名校协作体续写—沉默也是帮凶学案--2024届高三英语作文复习专项

续写之友情与诚实学案

一．话题语块学习：

Literally        ____________________    dent             ____________________

be associated with ____________________   bang the car into a tree____________________

make up a story  ____________________   lessen one’s rage     ____________________

perish one’s thought______________       have strong objections to doing sth_____________

inquiry_________---_________  v.        with great disbelief    ____________________

二．精彩语句学习：

The+比较级，the+比较级： The older we got, the more our values seemed to differ.

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状语从句：Nevertheless, after much request and a general questioning of my loyalty to our friendship, I decided that the least I could do was to act as a silent witness.

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三．话题语料积累：

如何表达生气
动作/心理/神态描写	修辞手段
         生气地说 ..., said Missy’s father ___________.          皱眉 Father ___________ at sb          怒火中烧beneath his dark eyebrows his eyes were ______ with anger.          怒视 He ________ ___ us with a pair of blazing black eyes.          气得面孔扭曲 Their faces were ________ with rage.          脸因生气变红 His face was _____ _____ anger and he was clearly at his wits ends about what to do.          脸变黑 His face was _______ _____ _____          一阵愤怒 ______________anger...he          声音变严肃He __________ his voice."	with a face as black as thunder. _________________。(比喻)

 

如何表达紧张不安
动作/心理/神态描写	修辞手段
         心情沉重with a______ heart/ my heart _____.          脸红 I________ with embarrassment 脸红          头晕 I felt _______ with anxiety.          心砰砰直跳At the words, my heart _______.          心跳厉害I could feel my heart _______./My heartbeat _________(加快)          脸色发白，汗水下滴，手发抖          My face turned white, drops of _____ shone upon my forehead, and my hands trembled          结巴 I __________	          Nervousness ______ me.(拟人)           Panic _________ me.吞噬(拟人)           I had knocking knees, cold feet, and goose pimples big as goose eggs.我双腿发软，__________________           /My heart was beating like a ____. (比喻)           How I wished the ground could open up and ______ me!(虚拟)

 

 

如何表达如释重负
如何表达如释重负	如何表达如释重负
         I felt _______/a huge wave of _______.          It was a great _______to do...          松了口气 I breathed/________ a sigh of relief.	          Telling the truth took a ______ off my mind/was a great _______ off my shoulders.(比喻)           a huge _______ was lifted off my shoulders.(比喻)           My heart suddenly ________(隐喻)

Para.1

1. 在仔细检查了车辆后，Missy的父亲问道：“我的车发生了什么事？”期望听到详细的事情经过。(非谓语)

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2. 显然是停车场里的某人在我不在的时候倒车撞到了我的车并留下了一个凹痕。(强调句)

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3. 接下来的几分钟见证了麦茜以坚定自信的语气讲述了她精心编织的故事，然而她的父亲却以怀疑的神态盯着她。(转折)

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Para.2

1. 我结结巴巴地说出了真相，不敢直视麦茜的父亲的眼睛。（非谓语）

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2. 我不应该答应帮助她欺骗她的父亲，也不应该对比自己的女儿更信任我的人保持沉默。(虚拟语气+定语从句)

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3. 房间一片寂静。（环境描写）

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4. 听完"全部真相"后，Missy的父亲突然转身面对我，眉头深锁，问道："这是真的吗？"(独立主格)

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参考范文：

Para.1 Finally, we presented Missy’s father with the car and the inquire began. Under a barrage [ˈbærɑːʒ] of(一连串的) inquiries, Missy recapped (v. 扼要重述) her concocted [kənˈkɒkt] (v.编造)story unhurriedly, while I stood there in silent agreement. After Missy finishing her seemingly perfect statement, her father raised his eyebrows and turned to me, waiting for my proof. However, once again, I chose silence under his scrutinizing [ˈskruːtənaɪzɪŋ] (审视的) eyes with my heart pounding violently. Suddenly, he walked over to the dented area for a closer inspection. It was at that point that pieces of bark from the tree that Missy had hit fell out.

Para.2 Her father looked at me with great disbelief. An enormous sense of guilt rose up in me as his cold eyes seemed to proclaim [prəˈkleɪm] (v. 宣告) me as the “guilty” bystander. I was so flustered [flʌstəd] (a.慌张的)that I wanted to explain but was interrupted by his harsh words, “You guys really failed me! Especially...” Instead of continuing his reproach [rɪˈprəʊtʃ](n.责备), he took a deep breath and turned his back on me. It dawned on me that the precious but fragile trust had been smashed by my silence. In fact, the process of how we apologized to make amends [əˈmendz] (n.赔偿) was just a blur, but the bitter lesson of being a silent accomplice [əˈkʌmplɪs] (n.同谋) was branded (v.铭刻) on my memory.

亲爱的学弟学妹你们好！

高三是艰苦的日子，也是快乐的日子。奋斗的足迹使人充实。回望我的高三生涯，在英语上刷的题数不胜数，而作文更是练了无数次，总是在找更好的语句，更好的构思，更好的框架。作文是很多人怕的一个题目，因为它的开放性非常强，对英语的综合素养要求非常高，而高分选手都是赢在作文上。其实续写高分不可怕，是有方法的，文中有很多词都可以直接拿来用，也可以通过一些语句猜到下文续写该怎么写，其实续写是没有标准答案的，只要剧情合理就可以，而合理的基础就是必须要读懂文章，在读懂文章情节然后构思情节再进行人物的描写还有环境的描写后，文章就会很充实了。例如本文看似没有什么内容可写，但是只要情节推动的同时加一些心理描写有紧张，羞愧，懊悔，再加上动作描写例如不同的看，听，说，脸部表情是怎么样的，其实就能写出很多内容，再用连接词，修饰词丰富一下就好了。当然这一些的前提是不能有语法错误，拼写错误等低级错误。

最慢的不是硅步，而是徘徊；最快的脚步不是冲刺，而是坚持。只要坚持练习相信学弟学妹们一定能赢得自己的璀璨。--浙江省内某知名大学学姐xue英语科高分

题目：名校协作体续写—沉默

第二节 (满分25分)

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Missy was absolutely my best friend in the whole world. We had known each other since first grade, and we literally did everything together. We frequently visited each other’s homes, we knew each other’s families like they were our own. The interesting thing about our relationship, however the fact was that the older we got, the more our values seemed to differ. We still enjoyed a lot of the same things, but I was a bit more settled while she loved being associated with popular people and things. Although she was basically a good person, she had no problem with forcing things to go her way.

Perhaps this is why it seemed that her family actually trusted me more than they trusted her. So, on the day when Missy showed up at my house with a huge dent (凹痕) in her father’s car, I knew that we were in for a troublesome time.

She had banged the car into a tree while out that day, and she knew her father was going to have an explanation. So she stopped by my house in order to make up a story that would lessen her father’s rage. Missy decided to tell him that while in a parking lot, someone must have backed into the car and dented it. Looking at the dent with some crashed leaves and bark still sticking there, I attempted to perish (打消) her thought, “I don’t think your father will buy it.” “Don’t worry,” she insisted, “even if my dad doesn’t trust me, he’ll trust you.” My role was to confirm for her. Now keep in mind that I had strong objections to lying and I wanted absolutely nothing to do with the situation. I loved her parents just like my own, and I did not want to be a party to this lie that Missy was creating. Nevertheless, after much request and a general questioning of my loyalty to our friendship, I decided that the least I could do was to act as a silent witness. That way, I wasn’t actually lying; I just wasn’t telling the full truth.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

An hour or so later, we presented Missy’s father with the car and the inquiry began.

Her father looked at me with great disbelief.

前文主要内容：Missy和我是好朋友，Missy要我帮忙隐瞒她撞车真相，因为她父亲非常信任我，我打算沉默，并认为这样就不算撒谎。

文本主要特点解读：心理描写的大量运用，阐述沉默对信任的伤害，注重人物性格的刻画，语言运用较为柔和。

写作中可能存在的问题： 不知道内容该写什么，词汇量缺乏使文章不够惊艳，前后衔接不当，内容理解失误

在考完试后的作文课上最重要的是语句积累，而不是盯着范文，毕竟不可能会有一摸一样的作文题目，然后再进行二次作文才能让自己记的更牢固，相信大家一定可以的！！！

我来做一下文本分析、原文化用以及写作构思：（过程性写作思路 呈现我的写作过程与思考）

Missy was absolutely my best friend in the whole world. We had known each other since first grade, and we literally did everything together. We frequently visited each other’s homes, we knew each other’s families like they were our own. The interesting thing about our relationship, however the fact was that the older we got, the more our values seemed to differ. We still enjoyed a lot of the same things, but I was a bit more