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第六节 写作技法3——格式套用
第一段提示语
情节安排:对话、动作、情感、冲突、心理活动、环境描写等。
第一句
细读开头提示语内容,在内容上衔接提示语并联系原文最后情节,可以是描写人物的情感和行为(情感描写+动作描写)。
第二句
主要(次要)人物的反应(动作、心理、语言描写以推动情节发展)。
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情节发展
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第三句
出现问题与矛盾冲突(冲突转折)。
第四句
为解决问题,主要/次要人物说了什么、做了什么及其心理活动。
第五句
为解决问题,主要/次要人物还做了什么。
第六句
问题仍然没有解决(冲突转折)。
第七句
衔接第二段提示语,作为第一段的最后一句。
第二段提示语
情节安排:对话、动作、情感、冲突、心理活动、环境描写等。
第一句
细读第二段提示语内容,可以是动作、语言、心理描写等以推动情节。
第二句
主要(次要)人物说了什么,做了什么,推动情节发展。
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情节发展
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第三句
主要(次要)人物的反应,心理、情感或动作描写。
第四句
主要人物在什么情况下做了什么,促使问题得到解决,凸显主要人物(转折)。
第五句
问题终于得到解决。
第六句
主要人物与次要人物在问题解决以后还做了什么。
第七句
表明主要人物的感情,或者是点题的语句。
注意:除了每一段的第一句与最后一句以外,其他几句在情节安排时,可以根据需要灵活运用,内容可以涉及对话描写、动作描写、情感描写、冲突描写、心理活动或环境描写等。近几年高考试题中都是问题解决类的文章,因此,在情节的安排上可以遵循一定的模式,即:出现问题→解决问题→再次出现问题→终于解决问题→最后,得到体会或感悟。此外,还要突显主要人物,次要人物只起衬托作用。
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2022·山东省潍坊市高三下学期模拟)
A GIFT FOR GRANDPA
Summer vacation was coming. Jack and his brother Berlin were filled with excitement as they thought of visiting their grandparents again.
The big day came at last. After the happy family got ready, they set out for the grandparents' eagerly. On the way, the brothers were excitedly talking about the fun they had with grandparents.
A little blue house with a tall white chimney finally appeared. Behind the property was the forest carrying their good memories with Grandpa. They arrived at the driveway, at the end of which Grandma was waiting for them joyfully.
Jack and Berlin each gave Grandma a big hug and then swept to the living room, shouting excitedly “Grandpa, we are back!”
Seeing his grandsons, Grandpa was wild with joy and tried to get up with all his strength from the chair but in vain. A helpless expression flashed on his face. Grandma explained that his health was declining rapidly and maybe couldn't stand up on his own forever. But Grandpa declared stubbornly (倔强地), “I can!” Certainly, he was stuck in his boyish way. Mum and grandparents were happy to meet again after a long time. They sat together and chatted about what happened recently.