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读后续写之动作描写
简单有效的四个微技能
本课目标
· 1. 复习读后续写”三原则四步骤”
· 2. 能够理解并使用固定句式进行动作描写
· 3. 能够根据短文细节,合理选用动作描写撰写与原文相呼应的细节,提升续文合理度, 与原文融洽度及语言优美度.
1. 读后续写“三原则四步骤”
1. “三原则”:
(1) _________________原则
(2) _________________原则
(3) _________________原则
2. “四步骤”
(1) 读懂大意,理清脉络
(2) 细读首句,构思框架
(3) 增加细节,开始写作
(4) 修改润色,整洁誊写
如何使动作描写更饱满?
· Skill 1:Choose Accurate Verbs 用精准动词代替笼统动词
general words(笼统词)
concrete words(具体词)
walk
(蹑手蹑脚地走)
run
(猛冲)
look
(瞥见) (怒视) (凝视)
say/talk
(闲聊) (耳语)
cry
(啜泣)
eat
(咬) (咀嚼) (吞下)
· Skill 2:Choose proper phrases用恰当短语代替普通动词
start/begin _________________________________________
decide _________________________________________
cry _________________________________________
remember _________________________________________
tired _________________________________________
see _________________________________________
attract _________________________________________
· Skill 3:Action chains分解动作,形成动作链
She hugged the boy. (拥抱)
She___________ forward,_____________ and __________ the boy tightly.(冲向前+跳起来+一把抱住)
· Sentence pattern动作链句型1: _________________________________________
描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个______做了_____动作以上,可以用这样的结构,这可以进行大量的动作细节描写,完整的交代过程。
我早上匆忙去上学。(穿外套+抓起书包+冲去学校)
I _________ my coat hurriedly, _________ my bag and _________ to school this morning.
· Sentence pattern动作链句型2: 当出现两个动作,而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时,
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排了三个小时的队伍, 他被告知票被卖完了.
_________________ for 3 hours, he _________________ that the tickets had been