如何让续写部分与原文高度协同How to match your own writing perfectly with the original 导学案-2024届高考英语专题复习之读后续写

高考专题复习之读后续写 如何让续写部分与原文高度协同How to match your own writing perfectly with the original 2021.1浙江英语高考 & 2021.5温州三模 主题背景：Halloween What are traditional Halloween activities? · Dressing up in costumes is one of the most popular Halloween customs, especially among children. According _____ tradition, people would dress up in costumes (wear special clothing, masks or disguises乔装) _______________ (frighten) the spirits away. · Trick-or-Treat is a modern Halloween custom _________ children go from house to house dressed in costume, ____________ (ask) for treats like candy or toys. If they don't get any treats, they might play ______ trick (mischief or prank恶作剧) on the owners of the house. · A jack-o’-lantern is a hollowed-out（被挖空的）pumpkin with a face _________ (carve) on one side. Candles are usually placed inside. The colors black and orange are also a part of Halloween. Black is a symbol of night _______ orange is the color of pumpkins. What kind of festival is Halloween? · People ________________ with neighbors, friends and family members at Halloween. · It is a(n) ________________ and ________________ festival full of ________________________. 2021.1浙江英语高考试题呈现: Pumpkin(南瓜) carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage - I carried an 85 -pounder back last year. This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I'm unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time. With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it，like a cork（软木塞）forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders. My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. "I'm going to set it down, now, "I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. "I can't get it out!“ I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.   I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. Preview预习 Task1 Read for basic information When where who what why How ... Task2 找出原文中的动词与动作链 1.南瓜开口朝上放在桌子上，我弯下腰，把头塞入开口中。 With the pumpkin ___________ on the table, hole uppermost, I _____________________________________________ . 2.一开始，就在我眼睛上一点我就被卡住了，然后，我不愿放弃继续往里塞，我的鼻子稍微有点挡着进不去。 At first I ________________________ just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, ____________________, my nose briefly __________________. 3.最后，我把整个脑袋都塞进了南瓜里，就像把软木塞塞进了瓶子一样。 Finally I _____________________, like a cork forced into a bottle. 4.我肩膀上扛着巨大的南瓜，站直身子。 I was able to _____________________ with the huge pumpkin _____________________________. 5.“现在我要把它放下来，”我说，杰森帮我扶着它，我弯下身将南瓜靠在桌子上。 “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason ___________________________, I ___________ over the table to give it somewhere to rest. 6.当我用力拔的时候，我的鼻子卡住了。 When I _________________, my nose ___________________. 7.我惊慌失措，紧紧地靠在桌子上，转动脑袋，试图找到正确的角度，但无济于事。 I ____________________ as I _____________________________________ and __________________________________ _________________________ , but it was no use. 8.“我的头出不来!”我喊道，我的声音在这个封闭的空间里听起来大得出奇。 “I can’t get it out!” I _____________, my voice ____________________________in the enclosed space. 总结：1.精准使用动词和_____________（三个或三个以上动作连用）可以构建生动的画面感。 2. 辅助使用个别修辞手法如________________(句3)可以使描写更形象。 3. 较多使用__________________(句2、7、8)和____________________（句1、4、5）等高级语法结构。 TIP1：找出原文的特色语法结构、句型及其他写作技巧并用于续写，增强语言协同。 Underline some key grammatical structures, sentence patterns and other writing techniques and apply them to your own writing to make the language and writing style match perfectly with the original. Task3 找出原文的伏笔并思考如何与之回应 Foreshadowing(伏笔) in the given part Echoes (回应) in writing ①Pumpkin carving at Halloween is a family tradition. The family atmosphere will be _________________________________ 第二段尾句可感叹What a/an______________ Halloween 与此呼应 ②...it was hard to tell whether...was the winner. ...I was determined to prove my point. 第二段结尾也可落脚到...even if I still _________ ___________ whose pumpkin was heavier yet. ③All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. 第一段中 ________ helped to rescue me 第一段结尾可写________ was filming all through the time ④I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time. 第一段被困时的自我怀疑：Thinking back to my action, I felt I was a bit ____________________. 或者How I wish I _________________ my head inside the pumpkin just to prove my point. ⑤"I can't get it out!" I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space. 续写第一段可描述“我”在黑暗密闭空间中只能靠______________ 感知事情经过；南瓜外家人说话的声音有_____________或______________ (与loud形成对比）或因缺乏________引起不适 ⑥段首句1：I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. · I was rescued by ____________ and it was a _____ process. · I felt it much longer because of ____________________________. · 与我焦虑的度秒如年形成对比的是我家人的________________ ________________。 ⑦段首句2：That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. · 第一段结尾要交代视频拍摄情况 · After posted online, it _________________(疯狂传播) and _________________（累计） hundreds of thousands of ______________ ____________（观看和点赞）. · 接下来的Halloween会发生什么?（与traditional Halloween activities联系起来）设想一到两个场景 TIP2：找出原文的伏笔并在续写中与之回应增强内容和主题协同。Find out and echo the foreshadowing to make the content and theme match perfectly with the original. 契诃夫法则（Chekhov’s Law）是一种文学技巧，在故事早期出现的某一元素，直至最后才显现出它的重要性。换言之，在故事开头出现过的物品一定要在后面的故事情节中用到，否则，它就不应该出现。 “契诃夫法则”对读后续写的启示--1.故事前面隐藏的线索为故事后续的发展指明了方向；2.在阅读故事时应重视隐藏的线索；3. 隐藏的线索在后续的故事发展中应有所交代。 Task4品读所给范文并对照check-list判断是否与原文高度协同 A possible version I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. ①My lungs panted（v.喘息）, struggling for oxygen while the muffled(沉闷的) voices from outside were oddly calming. ②Mom was giggling and sent my youngest brother to inform Dad of my dilemma, Jason giving advice as well as chuckling. ③With Dad’s familiar footsteps approaching, I felt two hands got me to push my head farther into the pumpkin so Jason could reach in and undo(v.解开) the rubber band(橡皮筋) round my ponytail(马尾辫).④Like a stray cat(流浪猫) just out of a trash can, I emerged with messy hair, a sore chin and my nose plugged with pumpkin pulp(瓜瓤) and what first came into my sight was a close-up(特写) camera. ⑤“You made it!” Mom laughed a loud laugh, filming my awkward situation with shivering hands. That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. ①Much to our astonishment, it went viral and racked up hundreds of thousands of views and likes just in a few days. ②“Which is the pumpkin?” crowds of trick-or-treaters knocked and asked with huge smiles just like the one on jack-o’-lanterns before taking selfies with it at the subsequent Halloween. ③Embarrassed as I was, I felt it was worth it since I could bring people pleasure and fun in such a festival full of laughter.④Undoubtedly, it became the most unforgettable Halloween even if I still had no idea of whose pumpkin was heavier yet. Check-list 与原文语言的协同 make the language and writing style match perfectly with the original ① 精准使用动词与动作链 ② 特色高级语言结构（非谓语动词、with的复合结构等） ③ 修辞手法（比喻、拟人、夸张等） ④ 特色句型（强调句等） ⑤ 多感官描写（视觉、听觉、嗅觉、触觉、味觉） 与原文内容、主题的协同 make the content and theme match perfectly with the original ① 回应伏笔1 ② 回应伏笔2 ③ 回应伏笔3 ④ 回应伏笔4 ⑤ 回应伏笔5 ⑥ 回应段首句1 ⑦ 回应段首句2 富兰克林写作法 共分三步：1.挑选范文；2.阅读＋解析；3.仿写+对比纠错。 第一步，挑选范文：挑选一篇自己喜欢的，水平达到天花板级别的范文。 第二步，阅读＋解析：在反复精读的基础上，重点做好解析工作。解析时，按照写作思维过程——即“审题/立意＋文章结构＋首、尾段落＋论据材料＋论证方式”的顺序进行拆解。通过拆解，掌握文章各段落核心观点，提取关键词。同时，对文章所使用的新鲜论据、名言金句、修辞手法等进行重点识记。 第三步，仿写：在不看原文的前提下，根据关键词，用自己知道的最贴切的语言去表达句子的核心内容，争取向原文靠拢。这里需要注意两点：1.仿写不是默写，不要死记硬背照抄原文；2.对比纠错，使自己的文章不断向原文靠拢，直至接近或达到原文水平。 Task5 Cloze Test Pumpkin carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I ____1____ with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a ____2____ that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage—I carried an 85-pounder back last year. This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. ____3____ , we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my ____4____ . All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the ____5____ event. I’m still unsure now why I forced my head inside the pumpkin, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time. With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and ____6____ my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose ____7____ prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork forced into a bottle. To my surprise, I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders. ____8____ , my excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was too heavy for me to carry on for a long time. With Jason helping to ____9____ its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest, but in vain. When I pulled ____10____ , my nose got in the way. I got into a ____11____ as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was ____12____ . “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the ____13____ space. Eventually, Dad ____14____ to break the pumpkin with a knife; meanwhile, I realized the camera had been rolling the whole time! My family had an ____15____ moment that we would always treasure, and my father broke the rule, announcing that both my brother and I were winners! 1．A．compete B．compare C．conflict D．contradict 2．A．command B．desire C．rule D．habit 3．A．Undoubtedly B．Unfortunately C．Uncertainly D．Unacceptably 4．A．guess B．idea C．thought D．trick 5．A．rare B．special C．grand D．annual 6．A．placed B．laid C．pressed D．pulled 7．A．hardly B．randomly C．quickly D．briefly 8．A．Therefore B．However C．Besides D．Then 9．A．support B．abandon C．reduce D．measure 10．A．easily B．hard C．smoothly D．gently 11．A．routine B．situation C．panic D．fight 12．A．temporary B．stupid C．priceless D．useless 13．A．enclosed B．wide C．open D．vast 14．A．tried B．wanted C．managed D．planned 15．A．ordinary B．unforgettable C．outstanding D．extra 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$