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考前特训
专题07 书面表达 期中考满分冲刺(南通专用)
姓名:___________班级:___________座号:___________
内容提要
题型分析
解题指导
集中突破
一、题型定位
“书面表达”是南通期中卷的最后一题,也是唯一没有标准答案的主观题:给出一段中文情境与要点提示,要求写一篇 80—100 词左右的英语短文,满分通常 15 分。
评分看四件事:要点是否齐全、结构是否清楚、语言是否准确、格式是否规范(书信有称呼与署名、发言稿有称呼与结束语、征文有标题)。它考的不是“难词难句”,而是“把中文要点准确、连贯地转成英文”的能力。
二、命题形式与题量
本次特训共 8 道写作题,每题 1 篇,体裁覆盖:命题作文(My Best Friend)、征文投稿(My school life、我的 DIY 故事)、电子邮件(给笔友 Peter、给网友 Mike)、申请信(DIY 俱乐部)与会议发言稿(赴北京参会)。
词数要求多为 80—100 词,部分题目已给出开头或结尾(如 Dear Peter, / Best wishes, / Ladies and gentlemen),这部分不计入总词数;答题区留有 6—8 行书写空间,需按行书写、字迹清楚。
三、核心考点分布(基于本次特训 8 题梳理)
梳理 8 道题的要点提示与范文,写作的考查点可归纳为以下七类:
(1)要点齐全:每条中文提示都必须落到句子上,缺一条就扣一档,如 Test 1 的外貌、性格、回忆、评价四条,Test 8 的性格爱好、作品、入会原因三条。
(2)时态与人称:介绍朋友用一般现在时,叙述一次经历用一般过去时,表达愿望用将来时或 hope to do,如 Test 3 的 DIY 经历通篇过去时、Test 6 的申请信以现在时为主。
(3)段落结构:一般三段——开头点题、中间分点展开、结尾总结或期待;要点多的题目(如 Test 2)可用 First / Second / Third 分段。
(4)连接与过渡:用 and / but / because / so / also / besides / in a word 等把句子串起来,避免“一句一段、句句孤立”。
(5)格式规范:书信要有 Dear..., / Best wishes, / 署名;发言稿要有称呼与 Thank you;征文要自拟标题并居中。
(6)句式变化:在准确的前提下用一两个复合句或非谓语(because 从句、when 从句、to do 表目的、doing 作主语),提升语言档次。
(7)书写与词数:按行书写、不超出答题区,词数控制在要求区间内(少 10 词或多 20 词都会被扣分)。
四、难度与趋势
整体难度中等:话题全部来自教材单元(朋友、校园生活、DIY、学习方法),词汇与句型都在课内范围,真正的难点是“要点多、时间紧”——考场上要在 15—20 分钟内完成审题、列要点、成文与检查。
南通期中卷近年的趋势是:①情境更真实,书信、申请信、发言稿等应用文比例上升,格式分不能丢;②要点更细,常给 3—4 条提示并要求“适当发挥”,只把要点逐条翻译会显得生硬;③对“连贯”的要求提高,范文普遍使用连接词与段落划分,评分时“结构清楚”单独占分。
一、四步解题法
第一步:审题(3 分钟)。圈出三样东西:文体(书信/征文/发言稿)、人称(I / he / we)、时态(介绍用现在时、叙事用过去时);再数一数共有几条要点,用数字标在草稿上。
第二步:列要点(3 分钟)。把每条中文提示缩成“关键词 + 英文短语”,例如“外貌→tall, short black hair”“性格→honest, helpful”;同时想好开头句与结尾句,避免写到一半没话说。
第三步:成文(8 分钟)。按“开头点题—中间分点—结尾总结”三段写,每条要点至少一句;句子以“主谓宾”短句为主,能用 and / because / when 连接就连接,不硬凑难句。
第四步:检查(3 分钟)。四查:要点齐不齐、时态对不对、单词拼写与三单/复数是 否正确、格式(称呼、署名、标题、标点)是否规范;最后数一遍词数。
二、结合本次特训题目的实战点拨
【点拨1】命题作文的四条要点怎么落——以 Test 1 为例:题目要求写 My Best Friend,四条要点分别是外貌、性格、校园回忆、评价。范文用四句话对应四条:先一句 Li Hua is my best friend. He is tall and has short black hair.(外貌),再一句讲性格(honest and helpful),第三句用 I still remember when I failed a math exam last term... 讲一件具体的往事(回忆),最后 I think he is the best friend in the world. 收尾(评价)。提示:要点式作文最稳的写法是“一条要点一句话”,既不会漏点,也不会写乱。
【点拨2】叙事段必须换成过去时——以 Test 3 为例:题目要求写一次 DIY 经历,范文从 My first DIY experience was making a hand-made card... 起笔,全段用 was / decided / made / saw 等过去式,最后用 When my mum saw the card, she said it was the best gift... 收束。提示:写“一次经历”时,动词一律过去式;一旦出现 was/were,后面的动词就要跟着变,别中途跳回现在时。
【点拨3】书信的格式与开头结尾——以 Test 4 为例:题目要求给英国笔友 Peter 写邮件,范文的骨架是:Dear Peter, → How’s it going? I’m glad to tell you about... → 正文分两段(朋友 + 校园生活)→ I enjoy my school life. I think friendship makes me happier. → Hope to hear from you soon. → Yours, Li Hua。提示:书信格式分(称呼、正文、结束语、署名)通常占 2—3 分,缺一项就丢分;开头忌用 Hello, I am Li Hua. 这类生硬句。
【点拨4】发言稿要有“称呼 + 结束语”——以 Test 7 为例:题目要求代表学校赴北京参会并发言,范文以 Ladies and gentlemen, I’m Li Hua from Sunshine Middle School. 开头,中间介绍校园生活与好友,结尾用 That’s all about my wonderful school life. Thank you for your listening. 收束。提示:发言稿属口语体,句子宜短、可用 I’m / That’s 缩写;结尾的 Thank you 不能省,这是格式分。
【点拨5】申请信要写“动机 + 能力”两件事——以 Test 6 为例:题目要求给 DIY 俱乐部写申请信,范文先自我介绍(I am Li Hua, a student in Grade 8. I would like to join the DIY club.),再写性格与爱好(careful and creative),接着写会做的作品,最后写加入的原因(want to learn more DIY skills and make more friends),并以 I am looking forward to your answer. 收尾。提示:申请信的要点通常是“我是谁—我能做什么—我为什么来”,三段式最清楚;结尾用 look forward to 比 hope 更得体。
【点拨6】三个要点如何用连接词串起来——以 Test 2 为例:题目要求写 My school life 征文,三条要点分别是好友、校园活动、如何做好学生。范文用 I have a good friend named Tom... 起,接着用 We became good friends because... 讲原因,再用 To be a good learner, I should... 自然过渡到第三条。提示:要点之间要有“桥”——because 讲原因、also 补充、in a word 收束;没有连接词的作文读起来像“清单”。
【点拨7】提建议类要“方法 + 理由”成对写——以 Test 5(给 Mike 的邮件)为例:题目要求就“怎样学好英语”给网友 Mike 提建议,范文先共情(I’m sorry to hear you have some trouble learning English.),再用 First, it’s important to make a study plan and stick to it every day. 给出方法与理由,最后以 Don’t give up! I believe you can do better. 鼓励收尾。提示:建议类作文最忌只列方法不说理由;每条建议后面用 because / so 补一句,内容立刻充实。
【点拨8】“适当发挥”怎么发挥才不跑题——以 Test 8 为例:题目要求以 Becoming a Better Me 为题,写朋友、社团、DIY 技能三方面如何让自己成长。范文先总起 Life is a journey of growth.,再分三段写朋友帮我学习、社团让我放松、DIY 让我更爱生活,最后用 In a word, friends, hobbies and skills help me grow greatly. 收束。提示:“适当发挥”指的是在要点基础上补一句感受或例子(如 When I feel stressed, ...),而不是另起话题;每段结尾加一句“这让我……”最安全。
三、易错提醒
• 漏要点是最常见的失分:动笔前把中文提示编号,写一段划掉一条,写完再核对一遍。
• 时态混用:叙事用过去时、介绍用现在时、期待用将来时;一句话里不要两种时态打架。
• 格式分不能丢:书信要有 Dear / Yours,发言稿要有称呼与 Thank you,征文要有标题且居中。
• 不要整篇简单句:适当用 because / when / if 从句与 to do 表目的,语言分才上得去。
• 词数控制在要求区间:少 10 词或多 20 词都会被扣分,写完后数一遍。
• 书写按行、字迹清楚,不写出答题区;涂改处一笔划掉,不要涂黑。
Test 1
1.请以“My Best Friend”为题,写一篇短文,介绍你的好朋友。内容包括:
1. 他/她的外貌;
2. 他/她的性格特点;
3. 你们在校园里美好的回忆;
4. 你对他/她的评价。
要求:(1)包含所有提示内容,语言通顺,意思连贯,条理清楚;
(2)词数80左右,标题已经给出,不计入总词数。
My Best Friend
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【答案】
My Best Friend
Li Hua is my best friend. He is tall and has short black hair. He has big eyes and always wears a smile. He is not only outgoing but also helpful.
I still remember when I failed a math exam last term; I was very sad. He encouraged me and helped me with my lessons patiently. We also played basketball together on the playground after school. We shared happiness and sadness together.
I think he is the best friend in the world. I hope our friendship will last forever.
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体: 介绍类记叙文,用一般现在时和一般过去时为主
明确要点:最好的朋友的外貌、性格特点、在校园里美好的回忆、对他/她的评价
确定人称:第三人称(he)和第一人称(we)为主
注意事项:需包含题干中所有要点内容,词数80左右
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:介绍自己最好的朋友是谁以及他的外貌和性格特点
主体段:具体描述两人在校园里美好的回忆
结尾段:阐述对最好的朋友的评价,表达情感
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:最好的朋友的外貌
外貌选择:tall and has short black hair/has big eyes and always wears a smile/has long black hair and big bright eyes/tall with short hair/of medium height/wears a pair of glasses/tall and thin/has long curly brown hair等
要点二:最好的朋友的性格特点
性格选择:not only outgoing but also helpful/quiet and helpful/is always ready to help others/outgoing and funny/friendly and patient/kind and easy-going/speaks softly and is always ready to help her classmates等
要点三:在校园里美好的回忆
回忆选择:he encouraged me and helped me with my lessons patiently/we also played basketball together on the playground after school/we shared happiness and sadness together/we often read books and play games together after class/we practiced running for the sports meet and cheered for each other等
要点四:对他/她的评价
评价选择:he is the best friend in the world/kind and hard-working/a true friend/she teaches me to be brave/honest and reliable/I’m lucky to have her as my friend/brings lots of happiness to my school life/she makes me a better person等
Test 2
2.在人生的旅途中,我们不断提升自我,成为理想中的模样。 Helen Keller once said, “Alone we can do so little; together we can do so much.”朋友的支持、尝试新事物的喜悦以及一路学到的技能,都助力我们的成长。请你回顾这些经历,说说它们如何让你成为更好的自己。
提示:
1. How does your good friend often help you?
2. What school club are you in and how does it help you relax or develop a hobby?
3. What DIY skill do you have and how does it make you love life more?
要求:
1、短文应包含所有要点,并适当发挥;
2、词数100 词左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数;
3、文中不得出现真实的姓名和学校名称。
Becoming a Better Me
Life is a journey of growth. We are always learning, changing and becoming a better student.
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【答案】
Becoming a Better Me Life is a journey of growth. We are always learning, changing and becoming a better student.
First, my good friend Tom often helps me with my study. When I feel stressed, he always encourages me to keep going. Second, I am in the School Reading Club. Reading books helps me relax after class and develops my hobby of writing stories. Third, I have a DIY skill of making beautiful cards. It makes me love life more because I enjoy creating things with my hands and sharing them with friends.
In a word, friends, hobbies and skills help me grow greatly. I will keep working hard to be a better me in the future.
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:记叙文,以一般现在时为主,结尾展望用一般将来时
明确要点:朋友如何帮助自己成长;参加的学校社团及其放松/培养爱好的作用;掌握的 DIY 技能及它让你更热爱生活的原因
确定人称:第一人称(I/my)
注意事项:包含全部提示要点并适当发挥;词数100词左右;不得出现真实姓名和学校名称
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:总起,点明成长主题(题干已给出)
主体段:分述三个要点——朋友的帮助、学校社团、DIY技能
结尾段:总结朋友、爱好与技能带来的成长,展望未来
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:朋友如何帮助
帮助学习:helps me with my study/help me with my lessons等
鼓励情绪:When I feel stressed, he encourages me/encourage me to keep going等
帮助方式:comforts me/gives me confidence/cheers me up等
要点二:学校社团及其作用
社团选择:School Reading Club/join a reading club/basketball club等
放松作用:helps me relax after class/help me relax/make me feel relaxed等
培养爱好:develops my hobby of writing stories/develop my hobby/broaden my interests等
要点三:DIY技能及热爱生活
技能内容:making beautiful cards/make cards by hand/cook simple dishes等
热爱生活:makes me love life more/make me enjoy life/feel happy about life等
分享快乐:sharing them with friends/share my works with others等
Test 3
3.假如你是李华,你的英国笔友Peter来信询问你最好的朋友以及你们的校园生活。请根据以下要点提示,给他写一封电子邮件。
朋友
姓名、外貌、性格(诚实、有幽默感……)、爱好(打羽毛球……)
学校生活
日常课程(如语文、数学、英语等),最喜欢英语学科并介绍至少两点学好英语的方法
学校重视环境卫生和食品教育,学习烹饪了解健康饮食,意识到健康饮食的重要性
你的感受
谈谈你对校园生活、友谊的看法
要求:1. 短文应包括表格中的全部信息,条理清楚,行文连贯;
2. 短文中不能出现真实的姓名、学校名和地名;
3. 词数90左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Peter,
How’s it going? I’m glad to tell you about my best friend and my school life.
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【答案】
Dear Peter,
How’s it going? I’m glad to tell you about my best friend and my school life.
My best friend is Tom. He is tall and wears glasses. He is not only honest but also humorous. We play badminton together.
At school, we have Chinese, Math and English. I like English best. To learn it well, I listen carefully and read English stories daily. Besides, our school cares about health and food education. We learn cooking and realise the importance of healthy eating.
I enjoy my school life. I think friendship makes me happier. Hope to hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:应用文(电子邮件),以一般现在时为主
明确要点:介绍好友Tom的外貌、性格、爱好;介绍校园课程、学好英语的方法、学校饮食健康教育;表达自己对校园生活和友谊的感受
确定人称:第一人称(I/my)、第三人称(he/Tom)
注意事项:邮件格式规范;覆盖表格全部要点;文中不能出现真实姓名、学校和地名
[第二步:构思布局]
四段式结构:
开头段:承接来信,开启话题(题干已给出)
第二段:介绍好友Tom,描写外貌特征、性格以及爱好
第三段:介绍校园课程、学习英语的方法、学校的饮食健康教育
结尾段:表达对校园生活、友谊的看法,发出期待回信的收尾
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:介绍好友Tom
外貌描写:tall and wears glasses/of medium height/has short curly hair等
性格描写:honest and humorous/kind and helpful/quiet and friendly等
爱好活动:play badminton/play basketball/read books等
要点二:介绍校园生活
课程介绍:have Chinese, Math and English/have Physics/have Art/have PE等
学英语方法:listen carefully/read English stories daily/write English diaries/watch English videos等
校园特色教育:learn cooking/learn about healthy food/have food lessons等
要点三:表达个人感受
校园生活感受:enjoy my school life/love my school life/feel relaxed at school等
友谊看法:friendship makes me happier/friendship brings me joy/a friend helps me a lot等
信件收尾:hope to hear from you soon/wait for your reply/look forward to your letter等
Test 4
4.假设你叫李华,是阳光中学 (Sunshine Middle School) 的一名学生。你将代表你校赴北京参加一个会议并在会上进行发言,此次会议的主题是“My Colourful School Life”。请你根据下表中的内容写一篇英文发言稿。
Your best friend
Name, looks, qualities
Colourful school life
Subjects, activities
Suggestions
Facilities (设施)/environment/activities... (选一点)
【要求】
1.文中应包括所有要点,并适当发挥。
2.词数90左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
3.不得出现真实的个人及学校信息。
Ladies and gentlemen, I’m Li Hua from Sunshine Middle School. I am very glad to share my colourful school life.
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That’s all about my wonderful school life. Thank you for your listening!
【答案】
Ladies and gentlemen, I’m Li Hua from Sunshine Middle School. I am very glad to share my colourful school life.
My best friend is Tom. He has short black hair and bright eyes. He is warm-hearted and always helps me with my lessons patiently when I meet difficulties. We have many colourful subjects at school, such as English and Art. We also take part in different after-school activities, like English corners and sports clubs. These activities make our daily life rich and interesting. I hope our school can build more reading rooms in the library so that we can have a quiet place to enjoy reading in our spare time.
That’s all about my wonderful school life. Thank you for your listening!
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:发言稿 (应用文),以一般现在时为主
明确要点:介绍最好的朋友 (姓名、外貌、品质);多彩校园生活 (学科、活动);一条学校建议 (设施/环境/活动任选一点)
确定人称:第一人称 (I/my),第三人称描述朋友
注意事项:包含全部要点、适当发挥,不出现真实个人及学校信息
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:承接已给开头,引出本次分享的主题
主体段:依次介绍好友情况、校园学科与课后活动、对学校的建议
结尾段:使用题目给出的结束语收尾
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:Your best friend
姓名外貌:My best friend is Tom. He has short black hair and bright eyes./My best friend is Amy. She has long curly hair等
品质描述:He is helpful and always ready to give me a hand when I meet problems./She is outgoing and patient等
要点二:Colourful school life
学科:We have many interesting subjects at school,like English and Art./We have Math, Chinese and PE等
活动:After class, we often take part in sports meetings and club activities./We join music and science clubs after school等
要点三:Suggestions
建议内容:I hope our school can build a bigger library so we can read more kinds of books./I hope we can have more outdoor activities等
理由:we can read more kinds of books/help us relax after busy study等
Test 5
5.学校英语报社正在举办主题为“My school life”的征文活动,请你写一篇短文投稿。
要点:
1. 你有一个好朋友 (姓名,性格,什么时候成为好朋友);
2. 学校生活:和你的好朋友一起参加哪些活动,相同的爱好,对学校生活的感受;
3. 如何成为一名善于学习的好学生。
词数80左右,短文开头已给,不计入总分。
My school life is colourful.
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【答案】例文
My school life is colourful.
I have a good friend named Tom. He is kind and helpful. We became good friends two years ago when we were in Grade Seven. We often take part in many school activities together. We both love reading and playing basketball after class. I always enjoy my busy but wonderful school life.
To be a good learner, I should make good study plans and learn to ask for help when I meet problems. I will keep working hard.
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:介绍性记叙文,以一般现在时为主,少量一般过去时
明确要点:好朋友的姓名、性格、相识时间;和好友一起参与的活动、共同爱好、校园生活感受;如何成为善于学习的学生
确定人称:第一人称 (I/my)
注意事项:不能透露真实姓名与学校名称,词数控制80左右
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:总起句,概括校园生活多彩
主体段:介绍好友信息,讲述和好友在校的活动、共同爱好,表达对校园生活的感受
结尾段:说明成为优秀学习者的做法,升华主题
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:好朋友
姓名选择:Tom/Li Hua/Jack等
性格描述:kind and helpful/warm-hearted and easy-going/quiet and careful等
相识时间:two years ago when we were in Grade Seven/on the first day of Grade Seven/at the beginning of Grade Seven等
要点二:校园生活
共同活动:take part in many school activities together/join in school sports meetings and English clubs together/work on group projects together等
共同爱好:reading and playing basketball after class/run on the playground after school/listening to pop music and drawing pictures in our free time等
感受:always enjoy my busy but wonderful school life/think my school life is full of fun and warmth等
要点三:如何成为善于学习的学生
方法:make good study plans/learn to ask for help when meeting problems/keep working hard/take notes in class/check mistakes after finishing homework等
Test 6
6.假设你是李华,你的外国网友 Mike 最近来信说他在学习英语时遇到了困难,不知道怎样才能学好。请你根据以下要点提示,用英语给他写一封邮件,分享你的学习方法与建议。
要点:
1. 学习方法:至少两点(如制定计划、多听多读、记笔记等)并说明理由;
2. 时间安排:每天坚持,合理利用时间;
3. 你的鼓励或期待。
注意:
1. 词数80左右(开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数);
2. 内容涵盖所有要点,可适当发挥;
3. 文中不得出现真实校名和人名。
Dear Mike,
I’m sorry to hear you have some trouble learning English. Here are my ways to be a good learner.
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Best wishes,
Li Hua
【答案】例文
Dear Mike,
I’m sorry to hear you have some trouble learning English. Here are my ways to be a good learner.
First, it’s important to make a study plan and stick to it every day. You can spend 30 minutes reading English books in the morning and listen to English songs before bed. This helps you improve listening and reading skills. Second, taking notes is very useful because it helps you remember key points. Also, try to speak English as much as possible to improve your speaking skills.
Learning English takes time, so please be patient. Don’t give up! I believe you can make great progress soon.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:应用文,介绍学习方法,以一般现在时为主
明确要点:学习方法、时间安排、鼓励与期待
确定人称:第一人称(I/my)和第二人称(you/your)
注意事项:不得出现真实姓名和学校名称,词数80左右
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:(已给出)表达同情并引出下文建议
主体段:分别介绍具体的学习方法及其理由,以及关于时间管理的建议
结尾段:表达鼓励,相信对方能学好英语
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:学习方法
方法选择:make a study plan/listen to English songs/read English books/take notes/watch English movies等
理由说明:help improve listening and reading skills/helps you remember key points/enlarge vocabulary/remember words better等
要点二:时间安排
时间建议:every day/in the morning/spend 30 minutes/before bed/spare time/evening等
要点三:鼓励与期待
鼓励话语:Don’t give up/I believe in you/You can do it等
期待结果:make great progress/enjoy learning English等
Test 7
7.假如你校英文报正在举办“我的DIY故事”征文活动,请你根据以下提示,写一篇英语短文投稿,介绍你的一次DIY经历。
提示:
1. 你制作了什么?为什么制作它?
2. 制作的过程是怎样的?遇到了什么困难?
3. 你的感受和收获是什么?
注意:
1. 文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称;
2. 词数100左右;文章的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数。
My first DIY experience was making a hand-made card for my mum’s birthday.
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【答案】例文
My first DIY experience was making a hand-made card for my mum’s birthday.
I decided to make it by myself instead of buying one, because I wanted to show my love to her. First, I cut a piece of red paper into the size of a card. Then I drew some flowers and a heart on it with coloured pencils. I also wrote “Happy Birthday, Mum” on it. At first, I wrote the words wrong and had to start again. It took me an hour to finish the card.
When my mum saw the card, she said it was the best gift she had ever got. I felt so proud and happy. DIY is really fun and meaningful.
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:记叙文,以一般过去时为主
明确要点:DIY的物品与制作缘由;制作过程与遇到的困难;个人感受与收获
确定人称:第一人称I
注意事项:不得出现真实姓名、学校名称;词数控制在100左右;已给出的开头不计入总词数
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:沿用题干给出的开篇句,直接点明制作对象是给妈妈生日的手工贺卡
主体段:清晰描述制作的具体步骤,自然植入过程中遇到的小困难以及对应的解决方式
结尾段:写出妈妈收到贺卡的反应,抒发自己这次DIY的感悟与收获
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:说明制作缘由:make a hand-made card for my mum’s birthday/because I wanted to show my love to her/give her a special surprise instead of buying a usual gift from the shop等
要点二:描述制作过程:First, I cut a piece of red paper into the size of a card. Then I drew some flowers and a heart on it with coloured pencils. I also wrote “Happy Birthday, Mum” on it./First, I took a piece of coloured paper, some crayons and glue out. Finally, I wrote my best wishes to Mum on the card.等
要点三:点明遇到的困难:I wrote the words wrong and had to start again/I carelessly spilt glue on the corner and it got dirty等
要点四:阐述感受收获:When my mum saw the card, she said it was the best gift she had ever got. I felt so proud and happy. DIY is really fun and meaningful./When Mum got the card, she was really moved. I learned that DIY brings me the joy of creating things by myself, and full love is the best gift for family.等
Test 8
8.学校DIY俱乐部正在招募新成员,请你根据以下提示,写一封申请信给俱乐部主席。
提示:
1. 你的性格与爱好 (至少两点);
2. 你会做哪些手工/DIY作品;
3. 你想加入俱乐部的原因 (至少两点)。
注意:
1. 表达清楚,语法正确,上下文连贯;
2. 必须包括所有要点内容,并适当发挥;
3. 词数在100词左右 (开头已给出,不计入总词数);
4. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
Dear Chairperson,
I am Li Hua, a student in Grade 8. I would like to join the DIY club.
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I am looking forward to your answer.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【答案】范文:
Dear Chairperson,
I am Li Hua, a student in Grade 8. I would like to join the DIY club.
I am a careful and creative boy. I love making things by hand in my free time after school. I can make many things, such as paper roses, paper stars, model planes, tie-dyed T-shirts and small wooden shelves. I made a bookshelf for my room last month. It looks beautiful and works very well.
I want to join the club because I want to learn more DIY skills and make more friends who share the same hobby. I also hope we can work together to make things for the school.
I am looking forward to your answer.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【详解】写作步骤:
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:书信类应用文,全文以一般现在时为主,叙述过往经历用一般过去时
明确要点:个人性格与手工爱好;擅长的DIY手工作品;加入俱乐部的理由与个人期望
确定人称:第一人称 (I/my)
注意事项:需包含所有问题要点,并适当发挥;词数100左右
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:自我介绍,表明申请加入DIY俱乐部,开门见山总起全文
主体段:介绍自身性格、手工爱好,列举擅长的DIY作品,举例说明动手能力
结尾段:阐述加入俱乐部的原因,说明个人学习目标与集体愿望,升华结尾
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:个人性格与手工爱好
a careful and creative boy/love making things by hand/patient and imaginative student/enjoy creating works by hand等
要点二:擅长的DIY手工作品
paper roses/tie-dyed T-shirts/small wooden shelves/make a bookshelf/colourful paper stars/cute clay cups/hand-made gifts/build wooden furniture等
要点三:加入俱乐部的理由
learn more DIY skills/make more friends/work together for the school/improve hand-making abilities/meet like-minded classmates/create works for school activities等
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$考前特训
专题07 书面表达 期中考满分冲刺(南通专用)
姓名:___________班级:___________座号:___________
内容提要
题型分析
解题指导
集中突破
一、题型定位
“书面表达”是南通期中卷的最后一题,也是唯一没有标准答案的主观题:给出一段中文情境与要点提示,要求写一篇 80—100 词左右的英语短文,满分通常 15 分。
评分看四件事:要点是否齐全、结构是否清楚、语言是否准确、格式是否规范(书信有称呼与署名、发言稿有称呼与结束语、征文有标题)。它考的不是“难词难句”,而是“把中文要点准确、连贯地转成英文”的能力。
二、命题形式与题量
本次特训共 8 道写作题,每题 1 篇,体裁覆盖:命题作文(My Best Friend)、征文投稿(My school life、我的 DIY 故事)、电子邮件(给笔友 Peter、给网友 Mike)、申请信(DIY 俱乐部)与会议发言稿(赴北京参会)。
词数要求多为 80—100 词,部分题目已给出开头或结尾(如 Dear Peter, / Best wishes, / Ladies and gentlemen),这部分不计入总词数;答题区留有 6—8 行书写空间,需按行书写、字迹清楚。
三、核心考点分布(基于本次特训 8 题梳理)
梳理 8 道题的要点提示与范文,写作的考查点可归纳为以下七类:
(1)要点齐全:每条中文提示都必须落到句子上,缺一条就扣一档,如 Test 1 的外貌、性格、回忆、评价四条,Test 8 的性格爱好、作品、入会原因三条。
(2)时态与人称:介绍朋友用一般现在时,叙述一次经历用一般过去时,表达愿望用将来时或 hope to do,如 Test 3 的 DIY 经历通篇过去时、Test 6 的申请信以现在时为主。
(3)段落结构:一般三段——开头点题、中间分点展开、结尾总结或期待;要点多的题目(如 Test 2)可用 First / Second / Third 分段。
(4)连接与过渡:用 and / but / because / so / also / besides / in a word 等把句子串起来,避免“一句一段、句句孤立”。
(5)格式规范:书信要有 Dear..., / Best wishes, / 署名;发言稿要有称呼与 Thank you;征文要自拟标题并居中。
(6)句式变化:在准确的前提下用一两个复合句或非谓语(because 从句、when 从句、to do 表目的、doing 作主语),提升语言档次。
(7)书写与词数:按行书写、不超出答题区,词数控制在要求区间内(少 10 词或多 20 词都会被扣分)。
四、难度与趋势
整体难度中等:话题全部来自教材单元(朋友、校园生活、DIY、学习方法),词汇与句型都在课内范围,真正的难点是“要点多、时间紧”——考场上要在 15—20 分钟内完成审题、列要点、成文与检查。
南通期中卷近年的趋势是:①情境更真实,书信、申请信、发言稿等应用文比例上升,格式分不能丢;②要点更细,常给 3—4 条提示并要求“适当发挥”,只把要点逐条翻译会显得生硬;③对“连贯”的要求提高,范文普遍使用连接词与段落划分,评分时“结构清楚”单独占分。
一、四步解题法
第一步:审题(3 分钟)。圈出三样东西:文体(书信/征文/发言稿)、人称(I / he / we)、时态(介绍用现在时、叙事用过去时);再数一数共有几条要点,用数字标在草稿上。
第二步:列要点(3 分钟)。把每条中文提示缩成“关键词 + 英文短语”,例如“外貌→tall, short black hair”“性格→honest, helpful”;同时想好开头句与结尾句,避免写到一半没话说。
第三步:成文(8 分钟)。按“开头点题—中间分点—结尾总结”三段写,每条要点至少一句;句子以“主谓宾”短句为主,能用 and / because / when 连接就连接,不硬凑难句。
第四步:检查(3 分钟)。四查:要点齐不齐、时态对不对、单词拼写与三单/复数是 否正确、格式(称呼、署名、标题、标点)是否规范;最后数一遍词数。
二、结合本次特训题目的实战点拨
【点拨1】命题作文的四条要点怎么落——以 Test 1 为例:题目要求写 My Best Friend,四条要点分别是外貌、性格、校园回忆、评价。范文用四句话对应四条:先一句 Li Hua is my best friend. He is tall and has short black hair.(外貌),再一句讲性格(honest and helpful),第三句用 I still remember when I failed a math exam last term... 讲一件具体的往事(回忆),最后 I think he is the best friend in the world. 收尾(评价)。提示:要点式作文最稳的写法是“一条要点一句话”,既不会漏点,也不会写乱。
【点拨2】叙事段必须换成过去时——以 Test 3 为例:题目要求写一次 DIY 经历,范文从 My first DIY experience was making a hand-made card... 起笔,全段用 was / decided / made / saw 等过去式,最后用 When my mum saw the card, she said it was the best gift... 收束。提示:写“一次经历”时,动词一律过去式;一旦出现 was/were,后面的动词就要跟着变,别中途跳回现在时。
【点拨3】书信的格式与开头结尾——以 Test 4 为例:题目要求给英国笔友 Peter 写邮件,范文的骨架是:Dear Peter, → How’s it going? I’m glad to tell you about... → 正文分两段(朋友 + 校园生活)→ I enjoy my school life. I think friendship makes me happier. → Hope to hear from you soon. → Yours, Li Hua。提示:书信格式分(称呼、正文、结束语、署名)通常占 2—3 分,缺一项就丢分;开头忌用 Hello, I am Li Hua. 这类生硬句。
【点拨4】发言稿要有“称呼 + 结束语”——以 Test 7 为例:题目要求代表学校赴北京参会并发言,范文以 Ladies and gentlemen, I’m Li Hua from Sunshine Middle School. 开头,中间介绍校园生活与好友,结尾用 That’s all about my wonderful school life. Thank you for your listening. 收束。提示:发言稿属口语体,句子宜短、可用 I’m / That’s 缩写;结尾的 Thank you 不能省,这是格式分。
【点拨5】申请信要写“动机 + 能力”两件事——以 Test 6 为例:题目要求给 DIY 俱乐部写申请信,范文先自我介绍(I am Li Hua, a student in Grade 8. I would like to join the DIY club.),再写性格与爱好(careful and creative),接着写会做的作品,最后写加入的原因(want to learn more DIY skills and make more friends),并以 I am looking forward to your answer. 收尾。提示:申请信的要点通常是“我是谁—我能做什么—我为什么来”,三段式最清楚;结尾用 look forward to 比 hope 更得体。
【点拨6】三个要点如何用连接词串起来——以 Test 2 为例:题目要求写 My school life 征文,三条要点分别是好友、校园活动、如何做好学生。范文用 I have a good friend named Tom... 起,接着用 We became good friends because... 讲原因,再用 To be a good learner, I should... 自然过渡到第三条。提示:要点之间要有“桥”——because 讲原因、also 补充、in a word 收束;没有连接词的作文读起来像“清单”。
【点拨7】提建议类要“方法 + 理由”成对写——以 Test 5(给 Mike 的邮件)为例:题目要求就“怎样学好英语”给网友 Mike 提建议,范文先共情(I’m sorry to hear you have some trouble learning English.),再用 First, it’s important to make a study plan and stick to it every day. 给出方法与理由,最后以 Don’t give up! I believe you can do better. 鼓励收尾。提示:建议类作文最忌只列方法不说理由;每条建议后面用 because / so 补一句,内容立刻充实。
【点拨8】“适当发挥”怎么发挥才不跑题——以 Test 8 为例:题目要求以 Becoming a Better Me 为题,写朋友、社团、DIY 技能三方面如何让自己成长。范文先总起 Life is a journey of growth.,再分三段写朋友帮我学习、社团让我放松、DIY 让我更爱生活,最后用 In a word, friends, hobbies and skills help me grow greatly. 收束。提示:“适当发挥”指的是在要点基础上补一句感受或例子(如 When I feel stressed, ...),而不是另起话题;每段结尾加一句“这让我……”最安全。
三、易错提醒
• 漏要点是最常见的失分:动笔前把中文提示编号,写一段划掉一条,写完再核对一遍。
• 时态混用:叙事用过去时、介绍用现在时、期待用将来时;一句话里不要两种时态打架。
• 格式分不能丢:书信要有 Dear / Yours,发言稿要有称呼与 Thank you,征文要有标题且居中。
• 不要整篇简单句:适当用 because / when / if 从句与 to do 表目的,语言分才上得去。
• 词数控制在要求区间:少 10 词或多 20 词都会被扣分,写完后数一遍。
• 书写按行、字迹清楚,不写出答题区;涂改处一笔划掉,不要涂黑。
Test 1
1.请以“My Best Friend”为题,写一篇短文,介绍你的好朋友。内容包括:
1. 他/她的外貌;
2. 他/她的性格特点;
3. 你们在校园里美好的回忆;
4. 你对他/她的评价。
要求:(1)包含所有提示内容,语言通顺,意思连贯,条理清楚;
(2)词数80左右,标题已经给出,不计入总词数。
My Best Friend
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Test 2
2.在人生的旅途中,我们不断提升自我,成为理想中的模样。 Helen Keller once said, “Alone we can do so little; together we can do so much.”朋友的支持、尝试新事物的喜悦以及一路学到的技能,都助力我们的成长。请你回顾这些经历,说说它们如何让你成为更好的自己。
提示:
1. How does your good friend often help you?
2. What school club are you in and how does it help you relax or develop a hobby?
3. What DIY skill do you have and how does it make you love life more?
要求:
1、短文应包含所有要点,并适当发挥;
2、词数100 词左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数;
3、文中不得出现真实的姓名和学校名称。
Becoming a Better Me
Life is a journey of growth. We are always learning, changing and becoming a better student.
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Test 3
3.假如你是李华,你的英国笔友Peter来信询问你最好的朋友以及你们的校园生活。请根据以下要点提示,给他写一封电子邮件。
朋友
姓名、外貌、性格(诚实、有幽默感……)、爱好(打羽毛球……)
学校生活
日常课程(如语文、数学、英语等),最喜欢英语学科并介绍至少两点学好英语的方法
学校重视环境卫生和食品教育,学习烹饪了解健康饮食,意识到健康饮食的重要性
你的感受
谈谈你对校园生活、友谊的看法
要求:1. 短文应包括表格中的全部信息,条理清楚,行文连贯;
2. 短文中不能出现真实的姓名、学校名和地名;
3. 词数90左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Peter,
How’s it going? I’m glad to tell you about my best friend and my school life.
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
Test 4
4.假设你叫李华,是阳光中学 (Sunshine Middle School) 的一名学生。你将代表你校赴北京参加一个会议并在会上进行发言,此次会议的主题是“My Colourful School Life”。请你根据下表中的内容写一篇英文发言稿。
Your best friend
Name, looks, qualities
Colourful school life
Subjects, activities
Suggestions
Facilities (设施)/environment/activities... (选一点)
【要求】
1.文中应包括所有要点,并适当发挥。
2.词数90左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
3.不得出现真实的个人及学校信息。
Ladies and gentlemen, I’m Li Hua from Sunshine Middle School. I am very glad to share my colourful school life.
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That’s all about my wonderful school life. Thank you for your listening!
Test 5
5.学校英语报社正在举办主题为“My school life”的征文活动,请你写一篇短文投稿。
要点:
1. 你有一个好朋友 (姓名,性格,什么时候成为好朋友);
2. 学校生活:和你的好朋友一起参加哪些活动,相同的爱好,对学校生活的感受;
3. 如何成为一名善于学习的好学生。
词数80左右,短文开头已给,不计入总分。
My school life is colourful.
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Test 6
6.假设你是李华,你的外国网友 Mike 最近来信说他在学习英语时遇到了困难,不知道怎样才能学好。请你根据以下要点提示,用英语给他写一封邮件,分享你的学习方法与建议。
要点:
1. 学习方法:至少两点(如制定计划、多听多读、记笔记等)并说明理由;
2. 时间安排:每天坚持,合理利用时间;
3. 你的鼓励或期待。
注意:
1. 词数80左右(开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数);
2. 内容涵盖所有要点,可适当发挥;
3. 文中不得出现真实校名和人名。
Dear Mike,
I’m sorry to hear you have some trouble learning English. Here are my ways to be a good learner.
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Best wishes,
Li Hua
Test 7
7.假如你校英文报正在举办“我的DIY故事”征文活动,请你根据以下提示,写一篇英语短文投稿,介绍你的一次DIY经历。
提示:
1. 你制作了什么?为什么制作它?
2. 制作的过程是怎样的?遇到了什么困难?
3. 你的感受和收获是什么?
注意:
1. 文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称;
2. 词数100左右;文章的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数。
My first DIY experience was making a hand-made card for my mum’s birthday.
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Test 8
8.学校DIY俱乐部正在招募新成员,请你根据以下提示,写一封申请信给俱乐部主席。
提示:
1. 你的性格与爱好 (至少两点);
2. 你会做哪些手工/DIY作品;
3. 你想加入俱乐部的原因 (至少两点)。
注意:
1. 表达清楚,语法正确,上下文连贯;
2. 必须包括所有要点内容,并适当发挥;
3. 词数在100词左右 (开头已给出,不计入总词数);
4. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
Dear Chairperson,
I am Li Hua, a student in Grade 8. I would like to join the DIY club.
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I am looking forward to your answer.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
18 / 18乐思英语
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