2026届广东省清远市高三上学期一模读后续写二次学案

2026届广东省清远市高三一模 读后续写二次学案教师版 Coach Dad John Haney had no interest in basketball,and he'd never thought about being a basketball coach either.But when his 8-year-old son Jack hopped over and asked,“Dad,could you sign me up for the school basketball game and be my coach?”,something in John's heart felt different. As a business consultant who worked long hours,John often wondered if he was a good father,for his own dad had been very distant,leaving him eager to stay close to his own child.Even so,he hesitated.“I know nothing about basketball,"he thought.“And Jack's interests change so fast.He might not like basketball tomorrow." Having known about John's concern,his wife Ashley encouraged him,“Jack really wants this.Why not give it a try?”Drawing strength from the words,John sat at his computer, filled out Jack's team application,clicked the box that said“I'd like to coach my child!”and hit SEND. Their first practice in the basketball stadium was a disaster.John wanted to show Jack how to shoot,but he did it badly.Jack ran around with no idea what to do.On the drive home,to John's surprise,Jack said he had fun.That night,lying in bed,John thought a lot. Finally,he decided that the most important thing wasn't being perfect—it was making sure his son had fun. At the beginning of the next practice,John looked Jack in the eye and said,“Today,our only goal is to have fun—miss as many baskets as you want,the more,the happier!” Unbelieving,Jack laughed and started shooting freely.After a while,his ball hit the backboard and went into the hoop(篮筐)!“I did it,Dad!”Jack shouted with a big smile. John rushed over to hug him,thinking,“This moment is all that matters.” 注 意 ： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The day finally came and Jack whispered anxiously,“Dad,can we win today?” After the game,John walked up to his son quickly. 【原文翻译】 约翰·哈尼对篮球毫无兴趣，他也从未想过要成为一名篮球教练。但当他8岁的儿子杰克蹦蹦跳跳地过来问："爸爸，你能帮我报名参加学校的篮球比赛并当我的教练吗？"时，约翰内心有些东西感觉不一样了。 作为一名工作时间很长的商业顾问，约翰经常怀疑自己是不是一个好父亲，因为他自己的父亲非常疏远，这让他渴望与自己的孩子保持亲密。即便如此，他还是犹豫了。"我对篮球一无所知，"他想。"而且杰克的兴趣变得很快。他可能明天就不喜欢篮球了。" 了解了约翰的担忧后，他的妻子阿什利鼓励他："杰克真的很想参加。为什么不试一试呢？"从这些话中汲取力量后，约翰坐在电脑前，填写了杰克的球队申请表，勾选了那个写着"我想担任我孩子的教练！"的方框，然后点击了发送。 他们在篮球馆的第一次训练是一场灾难。约翰想向杰克展示如何投篮，但他做得很糟糕。杰克跑来跑去，不知道该怎么办。在开车回家的路上，令约翰惊讶的是，杰克说他玩得很开心。那天晚上，约翰躺在床上想了很多。最后，他认定最重要的事情不是做到完美——而是确保他的儿子玩得开心。 在接下来的训练开始时，约翰注视着杰克的眼睛说："今天，我们唯一的目标就是玩得开心——想投丢多少篮就投丢多少，越多越开心！"杰克难以置信地笑了，然后开始自由地投篮。过了一会儿，他的球击中了篮板，然后进了篮筐！"我做到了，爸爸！"杰克大笑着喊道。约翰冲过去拥抱他，心想："这一刻才是最重要的。" 【写作训练步骤】 第一步：通读全文，深度解读 读情节： 开端: 对篮球无兴趣、也非教练的父亲约翰，因儿子杰克渴望他报名并担任教练而内心触动。 发展: 约翰因自身父爱缺失的经历而渴望亲近儿子，但犹豫于自身能力不足与儿子兴趣易变。在妻子鼓励下最终报名。 转折: 首次训练糟糕，但儿子表示开心，促使约翰思想转变——核心目标从"完美表现"转为"享受乐趣"。 高潮: 转变理念后的训练立竿见影，杰克在无压力下投中，父子共享喜悦时刻。 续写开端: 比赛日到来，杰克赛前表露对"胜利"的焦虑。 续写结局: 比赛结束后，约翰走向儿子，进行关键交流。 读人物: John Haney (父亲/教练): 初始缺乏篮球知识与自信，但深爱儿子，愿意学习、反思与成长，从追求"完美表现"转变为注重"过程乐趣"与"情感连接"。 Jack (儿子): 天真、有热情，起初技术生疏，但在父亲营造的轻松氛围中获得乐趣与初步成功，开始在意比赛结果。 Ashley (母亲): 支持者与鼓励者，推动情节发展。 读时态： 全文以一般过去时为主，续写需严格保持一致。 读冲突： 外在冲突: 父亲篮球知识技能匮乏与教练角色要求的差距；可能存在的比赛竞争压力。 内在冲突: 父亲对自身父亲角色的不自信与渴望成为好父亲之间的矛盾；儿子对"乐趣"与"胜利"的认知变化。 读情绪发展： 父亲: 犹豫不决 → 决心尝试 → 挫败感 → 反思领悟 → 欣慰喜悦 → （续写：应对比赛压力） → （续写：传递价值观，巩固关系） 儿子: 渴望期待 → 训练困惑但仍觉有趣 → 自由发挥的快乐与成功喜悦 → （续写：赛前紧张） → （续写：赛后感悟） 读主题： 父爱与成长 (Fatherly Love and Growth) 过程重于结果 / 乐趣胜过输赢 (Process Over Result / Fun Over Winning) 陪伴与情感连接 (Companionship and Emotional Connection) 勇气与尝试 (Courage and Trying) 第二步：【十句五定法】—— 搭建你的写作框架 请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。 段落 句子功能 你的句子构思 第一段 1. 接续Hint1 描写约翰如何回应杰克关于"能否赢"的焦虑（重申"乐趣"主题，减压）。 2. 动作/心理推进 描写比赛开始时的场景，杰克和队友们的表现（可能失误或精彩）。 3. 有效过渡 描写比赛关键时刻（如比分接近、最后一球）或杰克的关键表现。 4. 有效衔接 描写约翰在场边的反应和指导（强调鼓励而非战术）。 5. 段落收束 描写比赛结束（无论输赢），聚焦于杰克赛后的即时情绪和看向父亲的眼神。 第二段 6. 接续Hint2 描写约翰走向杰克时的动作、神态，以及杰克的身体语言和表情。 7. 情节发展 描写父子间的第一句话（约翰的问话或杰克的情绪宣泄）。 8. 主题升华 通过约翰的话语，再次点明故事核心价值（乐趣、努力、勇敢尝试、为他骄傲）。 9. 结局呈现 描写杰克对父亲话语的反应（释然、微笑、拥抱等），以及可能的周围环境反应（母亲、队友）。 10. 富有余韵的结尾 用一个总结性或展望性的句子结束，强调父子关系的变化或共同的未来。 第三步：【微写作训练】—— 打磨你的语言 人物心理描写 赛前焦虑: A knot of nervousness tightened in Jack's stomach before the game. 释然与喜悦: A wave of relief and happiness washed over John seeing Jack's smile. 自豪与肯定: Swelling with pride, John knew that this was worth more than any trophy. 情感描写 父亲的安抚: John's calm words were a shelter from Jack's storm of anxiety. 成功的狂喜: The pure joy of making a shot lit up Jack's entire face. 无条件的爱: In that hug, all the missed shots and lost points didn't matter; only the father-son bond did. 动作描写 蹲下平视: John knelt down to look Jack squarely in the eyes before the game. 鼓励拍肩: He gave Jack's shoulder a firm, reassuring squeeze. 冲过去拥抱: Rushing to hug his son, John cared little about the final score. 环境象征描写 篮球场 -> 从训练场到考验场的转变: The court was no longer just a place for practice fun, but a test of their new philosophy. 篮筐 -> 从难以企及到触手可及的目标: The hoop, once a distant challenge, now seemed within reach, both literally and metaphorically. 计分板 -> 世俗胜负与内在价值的对比: The scoreboard told one story, but the look in Jack's eyes told another, more important one. 【微写作训练】—— 为你的故事注入灵魂 训练目标：积累精准的"高级词汇"，学会用具体的"画面"代替抽象的"感觉"，让你的续写生动起来。 训练一：环境描写 · 烘托心情 （选择最贴合故事氛围的词语，并尝试造句） 心情 可选词汇（中英对照） 你的造句 紧张、期待 人声鼎沸 (a buzzing crowd); 心跳如鼓 (heart pounding like a drum); 手心出汗 (clammy palms) 体育馆里_____________________，杰克看着记分牌，_____________________。 激烈、投入 激烈的比拼 (an intense match); 奔跑的身影 (running figures); 热烈的欢呼 (enthusiastic cheers) 比赛中，，孩子们在场上。 缓和、温馨 如释重负的叹息 (a sigh of relief); 灿烂的笑容 (a beaming smile); 温暖的拥抱 (a warm hug) 比赛结束后，约翰_____________________，给了杰克一个_____________________。 训练二：人物刻画 · 于细微处见真情 （将左边抽象的描述与右边具体的表达连线，并选择一句仿写） 1. 他很紧张。 A. He kept shifting his weight from one foot to the other, his eyes darting towards the scoreboard. 2. 他很欣慰。 B. A slow, proud smile spread across his face as he watched his son interact with his teammates. 3. 他充满爱意。 C. He knelt down, his hands firmly on his son's shoulders, his voice soft but steady. 我选择仿写第____句：___________________________________________________________ 训练三：情感表达 · 找到"高级替身" （圈出你会在正式写作中使用的词语，并替换掉直白的表达） 想说 "nervous" (紧张): 试试 a wave of anxiety (一阵焦虑), butterflies in one's stomach (心里七上八下), feeling jittery (感到紧张不安) 想说 "proud" (骄傲): 试试 swelling with pride (充满自豪), a glow of satisfaction (满足的喜悦), his heart swelled with admiration (他的心中充满了赞赏) 想说 "happy" (开心): 试试 beaming with joy (喜笑颜开), a sense of accomplishment (成就感), elation bubbled up inside him (兴高采烈在他内心翻涌) 例句升级： 原句：Jack was nervous but John was proud and happy. 升级句: A wave of anxiety gripped Jack before the game, but John was swelling with pride and beaming with joy at his son's mere participation. 训练四：动作细节 · 让情感可视化 （请为以下情境，设计一个包含具体动作和身体反应的句子） 情境1：约翰在赛前安抚紧张的杰克。 直白版: John calmed the nervous Jack before the game. 细节版: John ___________________________, his voice ___________________________ as he said, "Remember, ___________________________." (参考：knelt down to meet Jack's eye level; calm and steady; we're here to have fun, just like in practice) 情境2：杰克在比赛中投进一球后，看向父亲。 直白版: Jack looked at his dad after scoring. 细节版: The moment the ball swooshed through the net, Jack ___________________________, ___________________________ on his face, searching for his father's reaction in the crowd. (参考：turned instantly towards the sidelines; a mixture of surprise and delight) 训练五：象征与隐喻 · 让主题更深刻 （将抽象概念与具体意象连接，完成句子） 篮球比赛 (The basketball game) → 对约翰而言，不再是关于胜负，而是关于 ______ (a test and a celebration of the father-son bond they had built through the season)。 "乐趣"哲学 (The "fun" philosophy) → 是约翰能给杰克的礼物，它让杰克能够 ______ (face challenges without the fear of failure, both on and off the court)。 这次教练经历 (The coaching experience) → 让约翰从 ______ (a father who doubted his ability to connect) 变成了 ______ (a confident dad who knew that presence and love were the most important lessons he could teach)。 【微动作训练】—— 让情感在行动中展现 训练目标：学会用精准的动作描写来"显示"角色的内心世界，而不是直接"告诉"读者他是什么感受。 训练一：动作-情绪绑定 （请根据中文提示，补全英文句子，完成"动作-情绪"的精准绑定） 场景：赛前安抚 英文：John knelt down, placing a steadying hand on Jack's shoulder and looking him directly in the eyes to convey calmness and confidence (蹲下来，把一只稳定的手放在杰克的肩膀上，直视他的眼睛，传递平静和信心). 中文：约翰_____________________，_____________________。 场景：进球喜悦 英文：When Jack scored, he pumped his fist in the air, a triumphant shout escaping his lips before he eagerly sought his dad's approving gaze (在空中挥舞着拳头，发出一声胜利的呼喊，然后急切地寻找爸爸赞许的目光). 中文：当杰克得分时，他_____________________，_____________________。 场景：赛后拥抱 英文：After the game, John swept Jack into a tight hug, lifting him slightly off the ground, all the tension of the game melting away in that simple act of love (把杰克紧紧地抱在怀里，把他稍微抱离了地面，比赛的所有紧张都在这个简单的爱的举动中消散了). 中文：比赛结束后，约翰_____________________，_____________________。 训练二：细节放大镜（请将简单的动作，通过添加1-2个细节进行升级，使其更具表现力） 原句： John talked to Jack. 细节升级： John crouched until he was at eye level with his son, his voice a low, reassuring murmur that was meant for Jack's ears only (蹲下直到与儿子视线平齐，他的声音低沉，令人安心，只为了让杰克一个人听到). 原句： Jack smiled. 细节升级： A wide, uninhibited smile spread across Jack's face, crinkling the corners of his eyes and showing a missing tooth (一个宽阔、无拘无束的微笑在杰克脸上绽开，使他的眼角泛起皱纹，还露出了一颗缺牙). 你的练习： 原句： They hugged. 细节升级： They ______, ______. (参考：met in a tight embrace, John's strong arms wrapping around Jack's small frame, which was still buzzing with the excitement and exhaustion of the game) 训练三：综合情景创作 （请运用以上所有技巧，为以下情景创作一个包含微动作描写的句子） 情景：比赛结束后，约翰快速走向杰克。杰克站在场上，也许他的球队输了，也许他错过了最后一个球，他低着头，肩膀耷拉着。约翰走近他。 要求：必须包含一个约翰走向杰克时的动作细节和一个杰克身体语言的细节。 你的创作： （参考：John walked quickly towards his son, his strides long and purposeful, ignoring the celebrating players around him. He found Jack standing alone, head bowed and shoulders slumped, scuffing the toe of his sneaker against the polished court floor.） 第四步：综合训练与范文引导 训练：补全段落 Paragraph 1 The day finally came and Jack whispered anxiously, "Dad, can we win today?" John knelt down, meeting his son at eye level. [He placed a firm, reassuring hand on Jack's shoulder, his voice calm and steady] (他把一只坚定、令人安心的手放在杰克的肩膀上，声音平静而沉稳). "Remember, buddy," John said, "the only goal today is to have as much fun as we did in practice. Winning is nice, but seeing you try your best is what makes me proudest." [Jack took a deep breath, his small shoulders relaxing slightly under his father's touch] (杰克深吸了一口气，他小小的肩膀在父亲的触碰下略微放松了). The game was a whirlwind of running, shouting, and bouncing balls. Jack's team wasn't the most skilled, but they played with heart. There were missed shots and turnovers, but also moments of pure joy when a pass connected or a shot rattled in. [John cheered from the sidelines, his voice rising above the crowd not in criticism, but in constant encouragement] (约翰在场边加油，他的声音盖过了人群，不是批评，而是持续的鼓励). When the final buzzer sounded, Jack's team had lost. Jack stood catching his breath, his eyes immediately searching for his father in the crowd. [He looked tired, a little disappointed, but there was no trace of the pre-game anxiety in his eyes anymore] (他看起来很累，有点失望，但他眼中已没有了赛前的焦虑). Paragraph 2 After the game, John walked up to his son quickly. He didn't hesitate. [He found Jack standing a little apart from his teammates, his small figure looking defeated under the bright gym lights] (他发现杰克独自站在离队友稍远的地方，他小小的身影在明亮的体育馆灯光下显得沮丧). "Hey, champ," John said softly, placing a hand on Jack's back. Jack looked up, his eyes glistening. "We lost, Dad," he mumbled. [John's heart ached for a moment, but he smiled down at his son, his own eyes shining with something other than disappointment] (约翰的心痛了一下，但他低头对儿子笑了笑，他自己的眼睛里闪烁着失望之外的东西). "I know," John said. "But did you see that pass you made in the third quarter? And the way you kept running until the very end? I've never been more proud of you." [He pulled Jack into a tight hug, feeling the residual tension slowly leave his son's body] (他把杰克拉入一个紧紧的拥抱，感觉到儿子体内残余的紧张慢慢离开). "You were amazing out there," John whispered into his hair. Jack hugged him back fiercely. "Thanks, Dad," he whispered. [In that moment, surrounded by the echoing sounds of the emptying gym, they both knew that this was a victory far greater than any on the scoreboard] (在那一刻，在空荡荡的体育馆回响的声音中，他们都知道，这是一场远比记分牌上的任何胜利更伟大的胜利). The "Coach Dad" experiment had been a success, not because of wins or losses, but because it had brought them closer together. [They walked off the court hand in hand, ready for whatever challenge came next, on or off the court] (他们手牵着手离开了球场，准备迎接接下来的任何挑战，无论是在球场上还是在球场外). 【微写作训练】参考答案 训练一：环境描写 · 烘托心情 紧张、期待: 体育馆里a buzzing crowd (人声鼎沸)，杰克看着记分牌，his heart pounding like a drum (他的心像打鼓一样砰砰直跳)。 激烈、投入: 比赛中，it was an intense match (这是一场激烈的比拼)，孩子们在场上were giving it their all, their running figures a blur of effort (全力以赴，他们奔跑的身影因努力而模糊)。 缓和、温馨: 比赛结束后，约翰let out a sigh of relief (如释重负地叹了口气)，给了杰克一个warm hug that spoke volumes (意义深远的温暖拥抱)。 训练二：人物刻画 · 于细微处见真情 连线答案: 1 - A; 2 - B; 3 - C 仿写示例 (选择第3句): He ruffled his son's hair affectionately, his eyes crinkling at the corners with a love that needed no words. 训练三：情感表达 · 找到"高级替身" 例句升级: A wave of anxiety gripped Jack before the game, but John was swelling with pride and beaming with joy at his son's mere participation. 训练四：动作细节 · 让情感可视化 情境1 (细节版): John knelt down to meet Jack's eye level (蹲下来与杰克视线平齐), his voice calm and steady (平静而沉稳) as he said, "Remember, we're here to have fun, just like in practice (我们是来享受乐趣的，就像在训练中一样)." 情境2 (细节版): The moment the ball swooshed through the net, Jack turned instantly towards the sidelines (立刻转向边线), a mixture of surprise and delight (混合着惊讶和喜悦的表情) on his face, searching for his father's reaction in the crowd. 训练五：象征与隐喻 · 让主题更深刻 篮球比赛 (The basketball game) → 对约翰而言，不再是关于胜负，而是关于 a test and a celebration of the father-son bond they had built through the season (对他们整个赛季建立的父子情谊的考验和庆祝)。 "乐趣"哲学 (The "fun" philosophy) → 是约翰能给杰克的礼物，它让杰克能够 face challenges without the fear of failure, both on and off the court (面对挑战而无需害怕失败，无论是在球场上还是在球场外)。 这次教练经历 (The coaching experience) → 让约翰从 a father who doubted his ability to connect (一个怀疑自己连接能力的父亲) 变成了 a confident dad who knew that presence and love were the most important lessons he could teach (一个自信的爸爸，他知道陪伴和爱是他能教给儿子的最重要的课程)。 【微动作训练】参考答案 训练一：动作-情绪绑定 约翰蹲下来，把一只稳定的手放在杰克的肩膀上，直视他的眼睛，传递平静和信心。 John knelt down, placing a steadying hand on Jack's shoulder and looking him directly in the eyes to convey calmness and confidence. 当杰克得分时，他在空中挥舞着拳头，发出一声胜利的呼喊，然后急切地寻找爸爸赞许的目光。 When Jack scored, he pumped his fist in the air, a triumphant shout escaping his lips before he eagerly sought his dad's approving gaze. 比赛结束后，约翰把杰克紧紧地抱在怀里，把他稍微抱离了地面，比赛的所有紧张都在这个简单的爱的举动中消散了。 After the game, John swept Jack into a tight hug, lifting him slightly off the ground, all the tension of the game melting away in that simple act of love. 训练二：细节放大镜 原句: John talked to Jack. 细节升级: John crouched until he was at eye level with his son, his voice a low, reassuring murmur that was meant for Jack's ears only. 原句: Jack smiled. 细节升级: A wide, uninhibited smile spread across Jack's face, crinkling the corners of his eyes and showing a missing tooth. 你的练习: 原句: They hugged. 细节升级: They met in a tight embrace, John's strong arms wrapping around Jack's small frame, which was still buzzing with the excitement and exhaustion of the game (他们紧紧相拥，约翰强壮的手臂环抱着杰克小小的身躯，那身躯仍因比赛的兴奋和疲惫而微微颤抖). 训练三：综合情景创作 你的创作 (参考示例): John walked quickly towards his son, his strides long and purposeful, ignoring the celebrating players around him. He found Jack standing alone, head bowed and shoulders slumped, scuffing the toe of his sneaker against the polished court floor. (约翰快速走向他的儿子，他的步伐又大又坚决，无视周围庆祝的球员。他发现杰克独自站着，低着头，肩膀耷拉着，鞋尖蹭着光亮的球场地面。) 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 2026届广东省清远市高三一模 读后续写二次学案学生版 Coach Dad John Haney had no interest in basketball,and he'd never thought about being a basketball coach either.But when his 8-year-old son Jack hopped over and asked,“Dad,could you sign me up for the school basketball game and be my coach?”,something in John's heart felt different. As a business consultant who worked long hours,John often wondered if he was a good father,for his own dad had been very distant,leaving him eager to stay close to his own child.Even so,he hesitated.“I know nothing about basketball,"he thought.“And Jack's interests change so fast.He might not like basketball tomorrow." Having known about John's concern,his wife Ashley encouraged him,“Jack really wants this.Why not give it a try?”Drawing strength from the words,John sat at his computer, filled out Jack's team application,clicked the box that said“I'd like to coach my child!”and hit SEND. Their first practice in the basketball stadium was a disaster.John wanted to show Jack how to shoot,but he did it badly.Jack ran around with no idea what to do.On the drive home,to John's surprise,Jack said he had fun.That night,lying in bed,John thought a lot. Finally,he decided that the most important thing wasn't being perfect—it was making sure his son had fun. At the beginning of the next practice,John looked Jack in the eye and said,“Today,our only goal is to have fun—miss as many baskets as you want,the more,the happier!” Unbelieving,Jack laughed and started shooting freely.After a while,his ball hit the backboard and went into the hoop(篮筐)!“I did it,Dad!”Jack shouted with a big smile. John rushed over to hug him,thinking,“This moment is all that matters.” 注 意 ： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The day finally came and Jack whispered anxiously,“Dad,can we win today?” After the game,John walked up to his son quickly. 【原文翻译】 约翰·哈尼对篮球毫无兴趣，他也从未想过要成为一名篮球教练。但当他8岁的儿子杰克蹦蹦跳跳地过来问："爸爸，你能帮我报名参加学校的篮球比赛并当我的教练吗？"时，约翰内心有些东西感觉不一样了。 作为一名工作时间很长的商业顾问，约翰经常怀疑自己是不是一个好父亲，因为他自己的父亲非常疏远，这让他渴望与自己的孩子保持亲密。即便如此，他还是犹豫了。"我对篮球一无所知，"他想。"而且杰克的兴趣变得很快。他可能明天就不喜欢篮球了。" 了解了约翰的担忧后，他的妻子阿什利鼓励他："杰克真的很想参加。为什么不试一试呢？"从这些话中汲取力量后，约翰坐在电脑前，填写了杰克的球队申请表，勾选了那个写着"我想担任我孩子的教练！"的方框，然后点击了发送。 他们在篮球馆的第一次训练是一场灾难。约翰想向杰克展示如何投篮，但他做得很糟糕。杰克跑来跑去，不知道该怎么办。在开车回家的路上，令约翰惊讶的是，杰克说他玩得很开心。那天晚上，约翰躺在床上想了很多。最后，他认定最重要的事情不是做到完美——而是确保他的儿子玩得开心。 在接下来的训练开始时，约翰注视着杰克的眼睛说："今天，我们唯一的目标就是玩得开心——想投丢多少篮就投丢多少，越多越开心！"杰克难以置信地笑了，然后开始自由地投篮。过了一会儿，他的球击中了篮板，然后进了篮筐！"我做到了，爸爸！"杰克大笑着喊道。约翰冲过去拥抱他，心想："这一刻才是最重要的。" 【写作训练步骤】 第一步：通读全文，深度解读 读情节： 开端: 对篮球无兴趣、也非教练的父亲约翰，因儿子杰克渴望他报名并担任教练而内心触动。 发展: 约翰因自身父爱缺失的经历而渴望亲近儿子，但犹豫于_____________________。在妻子鼓励下最终报名。 转折: 首次训练糟糕，但儿子表示开心，促使约翰思想转变——核心目标从""转为""。 高潮: 转变理念后的训练立竿见影，杰克在无压力下投中，父子共享喜悦时刻。 续写开端: 比赛日到来，杰克赛前表露对"_____________________"的焦虑。 续写结局: 比赛结束后，约翰走向儿子，进行关键交流。 读人物: John Haney (父亲/教练): 初始缺乏篮球知识与自信，但深爱儿子，愿意学习、反思与成长，从追求""转变为注重""与"_____________________"。 Jack (儿子): 天真、有热情，起初技术生疏，但在父亲营造的轻松氛围中获得乐趣与初步成功，开始在意比赛结果。 Ashley (母亲): _____________________，推动情节发展。 读时态： 全文以_____________________为主，续写需严格保持一致。 读冲突： 外在冲突: 父亲篮球知识技能匮乏与教练角色要求的差距；可能存在的比赛竞争压力。 内在冲突: 父亲对自身父亲角色的不自信与渴望成为好父亲之间的矛盾；儿子对""与""的认知变化。 读情绪发展： 父亲: 犹豫不决 → 决心尝试 → 挫败感 → 反思领悟 → 欣慰喜悦 → （续写：） → （续写：） 儿子: 渴望期待 → 训练困惑但仍觉有趣 → 自由发挥的快乐与成功喜悦 → （续写：） → （续写：） 读主题： _____________________ (Process Over Result / Fun Over Winning) _____________________ (Courage and Trying) 第二步：【十句五定法】—— 搭建你的写作框架 段落 句子功能 你的句子构思 第一段 1. 接续Hint1 描写约翰如何回应杰克关于"能否赢"的焦虑。 2. 动作/心理推进 描写比赛开始时的场景，杰克和队友们的表现。 3. 有效过渡 描写比赛关键时刻或杰克的关键表现。 4. 有效衔接 描写约翰在场边的反应和指导。 5. 段落收束 描写比赛结束，聚焦于杰克赛后的即时情绪和看向父亲的眼神。 第二段 6. 接续Hint2 描写约翰走向杰克时的动作、神态，以及杰克的身体语言和表情。 7. 情节发展 描写父子间的第一句话。 8. 主题升华 通过约翰的话语，再次点明故事核心价值。 9. 结局呈现 描写杰克对父亲话语的反应，以及可能的周围环境反应。 10. 富有余韵的结尾 用一个总结性或展望性的句子结束，强调父子关系的变化或共同的未来。 第三步：【微写作训练】—— 打磨你的语言 训练一：环境描写 · 烘托心情 体育馆里_____________________，杰克看着记分牌，_____________________。 比赛中，，孩子们在场上。 比赛结束后，约翰_____________________，给了杰克一个_____________________。 训练二：人物刻画 · 于细微处见真情（连线） 他很紧张。 A. He kept shifting his weight from one foot to the other, his eyes darting towards the scoreboard. 他很欣慰。 B. A slow, proud smile spread across his face as he watched his son interact with his teammates. 他充满爱意。 C. He knelt down, his hands firmly on his son's shoulders, his voice soft but steady. 我选择仿写第____句：___________________________________________________________ 训练三：情感表达 · 找到"高级替身" 例句升级： 原句：Jack was nervous but John was proud and happy. 升级句: ___________________________________________________________ 训练四：动作细节 · 让情感可视化 细节版: John ___________________________, his voice ___________________________ as he said, "Remember, ___________________________." 细节版: The moment the ball swooshed through the net, Jack ___________________________, ___________________________ on his face, searching for his father's reaction in the crowd. 训练五：象征与隐喻 · 让主题更深刻 篮球比赛 (The basketball game) → 对约翰而言，不再是关于胜负，而是关于 ___________________________。 "乐趣"哲学 (The "fun" philosophy) → 是约翰能给杰克的礼物，它让杰克能够 ___________________________。 这次教练经历 (The coaching experience) → 让约翰从 ___________________________ 变成了 ___________________________。 第四步：综合训练与范文引导 训练：补全段落 请根据上下文，在横线处填入最恰当的词语或短语。 Paragraph 1 The day finally came and Jack whispered anxiously, "Dad, can we win today?" John knelt down, meeting his son at eye level. ____________________________ (1). "Remember, buddy," John said, "the only goal today is to have as much fun as we did in practice. Winning is nice, but seeing you try your best is what makes me proudest." ____________________________ (2). The game was a whirlwind of running, shouting, and bouncing balls. Jack's team wasn't the most skilled, but they played with heart. There were missed shots and turnovers, but also moments of pure joy when a pass connected or a shot rattled in. ____________________________ (3). When the final buzzer sounded, Jack's team had lost. Jack stood catching his breath, his eyes immediately searching for his father in the crowd. ____________________________ (4). (1) ___________________________________________________________ (2) ___________________________________________________________ (3) ___________________________________________________________ (4) ___________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2 After the game, John walked up to his son quickly. He didn't hesitate. ____________________________ (5). "Hey, champ," John said softly, placing a hand on Jack's back. Jack looked up, his eyes glistening. "We lost, Dad," he mumbled. ____________________________ (6). "I know," John said. "But did you see that pass you made in the third quarter? And the way you kept running until the very end? I've never been more proud of you." ____________________________ (7). "You were amazing out there," John whispered into his hair. Jack hugged him back fiercely. "Thanks, Dad," he whispered. ____________________________ (8). The "Coach Dad" experiment had been a success, not because of wins or losses, but because it had brought them closer together. ____________________________ (9). (5) ___________________________________________________________ (6) ___________________________________________________________ (7) ___________________________________________________________ (8) ___________________________________________________________ (9) ___________________________________________________________ 【学生版学案 参考答案】 第一步：通读全文，深度解读 读情节： 发展: 自身能力不足与儿子兴趣易变。 转折: "完美表现"；"享受乐趣"。 续写开端: "胜利"。 续写结局: "我"的行动。 读人物： John Haney: "完美表现"；"过程乐趣"与"情感连接"。 Ashley: 支持者与鼓励者。 读时态： 一般过去时。 读冲突： "乐趣"；"胜利"。 读情绪发展： 父亲: 应对比赛压力；传递价值观，巩固关系。 儿子: 赛前紧张；赛后感悟。 读主题： 过程重于结果 / 乐趣胜过输赢；勇气与尝试。 第三步 & 第四步：微写作及综合训练参考答案 训练一： a buzzing crowd (人声鼎沸); his heart pounding like a drum (他的心像打鼓一样砰砰直跳)。 it was an intense match (这是一场激烈的比拼); were giving it their all, their running figures a blur of effort (全力以赴，他们奔跑的身影因努力而模糊)。 let out a sigh of relief (如释重负地叹了口气); warm hug that spoke volumes (意义深远的温暖拥抱)。 训练二： 连线: 1-A; 2-B; 3-C。 训练三： A wave of anxiety gripped Jack before the game, but John was swelling with pride and beaming with joy at his son's mere participation. 训练四： knelt down to meet Jack's eye level (蹲下来与杰克视线平齐); calm and steady (平静而沉稳); we're here to have fun, just like in practice (我们是来享受乐趣的，就像在训练中一样)。 turned instantly towards the sidelines (立刻转向边线); a mixture of surprise and delight (混合着惊讶和喜悦的表情)。 训练五： a test and a celebration of the father-son bond they had built through the season (对他们整个赛季建立的父子情谊的考验和庆祝)。 face challenges without the fear of failure, both on and off the court (面对挑战而无需害怕失败，无论是在球场上还是在球场外)。 a father who doubted his ability to connect (一个怀疑自己连接能力的父亲); a confident dad who knew that presence and love were the most important lessons he could teach (一个自信的爸爸，他知道陪伴和爱是他能教给儿子的最重要的课程)。 第四步：综合训练 (1) He placed a firm, reassuring hand on Jack's shoulder, his voice calm and steady (2) Jack took a deep breath, his small shoulders relaxing slightly under his father's touch (3) John cheered from the sidelines, his voice rising above the crowd not in criticism, but in constant encouragement (4) He looked tired, a little disappointed, but there was no trace of the pre-game anxiety in his eyes anymore (5) He found Jack standing a little apart from his teammates, his small figure looking defeated under the bright gym lights (6) John's heart ached for a moment, but he smiled down at his son, his own eyes shining with something other than disappointment (7) He pulled Jack into a tight hug, feeling the residual tension slowly leave his son's body (8) In that moment, surrounded by the echoing sounds of the emptying gym, they both knew that this was a victory far greater than any on the scoreboard (9) They walked off the court hand in hand, ready for whatever challenge came next, on or off the court 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $