专题16 书面表达，精彩纷呈-备战2021年高考英语纠错笔记

专题16 书面表达，精彩纷呈 技巧1 细审题，扣主题 1.你校正在组织英语作文比赛。请以身边值得尊敬和爱戴的人为题，写一篇短文参赛，内容包括: 1. 人物简介； 2. 尊敬和爱戴的原因。 注意: 1. 词数100左右； 2. 短文题目和首句已为你写好。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【分析】 本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求学生以身边值得尊敬和爱戴的人为题，写一篇短文参赛。 【详解】 第一步：审题 体裁：应用文。 时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。 结构：总分法。 要求： 1.人物简介： 2.尊敬和爱戴的原因。 第二步：列提纲（重点短语） As for me；spare some time；listen to me patiently; 第三步：连词成句 1.As for me, my father is the person I respect mostly. 2.He works very hard every day but he will also spare some time to accompany me and share many funny things with me about his work. 3.My father will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely. 根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。 第四步：连句成篇 1.表示文章结构顺序：介绍人物；阐述原因 2.表示并列补充关系：As for; and; but; So 第五步：润色修改 【点睛】 范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯。复合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多的高端句式，如定语从句：My father is a teacher who loves his work and his students very much；非谓语动词：He achieved a lot in his work, respected by his students；时间状语从句：When I come across the problem of learning in my study, my father will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely…等。文章思路清晰，层次分明，上下句转换自然。为文章增色添彩。 【答案】The person I respect We have a lot of respectable people around us. They may be our teachers, parents or one of our elders. As for me, my father is the person I respect most. My father is a teacher who loves his work and his students very much. He works very hard every day but he will also spare some time to accompany me and share many funny things with me about his work. When I come across the problems of learning in my study, my father will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely. He achieved a lot in his work, respected by his students. So, in my mind my father is the person I