专题 06 读后续写如何进行有效连贯和衔接内容 （写作专练） 英语高考复习通用版

专题 06 如何进行有效连贯和衔接内容 目录 01衔接原则--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------1 02衔接类型--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------1 03衔接技巧--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------2 续写首句衔接技巧-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------2 续写段间衔接技巧-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------3 续写段内衔接技巧-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------4 衔接过渡的常用句式--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------4 语法结构衔接类型-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------5 续写主题衔接-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------5 04即时演练--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------9 衔接原则 连贯是读者通过语篇的中心主题结构、组织或模式, 借助一定的语境和逻辑, 解读整体语篇特征和语义一致性的过程。 连贯针对的是整个篇章, 而非毫无逻辑联系的词汇堆砌。 语篇可能没有语法或词汇衔接, 却依然存在隐性连贯; 若没有逻辑衔接, 则无法构成连贯的语篇。 宏观衔接结构的框架 【para 1】 衔接1: 承接续写第一段首句，描写人物的心理和情感反应以及随之产生的行为或言语 过渡1: 语言/动作/环境描写+关键情节 衔接2: 依据续写第二段首句写出续写第一段的最后一句与之衔接 【para 2】 衔接3: 承接续写第二段首句，描写人物的心理和情感反应以及随之产生的行为或言语过渡2: 关键情节+心理/动作/语言+结局(紧贴首段，解决问题) 主题1: 依据故事主题写出启示和感悟，以提炼或升华主题 衔接类型 结合续写内容与原文的关系, 可将续写内容的衔接分为以下两类: 续写内容与前文的逻辑衔接, 包含情节与情绪的衔接, 段首句的衔接和两个续写段落之间的衔接以及续写段落内的语法衔接 (句法衔接 )和续写段落内的词汇衔接。 衔接技巧 一、续写首句接话的技巧 语篇通过词汇选择而建立起来的连贯性。词汇衔接手段可分为重复、 同义、反义、 上下义关系和搭配。语法衔接和词汇衔接能够用外在形式将语篇的内在意义更明确 地表现出来, 语篇连贯得以清晰实现。 1．简单重复部分信息（重复不仅是以此来强调自己和说话人的关注点相同，更重要的是对说话人的认同，满足说话人被尊重被关注的需要，是对一致准则的遵守，重复可以是对情境的重复。话语的重复可以分为简单性重复和归纳性重复。） ①（2022·河北省保定市高三摸底）Luckily, the man didn't seem to be angry. →He just shrugged, smiled a bit and went to the room where my first lecture was about to take place.（解读：那人似乎没有生气。他略微微笑，耸了耸肩。没有生气言外之意就是高兴，这样实现情绪完美对接） ②(2016. 10浙江卷)Para1：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. →Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. ③(2018.06浙江卷)Para 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark.→ Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back. ④（2022·河北省保定市高三摸底）Professor Mathews turned out to be an excellent speaker and the lecture went really well.→ After the class was dismissed, I came to him to apologize for my bad manners earlier in the day. 2．顺水推舟，就势推进（首句往往提到某些信息，比如news，fact，words等，我们可以根据给出故事的内容，顺势按照它们的内容写下去） ①In order not to let my team down, I decided to improve myself. →I ran as much as I could around my neighborhood to get in better shape and improve my speed. ②Sarah was lost in thought and decided to make a change.→ She went to the bedroom first, which was terrible. Sarah quickly began to sweep the floor, fold the clothes, and made the bed. ③With the company of the dog, Sarah began a busy and happy life. →After she woke up in the morning, she took her dog for a walk in the park. After coming back, she cleaned her room and had breakfast delightedly. ④That’s when I noticed my teacher Mr. Laskey, who turned to me and smiled. “Congratulations!” →Hearing this, I was totally at sea. 3．首句呼应——让子弹继续飞（首句往往提到某些信息，并且有主语，描述了主语的动作和特征，我们可以根据给出故事的内容，让主语的动作和情节继续走下去。或提取核心关键词作为新主语，有时可以利用宾语的信息，进行信息推进） ①The old clock had stood silent for years.→Its broken hands still pointed to 3:15, the moment my grandfather passed away.（利用主语衔接此处The old clock’s——Its） ②On Thanksgiving, he actually let me pet him. →His soft fur felt warm under my hand, and his gentle murmuring filled the room, creating a heartwarming atmosphere. （代词衔接him——his） 4．借助动词进行联动衔接 ①On Thanksgiving, he actually let me pet him. →When I scratched under his chin, he half-closed his eyes and looked up at me with an expression that wasn’t disagreeable. （根据动词pet进行动作衔接scratched（两个词是上下义关系）） ②On Dad’s next evening off, we put The Pirate in a box and drove down to the wharf. →As we opened the box, he peered out, his eyes instantly lighting up at the familiar smell of the sea.（利用反义词衔接此处put in——opened） 二、续写段间接话的技巧 1．句子成分嫁接（前段尾句宾语/表语成为后段首句主语（或通过代词复现）） ①前段尾句："...I decided to repair the clock."