读后续写 第五节 微情节之收尾点睛 讲义-2023届高三英语二轮复习写作专项

第五节 微情节之“收尾点睛” 1. 细节呼应 在本部分第一章的第三节“伏笔与铺垫”中我们提到：读后续写要求续写内容和所给短文是一脉相承的，那么最好的方式就是呼应短文的细节。抓住可以呼应的细节，可以帮助我们打开思路，让文章的结尾更加精彩。 (1) 不一定呼应开头。我们经常会提到“首尾呼应”，其实我们呼应的点，不一定是文章的开头，还可以呼应原文中后段里的细节。 (2) 尽量形成变化/反差。按照“负一转一正”的行文思路，文章中的情节、人物、情绪等都会发生一定的变化，而这种变化往往能够凸显出文章的主题。 例1 “海上遇险”【2020·山东省泰安市高二上学期期末】 前文情节：我们全家去海滩玩，我不会游泳，就去划一条小渔船，突然海浪袭来，我被冲到了海水中。幸运的是，我被救了起来，送到了医院。 微情节构建： 前文细节①： One of my sisters who had worked abroad for 10 years returned home for her vacation. All the family members were happy. My parents gave her a simple celebration and prepared food for us to share. 前文细节① 结尾呼应 庆祝我的一个姐妹归国 庆祝我被救 前文细节②： While staying with them, an idea came to me. We could have a family outing on the beach! All of my siblings(兄弟姐妹) agreed!... The weather was nice and many people were enjoying the sea water. 前文细节② 结尾呼应 我们很开心地去海滩玩耍 我再也不想去海滩了 One possible version: My mother said we should have another celebration for my being saved. I told them the celebration would never be held at beach. 翻译：我妈妈说我们应该为我的得救再庆祝一次。我告诉他们，庆视活动永远不要在海滩举行了。 例2“重组家庭”【2021·福建省莆田市第一中学高二上学期期末】 前文情节：我的父亲再婚了，Jen是继母的女儿。我因她们的到来感到不开心，因为我觉得她们打破了我和爸爸的“二人小分队”，但是后来我发现她们母女也经历了很多困难，不再为自已感到难过，我也想让Jen开心一些。 微情节构建： 前文细节①：The snow crunched under our boots as we walked down the street....Jen shook her head and looked at me. Finally, she said, "On Thanksgiving, Mom and I always went to visit some friends on a farm. I especially loved seeing their big turkeys." 前文细节① 结尾呼应 雪很厚；Jen喜欢火鸡 我们堆了“火鸡雪人” 前文细节②： I called her Mom, but the word felt uncomfortable, like a pair of shoes that pinched (挤脚). I didn't remember my own mother; she had died in an accident when I was a baby.It had always been just Dad and me. We were a team. Now, so much had changed, and sometimes I wished I had the magic to change it back. 前文细节② 结尾呼应 我和父亲的二人小分队被打破了 我们四人形成了新的队伍 One possible version: A sense of happiness welled up in my heart and surged through me." I guess we can be a good team," I said to myself." Thanks to the snow turkey." 翻译：一种幸福感在我心中涌动。“我想我们可以成为一支好队伍，”