“六字真经”读后续写真题写作导学案——湖北省10月高三百校大联考

“六字真经”读后续写真题写作导学案 湖北省10月高三百校大联考 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 On the eve of the New Year, I was shopping in a local supermarket, buying supplies for the festive season. The store was full of people, who were wrapped up in the holiday spirit. After I had gathered everything on my list, I made my way home, with a heart full of expectation for the celebrations ahead. As I walked through a quiet park, I noticed an old man sitting alone on a bench. He looked tired and seemed to be shaking in the cold. His clothes were worn, and his eyes held a distant gaze, as if lost in thought. The sight moved me deeply, and without a second thought, I approached him. “Excuse me, sir, what happened to you?” I said gently. He looked at me and said, “Nothing. I'm just missing those days when I had my family with me. ” Obviously, the old man lived alone. On the day when everyone was celebrating, he had to suffer loneliness. I continued, “Would you like to join me in the New Year's celebration at my home? It's getting cold out here.” “Thank you, my dear,” he replied, “but I have my own little place where I like to be on this special night.” I respected his wishes but wanted to do something to ensure he was not alone. I asked for his address, promising to check on him later. He hesitated for a moment before sharing it with me. Back home, I busied myself in the kitchen, preparing a heart y meal that could warm the soul. As I cooked, I also picked out a small gift, a soft woolen blanket and a box of homemade cookies, hoping they would bring the old man comfort. With the meal packed in a thermal（保暖的）container and the gift in hand, I set out for the old man's home. His home was a small one, which was in a quiet corner of a neighborhood. I knocked on his door, and when he opened it, the surprise on his face was evident. “I hope you don't mind,” I said, “I've brought you some dinner and something to keep you warm.” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The old man invited me in warmly. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ At last, the old man wanted to give me something in return for my kindness. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 1. 梳理文章关键信息： 通读文章，然后根据文章内容和提示完成表格。 人物(who) 时间(when) 地点(where) 起因(why) 做了何事(what) 结果如何(how) 故事大意 2. 理清文章故事脉络： 仔细阅读原文，从中找出重要的故事情节线索，然后根据提示完成表格。 起因/矛盾 故事经过/解决方式 线索/伏笔 主题/精神 第二步：依据首句，构思框架 阅读原文之后，我们可以通过两个关键步骤来构思续写内容的框架： （1）两段首句定一框 根据第二段首句，可以反推第一段的结尾。因此，通过分析第一段和第二段的首句，可以确定第一段段情节的发展方向和主要框架。 （2）二框二首正能量 故事的结尾通常要积极向上，带有正向意义。无论是迷路归家、脱险获救、和解矛盾、战胜困难，还是达成目标，第二段的框架应围绕正向结局来展开。借助第二段首句和一个积极的收尾，可以轻松确定第二段故事发展的完整结构。 根据“两段首句定一框、二框二首正能量”和以下所给提示，小组围绕展开讨论。讨论后，结合文章内容完成续写内容框架的拟定。 提示： 原文的起因/冲突是什么？是否已经解决？ 续写部分要解决哪些问题？ 故事中人物的目标和情感变化是什么？ 两段首句定一框： 第一段可写：（我和老人在家里一起享用晚餐，度过了美好的时光） _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The old man invited me in warmly. 老人热情地邀请我进去。 二框二首正能量： 第二段可写：（描述老人送我的礼物，以“我”的感悟进行结尾） ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ At last, the old man wanted to give me something in return for my kindness. 最后，老人想给我一些东西来报答我的恩情。 根据所写的内容框架，我们可以写出续写故事的线索： _____________________→_____________________→_____________________→ _____________________→_____________________→_____________________ 第三步：六字真经，构思情节 构思续写框架后，如何让人、事、物变得活灵活现，跃然纸上？确定续写段的主人公后，借助“看听想，讲做感”六字真经，我们可以往里面添加适当的细节，让故事内容更加丰富。 两段首句定一框： 第一段可写：（我和老人在家里一起享用晚餐度过了美好的时光） 确定人物：_______________________________________________________ 增加细节： （看到了什么？听到了什么？想到了什么？说了什么？做了什么？感受到了什么？） ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 二框二首正能量： 第二段可写：（描述老人送我的礼物，以“我”的感悟进行结尾） 确定人物：_______________________________________________________ 增加细节： （看到了什么？听到了什么？想到了什么？说了什么？做了什么？感受到了什么？） ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第四步：构思成文，细校至善（课后作业） The old man invited me in warmly. ________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ At last, the old man wanted to give me something in return for my kindness. _______ ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 答案与解析： 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 1. 梳理文章关键信息： 人物(who) I，Old Man 时间(when) 新年前夕 地点(where) 超市、公园、老人的家 起因(why) 我在超市购物回家途中，看到一位孤独的老人独自坐在公园长椅上，心生怜悯。 做了何事(what) 作者与老人交谈后，虽然老人拒绝去他家庆祝新年，但作者仍决定为老人送去温暖的食物和礼物。 结果如何(how) 老人对于作者如约到来感到意外和感动。 故事大意 作者在新年前夕偶遇一位独自度过节日的老人，虽然老人拒绝去他家庆祝，但叙述者仍送去食物和礼物，给老人带去温暖和关怀。 2. 理清文章故事脉络： 起因/矛盾 故事经过/解决方式 线索/伏笔 主题/精神 新年前夕，作者在公园看到了一位孤独的老人。 作者关心老人并邀请他一起过年，老人拒绝了。 老人提到怀念和家人在一起的时光，暗示了他的孤独。 关怀和善意在节日中尤为重要，尤其是对那些被忽略的人，这种关爱能带来温暖和慰藉。 老人拒绝了作者提出的陪伴，想独自一人在自己的小屋里过年。 作者决定做些什么，在询问了老人的地址后，回家准备了食物和礼物，送到老人家里。 老人住在偏僻的地方，也同样暗示了他的孤独。 第二步：依据首句，构思框架 两段首句定一框： 第一段可写：小屋里的情景（注意环境描写），他带我走到了桌子旁边放下食物（注意动作和语言描写），我们一边享用食物，一边聊天（注意动作和语言描写），时间慢慢过去，他的孤独感似乎也在慢慢消失（注意神态和情感描写）。 二框二首正能量： 第二段可写：老人拿出送给我的礼物（注意动作描写），老人描述礼物的来历（注意语言描写），我心怀感激的收下了礼物（注意心理和语言描写），最后以我对这次帮助的感悟进行结尾（主题升华）。 第三步：六字真经，构思情节 两段首句定一框： 确定人物：我和老人 增加细节： 看：我看到老人小屋里的情况 做：老人领着我到桌子旁边坐下 说：老人对我的到来表示感谢 说：我回应老人，表示想要一起共度这个孤独的夜晚 做：我把食物放在桌子上，并打开 做和说：我们一边享用食物，一边愉快的交谈 感：我和老人都觉得彼此的陪伴，让孤独感逐渐消失 二框二首正能量： 确定人物：我和老人 增加细节： 做：老人起身，走到橱柜前拿出了给我的礼物 说：老人描述这个礼物的来历，并希望我可以喜欢 做和感：我被老人描述的过去所感动，并感激的收下了礼物 说：我和老人承诺，我会好好珍惜这一份礼物 环境：我回家的时候，即使是大雪，但是感觉似乎没有那么寒冷了 感：我心里感觉到了温暖 第四步：构思成文，细校至善 范文参考： The old man invited me in warmly. His small home was simple but tidy, with a few old photographs hanging on the walls, telling stories of days gone by. He led me to a modest table where I set down the meal and gift. "You didn’t have to do all this," he said, his eyes glistening with gratitude. "It's nothing," I replied, "I just didn’t want you to spend this night alone." We sat together, talking as he enjoyed the warm meal. Slowly, his loneliness seemed to melt away as we shared stories about family, memories, and what the new year might bring. At last, the old man wanted to give me something in return for my kindness. He stood up, walked over to a small cupboard, and took out a worn but beautiful music box. "This belonged to my wife," he said softly. "She used to play it every New Year’s Eve. I want you to have it, as a reminder of this evening." Touched by his gesture, I accepted it, promising to cherish the music box as much as he had. As I left, the cold night air felt a little less chilly, warmed by the new connection we had made. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$