技巧01 语篇研读“五个关注”-【同步写作课】2024-2025学年高二英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练(通用版)

高二英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练 技巧01 语篇研读“五个关注” 读后续写题型要求学生对所提供的阅读材料进行认真研读和精准理解，否则就不可能较好地完成与所给材料协同度较高的续写任务。教师要充分 发挥读后续写题型对高中英语阅读和写作教学的反拨作用，培养学生养成精细化研读文本的习惯，引导他们研读文本时要做到“五关注”，先读后写，以读促写，以提升续写段落与原文的协同度，续写出情节合理、主题鲜明、逻辑连贯、语言生动、情感丰富的段落。 以 2020 年新高考I卷读后续写题为例，探究教师应如何指导学生运用文本研读“五关注 ” 策略，为续写环节找到情节、主题、逻辑、语言与情感上的依据，续写出与原文协同度较高的段落。 该续写原文是记叙文，讲述的是由于经济萧条，在梅雷迪恩（Meredith）一家居住的小区中，很多邻居失业了。好心的梅雷迪恩太太（Mrs. Meredith）经常带着食物和药品去看望经济困难的邻居们，其中小男孩伯纳德引起了她的特别关注。男孩的爸爸生病卧床，妈妈因在家照顾丈夫而无法外出工作，因 此小男孩很想挣些钱来补贴家用。梅雷迪恩太太希望家中的三个孩子约翰（John）、哈里（Harry）、克拉拉（Clara）能够帮助小男孩，最后机灵的约翰想出了一个好主意：可以把家里的玉米制成爆米花，让伯纳德拿到小区去售卖赚钱 。该故事语言生动活泼，具有较强的画面感，折射出的主题是邻里之间的互帮互助。 （一）关注情节，把握主要内容 学生把握原文关键信息和故事情节走向是关键，只有在很好地理解原文的基础上，才能有根据、有逻辑地进行续写，保证情节的前后协同。教师尝试从以下两个方面指导学生把握 故事主要内容： 1. 运用思维导图，厘清人物关系 读后续写提供的语篇常会涉及多个人物，关系比较复杂，因此厘清故事人物关系十分重要。在 该续写语篇中出现了多个人物，善良的梅雷迪恩 太太是约翰、哈里、克拉拉的母亲，在了解到邻居 伯纳德一家经济有困难后，她和孩子们决定帮助他们，机灵的约翰想到了一个好主意。教师指导学生边读原文，边学会运用思维导图这一策略（见图1），快速、清晰地梳理人物之间的关系，从而更合理地预设文中人物的后续行为，为创设合理的情节服务。 2. 细读故事文本，关注情节和动作 读后续写文章以故事类记叙文为主，只有精准把握故事文本细节，才能提高续写段落和原文的融洽度。除了关注故事六要素“ 5W1H”之外，教师还要引导学生养成细读文本的习惯，梳理并归纳每部分的主要情节，关注人物的动作（见表 1）。这有利于帮助学生了解故事经过，厘清故事发展脉络，提升情节构思能力，同时为后续进一步解读故事中主要人物的情感变化及分析主题作铺垫。 （二）关注主题，领会文章主旨 文章的主旨是情感的奠基，只有明确了文章的主旨，才能理解故事真正表达的内容。 续写段落要与提供的前文构成一个完整的语篇，就必然要与原文达成主题的协同。教师引导学生在进行文本研读时，要抓住文章线索，体会文章主旨，领 会作者想要表达的写作意图。 在本课例中，教师要求学生回读原文，并提 出以下两个问题：（1）What did people do during the economic recession?（2）When knowing of Bernard ’s story，what were the three children determined to do? 学生在思考后回答：“People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.”这句表明在经济萧条时 期，虽然人们过得艰辛，但是依然努力地相互帮助，共渡难关。“They were determined to do something to assist the Bernard family.”表明梅雷迪恩一家的三 个孩子非常乐于助人。通过以上两个问题的问答环节，教师带领学生揣摩作者的写作意图，旨在表达“邻里之间互帮互助”及“赠人玫瑰，手有余香”的主题。 在明析文章的主题后，教师指导学生在续写 段落的结尾处用描写方式或者议论升华的方式点明主题。比如，可以描写孩子们“相视一笑，感受到助人为乐的喜悦和邻里之情的温暖”；也可以在结尾处感叹“助人为乐不分年龄”“小小的善举会对他人产生大大的不同”等 。当然，无论选择以哪种方式结尾，都应与主题相呼应，从而实现与续写原文的协同。 （ 三）关注逻辑，构建续写脉络 在学生的读后续写作品中，经常出现故事情节 和原文及两段段首句脱节，无法衔接的情况；或者续写的两段段落之间逻辑混乱、不连贯的情况。在进行文本研读时，除了研读续写故事原文外，教师还要引导学生认真研读提供的两段段首句，并利用其中的关键词推测出每一段的大致情节走向，理顺两段之间的内在逻辑关系。 在文本中，在提供的续写原文中已经交代约翰想出了一个好主意，他们可以为伯纳德制作爆米花，让他拿到小区里去售卖赚钱。续写第一段所 给首句“When Mrs. Meredith heard of John ’s idea，she thought it was a good one，too.”和第二段首句 “ With everything ready，Bernard started out on his new business.”都十分重要，是推动故事情节发展的 关键。 教师要求学生认真阅读两段段首句，并圈画出其中的关键词。同时，为了帮助学生预测续写段落的情节走向，教师针对两个续写段落，以问题链的形式（见下页表 2）进行提问，从而为随后的续写环节搭建思维框架。 教师要求每四位学生组成一个学习小组，以小组讨论的形式思考以上问题。Q1 与续写第一段首句 紧密衔接，关注梅雷迪恩太太在确定约翰的主意可 行后的做法；Q2 和 Q3 环环相扣，围绕一系列问题 展开，如在妈妈同意约翰的计划后，孩子们是如何 分工和行动的呢？在制作爆米花时，家里又充满了怎 样的氛围呢？ Q4 起承接续写第一段和第二段的作 用，符合情节发展内在逻辑，推动着故事一步步向 前发展；Q5 紧扣续写第二段首句，聚焦小男孩伯纳 德开始售卖爆米花后可能会遇到的困难；Q6、Q7 与 Q5 一脉相连，关注当伯纳德售卖爆米花遇到困 难时，三个孩子的做法及伯纳德最后是否成功地卖 完爆米花；Q8 通过提问，提示学生要在故事结尾处 通过对伯纳德和三个孩子的心理或语言描写，突出 主题—“邻里之间互帮互助”及“赠人玫瑰，手有余 香”，从而使文章结尾富有韵味，引人深思。 （ 四）关注语言，积累续写语料 读后续写是一种测试手段，也是一种学习方法，教师在日常教学中可以引导学生在阅读时认真分析文本内容和语言，并将分析结果应用于之后的续写中，帮助学生通过语言模仿和内容创新不断提高写作能力（刘庆思、陈康 2016）。在读后续写中，提供的续写原文是学生最佳的模仿对象 。因此，在研 读原文本时，教师要带领学生一起赏析原文的语 言，关注原文中使用的句型和语法结构，并在续写时加以模仿和使用，使续写作品与原文在语言风格 上形成协同。 教师首先让学生找出原文中值得学生模仿和使 用的句式，比如：（1）“He sprang to his feet and cried. ” “ The other children also jumped up all attention.”（细致入微的动作描写）；（2）“I wish you could see him. ” （wish引导的虚拟语气）；（3）“His wife，who took care of him and could not go out to work.”（who引导的定语从句）；（4）“The children sat thinking about Bernard.”（非谓语动词）；（5）“So do I.”（部分倒装）。 如果学生能够巧妙地在续写段落中模仿这些句式和结构，一定能够使续写文章增色不少。 （五）关注情感，明晰情感走向 通过关注原文中的动作和语言描写等，可以推测出人物的性格特征，以及随着情节发展而产生的内心情感的波动变化 。在研读文本时，教师指导学 生对文中人物的动作行为进行分析（见表 3），以此 推测出人物的性格和情感变化，为接下来的续写作 好铺垫。 在本文中，前两段写梅雷迪恩太太帮助穷人，体现了她的热心、善良、乐善好施的性格；第 3至4段写伯纳德十分体恤父母，想要为贫困的家庭出一份力，可以看出他十分懂事、成熟、体贴父母；第5至8段写三个孩子听完伯纳德的故事后很想帮助他，体现出孩子的善良和乐于助人；接着写当约翰想到帮助伯纳德的主意后，几个孩子十分兴奋，纷纷表示同意，从中可以看出约翰的聪明机智。 1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It had been a long, tiring day because Carl had driven for 12 hours without a break. “Ah, I can finally get home now,” the tired driver sighed. He crossed a corner and noticed a panic-stricken woman getting off a taxi with a child in her arms. “What’s going on? Why is she shouting at the driver?” Carl wondered and slowed down near them. Carl was curious and got off the cab to find out what happened. Then he realized the woman was begging the driver not to leave. “Hey, Miss! Why are you crying?” Carl saw her holding a little boy in her arms, who had difficulty breathing. Carl realized the boy was having a seizure (疾病的突然发作) and asked the woman to get into his taxi. “He’s having an attack! Please hurry up, Miss! We have to get him to the hospital!” Carl drove as fast as he could, praying not to get trapped in traffic. The woman told Carl that she and her four-year-old son, Tyler, were returning from the park when it started raining. “I told the driver I would pay him once I got home because I didn’t have my purse with me. But then my son suddenly had a seizure, so I asked the driver to take us to the hospital instead. But he refused.” “Don’t worry, Miss. I will get you to the hospital on time, alright?” Half an hour later, they arrived at the hospital. Tyler was rushed inside for treatment. An hour later, the doctor came out and said, “Mrs. Thomas, your son is out of danger now. But it could have been fatal if you hadn’t made it here on time.” Mrs. Thomas immediately looked at Carl and joined his hands in tears, thanking him for saving her son’s life. Tears fogged in Carl’s eyes. He was glad Tyler was out of danger. Later, he dropped them off at home, and when Mrs. Thomas came out to pay him, he refused. “I have a policy. NO FARES for those making trips to the hospital!” revealed Carl. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 18 years later, 66-year-old Carl booked a taxi to the hospital. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Carl was astonished. “Free trips to the hospital? But why?” _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．阅读下面材料，根据内容和所给的段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Link struck a match and pushed the pile of grass to one side with his foot. By the light of the match, he discovered a dog curled up (蜷缩) in a heap, with one foreleg stuck awkwardly out in front of him at an impossible angle. Although the dog was in great pain, he still gazed at the man who bent above him softly, with a mixture of pride and need for help in his brown eyes. Moved by such an expression, Link knelt down to examine his hurts. He recognized the dog as a collie (柯利牧羊犬). The collie reminded him that several years before, he had ever witnessed one Airedale thrown from a car and killed by a close-following vehicle. Judging by the mud on the dog’s snowy chest and the oily marks on his back, he guessed this collie might have suffered a similar fate (命运), landing so heavily that it broke his front leg and ended up in the ditch covered in mud and oil. Link couldn’t imagine how long the dog had been lying there in pain. Seeing the serious hurts and hearing his howl (嚎叫) of pain, Link was at a loss, not knowing how to help him out successfully. He had planned to leave him behind but a voice inside him encouraged him to step forward bravely. Then Link suddenly realized that maybe the kindest thing to do for the dog was put him out of his suffering. He gently approached the badly hurt animal, whispering softly, “Sorry, honey! Forgive me please!” Picking up a stone off the ground with a heavy heart, Link turned back to where the dog lay, thinking to himself, “How terrible! Do I have the right to end his life?” His heart beat wildly as he cast scared glances on the dog. However, at the thought of his closed eyes and howls, he finally made the toughest decision. Watching the poor dog closely, he balanced the rock and prepared to deliver the deadly blow. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Link was about to strike with all his strength when the dog opened his eyes. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: The doctor in the pet hospital took the dog into the operating room. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 I sat at the breakfast table with my four-year-old son, Matthew, trying to ignore the ache in my stomach. “Mama, want to play?” “Not today, baby.” I shook my head. These days I could barely get out of bed. I was still recovering from an operation. I hoped for strength and happiness, but the future seemed so hopeless. Suddenly, Matthew jumped up from his spot on the kitchen floor. “Bird!” he shouted, rushing to our courtyard. Sure enough, there was a white dove seated in a rubber tree (橡胶树). It sat there for a few moments, and then flew away. Strange, I’d never seen one in our neighborhood before. When I dragged myself to the kitchen the next morning, the dove was back. This time it was with a mate carrying sticks. “Look Matthew,” I said, pointing to the tree. “They’re going to make a nest.” The doves flew in and out of the courtyard all week, building on top of the rubber tree. Matthew could hardly contain his excitement. Every morning, he’d run into the kitchen and take his spot by the sliding glass door (滑动玻璃门), talking to the birds while they worked. His happiness was influential. As much as I was sad, I couldn’t help but look forward to the doves’ visits too. Then it all went wrong. The courtyard was a safe enough spot for a nest, but the rubber tree’s broad, thin leaves were far from stable. One night, a strong wind blew, throwing the doves’ nest to the ground. I heard the twigs (细枝) break apart. I surveyed the damage. Nothing good ever lasted. I wouldn’t blame the doves if they never came back. But they returned. And they paid no attention to the pile of sticks that had once been their nest. They started again from the beginning. Again, though, the wind destroyed all their hard work. The next day, and the next, they started again, as if nothing had happened. 注意： 1．续写词数应为100左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: I knew I had to do something. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: “It works! The birds are back!” Matthew announced. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I looked at the steep, rocky mountain ahead of me and knew that my strength had abandoned me. Even the fresh bear tracks pressed in the recently fallen snow failed to make me take another step. My tired eyes met my father’s, and I felt too exhausted for tears. “Leave me. Seek help. Return for me. I cannot move my legs,” I uttered wearily. Earlier that day, my father and I set off on a brief journey accompanied by my brother and a friend who acted as our guide. Our companion had assured us that it would be an effortless two hour hiking through a natural environment. We were eager and filled with anticipation. Having spent the spring, summer, and early autumn hiking in the mountains with my father, I had been confident that this hike would present no difficulties. However, from the start, we found ourselves over a snow-covered ridge, and it appeared rougher than expected. As two hours passed without reaching our destination, it became evident that our friend had made a mistake. We had not yet reached the falls, yet he insisted that they were just a short distance away. Despite being accompanied by falling snow and howling winds, we pressed on. By the time we finally arrived at the falls, darkness and weariness had taken hold of us. Nevertheless, we couldn’t help but be fascinated by the charming pink, green, and copper as we observed the graceful fish swimming in its natural habitat. As late as it was, we could only rest and enjoy the scenery for a short while in order to make it back to the car before dark. Our friend assured us that we’d find the rest of the hike easy and short. However, it proved to be anything but. The mountain we encountered next was the steepest we had faced so far. Each step I took felt like my legs were being squeezed into my stomach. As we climbed down, my legs became increasingly knotted, and it brought great pain to my knees. We hoped that each climb would be the last, only to find another peak ahead. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Darkness enveloping us, my legs reach a point of giving out. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ With his encouragement, I struggled to my feet. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段（每段75词左右，共150词左右），使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My name is Andy. I was the new boy in the class. I was twelve when I moved to London. Having lost all my old friends, I felt shy and lonely at my new school. Most people weren’t very interested in a shy new boy. Colin was one of the few people who were kind to me. He often invited me to join his particular group, and as a result, I started getting to know people. Colin and I became good friends. We trusted each other and we could talk about personal matters, things that were important to us. Five years later, Colin’s father was knocked over by a car and died a few days later. The family had to move to a much smaller house in order to manage financially. Colin changed completely, becoming silent and moody. He had always been a clever, hard-working student but now he seemed to lose all interest in his work. He started losing friends. About three months ago, a group of us were playing football together after school. Having left something in the cloakroom, I went inside to get it, finding Colin going through the pockets of people’s coats. In his hand he had a wallet, but it wasn’t his! I just looked at him. Colin went bright red. “I’ll put it back right now,” he said, and he did so. I turned round and walked out without saying a word. Last week our school had a big fair in order to raise money for a charity. It was very successful and by the end of the day, we had made about £500. Holding the box, our head teacher said with a smile “We have raised £500 here.” But to our surprise, the next morning, we were told that the money had been stolen. I decided to ask Colin about the theft, and this morning I went to see him. I approached Colin with a heavy heart, knowing that this conversation could be hard. “Colin, I need to ask you something,” I began cautiously. He looked up at me, his eyes filled with a mixture of curiosity and worry. “Did you take the money from the charity fair?” I asked directly, hoping to get a straight answer. 注意: 1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 每段的开头语已为你写好。 Colin’s face turned pale, unable to meet my eyes. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I could see the pain in his eyes, and despite my disappointment, I couldn’t help but feel empathy (同情) for my friend. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的短文。 When I was a little girl, I was crazy about snow and winter was my favorite season. I still remember playing with my friends and family with the snow falling all around. I loved to watch the snowflakes flying in all directions. There was a strong desire inside me that I was eager to have my own snow as a special gift on my birthday. To my great disappointment, the snow disappeared before my birthday and started after it. I was completely mad. I just hungered for my birthday snow. I asked my beloved grandmother why it didn’t snow on my birthday over and over again. She laughed, telling me I had asked the same question for too many times. At the same time she promised that she would make it snow when I was enjoying life to the fullest and we agreed to keep it our secret. When I begged her for my next birthday snow with eagerness, she just patted me on the shoulder gently, not giving a definite reply. That cold winter, before my birthday, my grandmother died. I was deeply sad, but a bit angry because she had promised me to make it snow. The day of my tenth birthday, I wok e up and ran to my window, hoping to see just one snowflake. No luck. I cried and cried, thinking about my grandmother and the dream promise. There were still friends, gifts and a big dinner; there was still no snow. What’s worse, there was no my beloved grandmother. I would pray for my birthday snow in the following years, but it never came. Never! By my sixteenth birthday, I had lost all hope of getting my snow, even though I still wished for it. During my party, I had the best time ever! I enjoyed the company of my friends and family, and I was truly happy. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 Paragraph 1: I was outside with a friend when she asked me if I was having a good time. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: When I got home, my mother told me there was a surprise for me. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 7．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。 When I lived in Portland, Oregon, I taught English as a Second Language at a local community college. I had adult students in my class from Vietnam, Mexico, Russia and many other countries. Although they came from many lands, fighting for a better life, they had one thing in common: a desperate yearning(渴望) to learn English well. Many of the students worked in a factory for twelve hours throughout the night and hurriedly took a bus in the morning straight to our 8:00A．M. class. They attended my class on time whatever the weather. And they waited until after class to go home and sleep. Sometimes I would see them struggling to keep their eyes open in the beginning. However, their active participation in class drove away their physical tiredness as well as livened up the atmosphere. Some students even raised a bunch of questions by gesture after class. They were always there working hard, earnest and eager to learn. Despite their lack of sleep and long hours at work, the level of attendance and attentiveness in class was always excellent. No one called in sick. No one was absent-minded. Some of the students had as many as three jobs and took the bus everywhere they went because they couldn’t afford cars. To teach the course, I needed to use a lot of pictures and hand gestures, since I didn’t know all their respective languages. One of the things I taught was a simple dialogue called “Shopping for a New Coat”. They enjoyed standing up and acting out the gestures that accompanied the text of the story. Sometimes I wondered if I was really teaching my students in the best way possible. But I gave my all to this class, and they gave their all to me. If nothing else, they would always remember what to say if they ever went “shopping for a new coat”. Soon, the language course came to an end. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 On the last day of class, they held a wonderful party that was filled with good food and laughter. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I lifted from the box a beautiful, new, full-length coat. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 8．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Natasha Steer and her son Zac were about to miss their bus. As she turned the corner, she called back over her shoulder. “Zac, PLEASE. We’re going to miss it!” They were walking from their hotel in Phnom Penh, Cambodia, and Zac was dragging behind. It was hot and his bag was heavy, but Steer kept up the pace — they’d be left behind otherwise. “My stomach hurts!” Zac’s voice came from too far behind her. She turned, impatient. “I know, but we really need to keep going, OK?” “OK …but it really hurts …” She turned to keep walking, assuming that if she kept up the pace he’d speed it up, too. She felt bad. Her nine-year-old son was rightfully uncomfortable under his backpack and the hot sun during a long walk, and a stomach ache on top of that couldn’t be pleasant. Still, they needed to make this bus to Ho Chi Min City. He’d be able to rest once we sat down. She sped up as they neared the bus stop, eyes searching the platforms until they landed with relief on their bus. She turned to see Zac dragging himself up the sidewalk, leaving her pack on the ground before walking back toward him. She took his bag off so she could carry it the rest of the way. “Does it still hurt?” asked Steer. He nodded. “I don’t feel good.” Steer handed Zac some water and told him he would feel better if they got on the bus and she carried their backpacks to the bus, leaving them in the pile with the others while she searched her pocket for their bus tickets. On the bus and in their seats, she handed Zac the water bottle one more time. He leaned his head on her shoulder, closing his eyes. Suddenly, Zac doubled over, vomiting onto his feet. “Oh no — hold on!” she moved quickly to get him a bag to vomit (呕吐) in, saving his feet and the floor from some of the mess. He looked up, apologetic, and Steer felt the eyes of everyone on the bus on them. “Don’t worry about it honey, it doesn’t matter — do you feel better? Here — have some water.” As she twisted off the cap, Zac began to throw up again — only this time, there was no bag. Moving quickly to help him, Steer knocked over the two-liter water bottle. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 She felt flurried (慌乱) as the bus attendant came up to see what was happening. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Learning about Zac’s serious conditions, all other passengers did what Steer unexpected. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 9．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I’ve always thought of my mother Lee-Ann as a superhero because she has a huge heart full of love for anyone. I could write about all of the wonderful things she has done, but I want to focus on the project she does every year that has shaped my whole family and everyone around us: She collects money and puts it in a little jar that we refer to as “The Charity Jar.” Every year, she takes this money and puts it toward something—a cause, an act of kindness, anything that can help someone. Sometimes, she buys coffees for the next people in line at a coffee shop. Other times, she buys something for an organization that needs it. If you ask her about this tradition, she will tell you that she is carrying on something that her mother used to do around the holidays. She manages to get our whole family involved in this movement every year. Last year, she helped an organization where I volunteered—Ruth’s Place—a homeless women’s shelter in Wilkes-Barre, Pennsylvania. I had been helping in the shelter when I noticed the wish list on the wall: comforters (被子), a DVD player, a coffee maker and supplies. I told my mom, and within a day she had already asked if our family wanted to help Ruth’s Place. We all agreed and decided that the coffee maker and supplies would be the best things for our family to work on together. A few days later, Mom found a coffee maker online, showed it to us, and with a few clicks it was on its way. We gathered the rest of the supplies and called the shelter to find a day that we could deliver them. On Thanksgiving Day, I drove my mom to the shelter—very slowly because she had baked fresh chocolate cupcakes for the women, and they were sitting on my clean leather seats. She had never been in the shelter before, but the whole way she talked about how excited she was to be able to check off something on their list. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 When we took the gifts inside, the women were so happy. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ My mother had tears in her eyes as we walked to my car. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 10．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Rani jumped off the school bus. Splash! She landed right in the muddy rainwater. It had been a Friday full of disasters. Angry thoughts boiled inside Rani’s head as she marched home in the rain. Why did she have to forget her raincoat back home? Why did she have to risk taking the school bus back home? Why did her hair have to wave up like a giant cotton candy balloon just when she wanted it to behave? Why, why, why, fumed (烦恼) Rani as she turned the backdoor key. “Rani, is that you?” Mama called from the family room. Suddenly Rani’s cousins, Amit and Sumit, came charging toward her. “How many eggs does Rani have in that nest on her head?” laughed Amit. “Let me get them off Rani’s head!” shouted Sumit. This was really too much. Rani was upset. She fled out of the door, down the driveway, and back up the road she’d walked down minutes before. Angry as Ran I was, she knew that she should calm down. Without noticing, she walked behind a green curtain of lush (茂盛的) bamboo. Tearing through the wild growth, she made her way down a narrow mud path into a clearing. She threw her schoolbag on the ground and breathed hard. Lying on her schoolbag, she bitterly remembered the hours, days, and weeks she had spent trying to soften her hair from using her grandmother’s special mixture of coconut to washing it with Sunsilk shampoo—but in vain. Before long, the tiring day caught up with Rani, and she fell into sleep. “Rani! Raa—aani!” Rani woke up to Mama’s calls. She lifted her head from her knees. She wandered absently around the bamboo overlooking her house. Rani hugged herself, making no response. “I still need time to calm down,” she told herself, “Amit and Sumit shouldn’t have made fun of me.” Alone in her secret hideout, Rani watched the shadows get longer and begin to disappear as dusk fell. Suddenly the leaves rustled (沙沙作响). 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Someone was making its way towards her. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Rani! Here you are . Mama said relievedly ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 高二英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练 技巧01 语篇研读“五个关注” 读后续写题型要求学生对所提供的阅读材料进行认真研读和精准理解，否则就不可能较好地完成与所给材料协同度较高的续写任务。教师要充分 发挥读后续写题型对高中英语阅读和写作教学的反拨作用，培养学生养成精细化研读文本的习惯，引导他们研读文本时要做到“五关注”，先读后写，以读促写，以提升续写段落与原文的协同度，续写出情节合理、主题鲜明、逻辑连贯、语言生动、情感丰富的段落。 以 2020 年新高考I卷读后续写题为例，探究教师应如何指导学生运用文本研读“五关注 ” 策略，为续写环节找到情节、主题、逻辑、语言与情感上的依据，续写出与原文协同度较高的段落。 该续写原文是记叙文，讲述的是由于经济萧条，在梅雷迪恩（Meredith）一家居住的小区中，很多邻居失业了。好心的梅雷迪恩太太（Mrs. Meredith）经常带着食物和药品去看望经济困难的邻居们，其中小男孩伯纳德引起了她的特别关注。男孩的爸爸生病卧床，妈妈因在家照顾丈夫而无法外出工作，因 此小男孩很想挣些钱来补贴家用。梅雷迪恩太太希望家中的三个孩子约翰（John）、哈里（Harry）、克拉拉（Clara）能够帮助小男孩，最后机灵的约翰想出了一个好主意：可以把家里的玉米制成爆米花，让伯纳德拿到小区去售卖赚钱 。该故事语言生动活泼，具有较强的画面感，折射出的主题是邻里之间的互帮互助。 （一）关注情节，把握主要内容 学生把握原文关键信息和故事情节走向是关键，只有在很好地理解原文的基础上，才能有根据、有逻辑地进行续写，保证情节的前后协同。教师尝试从以下两个方面指导学生把握 故事主要内容： 1. 运用思维导图，厘清人物关系 读后续写提供的语篇常会涉及多个人物，关系比较复杂，因此厘清故事人物关系十分重要。在 该续写语篇中出现了多个人物，善良的梅雷迪恩 太太是约翰、哈里、克拉拉的母亲，在了解到邻居 伯纳德一家经济有困难后，她和孩子们决定帮助他们，机灵的约翰想到了一个好主意。教师指导学生边读原文，边学会运用思维导图这一策略（见图1），快速、清晰地梳理人物之间的关系，从而更合理地预设文中人物的后续行为，为创设合理的情节服务。 2. 细读故事文本，关注情节和动作 读后续写文章以故事类记叙文为主，只有精准把握故事文本细节，才能提高续写段落和原文的融洽度。除了关注故事六要素“ 5W1H”之外，教师还要引导学生养成细读文本的习惯，梳理并归纳每部分的主要情节，关注人物的动作（见表 1）。这有利于帮助学生了解故事经过，厘清故事发展脉络，提升情节构思能力，同时为后续进一步解读故事中主要人物的情感变化及分析主题作铺垫。 （二）关注主题，领会文章主旨 文章的主旨是情感的奠基，只有明确了文章的主旨，才能理解故事真正表达的内容。 续写段落要与提供的前文构成一个完整的语篇，就必然要与原文达成主题的协同。教师引导学生在进行文本研读时，要抓住文章线索，体会文章主旨，领 会作者想要表达的写作意图。 在本课例中，教师要求学生回读原文，并提 出以下两个问题：（1）What did people do during the economic recession?（2）When knowing of Bernard ’s story，what were the three children determined to do? 学生在思考后回答：“People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.”这句表明在经济萧条时 期，虽然人们过得艰辛，但是依然努力地相互帮助，共渡难关。“They were determined to do something to assist the Bernard family.”表明梅雷迪恩一家的三 个孩子非常乐于助人。通过以上两个问题的问答环节，教师带领学生揣摩作者的写作意图，旨在表达“邻里之间互帮互助”及“赠人玫瑰，手有余香”的主题。 在明析文章的主题后，教师指导学生在续写 段落的结尾处用描写方式或者议论升华的方式点明主题。比如，可以描写孩子们“相视一笑，感受到助人为乐的喜悦和邻里之情的温暖”；也可以在结尾处感叹“助人为乐不分年龄”“小小的善举会对他人产生大大的不同”等 。当然，无论选择以哪种方式结尾，都应与主题相呼应，从而实现与续写原文的协同。 （ 三）关注逻辑，构建续写脉络 在学生的读后续写作品中，经常出现故事情节 和原文及两段段首句脱节，无法衔接的情况；或者续写的两段段落之间逻辑混乱、不连贯的情况。在进行文本研读时，除了研读续写故事原文外，教师还要引导学生认真研读提供的两段段首句，并利用其中的关键词推测出每一段的大致情节走向，理顺两段之间的内在逻辑关系。 在文本中，在提供的续写原文中已经交代约翰想出了一个好主意，他们可以为伯纳德制作爆米花，让他拿到小区里去售卖赚钱。续写第一段所 给首句“When Mrs. Meredith heard of John ’s idea，she thought it was a good one，too.”和第二段首句 “ With everything ready，Bernard started out on his new business.”都十分重要，是推动故事情节发展的 关键。 教师要求学生认真阅读两段段首句，并圈画出其中的关键词。同时，为了帮助学生预测续写段落的情节走向，教师针对两个续写段落，以问题链的形式（见下页表 2）进行提问，从而为随后的续写环节搭建思维框架。 教师要求每四位学生组成一个学习小组，以小组讨论的形式思考以上问题。Q1 与续写第一段首句 紧密衔接，关注梅雷迪恩太太在确定约翰的主意可 行后的做法；Q2 和 Q3 环环相扣，围绕一系列问题 展开，如在妈妈同意约翰的计划后，孩子们是如何 分工和行动的呢？在制作爆米花时，家里又充满了怎 样的氛围呢？ Q4 起承接续写第一段和第二段的作 用，符合情节发展内在逻辑，推动着故事一步步向 前发展；Q5 紧扣续写第二段首句，聚焦小男孩伯纳 德开始售卖爆米花后可能会遇到的困难；Q6、Q7 与 Q5 一脉相连，关注当伯纳德售卖爆米花遇到困 难时，三个孩子的做法及伯纳德最后是否成功地卖 完爆米花；Q8 通过提问，提示学生要在故事结尾处 通过对伯纳德和三个孩子的心理或语言描写，突出 主题—“邻里之间互帮互助”及“赠人玫瑰，手有余 香”，从而使文章结尾富有韵味，引人深思。 （ 四）关注语言，积累续写语料 读后续写是一种测试手段，也是一种学习方法，教师在日常教学中可以引导学生在阅读时认真分析文本内容和语言，并将分析结果应用于之后的续写中，帮助学生通过语言模仿和内容创新不断提高写作能力（刘庆思、陈康 2016）。在读后续写中，提供的续写原文是学生最佳的模仿对象 。因此，在研 读原文本时，教师要带领学生一起赏析原文的语 言，关注原文中使用的句型和语法结构，并在续写时加以模仿和使用，使续写作品与原文在语言风格 上形成协同。 教师首先让学生找出原文中值得学生模仿和使 用的句式，比如：（1）“He sprang to his feet and cried. ” “ The other children also jumped up all attention.”（细致入微的动作描写）；（2）“I wish you could see him. ” （wish引导的虚拟语气）；（3）“His wife，who took care of him and could not go out to work.”（who引导的定语从句）；（4）“The children sat thinking about Bernard.”（非谓语动词）；（5）“So do I.”（部分倒装）。 如果学生能够巧妙地在续写段落中模仿这些句式和结构，一定能够使续写文章增色不少。 （五）关注情感，明晰情感走向 通过关注原文中的动作和语言描写等，可以推测出人物的性格特征，以及随着情节发展而产生的内心情感的波动变化 。在研读文本时，教师指导学 生对文中人物的动作行为进行分析（见表 3），以此 推测出人物的性格和情感变化，为接下来的续写作 好铺垫。 在本文中，前两段写梅雷迪恩太太帮助穷人，体现了她的热心、善良、乐善好施的性格；第 3至4段写伯纳德十分体恤父母，想要为贫困的家庭出一份力，可以看出他十分懂事、成熟、体贴父母；第5至8段写三个孩子听完伯纳德的故事后很想帮助他，体现出孩子的善良和乐于助人；接着写当约翰想到帮助伯纳德的主意后，几个孩子十分兴奋，纷纷表示同意，从中可以看出约翰的聪明机智。 1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It had been a long, tiring day because Carl had driven for 12 hours without a break. “Ah, I can finally get home now,” the tired driver sighed. He crossed a corner and noticed a panic-stricken woman getting off a taxi with a child in her arms. “What’s going on? Why is she shouting at the driver?” Carl wondered and slowed down near them. Carl was curious and got off the cab to find out what happened. Then he realized the woman was begging the driver not to leave. “Hey, Miss! Why are you crying?” Carl saw her holding a little boy in her arms, who had difficulty breathing. Carl realized the boy was having a seizure (疾病的突然发作) and asked the woman to get into his taxi. “He’s having an attack! Please hurry up, Miss! We have to get him to the hospital!” Carl drove as fast as he could, praying not to get trapped in traffic. The woman told Carl that she and her four-year-old son, Tyler, were returning from the park when it started raining. “I told the driver I would pay him once I got home because I didn’t have my purse with me. But then my son suddenly had a seizure, so I asked the driver to take us to the hospital instead. But he refused.” “Don’t worry, Miss. I will get you to the hospital on time, alright?” Half an hour later, they arrived at the hospital. Tyler was rushed inside for treatment. An hour later, the doctor came out and said, “Mrs. Thomas, your son is out of danger now. But it could have been fatal if you hadn’t made it here on time.” Mrs. Thomas immediately looked at Carl and joined his hands in tears, thanking him for saving her son’s life. Tears fogged in Carl’s eyes. He was glad Tyler was out of danger. Later, he dropped them off at home, and when Mrs. Thomas came out to pay him, he refused. “I have a policy. NO FARES for those making trips to the hospital!” revealed Carl. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 18 years later, 66-year-old Carl booked a taxi to the hospital. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Carl was astonished. “Free trips to the hospital? But why?” _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．阅读下面材料，根据内容和所给的段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Link struck a match and pushed the pile of grass to one side with his foot. By the light of the match, he discovered a dog curled up (蜷缩) in a heap, with one foreleg stuck awkwardly out in front of him at an impossible angle. Although the dog was in great pain, he still gazed at the man who bent above him softly, with a mixture of pride and need for help in his brown eyes. Moved by such an expression, Link knelt down to examine his hurts. He recognized the dog as a collie (柯利牧羊犬). The collie reminded him that several years before, he had ever witnessed one Airedale thrown from a car and killed by a close-following vehicle. Judging by the mud on the dog’s snowy chest and the oily marks on his back, he guessed this collie might have suffered a similar fate (命运), landing so heavily that it broke his front leg and ended up in the ditch covered in mud and oil. Link couldn’t imagine how long the dog had been lying there in pain. Seeing the serious hurts and hearing his howl (嚎叫) of pain, Link was at a loss, not knowing how to help him out successfully. He had planned to leave him behind but a voice inside him encouraged him to step forward bravely. Then Link suddenly realized that maybe the kindest thing to do for the dog was put him out of his suffering. He gently approached the badly hurt animal, whispering softly, “Sorry, honey! Forgive me please!” Picking up a stone off the ground with a heavy heart, Link turned back to where the dog lay, thinking to himself, “How terrible! Do I have the right to end his life?” His heart beat wildly as he cast scared glances on the dog. However, at the thought of his closed eyes and howls, he finally made the toughest decision. Watching the poor dog closely, he balanced the rock and prepared to deliver the deadly blow. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Link was about to strike with all his strength when the dog opened his eyes. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: The doctor in the pet hospital took the dog into the operating room. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 I sat at the breakfast table with my four-year-old son, Matthew, trying to ignore the ache in my stomach. “Mama, want to play?” “Not today, baby.” I shook my head. These days I could barely get out of bed. I was still recovering from an operation. I hoped for strength and happiness, but the future seemed so hopeless. Suddenly, Matthew jumped up from his spot on the kitchen floor. “Bird!” he shouted, rushing to our courtyard. Sure enough, there was a white dove seated in a rubber tree (橡胶树). It sat there for a few moments, and then flew away. Strange, I’d never seen one in our neighborhood before. When I dragged myself to the kitchen the next morning, the dove was back. This time it was with a mate carrying sticks. “Look Matthew,” I said, pointing to the tree. “They’re going to make a nest.” The doves flew in and out of the courtyard all week, building on top of the rubber tree. Matthew could hardly contain his excitement. Every morning, he’d run into the kitchen and take his spot by the sliding glass door (滑动玻璃门), talking to the birds while they worked. His happiness was influential. As much as I was sad, I couldn’t help but look forward to the doves’ visits too. Then it all went wrong. The courtyard was a safe enough spot for a nest, but the rubber tree’s broad, thin leaves were far from stable. One night, a strong wind blew, throwing the doves’ nest to the ground. I heard the twigs (细枝) break apart. I surveyed the damage. Nothing good ever lasted. I wouldn’t blame the doves if they never came back. But they returned. And they paid no attention to the pile of sticks that had once been their nest. They started again from the beginning. Again, though, the wind destroyed all their hard work. The next day, and the next, they started again, as if nothing had happened. 注意： 1．续写词数应为100左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: I knew I had to do something. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: “It works! The birds are back!” Matthew announced. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I looked at the steep, rocky mountain ahead of me and knew that my strength had abandoned me. Even the fresh bear tracks pressed in the recently fallen snow failed to make me take another step. My tired eyes met my father’s, and I felt too exhausted for tears. “Leave me. Seek help. Return for me. I cannot move my legs,” I uttered wearily. Earlier that day, my father and I set off on a brief journey accompanied by my brother and a friend who acted as our guide. Our companion had assured us that it would be an effortless two hour hiking through a natural environment. We were eager and filled with anticipation. Having spent the spring, summer, and early autumn hiking in the mountains with my father, I had been confident that this hike would present no difficulties. However, from the start, we found ourselves over a snow-covered ridge, and it appeared rougher than expected. As two hours passed without reaching our destination, it became evident that our friend had made a mistake. We had not yet reached the falls, yet he insisted that they were just a short distance away. Despite being accompanied by falling snow and howling winds, we pressed on. By the time we finally arrived at the falls, darkness and weariness had taken hold of us. Nevertheless, we couldn’t help but be fascinated by the charming pink, green, and copper as we observed the graceful fish swimming in its natural habitat. As late as it was, we could only rest and enjoy the scenery for a short while in order to make it back to the car before dark. Our friend assured us that we’d find the rest of the hike easy and short. However, it proved to be anything but. The mountain we encountered next was the steepest we had faced so far. Each step I took felt like my legs were being squeezed into my stomach. As we climbed down, my legs became increasingly knotted, and it brought great pain to my knees. We hoped that each climb would be the last, only to find another peak ahead. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Darkness enveloping us, my legs reach a point of giving out. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ With his encouragement, I struggled to my feet. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段（每段75词左右，共150词左右），使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My name is Andy. I was the new boy in the class. I was twelve when I moved to London. Having lost all my old friends, I felt shy and lonely at my new school. Most people weren’t very interested in a shy new boy. Colin was one of the few people who were kind to me. He often invited me to join his particular group, and as a result, I started getting to know people. Colin and I became good friends. We trusted each other and we could talk about personal matters, things that were important to us. Five years later, Colin’s father was knocked over by a car and died a few days later. The family had to move to a much smaller house in order to manage financially. Colin changed completely, becoming silent and moody. He had always been a clever, hard-working student but now he seemed to lose all interest in his work. He started losing friends. About three months ago, a group of us were playing football together after school. Having left something in the cloakroom, I went inside to get it, finding Colin going through the pockets of people’s coats. In his hand he had a wallet, but it wasn’t his! I just looked at him. Colin went bright red. “I’ll put it back right now,” he said, and he did so. I turned round and walked out without saying a word. Last week our school had a big fair in order to raise money for a charity. It was very successful and by the end of the day, we had made about £500. Holding the box, our head teacher said with a smile “We have raised £500 here.” But to our surprise, the next morning, we were told that the money had been stolen. I decided to ask Colin about the theft, and this morning I went to see him. I approached Colin with a heavy heart, knowing that this conversation could be hard. “Colin, I need to ask you something,” I began cautiously. He looked up at me, his eyes filled with a mixture of curiosity and worry. “Did you take the money from the charity fair?” I asked directly, hoping to get a straight answer. 注意: 1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 每段的开头语已为你写好。 Colin’s face turned pale, unable to meet my eyes. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I could see the pain in his eyes, and despite my disappointment, I couldn’t help but feel empathy (同情) for my friend. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的短文。 When I was a little girl, I was crazy about snow and winter was my favorite season. I still remember playing with my friends and family with the snow falling all around. I loved to watch the snowflakes flying in all directions. There was a strong desire inside me that I was eager to have my own snow as a special gift on my birthday. To my great disappointment, the snow disappeared before my birthday and started after it. I was completely mad. I just hungered for my birthday snow. I asked my beloved grandmother why it didn’t snow on my birthday over and over again. She laughed, telling me I had asked the same question for too many times. At the same time she promised that she would make it snow when I was enjoying life to the fullest and we agreed to keep it our secret. When I begged her for my next birthday snow with eagerness, she just patted me on the shoulder gently, not giving a definite reply. That cold winter, before my birthday, my grandmother died. I was deeply sad, but a bit angry because she had promised me to make it snow. The day of my tenth birthday, I wok e up and ran to my window, hoping to see just one snowflake. No luck. I cried and cried, thinking about my grandmother and the dream promise. There were still friends, gifts and a big dinner; there was still no snow. What’s worse, there was no my beloved grandmother. I would pray for my birthday snow in the following years, but it never came. Never! By my sixteenth birthday, I had lost all hope of getting my snow, even though I still wished for it. During my party, I had the best time ever! I enjoyed the company of my friends and family, and I was truly happy. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 Paragraph 1: I was outside with a friend when she asked me if I was having a good time. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: When I got home, my mother told me there was a surprise for me. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 7．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。 When I lived in Portland, Oregon, I taught English as a Second Language at a local community college. I had adult students in my class from Vietnam, Mexico, Russia and many other countries. Although they came from many lands, fighting for a better life, they had one thing in common: a desperate yearning(渴望) to learn English well. Many of the students worked in a factory for twelve hours throughout the night and hurriedly took a bus in the morning straight to our 8:00A．M. class. They attended my class on time whatever the weather. And they waited until after class to go home and sleep. Sometimes I would see them struggling to keep their eyes open in the beginning. However, their active participation in class drove away their physical tiredness as well as livened up the atmosphere. Some students even raised a bunch of questions by gesture after class. They were always there working hard, earnest and eager to learn. Despite their lack of sleep and long hours at work, the level of attendance and attentiveness in class was always excellent. No one called in sick. No one was absent-minded. Some of the students had as many as three jobs and took the bus everywhere they went because they couldn’t afford cars. To teach the course, I needed to use a lot of pictures and hand gestures, since I didn’t know all their respective languages. One of the things I taught was a simple dialogue called “Shopping for a New Coat”. They enjoyed standing up and acting out the gestures that accompanied the text of the story. Sometimes I wondered if I was really teaching my students in the best way possible. But I gave my all to this class, and they gave their all to me. If nothing else, they would always remember what to say if they ever went “shopping for a new coat”. Soon, the language course came to an end. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 On the last day of class, they held a wonderful party that was filled with good food and laughter. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I lifted from the box a beautiful, new, full-length coat. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 8．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Natasha Steer and her son Zac were about to miss their bus. As she turned the corner, she called back over her shoulder. “Zac, PLEASE. We’re going to miss it!” They were walking from their hotel in Phnom Penh, Cambodia, and Zac was dragging behind. It was hot and his bag was heavy, but Steer kept up the pace — they’d be left behind otherwise. “My stomach hurts!” Zac’s voice came from too far behind her. She turned, impatient. “I know, but we really need to keep going, OK?” “OK …but it really hurts …” She turned to keep walking, assuming that if she kept up the pace he’d speed it up, too. She felt bad. Her nine-year-old son was rightfully uncomfortable under his backpack and the hot sun during a long walk, and a stomach ache on top of that couldn’t be pleasant. Still, they needed to make this bus to Ho Chi Min City. He’d be able to rest once we sat down. She sped up as they neared the bus stop, eyes searching the platforms until they landed with relief on their bus. She turned to see Zac dragging himself up the sidewalk, leaving her pack on the ground before walking back toward him. She took his bag off so she could carry it the rest of the way. “Does it still hurt?” asked Steer. He nodded. “I don’t feel good.” Steer handed Zac some water and told him he would feel better if they got on the bus and she carried their backpacks to the bus, leaving them in the pile with the others while she searched her pocket for their bus tickets. On the bus and in their seats, she handed Zac the water bottle one more time. He leaned his head on her shoulder, closing his eyes. Suddenly, Zac doubled over, vomiting onto his feet. “Oh no — hold on!” she moved quickly to get him a bag to vomit (呕吐) in, saving his feet and the floor from some of the mess. He looked up, apologetic, and Steer felt the eyes of everyone on the bus on them. “Don’t worry about it honey, it doesn’t matter — do you feel better? Here — have some water.” As she twisted off the cap, Zac began to throw up again — only this time, there was no bag. Moving quickly to help him, Steer knocked over the two-liter water bottle. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 She felt flurried (慌乱) as the bus attendant came up to see what was happening. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Learning about Zac’s serious conditions, all other passengers did what Steer unexpected. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 9．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I’ve always thought of my mother Lee-Ann as a superhero because she has a huge heart full of love for anyone. I could write about all of the wonderful things she has done, but I want to focus on the project she does every year that has shaped my whole family and everyone around us: She collects money and puts it in a little jar that we refer to as “The Charity Jar.” Every year, she takes this money and puts it toward something—a cause, an act of kindness, anything that can help someone. Sometimes, she buys coffees for the next people in line at a coffee shop. Other times, she buys something for an organization that needs it. If you ask her about this tradition, she will tell you that she is carrying on something that her mother used to do around the holidays. She manages to get our whole family involved in this movement every year. Last year, she helped an organization where I volunteered—Ruth’s Place—a homeless women’s shelter in Wilkes-Barre, Pennsylvania. I had been helping in the shelter when I noticed the wish list on the wall: comforters (被子), a DVD player, a coffee maker and supplies. I told my mom, and within a day she had already asked if our family wanted to help Ruth’s Place. We all agreed and decided that the coffee maker and supplies would be the best things for our family to work on together. A few days later, Mom found a coffee maker online, showed it to us, and with a few clicks it was on its way. We gathered the rest of the supplies and called the shelter to find a day that we could deliver them. On Thanksgiving Day, I drove my mom to the shelter—very slowly because she had baked fresh chocolate cupcakes for the women, and they were sitting on my clean leather seats. She had never been in the shelter before, but the whole way she talked about how excited she was to be able to check off something on their list. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 When we took the gifts inside, the women were so happy. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ My mother had tears in her eyes as we walked to my car. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 10．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Rani jumped off the school bus. Splash! She landed right in the muddy rainwater. It had been a Friday full of disasters. Angry thoughts boiled inside Rani’s head as she marched home in the rain. Why did she have to forget her raincoat back home? Why did she have to risk taking the school bus back home? Why did her hair have to wave up like a giant cotton candy balloon just when she wanted it to behave? Why, why, why, fumed (烦恼) Rani as she turned the backdoor key. “Rani, is that you?” Mama called from the family room. Suddenly Rani’s cousins, Amit and Sumit, came charging toward her. “How many eggs does Rani have in that nest on her head?” laughed Amit. “Let me get them off Rani’s head!” shouted Sumit. This was really too much. Rani was upset. She fled out of the door, down the driveway, and back up the road she’d walked down minutes before. Angry as Ran I was, she knew that she should calm down. Without noticing, she walked behind a green curtain of lush (茂盛的) bamboo. Tearing through the wild growth, she made her way down a narrow mud path into a clearing. She threw her schoolbag on the ground and breathed hard. Lying on her schoolbag, she bitterly remembered the hours, days, and weeks she had spent trying to soften her hair from using her grandmother’s special mixture of coconut to washing it with Sunsilk shampoo—but in vain. Before long, the tiring day caught up with Rani, and she fell into sleep. “Rani! Raa—aani!” Rani woke up to Mama’s calls. She lifted her head from her knees. She wandered absently around the bamboo overlooking her house. Rani hugged herself, making no response. “I still need time to calm down,” she told herself, “Amit and Sumit shouldn’t have made fun of me.” Alone in her secret hideout, Rani watched the shadows get longer and begin to disappear as dusk fell. Suddenly the leaves rustled (沙沙作响). 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Someone was making its way towards her. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Rani! Here you are . Mama said relievedly ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考答案 1． 【参考范文】 18 years later, 66-year-old Carl booked a taxi to the hospital. He had retired from work and had developed health issues. He was going to the hospital for some tests. He was waiting outside when a taxi pulled over. Carl waved at the young driver. He got in and told the driver to drop him off at the hospital. “Alright, sir!” the driver replied and continued driving. They didn’t talk much in the car when Carl suddenly realized he left his wallet at home. “Sir, you don’t have to pay me. All the trips I make to the hospital are free!” the driver said. Carl was astonished. “Free trips to the hospital? But why?” “When I was little, I had seizures, and a driver drove me to the hospital for free and saved my life. His kindness inspired me, so I do the same!” Carl felt lighter and happier. “What’s your name?” he asked the driver, and tears rose to his eyes when the driver said, “TYLER.” Carl spoke no more, wiping tears of joy as they proceeded to the hospital. 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了疲惫的司机Carl在连续开车12小时后，偶遇Thomas夫人抱着疾病发作的儿子Tyler，急需医院救治。原本的出租车司机拒绝帮助，Carl则迅速将他们送往医院，确保Tyler及时得到治疗并脱离危险。Tyler的母亲感激Carl的救助，想要付钱给他。但Carl遵循自己的原则，表示对前往医院的人不收费。 【内容解析】1. 段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“18年后，66岁的Carl叫了一辆出租车去医院”和第二段首句中的“免费去医院”可知，第一段可描写Carl因为健康问题需要去医院检查，顺利坐上出租车，在车上发现没有带钱包，司机告知他这是免费的。 ②由第二段首句内容“Carl很吃惊。‘免费去医院？但是为什么呢？’”可知，第二段可描写这名司机告知Carl原因，Carl发现他竟是自己多年前帮助过的Tyler，内心充满感动。 2. 续写线索：66岁的Carl叫车去医院——Carl坐上车——Carl没带钱包，司机告知免费——Carl疑惑——司机说明原因——Carl得知司机是Tyler，内心感受 3. 词汇激活 行为类 ①回答，答复：reply/respond/answer ②意识到：realize/recognize ③拯救：save/rescue ④激励：inspire/motivate/encourage 情绪类 ①轻松的：light/relaxed ②喜悦：joy/delight/happiness [高分句型1] They didn’t talk much in the car when Carl suddenly realized he left his wallet at home. (when引导时间状语从句、that引导宾语从句并被省略) [高分句型2] Carl spoke no more, wiping tears of joy as they proceeded to the hospital. (现在分词作状语、as引导时间状语从句) 2． 【参考范文】     Link was about to strike with all his strength when the dog opened his eyes. He attempted to sit up but he couldn’t even move a step because of his serious injuries. However, after several attempts, he finally succeeded in standing up with a howl of pain, which surprised Link greatly. He stepped back and back, a sense of pity and guilt overwhelming him and the stone in his hands dropped to the ground unconsciously. He took off his overcoat in a hurry and coated the dog with care. His watery eyes welled up with pain but a light of hope. Link at once took the dog and headed to the nearest pet hospital. The doctor in the pet hospital took the dog into the operating room. After the door was closed, Link walked up and down, waiting outside of the room anxiously. Though the vet told him that they would spare no effort to save the dog, it was really in bad condition. In the bottom of his heart, he hoped the dog could go through the operation. It took a long time before the door reopened. He walked up and asked how it was going.The vet comforted him and told him that the operation went very well, leading him to the next office. Until then did he breathe a sign of relief. 【写作分析】本文以一只受伤的柯利牧羊犬为线索。文章讲述了Link原本打算结束一只严重受伤、濒临死亡的狗狗的痛苦，但在最后一刻被狗狗强烈的生存意志所触动，决定救助并带它前往医院，最终狗狗手术成功，让Link松了一口气的故事。这体现了对生命的尊重和动物顽强生命力的主题。 【内容解析】1.段落续写 ①由第一段句首内容“Link正准备使出全身的力气去打，这时狗睁开了眼睛。”可知，第一段可以描写Link改变想法，打算拯救这条牧羊犬的性命。 ②由第二段句首内容“宠物医院的医生把狗带进了手术室。”可知，第二段可以描写Link把牧羊犬送到宠物医院后，焦急地等待着医生对牧羊犬的治疗结果。 2.续写线索：准备使出全身力气——牧羊犬不顾伤势站起来——怜悯内疚地扔掉石头——送狗去宠物医院——医生救治牧羊犬——牧羊犬安全后松了一口气 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①尝试做某事：attempt to do/try to do ②朝……走去：head to/make one’s way to ③不遗余力地去做某事：spare no effort to do/do everything in one’s power to do 情绪类 ①眼中充满了泪水：His watery eyes welled up/Tears began to gather in his eyes ②使吃惊：surprise/astonish/amaze 【高分句型1】However, after several attempts, he finally succeeded in standing up with a howl of pain, which surprised Link greatly. (运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句) 【高分句型2】Though the vet told him that they would spare no effort to save the dog, it was really in bad condition.(运用了though引导的让步状语从句以及that引导的宾语从句) 3． 【参考范文】 Paragraph 1: I knew I had to do something. The white dove and its mate had provided brightness during my dark days. Now it was time to help them in return. I cut a piece of hardware cloth, forming it into the shape of a nest and then securing the ends. I then hammered it into the wall next to the rubber tree. After I had finished all the work, there was only an hour before the doves usually made their visit. Matthew and I stood by the sliding glass door, waiting and hoping. Paragraph 2: “It works! The birds are back!” Matthew announced. Hearing my son’s excited voice, which was as clear as a bell, I looked up. There they were-swooping and circling near the nest, trying to add some twigs to their new home. A few weeks later, three babies broke free from their shells. “Chirp, chirp,” Matthew sang. I held him in my arms and kissed him, enjoying the happiness of the moment. Looking at their flittering shadows and hearing them chirp, I felt the dim grayness within my heart disappeared, replaced by the strength of life. 【写作分析】本文以故事发展顺序为线索展开，讲述了作者的儿子Matthew每天都看到一些鸽子来到自己家的院子里，作者和儿子注意到鸽子要在橡胶树上筑巢。一天夜里，刮起了一阵大风，把筑在树上的鸽巢掀到地上。作者以为鸽子们再也不回来，但它们又回来了，并且又在树上筑巢。尽管大风又一次摧毁了它们所有的辛勤工作，但是它们继续努力。 【内容解析】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“我知道我必须做点什么。”可知，第一段可描写作者如何帮助鸽子们，并且等待鸽子们的到来。 ②由第二段首句内容“起作用了!鸟儿又回来了!’马修宣布。”可知，第二段可描写鸽子们回来后的情况。鸽子筑巢给新家添加树枝、孵蛋。这让作者意识到生活充满了无法想象的奇迹和惊喜。 2.续写线索：作者决定帮助鸽子——剪硬布，做成鸟巢的形状，然后把两端固定好——满怀希望地等待——鸽子回来发现新巢——小鸽子孵出——作者感到生活充满奇迹和惊喜 3.词汇激活行为类 ①帮助：help /do sb. a favor/give sb. a hand ②完成：complete/finish/accomplish ③提供：provide / offer/supply 情绪类 ①兴奋的：excited/thrilled ②开心：happiness/delight [高分句型1]I cut a piece of hardware cloth, forming it into the shape of a nest and then securing the ends.（运用了现在分词作状语） [高分句型2]After I had finished all the work, there was only an hour before the doves usually made their visit.（运用了after和before引导的时间状语从句） 4． 【参考范文】 Darkness enveloping us, my legs reach a point of giving out. Noticing me overwhelmingly exhausted, my father told the other two to keep moving, and that we would catch up shortly. He took both of my hands in his and squeezed tightly. “I’m not leaving you. It’s getting dark. We need to keep going. I’ll help you.” “I can’t,” I said as tears pooled in my eyes. “You can do it. Keep your eyes focused on your feet and on me.” With his encouragement, I struggled to my feet. As I made every step forward, his words rang in my ears, “Just take one small step at a time.” Some of my steps were so small that we hardly moved forward, but I persisted. Eventually, we did manage to get over the ridge, relieved to find that it was the final major obstacle on our path. Years have passed but Dad’s words remained in me: taking one small step at a time will eventually get me where I need to be. 【写作分析】本文以事件发展为线索展开，讲述了作者和父亲等人一起徒步旅行，过程充满艰辛，作者最终精疲力竭，父亲给予鼓励和帮助的故事。 【内容解析】段落续写： 由第一段首句“黑暗笼罩着我们，我的双腿达到了精疲力竭的地步。”可知，第一段可描写作者精疲力竭，父亲表示不会丢下作者，会帮助作者。 由第二段首句“在他的鼓励下，我挣扎着站起来。”可知，第二段可描写作者在父亲的鼓励下坚持前进，最终克服困难。 续写线索： 双腿无力——父亲安慰——受到鼓励——艰难前行——克服困难——有所感悟 词汇激活 行为类 坚持：persist/insist on 前进：move forward/advance 克服：overcome/conquer 情绪类 精疲力竭：exhausted/worn out/tired out 欣慰：relieved/feel a profound sense of relaxation [高分句型1] Noticing me overwhelmingly exhausted, my father told the other two to keep moving, and that we would catch up shortly.（使用了现在分词短语作状语） [高分句型2] Some of my steps were so small that we hardly moved forward, but I persisted.（使用了so…that引导的结果状语从句） 5． 【参考范文】 Colin’s face turned pale, unable to meet my eyes. I became very angry, glaring at him with deep disappointment. He went bright red, admitting that he had stolen it in a low voice. I slowly calmed down and hugged him, telling him that I would be willing to help him overcome his difficulty. He wept and then we had a sincere talk face to face. At last we agreed to return the money. I could see the pain in his eyes, and despite my disappointment, I couldn’t help but feel empathy for my friend. We went to the head teacher Mrs.Smith, together. In the teachers’ office, Roy returned the money to Mrs.Smith, and guaranteed not to do such things again. Though Mrs.Smith was so surprised that she couldn’t believe her eyes, she praised him for his courage and correction and told him if he had difficulty with finance she would be ready to help him. Roy was moved to tears. After that, we became good friends again. We trusted each other and shared sorrow and happiness together． 【写作分析】本文以时间为线索展开。作者的好朋友科林在经历家庭变故后变得沉默寡言，有一次作者看到科林正在翻别人外套的口袋，后来学校的一次慈善募捐款项被偷，作者怀疑是科林偷的，并直接质问，科林承认后，作者陪着科林一起向老师归还了这笔钱，他们又重新变成了彼此信任的好朋友。 【内容解析】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“科林的脸变得苍白，不敢直视我的眼睛。”可知，第一段可描写科林承认了钱是他偷的。 ②由第二段首句内容“我能看到他眼中的痛苦，尽管我很失望，但我还是忍不住同情我的朋友。”可知，第二段可描写作者陪着科林一起归还了募捐款。 2.续写线索：承认——安慰——恳谈——归还——称赞——重归于好 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①.拥抱：hug/embrace ②.克服：overcome/conquer ③.归还：return/give back 情绪类 ①.生气的：angry/annoyed/irritated ②.惊讶的：surprised/amazed/astonished [高分句型1] I became very angry, glaring at him with deep disappointment. (运用了现在分词作状语) [高分句型2] I slowly calmed down and hugged him, telling him that I would be willing to help him overcome his difficulty. (运用了that引导的宾语从句和现在分词作状语) [高分句型3] Though Mrs. Smith was so surprised that she couldn’t believe her eyes, she praised him for his courage and correction and told him if he had difficulty with finance she would be ready to help him. (运用了though引导的让步状语从句和that引导的结果状语从句) 6． 【参考范文】 I was outside with a friend when she asked me if I was having a good time. I told her I was having the best time ever! I was enjoying life to the fullest. Then I saw the white snow falling all around. I behaved like a little child on Christmas morning as I ran around screaming and laughing. She asked me if I had ever seen snow before. I laughed, saying I had. However, it was a special snow, my snow. She laughed at my childish action, but I didn’t care. When I got home, my mother told me there was a surprise for me. I wondered what it was. She gave me a small white box that had snowflake wrapping on it. I asked her what it was and she told me to stop asking so many questions and just open it. I did. Surprisingly, it was a handwritten letter from my beloved grandmother. Mum told me that it was my grandmother’s final wish to give me this on my “sweet sixteenth”. I cried and hugged my mum, although she didn’t understand. I said a silent prayer to my smiling grandmother, who I was certain was, and always had been, watching over me. 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者小时候喜欢雪，后来祖母不在了，好几年都没有下雪。直到多年后作者再次收到了“生日雪”——一封祖母留下的信。 【内容解析】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“我和一个朋友在外面，她问我玩得好不好”可知，第一段可描写她和朋友尽情享受16岁生日后，梦寐以求的属于她的“生日雪”终于降临。所以她欣喜若狂。 ②由第二段首句内容“当我回到家，我妈妈告诉我有一个惊喜给我”可知，第二段可描写惊喜生日礼物，表达作者对祖母的思念之情。 2.续写线索：玩得开心——询问情况——告知惊喜——祖母留下信——作者感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①嘲笑：laugh at/tease ②注视：watch over/stare at ③拥抱：hug/embrace 情绪类 ①幼稚：childish/naive ②确信：certain/ be sure of [高分句型1] She asked me if I had ever seen snow before. (运用了if引导宾语从句) [高分句型2] She gave me a small white box that had snowflake wrapping on it. (运用了that引导定语从句) 7． 【参考范文】 On the last day of class, they held a wonderful party filled with good food and laughter. Happiness blanketing the room, I proudly stood by the door, watching them toasting, laughing and chirping in their second language. Bright smiles radiated from their faces, reminding me of how they overcame fatigue and obstacles with enthusiasm. Hardly had I stepped in to join them when I felt a gentle touch on my shoulder. A beautifully-packed box popped in. Surprised, I carefully unwrapped the box, heart pounding with joy and expectations. I lifted from the box a beautiful, new, full-length coat. Memories of how we practices “shopping for a new coat” immediately came flooding back. Deeply touched, I looked up at my students, just in time to meet their eyes glittering with gratitude. My heart melted. No sooner had I carefully folded the coat than they sincerely expressed their thanks to me. Grinning with moistened eyes, I totally immersed myself in the warm atmosphere, while the new coat, as a witness to how my students appreciated my course, would be cherished forever. 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在俄勒冈州波特兰市一所社区大学教英语，学生们来自不同的国家，但都想学好英语，作者运用图片和手势帮助他们完成简单的对话“购买新外套”，最后一天的课上，他们举行了一个精彩的聚会，作者收到了一个漂亮的盒子，盒子里有一件长外套，代表着学生们的感激，作者十分感动。 【内容解析】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“在最后一天的课上，他们举行了一个精彩的聚会，充满了美食和笑声。”和第二段首句内容可知，第一段可描写作者看到同学们用英语交流，很有成就感，然后收到了一个盒子。 ②由第二段首句内容“我从盒子里拿出一件漂亮的、崭新的全长外套。”可知，第二段可描写这件外套让作者想起了自己编写的对话，它代表着学生们的感激，作者十分感动。 2.续写线索：参加聚会——学生们用英语交流——收到盒子——看见长外套——想起了教学的记忆——十分感动，决定珍藏 3.词汇激活 行为类 观察：watch/observe 表达：express/convey/extend 珍惜：cherish/treasure 克服：overcome/get over 情绪类 快乐：happiness/joy/delight 感动：touched/moved [高分句型1]Happiness blanketing the room, I proudly stood by the door, watching them toasting, laughing and chirping in their second language.（独立主格结构和现在分词作状语） [高分句型2] No sooner had I carefully folded the coat than they sincerely expressed their thanks to me.（no sooner…than…（一……就……）固定句型，含有时间状语从句和部分倒装结构） 8. 【参考范文】 She felt flurried (慌乱) as the bus attendant came up to see what was happening. Fearing that they might not let them stay on the bus if they thought he was sick, Steer explained to the attendant that maybe it was motion sickness that made Zac vomit, regretting to him and the passengers for making the floor of the bus dirty. However, the attendant was very warmhearted and asked them move up to the front. She supported the kid into Steer’s shoulder and told him to close his eyes or stare straight ahead so he wouldn’t get sick. But it didn’t make sense. Learning about Zac’s serious conditions, all other passengers did what Steer unexpected. They begged the driver to rush Zac to the nearest hospital, which made Steer’s welling up in her eyes. Despite kicking against the rules, the driver eventually accepted their request and sent Steer and her son to the nearest hospital. On arrival of the nearest hospital, Zac was diagnosed with food poisoning and was given appropriate cure. The kid was safe, making her relieved a lot. She was very grateful to the attendant and the passengers on the bus and a great warmth filled her that day. 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了娜塔莎·斯蒂尔和她的儿子扎克即将错过公共汽车。尽管扎克胃痛走得很慢，但是斯蒂尔还是继续往前走，因为这样扎克也会加快脚步跟上她。最终他们俩上了公共汽车，但是扎克仍然感到不舒服，在车上呕吐了。 【内容解析】1. 段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“当公共汽车服务员走过来看发生了什么事时，她感到很慌张。”可知，第一段可描写斯蒂尔担心公共汽车服务员可能不会让他们留在车上，对情况进行解释并向大家道歉。 ②由第二段首句内容“得知扎克的严重病情后，所有其他乘客都做出了斯蒂尔意想不到的举动。”可知，第二段可描写车上的乘客对于这对母子的帮助。 2. 续写线索：感到慌乱——解释呕吐的原因——服务员安排坐到前排——其他乘客乞求司机快速去医院——司机带他们去医院——诊断为食物中毒——扎克安全——斯蒂尔感到温暖 3. 词汇激活 行为类 ①担忧，害怕：fear/ worry about/ be afraid ②解释：explain/ account for/ make clear ③乞求：beg/ require/ demand ④冲：rush/ dash 情绪类 ①宽慰，松了口气：make her relieved a lot/relieve her a good deal ②感激的：grateful/ thankful 【高分句型1】Fearing that they might not let them stay on the bus if they thought he was sick, Steer explained to the attendant that maybe it was motion sickness that made Zac vomit, regretting to him and the passengers for making the floor of the bus dirty. (运用了现在分词作状语，运用了that引导的宾语从句，if引导条件状语从句以及that引导的定语从句) 【高分句型2】They begged the driver to rush Zac to the nearest hospital, which made Steer’s welling up in her eyes. (运用了which引导的定语从句) 9． 【参考范文】 When we took the gifts inside, the women were so happy. My mother was bright-eyed, carrying chocolate cupcakes into a shelter full of women she did not know. She stood by the front desk, thanking women for their praise on her baking and talking to the volunteers as I filled out the donation sheet. All the smiling faces lit up the shelter full of sweet smell of chocolate. As we left, we wished the women “Happy Thanksgiving,” and we were met with a chorus of “Happy Thanksgivings” and “Thank You.” My mother had tears in her eyes as we walked to my car. I did not have to ask why; I knew that she did not cry out of pity. She did not cry out of sorrow. She cried because she was thankful to have the opportunity to help someone in need with her whole family. I am thankful for my mother and the lessons she has shown me in love and kindness. I can say with certainty that I am not the only one whom she has made a better person. 【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者母亲通过慈善项目帮助他人的善举，以及感恩节时她如何与家人一起为无家可归的妇女提供援助，展现了母亲的爱心和善良。 【内容解析】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“当我们把礼物拿进去的时候，女人们非常高兴。”以及第二段首句内容“当我们走向我的车时，母亲眼里含着泪水。”可知，第一段可描写收容所的人们非常感激母亲。 ②由第二段首句内容“当我们走向我的车时，母亲眼里含着泪水。”可知，第二段可描写母亲为这一切感到开心，也希望自己能够帮助更多的人。 2.续写线索：作者的母亲总是坚持做善事——她说这一切都是受到了自己母亲的影响——作者在感恩节那天送母亲去收容所——作者的母亲不仅为收容所购买了愿望清单上的物品，还亲自烘焙了蛋糕——收容所的人看到这些非常感动，都在感谢母亲——回家时，母亲眼含泪水，她希望自己能够帮助更多的人 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①认识：be acquainted with/know ②充满了：full of/filled with ③离开：leave/set off 情绪类 ①感激的：thankful/grateful ②悲伤：sorrow/sadness 【高分句型1】My mother was bright-eyed, carrying chocolate cupcakes into a shelter full of women she did not know.（运用了省略关系代词的定语从句） 【高分句型2】She stood by the front desk, thanking women for their praise on her baking and talking to the volunteers as I filled out the donation sheet.（运用了as引导的状语从句） 10． 【参考范文】 Someone was making its way towards her. Rani froze. A shiver went down her spine. She crouched lower, not daring to move a muscle. At that moment, she began to regret not answering her mother’s call. She wished she was in her own warm home. The leaves parted, and a dark form stepped into the clearing. Rani’s heart leapt with fear. She opened her mouth to scream. The next moment Mama was kneeling next to her. “Rani! Here you are!” Mama said relievedly. Relief and joy flooded through Rani. She flung her arms around Mama and clung to her. “What are you doing here?” Mama asked. “Everyone’s been looking all over the place for you. Come, let’ s go home.” Rani shook her head. A lone tear slid down her cheek. “What’ s wrong, my child?” Mama asked gently. More tears streamed down her face. “I hate my hair!” Mama sighed and hugged Rani rubbing her back smoothly and said, “Your hair is beautiful. It’s so distinct and striking. Just be yourself.” 【写作分析】文章以人物为线索展开，讲述了Rani因为一系列不如意的事情而心情低落，特别是她因为忘记带雨衣而被雨淋湿，以及她因为头发无法控制而感到沮丧。在遭受家人和表弟的嘲笑后，她逃到了一个秘密的藏身之处，试图平复自己的情绪。然而，尽管她试图冷静下来，但她仍然对表弟的嘲笑感到愤怒。 【内容解析】1.段落续写 ①由第一段首句内容“有人朝她走来。”可知，第一段可描写Rani害怕的心理并解释来的人是谁。 ②由第二段首句内容““Rani！给你！””可知，第二段了描写妈妈安慰Rani的过程以及Rani的反应。 2.续写线索：感到害怕和后悔——妈妈跪在她身边——妈妈安慰Rani——Rani哭泣——妈妈鼓励Rani 3.词汇激活 行为类 尖叫：scream→screech 走进：step into/walk into 拥抱：hug/embrace 情绪类 温柔地：gently/tenderly 引人注目的：striking/remarkable [高分句型1] She crouched lower, not daring to move a muscle.（运用了现在分词作状语） [高分句型2] She wished she was in her own warm home.（运用了省略了that的宾语从句） 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$