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人教版选择性必修第一册 · 读后续写片段式训练
Unit 3 Fascinating Parks 自然公园
片段式阶梯训练(实用版)
本练围绕“Fascinating Parks 自然公园”单元主题,从课本提取 5 个可用于续写的“环境/景物”语块,按六步阶梯推进。每语块只点一处最易错的坑,全程提供写作支架与评价量表,避免机械堆砌,可直接用于课堂讲练或自习。
适用对象
建议时长
使用方式
配套
高二/高三学生、备课教师
课堂 1 课时 / 自习 30 min
个人自学 · 小组互评 · 课堂讲练
本单元课文 + 动作/环境描写表达库
Step 1 情境感知:先读进去,再学出来
读下面这个小故事(约 100–120 词)。它把本单元 5 个语块“藏”进了一段真实叙事里——先感受它们在故事里“干什么用”,比直接背例句更有效。
(1) I woke up to the sound of a stream, the tent glowing with the first light. (2) Even though the sky was bright, walking out was impossible through the heavy mist. (3) Checking my watch, I saw it was already past noon. (4) Spreading out before me, the valley held a sea of clouds. Behind the rocks (5) sat a lonely cabin, its window dark.
◆ 读后引导(不做空泛“找句式”,做有意义的两问)
1. 故事里 5 处语块,各承担什么功能:环境入笔 / 反差张力 / 动作紧贴 / 以景起笔 / 仪式感出场?哪一句最适合做“户外开篇”?
2. 哪一处最让你“置身”其中?请结合具体意象(溪声、云海、暗窗的小屋)来谈,而不是只套句式。
Step 2 语块建构·五金库:一个语块 = 一张“功能卡”
下面 5 个语块,每个都按“含义 → 续写功能 → 搭配锦囊 → 易错提醒 → 即时小练”五栏展开。重点不在“背得多”,而在“用得对”——每个语块只标一处最常见错误。
语块 1 wake up to the sound of ... 在……的声音中醒来(环境描写开篇)
课本原句:I wake up to the sound of the wind buffeting the cloth of my tent.
【续写功能】续写环境开篇常用 It was a sunny morning。wake up to the sound of 比直接写天气更有“在场感”。
【搭配锦囊】wake up to the sound of + 名词(在……声中醒来)。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
wake up to the sound of 后接名词/动名词,不接句子;
sound 用单数(the sound of…),不写 sounds;
to 是介词,后接名词性成分。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
1. 填空:I ______________(在鸟鸣声中醒来)every dawn in the camp.
语块 2 Even though ..., doing ... is impossible. 尽管……,但做……是不可能的
课本原句:Even though the sun is brightly shining, walking in the park is impossible because of the flood.
【续写功能】写“表象与事实矛盾”(看似安全实则危险)很有张力。Even though + 主句(对比反差)。
【搭配锦囊】Even though + 句子, + doing / 名词 + is impossible.
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
even though 引导让步从句(主谓完整),不可接短语;
主句主语若是 doing,注意单数谓语 is;
even though 不与 but 同用(× even though…, but…)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
2. 填空:______________(尽管路很近), climbing it before dark is impossible.
语块 3 现在分词作时间/伴随状语(V-ing, 主句) (边)做……,(就)……(动作紧贴)
课本原句:Checking my watch, I see that it is 7:30.
【续写功能】续写里“先做一个小动作,随即看到/意识到”极常用。用现在分词短语置首。
【搭配锦囊】V-ing(表主动/同时), + 主句(主语须与 V-ing 逻辑主语一致)。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
分词置首,主句主语须是分词动作的执行者(一致性!);
表“同时/紧接”,非原因时不与 because 混;
现在分词表主动进行,过去分词表被动完成,别用反。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
3. 填空:______________(望向窗外), she found the world white with snow.
语块 4 现在分词置首的景物描写(V-ing, 主句) ……铺展在眼前,(主句)……(以景起笔)
课本原句:Spreading out before me, branches of the trees formed a green roof.
【续写功能】续写环境烘托常用 There was a river...。用现在分词短语(Spreading/Stretching...)以景起笔更有镜头感。
【搭配锦囊】V-ing(景物) + 主句(主句主语须与分词主语一致,常为 the path/branches)。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
景物分词(spreading/stretching/lying)作前置,主句主语须能被它修饰;
避免悬垂:主句主语须是“铺展/延伸”的本体;
与上一语块同属分词置首,但本处侧重“景”,上一处侧重“动作”。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
4. 填空:______________(蜿蜒穿过山谷), the river caught the last light.
语块 5 全部倒装(方位/伴随前置) ……在……(把地点/伴随状语提前,主语后置)
课本原句:Following the reindeer were the Sami people.
【续写功能】续写想让“出场”更有仪式感时,可用全部倒装:把 Following/Behind/Out 等前置,主语后置。
【搭配锦囊】方位/伴随状语(介词短语/副词) + 谓语 + 主语(完全倒装,谓语与后置主语一致)。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
全部倒装:谓语提到主语前,主语须在谓语后;
谓语单复数由后置主语决定;
常用于 there/here/方位短语起首,增强画面感。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
5. 填空:On the hill ______________(站着一棵老树).
🔎 直击重难点:现在分词置首 vs 全部倒装 起笔
现在分词置首:V-ing 作状语,主句主语=分词执行者(Checking my watch, I…);
全部倒装:方位/伴随状语置首,谓语+主语(On the hill stood…);
前者“以动作/景物带出主句”,后者“以方位带出主语”,都增强镜头感。
Step 3 衔接迁移·语块串烧:把 5 个语块“缝”进一段续写
孤立造句容易,放进连贯段落才见真功夫。读下面这段微续写,用本单元语块补全 5 处空缺——注意前后逻辑与语法形式。
I (1)______________(在溪水声中醒来)in the tent. (2)______________(尽管天空湛蓝), walking to the lake was impossible because of the mist. (3)______________(看了看地图), I realized we were lost. (4)______________(蜿蜒穿过林间), a narrow path caught the morning. Behind the rocks (5)______________(坐着一位老人)who smiled at us.
提示:① wake up to the sound of + 名词 ② Even though + 句子(不与 but 同用)③ V-ing 置首,主语一致 ④ V-ing 景物置首 ⑤ 全部倒装:状语+谓语+主语
Step 4 微续写实战(支架式):从“会用语块”到“写出好片段”
顺着 Step 1 的故事情境,完成约 80–100 词的微片段(可另设人物/场景,但须用上本单元 5 个语块)。
不要提笔就写。先借下面的“提纲支架 + 词汇银行”搭好脚手架,再动笔;写完用“评价量表”自评。
◆ ① 提纲支架(每段该干什么、用哪个语块)
段落
写作任务
建议调用的语块
开头 Begin
自然入笔,环境声/光开篇
wake up to the sound of
发展 Develop
反差/动作链,分词置首
Even though / V-ing 状语
结尾 End
景物铺展 + 倒装出场
V-ing 景物 / 全部倒装
◆ ② 词汇银行(从动作 / 环境描写库精选,提升文采)
📚 可直接化用的地道表达
【清晨意象】Mist pooled in the valley like a forgotten sea. / The first light spilled over the ridge, gold and unhurried.
【动作细节】He stepped where the grass bent under his weight. / She breathed in the cold, and the mountain seemed to breathe back.
【氛围烘托】Silence here was not empty, but full of small lives. / The wind passed through the pines like a long, low song.
【金句】A park is the earth's way of keeping a secret in plain sight. / To walk in the wild is to remember we are guests, not owners.
◆ ③ 学生写作区
在此完成 80–100 词的微片段,尽量用上提纲里的 4–5 个语块,并至少借用“词汇银行”中 1 处描写:
◆ ④ 评价量表(自评 / 互评通用)
维度
优秀 4
达标 3
待改进 2
得分
内容完整
三段清晰,入笔—发展—出场完整
基本完整
缺环节
语块运用
准确使用 ≥4 个本单元语块
用对 2–3 个
误用 / 少用
景物描写
有声音/光线/草木细节,画面立体
略有描写
平铺
衔接自然
分词/倒装/让步过渡自然
基本连贯
跳跃
主题升华
点明“自然/秘境”立意
略有点题
未升华
🔍 自评 / 互评指引
圈出用到的本单元语块,核对形式:wake up to the sound of + 名词、Even though 不与 but、V-ing 置首主语一致、全部倒装谓语在主语前;
用“△”标一处最妙的景物,用“○”标一句点题句;
同伴互评:朗读片段,看“秘境感”是否自然浮现。
参考答案与解析
◆ Step 1 读后引导(开放式,参考要点)
1. 功能对应:(1) wake up to the sound of——环境入笔;(2) Even though——反差张力;(3) V-ing 状语——动作紧贴;(4) V-ing 景物——以景起笔;(5) 全部倒装——仪式感出场。最适合开头的是 (1)。
2. 开放作答,能结合具体意象(谷中雾、晨光、老人的笑)谈“秘境”即可。
◆ Step 2 即时小练答案 + 易错提醒
1. I woke up to the sound of birds singing every dawn in the camp.(to the sound of + 名词)
2. Even though the path is near, climbing it before dark is impossible.(even though + 句子;不与 but)
3. Looking out of the window, she found the world white with snow.(V-ing 置首;主语一致)
4. Winding through the valley, the river caught the last light.(V-ing 景物置首)
5. On the hill sat an old tree that had seen a hundred winters.(全部倒装;谓语随主语)
◆ Step 3 语块串烧补全
(1) woke up to the sound of the stream (2) Even though the sky was blue,
(3) Checking the map, (4) Winding through the woods,
(5) sat an old man
◆ Step 4 微续写范文(≈95 词)+ 亮点标注
I woke up to the sound of a stream (wake up to the sound of · 环境入笔) in a tent beneath the ridge. Even though the sky was blue (Even though · 反差), walking to the lake was impossible through the mist. Checking the map (V-ing 状语 · 动作紧贴), I realized we had wandered far. Winding through the woods (V-ing 景物 · 以景起笔), a narrow path caught the morning light. Behind the rocks sat an old man (全部倒装 · 仪式感出场) who smiled as if the mountain belonged to him — and I understood: a park is the earth's way of keeping a secret in plain sight.
亮点:① 五语块串成“入笔—反差—动作—景物—出场”闭环;② 细节(溪声、雾、晨光、老人的笑)以景衬秘;③ 末句金句点题“公园是大地坦露的秘密”;④ 衔接 even though / as if 自然。
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