技巧15 用微续写夯实写作基础-【同步写作课】2024-2025学年高二英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练(通用版)

高二英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练 技巧15 用微续写夯实写作基础 读后续写是英语高考试卷中的写作新题型，要求学生在有限的时间内，根据阅读材料及每段所给的开头句，续写两段文字，且字数限制在150左右。这就要求学生在阅读时准确把握文章情节线和情感线，进行写作时，要思路清晰，前后呼应，逻辑连贯。新高考全国卷读后续写评分标准中明确指出，教师阅卷时应考虑到上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性，以及续写内容与原文情境的融洽度。因此，读后续写命题看似开放，但若没有经过系统指导，学生可能会天马行空，写作思路容易偏离主线。为此，教师需要在两个方面进行深入探究：第一，培养学生在有限的时间内高效归纳故事线，建立写作思维逻辑和输出正向价值观的能力；第二，帮助学生摆脱英语写作固有的死记硬背套路，进行合理想象和创新。“微续写”通过故事评议和片段式续写等微写作形式，与读后续写相融合，从而达到提高学生读后续写能力的目的。 “微续写”的架构 “微续写”的特点是从“微”入手，“微用时”“微成篇”“微情节”。“微用时”要求学生在10~15分钟内完成微型续写任务；“微成篇”要求续写篇幅短小精悍，点明故事情节即可；“微情节”要求故事情节不得超过四点，这是根据高考读后续写题型的字数限制设定的。构思英语微续写的情节时，‌可以关注以下要点：‌ ‌确定语篇主旨‌：‌通过阅读前文和段首句，‌明确文章的核心或主题，‌确保续写内容围绕这一主旨展开，‌传递正能量，‌体现积极价值观。‌‌ ‌构思情节要点‌：‌确定续写内容的概要，‌包括每段的三个要点：‌拓展部分、‌衔接部分和结局部分。‌确保这些要点与主旨紧密相连，‌构成完整的故事情节。‌‌ ‌注重情节发展‌：‌在续写过程中，‌注重情节的起伏和转折，‌使故事发展有逻辑性，‌同时保持与给定材料的衔接，‌确保情节和结构的完整性。‌‌ ‌运用语言技巧‌：‌在续写时，‌运用丰富的词汇、‌恰当的句型和语法结构，‌使表达清晰、‌流畅，‌增强文章的表现力。‌‌ [微技巧示例]‌ 示例1：基于情节的关键点描绘‌‌ ‌环境‌：‌北极熊继续攻击营地。‌ ‌心理‌：‌我们的心理即将崩溃。‌ ‌动作‌：‌我们不知所措。‌ 句型：‌As/With +恶化的情况, sb. was on the edge of breaking down, totally at a loss what to do. 示例：‌As the bear was trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws for the second time, we were on the edge of breaking down, totally at a loss what to do. 这个示例展示了如何在微续写中构建激化矛盾的情节，‌包括环境、‌心理和动作的描写，‌以及相应的句型结构。 示例2：基于主题的情节拓展‌‌ 主题一：‌自我成长与探索 ‌前文‌：‌ Lisa had always been shy and lacked confidence. She often avoided social situations and felt uncomfortable in large groups. One day, her friend invited her to join a public speaking club. ‌微续写‌：‌ Lisa was hesitant but decided to take the challenge. At the first meeting, she felt nervous and barely spoke. However, with the encouragement of her friends and the club's mentor, she started practicing regularly. Over time, she noticed her confidence growing. She even won a small speaking contest within the club. Realizing her potential, Lisa continued to push herself out of her comfort zone and eventually became a confident and outgoing person. 主题二：‌友情与陪伴 ‌前文‌：‌ Jack and Emily had been friends since childhood. They had shared countless adventures and secrets together. When Jack's family moved to another city, they promised to stay in touch. ‌微续写‌：‌ Years passed, and their lives took different paths. Jack focused on his career while Emily pursued her passion for art. Despite the distance and busy schedules, they made sure to call each other every week. One day, Emily faced a major setback in her career and felt lost. Jack, who had just finished a successful project, immediately took a break and drove to her city. They spent days walking, talking, and reminiscing about old times. With Jack's support, Emily found the courage to pursue her dreams again, and their bond grew stronger. 主题三：‌梦想与追求 ‌前文‌：‌ Sara had always dreamed of becoming a professional photographer. She spent hours every day capturing the beauty of nature and people around her. However, her family expected her to pursue a more stable career. ‌微续写‌：‌ Sara faced immense pressure from her family but couldn't ignore her passion. She decided to take a leap of faith and enrolled in a photography course. She worked hard, learning new techniques and experimenting with different styles. Her dedication paid off when she won a local photography contest. The recognition gave her the confidence to pursue her dream full-time. Eventually, her unique perspective and skill landed her a job with a renowned travel magazine, proving to her family that dreams, when pursued with determination, can lead to success. 这些微续写展示了不同情节类型的发展，‌包括自我成长、‌友情陪伴，‌以及追求梦想的过程。‌每个示例都围绕一个核心主题展开，‌通过具体的事件和细节来丰富故事情节。‌ 基于高考试题语篇的“微续写”应用示例 “微续写”应用实践分为初期培训阶段和常规练习阶段。在初期培训阶段，教师引导学生熟悉该模式的具体流程，之后便进入常规练习阶段，即学生自行标注文章“评议”要素，并独立补充学案框架内的情节点，以促成一个既符合原文情感线又具有完整情节线的故事。 “微续写”的初期培训阶段是教师教授阶段。教师通过例题细致生动地向学生展示该模式的流程及形式。现以2022年新高考全国卷的读后续写为例进行说明。该文章讲述了一名教师—“我”与学生的故事。在大型越野赛跑那天，“我”发现患有脑疾的大卫独自一人闷闷不乐，因为教练担心大卫被同学嘲笑而暗示其弃赛。“我”看出了大卫内心的渴望，并鼓励他完成比赛。教学初期分为两部分。教师首先带着学生读，感悟作者的情感走向和文章主旨；然后指导学生写，根据所给句子延伸出故事的情节线，尤其要限制学生每段所写的情节点。 （一）读中感知情感线 教师先带领学生进行评议练习，领会如何评议文章的情感表达。 Expression 1: It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students were warming up and walking the route through thick evergreen forest. Expression 2: What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! 学生从这一组对比中感受到第一种表达是对故事情节的具体介绍，而第二种表达是作者自我情感的抒发。之后，教师要求学生完成该读后续写的阅读任务，并勾画出其认为重要的“评议”环节，随后教师进行补充和总结，并与学生一同分析故事的情感走向（如图所示）。 在教师的引导下，学生标出文章细节点，即评议部分：“David’s usual big toothy smile was absent today ”“David had a brain disease... ”“David had not missed a single practice... ”以及“... I was proud of his strong determination”。通过这些评议要素可知，大卫原本乐观，且身残志坚。从“The coach thought he was doing the right thing ”可知，教练好心办了坏事，伤害了大卫的自尊心。这些重要情感的总结为学生后面的续写奠定了准确的情感基础。 （二）写中延伸情节线 到了“微续写”环节，教师要求学生品读续写所给的句子，画出其认为重要的表达或意象，并引导学生想象接下来会发生什么样的故事情节。规定学生每段续写情节不得超过两个，并且用一个精练的句子描述每个情节。这样，一段简短的“微续写”篇章便呈现了出来。 续写部分第一段给出的句子是“We sat down next to each other，but David wouldn’t look at me. ”教师提 问：“What can you see from this sentence? ”学生很容易点出该句话的重要情节—作者和大卫肩并肩坐在了一起。 续写部分第二段所给句子是“I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ”教师再次提问相同问题，学生可点出“大卫起身走向了起跑线，加入了比赛”这一重要情节。这样师生可以总结出：续写部分第一段应写在我们坐下后，我对大卫进行了鼓励，且大卫被我说服了。第二段则应写大卫加入并完成了比赛。联系大卫身残志坚的品质，故事的结尾应是对大卫美好品质的褒奖与弘扬。 在分析完情节走向后，教师引领学生完成情节点： 第一段：情节1，我鼓励大卫；情节2，大卫备受鼓舞，同意参赛。 第二段：情节1，大卫坚持跑完了比赛；情节2，对大卫美好品质的弘扬。 其中第一段的最后一个情节应既承接上文，又引出第二段的首句。这样，一个完整的情节线便生成了（如图所示）。 完成“微续写”后，教师引领学生将自己的微篇章故事情节一一对应故事线的各个环节（如图所示）。 教师最后向学生呈现如图所示的“微续写”图示，这也是进入常规训练阶段后的“微续写”学案，能够形成写作范式，帮助学生规范平时的“微续写”写作训练，以培养学生精准把握情感线、合理延伸情节线的能力。进入常规练习阶段后，学生已经熟悉了“微续写”模式的具体流程，可以自行实施“读”和“写”。教师可以安排学生10~15分钟完成“微续写”任务，之后再对学生的成果进行点拨。 “微续写”能有效帮助学生高效归纳文章情感主旨，合理延伸故事情节。在教学实践中，教师应明确“微续写”故事情节的结尾积极向上，落实立德树人要求；在强化“微续写”写作技能的同时，也要促使学生加强词汇、语法结构等语言知识的积累；限制“微续写”情节数量并非限制学生的想象，而是培养学生更加准确精炼地把握文章的核心思想。 1．（23-24高二上·辽宁辽阳·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文 Last Sunday morning, my parents and I were going on a vacation in Sydney, where my grandparents lived, to celebrate my birthday. Actually, celebrating my birthday in my grandparents’ home had been a family tradition. As a result, their neighbors, warm-hearted and friendly, were familiar with me. Sometimes, they even came to the house and brought me birthday gifts in person. We took the subway there as usual. When we got off the subway, I found I had lost my bag. The bag was memorable to me because it was given by my parents when I became a senior high school student. It also had some valuable items inside, including an expensive watch a birthday gift from my grandparents. I couldn’t help but cry because the bag meant so much to me.“What’s the matter. Lily?” my mom asked. I told her that I might leave the bag on the subway. Hearing that, she comforted me and said. “We have plenty of time. Let’s talk to the staff (工作人员).” Instantly, my parents reported the situation to the staff at the subway station. A kind worker smiled to me and said. “If someone found it, they would hand it in.” He asked us to wait patiently for a while, and then he called for help．After half an hour, the worker didn’t give us any information. I started to become anxious and lose hope. My father said. “No news is good news.”However, the worker finally apologized to us and let us wait for the information on the recovery of the missing bag at home. We had to go to my grandparents’ house first. In the afternoon, while I, together with my grandparents and my father, was preparing for a birthday party, I heard my mother talking to someone on the phone about my lost bag. My heart was beating violently, and I was expecting something extraordinary to happen. Sure enough, my mother got me to answer the phone, “Good news, Lily. The call is just for you, from the kind worker. He said a girl called Beatrice had sent the bag back.” I felt amazed that the girl’s name is the same as my friend’s in Sydney. 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 I took the phone, and then the voice of the worker who had helped us at the subwaystation came from it. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ My family and I were dancing happily when someone knocked at the door. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．（23-24高二下·江西上饶·开学考试）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 James Bradley had developed a strong passion for skiing. On a freezing cold Sunday in 2019, James, then a 16-year-old boy, headed to Aspen Mountain with his father to go skiing. They took a cable car to the top of the mountain and conquered the most challenging part of the long trail. Afterwards, they decided to follow different trails to go down the mountain respectively. That was when everything started to veer off course. In the late afternoon, after finishing the final run through the side trial, his father arrived at the parking lot. Anxiously, he had waited here for his son for several hours. However, James never showed up. It turned out that a fierce snowstorm had swept into the area as James was on his way down. Unable to see far and clearly, he turned off the path by accident and got lost. The dreadful snowstorm coupled with strong winds gained strength and enveloped everything, blocking his way back to the ski trails. Before long, James slid down the mountain slope on his skis and stopped at the bottom of the mountain in the valley. Thanks to the thick snow, James didn’t get hurt and the winds weren’t as strong in the valley as they were up on the mountain. Looking around, he saw nothing but the branches of trees and the pure white snow. James had no idea where he was. Worse still, the sun began to sink and he was getting colder by the minute. Most worrisome of all was that he didn’t have any food or water with him, let alone his mobile phone or other supplies. Standing alone in the wild and holding his large skis, cold and thirst, he couldn’t help thinking about the survival show Man vs. Wild that he used to watch. In the show, Bear Grylls was abandoned in a wild area like this and had to help himself out by using all sorts of survival skills. Yes! It was time to put the tips he had learned to use. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Without hesitation, James took action immediately. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Two days later, James saw several figures approaching his shelter. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．（23-24高二上·河北·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was in high school, my art teacher asked me to participate in a regional painting competition. I hesitated at first. Although I loved art, I had always painted for myself, not for contests or recognition. My family, who had moved from Mexico, encouraged me to express our culture through my art, but I was unsure about exposing my work to the public. Painting was a personal journey for me, a way to connect with my roots and express my emotions. But my teacher saw something in my paintings that I hadn’t. She said, “Your work tells a story, a vibrant narrative of your heritage and dreams. You should share it with the world.” Motivated by her confidence in me, I decided to take the leap. I chose the theme of ‘Migration’ for my painting. It was a tribute to my family’s journey from Mexico to the United States, a blend of colors and emotions depicting both the struggles and hopes of moving to a new land. I poured my heart into that canvas, each stroke representing a piece of my story. As I worked, I found myself lost in the memories and experiences of my family. The more I painted, the more I understood the sacrifices they had made for me. My doubts turned into determination. I wanted this painting not just to be seen but to be felt. I stayed up late for several nights, perfecting every detail, ensuring that every color and every line conveyed the emotions I felt so deeply. When I finally finished, I was no longer concerned about winning. The painting was a part of me, a representation of my family’s journey and my growth as an artist. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The day of the competition arrived, and my heart was racing as I displayed my painting among the others. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ After the competition, I walked up to my art teacher, filled with a mix of gratitude and pride. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．（22-23高二上·全国·期中）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 If you want to hike alone in the woods, it’s always a good deal to bring along your best friend — the dog. A hiker in Nevada recently learned that lesson the hard way. A 53-year-old man was hiking in the woods in Nevada County on the night of July 12 when he fell down a 70-foot embankment (路堤). He was badly injured, breaking his hip and ribs, but he managed to drag himself to a spot with cell service and call for help. After getting cellphone reception, the wounded hiker, whose name was not released by authorities, phoned first responders at noon the following day asking for help and telling them about his broken bones. The man then covered himself in a camouflage tarp (伪装油布) and waited for help to arrive. His loyal friend, Saul, waited by his side. Upon receiving the man’s emergency call, the California Department of Forestry and Fire Protection enlisted the help of the nonprofit Nevada County Sheriff’s Search and Rescue to locate and rescue the man. Twenty-five members of the Nevada County Sheriff’s Search and Rescue organization set out to find the hiker, whose last GPS location was used to get to the general neighborhood, but with miles of huge wilderness around them, they worried it would take a long time to find him. At about 7 p. m. on July 13, the search was still going on. “Having searching for the man for over seven hours, we were tired out and felt a bit disappointed,” said Dennis Haack, leader of the Search and Rescue team, “But I do put a lot of faith in our searchers because they’re extremely good at what they do.” 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Suddenly, a black dog came into the sight of a group of rescuers. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The hiking victim was put into a helicopter. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．（22-23高二上·全国·开学考试）阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It pays to have friends in “high” places! Last year, Brody Ridder of Westminster, Colorado changed schools because hed was being bullied(霸凌). Sadly, the problem didn’t go away at his new school, The Academy of Charter Schools. When the school yearbook came out at the end of his sixth grade year, no one in his class wanted to sign his book. Brody says he approached several classmates to ask them to sign, but they refused. The few who did sign only wrote down their names carelessly with no personal notes for Brody. Except for a couple of teachers’ notes, his pages were completely blank. Greatly disappointed, Brody sat down and wrote in the book himself. ”Hope you make some more friends.—Brody Ridder,“ he wrote. Mom Cassandra Ridder was sad indeed when she read the note and heard how cruelly he’d been treated. She took a picture of the note and shared it online for parents of students at Brody’s school. She had no idea it would lead to discussions all over town! Parents were so sad to read Brody’s note to himself that they encouraged their children to reach out to the boy the next day. Rising senior Simone Lightfoot was one of the teenagers who heard the sixth grader’s story, and she understood his embarrassment. She and other high school students spent hours talking about Brody, coming up with a plan to help lift his spirits and make him feel less alone. ”We all just started planning that the next day we were going to go and sign this kid’s yearbook,“ said Logan South, another rising senior. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The next day, they did just that. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Not surprisingly, Brody’s classmates also reached out to him. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6．（23-24高二上·全国·阶段练习）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 “Hey, how are you doing, son?” My father smiled to me. “Not bad, dad, but I’ve decided not to go to university. I want to focus on my music career,” I replied. It would be a harmonious dinner if there was no argument interrupting us. As you know, my father insisted that I should be a teacher all the time because he was a professor while I would like to create a band in the rest of my life. My father got angry, raising his voice: “You can’t be serious. Why not being a teacher? You can help students and change their lives.” But I’m not interested in education at all. I just want to work in a studio, not a school. However, my dad thought that a band is not career, even not a job. If I were a lead singer of my band, I would be very happy. I will have new friends, new life, new environment and everything new. “It’s so boring to be a teacher for me, I can’t go to different countries, and I can’t wear popular clothes even!” I couldn’t control myself when I thought about it. I know teachers are great. They set an example for me, giving me a lot of care and help when I was young. I have never denied this profession, but it is not my dream. Supposing that our human society intends to acquire long-term prosperity, it is advisable for us to do what we really love. Only in this way, can we work productively, efficiently and effectively. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 At this time, my grandfather stepped between me and my father. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The relaxed atmosphere gradually eased off. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 7．（23-24高二上·安徽宣城·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Finding happiness in life When John walked into the dining room in the morning, his wife Jenny and his two children, Kevin and Sophie, were sitting at the table. The atmosphere was frosty as John sat down. Sophie, who was only five years old, gave her father a weak smile. Kevin, his teenage son, didn’t look up from his food. Jenny looked at him silently with her arms folded across her chest. “OK,” John began, “I’m sorry. I know I let everyone down yesterday.” Kevin looked accusingly at his father. “You missed my music performance at school again! You’ve never come to see me do anything,” he said angrily. Jenny placed a hand on John’s shoulder. “That’s true! John, you always miss family activities. The last time we had a family outing was five months ago! And I’m exhausted from all the housework.” As he drank his coffee, John reflected on his life. He had so much to be thankful for: a successful business, a harmonious family and a lovely home. In fact, he had everything he had ever wanted, but he knew something was wrong. He had always believed that with hard work, he could make his family happy. But he realized he was failing. He was spending more time at work and less time at home. He was working in the office until late in the evening and even during weekends. When at home, he was talking on the phone with his clients or sitting in front of the computer reading or writing emails. He was neglecting his family. He hadn’t taken his wife to a nice restaurant for months. Kevin was passionate about music, but John couldn’t remember the last time he saw Kevin perform at a school concert. Sophie was growing up so fast and John had even missed her last birthday party. John realized he had become an absent husband and an absent father. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Later that day, John went to work, determined to make some changes. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Soon, John felt a big improvement in his life and work. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 8．（23-24高二上·贵州贵阳·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Helen was putting her dress on. It was a bit small, but she could manage. She would be getting the rent with her father, Mr. Resnick, today. Helen didn’t often get to spend time with her father these days. He was always working, and always trying to make enough money to support the family. The rent was what kept them going during the Depression (经济大萧条). When Helen worried about her too-tight dress, other children had to worry about food or even their homes. The houses were not far, and three families lived there. Everything went smoothly at the first two apartments, but both Helen and her father were worried about the third. The Katz family never had enough money, and it had become harder and harder to accept their rent, even though her father had lowered it. Mrs. Katz opened the door when Helen’s father knocked. “Her eyes were red—from crying,” Helen thought. “Good afternoon, Mr. Resnick,” she said, hands nervously smoothing her gray dress. “How are you, Mrs. Katz?” he asked. “We’re. we’re getting by (勉强度日),” she said, but she wouldn’t meet his eyes or even Helen’s. “You’re here for the rent.” “Yes, Mrs. Katz, I’m afraid so.” “Please come in.” Inside of the apartment, Mr. Katz and the two children were sitting at a table, waiting for Mr. Resnick. “They all have such thin faces!” Helen thought. She was embarrassed, suddenly, by her own round cheeks and strong body. Mrs. Katz gave Helen’s father the money. He thanked her and turned to go. “Mr. Resnick?” Mrs. Katz said before they could leave. He turned to look at her. In a shaking voice she told him, “We haven’t eaten in two days.” 注意：1. 续写词数应为120词左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答； 3. 写作提示：第一段可写出Helen和她父亲听到消息后的反应；第二段可写出Helen买东西及众人的反应。 Two days! Helen couldn’t imagine such a thing. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ “Yes, Dad,” she answered and started running on the way to the store. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考答案 1． I took the phone, and then the voice of the worker who had helped us at the subwaystation came from it. He explained to me that, the kind girl, Beatrice, had picked up my bag on the subway and that she was sorry for not notifying the Lost and Found office in time. I felt infinitely grateful to him and the girl. When I hung up the phone, I circled with excitement. When my father soon fetched the bag, the birthday dinner was ready, and our family was seated at the desk, where we ate, talking and laughing. After dinner, we began to dance to the music. The house was full of harmony and warmth. My family and I were dancing happily when someone knocked at the door. Grandma stopped dancing and went to open the door. She said “It must be a neighbor who wants to give you a gift, Lily.” In a moment, a beautiful girl entered the house with a bunch of flowers. “Happy birthday, Lily.” said she, my best friend, Beatrice. I warmly welcomed her. When she saw the bag on the sofa, she screamed, “The bag looks like the one I picked up this morning.” We confirmed it and thought it was a coincidence. I said with gratitude, “Thanks, Beatrice. Kindness is always around us.” 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，主要讲述了作者和父母坐地铁去祖父母家过生日时，不小心把自己的包遗落在地铁上，作者很伤心，当他们向地铁工作人员求助时，也没有获得结果，正当作者绝望时，工作人员告诉作者一位叫做Beatrice的女孩找到了她的包，并寄回给她，后来发现Beatrice就是作者在悉尼最好的朋友。 【要点详解】1. 段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“我接过电话，电话里传来了在地铁站帮助我们的工作人员的声音。”可知，第一段可描写工作人员告诉作者找到了她的包，并开心举行生日聚会。 ②由第二段首句内容“我和家人正高兴地跳舞，这时有人敲门。”可知，第二段可描写作者的朋友Beatrice 来给作者过生日，发现自己捡到的包就是作者的。 2. 续写线索：坐地铁——遗失包——找工作人员帮助未果——被人捡到寄回——发现找到包的是自己最好的朋友 3. 词汇激活 行为类 ①通知：notify/inform ②进入：enter/step in ③尖叫：scream/yelp 情绪类 ①感激的：grateful/appreciative ②善良：kindness/goodness 【高分句型1】He explained to me that, the kind girl, Beatrice, had picked up my bag on the subway and that she was sorry for not notifying the Lost and Found office in time. （运用了that引导的的宾语从句） 【高分句型2】It must be a neighbor who wants to give you a gift, Lily.（运用了who引导的定语从句） 2．Possible version: Without hesitation, James took action immediately. Well aware that he stood a better chance of being found if he stayed, James decided to stop moving around and seek shelter nearby from the freezing wind and snow. Using his large skis, he managed to built a snow cave and dug out a hole in the middle. It didnt take long before he finished gathering some fallen branches and put them inside like a blanket. While huddling in the cave, hunger and thirst crept over him again, making him dizzy and weak. He had no choice but to eat snow so his body wouldn’t lose too much water and energy. Two days later, James saw several figures approaching his shelter. He couldn’t help crying out “I’m here!” at the top of his lungs when he spotted it was his father and two other rescuers who were searching for him. Struggling to his feet, Jamed staggered towards them and threw himself into his father’s arms. To their great relief, James was eventually rescued and fortunately, in a good condition. Meanwhile, this narrow escape taught James the unpredictable force of nature and the significance of courage and intelligence in face of danger. 【写作分析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。本文以人物为线索展开。詹姆斯·布拉德利滑雪时，一场猛烈的暴风雪席卷了这个地区。由于看不清楚，他不小心拐出了小路，迷了路。他不得不运用各种生存技能来帮助自己。 【要点详解】1.段落续写 ①由第一段句首内容“詹姆斯毫不犹豫地立即采取了行动。”可知，第一段可以描写詹姆斯野外生存时采取的措施。 ②由第二段句首内容“两天后，詹姆斯看到几个人影走近他的庇护所。”可知，第二段可以描写詹姆斯看到几个人影走近他的庇护所后的反应和感受。 2.续写线索：立即行动—建庇护所—来人—得救—感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①决定：decide/ determine ②停止：stop/ cease ③寻找：seek/ look for 情绪类 ①幸运地：fortunately/ luckily ②勇气：courage/ nerve 【高分句型1】Using his large skis, he managed to built a snow cave and dug out a hole in the middle. ( 运用了现在分词Using作状语) 【高分句型2】He couldn’t help crying out “I’m here!” at the top of his lungs when he spotted it was his father and two other rescuers who were searching for him.( 运用了when引导的时间状语从句、who引导的定语从句) 【高分句型3】Struggling to his feet, Jamed staggered towards them and threw himself into his father’s arms. (运用了现在分词Struggling作状语) 3．One possible version: The day of the competition arrived, and my heart was racing as I displayed my painting among the others. I felt a mix of excitement and nervousness as I saw the diverse and impressive artworks surrounding mine. Each piece told a unique story, but I knew that my painting held a special place in my heart, embodying not only my artistic expression but also my family’s journey and cultural heritage. As the judges began to evaluate the paintings, I closed my eyes and whispered a silent prayer, hoping that my message would resonate with those who viewed it. Finally, the head judge announced that I won! After the competition, I walked up to my art teacher, filled with a mix of gratitude and pride. She smiled warmly at me and said, “Congratulations! You’ve captured the essence of ‘Migration’ beautifully.” Her words filled me with a sense of validation and accomplishment. I knew that I had succeeded in sharing a piece of myself with the world. The journey of creating and exhibiting my painting had not only honed my artistic skills but had also deepened my connection to my roots. As I thanked my teacher for her guidance and support, I realized that taking that leap of faith had led me to a new level of artistic fulfillment and self-discovery. 【写作分析】本文以事件为线索展开，讲述了作者在高中时参加绘画比赛的经历。起初，作者犹豫不决，但在美术老师表达肯定和信心后，决定以“移民”为主题创作一幅代表家人从墨西哥到美国旅程的作品。作者投入了心血和情感，并将自己的家庭记忆和经历融入到作品中。最终，作者完成了这幅有意义的画作，展现了家人的旅程和自己的成长。 【要点详解】1. 段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“比赛的日子到了，当我把我的画作和其他人一起展示时，我的心怦怦直跳。”可知，第一段可描写作者看到其他人的画作的感受，对自己的画作的信心，以及评委们评价这些画作，作者成功获奖。 ②由第二段首句内容“比赛结束后，我走向我的美术老师，心中充满了感激和自豪。”可知，第二段可描写美术老师向作者表示祝贺和肯定，以及作者对这次完成画作参赛的感悟。 2. 续写线索：比赛日来临——作者和其他人画作的情况——评委宣布作者获奖——比赛结束——美术老师祝贺和肯定——作者参赛的感悟 3. 词汇激活 行为类 ①体现：embody/reflect/represent ②评价：evaluate/assess ③宣布：announce/declare ④展示：exhibit/display ⑤意识到：realize/recognize 情绪类 ①兴奋：excitement/thrill ②紧张：nervousness/tension [高分句型1] Each piece told a unique story, but I knew that my painting held a special place in my heart, embodying not only my artistic expression but also my family’s journey and cultural heritage. (that引导宾语从句、现在分词短语embodying…作状语) [高分句型2] As the judges began to evaluate the paintings, I closed my eyes and whispered a silent prayer, hoping that my message would resonate with those who viewed it. (As引导时间状语从句、现在分词短语hoping…作状语、that引导宾语从句、who引导限制性定语从句) 4．One possible version: Suddenly, a black dog came into the sight of a group of rescuers. It was Saul! “The dog was jumping up and down and turning around in circles,” said Dennis Haack. “I think this dog was trying to signal to us that we should follow him to his owner.” Surprisingly, Saul led the searchers more than 200 yards directly to the place where his owner lay. Thanks to the dog, the rescuers found him before he had to spend a second night in pain in the woods, just seven hours after he first called for help. “It was the real-life Lassie scenario that played out in the woods,” Dennis Haack added. “We always knew dogs were the most loyal companions around, but this story reminds us that they can really save lives, too.” The hiking victim was put into a helicopter. He was rushed to the nearest hospital for treatment. After giving him a thorough examination, the doctors said he had not received life-threatening injuries. According to a report about the event, Saul, the hero dog, was given a well-deserved dinner and is being cared for by a local animal shelter while his owner recovers in the hospital. 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了内华达州的一名徒步旅行者徒步旅行过程中从70英尺高的路堤上摔了下来受了重伤，在搜救工作正在艰难进行之时，一只黑狗出现了，并帮助救援人员完成搜救工作，最后徒步者成功获救，黑狗也得到了奖励。 【要点详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“突然，一只黑狗进入了一群救援人员的视线。”可知，第一段可描写黑狗帮助救援的过程和结果。 ②由第二段首句内容“徒步旅行的受害者被送上了一架直升机。”可知，第二段可描写徒步受害者的治疗情况和黑狗的情况。 2.续写线索：黑狗出现——帮助救援——救援成功——充满感激——救助后续——得到奖励 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①跳跃：jump/skip/leap ②示意：signal/hint ③发现：find/discover 情绪类 ①令人惊讶地：Surprisingly/amazingly ②忠诚的：loyal/devoted 【高分句型1】Surprisingly, Saul led the searchers more than 200 yards directly to the place where his owner lay.(运用了关系副词where引导的限制性定语从句) 【高分句型2】“It was the real-life Lassie scenario that played out in the woods,” Dennis Haack added.(运用了强调句式) 5．One possible version: The next day, they did just that. A big group of teenagers stepped into Brody’s classroom and announced they were there to sign his yearbook. They filled the pages with phone numbers, words of encouragement, and offers of friendship. Brody’s yearbook collected more than 100 signatures. One of the notes to Brody Ridder read, “Brody! I know we don’t know you, but I know you are the coolest kid! If you ever need anything, call your senior friends! ” Not surprisingly, Brody’s classmates also reached out to him. When they saw the cool upper classmen signing his yearbook, they wanted to sign it too! You can imagine how joyful Brody was. “It just made me feel better as a person,” he said. “I don’t know how to explain it. It just makes me feel better on the inside.” Meanwhile, Brody’s mom says she was deeply touched by the community support, and feels encouraged by these teens’ actions. “It made me feel like there’s hope for the school, there’s hope for humanity and there`re a lot of good kids in this world.” she said. 【写作分析】本文以“签名”为线索展开，讲述了六年级的布罗迪因没有几个朋友在他的毕业年鉴上签名，感到忧伤，他的妈妈把这件事分享给了布罗迪学校学生的家长，引起全城的关注，大家热心帮忙，帮他签署年鉴，给予鼓励，他的同学们也纷纷伸出援手，母子二人深受感动。 【要点详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“第二天，他们就这么做了。”可知，第一段可描写从网上知道消息的高年级朋友纷纷来给他签名，布罗迪收到了大量的签名以及鼓励的话语。 ②由第二段首句内容“毫不奇怪，布罗迪的同学们也向他伸出了援手。”可知，第二段可描写布罗迪的同学们也都来签名，他和妈妈都深受感动。 2.续写线索：没有人签名——感到失望——妈妈在网上发帖——高年级朋友纷纷帮忙——同学们签名——深受感动——感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①进入：step into/enter ②写着：read/say ③看见：see/notice 情绪类 ①感动的：touched/moved ②受到鼓舞的：encouraged/inspired 【高分句型1】A big group of teenagers stepped into Brody’s classroom and announced they were there to sign his yearbook.(运用了省略that的宾语从句) 【高分句型2】When they saw the cool upper classmen signing his yearbook, they wanted to sign it too!(运用了when引导的时间状语从句) 6．One possible version: At this time, my grandfather stepped between me and my father. “Calm down, both of you, OK?” My grandfather looked at my father. “Easy, son! I remember when you were his age, you said that you wanted to be a professional football player.” It was said that my grandfather wanted my father to be an engineer! “I just wanted you to be happy, so I advised you to think carefully,” my grandfather added. “You found the career that suits your talents. Your son and I are proud of you.” And then I said, “Of course, but I have different talents, too.” The relaxed atmosphere gradually eased off. Maybe I should try to take father’s advice and think carefully before jumping in with both feet? If I go to university and play music at the same time, I will have two options for my future. And playing in a band will help me make lots of new friends at university. We are all happy. Like father, like son. I found that communication is important and we should put our feet into parent’s shoes. 【写作分析】本文以事件为线索展开，讲述了作者与父亲之间在餐桌上因为未来职业选择产生了争执，作者不打算上大学，而是想专注于音乐事业，自己创建一个乐队。父亲坚持认为作者应该成为一名教师，因为他自己是教授，并认为教师可以改变学生的生活。然而，作者对教育工作不感兴趣，他梦想着在工作室工作，成为一名乐队主唱。尽管作者尊重老师这个职业，但他认为人应该坚持追求自己热爱的事业。 【要点详解】1. 段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“这时，祖父站在我和父亲之间”可知，第一段可描写祖父劝诫作者和父亲两人冷静下来，以及祖父分享父亲之前选择职业的经历开导父亲。 ②由第二段首句内容“轻松的气氛逐渐缓和下来”可知，第二段可描写作者想明白应该慎重考虑自己的职业选择，以及作者通过这件事明白沟通交流的重要性。 2. 续写线索：祖父介入——祖父让两人冷静——祖父分享往事——气氛缓和——作者重新考虑——作者的感悟 3. 词汇激活 行为类 ①记起：remember/recall ②考虑：think/meditate ③适合：suit/match ④接受：take/accept 情绪类 ①冷静下来：calm down/cool off ②开心的：happy/glad/delighted [高分句型1] I remember when you were his age, you said that you wanted to be a professional football player. (that引导名词性从句作remember的宾语并被省略、when引导时间状语从句、that引导名词性从句作said的宾语) [高分句型2] It was said that my grandfather wanted my father to be an engineer! (that引导名词性从句作真正的主语) [高分句型3] You found the career that suits your talents. (that引导限制性定语从句) 7． Later that day, John went to work, determined to make some changes. He knew that it was time to reassess his life, make his family his number one priority, and be a more caring husband and father. He informed his staff and clients that from then on, he would be working during office hours only. He also promised himself that he would participate in all activities involving his children and share household tasks with his wife. Indeed, the coming weekend, after helping Jenny with the shopping, he would take his family to the local park for a day out. Soon, John felt a big improvement in his life and work. By making changes, he found the right work -life balance to be both effective at work and happy at home. Amazingly, by reducing the amount of time spent on work, John had become much more enthusiastic about his job and more focused on what needed to be done. The result was improved work efficiency and increased productivity. Besides, as John spent more time at home, the family had grown closer together. Jenny was less tired than before, his relationship with Kevin was improving, and he was a proud father at Sophie’s birthday party! To his satisfaction, John had finally discovered the secret to happiness. 【写作分析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。本文以人物为线索展开。约翰走进餐厅时，他的妻子珍妮和两个孩子凯文和索菲正坐在桌旁。约翰坐下时，气氛很冷淡。妻子和儿子的话让约翰反思自己的生活方式，似乎自己只顾工作，错过了很多生活的美好。 【要点详解】1.段落续写 ①由第一段句首内容“那天晚些时候，约翰去上班，决心做出一些改变。”可知，第一段可以描写约翰具体的改变的做法。 ②由第二段句首内容“很快，约翰感到他的生活和工作都有了很大的改善。”可知，第二段可以描写约翰改变生活方式的结果。 2.续写线索：决心改变——实施改变——改善——工作与生活的平衡——幸福 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①使得：make/ let/ have ②告知：inform/ tell ③参与：participate in/ engage in 情绪类 ①高兴的：happy/ joyful/ delighted ②令人惊讶的：amazingly/ surprisingly 【高分句型1】He informed his staff and clients that from then on, he would be working during office hours only. ( 运用了that引导的宾语从句) 【高分句型2】Indeed, the coming weekend, after helping Jenny with the shopping, he would take his family to the local park for a day out. ( 运用了动名词helping作宾语) 【高分句型3】Amazingly, by reducing the amount of time spent on work, John had become much more enthusiastic about his job and more focused on what needed to be done. (运用了动名词reducing作宾语、what引导的宾语从句) 8．One possible version: Two days! Helen couldn’t imagine such a thing. Her stomach ached just to think of it. Mr. Resnick asked “Mr. Katz, is that true?” Mr. Katz didn’t answer but nodded. Without a word, Helen’s father put all of the Katz’s rent money back on the table. Then he seriously counted out two dollars in coins. “Helen,” he said, “I want you to go down to the store and buy food and bring it right back here.” “Yes, Dad,” she answered and started running on the way to the store. Holding the coins tightly, Helen arrived at the store. As she chose tasty and good foods, bread, flour, beans…, she suddenly realized two dollars bought such a lot! Finally, when she carried all the food back to the house, everyone’s eyes flew to her, and her father smiled. Helen laughed with joy, too. Though life might be harder, she knew Dad and she did a good job. 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了海伦和父亲住在一起，当海伦担心她的衣服太紧时，其他孩子不得不担心食物甚至他们的家。这天第三家的住户来交房租，当父亲得知了他们的困境后，没有收房租，还让海伦给他们买了食物。 【要点详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“两天!海伦无法想象这样的事情”可知，第一段可描写海伦和她父亲听到消息后的反应。 ②由第二段首句内容“‘好的爸爸’她回答，然后开始向商店跑去”可知，第二段可描写海伦买东西及众人的反应。 2.续写线索：父亲归还房租——让海伦去买食物——买回食物——众人感谢——父女感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①想到：think of/recall ②回答：answer/reply ③到达：arrive at/reach 情绪类 ①艰难：hard/tough ②快乐：joy/happiness [高分句型1] Holding the coins tightly, Helen arrived at the store. (运用了现在分词作状语) [高分句型2] Finally, when she carried all the food back to the house, everyone’s eyes flew to her, and her father smiled. (运用了when引导时间状语从句) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 高二英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练 技巧15 用微续写夯实写作基础 读后续写是英语高考试卷中的写作新题型，要求学生在有限的时间内，根据阅读材料及每段所给的开头句，续写两段文字，且字数限制在150左右。这就要求学生在阅读时准确把握文章情节线和情感线，进行写作时，要思路清晰，前后呼应，逻辑连贯。新高考全国卷读后续写评分标准中明确指出，教师阅卷时应考虑到上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性，以及续写内容与原文情境的融洽度。因此，读后续写命题看似开放，但若没有经过系统指导，学生可能会天马行空，写作思路容易偏离主线。为此，教师需要在两个方面进行深入探究：第一，培养学生在有限的时间内高效归纳故事线，建立写作思维逻辑和输出正向价值观的能力；第二，帮助学生摆脱英语写作固有的死记硬背套路，进行合理想象和创新。“微续写”通过故事评议和片段式续写等微写作形式，与读后续写相融合，从而达到提高学生读后续写能力的目的。 “微续写”的架构 “微续写”的特点是从“微”入手，“微用时”“微成篇”“微情节”。“微用时”要求学生在10~15分钟内完成微型续写任务；“微成篇”要求续写篇幅短小精悍，点明故事情节即可；“微情节”要求故事情节不得超过四点，这是根据高考读后续写题型的字数限制设定的。构思英语微续写的情节时，‌可以关注以下要点：‌ ‌确定语篇主旨‌：‌通过阅读前文和段首句，‌明确文章的核心或主题，‌确保续写内容围绕这一主旨展开，‌传递正能量，‌体现积极价值观。‌‌ ‌构思情节要点‌：‌确定续写内容的概要，‌包括每段的三个要点：‌拓展部分、‌衔接部分和结局部分。‌确保这些要点与主旨紧密相连，‌构成完整的故事情节。‌‌ ‌注重情节发展‌：‌在续写过程中，‌注重情节的起伏和转折，‌使故事发展有逻辑性，‌同时保持与给定材料的衔接，‌确保情节和结构的完整性。‌‌ ‌运用语言技巧‌：‌在续写时，‌运用丰富的词汇、‌恰当的句型和语法结构，‌使表达清晰、‌流畅，‌增强文章的表现力。‌‌ [微技巧示例]‌ 示例1：基于情节的关键点描绘‌‌ ‌环境‌：‌北极熊继续攻击营地。‌ ‌心理‌：‌我们的心理即将崩溃。‌ ‌动作‌：‌我们不知所措。‌ 句型：‌As/With +恶化的情况, sb. was on the edge of breaking down, totally at a loss what to do. 示例：‌As the bear was trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws for the second time, we were on the edge of breaking down, totally at a loss what to do. 这个示例展示了如何在微续写中构建激化矛盾的情节，‌包括环境、‌心理和动作的描写，‌以及相应的句型结构。 示例2：基于主题的情节拓展‌‌ 主题一：‌自我成长与探索 ‌前文‌：‌ Lisa had always been shy and lacked confidence. She often avoided social situations and felt uncomfortable in large groups. One day, her friend invited her to join a public speaking club. ‌微续写‌：‌ Lisa was hesitant but decided to take the challenge. At the first meeting, she felt nervous and barely spoke. However, with the encouragement of her friends and the club's mentor, she started practicing regularly. Over time, she noticed her confidence growing. She even won a small speaking contest within the club. Realizing her potential, Lisa continued to push herself out of her comfort zone and eventually became a confident and outgoing person. 主题二：‌友情与陪伴 ‌前文‌：‌ Jack and Emily had been friends since childhood. They had shared countless adventures and secrets together. When Jack's family moved to another city, they promised to stay in touch. ‌微续写‌：‌ Years passed, and their lives took different paths. Jack focused on his career while Emily pursued her passion for art. Despite the distance and busy schedules, they made sure to call each other every week. One day, Emily faced a major setback in her career and felt lost. Jack, who had just finished a successful project, immediately took a break and drove to her city. They spent days walking, talking, and reminiscing about old times. With Jack's support, Emily found the courage to pursue her dreams again, and their bond grew stronger. 主题三：‌梦想与追求 ‌前文‌：‌ Sara had always dreamed of becoming a professional photographer. She spent hours every day capturing the beauty of nature and people around her. However, her family expected her to pursue a more stable career. ‌微续写‌：‌ Sara faced immense pressure from her family but couldn't ignore her passion. She decided to take a leap of faith and enrolled in a photography course. She worked hard, learning new techniques and experimenting with different styles. Her dedication paid off when she won a local photography contest. The recognition gave her the confidence to pursue her dream full-time. Eventually, her unique perspective and skill landed her a job with a renowned travel magazine, proving to her family that dreams, when pursued with determination, can lead to success. 这些微续写展示了不同情节类型的发展，‌包括自我成长、‌友情陪伴，‌以及追求梦想的过程。‌每个示例都围绕一个核心主题展开，‌通过具体的事件和细节来丰富故事情节。‌ 基于高考试题语篇的“微续写”应用示例 “微续写”应用实践分为初期培训阶段和常规练习阶段。在初期培训阶段，教师引导学生熟悉该模式的具体流程，之后便进入常规练习阶段，即学生自行标注文章“评议”要素，并独立补充学案框架内的情节点，以促成一个既符合原文情感线又具有完整情节线的故事。 “微续写”的初期培训阶段是教师教授阶段。教师通过例题细致生动地向学生展示该模式的流程及形式。现以2022年新高考全国卷的读后续写为例进行说明。该文章讲述了一名教师—“我”与学生的故事。在大型越野赛跑那天，“我”发现患有脑疾的大卫独自一人闷闷不乐，因为教练担心大卫被同学嘲笑而暗示其弃赛。“我”看出了大卫内心的渴望，并鼓励他完成比赛。教学初期分为两部分。教师首先带着学生读，感悟作者的情感走向和文章主旨；然后指导学生写，根据所给句子延伸出故事的情节线，尤其要限制学生每段所写的情节点。 （一）读中感知情感线 教师先带领学生进行评议练习，领会如何评议文章的情感表达。 Expression 1: It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students were warming up and walking the route through thick evergreen forest. Expression 2: What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! 学生从这一组对比中感受到第一种表达是对故事情节的具体介绍，而第二种表达是作者自我情感的抒发。之后，教师要求学生完成该读后续写的阅读任务，并勾画出其认为重要的“评议”环节，随后教师进行补充和总结，并与学生一同分析故事的情感走向（如图所示）。 在教师的引导下，学生标出文章细节点，即评议部分：“David’s usual big toothy smile was absent today ”“David had a brain disease... ”“David had not missed a single practice... ”以及“... I was proud of his strong determination”。通过这些评议要素可知，大卫原本乐观，且身残志坚。从“The coach thought he was doing the right thing ”可知，教练好心办了坏事，伤害了大卫的自尊心。这些重要情感的总结为学生后面的续写奠定了准确的情感基础。 （二）写中延伸情节线 到了“微续写”环节，教师要求学生品读续写所给的句子，画出其认为重要的表达或意象，并引导学生想象接下来会发生什么样的故事情节。规定学生每段续写情节不得超过两个，并且用一个精练的句子描述每个情节。这样，一段简短的“微续写”篇章便呈现了出来。 续写部分第一段给出的句子是“We sat down next to each other，but David wouldn’t look at me. ”教师提 问：“What can you see from this sentence? ”学生很容易点出该句话的重要情节—作者和大卫肩并肩坐在了一起。 续写部分第二段所给句子是“I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ”教师再次提问相同问题，学生可点出“大卫起身走向了起跑线，加入了比赛”这一重要情节。这样师生可以总结出：续写部分第一段应写在我们坐下后，我对大卫进行了鼓励，且大卫被我说服了。第二段则应写大卫加入并完成了比赛。联系大卫身残志坚的品质，故事的结尾应是对大卫美好品质的褒奖与弘扬。 在分析完情节走向后，教师引领学生完成情节点： 第一段：情节1，我鼓励大卫；情节2，大卫备受鼓舞，同意参赛。 第二段：情节1，大卫坚持跑完了比赛；情节2，对大卫美好品质的弘扬。 其中第一段的最后一个情节应既承接上文，又引出第二段的首句。这样，一个完整的情节线便生成了（如图所示）。 完成“微续写”后，教师引领学生将自己的微篇章故事情节一一对应故事线的各个环节（如图所示）。 教师最后向学生呈现如图所示的“微续写”图示，这也是进入常规训练阶段后的“微续写”学案，能够形成写作范式，帮助学生规范平时的“微续写”写作训练，以培养学生精准把握情感线、合理延伸情节线的能力。进入常规练习阶段后，学生已经熟悉了“微续写”模式的具体流程，可以自行实施“读”和“写”。教师可以安排学生10~15分钟完成“微续写”任务，之后再对学生的成果进行点拨。 “微续写”能有效帮助学生高效归纳文章情感主旨，合理延伸故事情节。在教学实践中，教师应明确“微续写”故事情节的结尾积极向上，落实立德树人要求；在强化“微续写”写作技能的同时，也要促使学生加强词汇、语法结构等语言知识的积累；限制“微续写”情节数量并非限制学生的想象，而是培养学生更加准确精炼地把握文章的核心思想。 1．（23-24高二上·辽宁辽阳·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文 Last Sunday morning, my parents and I were going on a vacation in Sydney, where my grandparents lived, to celebrate my birthday. Actually, celebrating my birthday in my grandparents’ home had been a family tradition. As a result, their neighbors, warm-hearted and friendly, were familiar with me. Sometimes, they even came to the house and brought me birthday gifts in person. We took the subway there as usual. When we got off the subway, I found I had lost my bag. The bag was memorable to me because it was given by my parents when I became a senior high school student. It also had some valuable items inside, including an expensive watch a birthday gift from my grandparents. I couldn’t help but cry because the bag meant so much to me.“What’s the matter. Lily?” my mom asked. I told her that I might leave the bag on the subway. Hearing that, she comforted me and said. “We have plenty of time. Let’s talk to the staff (工作人员).” Instantly, my parents reported the situation to the staff at the subway station. A kind worker smiled to me and said. “If someone found it, they would hand it in.” He asked us to wait patiently for a while, and then he called for help．After half an hour, the worker didn’t give us any information. I started to become anxious and lose hope. My father said. “No news is good news.”However, the worker finally apologized to us and let us wait for the information on the recovery of the missing bag at home. We had to go to my grandparents’ house first. In the afternoon, while I, together with my grandparents and my father, was preparing for a birthday party, I heard my mother talking to someone on the phone about my lost bag. My heart was beating violently, and I was expecting something extraordinary to happen. Sure enough, my mother got me to answer the phone, “Good news, Lily. The call is just for you, from the kind worker. He said a girl called Beatrice had sent the bag back.” I felt amazed that the girl’s name is the same as my friend’s in Sydney. 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 I took the phone, and then the voice of the worker who had helped us at the subwaystation came from it. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ My family and I were dancing happily when someone knocked at the door. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．（23-24高二下·江西上饶·开学考试）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 James Bradley had developed a strong passion for skiing. On a freezing cold Sunday in 2019, James, then a 16-year-old boy, headed to Aspen Mountain with his father to go skiing. They took a cable car to the top of the mountain and conquered the most challenging part of the long trail. Afterwards, they decided to follow different trails to go down the mountain respectively. That was when everything started to veer off course. In the late afternoon, after finishing the final run through the side trial, his father arrived at the parking lot. Anxiously, he had waited here for his son for several hours. However, James never showed up. It turned out that a fierce snowstorm had swept into the area as James was on his way down. Unable to see far and clearly, he turned off the path by accident and got lost. The dreadful snowstorm coupled with strong winds gained strength and enveloped everything, blocking his way back to the ski trails. Before long, James slid down the mountain slope on his skis and stopped at the bottom of the mountain in the valley. Thanks to the thick snow, James didn’t get hurt and the winds weren’t as strong in the valley as they were up on the mountain. Looking around, he saw nothing but the branches of trees and the pure white snow. James had no idea where he was. Worse still, the sun began to sink and he was getting colder by the minute. Most worrisome of all was that he didn’t have any food or water with him, let alone his mobile phone or other supplies. Standing alone in the wild and holding his large skis, cold and thirst, he couldn’t help thinking about the survival show Man vs. Wild that he used to watch. In the show, Bear Grylls was abandoned in a wild area like this and had to help himself out by using all sorts of survival skills. Yes! It was time to put the tips he had learned to use. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Without hesitation, James took action immediately. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Two days later, James saw several figures approaching his shelter. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．（23-24高二上·河北·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was in high school, my art teacher asked me to participate in a regional painting competition. I hesitated at first. Although I loved art, I had always painted for myself, not for contests or recognition. My family, who had moved from Mexico, encouraged me to express our culture through my art, but I was unsure about exposing my work to the public. Painting was a personal journey for me, a way to connect with my roots and express my emotions. But my teacher saw something in my paintings that I hadn’t. She said, “Your work tells a story, a vibrant narrative of your heritage and dreams. You should share it with the world.” Motivated by her confidence in me, I decided to take the leap. I chose the theme of ‘Migration’ for my painting. It was a tribute to my family’s journey from Mexico to the United States, a blend of colors and emotions depicting both the struggles and hopes of moving to a new land. I poured my heart into that canvas, each stroke representing a piece of my story. As I worked, I found myself lost in the memories and experiences of my family. The more I painted, the more I understood the sacrifices they had made for me. My doubts turned into determination. I wanted this painting not just to be seen but to be felt. I stayed up late for several nights, perfecting every detail, ensuring that every color and every line conveyed the emotions I felt so deeply. When I finally finished, I was no longer concerned about winning. The painting was a part of me, a representation of my family’s journey and my growth as an artist. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The day of the competition arrived, and my heart was racing as I displayed my painting among the others. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ After the competition, I walked up to my art teacher, filled with a mix of gratitude and pride. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．（22-23高二上·全国·期中）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 If you want to hike alone in the woods, it’s always a good deal to bring along your best friend — the dog. A hiker in Nevada recently learned that lesson the hard way. A 53-year-old man was hiking in the woods in Nevada County on the night of July 12 when he fell down a 70-foot embankment (路堤). He was badly injured, breaking his hip and ribs, but he managed to drag himself to a spot with cell service and call for help. After getting cellphone reception, the wounded hiker, whose name was not released by authorities, phoned first responders at noon the following day asking for help and telling them about his broken bones. The man then covered himself in a camouflage tarp (伪装油布) and waited for help to arrive. His loyal friend, Saul, waited by his side. Upon receiving the man’s emergency call, the California Department of Forestry and Fire Protection enlisted the help of the nonprofit Nevada County Sheriff’s Search and Rescue to locate and rescue the man. Twenty-five members of the Nevada County Sheriff’s Search and Rescue organization set out to find the hiker, whose last GPS location was used to get to the general neighborhood, but with miles of huge wilderness around them, they worried it would take a long time to find him. At about 7 p. m. on July 13, the search was still going on. “Having searching for the man for over seven hours, we were tired out and felt a bit disappointed,” said Dennis Haack, leader of the Search and Rescue team, “But I do put a lot of faith in our searchers because they’re extremely good at what they do.” 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Suddenly, a black dog came into the sight of a group of rescuers. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The hiking victim was put into a helicopter. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．（22-23高二上·全国·开学考试）阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It pays to have friends in “high” places! Last year, Brody Ridder of Westminster, Colorado changed schools because hed was being bullied(霸凌). Sadly, the problem didn’t go away at his new school, The Academy of Charter Schools. When the school yearbook came out at the end of his sixth grade year, no one in his class wanted to sign his book. Brody says he approached several classmates to ask them to sign, but they refused. The few who did sign only wrote down their names carelessly with no personal notes for Brody. Except for a couple of teachers’ notes, his pages were completely blank. Greatly disappointed, Brody sat down and wrote in the book himself. ”Hope you make some more friends.—Brody Ridder,“ he wrote. Mom Cassandra Ridder was sad indeed when she read the note and heard how cruelly he’d been treated. She took a picture of the note and shared it online for parents of students at Brody’s school. She had no idea it would lead to discussions all over town! Parents were so sad to read Brody’s note to himself that they encouraged their children to reach out to the boy the next day. Rising senior Simone Lightfoot was one of the teenagers who heard the sixth grader’s story, and she understood his embarrassment. She and other high school students spent hours talking about Brody, coming up with a plan to help lift his spirits and make him feel less alone. ”We all just started planning that the next day we were going to go and sign this kid’s yearbook,“ said Logan South, another rising senior. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The next day, they did just that. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Not surprisingly, Brody’s classmates also reached out to him. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6．（23-24高二上·全国·阶段练习）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 “Hey, how are you doing, son?” My father smiled to me. “Not bad, dad, but I’ve decided not to go to university. I want to focus on my music career,” I replied. It would be a harmonious dinner if there was no argument interrupting us. As you know, my father insisted that I should be a teacher all the time because he was a professor while I would like to create a band in the rest of my life. My father got angry, raising his voice: “You can’t be serious. Why not being a teacher? You can help students and change their lives.” But I’m not interested in education at all. I just want to work in a studio, not a school. However, my dad thought that a band is not career, even not a job. If I were a lead singer of my band, I would be very happy. I will have new friends, new life, new environment and everything new. “It’s so boring to be a teacher for me, I can’t go to different countries, and I can’t wear popular clothes even!” I couldn’t control myself when I thought about it. I know teachers are great. They set an example for me, giving me a lot of care and help when I was young. I have never denied this profession, but it is not my dream. Supposing that our human society intends to acquire long-term prosperity, it is advisable for us to do what we really love. Only in this way, can we work productively, efficiently and effectively. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 At this time, my grandfather stepped between me and my father. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The relaxed atmosphere gradually eased off. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 7．（23-24高二上·安徽宣城·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Finding happiness in life When John walked into the dining room in the morning, his wife Jenny and his two children, Kevin and Sophie, were sitting at the table. The atmosphere was frosty as John sat down. Sophie, who was only five years old, gave her father a weak smile. Kevin, his teenage son, didn’t look up from his food. Jenny looked at him silently with her arms folded across her chest. “OK,” John began, “I’m sorry. I know I let everyone down yesterday.” Kevin looked accusingly at his father. “You missed my music performance at school again! You’ve never come to see me do anything,” he said angrily. Jenny placed a hand on John’s shoulder. “That’s true! John, you always miss family activities. The last time we had a family outing was five months ago! And I’m exhausted from all the housework.” As he drank his coffee, John reflected on his life. He had so much to be thankful for: a successful business, a harmonious family and a lovely home. In fact, he had everything he had ever wanted, but he knew something was wrong. He had always believed that with hard work, he could make his family happy. But he realized he was failing. He was spending more time at work and less time at home. He was working in the office until late in the evening and even during weekends. When at home, he was talking on the phone with his clients or sitting in front of the computer reading or writing emails. He was neglecting his family. He hadn’t taken his wife to a nice restaurant for months. Kevin was passionate about music, but John couldn’t remember the last time he saw Kevin perform at a school concert. Sophie was growing up so fast and John had even missed her last birthday party. John realized he had become an absent husband and an absent father. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Later that day, John went to work, determined to make some changes. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Soon, John felt a big improvement in his life and work. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 8．（23-24高二上·贵州贵阳·期末）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Helen was putting her dress on. It was a bit small, but she could manage. She would be getting the rent with her father, Mr. Resnick, today. Helen didn’t often get to spend time with her father these days. He was always working, and always trying to make enough money to support the family. The rent was what kept them going during the Depression (经济大萧条). When Helen worried about her too-tight dress, other children had to worry about food or even their homes. The houses were not far, and three families lived there. Everything went smoothly at the first two apartments, but both Helen and her father were worried about the third. The Katz family never had enough money, and it had become harder and harder to accept their rent, even though her father had lowered it. Mrs. Katz opened the door when Helen’s father knocked. “Her eyes were red—from crying,” Helen thought. “Good afternoon, Mr. Resnick,” she said, hands nervously smoothing her gray dress. “How are you, Mrs. Katz?” he asked. “We’re. we’re getting by (勉强度日),” she said, but she wouldn’t meet his eyes or even Helen’s. “You’re here for the rent.” “Yes, Mrs. Katz, I’m afraid so.” “Please come in.” Inside of the apartment, Mr. Katz and the two children were sitting at a table, waiting for Mr. Resnick. “They all have such thin faces!” Helen thought. She was embarrassed, suddenly, by her own round cheeks and strong body. Mrs. Katz gave Helen’s father the money. He thanked her and turned to go. “Mr. Resnick?” Mrs. Katz said before they could leave. He turned to look at her. In a shaking voice she told him, “We haven’t eaten in two days.” 注意：1. 续写词数应为120词左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答； 3. 写作提示：第一段可写出Helen和她父亲听到消息后的反应；第二段可写出Helen买东西及众人的反应。 Two days! Helen couldn’t imagine such a thing. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ “Yes, Dad,” she answered and started running on the way to the store. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$