Unit 5 The Value of Money单元写作作业设计-2025-2026学年高中英语人教版必修第三册

必修三 Unit 5　The Value of Money 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 假定你是李华，你校英语辩论社将举办以“Can Money Buy Happiness?”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇演讲稿参赛，内容包括： 1. 明确回答“金钱能否买来幸福”； 2. 用一两个理由或事例支持你的看法； 3. 向同学们提出一条关于金钱的建议。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Good afternoon, everyone. I'm Li Hua from Class 5. 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　Thank you for listening! 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 演讲稿（speech）：问候—亮明观点—论证—建议—致谢，口语化、有呼告。 人称 第一人称（I）谈看法，第一人称复数（we）提建议，第三人称举事例。 时态 陈述观点与普遍事实用一般现在时；叙述事例用一般过去时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：问候 + 直接回答（不能/能，但要给限定）；Para 2：理由一（金钱能买到什么）；Para 3：理由二（它买不到什么，用事例）；Para 4：建议 + 致谢。 要点 观点要有“分寸”：不否认金钱的作用，也不把它神化；事例最好是课文《百万英镑》或身边小事，一两句即可。 语气 从容、有思辨，避免极端。用设问开头（Can money buy…?）更能抓住听众。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. bet n. ____________ vi. ____________ 2. ____________ n. 仆人；佣人 3. allowance n. ____________ 4. ____________ n. 钞票；纸币 5. millionaire n. ____________ 6. ____________ adj. 富有的；富裕的 7. wealth n. ____________ 8. ____________ n. 贫穷；贫困 9. charity n. ____________ 10. ____________ vt. 捐赠；捐献 11. earn vt. ____________ 12. ____________ vt. 购买 n. 购买的东西 13. expense n. ____________ 14. ____________ n. 预算 15. value n. ____________ vt. ____________ 16. ____________ adj. 有价值的；贵重的 17. priceless adj. ____________ 18. ____________ adj. 贪婪的 19. honest adj. ____________ 20. ____________ n. 慷慨；大方 21. attitude n. ____________ 22. ____________ adj. 物质的；实体的 23. happiness n. ____________ 24. ____________ adj. 满足的；满意的 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. make a bet ____________ 2. ____________ 依靠；取决于 3. earn a living ____________ 4. ____________ 花得起钱做某事 5. be short of ____________ 6. ____________ 陷入困境 7. in need ____________ 8. ____________ 捐赠……给…… 9. spend money on ____________ 10. ____________ 省钱 11. make money ____________ 12. ____________ 量入为出 13. be worth ____________ 14. ____________ 珍惜 15. attach importance to ____________ 16. ____________ 除了……之外 17. at the cost of ____________ 18. ____________ 挣钱不易 19. be content with ____________ 20. ____________ 追求财富 21. in return ____________ 22. ____________ 帮助需要帮助的人 23. be faced with ____________ 24. ____________ 做出明智的选择 25. give away ____________ 26. ____________ 花费 27. count on ____________ 28. ____________ 真正的财富 29. be responsible for ____________ 30. ____________ 从长远看 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Money is important. ____________________ 2. Money cannot buy happiness. ____________________ 3. He is very rich. ____________________ 4. We should not be greedy. ____________________ 5. I want to help others. ____________________ 6. Money changed people. ____________________ 7. He gave the money away. ____________________ 8. It is not important. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 他身无分文，流落在伦敦街头。 　　He was ________ and wandering the streets of London. 2. 两位富有的兄弟为他的命运打赌。 　　Two ________ brothers ________ ________ ________ on his fate. 3. 他们给了他一张百万英镑的钞票。 　　They gave him a million-pound ________ ________. 4. 有了这张钞票，他立刻受到了礼遇。 　　________ the bank note, he was treated with respect at once. 5. 人们的态度随着他的财富而改变。 　　People's ________ changed with his ________. 6. 金钱能买到很多东西，但买不到幸福。 　　Money can buy many things, but it cannot buy ________. 7. 真正的财富是健康、友情和爱。 　　True ________ is health, friendship and love. 8. 他意识到自己真正想要的是什么。 　　He realized ________ he really wanted. 9. 他决定把钱捐给需要的人。 　　He decided to ________ the money to those ________ ________. 10. 金钱本身没有好坏，关键在于人如何使用它。 　　Money itself is ________ good ________ bad; it depends on how people use it. 11. 正是这次经历改变了他对金钱的看法。 　　________ ________ this experience that changed his attitude towards money. 12. 只有懂得知足的人，才能真正富有。 　　Only those ________ are ________ can be truly rich. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Money is important. It is not everything. 要求：用 but 构成对比，并用 matter 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. He had no money. He could not buy food. 要求：用 with 复合结构 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. People treated him differently. He became rich. 要求：用 as soon as 引导时间状语从句 → ____________________________________________________________ 4. Money can buy a house. It cannot buy a home. 要求：用并列句构成对照 → ____________________________________________________________ 5. He gave all his money to charity. 要求：用动词-ing 形式作主语改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. I think happiness comes from within. 要求：用 What…is that… 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 7. We should use money wisely. 要求：用 make good use of 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. The more money he got, the more worried he became. 要求：保留 the more…the more…，并加入插入语 → ____________________________________________________________ 9. We can be truly rich only when we are content. 要求：用 only + 状语从句置于句首的倒装句 → ____________________________________________________________ 10. Money is not the answer. Our attitude towards it is. 要求：用强调句强调 our attitude → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Money is a good servant but a bad master. 金钱是好仆人，却是坏主人。　（对称谚语） What money cannot buy is exactly what we need most. 金钱买不到的，恰恰是我们最需要的。　（what 主语从句 + 表语从句） Never have I seen a person made happy by counting what he owns. 我从未见过有人靠清点自己的财产而变得幸福。　（否定词置于句首的倒装） Rich as he was, he was poor in friendship. 他虽富有，却在友情上一贫如洗。　（as 引导的让步状语从句倒装） It is not how much we have but how much we give that makes us rich. 让我们富有的不是拥有多少，而是给予多少。　（强调句 + not…but…） With money in his pocket but nothing in his heart, he felt emptier than ever. 口袋里有钱，心里却空无一物，他从未如此空虚。　（with 复合结构） The more we chase wealth, the less we notice what we already have. 我们越追逐财富，就越看不见已经拥有的东西。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） There is no denying that money solves problems—but only some of them. 不可否认，金钱能解决问题——但只是一部分。　（There is no denying that… + 破折号补充） Compared with a full account, a full heart matters more. 与满满的账户相比，满满的心更重要。　（过去分词作状语） Not until he lost his health did he realize what true wealth was. 直到失去健康，他才明白什么是真正的财富。　（not until 的倒装） So obsessed was he with money that he forgot why he wanted it. 他如此痴迷金钱，以至于忘了自己为什么想要它。　（so…that 的倒装） A coin has two sides, and so does wealth. 硬币有两面，财富也一样。　（倒装表“也一样”） Spending money on others brings more joy than spending it on ourselves. 把钱花在别人身上，比花在自己身上带来更多快乐。　（动名词作主语 + 比较级） In the end, we are worth what we give, not what we keep. 最终，衡量我们价值的是我们给予的，而不是我们留住的。　（not…but… 对称句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自2021年高考新高考Ⅰ卷 应用文试题】 你校英文报正在开展以“Money and Happiness”为题的讨论。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 你对金钱与幸福关系的看法； 2. 一件让你有此体会的事； 3. 你对同学们的倡议。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题根据2021年新高考Ⅰ卷“为校英文报投稿”一题改编，情境已替换为本单元话题。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Good afternoon, everyone. I'm Li Hua from Class 5. 　　Can money buy happiness? My answer is: it can buy comfort, but it cannot buy happiness. 　　Let's be honest—money does matter. It pays for medicine when we are ill, for books when we want to learn, and for a warm meal on a cold night. Anyone who says money is worthless has probably never been short of it. 　　But the things that make life worth living are not for sale. In The Million Pound Bank Note, Henry Adams is treated like a gentleman simply because of a piece of paper. Yet what he really wants is not the money—it is to be seen as who he is. The same is true of us. A friend who listens when you fail, a family that waits for you at dinner—none of these can be bought. 　　So my advice is this: earn it honestly, spend it wisely, and never let it decide who you are. Money is a good servant but a bad master. Thank you for listening! 【学生习作】 Good afternoon, everyone. I'm Li Hua from Class 5. 　　Today I want to talk about money. Many people think money is very important. I think so too. But I don't think money can buy happiness. 　　Money can buy many things. We can buy food, clothes and books. But money cannot buy friends. It cannot buy health. It cannot buy love. My parents are not rich, but they love me. I am very happy. 　　So I think we should not be greedy. We should be happy with what we have. Thank you for listening! 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 开头是否直接回答了“能否买来幸福”，而不是绕圈子？ □ 是否既承认金钱的作用，又指出它的边界（避免极端）？ □ 论证是否有一个具体事例（课文情节或身边小事）？ □ 是否用了设问、对比或倒装，让演讲“有声音”？ □ 建议是否具体可行，而非“不要贪心”这类空话？ □ 结尾是否有一句能被记住的“金句”？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. bet n. 打赌；赌注 vi. 打赌 2. servant n. 仆人；佣人 3. allowance n. 津贴；零用钱 4. banknote n. 钞票；纸币 5. millionaire n. 百万富翁 6. wealthy adj. 富有的；富裕的 7. wealth n. 财富；财产 8. poverty n. 贫穷；贫困 9. charity n. 慈善；慈善机构 10. donate vt. 捐赠；捐献 11. earn vt. 赚得；挣得；获得 12. purchase vt. 购买 n. 购买的东西 13. expense n. 费用；开支 14. budget n. 预算 15. value n. 价值 vt. 重视；珍视 16. valuable adj. 有价值的；贵重的 17. priceless adj. 无价的；极珍贵的 18. greedy adj. 贪婪的 19. honest adj. 诚实的；正直的 20. generosity n. 慷慨；大方 21. attitude n. 态度；看法 22. material adj. 物质的；实体的 23. happiness n. 幸福；快乐 24. content adj. 满足的；满意的 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. make a bet 打赌 2. depend on 依靠；取决于 3. earn a living 谋生 4. afford to do sth. 花得起钱做某事 5. be short of 缺少；不足 6. get into trouble 陷入困境 7. in need 需要帮助的 8. donate...to... 捐赠……给…… 9. spend money on 在……上花钱 10. save money 省钱 11. make money 赚钱 12. live within one's means 量入为出 13. be worth 值……钱；值得 14. value sth. 珍视某物 15. attach importance to 重视 16. apart from 除了……之外 17. at the cost of 以……为代价 18. money doesn't grow on trees 钱不会从树上长出来 19. be content with 对……满足 20. pursue wealth 追求财富 21. in return 作为回报 22. help those in need 帮助需要帮助的人 23. be faced with 面临 24. make a wise choice 做出明智的选择 25. give away 赠送；捐赠 26. at the expense of 以……为代价 27. count on 依靠；指望 28. true wealth 真正的财富 29. be responsible for 对……负责 30. in the long run 从长远看 Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. Money matters, but it is not everything. 2. Happiness is not something money can buy. 3. He is a man of great wealth. 4. We should not let greed rule our lives. 5. I would rather give than receive. 6. Money changes people more than people admit. 7. He gave away what he had. 8. It counts for little in the end. 四、教材好句精选 1. He was penniless and wandering the streets of London. 2. Two wealthy brothers made a bet on his fate. 3. They gave him a million-pound bank note. 4. With the bank note, he was treated with respect at once. 5. People's attitudes changed with his wealth. 6. Money can buy many things, but it cannot buy happiness. 7. True wealth is health, friendship and love. 8. He realized what he really wanted. 9. He decided to donate the money to those in need. 10. Money itself is neither good nor bad; it depends on how people use it. 11. It was this experience that changed his attitude towards money. 12. Only those who are content can be truly rich. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. Money matters, but it is far from everything. 2. With no money in his pocket, he could not even buy a loaf of bread. 3. People treated him differently as soon as he became rich. 4. Money can buy a house, but it cannot buy a home. 5. Giving all his money to charity was his own way of saying thank you. 6. What I believe is that happiness comes from within, not from a bank account. 7. We should make good use of money instead of being used by it. 8. The more money he got, the more worried—and the less free—he became. 9. Only when we are content can we be truly rich. 10. It is not money itself but our attitude towards it that decides our happiness. 七、同话题高考真题【改编自2021年高考新高考Ⅰ卷 应用文试题】 审体裁：讨论类短文（英文报投稿），三段式，无称呼与落款。 审人称：第一人称（I）谈体会，第一人称复数（we）发倡议。 审时态：谈看法用一般现在时；叙述事件用一般过去时。 审内容：Para 1 观点（金钱能改善生活，但不等于幸福）；Para 2 一件小事（用压岁钱给奶奶买礼物）；Para 3 倡议（合理消费、帮助他人）。 审语气：平和、真诚，避免说教和极端，用亲身体会代替空谈。 【参考范文】 Money and Happiness 　　Some people believe that money buys happiness. I would say it buys comfort, not happiness. 　　Last winter, I saved my lucky money for months to buy a pair of shoes I had wanted for a long time. The excitement lasted about a week. Then, on my grandmother's birthday, I used the rest of the money to buy her a warm scarf. She wore it every day that winter and told every neighbour who had given it to her. That small scarf made me happier than the shoes ever did. 　　So my suggestion is simple: spend part of your money on things you need, and part of it on people you love. Money is a tool, not a goal—it is worth only what we do with it. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 必修三 Unit 5　The Value of Money 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 假定你是李华，你校英语辩论社将举办以“Can Money Buy Happiness?”为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇演讲稿参赛，内容包括： 1. 明确回答“金钱能否买来幸福”； 2. 用一两个理由或事例支持你的看法； 3. 向同学们提出一条关于金钱的建议。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Good afternoon, everyone. I'm Li Hua from Class 5. 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　Thank you for listening! 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 演讲稿（speech）：问候—亮明观点—论证—建议—致谢，口语化、有呼告。 人称 第一人称（I）谈看法，第一人称复数（we）提建议，第三人称举事例。 时态 陈述观点与普遍事实用一般现在时；叙述事例用一般过去时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：问候 + 直接回答（不能/能，但要给限定）；Para 2：理由一（金钱能买到什么）；Para 3：理由二（它买不到什么，用事例）；Para 4：建议 + 致谢。 要点 观点要有“分寸”：不否认金钱的作用，也不把它神化；事例最好是课文《百万英镑》或身边小事，一两句即可。 语气 从容、有思辨，避免极端。用设问开头（Can money buy…?）更能抓住听众。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. bet n. 打赌；赌注 vi. 打赌 2. servant n. 仆人；佣人 3. allowance n. 津贴；零用钱 4. banknote n. 钞票；纸币 5. millionaire n. 百万富翁 6. wealthy adj. 富有的；富裕的 7. wealth n. 财富；财产 8. poverty n. 贫穷；贫困 9. charity n. 慈善；慈善机构 10. donate vt. 捐赠；捐献 11. earn vt. 赚得；挣得；获得 12. purchase vt. 购买 n. 购买的东西 13. expense n. 费用；开支 14. budget n. 预算 15. value n. 价值 vt. 重视；珍视 16. valuable adj. 有价值的；贵重的 17. priceless adj. 无价的；极珍贵的 18. greedy adj. 贪婪的 19. honest adj. 诚实的；正直的 20. generosity n. 慷慨；大方 21. attitude n. 态度；看法 22. material adj. 物质的；实体的 23. happiness n. 幸福；快乐 24. content adj. 满足的；满意的 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. make a bet 打赌 2. depend on 依靠；取决于 3. earn a living 谋生 4. afford to do sth. 花得起钱做某事 5. be short of 缺少；不足 6. get into trouble 陷入困境 7. in need 需要帮助的 8. donate...to... 捐赠……给…… 9. spend money on 在……上花钱 10. save money 省钱 11. make money 赚钱 12. live within one's means 量入为出 13. be worth 值……钱；值得 14. value sth. 珍视某物 15. attach importance to 重视 16. apart from 除了……之外 17. at the cost of 以……为代价 18. money doesn't grow on trees 钱不会从树上长出来 19. be content with 对……满足 20. pursue wealth 追求财富 21. in return 作为回报 22. help those in need 帮助需要帮助的人 23. be faced with 面临 24. make a wise choice 做出明智的选择 25. give away 赠送；捐赠 26. at the expense of 以……为代价 27. count on 依靠；指望 28. true wealth 真正的财富 29. be responsible for 对……负责 30. in the long run 从长远看 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Money is important. Money matters, but it is not everything. 2. Money cannot buy happiness. Happiness is not something money can buy. 3. He is very rich. He is a man of great wealth. 4. We should not be greedy. We should not let greed rule our lives. 5. I want to help others. I would rather give than receive. 6. Money changed people. Money changes people more than people admit. 7. He gave the money away. He gave away what he had. 8. It is not important. It counts for little in the end. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 他身无分文，流落在伦敦街头。 　　He was penniless and wandering the streets of London. 2. 两位富有的兄弟为他的命运打赌。 　　Two wealthy brothers made a bet on his fate. 3. 他们给了他一张百万英镑的钞票。 　　They gave him a million-pound bank note. 4. 有了这张钞票，他立刻受到了礼遇。 　　With the bank note, he was treated with respect at once. 5. 人们的态度随着他的财富而改变。 　　People's attitudes changed with his wealth. 6. 金钱能买到很多东西，但买不到幸福。 　　Money can buy many things, but it cannot buy happiness. 7. 真正的财富是健康、友情和爱。 　　True wealth is health, friendship and love. 8. 他意识到自己真正想要的是什么。 　　He realized what he really wanted. 9. 他决定把钱捐给需要的人。 　　He decided to donate the money to those in need. 10. 金钱本身没有好坏，关键在于人如何使用它。 　　Money itself is neither good nor bad; it depends on how people use it. 11. 正是这次经历改变了他对金钱的看法。 　　It was this experience that changed his attitude towards money. 12. 只有懂得知足的人，才能真正富有。 　　Only those who are content can be truly rich. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Money is important. It is not everything. 要求：用 but 构成对比，并用 matter 改写 → Money matters, but it is far from everything. 2. He had no money. He could not buy food. 要求：用 with 复合结构 → With no money in his pocket, he could not even buy a loaf of bread. 3. People treated him differently. He became rich. 要求：用 as soon as 引导时间状语从句 → People treated him differently as soon as he became rich. 4. Money can buy a house. It cannot buy a home. 要求：用并列句构成对照 → Money can buy a house, but it cannot buy a home. 5. He gave all his money to charity. 要求：用动词-ing 形式作主语改写 → Giving all his money to charity was his own way of saying thank you. 6. I think happiness comes from within. 要求：用 What…is that… 改写 → What I believe is that happiness comes from within, not from a bank account. 7. We should use money wisely. 要求：用 make good use of 改写 → We should make good use of money instead of being used by it. 8. The more money he got, the more worried he became. 要求：保留 the more…the more…，并加入插入语 → The more money he got, the more worried—and the less free—he became. 9. We can be truly rich only when we are content. 要求：用 only + 状语从句置于句首的倒装句 → Only when we are content can we be truly rich. 10. Money is not the answer. Our attitude towards it is. 要求：用强调句强调 our attitude → It is not money itself but our attitude towards it that decides our happiness. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Money is a good servant but a bad master. 金钱是好仆人，却是坏主人。　（对称谚语） What money cannot buy is exactly what we need most. 金钱买不到的，恰恰是我们最需要的。　（what 主语从句 + 表语从句） Never have I seen a person made happy by counting what he owns. 我从未见过有人靠清点自己的财产而变得幸福。　（否定词置于句首的倒装） Rich as he was, he was poor in friendship. 他虽富有，却在友情上一贫如洗。　（as 引导的让步状语从句倒装） It is not how much we have but how much we give that makes us rich. 让我们富有的不是拥有多少，而是给予多少。　（强调句 + not…but…） With money in his pocket but nothing in his heart, he felt emptier than ever. 口袋里有钱，心里却空无一物，他从未如此空虚。　（with 复合结构） The more we chase wealth, the less we notice what we already have. 我们越追逐财富，就越看不见已经拥有的东西。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） There is no denying that money solves problems—but only some of them. 不可否认，金钱能解决问题——但只是一部分。　（There is no denying that… + 破折号补充） Compared with a full account, a full heart matters more. 与满满的账户相比，满满的心更重要。　（过去分词作状语） Not until he lost his health did he realize what true wealth was. 直到失去健康，他才明白什么是真正的财富。　（not until 的倒装） So obsessed was he with money that he forgot why he wanted it. 他如此痴迷金钱，以至于忘了自己为什么想要它。　（so…that 的倒装） A coin has two sides, and so does wealth. 硬币有两面，财富也一样。　（倒装表“也一样”） Spending money on others brings more joy than spending it on ourselves. 把钱花在别人身上，比花在自己身上带来更多快乐。　（动名词作主语 + 比较级） In the end, we are worth what we give, not what we keep. 最终，衡量我们价值的是我们给予的，而不是我们留住的。　（not…but… 对称句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自2021年高考新高考Ⅰ卷 应用文试题】 你校英文报正在开展以“Money and Happiness”为题的讨论。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 你对金钱与幸福关系的看法； 2. 一件让你有此体会的事； 3. 你对同学们的倡议。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题根据2021年新高考Ⅰ卷“为校英文报投稿”一题改编，情境已替换为本单元话题。 【审题建模】 审体裁：讨论类短文（英文报投稿），三段式，无称呼与落款。 审人称：第一人称（I）谈体会，第一人称复数（we）发倡议。 审时态：谈看法用一般现在时；叙述事件用一般过去时。 审内容：Para 1 观点（金钱能改善生活，但不等于幸福）；Para 2 一件小事（用压岁钱给奶奶买礼物）；Para 3 倡议（合理消费、帮助他人）。 审语气：平和、真诚，避免说教和极端，用亲身体会代替空谈。 【参考范文】 Money and Happiness 　　Some people believe that money buys happiness. I would say it buys comfort, not happiness. 　　Last winter, I saved my lucky money for months to buy a pair of shoes I had wanted for a long time. The excitement lasted about a week. Then, on my grandmother's birthday, I used the rest of the money to buy her a warm scarf. She wore it every day that winter and told every neighbour who had given it to her. That small scarf made me happier than the shoes ever did. 　　So my suggestion is simple: spend part of your money on things you need, and part of it on people you love. Money is a tool, not a goal—it is worth only what we do with it. 【亮点句式】 ① I would say it buys comfort, not happiness.（委婉表达立场 + not 对比，一句立论） ② The excitement lasted about a week.（时间状语短句，暗含转折，比 however 更自然） ③ …told every neighbour who had given it to her（定语从句作细节，画面感强） ④ Money is a tool, not a goal…（比喻 + 对称句收束，掷地有声） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Good afternoon, everyone. I'm Li Hua from Class 5. 　　Can money buy happiness? My answer is: it can buy comfort, but it cannot buy happiness. 　　Let's be honest—money does matter. It pays for medicine when we are ill, for books when we want to learn, and for a warm meal on a cold night. Anyone who says money is worthless has probably never been short of it. 　　But the things that make life worth living are not for sale. In The Million Pound Bank Note, Henry Adams is treated like a gentleman simply because of a piece of paper. Yet what he really wants is not the money—it is to be seen as who he is. The same is true of us. A friend who listens when you fail, a family that waits for you at dinner—none of these can be bought. 　　So my advice is this: earn it honestly, spend it wisely, and never let it decide who you are. Money is a good servant but a bad master. Thank you for listening! 【学生习作】 Good afternoon, everyone. I'm Li Hua from Class 5. 　　Today I want to talk about money. Many people think money is very important. I think so too. But I don't think money can buy happiness. 　　Money can buy many things. We can buy food, clothes and books. But money cannot buy friends. It cannot buy health. It cannot buy love. My parents are not rich, but they love me. I am very happy. 　　So I think we should not be greedy. We should be happy with what we have. Thank you for listening! 【习作点评】 优点：观点鲜明，能一分为二地看待金钱，举了“买不到朋友、健康、爱”的例子，格式正确，有问候与致谢，语言基本正确。 问题一：论证停留在“列举”，没有“展开”。“Money cannot buy friends”之后应有一句解释，例如“你可以请人吃饭，却买不到他愿意在你失败时留下来”。 问题二：没有事例支撑。全文是纯粹的议论，缺少一个具体场景，说服力打折；本单元课文《百万英镑》就是最好的例子，用一两句即可。 问题三：句式单调，多为“主语 + can/cannot + 动词”，应加入设问、倒装、强调句，让演讲有起伏。 问题四：结尾只有“不要太贪心”，倡议不够具体；应给出可操作的建议，如“把钱分成需要、所爱、储蓄三份”。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：观点要有“分寸”。全盘否定金钱显得幼稚，全盘崇拜又显得浅薄；写“it can buy comfort, but it cannot buy happiness”就显出思辨。 得分点二：用课文当论据。《百万英镑》里“一张纸改变了所有人对他的态度”，一句概括就能证明“金钱改变的是别人的眼光，不是你的内心”，比空谈有力得多。 得分点三：本单元词块要用够。make a bet、earn a living、be short of、donate...to...、be content with、in the long run、true wealth 至少出现 5 个，结尾再用 Money is a good servant but a bad master 这样的谚语收束，既有文采又有力量。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $