Unit7 Writing学案2026-2027学年沪教版七年级英语上册

2026—2027学年 沪教版七年级英语上册 Unit 7 U7 writing 学案 2026—2027学年沪教版七年级英语上册 写作探究课 让课后活动报道有细节 班级 __________ 姓名 __________ 日期 __________ 教材对应：第108—109页 Writing。建议用时：40分钟。 本课任务 为 Teen Post 写一篇80—100词的课后活动短文，让读者知道你做了什么，以及这次经历为何值得记住。 重难点 按活动概况、个人经历、感受组织内容；选择具体细节；在修改中检查过去式和表达效果。 一 读范文时看看作者怎样选材料 7分钟 1. Read “A fun charity sale” on p. 108. Match each paragraph with its job. Write 1, 2 or 3. a. Explain the writer’s feeling and why the activity mattered. ____ b. Introduce the activity, its time, place and purpose. ____ c. Describe the writer’s own actions and other useful details. ____ 2. Find one action done by “I” and one result of the sale. Use short phrases. My action in the model: _______________________________________________ The result of the sale: ________________________________________________ Why is “I decorated the tables with posters” more useful than “I helped a lot”? ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 二 把笼统评价改成读者能看见的事 6分钟 3. Compare the sentences. Underline the concrete actions in B. What does B help the reader understand? A. The paper-cutting activity was interesting. I learnt a lot. B. I cut off one of my rabbit’s ears by mistake. A club member showed me where to fold the paper, and my second rabbit had two ears. B helps the reader understand _________________________________________. 4. Improve ONE vague sentence using a detail from a real or imagined activity. Keep the detail believable. Choose: I helped someone. / We worked together. / I felt proud. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 细节可以是一次尝试、一个动作、一句有用的话或一件小成果。活动不一定发生意外；有意义的进步同样值得写。 先取舍材料再落笔 三 为自己的短文列提纲 6分钟 5. Choose one recent after-school activity: a club meeting, a charity sale, a book-sharing event, or another activity you know well. Paragraph Your notes 1 活动概况 What / when / where / why? ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ 2 我的经历 What did I do? Choose two useful details. ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ 3 感受及原因 How did I feel? What made me feel this way? ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ Circle your most useful detail. Cross out one detail that does not help your reader understand the activity. 可选词语：attended, made, brought, showed, helped, shared, learnt, decorated。 起步句：Last …, I took part in … . / I felt … because … . 按需要选用，不必全部使用。 四 写出初稿 12分钟 6. Write 80–100 words in three paragraphs. Give your description a suitable title. Use the simple past for the activity; you may use the present for a feeling you still have now. Title: ______________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 修改要让读者读得更明白 五 先当一次编辑 4分钟 7. Read this short draft. Find TWO verb errors. Then add one sentence after “It was fun” to explain the feeling with an action or a result. Last Friday, I go to a Craft Club meeting. We made paper flowers in the art room. I did not knew how to fold the paper, so a member helped me. It was fun. Corrections: __________________________ __________________________ My added sentence: __________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 六 对照初稿作一次有用的修改 4分钟 8. Exchange drafts with your partner, or read your own draft as a Teen Post reader. Mark the writing itself before ticking the boxes. □ 在文中圈出时间、地点和活动。 □ 用直线画出两处具体动作，其中至少一处是作者本人做的。 □ 用波浪线画出感受及其原因。 □ 检查过去式、拼写和句末标点。 The reader still wants to know: _________________________________________ 9. Revise the part that needs the most work. Write your improved paragraph below. Keep the rest of your draft if it already works. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ My change makes the writing clearer because ______________________________ ____________________________________________________________________. 七 给文章选一个贴切的标题 1分钟 10. Which title fits your own piece better: a general one such as “An activity” or one that names its memorable feature? Write your final title. My final title: ________________________________________________________ 课后整理：把保留的段落和修改后的段落合成终稿。不要只誊抄初稿。 参考答案与教学提示 开放题所列答案仅作示例。表达不同但符合文本、理由成立，应予认可；先肯定思考依据，再帮助学生修正语言。 一至二 从范文到细节 1. a—3；b—1；c—2。范文第二段篇幅较长，因为“我具体做了什么”是读者理解这次活动的主要依据。 2. 可选个人行动：brought handmade postcards / made postcards / decorated the tables with posters / got things ready for sale。结果：the school gave the money to different charities。 “decorated the tables with posters” 点明动作和对象，读者能想象作者怎样帮忙；“helped a lot” 只有笼统评价。 3. 动作包括 cut off an ear by mistake、showed me where to fold、made a second rabbit（最后一项由结果可知）。B shows how the writer learnt with help and improved the paper-cut. 不要求每篇文章都按“失败—成功”写。 4. 示例：I helped a new member fold the paper and draw a leaf on it. / We put our paper flowers together to make a bright picture. / I felt proud because a younger student could make the bird after I showed her the steps. 三至四 提纲与短文 5. 以学生选定的活动为准。第一段不要求机械回答所有问题；若活动没有明确公益目的，不编造目的。第二段至少包括一个“我”的动作。第三段的感受要由前文事实支撑。 6. 参考短文，共95词，标题不计入词数： My second paper rabbit Last Friday, I attended a Craft Club meeting in our school art room. We learnt to make paper rabbits for a small school show. At first, I cut off one ear by mistake. A club member showed me where to fold the paper. I tried again, and my second rabbit had two ears. Then I helped a new member draw a rabbit before she cut it out. We put our rabbits on the wall. I felt proud because I could make something and help someone else. I want to try a paper bird next time. 结尾的 I want 描述写作时仍有的愿望，不必改为过去式。学生的终稿应写自己的活动，参考文用于比较结构与细节。 参考答案与修改评价 五 编辑练习 7. go → went；knew → know。示例补句：With her help, I made three flowers and gave one to our teacher. 若补充了三朵花，就应在同一小稿中保持数量一致。 六 一次修改的示例 原句：We did many things. I was happy. 修改：I showed a new member how to fold the paper. When she finished her first flower, we both smiled. 修改理由：补入具体的帮助行为和两人的反应，让 happy 有了可见的依据。 8—9. 不以改动字数多少评价。学生若能指出读者不清楚的地方，并增加一个必要细节、删去重复句或纠正影响理解的错误，就完成了一次有效修改。 七 标题与评价 10. 标题应对应正文，如 My second paper rabbit、A busy book sale、An afternoon of sharing。不能为了“新颖”写一个正文没有体现的内容。 维度 检查依据 内容 活动背景清楚；写出本人行动；感受有原因。 组织 三段各有作用；事情的先后和因果清晰。 语言 主要过去事件使用一般过去时；词句自然、意思清楚。 修改 能说明一处修改解决了什么问题。 课堂提示 教师可先展示一组“笼统评价—具体细节”的对比，让学生讨论哪句更有用及其原因。初稿阶段不频繁打断改错；反馈先关注材料和结构，再选两三处共性语言问题集中处理。 80—100词用于控制课内任务量，轻微超出不一票否定。对表达较慢的学生，可保留第一段起步句；对完成较快的学生，要求删去一句重复内容，并说明删后为什么更紧凑。 第 页 共 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $