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高考读后续写冲刺---比赛类
1、 常见情节线
1. 比赛前的苦恼与不自信(负面情绪塑造)
2. 比赛前 (勤奋练习的场景)
3. 比赛中 (优秀的表现)
4. 比赛后的主旨升华
2、 高频动作链
比赛前
1.在接下来的几天里,塔克一有空就翻阅资料,从里面的故事、图片和文字中汲取灵感,编织故事。
Over the following days, Tucker spent every spare moment thumbing through the material and weaving together stories inspired by the stories, pictures and words.(2024届福建省高三下学期适应性练习:写作小白终获奖)
2.带着诺亚的建议,她开始制作服装,精心布置花草树木,创造出一个美丽的花园场景。她花了几个小时来完善自己的作品,到处添加一些小细节,直到恰到好处。
With Noah’s advice in mind, she started to work on her costume, carefully arranging the plants and flowers to create a beautiful garden scene. She spent hours perfecting her creation, adding little details here and there until it was just right.(2024届山东省日照市高三下学期校际联合考试)
3.她微笑着从椅子上站起来,拍拍我的肩膀,温和地说:"好吧,你有什么问题吗?她温暖的笑容融化了我的紧张。我把所有关于写作的困惑都说了出来,(2024 届-江苏扬州-高三统考期中)。
Smiling, she got up from her chair, patted me on the shoulder and said gently, “OK, what’s your problem?” Her warm smile melted my nervousness. I poured out all my puzzles about writing,(2024届·江苏扬州·高三统考期中)
比赛中
1.我深吸一口气,冲了上去,飞身一跃,越了过去!(跳高)
I took a deep breath, ran up, took off, and crossed over!(2024届南昌一模:女生参加跳高比赛打破性别偏见)
2.发现大卫在三分线外无人防守,乔治毫不犹豫地迅速将球传给了他。球在空中精准地飞过,平稳地穿过篮筐。
Spotting David unguarded at the three-point line, George quickly passed the ball to him without hesitation. The ball flew through the air with precision, smoothly passing through the basket.(2024广州一模)
3.威尔逊点点头,在一张空桌子旁坐了下来,掏出铅笔开始做试卷,认真地做完了所有的题目。
Wilson nodded, sat down at one of the empty desks, pulled out a pencil and started working on the test, carefully went through all the questions.(23-24·广东惠州二模)
4.突然,约翰放慢了速度,伴随着一阵剧痛坐在了地上。
Suddenly, John slowed down and sat onto the ground with a sharp pain.
5.我紧张地看着其他游泳者潜入水中。我的心怦怦直跳,深吸一口气,向起点区走去。随着哨声响起,我沉入水中。(温州三模作文--走出舒适区 挑战仰泳比赛终成功)
I watched nervously as the other swimmers dived into the water. With a pounding heart, I took a deep breath, and walked towards the starting blocks. As the whistle blew, and I immersed myself in the water.(温州三模作文---走出舒适区 挑战仰泳比赛终成功)
5.在同学们的欢呼声中,塔克兴奋地走上舞台,紧紧攥着他的活页夹,向弗利彭夫人投去感激的目光。(2024届福建省高三下学期适应性练习:写作小白终获奖)
With cheers erupting from his classmates, Tucker walked up to the stage excitedly, clutching his binder tightly and casting a grateful look at Mrs Flippen. (2024届福建省高三下学期适应性练习:写作小白终获奖)
6.桑德罗站在泳池边,注视着他的竞争对手,努力保持注意力集中。时间终于到了。他深吸一口气,在听到发令枪声时,将曾经笼罩他的疑虑一扫而空。
Standing at the edge of the pool, Sandro watched his competitors, trying to maintain his focus. The time finally came. He took a deep breath, blocking out the doubts that had once clouded his mind as he heard the sound of the gun. (202308广州市&湖北圆创8月联考)
7. 他看到莫希的手指毫不费力地在琴弦上划动,奏出动人的旋律,似乎能俘获每个人的心。
He could see Mohi’s fingers moving effortlessly across the strings, producing a attracting melody that seemed to capture the hearts of everyone. (202308深圳罗湖联考:笨拙女孩Mohi参加舞台表演)
8. 捧着那束红玫瑰,她感到心跳加速,紧张得胃都绷紧了。
Holding the bouquet(花束)of red roses, she felt her heart racing wildly and her stomach tightened with nervousness.
3、 衔接句
a.时间衔接
Finally came the big moment. Taking a deep breath, I stepped onto the stage, enveloped in the glow of the lights. 克服恐惧,独唱展风姿---2023浙南名校联盟第一次联考
The moment we finally crossed the finish line together, John cast a grateful look at me.(湖北省宜荆荆随10月联考放弃获奖,帮助受伤的对手完成比赛)
In that split second, I tried to help him stand up and move forward, but he shook head to say no.
Suddenly, I was trapped in an instant dilemma. My strong desire to overtake John was flashing in my mind. But in an instant, I decided without hesitation to accompany him to take a rest.放弃获奖,帮助受伤的对手完成比赛---湖北省宜荆荆随10月联考
In that critical moment, his dad’s words echoed in his mind: “I would have traded every shot for a win.”
Half an hour slipped by and finally it was our team’s turn to perform..
b.地点衔接
Stepping out of the bathroom, Anjali saw some inspiring posters on the wall.(2024·浙江杭州·二模)
c.心理活动衔接
Sensing my embarrassment, Jenny looked at me with an encouraging smile.(湖南师范大学附属中学联考二模---好友帮我克服恐惧准备演讲)
想到教练鼓励的话语和摩根坚定的支持,我专注于呼吸和划水的节奏。我比以往任何时候都更加努力,每一次划水都让我离终点更近。
Thinking of my coach's encouraging words and Morgan's unwavering support, I focused on my breathing and the rhythm of my strokes. I pushed myself harder than ever before, each stroke propelling me closer to the finish line.(温州三模作文)
As I had expected, they delivered such a flawless performance, especially Cameron. His stage presence left me an unforgettable impression. (福建省龙岩市三月模拟:不自信的男孩在家人鼓励下成功完成表演)
d.情绪衔接
To my great delight, Sara still cried, but much less frequently than before.
It was a great relief that they enjoyed the performance so much and played to the best of their ability.(福建省龙岩市三月模拟:不自信的男孩在家人鼓励下成功完成表演
e.五感衔接(看到、听到、闻到…)
On spotting his painful look, I ran up to him as fast as a bolt of lightning. (湖北省宜荆荆随10月联考:放弃获奖,帮助受伤的对手完成比赛)
Lifting my face, I saw my dad's eyes, in which I saw the sweat, the time. In that second, the world stood still.比赛失利,梦想破灭?(2024届杭州一模)
4、 主题升华句
精选:
1.我恍然大悟,原来是老师的鼓励让我找到了成功的自信。
It dawned on me that it was the encouragement from my teacher that helped me find the confidence to succeed. (202308湖南天一大联考:害羞的我第一次参加舞台表演)
2.这次经历让我卸下了害羞的面具,让害羞的女孩走上了外向的道路。
The experience helped me throw off my shy mask, leading the shy girl onto the path to becoming outgoing. (202308湖南天一大联考:害羞的我第一次参加舞台表演)
3.对队友的信任永远不会迟到。(厦门四模:力排众议 传球给不被看好的新手终获胜)
Trust for your teammate is never late.(厦门四模:力排众议 传球给不被看好的新手终获胜)
4.艾米丽成为激励乒乓球运动员的希望象征,她证明了只要努力并相信自己,一切皆有可能。她的经历提醒人们,永远不要把残疾视为障碍,而应将其视为发掘未开发潜力的机会
Emily became a symbol of hope for inspiring table tennis players, proving that with hard work and belief in oneself, anything is possible. Her journey served as a reminder that disabilities should never be seen as obstacles but rather as opportunities to discover untapped potential.(2024届8月金太阳广东联考:视力障碍的运动员追梦)
更多主题句
1. My mother was right— it wasn’t about me. It was about making people think about what girls could do. I jumped not only over the bar, but also over the boundary of prejudice.(2024届南昌一模:女生参加跳高比赛打破性别偏见)
2. Breaking the scoring record no longer mattered to George. What truly counted was the bond he had built with his teammates. He had come to appreciate the essence of sports: the selflessness and teamwork, values his dad had passed down to him. (2024届广州一模)
3. It dawned on George that breaking the scoring record wasn’t just about personal glory; it was about leading his team to victory. (2024届广州一模:球队获胜胜过个人荣耀)
4. After the contest, He wrote in his diary: Believe in yourself, be thankful to the one who believes in you and accept the one who don't understand you.(2024届福建省龙岩市三月模拟)
5. Reflecting on the night’s events, I realized that even amidst the chaos and uncertainty, I had persevered and delivered a memorable performance. With newfound confidence, I eagerly awaited the next opportunity to step into the spotlight.(2024江苏盐城二模:话剧赛上获成长)
6. From that day on, Lily felt more confident in herself and her abilities. She realized that it’s important to follow your passions and do what you love.(2024届山东省日照市高三下学期校际联合考试)
7. It was a moment of triumph, a celebration of hope, and the best birthday present we could have ever given. Our secret training had paid off, and Ted's journey was a reminder to all of us that hope, combined with action, can lead to miracles(河北省石家庄市2024年高三质检二)
8. The race might not have brought him a trophy, but it had brought something far more valuable — friendship, recognition, and the belief that he could overcome any challenge that came his way.(202308广州市&湖北圆创8月联考:努力训练游泳并获奖,获得自信)
9. It was our team spirit that carried us to win the competition and life.(202310齐鲁名校联盟联考:团体接力赛失误,但队友不放弃终获胜)
10. The unexpected discouragement can be a blessing in disguise if we have a belief in ourselves and never give up our dreams.(-2023浙南名校联盟第一次联考:克服恐惧,独唱展风姿)
11. " When the two teams met after the game,nobody on either side was too concerned about wins or losses. This is something our kids will hold for a lifetime," Thamas’ coach words ached in my mind .(2024届广东金太阳10月联考--放弃罚球得分,安慰对手)
12. As I had expected, they delivered such a flawless performance, especially Cameron. His stage presence left me an unforgettable impression. After the performance, I congratulated and hugged each of them, as I knew it was bound to be a success due to their hard work and great enthusiasm.(2024届高三福建省龙岩市一级校联盟期中考)
13. Although I didn’t win any prize, the experience helped me understand Mrs. John’s remark “writing was an art”. After that, I was really into writing and never stopped it, which I owed to the guidance of my dear teacher Mrs. Johnson. (2024届·江苏扬州·高三统考期中:老师鼓励我参加写作比赛)
14. As I recalled the match, I smiled as I looked at the trophy. I realized that the most important thing was not the trophy but the value of teamwork that I had learnt from that match.(2024届湖北省武汉市部分重点中学高三第二次联考:篮球赛经历顿悟团队合作的重要性)
15. As I climbed out of the pool, Morgan and Coach Cafferty came to praise me. Suddenly, all the doubts and fears gone, I had proven to myself that I was capable of more than I had ever imagined.(温州三模作文:走出舒适区 挑战仰泳比赛终成功)
5、 微场景
1.表演类比赛场景
表演前的紧张与忐忑场景描写
1)回顾这五个月的练习,我似乎对自己很有信心。然而,当我即将登台时,我的心怦怦直跳,喉咙发紧,膝盖发软。
Looking back on the five months of practice, I seemed to have confidence in myself. However, when I was about to go on stage, my heart was pounding so hard that my throat tightened and my knees felt weak.(202308湖南天一大联考)
2)站在幕后,我仍在背台词、练歌曲,想象着自己在舞台上的表演。然而,暖场音乐、闪烁的舞台灯光和欢呼的观众都把我拉回了现实。这让我再次陷入紧张的海洋。
Standing behind the curtains, I still memorized the lines and practiced songs, imagining myself acting on the stage. However, the warming-up music, the flashing stage lights and the cheering audience all brought me back to reality. And the realization threw me into a sea of nervousness again. (202308湖南天一大联考)
3)当我站在那里不知所措时,肩膀上轻轻的触碰把我拉回了现实。那是我的妈妈,带着安慰的微笑(2023浙南名校联盟第一次联考)
As I stood there, feeling at a loss, a gentle touch on my shoulder brought me back to reality. It was my mom, wearing a comforting smile(2023浙南名校联盟第一次联考)
表演中克服紧张感的场景描写
1)看着莎莉老师闪亮的蓝眼睛,我的心情平静了下来,然后带着他温暖的话语,像一缕阳光走上了舞台。
1)Looking into Mrs. Sally’s shining blue eyes, I calmed down and then walked onto the stage with his warm words like a ray of sunshine.
2)莎莉夫人把我揽在怀里,安慰我说,经过这么多的练习,我一定会把最好的一面展现出来。我备受鼓舞,如释重负。
2)Gathering me into Mrs. Sally’s arms, she comforted me that I would certainly bring the best out in the performance with so much practice. Encouraged and relieved, I was ready.
3)深吸一口气,我在灯光的照耀下走上了舞台。起初,我的声音因紧张而颤抖,但随着歌曲的进行,我的信心也随之高涨。我将自己的情感倾注在表演中,让歌声将我的感情带入空气中。
3)Taking a deep breath, I stepped onto the stage, enveloped in the glow of the lights. At first, my voice trembled with nervousness, but as the song progressed, my confidence soared. I poured my emotions into the performance, letting my voice carry my feelings into the air. (2023浙南名校联盟第一次联考)
4) 珍妮察觉到了我的尴尬,她用鼓励的微笑看着我。然后,她建议我谈谈我的妈妈,耐心地帮我把想法整理成合理而发自内心的句子。
Sensing my embarrassment, Jenny looked at me with an encouraging smile. Then she suggested I talk about my mom, helping me patiently organize my thoughts into reasonable and heartfelt sentences.(湖南师范大学附属中学联考二模---好友帮我克服恐惧准备演讲)
5)惊恐的时刻来临了。伊丽莎白紧握着玫瑰花,鼓起全部勇气慢慢地走向沃尔夫女士站立的地方。她艰难地张开嘴,嘴里念叨着那六个字。但没有声音发出来。她又试了一次,只觉得话卡在喉咙里,怎么也吐不出来。观众席上昏暗的灯光渐渐在她的眼中变成了无数的光点。
Then came the frightening moment. Clutching the roses, Elizabeth mustered all her courage to edge slowly towards the spot where Ms Wolff was standing. With difficulty, she opened her mouth, mouthing the very six words. But no sound came out. She tried again, only to feel the words stuck in her throat, unable to pour them out. The dim light from the audience gradually became numerous dots in her eyes.
表演后的成功喜悦场景描写
1) 当我表演结束时,全场爆发出热烈的掌声。
When I finished my performance, the audience burst into applause. The scene made me feel myself floating in an ocean of happiness.(202308湖南天一大联考:害羞的我第一次参加舞台表演)
2) 接下来的 15 分钟见证了我们精彩的表演,每个人都沉浸在角色中,我也完全忘记了紧张。当我们鞠躬致谢结束时,大厅里响起了雷鸣般的掌声,这表明我们成功了。我的同学和朋友都围了过来,祝贺我演出成功。(202308湖南天一大联考)
The next 15 minutes witnessed our amazing performance, everyone immersed in the role and I totally forgetting my nervousness. When the play ended with our bow of thanks, the hall exploded with thunderous applause, indicating that we had made it. My classmates and friends came gathering around me, congratulating me on the success. (202308湖南天一大联考)
3)观众们惊叹不已,掌声和欢呼声在大厅里回荡。面对热烈的反响,我知道我战胜了恐惧。
The crowd watched in awe, their applause and cheers echoing in the hall. Facing the overwhelming response, I knew that I had conquered my fears.(2023浙南名校联盟第一次联考)
4)最终,她深吸一口气,低声结结巴巴地说:“美......美丽的鲜花,献给美丽的表演!” 说着,她试探性地将玫瑰花献给了安娜-沃尔夫,而安娜-沃尔夫则回赠了伊丽莎白一个大大的拥抱。
Ultimately, she took a deep breath and stammered in a low voice, “Beaut...Beautiful flowers for a beautiful performance!” With this, she tentatively presented the roses to Ana Wolff, who, in return, wrapped Elizabeth in a big hug.
PartB球赛场景
1) 在周围没有防守队员的情况下,大卫转身向篮筐投篮。球在空中精准地飞过,平稳地穿过篮筐。熊队领先两分,全场欢呼!哨声响起,标志着比赛结束。
With no defenders around, David turned and shot at the basket. The ball flew through the air with precision, smoothly passing through the basket. The crowd burst into cheers as the Bears took the lead by two points! The whistle blew, marking the end of the game.(2024广州一模)
2) 当一名绿队球员冲向马凯拉,试图阻挡马凯拉进球时。马凯拉将球分到右侧,躲过对方球员的防守,然后凌空抽射,球骗过门将,稳稳地飞进了球门。
When one of the Green players rushed to Makayla, trying to block Makayla's goal. Makayla split the ball to her right, escaped the other player, and then volleyed it, which then cheated the goalkeeper and sailed safely into the goal.(厦门四模:力排众议传球给不被看好的新手终获胜)
3) 裁判吹响哨子,将篮球抛向空中。我知道我必须让我的球队抢占先机,于是我纵身一跃,在空中抓住了球。“约翰,接住!” 我大声喊道。约翰个子不高,但跑起来却快如闪电。还没等对方队员跑到约翰跟前,他已经把球投进了篮圈。我们的队员欢呼雀跃,我则用拳头在空中猛击了两下。
4) The referee blew the whistle and flung the basketball into the air. I knew I had to give my team a head start, so I leaped up in the air to grab the ball. "John, catch!" I yelled at the top of my voice. John was short but he could run at lightning speed. Before the opposing team could reach John, he had already shot the ball into the basketball hoop. Our team cheered with joy, and I punched the air twice with my fist.(2024届湖北省武汉市部分重点中学高三第二次联考)
5) 当对方全队向我冲过来的时候,尽管我被包围了,但我仍然保持冷静。我把球扔过他们的头顶。球在空中像导弹一样飞到了埃里克的手中,他就站在我们对手的后面,篮球架的旁边。埃里克把球扣进了篮筐。我们以 5-0 的比分赢得了比赛。
As the entire opposing team charged towards me, I kept my calm even though I was surrounded. I threw the ball over their heads. It flew through the air like a missile into the hands of Eric, who was standing right behind our opponents, next to the basketball hoop. Eric dunked the ball in. We won the match 5-0. (2024届湖北省武汉市部分重点中学高三第二次联考:比赛经历助我理解团队合作的重要性)
Part C游泳赛场景
桑德罗像其他选手一样自信地跳入泳池。他像鱼一样自由自在地游着。游过 150 米后,他被两名选手甩在身后。在最后 50 米,桑德罗游得非常出色,他的双臂快速向前推,双腿用力击水。最终,冠军还是与他失之交臂
Sandro dived into the pool confidently like other competitors. He swam as freely as a fish. 150 meters covered, he was left behind by two competitors. In the last 50 meters, Sandra swam magnificently, with his arms pushing forward fast, his legs hitting the water hard. Finally, the championship was still out of his reach. (202308广州市&湖北圆创8月联考)
Part D赛跑场景
我的力量正在耗尽。我的肺拼命吸入足够的空气,我的脚变成了水泥砖。与我最强大的对手之一并驾齐驱,我看到了终点线。当我开始向荣誉发起最后冲刺时,我的膝盖一软,双腿瘫软下来。我所做的一切都无法让它们承受住我的重量。它们就像果冻一样软弱无力。尽管我知道胜利的梦想已经破灭,但我必须完成比赛。我用尽全身的力气,手脚并用,一寸一寸地爬过终点线。当爸爸蹲下来把我拉进他的怀里时,我的心里涌动着羞愧。
My strength was running out. My lungs fought to take in enough air, and my feet transformed into cement bricks. Neck and neck with one of my greatest rivals, I could see the finish line. I had begun the final sprint into glory when my knees buckled and my legs gave way. Nothing I could do would make them hold my weight. They were as weak as jelly. Even though I knew my dreams of victory had been destroyed, I had to finish the race. With all of the strength left in me, I got on my hands and knees and crawled, inch by inch, across the finish line. Shame pulsed through my veins as Dad squatted down and pulled me into his arms.(2024届杭州一模:比赛失利,梦想破灭?)
Part E接力赛场景
轮到我时,我气喘吁吁地接过接力棒,开始奔跑。同学们爆发出热烈的欢呼声。听着大家的鼓励,我使出浑身解数,奋力向前跑去。不一会儿,我就遇到了第六位队友,准备把接力棒传给他。然而,还没等他抓住,我已经松开了接力棒。“哎呀!” 同学们一阵惊呼。来不及震惊,我停下脚步,弯下腰捡起接力棒,以最快的速度递给了他。来不及想发生了什么,我的队友拼命加快了速度。显然,我们已经落后了好几米。但是,他仍然像一匹脱缰的野马,全速向前奔跑,脸上露出坚定的神情。在充分准备的情况下,我们的下一位队友紧紧握住接力棒,成功地接近了前几名选手。出乎我们意料的是,最后一名队友鼓足干劲,以第二名的身份冲向终点。我们都欢呼雀跃,笑声不断。
As my turn arrived, I gasped the baton and began to run. Our classmates exploded with loud cheers. Hearing the encouragement, I made the best use of my legs, running forward. In a short time, I met the sixth teammate, and was ready to pass the baton to him. However, before he grabbed it, I had already released it.“Oh my!” A wave of shocked noises came from my classmates. No time to be shocked, I stopped, bent down to pick the baton up and handed it to him as quickly as possible. Having no time to think what had happened, my teammate picked up his speed desperately. Apparently, we had fallen behind for some meters. However, he still raced forward at a full speed like a wild horse out of control, with a determined look on his face. With full preparation, our next teammate held the baton tightly and managed to get closer to the top competitors. And to our surprise, our last teammate gathered up all his energy to rush to the finishing line as a second one. We all jumped for joy and laughter.(202310齐鲁名校联盟联考:团体接力赛失误,但队友不放弃终获胜)
Part F钢琴表演场景
灯光渐暗,沃尔夫开始了她的表演。她一边摇摆一边点头,手指在琴键上飞舞。轻柔悲伤的部分,响亮愤怒的部分,听起来很有趣的部分。随着一声 “挥舞”,沃尔夫弹出了最后一个音符。大厅里响起了雷鸣般的掌声。人们跳起来欢呼。沃尔夫女士微笑着鞠了一躬。然后她走下舞台。
The lights dimmed, and Wolff began her performance. She swayed and nodded with her fingers dancing across the keys. Soft sad parts, loud angry parts, parts that sounded fun to play. With a flourish(挥舞), Wolff played her final note. Applause thundered through the hall. People jumped to their feet and cheered. Ms Wolff smiled and bowed. Then she walked off stage.
“胜利庆祝”微场景
1)当我爬出泳池时,摩根冲过来拥抱了我。卡弗蒂教练拍了拍我的背,告诉我她为我感到骄傲。
As I climbed out of the pool, Morgan rushed over to hug me. Coach Cafferty gave me a pat on the back and told me she was proud of me.(温州三模作文---走出舒适区 挑战仰泳比赛终成功)
2).当宣布桑德罗获得第三名的结果时,其他选手纷纷向他表示祝贺,全场观众爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。
When the result was announced that Sandro won third place, however, other players congratulated him, the audience in the stadium bursting into thunderous applause
. 202308广州市&湖北圆创8月联考---努力训练游泳并获奖,获得自信
4)当演出在我们的鞠躬致谢中结束时,大厅里响起了雷鸣般的掌声,这表明我们成功了。我的同学和朋友们围拢过来,祝贺我演出成功。
When the play ended with our bow of thanks, the hall exploded with thunderous applause, indicating that we had made it. My classmates and friends came gathering around me, congratulating me on the success.(202308湖南天一大联考)
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