专题05 如何刻画具体场景 - 2024年新高考英语读后续写专项提高培优

专题05 如何刻画具体场景 一篇好的文章，无论在塑造角色、推动故事情节展开，还是传达主题上，都离不开栩栩如生的场景描绘。场景是由人物、事件与环境相互交融而构成的一幅立体画卷。因此，对场景的刻画既要全面展现，又要集中笔力，突出重点。既要描绘出场景的整体轮廓，又要刻画出细腻的细节；既要展现出场景的全貌，又要点面结合，主次分明。 一、人物活动场景 细化动作延缓过程，立体动感展现鲜活 【2022年1月浙江卷续写，“与学霸做项目”】 从设定假设，到做调查问卷，再到联系学校申请实验许可，一切都如预期般顺利，但不好的事情却在等待着我。 Everything went on smoothly as expected, ranging from setting hypothesis, making a questionnaire to contacting a school for permission to conducting experiments, but something bad was in store for me. 【连续相接的动词叠加能够使读者身临其境，如关于“合作式项目”进展顺利的描写用setting，making，contacting，conducting，环环相扣，一气呵成。】 【2021年1月浙江卷续写，“南瓜卡头”】 让我沮丧的是，爸爸妈妈低声说着，轻声笑着，咯咯笑着，最后哈哈大笑起来。 Much to my dismay, my dad and mom whispered, chuckled, giggled and finally burst into laughter. 【四连动，由轻渐重，层层递升，所抒发的感情层层推进，增强语言的说服力和感染力。】 动作描写刻画高兴情绪 他先是蹦跶了一下，原地转了几圈，再跑上几步，又停了下来，四下望了望，嗅了嗅午后暖烘烘的空气，然后一路跑进了果园。他在一颗苹果树的树荫下停住了脚步，将结实的鼻子插入地里，哼哧哼哧地拱起泥土来，真是欢乐得不得了! He gave a jump in the air, twirled, ran a few steps, stopped, looked all around, sniffed the smells of afternoon, and then set off walking down through the orchard. Pausing in the shade of an apple tree, he put his strong snout into the ground and began pushing, digging and rooting. He felt very happy. 【连续的动词描写能够反映出主人公当时快乐的一系列的反应，让其形象栩栩如生，给读者留下十分深刻的印象。】 【激动见面】 当贾利勒走进空地时，他会把夹克扔在筒状的泥炉上，然后张开双臂。这时候，玛利亚会跑到他身边，他就高高地抱起她，玛利亚欢快地欢呼着。 When Jalil entered the clearing, he would throw his jacket on the tandoor and open his arms. Mariam would walk, then finally run to him, and he would catch her under the arms and toss her up high. Mariam would squeal. 【这段动态场景描写随着人物的移动而变化：父亲从enter到throw到open到catch再到toss her up high,女儿从Walk到run to him再到squeal,画面流畅。】 【欢腾宴会】 人群变化越来越快，随着新客人的到来，人群分开，又在转瞬间组合。已经有一些 人开始四处闲逛，自信的姑娘在一群固定的人群中逛来逛去，一会儿在片刻的欢腾中成为 群人注意的中心，一会儿又得意洋洋地在不断变化的灯光下穿过变幻不定的面孔、声音和色彩扬长而去。 The groups change more swiftly, swell with new arrivals, dissolve and form in the same breath; already there are wanderers,confident girls who weave here and there among the stouter and more stable, become for a sharp, joyous moment the centre of a gro