五年高考英语真题专题训练（读后续写20篇+）-【万向思维·高考快递】五年高考英语专题训练（最全篇目、一次练透）

Part Six 做完题看《真题解码》P29 读后续写 1 比赛收获篇 限时：90分钟 总分：75分 用时： 分钟 得分 答案见D135 Writing1(2024.1浙江卷·25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water.One of the major 名师讲真题 headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building.It was a six-story building.On each floor,hallways stretched in four directions,leading to classrooms,laboratories,and teachers'offices.Somewhere in the building,there was also a library,a cafeteria,and a gym. Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about,let alone commit to memory.She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn't exist. In her first PE class,Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside.She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic.There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile.To Eva,"a mile"was used to describe long distances.It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather's,and that always seemed like a long way,even in a car! When Coach Pitt blew his whistle ()Eva figured she would be left in the dust.However,while some of her classmates edged ahead,others actually fell behind."It's just the beginning,"she thought."I'll come in last for ure.” Soon Eva began to breathe hard,with her heart pounding and legs shaking.Feeling desperate,Eva started using a mind trick on herself.She stopped thinking about the word "mile".Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead.Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved )After that,she tried to see if she could complete her first lap.One lap turned into two,then three,then four. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右： 2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 When Coach Pitt said "Nice work!"to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 144 Part Six读后续写 ▣ Writing2(2023新课标1&l卷·25分) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 When I was in middle school,my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest.I 名师讲真题 said no without thinking.I did not love writing.My family came from Brazil,so English was only my second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play,where I played all the parts.No one laughed harder than he did. So,why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail?His reply:"Because I love your stories.If you're willing to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this."Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a try. I chose Paul Revere's horse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith(in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming.My story would come straight from the horse's mouth.Not a brilliant idea,but funny;and unlikely to be anyone else's choice. What did the horse think,as he sped through the night?Did he get tired?Have doubts?Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But,like Revere's horse,I kept going.I worked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar.I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even read a few of them. When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud,and said,"Great.Now,write it again."I wrote it again,and again and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn't win,I wouldn't care. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右： 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news. I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. 145 高考快递 高考真题分类集训 ·英语··· ▣落▣ Writing3(2022新高考1&1卷·25分) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 ▣ It was the day of the big eross-country run..Students from seven different primary schools in and名师讲真题 around the small town were warming up and walking the route(through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David,who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong?He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened."I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,"he explained uncomfortably."I gave him the choice to run or not,and let him decide." I bit back my frustration().I knew the coach meant well-he thought he was doing the right thing.After making sure that David could run if he wanted,I tumed to find him coming towards me,his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children,but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid.He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team.It just took him longer-that's all.David had not missed a single practice,and although he always finished his run long after the other children,he did always finish.As a special education teacher at the school,I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右： 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 We sat down next to each other,but David wouldn't look at me. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. 146 Part Six读后续写 2节日经历篇 限时：60分钟 总分：50分 用时： 分钟 得分： 分 答案见D138 ▣▣ Writing1(2021新高考1&I卷·25分) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE 可飞 名师讲真题 The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They deeided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the bumt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she tumed down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff's hand touched the hot bumer and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had tumed black as well. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右： 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 147 高考快递 高考真题分类集训 ·英语 Writing2(2021.1浙江卷·25分)】 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Pumpkin(carving at Halloween is a family tradition.We visit a local farm every October. 名师讲真题 In the pumpkin field,I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin.My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home,and as the eldest child I have an advantage-I carried an 85-pounder back last year. This year.it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother,Jason,was the winner.Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides,but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table,with my mom filming the annual event.I'm unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter,but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time. With the pumpkin resting on the table,hole uppermost,I bent over and pressed my head against the opening.At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then,as I went on with my task,unwilling to quit,my nose briefly prevented entry.Finally I managed to put my whole head into it,like a cork (forced into a bottle.I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders. My excitement was short-lived.The pumpkin was heavy."I'm going to set it down,now,"I said,and with Jason helping to support its weight,I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest.It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in.When I pulled hard,my nose got in the way.I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle,but it was no use."I can't get it out!"I shouted,my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语： 3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好： 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. That video was posted the day before Halloween. 148 Part Six读后续写 3好人好事篇 限时：60分钟 总分：50分 用时： 分钟 得分： 分 答案见D139 回▣ Writing1(2024新课标|&I卷·25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I met Gunter on a cold,wet and unforgettable evening in September.I had planned to fly to 回送 名师讲真题 Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference.Due to a big storm,my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half.I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague.The moment I got off the plane,I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter.I told him where I was going,but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station.I thought my pronunciation was the problem,so I explained again more slowly,but he still looked confused.When I was about to give up.Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend.After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century,Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally,with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station.Thankfully,there was a long queue )still waiting to board the bus.Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus,turned around,and looked at me with a big smile on his face."We made it,"he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet.I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard.He tried it several times,but the card machine just did not play along.A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment,Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station.There,at the entrance,was a cash machine.I jumped out of the car,made a mad run for the machine,and popped my card in,only to read the message:"Out of order.Sorry. 注意： (1)续写词数应为150个左右： (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. 言营丝油花 Four days later,when I was back in Vienna,I called Gunter as promised. 149 高考快递 高考真题分类集训 ·英语··· Writing2(2020新高考1&1卷·25分) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 The Meredith family lived in a small community.As the econmy was in deeline,some people in名师讲真题 the town had lost their jobs.Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet.People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs.Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman.She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor.She knew they had problems,and they needed all kinds of help.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them. One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before.There was a man sick in bed, his wife,who took care of him and could not go out to work,and their little boy.The little boy-his name was Bernard-had interested her very much. "I wish you could see him,"she said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara."He is such a help to his mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I don't see what he can do." After their mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard."I wish we could help him to earn money,"said Clara."His family is suffering so much." “So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them." For some moments,John said nothing,but,suddenly,he sprang to his feet and cried,"I have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).” The other children also jumped up all attention.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one."I tell you what we can do,"said John."You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us?Well,we can make popcorn (暴米花)，and put it into paper bags,and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it..” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右： 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 When Mrs.Meredith heard of John's idea,she thought it was a good one,too. With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business. 150 Part Six读后续写 4成长感悟篇 限时：60分钟 总分：50分 用时： 分钟 得分 分 答案见D141 Writing1(2022.1浙江卷·25分)】 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 When Dr.Henderson was assigning (project mates for his psychology class,I secretly ▣平 名师讲真题 hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with.Above all,I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.As fate (would have it,Dr.Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid. I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself.He looked at me as though I weren't there.I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course.He wasn't mean or abusive;he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone. Needless to say,I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off,but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse. The project required each team to develop a hypothesis ()set up an experiment to test the hypothesis,do the statistical analysis and present the findings.Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students. When my teammate and I met to discuss our project,I was uneasy.Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades-the exact opposite of me.I was outmatched.I actually wanted to drop the class at one point,but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what. After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers.I wasn't sure what it meant exactly,but at least we had a topic. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语： 3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好： 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. 151 高考快递 高考真题分类集训 ·英语 ▣▣ Writing2(2021.6浙江卷·25分) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 ▣空 My dad,George,only had an eighth grade education.A quiet man,he didn't understand my world 名师讲真题 of school activities.From age 14,he worked.And his dad,Albert,took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses. I didn't really understand his world either:He was a livestock trucker,and I thought that I would surpass( anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation. Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets,hitting a baseball,or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team.In poor weather,I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号). The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field.He explained our basic task,the tractor fired up and we were off,riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals.After a short way,the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed.Then we began again.This happened over and over,but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs,lamb's- quarters,foxtails,and the king of weeds,the pretty purple thistle.It was tiring work,but I looked forward to the pay,even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to. At home,my dad said,"A job's a big step to growing up.I'm glad you will be contributing to the household. My dad's words made me realize that my eamings might not be mine to do with as I wished. My labors lasted about two weeks,and the farmer said there might be more work,but I wasn't interested.I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右： 2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语： 3续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好： 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 The pay day arrived at last. I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. 152 Part Six读后续写 5人与动物篇 限时：60分钟 总分：50分 用时： 分钟 得分： 分 答案见D143 ▣ ▣ Writing1(2023.1浙江卷·25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I was invited to a cookout on an old friend's farm in westemn Washington.I parked my car outside 名师讲真题 the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years.A noise at a window caught my attention,so I entered it.It was a hummingbird ()desperately trying to escape.She was covered in spider-webs (and was barely able to move her wings.She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up. With the bird in my cupped hand,I looked around to see how she had gotten in.The broken window glass was the likely answer.I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside,closing the door securely behind me. When I opened my hand,the bird did not fly away;she sat looking at me with her bright eyes.I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings.Still,she made no attempt to fly.Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired?Or too thirsty? As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle,she began to move.I stopped,and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering ()she approached within six inches of my face.For a very long moment,this tiny creature looked into my eyes,turning her head from side to side.Then she flew quickly out of sight. During the cookout,I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident.They promised to fix the window.As I was departing,my friends walked me to my car.I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering.She turned from person to person until she came to me.She again looked directly into my eyes,then let out a squeaking call and was gone.For a moment,all were speechless.Then someone said,"She must have come to say goodbye. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右： 2.请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 A few weeks later,I went to the farm again. I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. 153参考答案·可视化解析 ②不定式短语作目的状语 情之一就是要努力适应新环境。而对于她这样一个 I'm writing to show our genuine concern for your 方向感极差的人来说,纵横交错的教学楼走廊让她 health. 迷路。体育课上,Pit教练要求学生在操场上跑一英 (2)Par.2:要点1(询问近况) 里。这项任务让Eva感到惊慌,因为对她而言,一英 ①不定式短语作表语 里是很长的距离。面对困境,她在自己身上使用了 Don't worry about our study and all you need to do 一种“心理战术(mindtrick)”--通过关注操场上 now is to have an adecquate rest and a healthv diet. 一棵橡树的树影来转移注意力。同时,Eva将一英里 ②固定搭配:wonder if... 分成若干个小段,每一小段都是她能够完成的“小目 I'm wondering if you are getting better now. 标”,这种方法奏效了。 要点2(分享现状) 【审题指导】 ①宾语从句 根据续写第一段的开头语可知,Pitt教练在终点 We are sure that we will live up to your expectations. 线对Eva说“干得不错!”。这暗示Eva的心理战术 ②状语+固定表达:be busy doing 奏效了--她成功跑完了一英里。所以第一段续写 With the approach of the colege entrance exams, 的重点应该放在对Eva在跑完一英里之后的内心感 we are busy making final preparations. 受的描写上。当然,从给出的首句中的“Nice work!” (3)Para.3:表达祝愿 可以看出,Pitt教练应当和Eva有一定的语言和动作 ①hope+省略that的宾语从句 上的互动。 We earnestly hope you will recover soon and we 续写的难点在第二段,也就是Eva是如何把这 are expecting your early return to China. 种“心理战术”运用到记忆这偌大的教学楼的。这段 ②强调谓语+固定表达:wishsbsth 续写想要做到合理,写作必须紧密联系Eva在跑一 We do expect you can come back soon. Wish you 英里过程中所使用的“心理战术”的核心:“拆分任 务”(divide and conquer)和“化整为零”(break down good health! the whole into parts)。 【参考范文及点评】 【写作指导 Dear Peter, 1.情节构建 *I hope this email finds you well. ①开门见山,点 as many of our classmates are 明了写信目的。 concemed ahout you. -I am writing to 其中as引导原 根据开头语“When Coach Pitt share with you some events that 因状语从句。 said ' Nice work!' to her at the ②中that引导定 happened after you returned to Ireland. finish line, Eva was surprised." First of all. all of us students 语从句,after引 可以为本段续写梳理出如下 导时间状语 want to send our hest regards to you. 思路: 从句。 Currently, a substitute teacher who is ①(与前一句衔接)Eva为何 续写 kind and easy-going is teaching us. 第二段表达了大 感到惊讶(surprised) 第一段 We do miss you. however, as you 家对Peter的想 ②(过渡)Eva完成一英里任 务时的感受以及她是如何克 念和关心,告诉 “战术”奏效 used to arrange various kinds of 服恐惧和不安的 - interesting activities for us to learn 了他目前班里的 ③(承上启下)这次经历给Eva 情况。 总结与反思 English. We really wish to see you ③who引导的定 again next semester. We also 带来自信的同时,也让她认识 到这一“心理战术(mind 语从句。 突发奇想 understand that the top priority now trick)“的重要性 ④中“do+动词原 is your health, so please take time to 形”表示强调,as have a good rest. “战术”步骤 We hope you will recover soon. 引导原因状语 从句。 进展与收获 Please let us know your situation and 根据开头语“Eva decided to we look forward to hearing from you 宾语从句,表 use the same trick to deal with 达了对Peter的 得到成长 soon. the school building.”可以为本 Best wishes. 关心和理解。 段续写梳理出如下思路: Li Hua 续写 ①(与前一句衔接)Eva是如 Part Six 读后续写 第二段 何开始在记忆教学楼时使用 这种“心理战术”的 比赛收获篇 ②(过渡)实施这样的“心理战 术”的进展和收获 Writing 1 ③(收尾)从这样的经历中Eva 【故事文本分析】 得到了怎样的成长 Eva的高中生活第一周过得很艰难,最头疼的事 D135 高考快递 高考真题分类集训·英语 2.思路引导 总评:这篇文章在内容、结构和表达方面都很出色. 第一段我们可以尝试问这些问题: 值得一读。它不仅能够给读者带来愉悦的阅读体 ①What does Coach Pitt mean by saying "Nice work!" 验,还能启发读者思考如何在生活中克服困难和实 to Eva? 现自我成长。 Writing 2 ②Why does Eva feel surprised? 【故事文本分析】 本文讲述了一名以英语为第二语言的中学生, ③ What does Eva learn from successfully completing 在老师的鼓励下参加英语写作比赛的故事。 one-mile run? 【审题指导】 考生在续写时要紧跟所给材料的情节,续写从 第二段我们可以尝试问这些问题: “几乎忘记比赛”到“突然得到消息”的故事。续写 ①What does"the same trick" mean? 和所给材料一样也要用第一人称,时态要用一般过 ② How will Eva find her way in the huge school 去时。第一段可以就领奖情形展开想象。第二段可 building? 以就“我”在老师办公室里与老师的交流场景展开想 象,最终落脚点在“感激老师”,再过渡到“表达自己 的感悟”。 ③What will Eva learn from her experience? 【写作指导】 【参考范文及点评 1.情节构建 When Coach Pitt said"Nice work!" to her at the (1)由续写第一段开头语内容“几周以后,我都 finish line, Eva was surprised. What had seemed to be a 快忘了比赛的时候,消息来了。”和续写第二段开头 challenging task to her minutes before was now 语内容“颁奖仪式后我去了老师办公室。”可知,第一 accomplished. A mile was never what she had thought a 段可描写这个消息是获奖消息,以及“我”获奖后的 long way! Coach Pitt's encouraging affirmation improved 情感变化和感触。再结合第二段开头语内容可以推 her self-identity. ①Fear and uneasiness began to fade 断,续写第一段最后一句可以为“我”想到了老师的 away and a sense of confidence came to her. It marked 鼓励。 通过描述Eva的心理变化展现了她的成长过程,使读 (2)由续写第二段开头语内容“颁奖仪式后我去 者能够产生共鸣。 a turning point where she learned the trick that *it was 了老师办公室。”可知,续写第二段可描写“我”对老 her persistence and appropriate strategy that mattered. 师表达的深深的感激之情,以及老师对“我”的再次 此处用强调句生动地展现了人物的内心起伏。 鼓励和“我”的感悟。 Furthermore. 3she realized that she could overcome 2.思路引导 troubles in life as long as shifting the way of thinking. 第一段考生可以尝试问这些问题 传达了一个积极向上的信息,即只要调整思 维方式,就能克服生活中的困难。 ①What was the news? How did"I" feel? Thanks to Coach Pitt, she had a great thought running in her mind ②Did"I" win the competition? Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. With the help of her friendly ③ What was the reaction of "my" teacher and *she began to foeus on familiarizing herself classmates. classmates? with the floor on which her classroom was located, and then she concentrated on walking towards different 第二段考生可以尝试问这些问题: 此处三个并列句写明了“心理战术”的施行步骤。 functional classrooms and marked the routes with special ①Why did"I" go to the teacher's office? markers in her mind.*Floor after floor, in less than two weeks, she had a vivid mind map of the huge ②What would "I" say to my teacher? building, which was no longer bothering her. To Eva, 此处的非限制性定语从句表明了人物的收获。 ③What would"my" teacher feel and say? such experiences brought her a giant step of growth. -Though sometimes it seemed an impossible mission, it 升华主题:将不可能的任务看作珍贵的成长机会。 【参考范文及点评】 eventually turned a precious opportunity for growth. It A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the was a magic trick! contest, there came the news. It was a phone call D136 参考答案·可视化解析 *saying that I was a winner. When I knew I won the “我”自己的感悟。 此处使用了“非谓语动词+宾语从句”,揭示了news的内容。 【写作指导 紧扣所给材料情节发展。 1.情节构建 prize,^②a wide excitement took hold of me, I rushed to 此处运用了“物称名词”作主语,丰富 根据续写第一段首句“We satdown 了文章的表达形式。 my older sister with excitement and shared the fantastic next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me."可以设想,此 news with her. On hearing the unexpected news, she 续写 段应该写“我”如何鼓励、劝说 was"so surprised that she froze with her mouth wide 第一段 David参加这次比赛,以及David如 鼓励David 此处运用了“so... that...”句型,生动形象地描述出了人物的 何一步步地转变思想,从最初的犹 激动心情。 豫和回避慢慢转变为坚定和自 心理变化 open. After a while, excited tears streamed down her 信的。 cheeks. 'Bathed in the warm sunshine, we made our 决定参赛 此处运用了作状语的非谓语动词短语来进行环境描 写,从例面衬托了“我”获奖后的愉悦心情。 根据续写第二段首句“Iwatchedas 克服困难 way to the award presentation. On the way, my older David moved up to the starting line sister reminded me that without my teacher's with the other nunners.”可设想,此 此处运用了”宾语从句+虚拟语气”,紧扣续写第二段开头语 加油助威 续写 段应该写David终于重拾自信,站 内容,过渡自然。 到了起跑线上,与其他选手一起参 第二段 encouragement I wouldn't have made much progress in 完成比赛 加越野赛跑。可重点描写他如何 writing in English. 克服重重困难,坚持跑完全程并抵 I went to my teacher's office after the award 达终点,以及在此过程中的心路历 presentation. With tears in my eyes, I said to him,"I 程和跑完后的感受。 would like to express my heartfelt gratitude to you for your timely help. "It was your encouragement that made 2.思路引导 此处运用了强调句,体现了“尊师重道”的传统美德, 第一段我们可以尝试问这些问题: 呼应了英语学科”立德树人”的根本任务。 ①How would "I" communicate with David? me brave enough to sign up for the contest." He stepped forward, patted me on the shoulder, and said ②Did"I" convince David? softly."{Where there is a will, there is a way." We 此处运用了一句该语,升华了文章主题,传递了正能量。 hugged each other as tightly as possible and our eyes ③Had David decided to enter the race? were filled with tears. ”Only then did I realize that it 此处运用了“例装句+宾语从句”以及bravery。 第二段我们可以尝试问这些问题: determination,conquer等高级词汇,提高了文幸的语言档 ①What happened during the race? 次。 was bravery and determination that could conquer all ②Did David win in the end? the difficulties. Hard work paid off eventually. Writing 3 ③How did David feel? 【故事文本分析 本文是一个战胜自我的故事,主要是说患有脑 【参考范文及点评】 We sat down next to each other, but David 疾的David志在参加一次大型的校际越野跑比赛,但 是在比赛当天,由于担心自己会被来自其他学校的 wouldn't look at me. He buried his head in his hands sobbing. "Do you fear the audience will laugh at you?" 学生取笑,他决定放弃这次比赛。 asked I. He nodded and bit his lip, {tears welling up 【审题指导】 此处的独立主格结构和动作描写生动地展现了人物的内 考生要紧跟所给材料的情节,思考面对David 心情感。 “不愿意看我一眼”的情况,“我”是如何和他交流 in his eyes. I hugged him firmly, patting his back 的。续写也要和所给材料一样,用第一人称和第三 gently."I have faith in you and you will not be looked 人称,时态用一般过去时。由于续写第二段的开头 down upon. Instead, everyone will cheer for you when 语暗示David决定参加比赛,故第一段可以就David you are running!" David was inspired instantly and accepted to run. Seeing the determination in his eyes. 决定参加比赛前“我”与他的互动展开想象;第二段 I wiped the tears on his cheeks, promising to keep 可以就David参加越野跑的过程展开想象,最终把落 ②和③运用了现在分词短语作状语,传达了老师对学生 脚点放在David克服困难并成功完成越野跑上,再到 的关爱,传递正能量。 D137 高考快递 高考真题分类集训·英语 him company until the end of the competition 【写作指导】 I watched as David moved up to the starting line 1.情节构建 with the other runners. The starter's gun sounded, and 续写第一段:根据续写第二段提示句可知,早餐最终 David lurched forward with the other children. But he 做好了,因此本段可围绕父亲出现后给予双胞胎的 had only gone a few metres before he tripped and fell 帮助展开故事情节--可以是父亲给他们指出补救 flat on the ground. My heart sank. As I started to shout 办法,或者是父亲直接帮忙。不管是哪种构思,双胞 encouragement, other voices around me took up the call 胎做早餐时遇到的困难在本段应该得到解决。 “Come on David, you can do it!" David picked himself 续写第二段:根据提示句可知,双胞胎已经端着早餐 up and started again. He used up all his power to march 上楼并叫醒母亲。因此本段可围绕双胞胎见到母亲 on. This was David's run. He had worked for it, and he 后的故事展开,可以穿插双胞胎和母亲之间的对话 wouldn't give up! Upon his dashing towards the 还可以提到父亲假装睡觉,最后可以通过自然式结 finishing line, a wave of thunderous applause flooded 尾,给故事画上句号,或通过主题式结尾,突出“亲 运用了夸张的修辞手法,体现了考生扎实的英语语言功 情、劳动、克服困难、解决问题”等主题。 底和出色的表达能力。 2.思路引导 in. I ran towards David and gave him a bear hug."You Para.1 made it!" His eyes twinkled with delight, saying, How did their father react to the As the twins Imess? What did he do to help the “Thank you. It was you who made me realize that just looked around them twins? What did the twins do? 此处是强调句,升华了文章主题-做自己命运的主人。 in disappointment, their father be myself , and I can be the master of my destiny." How did the breakfast turn out? appeared. Where did their father go after 节日经历篇 helping the twins? Writing 1 What did the twins say to their mother? 【故事文本分析】 Para.2 How did their mother feel and OPENING:双胞胎Jenna和Jeff在母亲节那天 The twins carried react? Did she eat the breakfast? 为母亲做早餐(法式吐司和鸡肉粥)。 the breakfast upstairs What was their father doing at and woke their that time? "mother up. BUILD-UP:刚开始一切进展顺利,但随后Jeff What might happen between the 煎懈了一片面包,于是Jenna往锅中放入了另一片 twins and their father? What can 面包。 be a proper ending? 一→ 【参考范文及点评】 looked around them in CLIMAX:Jeff发现溢出的粥把火扑灭了,慌乱 As the twins their father disappointment. appeared. One 中他的手碰到了滚烫的煤气处火圈,而且这片面包 look and he knew what they were up to. *Seeing 也被煎蝴了。 what引导宾语从句,丰富句式结构。 1 their downcast eyes, he told them to clean up the RESOLUTION:双胞胎失望地环顾四周时.他 作状语的现在分词及动词(短语)描写了人物间 们的父亲出现了...... 的互动,利千故事发展。 -- kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for their ENDING;之后孩子们顺利将早餐送到母亲卧 mother. The twins cheered up and did as told. Within 室,叫醒了他们的母亲...... an hour, the kitchen was cleaned up, and the father 【审题指导】 made some egg sandwiches and cooked some oat porridge. ③Then he sneaked back to bed. The twins 1.根据题目要求可知,本篇作文要求考生对给 出的一篇英文故事进行续写。考生首先要注意,读是 把父亲的动作刻画得活灵活现,为下文埋下伏笔。 prepared the breakfast tray, and added a card they had 写的基础,要注意把握原文中的“人、事、情”,并在阅 made. 读全文,理解故事情节的基础上掌握故事发展的大 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke 致方向:其次整理思路,构建故事情节,确定故事的 their mother up.'They hugged their mother tightly and 人称(第三人称)、时态(一般过去时)等:最后,要用 与下文的加ged相呼应,表达家人之间的亲情。 适当的句子将故事情节串联起来,完成写作。 ,"Happy Mother's Day, dear Mummy!" yelled, The 2.对于故事类记叙文,续写时考生要通过事件 复现关键信息,呼应主题。 的起承转合不断推动情节发展。文本包含两条线 mother hugged the twins. *Her eyes widened at the 描写母亲的表情,表达人物感情。 索,明线是双胞胎如何在父亲的帮助下完成早餐并 sight of the breakfast tray. She shook Father who was 给母亲一个惊喜,暗线是这一家人心理状态的变化 pretending to snore. 'He acted astonished when he saw 即双胞胎在准备早餐过程中从开心到失落,再到重拾 描写父亲的一系列行为,巧妙构建故事情节,并 希望,最后到自豪,以及母亲在收到惊喜时的幸福。 为下文埋下伏笔。 D138 参考答案·可视化解析 the breakfast. Mother bit into a sandwich and said it 2.思路引导 was the best one she had ever tasted. Jeff immediately 第一段考生可以尝试问这些问题: wanted to have a bile, too. Jenna caught her father's ①What was my feeling at that time? 自然式结尾,呼应上文。 eye and they winked at each other secretly. 名师评题,石家庄二中 高级教师 杨贵彬 ②What was the reaction of my family? ★本篇读后续写以“母亲节”为背景,旨在通过讲述 ③How did I finally get my head out of the pumpkin? 一个家庭里面发生的温暖故事达到启发考生的目 的,使他们更加注重“家庭纽带(familybond)”。文 第二段考生可以尝试问这些问题: 章从双胞胎孩子的视角展开故事,让考生在写作时 ①Was the video popular and what was the reaction of 有情感共鸣。除此之外,母亲的情感反馈也更好地 the public? 升华了文章的情感主题。续写段落第一段的开头语 中,父亲的出现给考生提供了更多的想象空间。续 ②How did my family and I take the matter? 写段落第二段的开头语中,“准备好的早餐”对续写 第一段需要什么样的填充细节做了很好的铺垫。那 【参考范文及点评】 关于故事的结局呢?应是关注“母亲节”这个特别的 I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt 节日所传达的情怀--感恩母亲的付出以及亲密家 much longer. ①Growing more panic, I began to cry. 庭关系的建立。整篇文章借助故事的发展让考生对 有效地传达了“我”当时的紧张和恐慌情绪 于健康的家庭关系、成长路上父母的付出以及自己 Fortunately, hearing me crying, my dad came and 对于家庭的责任担当有了更深刻的理解。 helped me lay my head on the table, so my neck could Writing 2 rest for a while. Then he said to me "Listen, honey. 【故事文本分析 整体语言风格亲切。口语化,使用了一些非正式表达, 营造了一种家庭化的氛围。 作者家一直有项传统活动:为迎接万圣节,每年 I have to cut this pumpkin in half."I had no choice 十月份,一家人都会一起到当地农场挑南瓜,“我”和 but to keep still with my eyes tightly closed and 弟弟妹妹还会比赛看谁选的南瓜大。往年“我”都赢 listening to the knife moving on the pumpkin. Moments 了,可今年“我”的南瓜和弟弟的不分伯仲。为了证 细节描写增强了故事的生动性和画面感 明“我”的南瓜大,“我”把头塞进了挖空的南瓜里。 later, my head was finally released from this horrible 没想到的是,“我”的头卡在南瓜里了。 pumpkin cage. Then my mom told me she had just 【审题指导】 filmed me managing to pull my head out of the 考生在续写时要紧跟所给材料的情节以及所给 pumpkin. 开头语,续写从“成功获救”到“视频走红”的故事。 That video was posted the day before Halloween. *Actually my mom had asked whether she could post it 续写和所给材料一样也要用第一人称,时态要用一 whether引导的宾语从句和because引导的原园状语从句 般过去时。第一段可以就“我”是如何获救的展开想 丰富了文章的句式表达。 象。第二段可以就“我”的幽默事件被拍下来并迅速 on the Internet. because after all I was so embarrassed 走红这一情况展开想象,最终落脚点在“描述家庭成 and looked so silly in it. Anyway, I nodded and 员对这一幽默事件的反应”,再过渡到“表达自己的 supported her idea. It turned out that people liked and 感悟”。 故事以一个意想不到的结局结束:“我”原本犹豫是否同意 【写作指导】 上传的那段视频,最终却在网上广受欢迎。这种反转增加了 1.情节构建 故事的吸引力。 forwarded it erazily on the Internet, only to make me an (1)由续写第一段开头语内容“我被困了五六分 Internet celebrity. 钟,虽然感觉时间更长。”可知,第一段内容应描写 “我”当时的恐慌情绪。根据续写第二段开头语内容 好人好事篇 “那段视频是在万圣节前一天发布的。”可知,“我的 Writing 1 头卡在南瓜里”这件事情结束了,所以第一段还应描 【故事文本分析】 述“我”获救的过程。续写第二段开头语点明了事件 在飞往维也纳转乘公共汽车前往布拉格的途 接下来的发展“妈妈拍了视频,并且传到了网上”,所 中,由于天气原因,作者的航班延误了,作者几乎要 以第一段结尾要提到“妈妈拍了视频”。 错过开往布拉格的末班公共汽车。在维也纳,作者 (2)根据续写第二段开头语内容“那段视频是 遇到了出租车司机Gunter,尽管他对目的地不熟悉 在万圣节前一天发布的。”可知,第二段应描述这 但通过电话求助后成功将作者及时送达公共汽车 幽默事件被拍下来的情况、视频被发布并在网上引 站。然而,到达后作者发现钱包里没有现金支付车 起的反响,并点出主题或故事结局,可能涉及对家庭 费,银行卡在出租车的卡机上也无法使用,并且公共 传统和幽默的反思。 汽车站的取款机也出现了故障...... D139 高考快递 高考真题分类集训·英语 【审题指导】 having the fare in time.②Unexpectedly, he comforted 考生在续写时要结合所给材料的情节,续写从 me with a gentle smile, "It doesn't matter; get on the “无法支付车费”到“约定时间还钱”的故事。续写内 符合常理的转折,推动了情节的发展。 容要和所给材料的风格一致,人称要用第一人称,时 bus, or you will miss it." I was overwhelmed by his kindness and insisted on paying him later. "I will 态要用一般过去时。续写第一段可以就主人公无法 支付车费这件事展开想象。续写第二段可以就主人 return to pay the money after finishing the conference in 公按照约定联系Gunter以支付其车费展开想象,最 four days." I promised. He accepted, and then we 终落脚点在“和谐的人际关系--人与人之间相互 做出承诺,衔接第二段的提示句,体现了极好的连贯性。 信任、互帮互助”上。 exchanged our phone numbers to decide the exact place where we would meet. ③My heart brimming with 【写作指导】 独立主格结构,让情感描写更动人。 1.情节构建 appreciation. I got on the bus. As the bus pulled (1)由续写第一段提示语“I ranback to Gunter As引导的时间状语从句和with复合结构,展现了一个生动 and told him the bad news.(我跑回Gunter身边,告诉 的画面。 away. I saw Gunter standing there and waving goodbve. 了他这个坏消息。)”以及续写第二段的提示语“Four with a warm smile on his face. days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I as promised.(四天后,当我回到维也纳时,按照约定, called Gunter as promised. He was extremely happy to 我给Gunter打了电话。)”可知,第一段接下来可描写 hear my voice. We met at the airport, embracing like “我”无法支付车费的尴尬以及两人之间的互动。再 long-lost friends.*He accepted the money and invited 结合续写第二段提示语可以推断,续写第一段必须 交代“我们”约定的还钱时间(由第二段的提示语可 me to join him for a coffee and we spent a delightful 连续的动作描写构成了动作链,推动了情节的发展。 知,时间为四天后)和地点(由出租车司机的工作性 afternoon talking about our lives and experiences. *It 质可知,地点可以是机场或车站)。 was a truly meaningful encounter that taught me the (2)由续写第二段提示语“Four days later,when 定语从句升华文章主题。 I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised."可 value of kindness and the importance of making 知,接下来可描写“我”按照约定,联系Gunter,还上 connections with people honestly and keeping promises. *I left Vienna with a heart full of gratitude and a 了当时欠的车费,以及两人的友谊进一步发展的情 形。本段可以通过对话、动作、心理描写展开情节, with复合结构是点晴之笔,让人回味无穷。 newfound friend. 最后通过“我”的感悟-人与人之间相处要互相信 writing 2 任,遵守诺言来升华主题。 【故事文本分析】 2.思路引导 在经济衰退的大环境下,小镇上很多人失业。 第一段考生可以尝试问这些问题: 善良的Meredith太太热心帮助他人,其中有一家三 ①How did Gunter react to the bad news? What did he 口,丈夫卧病在床,妻子因要照顾他无法外出挣钱。 do and say? 他们的儿子Bernard想帮助维持生活却不知该做什 ②What promise did I make? 么。Meredith太太的三个孩子Clara,Harry和John 从母亲那里得知此情况后,非常想帮助Bernard ③What did Gunter and I do before the bus pulled John想出一个好主意。他们决定把家里的那盒玉米 away? 做成爆来花,再让Bernard拿到社区售卖。 Who(人物) Mrs. Meredith, Bernard, Bermard's parents, 第二段考生可以尝试问这些问题: Clara. Hary, John ①What was Gunter's reaction on hearing my voice? Where(地点) a small community What(事件) Mrs. Meredith's children wanted to assist the ②What did he do and say after receiving the money? boy Bernard in making money. ③What did I learn from the special experience? With his father sick in bed, his mother Why(起因) unable to go out to work, Bemard wanted to do something to support his family. 【参考范文及点评 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. 该材料的价值取向是传播爱与友善。作为故事 {He didn't seem too surprised, and I made a genuine 类记叙文,它通过事件的起承转合不断推动情节发 apology to him for giving me such a big hand without 展。文本包含两条线索,明线是Meredith太太的三 很好地衔接了上文提到的“没取到钱”的坏消息,使用了 个孩子尽力帮助Bernard,暗线是两家人的心理和情 两个“介词+doing”结构,丰富了文章的表达形式 感线,Meredith一家助人的快乐,Bemard一家受助的 D140 参考答案·可视化解析 感激。 popped corn can be filled. Then, she brought Bernard 【审题指导】 when she came back. 根据题目要求可知,本篇作文要求考生根据给 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his 出的一篇英文故事进行续写。考生首先要阅读全 new business. Having returned with an empty basket 文,理解故事情节并掌握故事发展的大致方向;其次 and money in his hands for the first time, he was so 整理思路,构建故事,确定故事的人称(第三人称)、 delighted to find that the money he earned could save 时态(一般过去时)等;最后用适当的句子将故事情 现在分词短语Having returned..作状语,find后是 that 引 节串联起来,完成写作。 导的宾语从句。本句生动地表达了主人公的情感。 【写作指导】 his family. Meanwhile. John and his mother reached a consensus that they would offer Bernard as much help as 1.情节构建 consensus后的that引导同位语从句,清晰地表达了John 第一段开头句“WhenMrs.Meredithheard of 和他的母亲对Bermarl的关心和支持。 John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.”表明 possible. For the following weeks, John prepared the Meredith太太同意John的想法,因此本段应该描写 popcorn for Bernard every Saturday. Finally, the "little 卖爆米花前的准备工作以及他们所需要的材料。 popcorn boy" attracted much altention from the crowd. 第二段开头句“With everything ready,Bernard and the incomes were enough to solve the problem.It started out on his new business."表明,Bernard 要开始 was John's bright idea and the way he carried the plan 卖爆米花了。此时可以有两种情况,一种情况是爆 本句是lt was.. that...强调句.强调John给子了Bernarl 很大的帮助,he carried the plan out是省略关系词的定语 米花卖得很快,他很快就赚到了钱;另一种情况则是 从句。 爆米花卖得不好,但在孩子们的帮助下,Bernard最 out that made a great difference in Bernard's life. 终赚到了钱,他因此非常感激Meredith太太和她的 孩子们。 成长感悟篇 2.思路引导 Writing 1 第一段我们可以尝试问这些问题: 【故事文本分析】 ①What did Mrs. Meredith do? 作者在一次课上被分配与一个不想要与之合作 的队友共同完成作业并共享分数,他们开始无法配 ②What did John, Harry and Clara do to help Bernard? 合,后来圆满完成任务。 hoped he would pair was matched with the Story line ③How did they let Bernard know their idea? me with my best friend person I wanted to avoid he was admitted met to draw up introduced myself and ④How did Bernard feel? to hospital... our plans... tried to make the best Eofit 第二段我们可以尝试问这些问题: Emotion line expectant →disappointed ①When Bernard sold popcorn, what problem would he meet? cautious→? ②What did the children do? 【审题指导】 考生在续写时要紧跟所给材料的情节,续写应 ③Did Bernard sell popcorn out? 围绕以下几个方面展开: (1)“我”与新队友的合作经历;(2)合作过程中 ④Was Bermard thankful to them? 的挑战和成就;(3)“我”对新队友态度的转变(从最 初的不愿意合作到后来的理解和尊重)等。 【参考范文及点评】 续写线索:见面起草计划--“我”害怕说错 基本保持沉默,只是顺从队友的想法--队友生病 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she 住院--探望取得信任--合作圆满完成作业- thought it was a good one. too. Based on this perfect 懂得了团队合作的意义。 plan, the children spared no effort to pop the corn, 【写作指导】 letting Bernard sell for money. At the same time, their 1.情节构建 Basedon...和letting..作状语,展现了主人公们的智慧和 为了实现目标而付出的努力。 (1)由续写段落第一段首句内容“我们开始定期 mother was willing to take part in this kind activity. 见面来起草我们的计划。”可知,第一段可描写在“我 *She went out to buy the paper bags in which the 们”见面起草计划的过程中所发生的事情以及各自 “介词in+which”引导定语从句,其中be filled in为图 的心理活动。 定结构。 (2)由续写段落第二段首句内容“有一天,我听 D141 高考快递 高考真题分类集训·英语 说他因为严重的疾病住院了。”可知,第二段可描写 writing 2 “我”的队友住院以后“我们”是如何应对这个问题 【故事文本分析】 并最终圆满完成作业的。 本文主要讲述了作者和父亲之间的亲情故事。 2.思路引导 作者的父亲George文化程度不高,是一名卡车司机. 第一段考生可尝试问以下问题: 不了解作者的学校活动。暑期邻居家雇用作者干农 ①At the beginning, how did the workmate treat me and 活,作者学会了识别不同类型的草。虽然工作很累, my involvement in it? 但是作者期待着报酬。父亲认为工作是迈向成长的 一大步,让作者将挣得的钱奉献给家里。作者感到 ②During the process, what changes happened? 不公平,打算不再为邻居继续劳动。 (主要)角色1 I (a high school student) ③How did we work as a pair? And how was the project going on? Dad ( only had an eighth grade (主要)角色2 education, had eamed money to pay 第二段考生可尝试问以下问题: family expenses since young ) (次要)角色 ①At the hospital, what did I decide to do about our a neighboring farmer project? 背景事件 I did a summer job and eamed some money. ②To get an A, what did I do? And what was the I was hired to work in the farmer's result? field. I looked forward to the pay. Dad's 微情节 words made me realize my earnings ③How did he react to the result? And what else did I might be not mine. I felt it was not fair harvest? that I had to contribute my money. 【审题指导】 【参考范文及点评】 本篇写作要求考生根据给出的短文进行续写. We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. 使之构成一个完整的故事。文章的主体是记叙文 Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully, I 主要使用第一人称和第三人称,时态用一般过去时。 failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back. ①1 写作时应注意合理安排并紧扣故事情节,不可偏离 just kept nodding when he asked me whether it was OK 主题。 动作描写增加了对话的真实性,使读者能够更直观地感 受到角色间的互动。 【写作指导】 to do this way or that way. I thought it was impossible 1.情节构建 to persuade him into accepting my views, so I didn't (1)由第一段首句内容“发工资的日子终于到 want to waste our time discussing. I started to wait to 了。”可知,第一段可描写作者在工资到手后的心情 leave immediately we arrived at the place, and so did 以及对这笔钱的打算。再结合第二段首句可知,第 he. I just hoped that the presentation day could come 段最后应是发生了什么才使得作者明白了父母担 earlier. 心的是什么。 One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital (2)由第二段首句内容“我立刻明白了父母担心 for a serious disease. ②I felt so sorry to hear that and 1 的是什么。”可知,第二段可描写作者心理上的变化 本句使用了第一人称来叙述,有效地传达了主人公的情 以及因为这个变化而做出的决定。同时,还可以描 感变化,增强了故事的沉浸感和情感共鸣。 写作者的父亲对作者做出这一决定的反应。 thought I should visit him in any case. He was a little 2.思路引导 surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with 第一段我们可以尝试问这些问题: some flowers and fruits. I offered to do the rest of our ①How did "I" feel when"I" got payment from my project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect work? it. We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time. Our hard work paid off and Dr. ②How did "I" plan to do with the money at first? Henderson was very satisfied with our wonderful findings. From this project, we also learned the significance of teammates. Just as the saying goes, ③What made "me" understand "my" parents' worries? 最后一句强调了团队合作的重要性,不仅是对主人公个 人成长的总结,也升华了文章的主题。 第二段我们可以尝试问这些问题: one person can go far, but a group of people can travel ①What did "I" realize and decide to do? farther. D142 参考答案·可视化解析 ②How did"my" dad react to"my" decision? 以第一人称为主,时态为一般过去时。文章讲述了 人与动物之间的趣事,体现了人与自然和谐相处。 ③What's the end of the story? 【写作指导】 1.情节构建 【参考范文及点评】 第一段首句“A few weeks later,I went to the The pay day arrived at last. ①Though I had a total farmagain.”表示“几周后我再次来到农场。”由此可 此处运用了让步状语从句和wih介宾 知,续写的情节发展可以是(但不限于):我想起了那 结构,体现了人物内心的挣扎。 of $ 1oo in my pocket, I still went home with a heavy 只蜂鸟(主要角色再现)→我看到那座废弃房子的玻 heart. *How I wished I could use the money to buy a 璃窗已经被修好了(呼应前文)→非常想要再见一见 此处运用了感叹句和省略that的定语从句,生动 那只可爱的蜂鸟(情感流露)→蜂鸟一直没来,我该 展现人物的心理活动。 离开了(连接下文)。 pair of new sports shoes I'd wanted for ages. Not much 第二段首句"I was just about to leave when the was said over dinner, However, before I went to bed hummingbirdappeared.”表示“我正要离开,这时这只 that night, I overheard a conversation ”coming from my 蜂鸟出现了。”由此可知,续写的情节发展可以是(但 此处运用了非谓语动词短语作后置定语,增 加了故事细节。 不限于):蜂鸟盘旋在我的头顶鸣叫,我很欣喜(人鸟 parents' bedroom. "Sam can do without a personal 互动)→蜂鸟看着我,好像在表达感谢(情景复现)一 football coach. Our budget is really tight this month." 我目送蜂鸟振翅离开,期待下次再见(心理活动)一 said my mom. "Don't worry. I just need to do some 人与大自然应该和谐共处(情感升华)。 extra driving. A professional can help him make great 2.思路引导 progress in football. You know the boy's future dream," 第一段我们可以尝试问这些问题: said my dad. ①Why did I come back again? I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. *lt was me who had misunderstood my ②Did the hosts keep the promise? 此处使用了强调句,使人物情感的转折更加鲜明。 dad all the time, *not the other way around. The next 此处使用了圆定搭配,语言地道,展现了 ③How did I feel when not seeing the hummingbird? 作者深厚文学功底。 morning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It only 第二段我们可以尝试问这些问题: seemed fair. But he just took some of it. "That'll do for ①What did the hummingbird do at first and at last? now and thanks for helping with the family expenses, son. You have really grown up,"he said. After the ②How did I react when seeing the hummingbird again? talk, I went straight back to the farmer and took the extra work. ③Eventually, what did I gain from such an experience? 人与动物篇 【参考范文及点评】 Writing 1 A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. {①As 【故事文本分析 my car neared it, my thoughts drifted back to the moment 本文的主题是人与自然,讲述的是关干人类救 when I rescued the hummingbird from the spider-webs. 助动物、与自然和谐相处的故事。作者被邀请去一 使用a引导的时间状语从句和whem引导的定语从句描 个农场享用露天烧烤,发现有只蜂鸟被蛛网困住了 述作者回到农场的情感变化。 于是作者把这只蜂鸟救了。但是,这只蜂鸟却迟迟 I rushed back to the abandoned house.②It was a great 不肯飞走,徘徊了许久后才离开。后来,在作者准备 comfort that the original hole in the window was 离开时,这只蜂鸟又飞回到作者面前,好像是在和作 运用了i作形式主语和thal引导的主语从句,表明 者告别。 了作者对于农场窗户上的破洞消失的欣慰。 nowhere to be found. -Leaving the house, I couldn't 人物 1. my hosts. hummingbird (she) help wondering how she was getting on now. Had she farm, car, the abandoned house, spider-webs. 使用现在分词短语作状语,couldn't helpdoing结构及how引 环境 broken window glass. blackberry-lined path 导的宾语从句,表达了作者对于蜂鸟的关心和担忧。 managed to find her way back home, or was she still ou I went to an old friend's farm. → I saved a bird 事件 trapped in spider-webs. →The bird flew back to say there somewhere struggling to survive? goodbye. I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. *A flash of movement caught my attention. I 【审题指导】 运用了物称名词作主语,丰富了文章的表达形式。 文章讲述的是作者过去的经历,所以续写时应 turned around to see the same hummingbird hovering in D143 高考快递 高考真题分类集训·英语 the air. lt seemed that the bird was waiting for me, 【参考范文及点评 her beady eyes locked on mine as if trying to convey A few minutes later, the bear came back. This time. 运用了It seemed that...句型和as if引导的省略句, it was roaring more angrily. ①Though it was still miles 描述蜂鸟的出现及其与作者的互动,表达了作者对 于蜂鸟的关心和担忧。 away, the sound of its heavy breathing and the crack of some deep, unspoken gratitude. I felt a surge of relief the wooden fence could be felt as if it was just standing and awe at the sight of this sound and grateful creature. 此处使用了状语从句,生动地讲述了当时情况的紧急程 度。 The memory she left with me will remain, reminding me before me. "]esus!"②I felt my mouth opening wide, that we human should live in harmony with nature. 此处使用了as...aspossible结构,表现了作者当时的紧张 Writing 2 和慌乱。 【故事文本分析】 ready to scream as loud as possible. but my mouth went 本文主要讲述“我”和妻子EIi去给北极熊拍照 dry. The bear broke into the camp and was ready to 的故事。“我们”在营地做饭时,面包的香味吸引来 一系列动作描写反映了当时熊的状态。 了一头北极熊,它闻着味道来到“我们”所在的营地, rush into me. Out of instinct, I grabbed my camera 开始咬铁丝栅栏和推木篱笛。“我们”对着熊大叫 tripod(三脚架) in both hands to form a barrier. But 并用猎枪向空中发射空包弹,但它并不害怕,“我”乘 my tiny body was no comparison to this giant monster. 机近距离拍摄了多张它的照片。熊的威胁仍然继续 The beast held tightly on the tripod and pressed it into 存在,“我”通过无线电向营地经理求助,并用胡椒喷 my side. My arm could not move, and I sensed that my 雾喷向它的眼睛。中招的熊跑到湖边洗眼睛。 bones were going to break. Drawing back my free 【审题指导】 此处使用了现在分词短语作状语和asl.asone can结构。 叙述了作者与北极能搏斗的过程。 本题要求考生根据给出的短文进行续写,使之 hand, I struck the bear as hard as I could for five to six 构成一个完整的故事,属于记叙文,主要使用第一和 times. The bear opened its mouth and I grasped its fur. 第三人称,时态为一般过去时。考生在写作时应注 trying to push it away. I was actually wrestling (扭打) 意紧扣故事情节,不可偏离主题,还应注意合理安排 with the bear at this point. I could be beaten at any 情节,并使用高级词汇和句型。 moment. 【写作指导】 At the very moment, the helicopter arrived. At 1.情节构建 the sight of it, Elli waved her hands wildly, screaming, 针对“我”的求救,营地经理回应说直升机需要 “Help!" The nearer the helicopter got, the more 30分钟才能抵达。在这中间,“我”和妻子的命运将 此处使用了短语at the sight of和”the+比较级..the+比较 会如何?北极熊接下去又会怎样应付胡椒喷雾?北 级.."结构,生动地表现了Elli看到救拢飞机时的激动之 极熊能否冲破栅栏?“我们”是怎样对付它的?介绍 情。 这些情况宜用一般过去时。 excited and hopeful she was. *Hearing her yell, I 2.思路引导 此处使用了现在分词短语作状语和that引导的定语从句。 gathered all the strength that I possibly had to hold on. (1)故事的起因,发展、高潮和结局是记叙文写 作的基本要素。原文已经将起因和发展交代清楚 Bang came a shoot. Then, as suddenly as it had 了,所以考生要通读全文,把握短文的脉络,串起短 begun, the fight ended. A calming drug was shot at it. "Thank Lord! We were safe finally!" Elli was so 文的关键词,根据所给的两个段落的首句续写故事 的高潮部分和结局部分。 此处使用了so..that..结构,表现了二人获救后Elli 的激动和喜悦。 (2)考生在谋篇布局时,必须注意短文所述的事 delighted that she hugged me tightly. My arm was 件的逻辑,故事的发展必须符合情节发展的内在逻 injured and the camp was ruined, but the outcome for 辑。考生在对第一段的内容进行布局时,要兼顾两 us was not all that bad. *After all, we've taken such a 个段首句,因为第二段的首句决定第一段的走向:同 close snap of the polar bear, which was exactly the goal 时也应注意标有下划线的词语与主题的关联。 此处使用了which引导的非限制性定语从句,解释了这次 (3)在写作手法上应以叙述为主,在描写上应倾 经历的收获。 向于对人物的心理活动、动作的描写,情节的推进要 of this journey. *Moreover, when Elli and I got home 合乎逻辑。在第一段的续写中,考生应该写“我们” 此处合理使用了连接成分,显示了作者较高的驾取英语 的能力。 与北极熊搏斗的过程;而在第二段的续写中应着重 and developed our pictures, we noticed this bear had 叙述二人获得营救、脱离危险的过程。由于题目要 broken an important tooth. Like humans, polar bears 求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语,这 feel pain, have emotions, and can be afraid. Elli and l 就给考生增加了写作难度。我们要熟悉所给的标有 learned our lesson: Beware of a bear with a toothache. 下划线的词语,并在恰当的时候加以运用 D144