Unit 4 Scientists who changed the world单元写作作业设计-2026-2027学年高中英语译林版必修第三册

译林版必修三 Unit 4　Scientists who changed the world 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报 "Role Models" 专栏正在征稿，请同学们介绍一位自己最敬佩的、改变了世界的科学家。请你以居里夫人为例写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 简要介绍这位科学家的生平与主要成就； 2. 说明她（他）身上的优秀品质； 3. 谈谈她（他）对你的影响。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 题目自拟。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这六件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 人物介绍（校英文报征稿）：人物概况—主要成就—精神品质—对我的影响；属于"叙 + 议"，叙述部分简洁，议论部分见思想。 人称 介绍人物用第三人称（she / Marie Curie）；最后一段谈影响自然转为第一人称（I / my study），实现"她—我"的衔接。 时态 介绍生平用一般过去时（be born, discovered, was awarded）；谈她仍然存在的精神影响用一般现在时和现在完成时（Her spirit still inspires me）。 结构 四段式。Para 1：一句话点明她是我的 role model；Para 2：生平与成就（简陋实验室中提炼镭、两获诺贝尔奖）；Para 3：品质（好奇、坚毅、淡泊名利——拒绝为镭申请专利）；Para 4：对我的影响 + 结尾升华。 要点 成就要写"细节"：不是 simply discovered radium，而是 from tons of pitchblende, in a shabby laboratory, after four years of hard work；品质必须由事实推出，不能只说 she was great。 语气 崇敬而不夸张。用具体事例代替形容词；结尾从"她的光"落到"我的路"，情感自然升温。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. scientist n. ____________ 2. ____________ n. 物理学家 3. chemist n. ____________ 4. ____________ n. 实验室 5. experiment n. ____________ 6. ____________ n. & vi. 研究 7. discover vt. ____________ 8. ____________ n. 发现；发觉 9. element n. ____________ 10. ____________ n. 镭 11. polonium n. ____________ 12. ____________ n. 放射性 13. award n. ____________ vt. 授予 14. ____________ n. 荣誉 vt. 尊敬 15. courage n. ____________ 16. ____________ n. 决心；坚定 17. curiosity n. ____________ 18. ____________ vt. 奉献；致力于 19. genius n. ____________ 20. ____________ vt. 激励；给……以启发 21. remarkable adj. ____________ 22. ____________ n. 突破；重大进展 23. unknown adj. ____________ 24. ____________ n. 榜样；模范 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. change the world ____________ 2. ____________ 获得诺贝尔奖 3. be awarded...for ____________ 4. devote oneself to ____________ 5. ____________ 专注于；献身于 6. make great contributions to ____________ 7. carry out ____________ 8. ____________ 夜以继日地工作 9. in a shabby laboratory ____________ 10. ____________ 成吨的…… 11. give up ____________ 12. ____________ 面对困难 13. lay the foundation for ____________ 14. ____________ 打开……的大门 15. benefit from ____________ 16. ____________ 作为……而闻名 17. rather than ____________ 18. ____________ 拒绝做某事 19. refuse to patent the discovery ____________ 20. ____________ 去世 21. set an example to ____________ 22. ____________ 楷模；榜样 23. look up to ____________ 24. ____________ 对……好奇 25. think independently ____________ 26. ____________ 克服困难 27. believe in ____________ 28. ____________ 梦想做某事 29. make a difference ____________ 30. ____________ 把……奉献给…… Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Marie Curie was a great scientist. ____________________ 2. She worked very hard. ____________________ 3. She discovered radium. ____________________ 4. She was very determined. ____________________ 5. She won two Nobel Prizes. ____________________ 6. I admire her very much. ____________________ 7. Her story encourages me. ____________________ 8. We should learn from her. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 玛丽·居里1867年出生于华沙，后来前往巴黎求学。 　　Marie Curie ________ ________ in Warsaw in 1867 and later went to Paris to study. 2. 1898年，居里夫妇发现了两种新元素——钋和镭。 　　In 1898, the Curies ________ two new ________, polonium and radium. 3. 为了证明镭的存在，他们在一间简陋的实验室里工作了四年。 　　In order to prove the ________ ________ radium, they worked in a ________ laboratory for four years. 4. 从数吨沥青铀矿中，他们最终提炼出极少量的镭。 　　From tons of pitchblende they finally ________ a very small ________ of radium. 5. 1903年，玛丽·居里被授予诺贝尔物理学奖。 　　In 1903, Marie Curie ________ ________ the Nobel Prize in Physics. 6. 她是历史上第一位获得诺贝尔奖的女性。 　　She was the first woman ________ ________ a Nobel Prize in history. 7. 尽管困难重重，她从未放弃自己的研究。 　　________ the difficulties, she never ________ ________ her research. 8. 正是她的决心带来了这一伟大的发现。 　　________ ________ her determination ________ led to this great discovery. 9. 她的发现为原子时代打开了大门。 　　Her discoveries ________ ________ ________ ________ the atomic age. 10. 虽然名满天下，她却把钱看得极轻。 　　________ she won great fame, she cared little for money. 11. 她把毕生精力都奉献给了科学事业。 　　She ________ all her life ________ the cause of science. 12. 直到今天，她的精神依然激励着世界各地的年轻人。 　　Her spirit still ________ young people around the world ________ today. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Marie Curie was a very great scientist. 要求：用 one of the + 最高级 + 定语从句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. She worked hard for four years. She was in a shabby laboratory. 要求：用介词短语开头合并，突出实验条件的艰苦 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. She finally got radium from tons of pitchblende. 要求：用强调句强调 a very small amount of radium → ____________________________________________________________ 4. She won the Nobel Prize in 1903 and again in 1911. 要求：用 not once but twice 改写，突出"两获诺奖" → ____________________________________________________________ 5. She was the first woman to win a Nobel Prize. 要求：用 Nobody had ever...before 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. She was poor and often hungry, but she kept on studying. 要求：用 Despite 名词短语开头改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 7. She refused to patent radium because she wanted the world to benefit. 要求：用 so that 状语从句合并并强调目的 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. Her spirit still encourages me when I meet difficulties. 要求：用 Whenever 改写，并加入 want to give up → ____________________________________________________________ 9. We should be curious about the unknown world. 要求：用 It is...that 强调句强调 curiosity → ____________________________________________________________ 10. Her light in the dark laboratory showed us the way. 要求：用比喻扩写，把"光"与"引路"写成完整意象 → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Great discoveries are born not of luck but of countless failures 伟大的发现不是诞生于运气，而是诞生于无数次失败。　（not...but... 对称） Nothing in the world can take the place of persistence. 世上没有什么能代替坚持。　（否定主语 + 短句立论） It was in the darkest lab that the brightest light was found. 正是在最黑暗的实验室里，人们找到了最亮的光。　（强调句 + dark/bright 对照） A scientist may pass away, but the truth she found lives on. 科学家会逝去，但她发现的真理长存。　（may...but... 转折） So poor was her laboratory, so rich her mind. 她的实验室如此简陋，她的头脑却如此丰盈。　（so...倒装 + 对偶） What made her great was not the prize but the price she paid. 成就她的不是奖牌，而是她付出的代价。　（what 主语从句 + prize/price 双关） Only those who love the unknown dare to walk into it. 只有热爱未知的人，才敢走进未知。　（only 引导的强调 + 定语从句） She gave up wealth, and the world gave her honour in return. 她放弃了财富，世界回赠她以荣誉。　（并列句 + give 呼应） Never had the world seen a woman shine so brightly in science. 世界从未见过一位女性在科学中如此闪耀。　（never 置于句首的倒装） Every experiment that failed was a step towards the one that worked. 每一次失败的实验，都是通往成功的一步。　（定语从句 + 比较级意味） To be a scientist, first be a person who never stops asking why. 要成为科学家，先做一个永远追问"为什么"的人。　（不定式开头 + 定语从句） The lighter she held fame, the heavier her name weighs in history. 她把名声看得越轻，她的名字在历史上就越重。　（the + 比较级对偶） Curiosity is the compass that led her through the darkness. 好奇心是指引她穿过黑暗的罗盘。　（暗喻 + 定语从句） Her story tells us that an ordinary person with extraordinary effort can change the world. 她的故事告诉我们：付出不凡努力的普通人，也能改变世界。　（宾语从句 + ordinary/extraordinary 对照） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·人物介绍体裁，情境已替换】 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在开展 "The Scientist I Admire Most" 征文活动。请你写一篇短文介绍你敬佩的一位科学家，内容包括： 1. 简要介绍这位科学家； 2. 他（她）的主要成就与品质； 3. 你从他（她）身上得到的启发。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自高考应用文真题（人物介绍体裁），情境已替换为本单元话题。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Marie Curie: A Light in the Darkness 　　When my teacher asked who my role model is, I answered without hesitation: Marie Curie. 　　In a shabby laboratory, she and her husband worked day and night for four long years. From tons of pitchblende, she finally obtained a tiny amount of radium. In 1903 she became the first woman to win a Nobel Prize, and in 1911 she won a second one. 　　What impresses me most is not the prizes but her spirit. She was curious, determined and generous—she even refused to patent radium so that the whole world could benefit. 　　Whenever I meet difficulties in my study, I think of that faint blue light glowing in her dark laboratory. Her light tells me: with curiosity and courage, an ordinary student can also make a difference. 【学生习作】 My Role Model 　　Marie Curie was a famous scientist. She was born in 1867. She discovered radium. She won two Nobel Prizes. She was very great. 　　She worked very hard. She did many experiments. She did not give up when things were hard. I think she is my role model. 　　I should learn from her. I will study hard like her. She is really a great woman scientist and everyone likes her. 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 成就是否有具体细节（实验室、原料、用时、奖项），而不是一句 discovered radium？ □ 每写一个品质（好奇、坚毅、淡泊），是否都配了一个对应的事实？ □ 时态是否正确：生平用过去时，精神影响用现在时？ □ 是否避免了连续多个 She 开头，并用了强调句、倒装或 not...but... 中的至少一种？ □ "对我的影响"是否写到了具体的学习情境，而不是只说 study hard？ □ 结尾是否有一处比喻或金句，与人物精神呼应？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. scientist n. 科学家 2. physicist n. 物理学家 3. chemist n. 化学家；药剂师 4. laboratory n. 实验室 5. experiment n. 实验；试验 6. research n. & vi. 研究；调查 7. discover vt. 发现；找到 8. discovery n. 发现；发觉 9. element n. 元素；要素 10. radium n. 镭 11. polonium n. 钋 12. radioactivity n. 放射性 13. award n. 奖；奖品 vt. 授予；奖励 14. honour n. 荣誉；荣幸 vt. 尊敬；给……荣誉 15. courage n. 勇气；胆量 16. determination n. 决心；坚定 17. curiosity n. 好奇心；求知欲 18. devote vt. 奉献；把……专用于 19. genius n. 天才；天赋 20. inspire vt. 激励；给……以启发 21. remarkable adj. 非凡的；显著的 22. breakthrough n. 突破；重大进展 23. unknown adj. 未知的；不出名的 24. role model n. 榜样；模范 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. change the world 改变世界 2. win the Nobel Prize 获得诺贝尔奖 3. be awarded...for 因……被授予…… 4. devote oneself to 献身于；致力于 5. be devoted to 专注于；献身于 6. make great contributions to 对……做出巨大贡献 7. carry out 开展；执行 8. work day and night 夜以继日地工作 9. in a shabby laboratory 在简陋的实验室里 10. tons of... 成吨的……；大量的…… 11. give up 放弃 12. in the face of difficulties 面对困难 13. lay the foundation for 为……打下基础 14. open the door to 打开……的大门 15. benefit from 从……中受益 16. be known as 作为……而闻名 17. rather than 而不是 18. refuse to do sth. 拒绝做某事 19. refuse to patent the discovery 拒绝为该发现申请专利 20. pass away 去世 21. set an example to 为……树立榜样 22. role model 楷模；榜样 23. look up to 尊敬；敬仰 24. be curious about 对……好奇 25. think independently 独立思考 26. overcome difficulties 克服困难 27. believe in 相信；信任；信仰 28. dream of doing sth. 梦想做某事 29. make a difference 有所作为；产生影响 30. devote...to... 把……奉献给…… Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. Marie Curie was one of the greatest scientists the world has ever seen. 2. She worked day and night in a shabby laboratory, never complaining. 3. It was she who discovered the mysterious element—radium. 4. Nothing—not poverty, not failure—could shake her determination. 5. Few scientists in history have won two Nobel Prizes, but she did. 6. It is her spirit, not just her success, that I look up to. 7. Whenever I want to give up, her story reminds me to hold on. 8. Her example lights the way for everyone who dreams of science. 四、教材好句精选 1. Marie Curie was born in Warsaw in 1867 and later went to Paris to study. 2. In 1898, the Curies discovered two new elements, polonium and radium. 3. In order to prove the existence of radium, they worked in a shabby laboratory for four years. 4. From tons of pitchblende they finally obtained a very small amount of radium. 5. In 1903, Marie Curie was awarded the Nobel Prize in Physics. 6. She was the first woman to win a Nobel Prize in history. 7. Despite the difficulties, she never gave up her research. 8. It was her determination that led to this great discovery. 9. Her discoveries opened the door to the atomic age. 10. Though she won great fame, she cared little for money. 11. She devoted all her life to the cause of science. 12. Her spirit still inspires young people around the world even today. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. Marie Curie was one of the greatest scientists the world has ever seen. 2. In a shabby laboratory, she worked day and night for four long years. 3. It was a very small amount of radium that she finally obtained from tons of pitchblende. 4. She won the Nobel Prize not once but twice—in 1903 and again in 1911. 5. Nobody in history had ever won a Nobel Prize before this determined woman did. 6. Despite poverty and hunger, she kept on studying. 7. She refused to patent radium so that the whole world could benefit from her discovery. 8. Whenever I want to give up, her spirit encourages me to try one more time. 9. It is curiosity about the unknown world that we should have. 10. The faint blue light of radium in her dark laboratory still lights the way for dreamers today. 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·人物介绍体裁，情境已替换】 审体裁：人物介绍的征文，三段式，无称呼落款；开头点题，结尾升华。 审人称：介绍科学家用第三人称（he / Yuan Longping），谈启发转为第一人称（I）。 审时态：生平与成就用一般过去时和现在完成时；他的精神与对我的影响用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 一句话点明我最敬佩的科学家是袁隆平；Para 2 成就与品质（毕生研究杂交水稻、常在田间、解决亿万人的吃饭问题）；Para 3 启发（把论文写在大地上：踏实、坚持、心怀他人）。 审语气：崇敬而朴实，用"田间背影"一类的画面代替堆砌形容词。 【参考范文】 The Scientist I Admire Most 　　The scientist I admire most is Yuan Longping, the father of hybrid rice. 　　For over fifty years, he devoted himself to developing better rice. Even in his old age, he could often be found standing in the fields, his trousers muddy, checking every rice plant. Thanks to his work, millions of people no longer go hungry. 　　What touches me most is not his fame but his simple wish—to let everyone have enough to eat. Whenever I want to give up my studies, I think of that old man in the fields. His story tells me that real greatness grows out of the soil of hard work. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 译林版必修三 Unit 4　Scientists who changed the world 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报 "Role Models" 专栏正在征稿，请同学们介绍一位自己最敬佩的、改变了世界的科学家。请你以居里夫人为例写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 简要介绍这位科学家的生平与主要成就； 2. 说明她（他）身上的优秀品质； 3. 谈谈她（他）对你的影响。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 题目自拟。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这六件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 人物介绍（校英文报征稿）：人物概况—主要成就—精神品质—对我的影响；属于"叙 + 议"，叙述部分简洁，议论部分见思想。 人称 介绍人物用第三人称（she / Marie Curie）；最后一段谈影响自然转为第一人称（I / my study），实现"她—我"的衔接。 时态 介绍生平用一般过去时（be born, discovered, was awarded）；谈她仍然存在的精神影响用一般现在时和现在完成时（Her spirit still inspires me）。 结构 四段式。Para 1：一句话点明她是我的 role model；Para 2：生平与成就（简陋实验室中提炼镭、两获诺贝尔奖）；Para 3：品质（好奇、坚毅、淡泊名利——拒绝为镭申请专利）；Para 4：对我的影响 + 结尾升华。 要点 成就要写"细节"：不是 simply discovered radium，而是 from tons of pitchblende, in a shabby laboratory, after four years of hard work；品质必须由事实推出，不能只说 she was great。 语气 崇敬而不夸张。用具体事例代替形容词；结尾从"她的光"落到"我的路"，情感自然升温。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. scientist n. 科学家 2. physicist n. 物理学家 3. chemist n. 化学家；药剂师 4. laboratory n. 实验室 5. experiment n. 实验；试验 6. research n. & vi. 研究；调查 7. discover vt. 发现；找到 8. discovery n. 发现；发觉 9. element n. 元素；要素 10. radium n. 镭 11. polonium n. 钋 12. radioactivity n. 放射性 13. award n. 奖；奖品 vt. 授予；奖励 14. honour n. 荣誉；荣幸 vt. 尊敬；给……荣誉 15. courage n. 勇气；胆量 16. determination n. 决心；坚定 17. curiosity n. 好奇心；求知欲 18. devote vt. 奉献；把……专用于 19. genius n. 天才；天赋 20. inspire vt. 激励；给……以启发 21. remarkable adj. 非凡的；显著的 22. breakthrough n. 突破；重大进展 23. unknown adj. 未知的；不出名的 24. role model n. 榜样；模范 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. change the world 改变世界 2. win the Nobel Prize 获得诺贝尔奖 3. be awarded...for 因……被授予…… 4. devote oneself to 献身于；致力于 5. be devoted to 专注于；献身于 6. make great contributions to 对……做出巨大贡献 7. carry out 开展；执行 8. work day and night 夜以继日地工作 9. in a shabby laboratory 在简陋的实验室里 10. tons of... 成吨的……；大量的…… 11. give up 放弃 12. in the face of difficulties 面对困难 13. lay the foundation for 为……打下基础 14. open the door to 打开……的大门 15. benefit from 从……中受益 16. be known as 作为……而闻名 17. rather than 而不是 18. refuse to do sth. 拒绝做某事 19. refuse to patent the discovery 拒绝为该发现申请专利 20. pass away 去世 21. set an example to 为……树立榜样 22. role model 楷模；榜样 23. look up to 尊敬；敬仰 24. be curious about 对……好奇 25. think independently 独立思考 26. overcome difficulties 克服困难 27. believe in 相信；信任；信仰 28. dream of doing sth. 梦想做某事 29. make a difference 有所作为；产生影响 30. devote...to... 把……奉献给…… Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Marie Curie was a great scientist. Marie Curie was one of the greatest scientists the world has ever seen. 2. She worked very hard. She worked day and night in a shabby laboratory, never complaining. 3. She discovered radium. It was she who discovered the mysterious element—radium. 4. She was very determined. Nothing—not poverty, not failure—could shake her determination. 5. She won two Nobel Prizes. Few scientists in history have won two Nobel Prizes, but she did. 6. I admire her very much. It is her spirit, not just her success, that I look up to. 7. Her story encourages me. Whenever I want to give up, her story reminds me to hold on. 8. We should learn from her. Her example lights the way for everyone who dreams of science. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 玛丽·居里1867年出生于华沙，后来前往巴黎求学。 　　Marie Curie was born in Warsaw in 1867 and later went to Paris to study. 2. 1898年，居里夫妇发现了两种新元素——钋和镭。 　　In 1898, the Curies discovered two new elements, polonium and radium. 3. 为了证明镭的存在，他们在一间简陋的实验室里工作了四年。 　　In order to prove the existence of radium, they worked in a shabby laboratory for four years. 4. 从数吨沥青铀矿中，他们最终提炼出极少量的镭。 　　From tons of pitchblende they finally obtained a very small amount of radium. 5. 1903年，玛丽·居里被授予诺贝尔物理学奖。 　　In 1903, Marie Curie was awarded the Nobel Prize in Physics. 6. 她是历史上第一位获得诺贝尔奖的女性。 　　She was the first woman to win a Nobel Prize in history. 7. 尽管困难重重，她从未放弃自己的研究。 　　Despite the difficulties, she never gave up her research. 8. 正是她的决心带来了这一伟大的发现。 　　It was her determination that led to this great discovery. 9. 她的发现为原子时代打开了大门。 　　Her discoveries opened the door to the atomic age. 10. 虽然名满天下，她却把钱看得极轻。 　　Though she won great fame, she cared little for money. 11. 她把毕生精力都奉献给了科学事业。 　　She devoted all her life to the cause of science. 12. 直到今天，她的精神依然激励着世界各地的年轻人。 　　Her spirit still inspires young people around the world even today. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Marie Curie was a very great scientist. 要求：用 one of the + 最高级 + 定语从句改写 → Marie Curie was one of the greatest scientists the world has ever seen. 2. She worked hard for four years. She was in a shabby laboratory. 要求：用介词短语开头合并，突出实验条件的艰苦 → In a shabby laboratory, she worked day and night for four long years. 3. She finally got radium from tons of pitchblende. 要求：用强调句强调 a very small amount of radium → It was a very small amount of radium that she finally obtained from tons of pitchblende. 4. She won the Nobel Prize in 1903 and again in 1911. 要求：用 not once but twice 改写，突出"两获诺奖" → She won the Nobel Prize not once but twice—in 1903 and again in 1911. 5. She was the first woman to win a Nobel Prize. 要求：用 Nobody had ever...before 改写 → Nobody in history had ever won a Nobel Prize before this determined woman did. 6. She was poor and often hungry, but she kept on studying. 要求：用 Despite 名词短语开头改写 → Despite poverty and hunger, she kept on studying. 7. She refused to patent radium because she wanted the world to benefit. 要求：用 so that 状语从句合并并强调目的 → She refused to patent radium so that the whole world could benefit from her discovery. 8. Her spirit still encourages me when I meet difficulties. 要求：用 Whenever 改写，并加入 want to give up → Whenever I want to give up, her spirit encourages me to try one more time. 9. We should be curious about the unknown world. 要求：用 It is...that 强调句强调 curiosity → It is curiosity about the unknown world that we should have. 10. Her light in the dark laboratory showed us the way. 要求：用比喻扩写，把"光"与"引路"写成完整意象 → The faint blue light of radium in her dark laboratory still lights the way for dreamers today. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Great discoveries are born not of luck but of countless failures 伟大的发现不是诞生于运气，而是诞生于无数次失败。　（not...but... 对称） Nothing in the world can take the place of persistence. 世上没有什么能代替坚持。　（否定主语 + 短句立论） It was in the darkest lab that the brightest light was found. 正是在最黑暗的实验室里，人们找到了最亮的光。　（强调句 + dark/bright 对照） A scientist may pass away, but the truth she found lives on. 科学家会逝去，但她发现的真理长存。　（may...but... 转折） So poor was her laboratory, so rich her mind. 她的实验室如此简陋，她的头脑却如此丰盈。　（so...倒装 + 对偶） What made her great was not the prize but the price she paid. 成就她的不是奖牌，而是她付出的代价。　（what 主语从句 + prize/price 双关） Only those who love the unknown dare to walk into it. 只有热爱未知的人，才敢走进未知。　（only 引导的强调 + 定语从句） She gave up wealth, and the world gave her honour in return. 她放弃了财富，世界回赠她以荣誉。　（并列句 + give 呼应） Never had the world seen a woman shine so brightly in science. 世界从未见过一位女性在科学中如此闪耀。　（never 置于句首的倒装） Every experiment that failed was a step towards the one that worked. 每一次失败的实验，都是通往成功的一步。　（定语从句 + 比较级意味） To be a scientist, first be a person who never stops asking why. 要成为科学家，先做一个永远追问"为什么"的人。　（不定式开头 + 定语从句） The lighter she held fame, the heavier her name weighs in history. 她把名声看得越轻，她的名字在历史上就越重。　（the + 比较级对偶） Curiosity is the compass that led her through the darkness. 好奇心是指引她穿过黑暗的罗盘。　（暗喻 + 定语从句） Her story tells us that an ordinary person with extraordinary effort can change the world. 她的故事告诉我们：付出不凡努力的普通人，也能改变世界。　（宾语从句 + ordinary/extraordinary 对照） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·人物介绍体裁，情境已替换】 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在开展 "The Scientist I Admire Most" 征文活动。请你写一篇短文介绍你敬佩的一位科学家，内容包括： 1. 简要介绍这位科学家； 2. 他（她）的主要成就与品质； 3. 你从他（她）身上得到的启发。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自高考应用文真题（人物介绍体裁），情境已替换为本单元话题。 【审题建模】 审体裁：人物介绍的征文，三段式，无称呼落款；开头点题，结尾升华。 审人称：介绍科学家用第三人称（he / Yuan Longping），谈启发转为第一人称（I）。 审时态：生平与成就用一般过去时和现在完成时；他的精神与对我的影响用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 一句话点明我最敬佩的科学家是袁隆平；Para 2 成就与品质（毕生研究杂交水稻、常在田间、解决亿万人的吃饭问题）；Para 3 启发（把论文写在大地上：踏实、坚持、心怀他人）。 审语气：崇敬而朴实，用"田间背影"一类的画面代替堆砌形容词。 【参考范文】 The Scientist I Admire Most 　　The scientist I admire most is Yuan Longping, the father of hybrid rice. 　　For over fifty years, he devoted himself to developing better rice. Even in his old age, he could often be found standing in the fields, his trousers muddy, checking every rice plant. Thanks to his work, millions of people no longer go hungry. 　　What touches me most is not his fame but his simple wish—to let everyone have enough to eat. Whenever I want to give up my studies, I think of that old man in the fields. His story tells me that real greatness grows out of the soil of hard work. 【亮点句式】 ① …the father of hybrid rice.（同位语一句话点明身份，简洁） ② …his trousers muddy, checking every rice plant.（独立主格 + 分词，画面感极强） ③ What touches me most is not his fame but his simple wish…（what 从句 + not...but... 结构） ④ …real greatness grows out of the soil of hard work.（一语双关，照应稻田，收束有力） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Marie Curie: A Light in the Darkness 　　When my teacher asked who my role model is, I answered without hesitation: Marie Curie. 　　In a shabby laboratory, she and her husband worked day and night for four long years. From tons of pitchblende, she finally obtained a tiny amount of radium. In 1903 she became the first woman to win a Nobel Prize, and in 1911 she won a second one. 　　What impresses me most is not the prizes but her spirit. She was curious, determined and generous—she even refused to patent radium so that the whole world could benefit. 　　Whenever I meet difficulties in my study, I think of that faint blue light glowing in her dark laboratory. Her light tells me: with curiosity and courage, an ordinary student can also make a difference. 【学生习作】 My Role Model 　　Marie Curie was a famous scientist. She was born in 1867. She discovered radium. She won two Nobel Prizes. She was very great. 　　She worked very hard. She did many experiments. She did not give up when things were hard. I think she is my role model. 　　I should learn from her. I will study hard like her. She is really a great woman scientist and everyone likes her. 【习作点评】 优点：段落安排合理，按"人物—精神—我的行动"展开，选取居里夫人紧扣课文，She did not give up when things were hard 有一点让步意识。 问题一：生平成就只有一条时间线和一句话结论，没有细节；应写简陋的实验室、数吨沥青铀矿、四年日夜工作，"提炼出极少量镭"的画面比 She was very great 有力得多。 问题二：品质没有事实支撑。She worked very hard 之后应紧跟证据——尽管贫穷饥饿仍坚持求学、拒绝为镭申请专利，让读者自己得出"伟大"的结论。 问题三：句式过于单调，五个连续的 She 开头；应变换主语并加入强调句（It was...that...）、倒装（Never had the world seen...）或 not...but... 结构。 问题四：结尾 I will study hard like her 是空话，"影响"没有落到具体情境；可改为 Whenever I want to give up, her story reminds me to hold on，再补一句自己的目标。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：用"数字与画面"写成就。简陋的实验室、成吨的沥青铀矿、四年日夜工作、极少量镭、两获诺奖——把课文里的事实变成你文章的细节，人物才立得起来。 得分点二：品质由事实推出，不贴标签。写"淡泊名利"就用 refuse to patent radium；写"坚毅"就用 Despite the difficulties, she never gave up her research；devote oneself to、make great contributions to、set an example to 等词块至少用三个。 得分点三：让"她"照亮"我"。最后一段从她的光（镭的蓝光、黑暗中的坚持）自然过渡到自己的学习场景，用 Whenever I want to give up... 或 It is her spirit that... 收尾，升华而不空喊。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $