Module 4 Unit 8 Writing课件-2024-2025学年沪教牛津版英语九年级上册

Module 4 Unit 8 Writing Learn how to use an outline to list ideas before you write and then finish an article on the most valuable gift you have ever received. Understand the most valuable gift has nothing to do with its price, but with the love and care behind it. Learning objectives Be aware of what makes a good article and then correct mistakes and make further improvements. 2 3 1 Think about the kinds of gifts you have received on special days. Pre-writing What’s your most valuable gift? A photo album is like a book with a lot of photos. The most valuable gift I have ever received was a photo album from my best friend Kevin. Kevin and I were classmates for all six years of primary school. We both liked playing football and listening to music, so we always had a lot of things to talk about. It is wonderful to have such a good friend. However, last summer, Kevin had to move to another city because of his father’s job. Then he gave me a photo album. “It has photos of the memorable events we have experienced together. I’ve also written some notes under each photo,” he said. I was deeply moved. I put the album beside my bed. I always look at it when I think of Kevin. 1. What is my most valuable gift? 2. Who gave it to me? 3. What is our relationship? 4. Why did we become friends? 5. What happened to Kevin last summer? 6. What can be found inside the photo album? 7. How did I feel when I got the gift? 8. What do I do with the gift now? What is my most valuable gift? Who gave it to me? What is our relationship? Why did we become friends? What is my most valuable gift? It is a photo album. Who gave it to me? Kevin gave it to you. What is our relationship? You are good friends. Why did we become friends? Because you were classmates for all six years of primary school and you both liked playing football and listening to music. The most valuable gift I have ever received was a photo album from my best friend Kevin. Kevin and I were classmates for all six years of primary school. We both liked playing football and listening to music, so we always had a lot of things to talk about. It is wonderful to have such a good friend. What happened to Kevin last summer? He had to move to another city because of his father’s job. What can be found inside the photo album? Photos of the memorable events you have experienced together and notes under each photo. How did I feel when he got the gift? You were deeply moved. What do I do with the gift now? You put the album beside your bed. When you think of Kevin, you always look at it. What happened to Kevin last summer? He had to move to another city because of his father’s job. What can be found inside the photo album? Photos of the memorable events you have experienced together and notes under each photo. How did I feel when he got the gift? You were deeply moved. What do I do with the gift now? You put the album beside your bed. When you think of Kevin, you always look at it. However, last summer, Kevin had to move to another city because of his father’s job. Then he gave me a photo album. “It has photos of the memorable events we have experienced together. I’ve also written some notes under each photo,” he said. I was deeply moved. I put the album beside my bed. I always look at it when I think of Kevin. Write a short article about the most valuable gift you have ever received. While writing What is the gift? Who gave it to you? When did you receive it? Why was it given to you? Why is it valuable to you? Writing process(写作过程) Step 1 – Brainstorm what you want to write. Tips: Brainstorm the gifts you have. Ask wh-questions about this gift. Use a mind map to help. Paragraph 1 What is your most valuable gift? Who gave it to you? What is the relationship between you two? Paragraph 2 What do/did you usually get along with him/her? Paragraph 3 When did you get the gift? Why did he/she give it to you? How did you feel when you got it? Paragraph 4 Where do you keep your gift now? What do you do with the gift now? Step 2 – Make an outline of your article Step 3 – Make your first draft Tips: Use complete sentences. Limit your writing time. Step 4 – Improve your writing What makes a good article? What makes a good article? A logical structure A good article contains What makes a good article? A logical structure A good article contains Proper expressions Chinese English 1. 最珍贵的礼物 2. 值得纪念的事情 3. 难忘的 4. 深受感动 5. 使…想起 6. 帮了…很多 7. 珍贵的友谊 8. 振奋精神 9. 带来克服困难的勇气 Useful expressions the most valuable gift memorable events unforgettable be deeply moved remind…of… help … a lot precious friendship raise one’s spirits bring sb. the courage to get over difficulty Chinese English Sentence patterns 1.他说他在每张照片下面都写了一些注释。 Object clause (宾语从句) 2.当我想到凯文,我总是看一看它。 Adverbial clause of time (时间状从) 3.现在我把卡片放到钱包里以便我能够记得我们的友谊。 Adverbial clause of purpose (目的状从) 4.多么难忘的经历啊! Exclamation(感叹句) 5.拥有这样好的朋友是极好的。 It is +adj. (for sb.) to do sth. Sentence patterns What an unforgettable experience it is! It is wonderful to have such a good friend. l always look at it when l think of Kevin. He said that he had written some notes under each photo. Now I put the card in my wallet so that I can remember our friendship. A logical structure A good article contains Proper expressions Suitable linking words What makes a good article? 1.并列关系 2.转折关系 3.顺序关系 4.因果关系 5.归纳关系 C E B A D Choose the correct words on the left column to match the right one. A so, because, as, since, therefore, as a result, for this reason, because of this B first, second, third, finally, then, next C besides, moreover, furthermore, in addition, what’s more D in short, all in all, in brief, in a word, to sum up, in conclusion E although, however, but, yet, otherwise, while, on the contrary A logical structure A good article contains Proper expressions Suitable linking words What makes a good article? Correct grammar lack of coherence 缺少连贯性 lack of conjunction 缺少连词 capital letter 大写字母 improper prepositions不恰当介词 The singular or plural forms of the nouns The tenses of the verbs Subject-predicate agreement Regular collocations Proper articles Common grammar mistakes 名词单复数问题 动词时态问题 主谓一致问题 固定搭配问题 冠词使用问题 A logical structure A good article contains Proper expressions Suitable linking words What makes a good article? Correct grammar Pretty handwriting Step 5 – Copy neatly Post- writing 标准 完全 不符(0) 较不符合(+1) 一般 (+2) 较 符合 (+3) 完全 符合 (+4) 1 文章覆盖了所有内容要点。 2 文章有清晰的结构。 3 文章准确地运用了语法和词汇。 4 文章有效地使用了语法间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。 5 文章有干净整洁的书写。 Please evaluate (评估) your article according to the standard (标准). What gift did the girl send to her mum? How many kinds of love can you find? Watch the video and answer questions What gift did the girl send to her mum? It is a bar of chocolate. How many kinds of love can you find? Three. Mother’s love, child’s love and the stranger’s love. Watch the video and answer questions What gift did the girl send to her mum? It is a bar of chocolate. How many kinds of love can you find? Three. Mother’s love, child’s love and the stranger’s love. Watch the video and answer questions The most valuable gift has nothing to do with its price, but with the love and care behind it. 请写一篇短文关于你收到的“最珍贵的礼物”。 内容包括: 1.你与送礼物人之间的关系以及对礼物的描述; 2.你和礼物之间的故事; 3.你对礼物的感受。 注意: 1.词数80-100。开头已为你写好,不计入总词数; 2.短文须包括所给内容信息。可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 The most valuable gift The most valuable gift I have ever received was……. Homework — Part One After finishing your article, correct your mistakes and make further improvements. Then you can discuss and evaluate articles with your classmates. 在完成文章后,进行错误修改并美化。之后与同学一起讨论和评估你的文章。 Homework — Part Two Thank you Lavf58.29.100 {"top_left": [75, 5], "size": 577, "detection": [226, 144, 506, 526], "face_id": 0, "detect_confidence": 0.9997974038124084, "mask_confidence": 1.0, "overlap": "no", "neighbors": null} Lavf58.29.100 {"top_left": [75, 6], "size": 583, "detection": [226, 144, 506, 526], "face_id": 0, "detect_confidence": 0.9997974038124084, "mask_confidence": 1.0, "overlap": "no", "neighbors": null} Lavf58.20.100 $$