→后段首句："It took three weekends of careful work, but the result was worth it." ②前段尾句：I knew I had to act quickly, but I also knew I could do it.→后段首句：Holding the rescue buoy, I jumped into the loud waves. （相同主语延续第一段动作，构成动作链，顺理成章） ③前段尾句：He took off his jacket and wrapped it around the girl to keep her warm.→后段首句：Then, Tom picked up the girl and started to climb back up the ravine.（相同主语延续第一段动作，构成动作链，顺理成章） 2．利用同义表达手段 ①前段尾句：Despite the bond we’d formed, I thought it was time to let him return to where he belonged.→后段首句：On Dad’s next evening off, we put The Pirate in a box and drove down to the wharf.（return to where he belonged——drove down to the wharf） ②前段尾句：Sadly, we agreed that he was not a happy cat and decided to take it back to the wharf.→后段首句：On Dad’s next evening off, we put The Pirate in a box and drove down to the wharf.（take it back to the wharf——drove down to the wharf） 3．利用逻辑关系衔接 ①前段尾句：With renewed confidence, I focused on making the best cupcakes I could.  →后段首句：Thanks to Dayna’s chocolates, I won! （making the best cupcakes I could——I won经过——结果） ②前段尾句：Their laughter and songs filled the park, making the cleanup seem more like a fun game.→后段首句： Unexpectedly, other parkgoers joined in as they did the cleanup. （以Unexpectedly为转折，展现上下文的不同意境） 三、续写段内衔接技巧 1.让故事表达连贯自然流畅：能让故事的情节发展更加舒畅，比如“suddenly”“then”“after that”等词，可清晰展现事件发生的先后顺序不会感到突兀。 2.展现逻辑关系：像“however”“therefore”“moreover”等词，能明确句子或段落间的逻辑，如转折、因果、递进等关系，有助于读者理解故事的内在逻辑。 3.提升表达效果：恰当使用衔接过渡语，体现考生对英语语言的熟练运用，使文章更具可读性和专业性，从而提升整体语言质量和得分。 四、衔接过渡的常用句式 (1)介词短语或副词作状语衔接 A few weeks later，when I almost forgot the contest，there came the news. Much to my surprise/Surprisingly，I beat a lot of participants and won the first prize. 几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传来了消息。令我吃惊的是，我打败了很多参赛者，获得了第一名。 (2)对话或者独白衔接 I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. “Congratulations! Your efforts paid off！”，said he smilingly. 颁奖典礼结束后，我去了老师的办公室。“祝贺你！你的努力得到了回报！”他微笑着说。 (3)状语从句衔接 I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.The minute I stepped in，he laughed out loud again as has had before，and said “Congratulations！” 颁奖典礼结束后，我去了老师的办公室。我一进门，他又像以前一样大笑起来，说“祝贺你！” (4)形容词(短语)作状语 With everything ready，Bernard started out on his new business. Anxious and full of expectation，he took the popcorn around to the houses and began to sell his popcorn. 一切准备就绪后，伯纳德开始着手他的新生意。既焦虑又满怀期待，他拿着爆米花挨家挨户地开始售卖。 (5)非谓语动词作状语 We sat down next to each other，but David wouldn't look at me. Seeing his face filled with anxiety，I felt sad，deciding to talk something with him. 我们紧挨着坐了下来，但大卫不愿看我。看着他那充满焦虑的脸，我感到很难过，决定和他说点什么。 (6)倒装句衔接 As the twins looked around them in disappointment，their father appeared.In no time did their father seem to understand exactly what had happened and what to do next. 当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了。他们的父亲似乎很快就明白了到底发生了什么事，下一步该怎么办。 四、 语法结构衔接类型 1.场景状语前置：Cold and hungry, we huddled together under the old oak tree.（形容词短语营造氛围） 分词逻辑衔接：Hearing the cheers from the crowd, I felt a surge of confidence rushing through me.（现在分词表伴随） 2.倒装强调衔接：Not once did she complain, even when the rain soaked through her jacket.（否定词前置强化态度） 3.时间标记衔接：Three days later, when the first snow fell, we found the missing puppy by the barn.（时间副词明确脉络） 4.对话推进衔接："What if we try together?" she suggested, holding out a hand covered in paint.（直接引语推动情节） 5.因果句式衔接：Because he had shared his last sandwich with me, I learned to always carry extra for those in need.（原因状语从句揭示逻辑） 五、续写主题衔接 1.主题锚定——结尾升华需从具体事件中提炼 "善良"" 勇气 ""责任" 等普适价值，避免空洞说教 事件：帮助老人找回失物 升华："A small act of care can light up someone else's world, and in doing so, we brighten our own." 2. 万能句式模板（带功能标注） 情感递进句：As I watched her walk away, I realized that goodbye doesn't always mean loss—it can mean the beginning of something beautiful.（从具体到抽象） 哲理点睛句：Just as the river needs both banks to flow, kindness needs both giving and receiving to thrive.（比喻修辞升华） 行动承诺句：From that day forward, I kept a journal of small kindnesses, determined to make goodness a daily practice.（未来展望强化主题） 强调升华句：It wasn't the trophy that mattered—it was the team standing beside me, proving that victory is sweeter when shared.（强调句型聚焦核心） 典例示范　(2021·浙江6月卷改编) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My dad，George，only had an eighth grade education.A quiet man，he didn't understand my world of school activities.From age 14，he worked.And his dad，Albert，took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses. I didn't really understand his world either：He was a livestock trucker，and I thought that I would surpass(超过)anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation. Summers in the mid­70s were spent at home shooting baskets，hitting a baseball，or throwing a football，preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team.In poor weather，I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号). The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field.He explained our basic task，the tractor fired up and we were off，riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals.After a short way，the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed.Then we began again.This happened over and over，but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs，lamb's­quarters，foxtails，and the king of weeds，the pretty purple thistle.It was tiring work，but I looked forward to the pay，even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to. At home，my dad said，“A job's a big step to growing up.I'm glad you will be contributing to the household.” My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished. My labors lasted about two weeks，and the farmer said there might be more work，but I wasn't interested.I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money. 注意：续写词数应为150左右。 When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 【参考范文】 When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me. Obviously(副词作状语衔接)，my dad would try to persuade me to contribute all my earning.It's never fair.I thought in my mind hopelessly，grabbing the money tightly in my sweating fist.After a long silence，he didn't ask as expected，instead，he gently said “How do you plan to spend the money from the farmer？” Without any hesitation，the following words popped out，“There are many things I wanted，such as a new football，a baseball bat and a pair of sneakers and so on，anything but to pay family expense like you.” At that，my dad nodded and let me keep the money(与第二段首句主语一致). I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. Staring at my confused expression(分词作状语衔接)，my dad explained：“Though I can't understand your world of school activities，still I will stand by you”.Moved by the touching words and seeing his increasingly hunching back，I felt a sense of guilt and selfishness welled up in my mind and surged through myself.At exactly that moment，I realized why my father let me have the money—it was his expectation for my future，his encouragement and quiet love.It was this unique experience that made me realize I would never surpass his love for me(强调句型). 【写作指导】 故事梗概 “我”赚取119美元工资后，本以为父亲会要求上交收入，却意外获得支配权。父亲的理解与沉默的爱让“我”深感愧疚，最终领悟父爱的深意。 语言亮点分析 副词与分词状语衔接 1. Obviously开篇点明“我”对父亲的固有认知，形成心理预期反差。 2. Staring at my confused expression以动作细节衔接父亲的解释，自然引出情感转折。 动作与心理描写 1. grabbing the money tightly in my sweating fist通过“抓钱”“出汗的拳头”等具象动作，刻画“我”的抗拒与紧张。 1. a sense of guilt and selfishness welled up in my mind and surged through myself用“涌出”“席卷”等动态词汇，强化情感冲击的层次感。 强调句型与情感升华 1. It was this unique experience that made me realize...以强调句收尾，突出经历的意义，点明“父爱”主题。 可优化之处与修改建议 1.句式丰富度与高级表达 原文问题：部分句式结构简单，可尝试复合句、虚拟语气或“无灵主语”等高级表达。 修改示例： · 普通句：It's never fair. 升级句：A wave of frustration swept over me at the mere thought of contributing my hard-earned money,for fairness had always seemed like a distant dream in such conversations.（运用“无灵主语”+原因状语从句，强化情感铺垫） · 普通句：He didn't ask as expected. 升级句：To my astonishment,his usual demand never came;instead,his question hung in the air like a gentle breeze—“How do you plan to spend the money from the farmer？”*（增加环境描写+比喻修辞，烘托意外感） 2.情感细节的具象化 原文问题：部分情感描写较笼统，可通过五感（视觉、听觉、触觉等）增强画面感。 修改示例： · 心理描写升级： Moved by the touching words and seeing his increasingly hunching back→ His words,soft yet weighty,settled deep in my heart,while his hunched back—silhouetted against the dim kitchen light—looked like a weathered mountain bearing the storms of life.A sharp ache pierced my chest,as if my selfishness had just left a tangible wound.（加入光影描写与通感修辞，将“愧疚”转化为可感知的疼痛） 3.逻辑衔接与主题深化 原文问题：从“允许用钱”到“领悟父爱”的过渡稍显突兀，可增加伏笔或象征物。 修改建议： · 引入象征物（如父亲的旧物）： As he spoke,his calloused hand instinctively brushed the frayed edge of his decades-old work jacket—a jacket that had patched up our family's hardships for years.That subtle gesture suddenly unlocked the truth:his“letting go”of the money was his way of handing me a torch,lighting my path while concealing his own sacrifices.（以“旧夹克”象征父亲的付出，用“火炬”比喻父爱传承，强化主题） 名师点津：读后续写提分策略 1.“三维联动”构建故事张力 · 情感维度：用“矛盾→意外→顿悟”结构（如“我”的抗拒→父亲的宽容→愧疚与理解）制造情感波动。 · 感官维度：通过“听觉”（父亲的嗓音沙哑）、“视觉”（鬓角的白发）、“触觉”（纸币的质感）等细节增强代入感。 · 象征维度：借助物品（如工资、旧夹克）或环境（夕阳、厨房灯光）隐喻人物心理变化。 2.高级句式的“精准投放”原则 · 动作描写：优先使用“动作链+伴随状语”（如rushed to the door,flung it open,panting heavily）。 · 环境渲染：多用“with复合结构”或“独立主格”（如With the clock ticking,shadows stretched across the room like silent spectators）。 · 情感高潮：用强调句（It was...that...）或虚拟语气（If only I had noticed his struggles earlier）升华主题。 3.避免“为高级而高级”的误区 · 句式匹配度：确保选用的句型与故事场景贴合。例如，争吵场景适合短句+倒装（Never had I spoken to him so rudely），抒情场景适合长句+比喻。 · 语义连贯：高级句式需服务于情节逻辑，避免堆砌。如用“无灵主语”描写情感时，需与人物动作形成呼应（A wave of shame washed over me as I met his gaze）。 即时演练 一、读后续写情景运用—单句 阅读所给首句，在了解首句所设定的情境后，用一句话进行衔接相关的主题续写。 1. [梦想大学录取]She opened the envelope and pulled out the invitation to her dream university. ____________________________________________________________________________________ 2. [完美钢琴演出]He had been practicing the piano for months, and today he performed flawlessly in front of an audience. ____________________________________________________________________________________ 3. [要去娱乐公园]The students cheered when their teacher announced a class trip to the amusement park. ____________________________________________________________________________________ 4. [庆祝爷爷生日]The family gathered around the dinner table to celebrate their grandmother's 90th birthday. ____________________________________________________________________________________ 5. [得知比赛获奖]She had been nervously waiting for the results of her competition, and finally heard her name announced as the winner. ____________________________________________________________________________________ 【参考答案】 1. With trembling hands, she unfolded the invitation to her dream university, tears of joy streaming down her face as she realized her hard work had finally paid off. 2. A sense of triumph and joy washed over him as the final notes faded away and the audience erupted into applause, his face beaming with pride. 3. Their faces lit up with excitement and pure joy as they clapped and shouted in unison, eagerly anticipating the fun-filled day ahead. 4. Laughter and warm conversation filled the air as they shared stories and toasted to her health and happiness, each face reflecting the joy of the occasion. 5. A thrill of excitement and joy rushed through her body as she sat there still, overwhelmed with excitement for the award. 二、读后续写 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。（2025·河北昌黎第一中学高三下学期第十次飞跃考试） During my ninth-grade days, there was an incoming event in our school entitled “English Week” where a lot of contests were to be held. These contests were related to spelling, short story writing, recitation and more. Our teacher appointed me to be the representative of the whole ninth grade in the short story contest. She said that I had potential in terms of creative thinking because she had read my fiction. Actually, I did not expect that and was shocked since I did not have experience being one of the contestants of any contests. And I was also unconfident in terms of joining any event in our school. Even though I refused to join in the contest, my teacher was still encouraging me and she said I just needed to believe in myself and the talent that I had. I was not that convinced of what my teacher said, but I finally gave in to her insistence. Then I decided to make myself ready through practicing more in writing short stories. My teacher also advised that I needed to be more confident and knowledgeable in the contest that I was going to join in. The days leading up to the contest were filled with anxiety and self-doubt. I spent countless hours researching, writing a draft, and revising my story, constantly questioning whether it was good enough. On the day of the contest, my nervousness reached its peak as I entered the competition room. The room was filled with fellow participants, all seeming confident and prepared. The pressure was immense (巨大的), as we were all aware of the strict rule: we had only one hour to create our short story once the topic was released. The results would be revealed in one month. I glanced at the clock nervously every now and then, waiting for the contest to begin. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右； 2. 请按如下格式作答。 When the topic was announced, my mind went blank for a second. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ To my surprise and disbelief, I won the first prize! _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，主要讲述了作者在九年级时，老师推荐作者参加学校“英语周”活动中的短篇小说创作比赛，作者从一开始的拒绝到在老师鼓励下参赛，比赛当天十分紧张的故事。 1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“当题目公布时，我的大脑瞬间一片空白。”可知，第一段可描写作者在大脑空白后如何调整状态完成写作，以及提交作品后的心情和对结果的期待。 ②由第二段首句内容“令我既惊讶又不敢相信的是，我竟然获得了一等奖！”可知，第二段可描写作者获奖后的感受，老师的反应，以及此次经历对作者的影响。 2.续写线索：比赛题目公布大脑空白——调整状态完成写作——提交作品后期待结果——意外获奖——老师骄傲，自己获得自信并积极参加活动。 【参考范文】 When the topic was announced, my mind went blank for a second. After taking a deep breath to calm my nerves, I gathered my thoughts and started writing, pouring my heart and soul into the words. Time flew by, and before I knew it, the bell rang, indicating the time was up. After submitting my story, I felt a mix of relief and uncertainty. I wondered how my work compared with the others’ work, and as the days passed, I found myself so eager for the results. Finally, the results were announced. To my surprise and disbelief, I won the first prize! It was like a dream, a moment of pure joy and excitement I would never forget. My teacher’s face lit up with pride, and I gained newfound confidence in my abilities. It was a moment that made all the hard work worth it and made me realize that I could do more than I had ever imagined. From that day on, I actively participated in school activities. This rewarding experience gave me a whole new perspective on contests and helped me be a confident person. 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①深呼吸：take a deep breath/ breathe deeply ②提交：submit /hand in ③意识到：realize /be aware of 情绪类： ①快乐：joy /pleasure ②不确定：uncertainty /doubt 【点睛】【高分句型 1】After taking a deep breath to calm my nerves, I gathered my thoughts and started writing, pouring my heart and soul into the words.（运用了动名词短语作宾语，现在分词短语作伴随状语） 【高分句型 2】Time flew by, and before I knew it, the bell rang, indicating the time was up.（运用了before引导的时间状语从句和省略that引导的宾语从句） 4 / 5 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$