Unit 5 On the Road 读后续写句式仿写与实战演练 2027届高三英语一轮复习外研版必修第二册

读后续写句式仿写与实战演练 外研版必修二 Unit 5 On the Road 在路上 【单元导读】 本单元带我们“在路上”：课文 Blogging Australia 讲澳洲第一位职业旅行摄影博主 Lauren——从厨师到博主，用镜头带人们看西澳的绝美风光，也让更多人看见环境问题；课文 Coast to Coast 则是一封邮件：一家人从温哥华自驾横穿北美大陆，落基山的风雪、魁北克的午餐、纽芬兰的杀人鲸，一路惊险一路歌。 旅行是读后续写的高频题材——迷路、坏车、错过、相遇，都自带“意外—应对—成长”的节奏。写好旅途类故事要抓三条线：一是“风景线”，用 masses of ice, which is like another world、the colourful little houses along the coast 写脚步丈量过的土地；二是“行动线”，用 got lost a few times、managed to cross 写出路上的波折与抵达；三是“人情线”，用 make people aware of、make a friend of the same age as me 点出旅行真正的收获是看见世界、看见彼此。 学习建议：先梳理两篇课文的“行程线”与“人物线”，注意 But、Fortunately 等转折词如何推进叙事；再按六大功能分类背诵句式骨架，重点体会 was doing ... when ... 的突发感与 managed to do 的坚持感；最后用巩固练习完成从输入到输出的转化，把旅途句式迁移到自己的故事里，让路途替人物成长。 【话题语块储备】 旅途见闻：vehicle 交通工具 ｜ Rocky Mountains 落基山脉 ｜ boat trip 乘船游览 ｜ killer whale 杀人鲸 ｜ coast 海岸 风景与色彩：masses of ice 大量积冰 ｜ colourful little houses 色彩斑斓的小房子 ｜ fantastic views 极美的景色 ｜ natural world 自然界 出行状况：get lost 迷路 ｜ poor sense of direction 方向感差 ｜ battery is dead 电瓶没电 ｜ arrive in 抵达 收获与升华：make people aware of 使人们意识到 ｜ follow online 在线关注 ｜ make a friend 交朋友 ｜ manage to do 设法做成 第一部分 仿写句式库 句式1　[环境与场景] “an extremely beautiful place, where ...” 采风之地——where 从句 【原句】First, she visited Western Australia, an extremely beautiful place, where she took some of her favourite photographs. 【结构】... visited ..., an extremely beautiful place, where ... 【点拨】同位语先赞叹“极美之地”，where 从句再写“在那里做了什么”，一叹一行写全采风场景。续写旅行第一站的惊艳，一句就把读者带到现场。 【情境仿写】First, we visited the ancient town, an extremely quiet place, where we took some of our favourite photographs. 句式2　[环境与场景] “masses of ..., which is like another world” 冰雪异世界 【原句】There were masses of ice, which is like another world. 【结构】There were masses of ..., which is like another world. 【点拨】masses of 写“大量的”，which is like another world 用一个明喻把奇景推到眼前。续写雪原、花海、沙丘、云海，自然奇观一句封神。 【情境仿写】There were masses of cherry blossom, which is like another world in spring. 句式3　[环境与场景] “the colourful little houses along the coast” 海岸小镇 【原句】Mum was using Dad's phone to take photos of the colourful little houses along the coast when we saw a killer whale! 【结构】the colourful little houses along the coast 【点拨】colourful 写色彩，little 写小巧，along the coast 定位，三个修饰一层层把镜头摇到海岸小镇。续写渔村、山城、老街，风景速写直接取用。 【情境仿写】We walked past the colourful little houses along the river, taking photos of every corner. 句式4　[环境与场景] “start from ..., where ...” 起点交代 【原句】We started from Vancouver, where we picked up our vehicle for the trip. 【结构】We started from ..., where ... 【点拨】start from 交代起点，where 从句补上“在那里做的事”，一句把行程的开篇稳稳立住。续写任何旅程、计划、项目的起点，先定位再出发。 【情境仿写】We started from the small station at dawn, where we picked up our bicycles for the trip. 句式5　[动作与动作链] “begin to post ... on one's blog” 起步链 【原句】Lauren Elizabeth Pirie Bath, who was a chef a few years ago, discovered that she could take pretty pictures and began to post pictures on her blog. 【结构】... discovered that ... could ... and began to ... on one's blog. 【点拨】discovered that 写发现潜能，began to post on her blog 写付诸行动，一“发现”一“开始”，转折人生的标准两步。续写学拍视频、开账号、做志愿，起步即叙事。 【情境仿写】She discovered that she could write well and began to post stories on her blog. 句式6　[动作与动作链] “get lost because of ...” 迷路波折 【原句】We got lost a few times because of my father's poor sense of direction. 【结构】... got lost ... because of ... 【点拨】get lost a few times 写屡屡迷路，because of 短语点出原因，一波一因，旅途的狼狈跃然纸上。续写走错路、坐过站、找错门，波折立刻具体。 【情境仿写】We got lost a few times because of the old map that was ten years out of date. 句式7　[动作与动作链] “was doing ... when ...” 突发打断 【原句】Mum was using Dad's phone to take photos of the colourful little houses along the coast when we saw a killer whale! 【结构】... was doing ... when ... saw ... 【点拨】过去进行时铺垫背景，when 从句猝然闯入意外，是读后续写最爱的“突发”句型。续写拍照时看见彩虹、吃饭时遇见故人，惊喜感一句到位。 【情境仿写】I was walking along the beach when I saw a message in a bottle half buried in the sand. 句式8　[心理与情感] “To her surprise” 惊讶开场 【原句】To her surprise, there were over 200,000 people reading her blog in less than 18 months and some companies even paid her to take photos. 【结构】To one's surprise, ... 【点拨】To one's surprise 独立状语放句首，一句话交代“出乎意料”，比 she was surprised 更简洁有力。续写爆红、获奖、被认出，意外感开门见山。 【情境仿写】To our surprise, the quiet boy at the back won first prize in the speech contest. 句式9　[心理与情感] “so ... that ...” 兴奋到失手 【原句】Mum was so excited that she dropped the phone into the sea. 【结构】... was so ... that ... 【点拨】so ... that ... 把情绪量化成后果，“激动到掉手机”比 very excited 生动十倍。续写喜极而泣、惊得发呆、慌得摔碗，情绪要有动作才算数。 【情境仿写】She was so excited that she dropped the bowl on the floor. 句式10　[心理与情感] “be glad to make a friend of the same age as me” 旅途交友 【原句】I was glad to make a friend of the same age as me, and I now have someone to practice French with! 【结构】I was glad to make a friend of the same age as me ... 【点拨】be glad to 写乐意，of the same age as me 同龄定语，一句写出旅途交友的默契。续写营地、青旅、火车上结识的伙伴，缘分一句话收拢。 【情境仿写】I was glad to make a friend of the same age as me at the summer camp, and we still write to each other. 句式11　[人物与细节] “who was ... a few years ago” 过去身份速写 【原句】Lauren Elizabeth Pirie Bath, who was a chef a few years ago, discovered that she could take pretty pictures. 【结构】..., who was ... a few years ago, ... 【点拨】who was ... a few years ago 用定语从句轻描“几年前的身份”，与今日成就形成落差。续写退学、转行、退役、归乡的人物弧光，过去一句话带过。 【情境仿写】Mr Chen, who was a fisherman a few years ago, now runs a small museum by the sea. 句式12　[人物与细节] “Australia's first ...” 首创细节 【原句】So in 2013, she decided to become Australia's first professional photo blogger, which was a challenging job. 【结构】... decided to become ...'s first ..., which was a challenging job. 【点拨】's first 写“第一人”的独创性，which was a challenging job 补上艰辛，一荣一艰写出事业的分量。续写“第一个……的人”，首创感与代价并存。 【情境仿写】She decided to become the school's first student barista, which was a challenging job. 句式13　[过渡与衔接] “So in 2013, she decided to ...” 决定时刻 【原句】So in 2013, she decided to become Australia's first professional photo blogger, which was a challenging job. 【结构】So in ..., ... decided to ... 【点拨】So 承接上文的意外走红，in 2013 钉死时间，decided to 给出抉择，一句完成“机缘—决定”的转折。续写辞职、参赛、表白、出发，人生路口专用。 【情境仿写】So in the spring of 2020, he decided to become a volunteer teacher in the mountains. 句式14　[过渡与衔接] “But eventually we managed to ...” 终达 【原句】But eventually we managed to cross the Rocky Mountains and enjoyed the fantastic views. 【结构】But eventually ... managed to ... 【点拨】eventually 写“最终”，manage to do 强调“设法做成”，一波三折后的抵达全靠这句。续写翻山、过河、赶车、赴约，坚持有了落点。 【情境仿写】But eventually we managed to climb to the top before sunset. 句式15　[过渡与衔接] “Fortunately, ...” 幸运转折 【原句】Fortunately, another family from Quebec was going to send some great photos to us. 【结构】Fortunately, ... 【点拨】Fortunately 独立副词放句首，一笔把“损失”扭转为“补偿”，是剧情自救的神来之笔。续写丢手机得照片、错过车遇好人，柳暗花明即从此句开始。 【情境仿写】Fortunately, a kind stranger found my lost wallet and returned it to the school gate. 句式16　[升华与感悟] “make people aware of ...” 唤醒意识 【原句】Her aim was to use her photography to make people aware of environmental issues. 【结构】use ... to make people aware of ... 【点拨】use sth to do 写手段，make people aware of 写唤醒，一句立起“用专业推动改变”的格局。续写用文字、镜头、歌声发声，公益主题的升华标配。 【情境仿写】His aim was to use his drawings to make people aware of the river pollution. 句式17　[升华与感悟] “spend ... travelling” 每月都在路上 【原句】Now she spends 3 weeks every month travelling and has over 464,000 fans following her online. 【结构】... spends ... every month doing ... 【点拨】spend time doing 写时间去向，every month 强调常态，has over ... fans following 用数据收尾。续写坚持读书、跑步、练琴，把“高频”写成生活方式。 【情境仿写】Now he spends two hours every morning reading and has finished over thirty books this year. 句式18　[升华与感悟] “has got to know more about ...” 行走的认识论 【原句】She has got to know more about this country and its people. 【结构】... has got to know more about ... and its people. 【点拨】has got to know 用完成时写“渐渐懂得”，more about ... and its people 把国土与人民并提，是旅人最深切的收获。续写支教、驻村、旅行后的感悟，见识即成长。 【情境仿写】After a year in the village, she has got to know more about the land and its people. 句式19　[升华与感悟] “managed to cross ...” 跨越之举 【原句】My family and I managed to cross the North American continent. 【结构】... managed to cross ... 【点拨】manage to cross 写“设法跨越”，大陆、山河、鸿沟皆可 cross，是宏大叙事的起点句。续写穿越沙漠、横渡大江、走完赛道，一开口就是史诗。 【情境仿写】The old postman managed to cross the mountains every week for thirty years. 巩固练习（课堂当堂练，题量贴合实际） 1.（句型仿写）用 “masses of ..., which is like another world” 写“田野里全是积雪，宛如另一个世界”： _________________________________________________________________________________ 2.（句型仿写）用 “was doing ... when ...” 写“妈妈正在给海边的小房子拍照，突然我们看到一头鲸”：_________________________________________________________________________________ 3.（句型仿写）用 “make people aware of ...” 写“他的视频让更多人意识到环境保护的重要性”： _________________________________________________________________________________ 4.（句型仿写）用 “managed to ...” 写“尽管迷路多次，我们最终设法在天黑前到达小镇”： _________________________________________________________________________________ 5.（表达升级）基础句：She was a chef before, but now she takes photos. 请用 “who was ... a few years ago” 升级： _________________________________________________________________________________ 6.（表达升级）基础句：We didn't know the way and got lost. 请用 “because of” 改写： _________________________________________________________________________________ 7.（表达升级）基础句：The view was very beautiful and there was a lot of ice. 请用 “fantastic views” 与 “masses of” 升级： _________________________________________________________________________________ 8.（微写作）阅读以下段落开头，续写两三句，至少运用本单元 3 个句式：Our family decided to drive to the seaside for the weekend. We started from the city early in the morning. _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 9.（微写作）以“难忘的旅行”为题，用 “every opportunity to ...” 与 “make a friend of the same age as me” 写两三句：_________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 10.（微写作）为“骑行川藏线”的故事写结尾两句，至少运用 1 个升华句式，点出旅行如何让人看见世界： _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 参考答案 1. 参考例句：There were masses of snow in the fields, which is like another world. 2. 参考例句：Mum was taking photos of the colourful little houses along the coast when we saw a killer whale. 3. 参考例句：His video made more people aware of the importance of protecting the environment. 4. 参考例句：Although we got lost a few times, we managed to reach the town before dark. 5. 参考示例：Lauren, who was a chef a few years ago, now takes photos for a living. 6. 参考示例：We got lost a few times because of my father's poor sense of direction. 7. 参考示例：We enjoyed the fantastic views, and there were masses of ice, which is like another world. 8. 参考示例：Our family decided to drive to the seaside for the weekend. We started from the city early in the morning. We got lost a few times because of the new highway, but eventually we managed to reach the coast before noon. There were masses of ice on the beach, which is like another world. 9. 参考示例：During the trip, I took every opportunity to talk with the locals, and I was glad to make a friend of the same age as me. 10. 参考示例：By riding across the mountains in such a special way, the young man may indeed have understood what it means to see the world. 第二部分 实战演练 话题：旅途人情 · 一次抛锚的善意 【阅读原文】 Many years ago, when I was fresh out of school and working in Denver, I was driving to my parents' home in Missouri for Christmas. I stopped at a gas station about 50 miles away from Oklahoma City, where I was planning to stop and visit a friend. While I was standing in line at the cash register, I said hello to an older couple who were also paying for gas. I took off, but had gone only a few miles when black smoke poured from the back of my car. I stopped and wondered what I should do. A car pulled up behind me. It was the couple I had spoken to at the gas station. They said they would take me to my friend's. We chatted on the way to the city, and when I got out of the car, the husband gave me his business card. I wrote him and his wife a thank-you note for helping me. Soon afterwards, I received a Christmas present from them. Their note that came with it said helping me had made their holidays meaningful. Years later, I drove to a meeting in a nearby town in the morning. In late afternoon I returned to my car and found that I'd left the lights on all day, and the battery was dead. Then I noticed that the Friendly Ford dealership — a shop selling cars — was right next door. I walked over and found two salesmen in the showroom. 注意: 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语: 3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 【续写任务】 Paragraph 1: I entered the shop, and one of the salesmen came to me. _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: After a while, they quickly drove a pickup truck to my car and started it. _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 【参考范文】 Paragraph 1: I entered the shop, and one of the salesmen came to me. “My battery is dead,” I said, feeling a little awkward, afraid they would only want to sell me a new one. To my surprise, he didn't hesitate. “We'll be glad to help,” he said with a smile. He called his workmate over, and the two of them began to discuss which cables to use. Watching them get ready, I remembered the kind couple who had helped me on the road to Oklahoma City years before. After a while, they quickly drove a pickup truck to my car and started it. The engine came back to life at the first try. I reached for my wallet, but they shook their heads. “Helping you makes our day meaningful,” one of them said. Driving home, I thought of the Christmas note from that couple. Kindness is a chain that travels from hand to hand, and I was glad to be one of its links. 【解析】 本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读文章可知，“我”圣诞前驾车回家，途中抛锚，得到一对老年夫妇的帮助；几年后“我”的电瓶没电，走进隔壁的汽车经销店，故事停在走进店里的时刻。 【详解】 续写第一段开头为：我走进店里，一个销售员向我走来……后面应该写他热心答应帮忙，与“我”担心被推销的心情形成反差。 续写第二段开头为：过了一会儿，他们迅速开着一辆皮卡车来到我的车旁，把车启动……后面应该写“我”的感激与感悟，点出善意的传递。 续写要求至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语，考生应熟悉所给划线词语并恰当使用；注意词数应为150左右，并用下划线标出所使用的关键词语。 【点睛】 文章主题部分选用的是一般过去时，续写部分也用一般过去时，通篇时态把握准确；范文中使用 To my surprise 的心理转折与直接引语，真实自然；结尾以 Kindness is a chain 暗含比喻的升华句收束，呼应上文夫妇的圣诞留言，把一次抛锚点成善意的传递，衔接自然，情感温暖。 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $