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人教版必修第二册 · 读后续写片段式训练
Unit 2 Wildlife Protection野生动物保护
片段式阶梯训练(实用版)
本单元以“Wildlife Protection野生动物保护”为素材,集中呈现自然描写、目睹震撼与生态呼吁的句式。下面按六步梯推进,把课文里的 To one's left、V-ing 状语+be struck by、现在进行时被动、Only when 倒装、Much is being done ... but if 转化为读后续写的自然叙事工具,避免机械堆砌。
适用对象
建议时长
使用方式
配套
高二/高三学生、备课教师
课堂 1 课时 / 自习 30 min
个人自学 · 小组互评 · 课堂讲练
本单元课文 + 动作/环境描写表达库
Step 1 情境感知:先读进去,再学出来
读下面这个小故事(约 100–120 词)。它把本单元 5 个语块“藏”进了一段真实叙事里——先感受它们在故事里“干什么用”,比直接背例句更有效。
To our left, snow-covered mountains vanished into clouds. Watching them graze, I was struck by their quiet beauty. Yet these antelopes are being hunted for their fur. Only when we learn to live in harmony with nature can we stop the threat. Much is being done, but if we do not change, the planet is lost.
◆ 读后引导(不做空泛“找句式”,做有意义的两问)
1. 故事怎样用‘移步换景—目睹震撼—危机—呼吁—警醒’把生态保护写得有感染力?哪一句最适合做镜头起手?
2. 若要写‘一次山野徒步遇见的生灵’,你会用本单元哪两个句式描写画面与感受?
Step 2 语块建构·五金库:一个语块 = 一张“功能卡”
下面 5 个语块,每个都按“含义 → 续写功能 → 搭配锦囊 → 易错提醒 → 即时小练”五栏展开。重点不在“背得多”,而在“用得对”——每个语块只标一处最常见错误。
语块 1 To one's left / To our left + 主句 在我们左侧,……
课本原句:To our left, snow-covered mountains disappear into clouds that seem almost close enough to touch.
【续写功能】续写移步换景用 To one's left / right 起手交代方位,画面立刻有镜头感。
【搭配锦囊】To the left / right (of sb.), + 主语 + 谓语.
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
To one's left 是介词短语,后接逗号+句子;
one's 随主语变(our/their);
区别于 On the left(静态位置)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
1. 翻译:在我们右侧,一条河在暮色中闪着光。______________________
语块 2 V-ing 作状语 + be struck by(Watching them ..., I am struck by their beauty) 望着……,我被……震撼
课本原句:Watching them move slowly across the green grass, I am struck by their beauty.
【续写功能】续写目睹+感受用现在分词状语带出看的动作,主句 be struck by 表被震撼,情感自然。
【搭配锦囊】V-ing (伴随动作), + 主语 + be struck by + 名词.
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
句首 V-ing 与主语是主动关系(I watch);
be struck by 用被动,by 后接震撼源;
striking 是形容词惊人的,别混。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
2. 填空:______(听着)the song, she was struck by its sadness.
语块 3 现在进行时被动(They are being hunted, illegally, for their valuable fur) 正被……(此刻仍在发生)
课本原句:They are being hunted, illegally, for their valuable fur.
【续写功能】续写正在遭受用现在进行时被动强调此刻仍在发生,紧迫感强。
【搭配锦囊】主语 + am/is/are being + 过去分词(此刻被动进行)。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
进行被动 = be + being + done;
being 不可省;
illegally 插在被动间用逗号。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
3. 翻译:这些珍稀鸟正被悄悄地偷猎。______________________
语块 4 Only when ... + 倒装(Only when we learn ..., can we stop ...) 只有当我们……,我们才能……
课本原句:Only when we learn to exist in harmony with nature can we stop being a threat to wildlife and to our planet.
【续写功能】续写悟理/呼吁用 Only when 置首引倒装,语气郑重,适合结尾点题。
【搭配锦囊】Only when + 从句, + 助动词 + 主语 + 动词(部分倒装)。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
Only when 在句首,主句部分倒装(can 提前);
when 后是从句,不倒装;
can 与主语一致。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
4. 填空:Only when we keep quiet ______ ______ ______(我们才能听见)the forest.
语块 5 Much is being done ..., but if ..., we must ... 已在做很多,但如果……,我们必须……
课本原句:Much is being done to protect wildlife, but if we really want to save the planet, we must change our way of life.
【续写功能】续写成绩与警醒用 Much is being done 肯定努力,but if 转折提要求,结构平衡。
【搭配锦囊】Much is being done to ..., but if + 条件, 主语 + must + 动词.
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
Much is being done 用进行被动表正在做;
if 条件用一般现在;
but 连接并列句,语气转折。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
5. 翻译:为救助它们已在做很多,但如果我们不行动,就太迟了。______________________
🔎 直击重难点:be being done(进行被动)的构成
进行被动 = am/is/are + being + 过去分词,being 不可省;
区别于一般被动(are done,表常态);
Only when 置首,主句须部分倒装。
Step 3 衔接迁移·语块串烧:把 5 个语块“缝”进一段续写
孤立造句容易,放进连贯段落才见真功夫。读下面这段微续写,用本单元语块补全 5 处空缺——注意前后逻辑与语法形式。
(1)______________(在我们左侧),雪覆山峰没入云中。望着它们缓行,我(2)______________(被它们的美震撼)。这些藏羚羊(3)______________(正被非法猎杀)以获取贵价皮毛。(4)______________(只有当我们学会与自然和谐共存),我们才能停止成为威胁。为护它们(5)______________(已在做很多),但如果我们不改变生活方式,星球难救。
提示:① To one's left ② V-ing 状语 + be struck by ③ 现在进行时被动 ④ Only when 倒装 ⑤ Much is being done ... but if
Step 4 微续写实战(支架式):从“会用语块”到“写出好片段”
顺着 Step 1 的故事情境,完成约 80–100 词的微片段(可另设人物/场景,但须用上本单元 5 个语块)。
不要提笔就写。先借下面的“提纲支架 + 词汇银行”搭好脚手架,再动笔;写完用“评价量表”自评。
◆ ① 提纲支架(每段该干什么、用哪个语块)
段落
写作任务
建议调用的语块
开头 Begin
移步换景
To one's left / V-ing 状语
发展 Develop
目睹与危机
be struck by / 现在进行时被动
结尾 End
悟理呼吁
Only when 倒装 / Much is being done ... but if
◆ ② 词汇银行(从动作 / 环境描写库精选,提升文采)
📚 可直接化用的地道表达
【自然描写】The plain breathed under a wide, indifferent sky. / Mist drifted down the slopes like a slow white river.
【生灵细节】The antelope lifted its head, ears tuned to the wind. / Hooves whispered over the grass, soft as breath.
【氛围烘托】Silence here was not empty but listening. / The cold carried the smell of snow and stone.
【金句】To save them is to save ourselves. / We are not owners of the wild, only guests.
◆ ③ 学生写作区
在此完成 80–100 词的微片段,尽量用上提纲里的 4–5 个语块,并至少借用“词汇银行”中 1 处描写:
◆ ④ 评价量表(自评 / 互评通用)
维度
优秀 4
达标 3
待改进 2
得分
内容完整
三段清晰,换景—危机—呼吁完整
基本完整
缺环节
语块运用
准确使用 ≥4 个本单元语块
用对 2–3 个
误用 / 少用
描写生动
有自然 / 生灵 / 氛围细节
略有描写
平铺直叙
衔接自然
逻辑连词 / 过渡自然
基本连贯
跳跃
主题升华
点明“和谐共生”立意
略有点题
未升华
🔍 自评 / 互评指引
圈出用到的本单元语块,核对形式:To one's left 后接逗号、V-ing 与主语主动、be being done 中 being 不省、Only when 置首部分倒装、Much is being done 进行被动;
用△标一处最生动的自然或生灵细节,用○标一句点题句;
同伴互评:朗读片段,看是否画面有镜头感、呼吁有力量。
参考答案与解析
◆ Step 1 读后引导(开放式,参考要点)
1. 功能对应:(1) To one's left — 方位镜头;(2) be struck by — 目睹震撼;(3) 进行被动 — 危机紧迫;(4) Only when 倒装 — 郑重呼吁;(5) Much ... but if — 成绩与警醒。最适合起手的是 (1)。
2. 开放作答,能结合具体生灵/自然细节谈和谐共生即可。
◆ Step 2 即时小练答案 + 易错提醒
1. To our right, a river shone in the dusk.(To one's left/right 方位起手)
2. Listening to the song, she was struck by its sadness.(V-ing 与主语主动)
3. These rare birds are being poached quietly.(are being + 过去分词)
4. can we hear the forest.(Only when 置首,主句部分倒装)
5. Much is being done to help them, but if we don't act, it will be too late.(Much is being done 进行被动 + If 条件)
◆ Step 3 语块串烧补全
(1) To our left (2) was struck by their beauty
(3) are being hunted illegally (4) Only when we learn to exist in harmony with nature can we
(5) much is being done.
◆ Step 4 微续写范文(≈95 词)+ 亮点标注
To our left, snow-covered mountains vanished into clouds (To one's left · 方位). Watching them graze, I was struck by their quiet beauty (V-ing + struck · 震撼). Yet these antelopes are being hunted for their fur (进行被动 · 危机). Only when we learn to live in harmony with nature can we stop the threat (Only when 倒装 · 呼吁). Much is being done, but if we do not change, the planet is lost (Much ... but if · 警醒): to save them is to save ourselves.
亮点:① 五语块串成方位—震撼—危机—呼吁—警醒;② 细节(雪峰、轻蹄、寒雾)有画面;③ 末句点题救它们即救己;④ to our left/struck/being done/only when/if 自然。
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