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第2课时——强化表达功·写作短板的专项补弱
1.be doing ...when ...“正在做……这时……”
be doing ...when ...中,when是并列连词,相当于and at that/this time。when用作并列连词的句型还有:
(1)be about to do ... when ...=be on the point of doing ... when ... 正要做……这时……
(2)had (just) done ... when ...
刚做完……这时……
|先|学|通|(通过句子变换把握句式特点)
①She was walking along the bank of the river, and at that time she heard a cry for help.
→She was_walking_along_the_bank_of_the_river_when she heard a cry for help.
②Having just finished my homework, I was ordered to do some housework.
→I had_just_finished_my_homework_when I was ordered to do some housework.
③He was on the point of telling us the big secret when someone in the back interrupted him.
→He was_about_to_tell_us_the_big_secret_when someone in the back interrupted him.
|再|写|美|(通过句子仿写做到运用自如)
④我刚刚到家,这时候下起了瓢泼大雨。
I had_just_arrived_home_when it began to rain cats and dogs.
⑤我正要放弃,这时候我最好的朋友鼓励我继续前行。
I was_about_to_give_up/was_on_the_point_of_giving_up_when my best friend encouraged me to go on.
⑥我碰巧来到这里,正在看发生了什么事,这时一个女孩向我走来。
I came here by chance and was_just_watching_what_was_going_on when a girl came up to me.
2.not only ... but also ...“不仅……而且……”
(1)not only ...but also ...(only亦可以替换为just/merely等),用于连接两个表示并列关系的成分,着重强调后者,意为 “不仅……而且……”,其中的also有时可以省略。
(2)not only ...but also ...连接两个句子,且not only位于句首时, not only后面的句子要用部分倒装。
(3)not only ...but also ...连接的两个并列成分作主语时,其谓语通常与靠近的主语保持一致,即遵循“就近原则”。
|先|学|通|(通过句子变换把握句式特点)
①The students and their teacher all take an active part in the sports meeting.
→Not just the students but_(also)_their_teacher_takes_an_active_part_in the sports meeting.
②As we all know, reading classics can not only improve our studying career but also it can enrich our everyday life.
→As we all know, not_only_can_reading_classics_improve_our_studying_career but also it can enrich our everyday life.(倒装句)
|再|写|美|(通过句子仿写做到运用自如)
③首先,这个展览的主题是环境保护。这不仅有意义,而且很有趣。
To begin with, the theme of the exhibition is environmental protection,which_is_not_only_meaningful_but_also_very_interesting.
④锻炼不仅可以增强我们的体质,还可以培养我们的性格。
Not only can_taking_exercise_build_up_our_strength,_but it can also develop our character.
⑤(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷写作)从那时起,我不仅掌握了良好的写作能力,而且还明白了一个真理——恐惧永远不会建立未来,但希望可以。(用倒装结构)
From then on, not_only_did_I_have_a_good_command_of_writing,_but also I knew the truth — fear never builds the future, but hope does.
1.赏用词与意境之美
After I had pictured it over and over again in my mind, the big day finally arrived: my first day at senior high! I woke up early and rushed out of the door in my eagerness to get to know my new school.
写法领悟:本段中pictured“想象;设想”为名词用作动词,增添了表达的生动性,形成一种意境之美。“over and over again, finally, woke up early, rushed, eagerness”等词汇生动地描写了“我”对开学的期待之情。本段文字向读者呈现了一个鲜活的青少年形象:心中充满梦想,对高中生活充满期待。
2.赏修辞、心理描写与结构之美
“What?!” I tried to turn on my brain but the engine just wouldn't start. “I should say my name, of course. But what else? What could I say to make a good first impression? Something about my insect collection, perhaps.” I was organising my words in my head when the girl next to me gave me a nudge. “It's your turn!”
写法领悟:本段中的“turn on my brain but the engine just wouldn't start”用启动机器来比喻动脑思考,语言活泼幽默,想象丰富。but后的内容则写出了“我”的茫然无措。本段引号部分为“我”的心理活动,通过内心独白的方式真实生动地展示了“我”的内心矛盾和思想斗争。此外,本段运用了be doing ... when ...“正在做……,这时……”这一经典句式。
3.赏修辞与场景之美
With butterflies in my stomach, I breathed deeply. “Hi, I'm Meng Hao.” Everyone started laughing. I looked at them in panic.“Nice to know we share the same name,” said my new teacher. I had been too nervous to pay attention when he introduced himself! Although I was embarrassed, his words made me a lot more relaxed!
写法领悟:习语“With butterflies in my stomach”运用了比喻手法,生动形象地表达了“我”内心的紧张和忐忑不安。在紧张的思想状态下,“我”的自我介绍让同学们捧腹大笑,从而使“我”陷入尴尬境地,而老师风趣的语言帮“我”化解了内心的尴尬。本段对话简洁精练,表达效果强。这种微妙的互动,生动呈现了新生第一课的课堂场景。
[针对练笔] (依据提示完成句子)
①(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷写作)Depression hung over him like_a_heavy_dark_cloud and tears welled up in his eyes. 沮丧像一团浓重的乌云笼罩着他,泪水涌上了他的眼睛。
②(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷写作)“Unbelievable!_You_can_cook! It's the biggest surprise I have ever received.” her face lit up.
“难以置信!你们会做饭!这是我收到过的最大的惊喜。”她的脸上神采飞扬。
[命题导向]
本单元主题是“学校生活”,属于人与自我的主题语境,是高考的热考话题之一。命制读后续写时,前文一般会描述主人公在校园生活中遇到的各种具有挑战性的问题,如适应新环境、处理同学关系、能否跟上学习进度等,或者描述发生在师生、同学之间的误解或冲突等,作为下文续写的伏笔。续写部分往往是描写主人公面对挑战或冲突时内心的各种负面情绪,此时故事情节达到高潮;进而叙述在他人的帮助下如何成功应对挑战、化解矛盾,并结合自己的感悟进行主题升华。这种类型的命题旨在引导学生学会以正确的态度面对困难与挑战,以乐观、积极的心态处理学习、生活中遇到各种问题,为他们未来的社会生活奠定基础。
构建语义场
(一)初入校园
1.explore the new school 探索新校园
2.surprised and embarrassed 吃惊又尴尬
3.butterflies in one's stomach 情绪紧张,心里发慌
4.one's heart racing wildly 某人的心跳加速
5.On the first day of school, I stared in awe at the huge buildings, bigger than any school buildings I had previously seen.
开学的第一天,我敬畏地盯着那些巨大的建筑,它们比我以前见过的任何学校建筑都要大。
6.As a high school freshman, Jack walked alone along the wall of the hallway, with his head down.作为一名高中新生,杰克低着头,独自沿着走廊墙走着。
7.I was looking at the photos on the noticeboard when I heard a voice behind me. “New here?”
我正在浏览公告牌上的照片,身后忽然传来一个声音:“你是新生吗?”
(二)遇到挑战
1.in low spirits 情绪低落
2.be rooted to the spot 呆若木鸡
3.tears streaming down one's cheeks 眼泪顺着脸颊流下来
4.The teacher spoke so fast that I couldn't take everything down.
老师讲得太快了,我无法把所有的东西都记下来。
5.I tried to turn on my brain but the engine just wouldn't start.
我试着开动脑筋,但引擎就是发动不起来。
6.Many students were talking and laughing, entirely ignoring me.
许多学生都在说笑,完全忽略了我的存在。
7.I couldn't continue my speech. I froze there, my mind going blank.
我再也讲不下去了。我僵在那儿,大脑一片空白。
8.It was a long and hard moment and it seemed as if I were sitting on pins and needles.
这是漫长而艰难的时刻,我如坐针毡。
(三)同学互助
1.sound advice 合理的建议
2.help sb. get through the tough time 帮助某人度过艰难时期
3.She said, “Be a rainbow in somebody else's cloud.”
她说:“要成为别人云朵中的一道彩虹。”
4.So, give your friends a hand when they need it.
所以,在朋友需要帮助时要施以援手。
5.My classmates burst into wild applause and yelled encouragement at me.
同学们爆发出热烈的掌声,并大声鼓励我。
6.Dead silence spreading across the classroom, I determined to put up my hand and explain the whole thing for him.
教室里一片死寂,我决定举手为他解释这一切。
7.Luckily, a girl named Summer offered to sit with her on her first day of school.
幸运的是,一位名叫夏天的女孩在她上学的第一天提出和她坐在一起。
(四)成长感悟
1.hold your head up 抬起你的头(不要气馁)
2.deal with new challenges more proactively
更积极主动地应对新挑战
3.But life is not always easy.
可是生活并非总是一帆风顺。
4.Just keep an open mind and take part in as much as possible.只管敞开心扉,尽可能地参与其中。
5.If you fail, no problem — next time you can fail better!
这次考不好,没关系的——下次你会做得更好!
6.At first I was really sad, but later I realized that I joined the team for the love of the sport. It wasn't just about winning.
开始我非常沮丧,但是后来我意识到,我是因为热爱这项运动才加入球队的,与我(是不是能上场)赢球无关。
平时勤练笔
写作任务——读后续写的片段训练
(一)语境片段训练(依据提示补全下列语段)
1.面对新环境(渴望、好奇、不安与紧张)
①Full_of_eagerness_and_curiosity (充满渴望与好奇), I couldn't wait to begin my new school life. On the first day of school, I ② stared_in_awe_at (敬畏地盯着) the huge buildings, bigger than any school buildings I had previously seen. I really wanted ③to_explore_life_here (探索这里的生活). My first class was English. We were asked to introduce ourselves one by one and I was the first one. ④Surprised_and_embarrassed (吃惊又尴尬), I stood up, ⑤my_heart_racing_wildly (我的心跳加速).
2.陷入困境(害怕、沮丧与苦恼)
Facing so many students, I ① became_frightened (变得害怕) that I couldn't perform well. My legs trembled and so did my voice. I couldn't continue my speech. I froze there, my mind ②going_blank (变得一片空白). All of a sudden, I was ③disappointed_and_in_low_spirits (失望,情绪低落), ④tears_streaming_down_my_cheeks (眼泪顺着脸颊流下来).
3.伸出援手(同学给予鼓励)
Dead silence spreading across the classroom, a sense of loss was creeping up on me. After class, I was sitting at my desk with my head down ①when_my_partner_gave_me_a_hug (这时候我的搭档给我一个拥抱) and said ②encouraging_words (鼓励的话) such as “Don't be discouraged. I will always stand by you, ③giving_you_a_hand (帮助你).”
4.收获友谊(感动、感激)
I ①smiled_in_relief (欣慰地笑了) through my tears like the sun through rain and he smiled, too. We felt on the top of the world. From that day on, we ②kept_an_open_mind (敞开心扉) to each other, discussed problems together and soon became good friends. It is my partner that teaches me ③to_hold_my_head_up (抬起头) whenever in trouble. I will ④be_forever__grateful_to_her (永远感激她) for that.
(二)续写构思训练(根据提示构思、续写语段)
前情概述:因为父亲工作变动的原因,作者不得不转学到一个完全陌生的地方。内向的作者不擅长结交新朋友,虽然成绩优异,经常获得老师的表扬,但他依然没有任何朋友。直到一天,一堂英语课后,一个高个子的男生站在作者的课桌旁……
场景1:男孩告诉作者自己是校篮球队的,他和他的队友们希望作者能在空余时间教他们英语,作者欣然同意了。
Then one day, a tall boy walked over to me after English class.________________ _______________________________
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场景2:作者全力帮助篮球队员们补习功课,队员们对作者心怀感激,并开始教作者打篮球,作者交到了许多朋友,性格也变得开朗起来。
Something gradually changed after that._______ _______________________________
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参考范文:
Then one day, a tall boy walked over to me after English class. He introduced himself and told me he was in the school basketball team. I knew him — he was the star player! “Hey,” he said. “You do really well in English class. And you know, my teammates and I spend much time competing and practising, which has affected our study greatly. The subjects, especially English, really bother us. Do you think you could help us?” “Yes. Oh, definitely yes. I could, and I would,” I replied, surprised and delighted. We made the deal with an exchange of smiles.
Something gradually changed after that.We got on quite well. We were often seen study in the library as a group or walk to classes together.I tried to make use of all my spare time to help and shared my good study habits and useful skills with them.Meanwhile, the basketball players taught me how to play basketball. I learned a lot of basketball skills from them.Gradually, I became more outgoing and had the courage to communicate with others on my own initiative.Not only did I help the basketball players, but also they changed me.
[课时作业评价] 主题表达升格训练
Ⅰ.根据要求完成下列句子
1.(完成句子)I was_waiting_for_the_green_light_at_a_crossing_when (正在一个十字路口等绿灯,这时) someone called me.
2.(完成句子)Depending_on_fast_food (依靠快餐) may cause a person to suffer from lack of nutrition.
3.(完成句子)Viewed_from_the_top_of_the_hill (从山顶望去), the city takes the round shape with a flowing river through it.
4.(完成句子)I know you have_been_looking_forward_to_having (一直期待拥有) an opportunity to pay a visit to the Great Wall.
5.(完成句子)I suggest you apply_to_one_of_the_best_universities (申请最好的大学之一) in China, Peking University.
6.(句型转换)The lady was so annoyed with the naughty boy that she couldn't control her temper.
→The lady was_too_annoyed_with_the_naughty_boy_to_control_her temper.
7.This opportunity will not only make you happy, but also satisfy your interest in Chinese operas.
→Not_only_will_this_opportunity_make_you_happy,but also it will satisfy your interest in Chinese operas.(倒装句)
8.As the College Entrance Examination is drawing near, some students are getting more and more nervous.
→With_the_College_Entrance_Examination_drawing_near,_some students are getting more and more nervous. (用with 复合结构升级)
Ⅱ.语法填空
An anxious 18-year-old Peng Lanxi got his __1__ (admit) letter from Hunan University of Science and Technology on July 26, bringing his dream closer — making prosthetic limbs (假肢) more advanced and __2__ (access) to people like him.
Peng lost his legs in a car accident in 2005, leaving him __3__ (whole) unable to move around. __4__ (learn) to walk using just his hands for years, he now enjoys life as much as the teenagers around him. On his wheelchair he plays basketball and badminton. “ I believe that obstacles (障碍) are there __5__ (conquer). Someone says that life is like a mirror, and we get the best results __6__ we smile at it,” Peng says.
His story, which __7__ (view) more than 19 million times up till now, has gone viral (在网上快速传播的) on social media platform and he wins admiration from its users __8__ his courage, determination and hard work. Lu Ming, director of the university's School of Information and Electrical Engineering, says that the school will help Peng to pursue his dream — to be a prosthetics engineer, a career __9__ will in time change lives.
Peng is not alone. According to the China Disabled Persons' Federation, 14,559 students facing physical challenges entered college last year. From 2016 to 2020, about 57,500 students with special needs enrolled at universities, __10__ more than 50 percent increase compared with the 2011-2015 period.
语篇解读:本文是一篇记叙文。文章介绍了一个身残志坚的少年。
1.admission 考查名词。admission letter 意为“录取通知书”。
2.accessible 考查形容词。空处和and前的advanced并列作宾语补足语,应用形容词形式。be accessible to sb.意为“易于让某人所得(所用)”。
3.wholly 考查副词。此空修饰形容词“unable”,应用副词。
4.Having learned/learnt 考查非谓语动词。句子主语是he,与learn为逻辑上的主谓关系;由for years可知,应填Having learned/learnt。
5.to be conquered 考查非谓语动词。to be conquered 作表语,表达“将要征服”之意,conquer与主语obstacles之间是动宾关系,故应用to be conquered。
6.when/if 考查连词。句意:生活就像一面镜子,当/如果我们向其微笑,我们就会得到最好的结果。
7.has been viewed 考查动词时态、语态和主谓一致。由时间状语“up till now”可判断,谓语应用现在完成时;主语“His story”与动词“view”之间是动宾关系,且表单数概念,故应用has been viewed。
8.for 考查介词。此处需用介词for表达原因。
9.that/which 考查定语从句。此处引导定语从句,修饰a career,且在从句中作主语。
10.a 考查冠词。此处不定冠词a修饰more than 50 percent increase,表示“大于50%的增长”。
Ⅲ.应用文写作
(2024·广州模拟)假定你是李华,为了适应英语听力中的英美混合播音,你给外教 Smith写一封邮件,希望他在口语课上提供针对性的帮助。内容包括:
1.写信目的;
2.你的建议。
注意:1.写作词数应为80左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Dear Smith,
I'm Li Hua, one of your students. _________________________________________
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
参考范文:
Dear Smith,
I'm Li Hua, one of your students. In order to adjust to the mixed accents of British and American English in listening practice, I'm wondering if you could consider the following suggestions I would like to offer on our oral English lessons.
First of all, we would greatly appreciate it if you could provide some pronunciation rules which can help us sharpen our listening skills. Additionally, it would be helpful to introduce us to some useful materials, such as English songs, fun dubbing, or film clips where we can be exposed to various accents. I am firmly convinced that we will make great progress with your aid.
Thank you for your attention to this letter! Looking forward to your support and guidance!
Yours sincerely,
学科网(北京)股份有限公司
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