Unit 5 Revealing Nature单元写作作业设计（学生版+教师版）2026-2027学年高中英语外研版选择性必修第一册

外研版选择性必修一 Unit 5　Revealing Nature 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报"Nature Notes"专栏正在征稿，主题是"亲近自然，发现自然"。假定你是李华，请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位你敬佩的博物学家（如达尔文）及其发现，或记叙你一次亲近自然的观察经历与发现。内容包括： 1. 介绍这位博物学家及其重要发现（或交代你观察的时间、地点与对象）； 2. 说明他（她）的发现过程或你的观察所得； 3. 谈谈这次"发现"带给你的启示。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 题目自拟。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 英文报专栏稿（人物介绍型说明文）：人物—发现—过程—启示，层次分明，客观中带敬意。 人称 介绍博物学家用第三人称（he / Darwin）；结尾谈启示可转 we，把读者带进来。 时态 生平与发现用一般过去时；理论的科学意义用一般现在时；"他花二十年才发表"可用 It took sb…to do 句型。 结构 四段式。Para 1：一句话点出人物与身份；Para 2：五年环球航行与加拉帕戈斯群岛雀鸟的发现；Para 3：从观察到结论——喙的差异、自然选择、《物种起源》；Para 4：启示——伟大的发现始于耐心的观察。 要点 细节是生命：小猎犬号、五年、雀鸟的喙、二十年的思考；不要堆名词解释，用一个故事讲清"怎样发现"。 语气 敬佩而平静。多用动词与数字写他"如何工作"（observe, record, compare），少用 great、famous 之类空洞赞叹。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. species n. ____________ 2. ____________ n. 进化；演变 3. evolve vi. ____________ 4. ____________ n. 雀；鸣禽 5. beak n. ____________ 6. ____________ n. 祖先 7. adapt vi. ____________ vt. 使适应 8. ____________ n. 适应；改编 9. habitat n. ____________ 10. ____________ n. 环境 11. extinct adj. ____________ 12. ____________ n. 灭绝 13. generation n. ____________ 14. ____________ n. 基因 15. survive vi. ____________ 16. ____________ n. 生存；幸存 17. creature n. ____________ 18. ____________ adj. 多种多样的 19. diversity n. ____________ 20. ____________ adj. 非凡的；卓越的 21. naturalist n. ____________ 22. ____________ n. 观察；观察力 23. observe vt. ____________ 24. ____________ n. 起源；由来 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. set sail ____________ 2. ____________ 在船上 3. across the globe ____________ 4. ____________ 各种各样的 5. adapt to ____________ 6. ____________ 原产于 7. date back to ____________ 8. ____________ 提出一种理论 9. natural selection ____________ 10. ____________ 适者生存 11. over time ____________ 12. ____________ 一代又一代 13. feed on ____________ 14. ____________ 不同于 15. in search of ____________ 16. ____________ 记录 17. make observations ____________ 18. ____________ 野外笔记 19. common ancestor ____________ 20. ____________ 作为对……的反应 21. play a part in ____________ 22. ____________ 由于 23. result in ____________ 24. ____________ 灭绝 25. draw a conclusion ____________ 26. ____________ 形成；产生 27. a wide range of ____________ 28. ____________ 对……感到惊叹 29. keep one's eyes open ____________ 30. ____________ 揭开自然的秘密 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Darwin watched animals carefully. ____________________ 2. The finches were different. ____________________ 3. He had a great idea. ____________________ 4. He worked for a long time. ____________________ 5. Animals change to fit their environment. ____________________ 6. Nature is amazing. ____________________ 7. We should protect animals. ____________________ 8. I like watching birds. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 达尔文用了五年时间环球航行，一路进行观察。 　　It took Darwin five years to ________ ________ the world ________ observations. 2. 加拉帕戈斯群岛上的雀类彼此不同。 　　The finches on the Galapagos Islands ________ ________ one another. 3. 它们的喙恰好适应了各自的食物来源。 　　Their beaks were perfectly ________ ________ their own food ________. 4. 正是这些微小的差异启发了他的思考。 　　It was these ________ ________ that inspired his thinking. 5. 一代又一代，物种在慢慢地进化。 　　________ ________ ________, species ________ slowly. 6. 只有适应环境的生物才能生存下来。 　　Only the creatures that ________ ________ their environment can ________. 7. 他仔细记录每一个细节，无论多么微小。 　　He ________ ________ every detail, ________ ________ it was. 8. 正是这些野外笔记后来孕育了他伟大的理论。 　　It was these ________ ________ that later gave birth to his great ________. 9. 自然选择像一位看不见的园丁，悄悄修剪着万物。 　　Natural selection is like an ________ gardener, quietly ________ all living things. 10. 睁大眼睛观察大自然，你会发现一个全新的世界。 　　Keep your ________ ________ to nature, and you will find a whole new world. 11. 他花了二十多年才发表自己的发现。 　　He ________ more than twenty years ________ publishing his findings. 12. 每一种现存生物都是一场漫长生存故事的赢家。 　　Every creature now alive is the ________ of a long ________ story. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Darwin sailed around the world. At the same time, he made observations. 要求：用现在分词作伴随状语合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. The finches had different beaks. This inspired his thinking. 要求：用 It was…that… 强调句合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. He observed carefully. He finally drew a conclusion. 要求：用 Only by… 倒装合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 4. Species change slowly as time passes. 要求：用 over time 和 generation after generation 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 5. If you keep your eyes open, nature will show you her secrets. 要求：用"祈使句 + and"句型改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. He spent twenty years on his theory. It was worth it. 要求：用 It took sb…to do 句型改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 7. The differences were so tiny that only a patient eye could catch them. 要求：把 so…that 改为倒装 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. Creatures that cannot adapt die out. 要求：用 fail to do 改写定语从句 → ____________________________________________________________ 9. I have never seen nature reveal a secret so patiently. 要求：用否定词置于句首的倒装改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 10. He recorded every detail. The details were small but important. 要求：用 however 引导让步状语从句合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） A finch's beak tells the story of a thousand generations. 一只雀喙讲述着一千代的故事。　（名词所有格 + 拟人） It is not the strongest that survive, but those most responsive to change. 存活下来的不是最强壮的，而是最能回应变化的。　（强调句 + not…but…） Look closely: the ordinary world is quietly extraordinary. 仔细看：平凡的世界正静静地不平凡着。　（祈使句 + 矛盾修辞） So tiny were the differences that only a patient eye could catch them. 差异如此细微，只有耐心的眼睛才能捕捉。　（so…that 的倒装） Only by questioning could he see what others had overlooked. 只有靠质疑，他才能看见别人忽略的东西。　（only + 介词短语的倒装） Every generation inherits the world and rewrites it a little. 每一代人继承世界，又稍稍改写它。　（and 连接并列谓语） Wonder is where science begins. 惊奇是科学的起点。　（表语从句） The more we observe, the more questions nature generously offers. 我们观察得越多，大自然慷慨地给出的问题就越多。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） Never had the Galapagos seemed so alive as in Darwin's notebooks. 加拉帕戈斯群岛从未像在达尔文笔记里那样生机勃勃。　（否定词置于句首的倒装） What looks like stillness is change in slow motion. 看似静止，实则是慢镜头里的变化。　（what 主语从句） To observe patiently is to converse with time itself. 耐心观察就是与时间本身对话。　（不定式平行结构） Nature keeps her secrets not out of shyness, but out of patience. 自然保守秘密，不是因为害羞，而是因为需要耐心。　（not…but… 对称句） Written across a finch's beak is the whole history of its island. 一只雀喙上写着整座岛的历史。　（过去分词前置的全倒装） Every creature now alive is the winner of a long survival story. 每一种现存生物都是漫长生存故事的赢家。　（形容词后置定语 + 比喻） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿，情境已替换】 你校英文报"My Role Model"专栏正在征稿，请同学们介绍一位自己敬佩的人物。假定你是李华，请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍达尔文，内容包括： 1. 人物身份与主要成就； 2. 他身上最打动你的一个细节； 3. 你从他身上学到了什么。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自历年高考"人物介绍类"英文报征稿应用文真题，情境已替换为本单元博物学家话题。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Revealing Nature 　　The scientist I admire most is Charles Darwin, an English naturalist who changed the way we understand life. 　　At twenty-two, he set sail on a five-year voyage around the world. On the Galapagos Islands, he observed that finches on different islands had differently shaped beaks, each perfectly adapted to the food there. Generation after generation, the birds had slowly evolved to fit their environments. 　　It was these small differences that led him to the theory of natural selection. He spent more than twenty years checking his field notes before publishing On the Origin of Species. 　　His story teaches us a simple truth: keep your eyes open, observe patiently, and nature will reveal her secrets. 【学生习作】 Revealing Nature 　　Darwin is a famous scientist. He was from England. He made a journey around the world. He saw many animals and plants. 　　He found that the birds were different on different islands. Their mouths were not the same. He thought about it for many years. Then he wrote a famous book about it. 　　I think Darwin is very great. He worked hard and never gave up. We should learn from him and study hard. 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 人物的身份与成就是否一句话说清？ □ 发现过程是否有具体数字和地名（五年、加拉帕戈斯、雀鸟的喙）？ □ 是否用上 species、adapt to、evolve、natural selection 等本单元词汇（至少四个）？ □ 谈启示是否从"他如何工作"中自然引出，而不是贴标签？ □ 生平是否统一用过去时，科学结论是否用现在时？ □ 结尾是否有一句能被记住的话？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. species n. 物种 2. evolution n. 进化；演变 3. evolve vi. 进化；演化 4. finch n. 雀；鸣禽 5. beak n. 鸟喙；鸟嘴 6. ancestor n. 祖先 7. adapt vi. 适应 vt. 使适应；改编 8. adaptation n. 适应；改编 9. habitat n. 栖息地 10. environment n. 环境 11. extinct adj. 灭绝的 12. extinction n. 灭绝 13. generation n. 一代（人）；一代（动植物） 14. gene n. 基因 15. survive vi. 生存；幸存 16. survival n. 生存；幸存 17. creature n. 生物；动物 18. diverse adj. 多种多样的 19. diversity n. 多样性；差异 20. remarkable adj. 非凡的；卓越的 21. naturalist n. 博物学家 22. observation n. 观察；观察力 23. observe vt. 观察；注意到 24. origin n. 起源；由来 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. set sail 起航 2. on board a ship 在船上 3. across the globe 在全球 4. a variety of 各种各样的 5. adapt to 适应 6. be native to 原产于 7. date back to 追溯到 8. come up with a theory 提出一种理论 9. natural selection 自然选择 10. survival of the fittest 适者生存 11. over time 随着时间推移 12. generation after generation 一代又一代 13. feed on 以……为食 14. differ from 不同于 15. in search of 寻找 16. keep records of 记录 17. make observations 进行观察 18. field notes 野外笔记 19. common ancestor 共同祖先 20. in response to 作为对……的反应 21. play a part in 在……中起作用 22. due to 由于 23. result in 导致 24. die out 灭绝 25. draw a conclusion 得出结论 26. come into being 形成；产生 27. a wide range of 范围广泛的 28. wonder at 对……感到惊叹 29. keep one's eyes open 睁大眼睛；留心 30. reveal the secrets of nature 揭开自然的秘密 Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. Darwin observed every creature with a patient, questioning eye. 2. The finches differed from island to island in the shape of their beaks. 3. It was these small differences that gave birth to a great theory. 4. He spent more than twenty years turning field notes into a book that changed science. 5. Creatures adapt, generation after generation, to the world around them. 6. Nature keeps her secrets, and only patience earns them. 7. Every creature deserves to survive, so protecting animals is not a choice but a duty we all share. 8. A quiet hour of bird-watching can teach more than a loud day of talk. 四、教材好句精选 1. It took Darwin five years to sail around the world making observations. 2. The finches on the Galapagos Islands differed from one another. 3. Their beaks were perfectly adapted to their own food sources. 4. It was these small differences that inspired his thinking. 5. Generation after generation, species evolve slowly. 6. Only the creatures that adapt to their environment can survive. 7. He carefully recorded every detail, however small it was. 8. It was these field notes that later gave birth to his great theory. 9. Natural selection is like an invisible gardener, quietly pruning all living things. 10. Keep your eyes open to nature, and you will find a whole new world. 11. He spent more than twenty years before publishing his findings. 12. Every creature now alive is the winner of a long survival story. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. Darwin sailed around the world, making observations along the way. 2. It was the finches' different beaks that inspired his thinking. 3. Only by observing carefully could he finally draw a conclusion. 4. Over time, generation after generation, species evolve slowly. 5. Keep your eyes open, and nature will show you her secrets. 6. It took him more than twenty years to turn his observations into a theory worth the wait. 7. So tiny were the differences that only a patient eye could catch them. 8. Creatures that fail to adapt to their environment will die out. 9. Never have I seen nature reveal her secrets so patiently. 10. He recorded every detail, however small it was, because details lead to discoveries. 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿，情境已替换】 审体裁：专栏征稿，人物介绍，客观中带敬意。 审人称：第三人称（Darwin / he）为主，谈学到的品质时转第一人称（I）。 审时态：生平与发现用一般过去时，其理论的意义用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 人物身份；Para 2 五年环球航行与雀鸟研究；Para 3 打动人的细节（二十年的耐心）与收获。 审语气：克制而有温度，用数字与动作写敬佩，不用 famous、great 空泛堆砌。 【参考范文】 　　The person I admire most is Charles Darwin, the English naturalist who revealed the secrets of nature to the world. 　　At twenty-two, he set sail on a five-year voyage around the globe, observing and recording everything along the way. On the Galapagos Islands, he noticed that finches on different islands had differently shaped beaks, each perfectly adapted to its food. That small discovery grew, year by year, into his theory of evolution. 　　What moves me most is his patience: he spent over twenty years before publishing his findings. From him I have learned that great discoveries begin with quiet, careful eyes. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 外研版选择性必修一 Unit 5　Revealing Nature 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报"Nature Notes"专栏正在征稿，主题是"亲近自然，发现自然"。假定你是李华，请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位你敬佩的博物学家（如达尔文）及其发现，或记叙你一次亲近自然的观察经历与发现。内容包括： 1. 介绍这位博物学家及其重要发现（或交代你观察的时间、地点与对象）； 2. 说明他（她）的发现过程或你的观察所得； 3. 谈谈这次"发现"带给你的启示。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 题目自拟。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 英文报专栏稿（人物介绍型说明文）：人物—发现—过程—启示，层次分明，客观中带敬意。 人称 介绍博物学家用第三人称（he / Darwin）；结尾谈启示可转 we，把读者带进来。 时态 生平与发现用一般过去时；理论的科学意义用一般现在时；"他花二十年才发表"可用 It took sb…to do 句型。 结构 四段式。Para 1：一句话点出人物与身份；Para 2：五年环球航行与加拉帕戈斯群岛雀鸟的发现；Para 3：从观察到结论——喙的差异、自然选择、《物种起源》；Para 4：启示——伟大的发现始于耐心的观察。 要点 细节是生命：小猎犬号、五年、雀鸟的喙、二十年的思考；不要堆名词解释，用一个故事讲清"怎样发现"。 语气 敬佩而平静。多用动词与数字写他"如何工作"（observe, record, compare），少用 great、famous 之类空洞赞叹。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. species n. 物种 2. evolution n. 进化；演变 3. evolve vi. 进化；演化 4. finch n. 雀；鸣禽 5. beak n. 鸟喙；鸟嘴 6. ancestor n. 祖先 7. adapt vi. 适应 vt. 使适应；改编 8. adaptation n. 适应；改编 9. habitat n. 栖息地 10. environment n. 环境 11. extinct adj. 灭绝的 12. extinction n. 灭绝 13. generation n. 一代（人）；一代（动植物） 14. gene n. 基因 15. survive vi. 生存；幸存 16. survival n. 生存；幸存 17. creature n. 生物；动物 18. diverse adj. 多种多样的 19. diversity n. 多样性；差异 20. remarkable adj. 非凡的；卓越的 21. naturalist n. 博物学家 22. observation n. 观察；观察力 23. observe vt. 观察；注意到 24. origin n. 起源；由来 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. set sail 起航 2. on board a ship 在船上 3. across the globe 在全球 4. a variety of 各种各样的 5. adapt to 适应 6. be native to 原产于 7. date back to 追溯到 8. come up with a theory 提出一种理论 9. natural selection 自然选择 10. survival of the fittest 适者生存 11. over time 随着时间推移 12. generation after generation 一代又一代 13. feed on 以……为食 14. differ from 不同于 15. in search of 寻找 16. keep records of 记录 17. make observations 进行观察 18. field notes 野外笔记 19. common ancestor 共同祖先 20. in response to 作为对……的反应 21. play a part in 在……中起作用 22. due to 由于 23. result in 导致 24. die out 灭绝 25. draw a conclusion 得出结论 26. come into being 形成；产生 27. a wide range of 范围广泛的 28. wonder at 对……感到惊叹 29. keep one's eyes open 睁大眼睛；留心 30. reveal the secrets of nature 揭开自然的秘密 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Darwin watched animals carefully. Darwin observed every creature with a patient, questioning eye. 2. The finches were different. The finches differed from island to island in the shape of their beaks. 3. He had a great idea. It was these small differences that gave birth to a great theory. 4. He worked for a long time. He spent more than twenty years turning field notes into a book that changed science. 5. Animals change to fit their environment. Creatures adapt, generation after generation, to the world around them. 6. Nature is amazing. Nature keeps her secrets, and only patience earns them. 7. We should protect animals. Every creature deserves to survive, so protecting animals is not a choice but a duty we all share. 8. I like watching birds. A quiet hour of bird-watching can teach more than a loud day of talk. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 达尔文用了五年时间环球航行，一路进行观察。 　　It took Darwin five years to sail around the world making observations. 2. 加拉帕戈斯群岛上的雀类彼此不同。 　　The finches on the Galapagos Islands differed from one another. 3. 它们的喙恰好适应了各自的食物来源。 　　Their beaks were perfectly adapted to their own food sources. 4. 正是这些微小的差异启发了他的思考。 　　It was these small differences that inspired his thinking. 5. 一代又一代，物种在慢慢地进化。 　　Generation after generation, species evolve slowly. 6. 只有适应环境的生物才能生存下来。 　　Only the creatures that adapt to their environment can survive. 7. 他仔细记录每一个细节，无论多么微小。 　　He carefully recorded every detail, however small it was. 8. 正是这些野外笔记后来孕育了他伟大的理论。 　　It was these field notes that later gave birth to his great theory. 9. 自然选择像一位看不见的园丁，悄悄修剪着万物。 　　Natural selection is like an invisible gardener, quietly pruning all living things. 10. 睁大眼睛观察大自然，你会发现一个全新的世界。 　　Keep your eyes open to nature, and you will find a whole new world. 11. 他花了二十多年才发表自己的发现。 　　He spent more than twenty years before publishing his findings. 12. 每一种现存生物都是一场漫长生存故事的赢家。 　　Every creature now alive is the winner of a long survival story. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Darwin sailed around the world. At the same time, he made observations. 要求：用现在分词作伴随状语合并 → Darwin sailed around the world, making observations along the way. 2. The finches had different beaks. This inspired his thinking. 要求：用 It was…that… 强调句合并 → It was the finches' different beaks that inspired his thinking. 3. He observed carefully. He finally drew a conclusion. 要求：用 Only by… 倒装合并 → Only by observing carefully could he finally draw a conclusion. 4. Species change slowly as time passes. 要求：用 over time 和 generation after generation 改写 → Over time, generation after generation, species evolve slowly. 5. If you keep your eyes open, nature will show you her secrets. 要求：用"祈使句 + and"句型改写 → Keep your eyes open, and nature will show you her secrets. 6. He spent twenty years on his theory. It was worth it. 要求：用 It took sb…to do 句型改写 → It took him more than twenty years to turn his observations into a theory worth the wait. 7. The differences were so tiny that only a patient eye could catch them. 要求：把 so…that 改为倒装 → So tiny were the differences that only a patient eye could catch them. 8. Creatures that cannot adapt die out. 要求：用 fail to do 改写定语从句 → Creatures that fail to adapt to their environment will die out. 9. I have never seen nature reveal a secret so patiently. 要求：用否定词置于句首的倒装改写 → Never have I seen nature reveal her secrets so patiently. 10. He recorded every detail. The details were small but important. 要求：用 however 引导让步状语从句合并 → He recorded every detail, however small it was, because details lead to discoveries. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） A finch's beak tells the story of a thousand generations. 一只雀喙讲述着一千代的故事。　（名词所有格 + 拟人） It is not the strongest that survive, but those most responsive to change. 存活下来的不是最强壮的，而是最能回应变化的。　（强调句 + not…but…） Look closely: the ordinary world is quietly extraordinary. 仔细看：平凡的世界正静静地不平凡着。　（祈使句 + 矛盾修辞） So tiny were the differences that only a patient eye could catch them. 差异如此细微，只有耐心的眼睛才能捕捉。　（so…that 的倒装） Only by questioning could he see what others had overlooked. 只有靠质疑，他才能看见别人忽略的东西。　（only + 介词短语的倒装） Every generation inherits the world and rewrites it a little. 每一代人继承世界，又稍稍改写它。　（and 连接并列谓语） Wonder is where science begins. 惊奇是科学的起点。　（表语从句） The more we observe, the more questions nature generously offers. 我们观察得越多，大自然慷慨地给出的问题就越多。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） Never had the Galapagos seemed so alive as in Darwin's notebooks. 加拉帕戈斯群岛从未像在达尔文笔记里那样生机勃勃。　（否定词置于句首的倒装） What looks like stillness is change in slow motion. 看似静止，实则是慢镜头里的变化。　（what 主语从句） To observe patiently is to converse with time itself. 耐心观察就是与时间本身对话。　（不定式平行结构） Nature keeps her secrets not out of shyness, but out of patience. 自然保守秘密，不是因为害羞，而是因为需要耐心。　（not…but… 对称句） Written across a finch's beak is the whole history of its island. 一只雀喙上写着整座岛的历史。　（过去分词前置的全倒装） Every creature now alive is the winner of a long survival story. 每一种现存生物都是漫长生存故事的赢家。　（形容词后置定语 + 比喻） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿，情境已替换】 你校英文报"My Role Model"专栏正在征稿，请同学们介绍一位自己敬佩的人物。假定你是李华，请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍达尔文，内容包括： 1. 人物身份与主要成就； 2. 他身上最打动你的一个细节； 3. 你从他身上学到了什么。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自历年高考"人物介绍类"英文报征稿应用文真题，情境已替换为本单元博物学家话题。 【审题建模】 审体裁：专栏征稿，人物介绍，客观中带敬意。 审人称：第三人称（Darwin / he）为主，谈学到的品质时转第一人称（I）。 审时态：生平与发现用一般过去时，其理论的意义用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 人物身份；Para 2 五年环球航行与雀鸟研究；Para 3 打动人的细节（二十年的耐心）与收获。 审语气：克制而有温度，用数字与动作写敬佩，不用 famous、great 空泛堆砌。 【参考范文】 　　The person I admire most is Charles Darwin, the English naturalist who revealed the secrets of nature to the world. 　　At twenty-two, he set sail on a five-year voyage around the globe, observing and recording everything along the way. On the Galapagos Islands, he noticed that finches on different islands had differently shaped beaks, each perfectly adapted to its food. That small discovery grew, year by year, into his theory of evolution. 　　What moves me most is his patience: he spent over twenty years before publishing his findings. From him I have learned that great discoveries begin with quiet, careful eyes. 【亮点句式】 ① …the English naturalist who revealed the secrets of nature（who 定语从句，一句立人） ② …observing and recording everything along the way.（现在分词作伴随状语） ③ That small discovery grew, year by year, into his theory…（时间插语 year by year，写活过程） ④ …begin with quiet, careful eyes.（抽象结论落在具体意象，余味悠长） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Revealing Nature 　　The scientist I admire most is Charles Darwin, an English naturalist who changed the way we understand life. 　　At twenty-two, he set sail on a five-year voyage around the world. On the Galapagos Islands, he observed that finches on different islands had differently shaped beaks, each perfectly adapted to the food there. Generation after generation, the birds had slowly evolved to fit their environments. 　　It was these small differences that led him to the theory of natural selection. He spent more than twenty years checking his field notes before publishing On the Origin of Species. 　　His story teaches us a simple truth: keep your eyes open, observe patiently, and nature will reveal her secrets. 【学生习作】 Revealing Nature 　　Darwin is a famous scientist. He was from England. He made a journey around the world. He saw many animals and plants. 　　He found that the birds were different on different islands. Their mouths were not the same. He thought about it for many years. Then he wrote a famous book about it. 　　I think Darwin is very great. He worked hard and never gave up. We should learn from him and study hard. 【习作点评】 优点：人物清楚，发现过程基本讲到了，行文通顺，没有严重语法错误。 问题一：用词不够专业。"Their mouths were not the same"应写成"their beaks were differently shaped"，用本单元词汇 beak、adapt 代替 mouth、not the same。 问题二：缺少关键数字。"a journey"是哪次旅程？应写five-year voyage、the Galapagos Islands、On the Origin of Species，细节决定说服力。 问题三：没有一个从句或强调句；本单元最有用的 It was…that…、Only by…can… 一个都没出现，句式平淡。 问题四："He is very great. We should study hard."是空话；应落到具体品质，如"great discoveries begin with quiet, careful eyes"。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：用"一个发现"撑起全文。不要把达尔文一生都写一遍，抓住雀鸟的喙这一个观察，把"看到差异—追问原因—形成理论"讲清楚即可。 得分点二：数字是最好的敬意。five-year voyage、twenty years、one species after another，数字比 great、famous 更能让评卷人感到你真的了解他。 得分点三：本单元词块要用够。set sail、adapt to、generation after generation、draw a conclusion、natural selection 至少出现四个；启示句用"祈使 + and"或 Only by…倒装收束，端庄有力。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $