Unit 1 Growing Up 单元写作作业设计 -2026-2027学年高中英语外研版选择性必修第二册

外研版选择性必修二 Unit 1　Growing Up 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在以“The Moment I Grew Up”为题征稿。请你写一篇短文投稿，记叙一个让你突然长大的瞬间（如一次照顾生病的家人、一次独自解决突发问题），写清你前后的变化。内容包括： 1. 简述那次经历（时间、起因、经过）； 2. 对比“长大前的我”和“长大后的我”； 3. 谈谈你对“长大”的理解。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙文（英文报征稿）：点题—叙事—感悟，标题已给出，直接入文，不写称呼与落款。 人称 第一人称（I）叙事；写到家人、救援者等用第三人称，注意动作与神态的观察视角。 时态 叙事用一般过去时；过去的过去（如“以前我一直以为”）用过去完成时；感悟用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：点题，一句话引出“那个瞬间”；Para 2：交代背景，写“长大前的我”；Para 3：细写瞬间本身（照顾生病的妈妈／独自处理突发状况），放慢笔墨；Para 4：写“长大后的我”，点出对成长的理解。 要点 前后变化要“看得见”：用具体的动作、细节对比（从前依赖、如今担当），忌空喊“我长大了”；关键瞬间要有动作、对话或心理描写。 语气 真挚、克制，用细节打动人，避免夸张抒情和大段说教；结尾一句感悟即可，点到为止。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. maturity n. ____________ 2. ____________ n. 成年；成人期 3. independence n. ____________ 4. ____________ adj. 独立的；自主的 5. responsibility n. ____________ 6. ____________ n. 义务；职责 7. ambition n. ____________ 8. ____________ n. 决心；坚定 9. consideration n. ____________ 10. ____________ n. 挚爱；奉献 11. anxiety n. ____________ 12. ____________ n. 感激；感恩 13. sacrifice n. ____________ vt. ____________ 14. ____________ vt. 陪伴；陪同 15. appreciate vt. ____________ 16. ____________ adj. 成熟的 17. reluctant adj. ____________ 18. ____________ adj. 珍贵的；宝贵的 19. memorable adj. ____________ 20. ____________ n. 倾向；趋势 21. assumption n. ____________ 22. ____________ n. 困惑；混淆 23. dilemma n. ____________ 24. ____________ n. 转折点；关键时刻 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. grow up ____________ 2. ____________ 走出舒适区 3. take on responsibility ____________ 4. ____________ 照顾；照料 5. rely on ____________ 6. ____________ 认为……理所当然 7. hold back ____________ 8. ____________ 恢复健康；渡过难关 9. from then on ____________ 10. ____________ 不再 11. face up to ____________ 12. ____________ 度过；熬过（难关） 13. to one's relief ____________ 14. ____________ 自立；独立 15. all by oneself ____________ 16. ____________ 独自处理；对付 17. be there for sb. ____________ 18. ____________ 因某事感激某人 19. put oneself in sb.'s shoes ____________ 20. ____________ 一股责任感 21. burst into tears ____________ 22. ____________ 平静下来 23. make a difference ____________ 24. ____________ 从长远看 25. come of age ____________ 26. ____________ 擦去眼泪 27. in the past ____________ 28. ____________ 一夜之间；突然间 29. learn a lesson from ____________ 30. ____________ 珍惜这一时刻 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. I am 18 years old now. ____________________ 2. My mother was sick, so I looked after her. ____________________ 3. I realized my parents could not always be there. ____________________ 4. I took care of my grandma every day. ____________________ 5. I was very scared at first. ____________________ 6. I learned a lot from this. ____________________ 7. I have changed a lot. ____________________ 8. I understood what growing up means. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 我曾理所当然地认为父母会一直照顾我。 　　I ________ ________ ________ ________ that my parents would always be there for me. 2. 直到那个冬天，我才明白照顾一个人意味着什么。 　　Not until that winter ________ ________ ________ what caring for someone really means. 3. 妈妈病倒了，我便挑起了家务的担子。 　　My mother fell ill, and I ________ ________ all the housework. 4. 看着她疲惫的脸，我第一次感到自己长大了。 　　________ ________ ________ ________, I felt grown-up for the first time. 5. 我日夜守在她身边，直到她渐渐好起来。 　　I stayed by her side day and night until she ________ ________. 6. 从那天起，我不再是一个只会依赖别人的孩子。 　　From that day on, I was ________ ________ a child who only relied on others. 7. 正是那个瞬间让我真正长大了。 　　________ ________ that very moment ________ made me truly grow up. 8. 我忍住眼泪，给妈妈端去一杯热水。 　　I ________ ________ my tears and brought my mother a cup of hot water. 9. 长大意味着付出，而不是索取。 　　Growing up ________ giving rather than ________. 10. 我永远不会忘记那个我学会承担责任的冬天。 　　I will never forget the winter ________ I learned to take on responsibility. 11. 定义成熟的是责任，而非年龄。 　　________ ________ ________ age ________ responsibility that defines maturity. 12. 只有走出舒适区，我们才能学会独立。 　　Only ________ ________ ________ of our ________ ________ can we learn to be independent. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. My mother fell ill. I took over the housework. 要求：用 with 复合结构把两句合并为一句 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. I stood beside her bed. I watched her fall asleep. 要求：用动词-ing 形式作状语合并为一句 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. I didn't realize the weight my parents carried until that week. 要求：用 Not until 开头的倒装句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 4. That moment made me grow up. 要求：用强调句强调 that moment（可加 very 增强语气） → ____________________________________________________________ 5. I was so tired that I could hardly stand. 要求：用 So…that… 结构的倒装句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. I cooked a whole meal for my family. It was the first time. 要求：用 It was the first time that… 句型合并（注意时态） → ____________________________________________________________ 7. I once took my mother's care for granted. 要求：用 There was a time when… 句型改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. Growing up is not about age. It is about responsibility. 要求：用 not…but… 结构合并为一句 → ____________________________________________________________ 9. We can understand growing up only after we have carried a load ourselves. 要求：用 Only + 状语从句置于句首的倒装句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 10. If you want to grow up, you must step out of your comfort zone. 要求：改为“祈使句 + and”结构 → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Growing up is not a single moment but a series of quiet awakenings. 成长不是某一个瞬间，而是一连串安静的觉醒。　（表语对仗 + not…but…） Never had I understood my mother's tiredness until I carried her load myself. 直到亲自挑起她的担子，我才懂得妈妈的疲惫。　（Never 置于句首的倒装） It was in the kitchen, washing dishes for the first time, that I felt myself truly grow. 正是在厨房里第一次洗碗时，我感到自己真正成长了。　（强调句 + 插入分词短语） The moment I stopped waiting to be taken care of, I grew up. 当我不再等着被人照顾的那一刻，我长大了。　（the moment 引导时间状语从句） Responsibility is the true mark of maturity, not the candles on a birthday cake. 责任才是成熟真正的标志，而不是生日蛋糕上的蜡烛。　（not 对比 + 比喻） So absorbed was I in my own world that I had never noticed her grey hair. 我如此沉浸在自己的世界里，从未注意到她的白发。　（so…that 的倒装） What changed me was not the illness itself, but what it forced me to do. 改变我的不是疾病本身，而是它逼我去做的事。　（what 主语从句 + not…but…） There was a time when I believed growing up meant freedom. 曾有一段时间，我以为长大就意味着自由。　（There was a time when…） The more I did for her, the more I understood the word "love". 我为她做得越多，就越理解“爱”这个词。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） Only when the storm came did I learn to hold an umbrella for others. 只有当风暴来临时，我才学会为别人撑伞。　（only + 状语从句的倒装） Behind every grown-up child stands a parent quietly letting go. 每个长大的孩子背后，都站着一位悄悄放手的家长。　（地点状语前置的倒装） Hard as it was, that winter taught me more than all my textbooks together. 尽管艰难，那个冬天教给我的比所有课本加起来还多。　（as 引导的让步倒装） Caring for someone is the shortest road between a child and an adult. 照顾一个人，是孩子与成人之间最短的路。　（动名词作主语 + 比喻） I used to count my birthdays; now I count the things I can carry. 我曾经数着自己的生日；如今我数着自己能扛起的事。　（分号对比句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·记叙文（英文报征稿），情境已替换】 你校英文报正在开展以“A Small Act That Changed Me”为主题的征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，记叙一件让你改变的小事，内容包括： 1. 事情的经过； 2. 它带给你的改变； 3. 你的感受。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自高考应用文真题（英文报征稿体裁），情境已替换为本单元话题。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 The Moment I Grew Up 　　People say growing up takes years. For me, it happened in a single night. 　　Last January, my mother was rushed to hospital on a snowy evening, and my father was away on business. For the first time, I was the one in charge. I cooked simple meals, kept the house warm, and brought her favourite porridge to the hospital every afternoon. One evening, I found her crying quietly—not from pain, she said, but from relief that someone was holding things together at home. I held back my tears and smiled at her. 　　Before that winter, I had taken my parents' care for granted, and growing up, to me, was just a number on the calendar. 　　Now I understand: growing up has little to do with age. It happens the moment you learn to carry a load for someone else—and keep smiling while you do it. 【学生习作】 The Moment I Grew Up 　　Last month, my mother was ill, so I took care of her. I cooked food for her. I washed clothes for her. I gave her medicine on time. I was very tired but happy. 　　Before that, I was a lazy boy. I didn't do any housework. My mother did everything for me. Now I do many housework. 　　I think I grew up. I will take care of my mother in the future too. 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 是否只记叙了一个“瞬间”，而不是流水账式的一段时间？ □ “长大前的我”是否有具体表现，让变化看得见？ □ 关键瞬间是否放慢了笔墨，写出了动作、对话或心理？ □ 是否用了一处倒装、强调句或分词结构等高级句式？ □ 结尾是否点出了你对“长大”的理解，而不是空喊“我长大了”？ □ 词数是否在100左右，时态（过去叙事、现在感悟）是否准确？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. maturity n. 成熟 2. adulthood n. 成年；成人期 3. independence n. 独立；自主 4. independent adj. 独立的；自主的 5. responsibility n. 责任；职责 6. obligation n. 义务；职责 7. ambition n. 雄心；抱负 8. determination n. 决心；坚定 9. consideration n. 考虑；体贴 10. devotion n. 挚爱；奉献 11. anxiety n. 焦虑；不安 12. gratitude n. 感激；感恩 13. sacrifice n. 牺牲 vt. 牺牲；献出 14. accompany vt. 陪伴；陪同 15. appreciate vt. 感激；欣赏；领会 16. mature adj. 成熟的 17. reluctant adj. 不情愿的 18. precious adj. 珍贵的；宝贵的 19. memorable adj. 难忘的；值得纪念的 20. tendency n. 倾向；趋势 21. assumption n. 假定；设想 22. confusion n. 困惑；混淆 23. dilemma n. 困境；进退两难 24. turning point n. 转折点；关键时刻 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. grow up 长大；成长 2. step out of one's comfort zone 走出舒适区 3. take on responsibility 承担起责任 4. look after 照顾；照料 5. rely on 依靠；依赖 6. take it for granted 认为……理所当然 7. hold back 忍住；抑制（情绪、眼泪） 8. pull through 恢复健康；渡过难关 9. from then on 从那时起 10. no longer 不再 11. face up to 勇敢面对 12. get through 度过；熬过（难关） 13. to one's relief 令某人欣慰的是 14. stand on one's own feet 自立；独立 15. all by oneself 独自；全靠自己 16. deal with by oneself 独自处理；对付 17. be there for sb. 陪伴并支持某人 18. be grateful to sb. for sth. 因某事感激某人 19. put oneself in sb.'s shoes 设身处地替某人着想 20. a sense of responsibility 一股责任感 21. burst into tears 突然大哭起来 22. calm down 平静下来 23. make a difference 有影响；起作用 24. in the long run 从长远看 25. come of age 成年；到法定年龄 26. wipe away the tears 擦去眼泪 27. in the past 在过去 28. overnight 一夜之间；突然间 29. learn a lesson from 从……中吸取教训 30. treasure the moment 珍惜这一时刻 Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. I have just stepped into adulthood. 2. My mother fell ill, and for the first time it was I who looked after her. 3. I finally understood that my parents could not always be there for me. 4. Day after day, I cooked, cleaned and kept my grandma company. 5. At first, fear almost swallowed me. 6. The experience taught me what no textbook ever could. 7. The boy who once hid behind his mother is no longer there. 8. Growing up, I realized, is not about age but about responsibility. 四、教材好句精选 1. I took it for granted that my parents would always be there for me. 2. Not until that winter did I understand what caring for someone really means. 3. My mother fell ill, and I took on all the housework. 4. Looking at her tired face, I felt grown-up for the first time. 5. I stayed by her side day and night until she pulled through. 6. From that day on, I was no longer a child who only relied on others. 7. It was that very moment that made me truly grow up. 8. I held back my tears and brought my mother a cup of hot water. 9. Growing up means giving rather than taking. 10. I will never forget the winter when I learned to take on responsibility. 11. It is not age but responsibility that defines maturity. 12. Only by stepping out of our comfort zone can we learn to be independent. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. With my mother lying ill in bed, I took over the housework. 2. Standing beside her bed, I watched her fall asleep. 3. Not until that week did I realize the weight my parents carried. 4. It was that very moment that made me grow up. 5. So tired was I that I could hardly stand. 6. It was the first time that I had cooked a whole meal for my family. 7. There was a time when I took my mother's care for granted. 8. Growing up is not about age but about learning to shoulder responsibility. 9. Only after we have carried a load ourselves can we understand growing up. 10. Step out of your comfort zone, and you will find yourself growing up sooner than you expect. 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·记叙文（英文报征稿），情境已替换】 审体裁：记叙文（英文报征稿），标题已给出，三至四段，无称呼与落款。 审人称：第一人称（I）叙事，第三人称写爷爷。 审时态：叙事用一般过去时；感悟用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 起因（数学考砸，自我否定）；Para 2 爷爷的“梯子哲学”；Para 3 改变（一步步订正错题，成绩回升）；Para 4 感悟。 审语气：以小见大，用具体动作和引语说话，避免空喊“我变了”。 【参考范文】 A Small Act That Changed Me 　　Last autumn, I failed my first maths test and locked myself in my room, convinced I was simply "not good at maths". 　　It was my grandfather who knocked at the door. Instead of comforting me, he handed me a ladder and asked me to help him fix the leaking roof. "See?" he said at the top, "you climb one rung at a time, and suddenly you're there." 　　I returned to my desk with those words. Step by step, I worked through every mistake, and three months later my scores climbed higher than ever. 　　What grandpa gave me was not a lesson in maths, but a way of climbing—slowly, bravely, rung by rung. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 外研版选择性必修二 Unit 1　Growing Up 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在以“The Moment I Grew Up”为题征稿。请你写一篇短文投稿，记叙一个让你突然长大的瞬间（如一次照顾生病的家人、一次独自解决突发问题），写清你前后的变化。内容包括： 1. 简述那次经历（时间、起因、经过）； 2. 对比“长大前的我”和“长大后的我”； 3. 谈谈你对“长大”的理解。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙文（英文报征稿）：点题—叙事—感悟，标题已给出，直接入文，不写称呼与落款。 人称 第一人称（I）叙事；写到家人、救援者等用第三人称，注意动作与神态的观察视角。 时态 叙事用一般过去时；过去的过去（如“以前我一直以为”）用过去完成时；感悟用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：点题，一句话引出“那个瞬间”；Para 2：交代背景，写“长大前的我”；Para 3：细写瞬间本身（照顾生病的妈妈／独自处理突发状况），放慢笔墨；Para 4：写“长大后的我”，点出对成长的理解。 要点 前后变化要“看得见”：用具体的动作、细节对比（从前依赖、如今担当），忌空喊“我长大了”；关键瞬间要有动作、对话或心理描写。 语气 真挚、克制，用细节打动人，避免夸张抒情和大段说教；结尾一句感悟即可，点到为止。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. maturity n. 成熟 2. adulthood n. 成年；成人期 3. independence n. 独立；自主 4. independent adj. 独立的；自主的 5. responsibility n. 责任；职责 6. obligation n. 义务；职责 7. ambition n. 雄心；抱负 8. determination n. 决心；坚定 9. consideration n. 考虑；体贴 10. devotion n. 挚爱；奉献 11. anxiety n. 焦虑；不安 12. gratitude n. 感激；感恩 13. sacrifice n. 牺牲 vt. 牺牲；献出 14. accompany vt. 陪伴；陪同 15. appreciate vt. 感激；欣赏；领会 16. mature adj. 成熟的 17. reluctant adj. 不情愿的 18. precious adj. 珍贵的；宝贵的 19. memorable adj. 难忘的；值得纪念的 20. tendency n. 倾向；趋势 21. assumption n. 假定；设想 22. confusion n. 困惑；混淆 23. dilemma n. 困境；进退两难 24. turning point n. 转折点；关键时刻 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. grow up 长大；成长 2. step out of one's comfort zone 走出舒适区 3. take on responsibility 承担起责任 4. look after 照顾；照料 5. rely on 依靠；依赖 6. take it for granted 认为……理所当然 7. hold back 忍住；抑制（情绪、眼泪） 8. pull through 恢复健康；渡过难关 9. from then on 从那时起 10. no longer 不再 11. face up to 勇敢面对 12. get through 度过；熬过（难关） 13. to one's relief 令某人欣慰的是 14. stand on one's own feet 自立；独立 15. all by oneself 独自；全靠自己 16. deal with by oneself 独自处理；对付 17. be there for sb. 陪伴并支持某人 18. be grateful to sb. for sth. 因某事感激某人 19. put oneself in sb.'s shoes 设身处地替某人着想 20. a sense of responsibility 一股责任感 21. burst into tears 突然大哭起来 22. calm down 平静下来 23. make a difference 有影响；起作用 24. in the long run 从长远看 25. come of age 成年；到法定年龄 26. wipe away the tears 擦去眼泪 27. in the past 在过去 28. overnight 一夜之间；突然间 29. learn a lesson from 从……中吸取教训 30. treasure the moment 珍惜这一时刻 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. I am 18 years old now. I have just stepped into adulthood. 2. My mother was sick, so I looked after her. My mother fell ill, and for the first time it was I who looked after her. 3. I realized my parents could not always be there. I finally understood that my parents could not always be there for me. 4. I took care of my grandma every day. Day after day, I cooked, cleaned and kept my grandma company. 5. I was very scared at first. At first, fear almost swallowed me. 6. I learned a lot from this. The experience taught me what no textbook ever could. 7. I have changed a lot. The boy who once hid behind his mother is no longer there. 8. I understood what growing up means. Growing up, I realized, is not about age but about responsibility. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 我曾理所当然地认为父母会一直照顾我。 　　I took it for granted that my parents would always be there for me. 2. 直到那个冬天，我才明白照顾一个人意味着什么。 　　Not until that winter did I understand what caring for someone really means. 3. 妈妈病倒了，我便挑起了家务的担子。 　　My mother fell ill, and I took on all the housework. 4. 看着她疲惫的脸，我第一次感到自己长大了。 　　Looking at her tired face, I felt grown-up for the first time. 5. 我日夜守在她身边，直到她渐渐好起来。 　　I stayed by her side day and night until she pulled through. 6. 从那天起，我不再是一个只会依赖别人的孩子。 　　From that day on, I was no longer a child who only relied on others. 7. 正是那个瞬间让我真正长大了。 　　It was that very moment that made me truly grow up. 8. 我忍住眼泪，给妈妈端去一杯热水。 　　I held back my tears and brought my mother a cup of hot water. 9. 长大意味着付出，而不是索取。 　　Growing up means giving rather than taking. 10. 我永远不会忘记那个我学会承担责任的冬天。 　　I will never forget the winter when I learned to take on responsibility. 11. 定义成熟的是责任，而非年龄。 　　It is not age but responsibility that defines maturity. 12. 只有走出舒适区，我们才能学会独立。 　　Only by stepping out of our comfort zone can we learn to be independent. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. My mother fell ill. I took over the housework. 要求：用 with 复合结构把两句合并为一句 → With my mother lying ill in bed, I took over the housework. 2. I stood beside her bed. I watched her fall asleep. 要求：用动词-ing 形式作状语合并为一句 → Standing beside her bed, I watched her fall asleep. 3. I didn't realize the weight my parents carried until that week. 要求：用 Not until 开头的倒装句改写 → Not until that week did I realize the weight my parents carried. 4. That moment made me grow up. 要求：用强调句强调 that moment（可加 very 增强语气） → It was that very moment that made me grow up. 5. I was so tired that I could hardly stand. 要求：用 So…that… 结构的倒装句改写 → So tired was I that I could hardly stand. 6. I cooked a whole meal for my family. It was the first time. 要求：用 It was the first time that… 句型合并（注意时态） → It was the first time that I had cooked a whole meal for my family. 7. I once took my mother's care for granted. 要求：用 There was a time when… 句型改写 → There was a time when I took my mother's care for granted. 8. Growing up is not about age. It is about responsibility. 要求：用 not…but… 结构合并为一句 → Growing up is not about age but about learning to shoulder responsibility. 9. We can understand growing up only after we have carried a load ourselves. 要求：用 Only + 状语从句置于句首的倒装句改写 → Only after we have carried a load ourselves can we understand growing up. 10. If you want to grow up, you must step out of your comfort zone. 要求：改为“祈使句 + and”结构 → Step out of your comfort zone, and you will find yourself growing up sooner than you expect. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Growing up is not a single moment but a series of quiet awakenings. 成长不是某一个瞬间，而是一连串安静的觉醒。　（表语对仗 + not…but…） Never had I understood my mother's tiredness until I carried her load myself. 直到亲自挑起她的担子，我才懂得妈妈的疲惫。　（Never 置于句首的倒装） It was in the kitchen, washing dishes for the first time, that I felt myself truly grow. 正是在厨房里第一次洗碗时，我感到自己真正成长了。　（强调句 + 插入分词短语） The moment I stopped waiting to be taken care of, I grew up. 当我不再等着被人照顾的那一刻，我长大了。　（the moment 引导时间状语从句） Responsibility is the true mark of maturity, not the candles on a birthday cake. 责任才是成熟真正的标志，而不是生日蛋糕上的蜡烛。　（not 对比 + 比喻） So absorbed was I in my own world that I had never noticed her grey hair. 我如此沉浸在自己的世界里，从未注意到她的白发。　（so…that 的倒装） What changed me was not the illness itself, but what it forced me to do. 改变我的不是疾病本身，而是它逼我去做的事。　（what 主语从句 + not…but…） There was a time when I believed growing up meant freedom. 曾有一段时间，我以为长大就意味着自由。　（There was a time when…） The more I did for her, the more I understood the word "love". 我为她做得越多，就越理解“爱”这个词。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） Only when the storm came did I learn to hold an umbrella for others. 只有当风暴来临时，我才学会为别人撑伞。　（only + 状语从句的倒装） Behind every grown-up child stands a parent quietly letting go. 每个长大的孩子背后，都站着一位悄悄放手的家长。　（地点状语前置的倒装） Hard as it was, that winter taught me more than all my textbooks together. 尽管艰难，那个冬天教给我的比所有课本加起来还多。　（as 引导的让步倒装） Caring for someone is the shortest road between a child and an adult. 照顾一个人，是孩子与成人之间最短的路。　（动名词作主语 + 比喻） I used to count my birthdays; now I count the things I can carry. 我曾经数着自己的生日；如今我数着自己能扛起的事。　（分号对比句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·记叙文（英文报征稿），情境已替换】 你校英文报正在开展以“A Small Act That Changed Me”为主题的征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，记叙一件让你改变的小事，内容包括： 1. 事情的经过； 2. 它带给你的改变； 3. 你的感受。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自高考应用文真题（英文报征稿体裁），情境已替换为本单元话题。 【审题建模】 审体裁：记叙文（英文报征稿），标题已给出，三至四段，无称呼与落款。 审人称：第一人称（I）叙事，第三人称写爷爷。 审时态：叙事用一般过去时；感悟用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 起因（数学考砸，自我否定）；Para 2 爷爷的“梯子哲学”；Para 3 改变（一步步订正错题，成绩回升）；Para 4 感悟。 审语气：以小见大，用具体动作和引语说话，避免空喊“我变了”。 【参考范文】 A Small Act That Changed Me 　　Last autumn, I failed my first maths test and locked myself in my room, convinced I was simply "not good at maths". 　　It was my grandfather who knocked at the door. Instead of comforting me, he handed me a ladder and asked me to help him fix the leaking roof. "See?" he said at the top, "you climb one rung at a time, and suddenly you're there." 　　I returned to my desk with those words. Step by step, I worked through every mistake, and three months later my scores climbed higher than ever. 　　What grandpa gave me was not a lesson in maths, but a way of climbing—slowly, bravely, rung by rung. 【亮点句式】 ① …convinced I was simply "not good at maths"（形容词作状语，简洁传神） ② Instead of comforting me, he handed me a ladder…（用具体动作代替安慰，细节立人） ③ you climb one rung at a time, and suddenly you're there（口语化引语 + and 并列，画面感强） ④ What grandpa gave me was not a lesson in maths, but a way of climbing（what 从句 + not…but… 收束全文） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 The Moment I Grew Up 　　People say growing up takes years. For me, it happened in a single night. 　　Last January, my mother was rushed to hospital on a snowy evening, and my father was away on business. For the first time, I was the one in charge. I cooked simple meals, kept the house warm, and brought her favourite porridge to the hospital every afternoon. One evening, I found her crying quietly—not from pain, she said, but from relief that someone was holding things together at home. I held back my tears and smiled at her. 　　Before that winter, I had taken my parents' care for granted, and growing up, to me, was just a number on the calendar. 　　Now I understand: growing up has little to do with age. It happens the moment you learn to carry a load for someone else—and keep smiling while you do it. 【学生习作】 The Moment I Grew Up 　　Last month, my mother was ill, so I took care of her. I cooked food for her. I washed clothes for her. I gave her medicine on time. I was very tired but happy. 　　Before that, I was a lazy boy. I didn't do any housework. My mother did everything for me. Now I do many housework. 　　I think I grew up. I will take care of my mother in the future too. 【习作点评】 优点：选材切题，“妈妈生病、我第一次照顾她”符合任务要求；标题已给出，格式正确；全文意思清楚，基本无大错。 问题一：细节不足。“cook food / wash clothes”只是清单式罗列，应换成一两个具体场景（如深夜端水、第一次下厨的慌乱），画面比清单动人。 问题二：前后变化没有形成对比。“I was a lazy boy”一笔带过；应写出“以前什么样—现在什么样”的具体对照，让“长大”看得见。 问题三：语言有明显错误与短板。“many housework”应为 much housework（不可数名词）；且句式几乎全是“主语+动词”短句，应加入倒装、强调句或分词结构。 问题四：结尾说理太浅。“I think I grew up”是结论不是感悟；应点出对“长大”的理解，如“长大就是开始为别人做事”，一句即可。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：变化要“可见”。用“从前的我”与“现在的我”的具体细节对照（如从乱扔书本到把家里打理得井井有条），一个动作胜过十句“我长大了”。 得分点二：瞬间要“放慢”。在最关键处加入动作、对话和心理（如“我忍住眼泪，给妈妈端去一杯热水”），让叙事从“流水账”变成“特写镜头”。 得分点三：本单元词块要用够。take on responsibility、take it for granted、hold back、pull through、no longer、from then on、step out of one's comfort zone 至少出现 5 个，结尾再用一句强调句或倒装收束，既有文采又有力量。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $