第06讲 英语作文之书信邮件类（复习讲义）（上海专用）2026年高考英语一轮复习讲练测

第06讲 英语作文之书信邮件类 目录 01 2 02 体系构建·思维可视 4 03 核心突破·靶向攻坚 5 智能解码 5 考向破译 12 【思维建模】上海高考英语应用文命题核心特点 0424 年份 作文题 话题 分类 文体 2025夏考 人们常说“Don't be afraid of wetting your feet if you want to learn how to swim.” 请你结合自己的经历写出你对这句话的理解。 谈谈对格言的理解 学习 叙议文 2025春考 外国朋友kiven要选编程课，有A和B课程可以选。 你建议他选哪一个，并对比给出理由。 课程选择 学习 应用文-建议信 2024夏考 你是明启中学的高三学生李明，你们学校英语报开设了一个“排忧解难”专栏，你的校友Lynn发出求助，请根据她的来信写封回信：写信要求： 1. 提出你的建议；2. 说明你的理由 I’m a high school student. I want to do some cooking but my parents don’t allow me to do so. How can I change their mind? 家长不同意cooking 家庭与校园 应用文-信件 2024春考 假如你是李华，外国文学教授，要莅临你校开办文学讲座，教授现要征求两个与文学有关的问题，在讲座上进行回应，应包括以下内容 (1)向教授提出问题: (2)并说明理由: 文学教授的回信 校园 应用文-信件 2023夏考 假设你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇物品介绍，内容须包括： (1) 对该物品的简要描述； (2) 你选择该物品参展的原因。 物品介绍 校园生活 叙议文 2023春考 你们班的口语课外教 Tom 发现你们班课上互动不积极，委托你了解同学们的想法。经过你对全班同学看法的了解，有些同学表示对课堂上讨论的话题不感兴趣，有些同学害怕犯错，不敢开口。 1. 向 Tom 反映同学的想法； 2. 向 Tom 提出建议并说明理由。 课堂互动 学习 应用文-信件 2022夏考 假设你是高三学生李华，你校计划组织“走进历史”的主题活动，有三项活动可供选择：（1）走访老战士；（2）表演历史剧；（3）制作短视频。现向全校学生征求意见，给组织者写封信，信的内容包括： 1. 你的选择； 2. 你的理由。 走近历史 社会热点 应用文-信件 2022春考 假如你是名启中学的高三学生李明，入冬以来，你们学校组织全校师生进行晨跑，时间在7：30-7：50，休息5分钟之后准备上第一节课。但是有同学反映，晨跑后身体不适。校方委托学生向同学们征集意见，请你向学生会写封邮件。要求 1.提出问题 2.提出改进的建议及理由。 晨跑运动 校园生活 应用文-邮件 2021夏考 假如你是名启中学高三学生李华，收到外国朋友bill的邮件，告诉你他也准备学习汉语，现有两门汉语课程供他选择（课程信息如下表所示），但他对课程选择有些迷茫，想听取你的意见。给bill回邮件，在邮件中你必须： 1.推荐其中一门课程 2.通过比较两门课程的信息，说明你推荐该课程的原因。 课程名称 汉语听说 汉语读写 课程内容 日常会话 故事读写 授课安排 每周一、周四晚7：00-8：00 共8周 每周五晚7：00-8：00 共16周 授课语言 全中文 中英双语 推荐课程 学习 应用文-邮件 2021春考 假如你是明启中学的高三学生王佳，你学校的教师Lucy准备在高中开设关于“信息素养”的课程，课程包含以下四个板块，“网站设计”“大数据处理”“辨别真伪信息”“精确搜索信息”。现在向全体同学征求意见，。请你给他写一份电子邮件，要求： 1.选择两个你感兴趣的板块 2.说明为什么选择这个板块的理由。 课程选择 学习 应用文-邮件 针对上海高考英语作文最大热门的建议理由型书信文，以下五大亮点句型是必须掌握的，纯干货一定要准确记下来。 一、开篇句 Word comes that/News comes that … 消息传来。很多考生开篇喜欢用【hearing that…, I…】这个非谓语句型，然而主句又忘了对应的I do sth.，第一句就造成语法错误。所以此处建议用word/news来表示消息，引出一个名词性从句来开篇； 【正】Word comes that our school organizes all teachers and students to run in the morning. But what is tricky is that …. 【误】Hearing that our school organizes all teachers and students to run in the morning. But what is tricky is that …. 二、写信主题句 I am writing to do sth. 注意这句写作的目的句虽然简单，但是很容易被繁琐的写成I am writing this letter to do sth. 需要注意的是write 本身就有“写作、写信”的意思，所以后面不需要再添加this letter了。 【简洁】I am writing to point out some defects and put forward my suggestions. 【繁琐】I am writing this letter to point out some defects and put forward my suggestions. 三、核心理由句 What matters most is that… 表述重要的句型非常多，比如大家常用的it is important that /it is of great importance that 等等，但是简练而表述有力的还是推荐这个用不及物动词表达“重要”的句型。 【初级】With regard to the morning-run initiative, it is very important to have a reasonable and practical schedule.   【高级】With regard to the morning-run initiative, what matters most is that we, students,   have a reasonable and practical schedule. 四、总结句 As are stated above, I hold that …. Taking all the factors into account, I firmly believe that … 总结句要避免一些all in all/in my opinion 等特别初级的句子, 以上两个句子就是不错的亮点句。  【例】As are stated above, I hold that emphasis on physical education can never be too much. 五、展望句 Thus，I‘d appreciate it that/ if… 【例】Thus, I would appreciate it if you could adopt my suggestions. 2022年上海秋季高考英语作文 Guided writing: Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假设你是高三学生李华，你校计划组织“走进历史”的主题活动，有三项活动可供选择： （1）走访老战士；（2）表演历史剧；（3）制作短视频。现向全校学生征求意见，给组织者写封信，信的内容包括： 1. 你的选择； 2. 你的理由。 _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【写作解析】 写作思路： 选一个你比较会写的活动+陈述这个活动2-3个好处。 在范文中我选择的是走访老战士，列举了三个理由（好处），全文分为五段来写。 之所以写三个理由是为了给同学们提供更多写作思路，在考场时间紧张的情况下，同学们也可以酌情选择2个。其中一些理由，不管你选择什么活动，都可以通用，比如“有利于学生了解历史”，“有利于鼓舞学生”等。大家要学会举一反三。 【写作提纲】 中文提纲 第一段：寒暄+我是李华+我选老战士 第二段：理由1： 有利于了解历史（通用理由） 第三段：理由2：有利于对老战士表达感激 第四段：理由3：有利于精神鼓舞（通用理由） 第五段：信件结束语 英文提纲 P1：I hope you're doing well.  I'm Li Hua.        I choose to XXX and here's why. P2:  Firstly, it allows us to gain a deeper understanding of history.  P3:  Secondly, it offers a chance to express respect to XXX. P4:  Lastly, it can be inspiring.  P5：Thank you. Looking forward to XXX. 提纲里列举了三个表达好处的句式，大家注意替换使用。 P234 提纲仅列出开头，作为一个完整的段落，还需补充1-2句话。注意运用 【which引导从句】 和 【非谓语动词】，两个技巧为句式加分。 【学霸范文供参考】 Dear Organizers, I hope you're doing well. I'm Li Hua, a senior student, and I wish to share my preference for the upcoming "Journey into History" event. I choose to visit veterans because it offers a chance to connect with living history witnesses. Here's why. 祝您一切安好。我是李华，一名高三学生，对于即将到来的“走进历史”主题活动，我想分享一下我的个人喜好。我选择的是拜访老战士，因为这个活动能让我们有机会接触到这些还在世的历史见证者。以下是我的理由： Firstly, it allows us to gain a deeper understanding of our nation's history. These veterans experienced historical events firsthand, and by interacting with them, we can learn about the sacrifices they made, which will make history more than a subject in textbooks. 首先，拜访老战士能让我们更加深刻了解国家历史。这些老战士亲历了历史事件，通过与他们交流，我们可以了解他们曾经的牺牲，这将让历史跃出课本，不再仅仅是一门学科。 Secondly, visiting veterans offers a chance to express respect and gratitude for their contributions to our country. This can strengthen our sense of national pride and unity. 其次，拜访老战士能让我们有机会向他们致以崇高敬意，感谢他们为国家所作出的巨大贡献，这也有利于增强我们的民族自豪感和团结感。 Lastly, meeting veterans can be inspiring. Their resilience and patriotism serve as role models, motivating us to cherish peace and strive for a better future. 最后，与老战士见面可以鼓舞人心。他们的坚韧和爱国精神是我们学习的榜样，激励我们珍惜和平，为更美好的未来而努力。 Thank you for organizing the event. I look forward to the valuable experience it will provide. 感谢您组织这次活动。我期待着它将带来的宝贵经历。 Yours, Li Hua 【表达学习】 分享我的偏好 - share my preference 即将到来的 - upcoming 老战士 - veterans 提供机会 - it offers a chance to 在世的历史见证者 - living history witnesses 使我们能够 - it allows us to 更深入地了解 - gain a deeper understanding of 亲历历史事件 - experienced historical events firsthand 牺牲 - sacrifices 使历史不仅仅是课本中的一门学科 make history more than a subject in textbooks 提供机会 -it offers a chance to 增强我们的民族自豪感和团结感 - strengthen our sense of national pride and unity 坚韧 - resilience 爱国主义 - patriotism 作为榜样 - serve as role models 激励某人去 - motivate sb to do sth 为更美好的未来而努力 - strive for a better future 附：作文批改实例： Dear Headmaster, My name is Li Hua, one of senior students in our school. Having heard our school is going to organize an activity about walking into history and is now considering three ways among6making short Videos ”,“ visiting the old soldiers” and “ historical stage play” I am writing to voice my support for filming short videos. My reasons in favour are listed as follows. First and foremost. electronic devices are almost available to the young generation and social media like Tik Tok have been on the rise, leaving the short Video prone to being accepted by the youth. Apart from it,Short Videos bear a little cost and energy for the school side. Not Only will they help save the school's financial budget. but also they will not involve too much energy of the teachers and students, who already have a tight schedule in engaging in educational activities. Last but not least., short videos can cover more various historical themes in a wider range. which means historical tales and figures from the ancient society to modern one can be exhibited through videos. Conclusively, these are my reasons after careful consideration. I sincerely wish my voice could be considered. Yours, Li Hua 得分说明:23-25分 一、内容10 分: 分析:内容充实，详略得当。 首段点题:主体部分，陈述 3 个观点说明短视频的重要性支撑作者提出的建议: O短视频更容易让年轻人接受:2短视频活动低成本、耗费较低的人力及精力:@更充分的展示历史的丰富内容:末段跟首段呼应进行总结。 二、语言-9-10 分 分析:具有较好的语言表达能力，句子结构多样且词汇丰富，如:多种复合句---状语从句,定语从句,以及特殊句型。并多次使用高级词汇及固定搭配，且无明显的语法错误。 三、结构-5 分 使用总分总结构,全文流畅且结构紧凑，自然地使用语句间的连接成分。 范文赏析: 一、审题立意: 该题是一篇针对社会热点话题，考察学生如何表达自己的观点、看法和建议并给出理由。重点考察学生的思维活跃度和语言表述能要求学生不仅在具体的建议方面详略得当，同时需要学生结合社会热点，提出较为合理的建议，对学生的英语能力进行综合考察。 二、写作思路: 三、语言部分 1.自然地使用了语句间的连接成分: First and foremost，Apart from it，Last but not least.等连接词，使得文章条理清晰，且全文流畅结构紧凑。 2.具有较好的语言表达能力。 （1）高分句式,如:倒装句结合定语从句等复合句构成Not Only will they help save the school' s financial budget, but also they will not involve too much energy ofthe teachers and students, who already have a tight schedule in engaging in educational activities: （2）词汇丰富，如: voice my support for、 on the rise/catch on/take off/be in vogue, be prone to sth/ doing sth, engage in, have a tight schedule, , in a wider range等多种词汇。 思维建模 上海高考英语应用文命题核心特点 · 题型聚焦实用性：近 5 年真题以书信（含建议信、感谢信、咨询信）和通知为主，占比超 80%，偶见演讲稿（如 2023 年 “校园文化节倡议演讲”），均围绕 “解决实际问题” 或 “传递具体信息” 设计，无复杂抒情类文体。​ · 话题绑定校园与生活：90% 以上题目紧扣高中生日常场景，如 “建议学校优化图书馆服务”（2022 年）、“邀请外教参加班级毕业聚会”（2021 年）、“通知同学参加志愿者招募会”（2020 年），极少涉及陌生领域，降低背景知识门槛。​ · 要求隐含 “细节导向”：题干不仅明确文体和核心目的，还会限定关键信息，如 “需说明建议的 2 个具体理由”“要包含活动时间、地点及报名方式”，若遗漏细节会直接扣 1-2 分（满分 15 分，细节分占 3-4 分）。​ Passage 1 2022年上海春季高考英语作文 Guided writing: Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假如你是明启中学的高三学生李明。入冬以来，你们学校组织全校师生进行晨跑，时间在7:30到7:50，休息5分钟之后准备上第一节课。但是有同学反映，晨跑后身体不适。校方委托学生会向同学们征集意见，请你向学生会写封邮件。（信件格式已给出） 要求： 1. 提出问题； 2. 提出改进的建议和理由。 _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Passage 2 （变式演练） Guided Writing Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 【上海市闵行第三中学2024-2025学年高三上学期第一次月考英语试题】 假设你是明启中学的高三学生李华，学校图书馆拟购入一批英语学习资料与读物，图书馆长周老师现向同学们征集意见。请写一封电子邮件，谈谈你的看法和建议，并说明理由。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 54 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 第06讲 英语作文之书信邮件类 目录 01 2 02 体系构建·思维可视 4 03 核心突破·靶向攻坚 5 智能解码 5 考向破译 12 【思维建模】上海高考英语应用文命题核心特点 0424 年份 作文题 话题 分类 文体 2025夏考 人们常说“Don't be afraid of wetting your feet if you want to learn how to swim.” 请你结合自己的经历写出你对这句话的理解。 谈谈对格言的理解 学习 叙议文 2025春考 外国朋友kiven要选编程课，有A和B课程可以选。 你建议他选哪一个，并对比给出理由。 课程选择 学习 应用文-建议信 2024夏考 你是明启中学的高三学生李明，你们学校英语报开设了一个“排忧解难”专栏，你的校友Lynn发出求助，请根据她的来信写封回信：写信要求： 1. 提出你的建议；2. 说明你的理由 I’m a high school student. I want to do some cooking but my parents don’t allow me to do so. How can I change their mind? 家长不同意cooking 家庭与校园 应用文-信件 2024春考 假如你是李华，外国文学教授，要莅临你校开办文学讲座，教授现要征求两个与文学有关的问题，在讲座上进行回应，应包括以下内容 (1)向教授提出问题: (2)并说明理由: 文学教授的回信 校园 应用文-信件 2023夏考 假设你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇物品介绍，内容须包括： (1) 对该物品的简要描述； (2) 你选择该物品参展的原因。 物品介绍 校园生活 叙议文 2023春考 你们班的口语课外教 Tom 发现你们班课上互动不积极，委托你了解同学们的想法。经过你对全班同学看法的了解，有些同学表示对课堂上讨论的话题不感兴趣，有些同学害怕犯错，不敢开口。 1. 向 Tom 反映同学的想法； 2. 向 Tom 提出建议并说明理由。 课堂互动 学习 应用文-信件 2022夏考 假设你是高三学生李华，你校计划组织“走进历史”的主题活动，有三项活动可供选择：（1）走访老战士；（2）表演历史剧；（3）制作短视频。现向全校学生征求意见，给组织者写封信，信的内容包括： 1. 你的选择； 2. 你的理由。 走近历史 社会热点 应用文-信件 2022春考 假如你是名启中学的高三学生李明，入冬以来，你们学校组织全校师生进行晨跑，时间在7：30-7：50，休息5分钟之后准备上第一节课。但是有同学反映，晨跑后身体不适。校方委托学生向同学们征集意见，请你向学生会写封邮件。要求 1.提出问题 2.提出改进的建议及理由。 晨跑运动 校园生活 应用文-邮件 2021夏考 假如你是名启中学高三学生李华，收到外国朋友bill的邮件，告诉你他也准备学习汉语，现有两门汉语课程供他选择（课程信息如下表所示），但他对课程选择有些迷茫，想听取你的意见。给bill回邮件，在邮件中你必须： 1.推荐其中一门课程 2.通过比较两门课程的信息，说明你推荐该课程的原因。 课程名称 汉语听说 汉语读写 课程内容 日常会话 故事读写 授课安排 每周一、周四晚7：00-8：00 共8周 每周五晚7：00-8：00 共16周 授课语言 全中文 中英双语 推荐课程 学习 应用文-邮件 2021春考 假如你是明启中学的高三学生王佳，你学校的教师Lucy准备在高中开设关于“信息素养”的课程，课程包含以下四个板块，“网站设计”“大数据处理”“辨别真伪信息”“精确搜索信息”。现在向全体同学征求意见，。请你给他写一份电子邮件，要求： 1.选择两个你感兴趣的板块 2.说明为什么选择这个板块的理由。 课程选择 学习 应用文-邮件 针对上海高考英语作文最大热门的建议理由型书信文，以下五大亮点句型是必须掌握的，纯干货一定要准确记下来。 一、开篇句 Word comes that/News comes that … 消息传来。很多考生开篇喜欢用【hearing that…, I…】这个非谓语句型，然而主句又忘了对应的I do sth.，第一句就造成语法错误。所以此处建议用word/news来表示消息，引出一个名词性从句来开篇； 【正】Word comes that our school organizes all teachers and students to run in the morning. But what is tricky is that …. 【误】Hearing that our school organizes all teachers and students to run in the morning. But what is tricky is that …. 二、写信主题句 I am writing to do sth. 注意这句写作的目的句虽然简单，但是很容易被繁琐的写成I am writing this letter to do sth. 需要注意的是write 本身就有“写作、写信”的意思，所以后面不需要再添加this letter了。 【简洁】I am writing to point out some defects and put forward my suggestions. 【繁琐】I am writing this letter to point out some defects and put forward my suggestions. 三、核心理由句 What matters most is that… 表述重要的句型非常多，比如大家常用的it is important that /it is of great importance that 等等，但是简练而表述有力的还是推荐这个用不及物动词表达“重要”的句型。 【初级】With regard to the morning-run initiative, it is very important to have a reasonable and practical schedule.   【高级】With regard to the morning-run initiative, what matters most is that we, students,   have a reasonable and practical schedule. 四、总结句 As are stated above, I hold that …. Taking all the factors into account, I firmly believe that … 总结句要避免一些all in all/in my opinion 等特别初级的句子, 以上两个句子就是不错的亮点句。  【例】As are stated above, I hold that emphasis on physical education can never be too much. 五、展望句 Thus，I‘d appreciate it that/ if… 【例】Thus, I would appreciate it if you could adopt my suggestions. 2022年上海秋季高考英语作文 Guided writing: Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假设你是高三学生李华，你校计划组织“走进历史”的主题活动，有三项活动可供选择： （1）走访老战士；（2）表演历史剧；（3）制作短视频。现向全校学生征求意见，给组织者写封信，信的内容包括： 1. 你的选择； 2. 你的理由。 _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【写作解析】 写作思路： 选一个你比较会写的活动+陈述这个活动2-3个好处。 在范文中我选择的是走访老战士，列举了三个理由（好处），全文分为五段来写。 之所以写三个理由是为了给同学们提供更多写作思路，在考场时间紧张的情况下，同学们也可以酌情选择2个。其中一些理由，不管你选择什么活动，都可以通用，比如“有利于学生了解历史”，“有利于鼓舞学生”等。大家要学会举一反三。 【写作提纲】 中文提纲 第一段：寒暄+我是李华+我选老战士 第二段：理由1： 有利于了解历史（通用理由） 第三段：理由2：有利于对老战士表达感激 第四段：理由3：有利于精神鼓舞（通用理由） 第五段：信件结束语 英文提纲 P1：I hope you're doing well.  I'm Li Hua.        I choose to XXX and here's why. P2:  Firstly, it allows us to gain a deeper understanding of history.  P3:  Secondly, it offers a chance to express respect to XXX. P4:  Lastly, it can be inspiring.  P5：Thank you. Looking forward to XXX. 提纲里列举了三个表达好处的句式，大家注意替换使用。 P234 提纲仅列出开头，作为一个完整的段落，还需补充1-2句话。注意运用 【which引导从句】 和 【非谓语动词】，两个技巧为句式加分。 【学霸范文供参考】 Dear Organizers, I hope you're doing well. I'm Li Hua, a senior student, and I wish to share my preference for the upcoming "Journey into History" event. I choose to visit veterans because it offers a chance to connect with living history witnesses. Here's why. 祝您一切安好。我是李华，一名高三学生，对于即将到来的“走进历史”主题活动，我想分享一下我的个人喜好。我选择的是拜访老战士，因为这个活动能让我们有机会接触到这些还在世的历史见证者。以下是我的理由： Firstly, it allows us to gain a deeper understanding of our nation's history. These veterans experienced historical events firsthand, and by interacting with them, we can learn about the sacrifices they made, which will make history more than a subject in textbooks. 首先，拜访老战士能让我们更加深刻了解国家历史。这些老战士亲历了历史事件，通过与他们交流，我们可以了解他们曾经的牺牲，这将让历史跃出课本，不再仅仅是一门学科。 Secondly, visiting veterans offers a chance to express respect and gratitude for their contributions to our country. This can strengthen our sense of national pride and unity. 其次，拜访老战士能让我们有机会向他们致以崇高敬意，感谢他们为国家所作出的巨大贡献，这也有利于增强我们的民族自豪感和团结感。 Lastly, meeting veterans can be inspiring. Their resilience and patriotism serve as role models, motivating us to cherish peace and strive for a better future. 最后，与老战士见面可以鼓舞人心。他们的坚韧和爱国精神是我们学习的榜样，激励我们珍惜和平，为更美好的未来而努力。 Thank you for organizing the event. I look forward to the valuable experience it will provide. 感谢您组织这次活动。我期待着它将带来的宝贵经历。 Yours, Li Hua 【表达学习】 分享我的偏好 - share my preference 即将到来的 - upcoming 老战士 - veterans 提供机会 - it offers a chance to 在世的历史见证者 - living history witnesses 使我们能够 - it allows us to 更深入地了解 - gain a deeper understanding of 亲历历史事件 - experienced historical events firsthand 牺牲 - sacrifices 使历史不仅仅是课本中的一门学科 make history more than a subject in textbooks 提供机会 -it offers a chance to 增强我们的民族自豪感和团结感 - strengthen our sense of national pride and unity 坚韧 - resilience 爱国主义 - patriotism 作为榜样 - serve as role models 激励某人去 - motivate sb to do sth 为更美好的未来而努力 - strive for a better future 附：作文批改实例： Dear Headmaster, My name is Li Hua, one of senior students in our school. Having heard our school is going to organize an activity about walking into history and is now considering three ways among6making short Videos ”,“ visiting the old soldiers” and “ historical stage play” I am writing to voice my support for filming short videos. My reasons in favour are listed as follows. First and foremost. electronic devices are almost available to the young generation and social media like Tik Tok have been on the rise, leaving the short Video prone to being accepted by the youth. Apart from it,Short Videos bear a little cost and energy for the school side. Not Only will they help save the school's financial budget. but also they will not involve too much energy of the teachers and students, who already have a tight schedule in engaging in educational activities. Last but not least., short videos can cover more various historical themes in a wider range. which means historical tales and figures from the ancient society to modern one can be exhibited through videos. Conclusively, these are my reasons after careful consideration. I sincerely wish my voice could be considered. Yours, Li Hua 得分说明:23-25分 一、内容10 分: 分析:内容充实，详略得当。 首段点题:主体部分，陈述 3 个观点说明短视频的重要性支撑作者提出的建议: O短视频更容易让年轻人接受:2短视频活动低成本、耗费较低的人力及精力:@更充分的展示历史的丰富内容:末段跟首段呼应进行总结。 二、语言-9-10 分 分析:具有较好的语言表达能力，句子结构多样且词汇丰富，如:多种复合句---状语从句,定语从句,以及特殊句型。并多次使用高级词汇及固定搭配，且无明显的语法错误。 三、结构-5 分 使用总分总结构,全文流畅且结构紧凑，自然地使用语句间的连接成分。 范文赏析: 一、审题立意: 该题是一篇针对社会热点话题，考察学生如何表达自己的观点、看法和建议并给出理由。重点考察学生的思维活跃度和语言表述能要求学生不仅在具体的建议方面详略得当，同时需要学生结合社会热点，提出较为合理的建议，对学生的英语能力进行综合考察。 二、写作思路: 三、语言部分 1.自然地使用了语句间的连接成分: First and foremost，Apart from it，Last but not least.等连接词，使得文章条理清晰，且全文流畅结构紧凑。 2.具有较好的语言表达能力。 （1）高分句式,如:倒装句结合定语从句等复合句构成Not Only will they help save the school' s financial budget, but also they will not involve too much energy ofthe teachers and students, who already have a tight schedule in engaging in educational activities: （2）词汇丰富，如: voice my support for、 on the rise/catch on/take off/be in vogue, be prone to sth/ doing sth, engage in, have a tight schedule, , in a wider range等多种词汇。 思维建模 上海高考英语应用文命题核心特点 · 题型聚焦实用性：近 5 年真题以书信（含建议信、感谢信、咨询信）和通知为主，占比超 80%，偶见演讲稿（如 2023 年 “校园文化节倡议演讲”），均围绕 “解决实际问题” 或 “传递具体信息” 设计，无复杂抒情类文体。​ · 话题绑定校园与生活：90% 以上题目紧扣高中生日常场景，如 “建议学校优化图书馆服务”（2022 年）、“邀请外教参加班级毕业聚会”（2021 年）、“通知同学参加志愿者招募会”（2020 年），极少涉及陌生领域，降低背景知识门槛。​ · 要求隐含 “细节导向”：题干不仅明确文体和核心目的，还会限定关键信息，如 “需说明建议的 2 个具体理由”“要包含活动时间、地点及报名方式”，若遗漏细节会直接扣 1-2 分（满分 15 分，细节分占 3-4 分）。​ Passage 1 2022年上海春季高考英语作文 Guided writing: Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 假如你是明启中学的高三学生李明。入冬以来，你们学校组织全校师生进行晨跑，时间在7:30到7:50，休息5分钟之后准备上第一节课。但是有同学反映，晨跑后身体不适。校方委托学生会向同学们征集意见，请你向学生会写封邮件。（信件格式已给出） 要求： 1. 提出问题； 2. 提出改进的建议和理由。 _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【写作思路与框架拆解】 审题定位 体裁：应用文——邮件（意见反馈） 受众：学生会（校内官方组织） 目的：①提出问题 ②给出改进建议并说明理由 字数：120–150 词 时态与人称 时态：一般现在时为主，个别地方用现在完成时强调影响 人称：第一人称复数（we, us）更显集体立场；必要时用第二人称（you）对学生会呼吁 内容规划（“夹叙夹议”微缩版） Para 1（引言）：一句寒暄 + 写信目的 Para 2（记叙/问题）：用一句话概括晨跑安排，用 1–2 句描述同学不适现象（数据或例子） Para 3（议论/建议）：两条改进方案，每条方案后紧跟一句理由（因果或对比论证） Para 4（结尾）：礼貌收尾，表达期待采纳 语言升级技巧 • 高级衔接：To begin with, Moreover, Consequently • 礼貌表达：would appreciate it if… / could you possibly… • 词汇替换：complaints → concerns；post-run fatigue → lingering exhaustion 【参考范文】（约 140 词） Dear Student Union, I’m Li Ming from Class 3, Senior 3. I’m writing to share some concerns about our winter morning run held from 7:30 to 7:50. Since the program began, many of us have felt dizzy or even nauseated after the 2-kilometre dash, especially on frosty days when the air is piercingly cold. Several students in my class had to skip first period to rest in the clinic. To solve the problem, I would suggest the following. First, could we postpone the run to 7:15–7:35? An earlier start would give everyone a ten-minute buffer to re-enter the warm classroom and recover. Secondly, adopting a staggered schedule—grades 10 and 11 on Monday, Wednesday and Friday, grade 12 on Tuesday and Thursday—would halve the playground density and reduce exhaust fumes from overcrowded lanes. Thank you for considering these proposals. I believe small adjustments can keep both our hearts and grades healthy. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 附学霸作文01： Dear Student Union, I am writing this letter to reflect on the school's organization of morning running for all teachers and students. Despite the good intention to improve their physical quality, some students reflected that they were uncomfortable after running, which is an urgent problem to be solved. In response to it, my reasons and suggestions are as follows. First of all, it is inappropriate to set the time for morning running from 7:30 to 7:50, because it is only 5 minutes from the first class. In this case, students will feel burnt out, which will be detrimental to their learning efficiency. Meanwhile, performing morning vigorous exercise just after breakfast is not suitable for human beings, as it will cause stomach discomfort. Therefore, why not try to put the running time in the big break after the second class? What's more, I hold that, before organizing morning running, we should give students a comprehensive physical examination to ensure that everyone's physical condition is suitable for running. And some warm-up activities should be arranged to prevent unexpected accidents. Last but not least, the school should plan ahead for emergencies, such as preparing first-aid kits and employing professional medical staff. These measures can assure students and teachers of their safety. In short, what matters most is to instil in students the significance of physical education. Only by strengthening our bodies can we better protect our country and build our motherland. I sincerely hope all the students can feel happiness in doing moderate sports. Yours, Li Ming 附学霸作文02： Dear Members of the Student Union,​ I’m Li Ming, a senior three student from Mingqi Middle School. I’m writing to share feedback on the school’s winter morning jogging (7:30-7:50 am) and offer some suggestions, as several classmates have reported feeling unwell after it.​ The main issues are twofold. First, after 20 minutes of jogging, the 5-minute rest is too short for us to recover—many feel dizzy and breathless when the first class begins, which harms our concentration. Second, the cold winter air makes us sweat during exercise; if we can’t dry off quickly, we easily catch colds.​ To solve these problems, I have three suggestions. First, extend the rest time to 10 minutes. This will let us rehydrate and calm down before class. Second, group students by physical condition: weaker students could jog at a slower pace to avoid overexertion. Third, use the gym instead of outdoor areas on extremely cold days to reduce illness risks.​ I hope these ideas can help improve the morning jogging. Thank you for considering our feedback.​ Yours sincerely,​ Li Ming Passage 2 （变式演练） Guided Writing Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 【上海市闵行第三中学2024-2025学年高三上学期第一次月考英语试题】 假设你是明启中学的高三学生李华，学校图书馆拟购入一批英语学习资料与读物，图书馆长周老师现向同学们征集意见。请写一封电子邮件，谈谈你的看法和建议，并说明理由。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、写作思路解析​ 身份与场景定位：作为高三学生李华，邮件收件方是图书馆长周老师，需保持礼貌诚恳的语气（避免过于随意的表达，如不用 “Hey Mr. Zhou”），同时建议要贴合 “高三英语学习需求” 与 “图书馆资料实用性”，既要满足备考需求，也要兼顾阅读兴趣培养。​ 核心需求拆解：图书馆购入英语资料，需覆盖 “学习资料” 与 “读物” 两类。高三学生的核心需求包括：①备考刚需（如高考真题解析、写作素材）；②能力提升（如分级读物、外刊选篇）；③兴趣驱动（如短篇故事、主题类读物），建议需围绕这三点展开，避免空泛。​ 建议与理由的逻辑绑定：每一条建议都需对应具体理由，且理由要 “贴近学生实际”。例如，建议购入 “高考英语真题分类汇编”，理由可写 “帮助高三学生针对性突破薄弱题型（如完形填空、阅读理解），贴合备考节奏”；建议加入 “分级英语读物（如书虫系列）”，理由可写 “难度适配高中生水平，既能积累词汇，又能提升阅读兴趣，缓解备考压力”。​ 语言风格把控：对师长（周老师）需用正式且礼貌的表达，可用 “Could we consider…”“I would suggest…” 等温和建议句式，避免生硬的 “ You should…”；同时，用词要准确，如 “英语学习资料” 可表述为 “English learning materials”，“读物” 用 “English readings” 或 “English books”，避免歧义。​ 二、写作框架拆解​ 称呼​ 礼貌称呼图书馆长，用 “Dear Mr. Zhou,”（姓氏已知，避免 “Dear Librarian”）​ Dear Mr. Zhou,​ 引言段（1-2 句）​ 自我介绍 + 说明写信背景与目的（回应征集意见，谈英语资料建议）​ I’m Li Hua, a senior three student from Mingqi Middle School. I’m writing to share my thoughts and suggestions on the English learning materials and readings the library plans to purchase, as you recently asked for students’ opinions.​ 建议与理由段（2-3 点，每点 1-2 句）​ 分点提建议，每点对应具体理由，先总述建议，再展开理由​ 1. For English learning materials, I suggest buying the “Classified Collection of Shanghai Gaokao English Real Questions.” It can help senior three students focus on weak question types (like cloze tests and reading comprehension) and fit our exam preparation schedule.2. For English readings, could we add graded English books (such as the “Bookworm” series) and selected foreign magazine articles (like those from The Economist Student Edition)? The graded books match our English level—they help us accumulate vocabulary and improve reading interest, while the magazine articles can broaden our horizons and provide useful writing examples.​ 补充建议（可选，1 句）​ 结合实际需求补充细节，让建议更落地​ Besides, it would be great if the readings cover different themes (like science, culture, and daily life), so students with different interests can all benefit.​ 结尾段（1-2 句）​ 礼貌收尾，表达感谢与期待​ Thank you for listening to my suggestions. I hope they can help make the library’s English materials more useful for us students.​ ​ 三、参考范文​ Subject: Suggestions on English Materials for the Library​ Dear Mr. Zhou,​ I’m Li Hua, a senior three student from Mingqi Middle School. I’m glad to share my suggestions on the English learning materials and readings the library plans to purchase, as you recently asked for our opinions.​ For English learning materials, I strongly recommend buying the “Classified Shanghai Gaokao English Real Questions.” As senior three students, we need to target weak areas (such as grammar 填空 and reading inference questions), and this book can help us practice systematically, which fits our exam preparation.​ For readings, I suggest adding two types: graded English books (like the “Bookworm” series) and short foreign magazine articles. The graded books are not too difficult—they let us read happily while expanding vocabulary, relieving our exam pressure. The magazine articles (from student-friendly versions of Time or National Geographic) can broaden our horizons and provide good examples for English writing.​ Thank you for considering my suggestions. I believe these materials will benefit many students.​ Yours sincerely,​ Li Hua 附学霸作文： Dear Mr. Zhou,      I am Li Hua, a student from Class 3, Grade 12. I am writing to offer some suggestions regarding the new batch of English learning materials and readings for the school library. Firstly, I suggest purchasing some classic English literature, such as works by Shakespeare, Jane Austen, and Charles Dickens. Secondly, it would be great to have a collection of contemporary English magazines and newspapers. These publications can help us stay updated with global issues and improve our reading skills. Moreover, I recommend adding some English language learning guides that focus on practical skills, such as speaking and writing. These resources can be particularly useful for students preparing for exams or aiming to enhance their communicative abilities. I believe that with these materials, the library will better support our English learning and foster a more engaging reading environment for all students.     Thank you for considering my suggestions. Best regards, Li Hua 评析： 【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给学校图书馆长周老师写一封电子邮件，就购买英语学习资料与读物一事提建议。 【详解】1. 词汇积累 关于：regarding→concerning 另外：moreover→besides 提高：enhance→raise 考虑：consider→take...into consideration 2. 句式拓展 简单句变复合句 原句：These publications can help us stay updated with global issues and improve our reading skills. 拓展句：There is no doubt that these publications can help us stay updated with global issues and improve our reading skills. 【点睛】【高分句型1】Moreover, I recommend adding some English language learning guides that focus on practical skills, such as speaking and writing.（运用了动名词作宾语和that引导的定语从句） 【高分句型2】I believe that with these materials, the library will better support our English learning and foster a more engaging reading environment for all students.（运用了that引导的宾语从句） 1 / 54 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$