专题01 高考英语小作文讲义（上）2027年高考英语一轮复习

高考英语写作·解析分册(01/13) 第一篇·小作文写作思路讲义（上)·思路与体裁（解析版) 答案与解析随练随附 本册目录 高考小作文写作思路讲义 第一部分先认清它到底考什么 第二部分体裁格式速查·先认体裁，再谈写法 I练一练（书面练习·书信） 【练一练（书面练习·通知） 1练一练（书面练习·演讲稿） I练一练（书面练习·报道） 【练一练（书面练习·投稿/短文） 第三部分五步主流程（示范篇·六种体裁全程演示） 1 高考小作文写作思路讲义 五步主流程·从「不知道写什么」到「写得全、写得够、写得好」 1五步主流程一览·一页看懂 卡壳时问自己：我这一步在写「哪个要点」？给它加个W就够了。 核心认知：小作文不是创作题，是「按题干要点翻译+扩写」的信息任务。内容都在题干里，你要 练的是一一看得见要点、撑得开句子。 总口诀：先看得见（拆点）一再撑得开（加4W)→后说得漂亮（升级词汇+句式）。三步顺序 不能颠倒，一颠倒就白练。 第一部分 先认清它到底考什么 一、高分三要素（按阅卷权重排序） ●格式规范一一 体裁对、称呼落款对，先保住基础分 ●要点齐全一一题干信息点一个不漏，漏1点直接掉档 ●结构清晰一一开头/正文/结尾一眼可见，有逻辑连接词 ●语言亮点一一语法正确的前提下，放3~4处升级表达（换词+换句式）即可 提醒：亮点句只是锦上添花。要点漏了、格式错了，写得再漂亮也救不回来。 二、学生写不出来的三个真实卡点 ●卡点①：不知道体裁长什么样→第一步「定体裁」解决 ●卡点②：知道要点但每点写不满→第四步「扩句4W」解决 ☑课堂用法：先问学生「你是哪一步卡住了」，再对症下药，不要一上来就讲好词好句。 第二部分体裁格式速查·先认体裁，再谈写法 体裁是地基。体裁认错，格式分、语气分、时态分一起丢。五个体裁下面各配一道例题，先看骨 架、再读范文片段，把「这类文章长什么样」刻进脑子里，后面练五步流程才接得住。 一、书信/邮件（高考最高频） ●骨架：Dear→开头目的句→正文（每要点I段）→结尾客套→Yours,.LiHua ●按功能记三样：开头动词(invite/suggest/apply/ask/thank/apologize)+正文必写内容+结尾套话 ●语气：写给朋友可轻松；写给老师、外教、机构一律正式，不用缩写 ■例题示范·感谢信（书信/邮件） 【例题·书信：感谢信】 假定你是李华，作为交换生在英国学习期间得到M.Brwm一家的照顾。回国后请你给他们写一封 感谢信，内容包括：1.表达感谢；2.回顾他们对你的帮助；3.邀请他们来中国。 要点编号：①表达感谢（书信体裁自带开头目的句）②回顾帮助③邀请来访 隐含要点：④结尾再致谢并期待回复一一书信的结尾套话不算废话，是得分点 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 【格式片段（背这几行就够） Dear Mi:a1dMrs.Brown,(称呼顶格，后面用逗号，不用冒号) I am writing to express my sincere gratitude for your generous help during my stay in Britain. (开 头目的句=写信功能动词：express gratitude for感谢) But for your patient guidance,,I could not have adapted to the local life so quickl.(回顾帮助： but for含蓄虚拟，比Thank you very much高一个档) I sincerely hope you can visit China someday,and Iwould be more than delighted to show you aroud (邀请+期待) Yours, (落款) Li Hua 书信的命门在「称呼+落款/和「开头目的句/三处。感谢信的开头动词换成express my sincere 8 ratitude for,一篇就立住了。给朋友写信可以轻松，给长辈外教一律正式，别用Im/camt这类缩写。 【练习·书信：邀请信】假定你是李华，你校将于下周五下午3：00在学校礼堂举办“中国传统文化 节”(Traditional Culture Festival)。请你给外教Mr.Smith写一封邀请信，内容包括：l.活动目的：2.活动 的主要内容；3.期待他参加。 提纲：Dear(称呼)→开头目的句→正文（每要点1段）→结尾客套→Yours,LiHa(落 款) 终检：格式(Dear/Yours,LiHua)√语气（正式，不用缩写）√要点①②③全√字数 100-120/ 参考范文见第三部分「示范篇·书信」；练习详解见第四、五部分题头批注。 1练一练（书面练习·书信） 二、通知Notice ●骨架：NOTICE(标题居中)→时间地点活动→参加对象与要求→落款(Student Union) ●时态雷区：通知写的是「将要发生」，一律用将来时(will be held/is to be held) ●不用称呼，不用Yors,这是和书信最大的区别 3 【例题示范·讲座通知 【例题·通知：英语讲座】 假定你是校学生会主席李华。学校将邀请Sith教授作一场关于英语学习策略的讲座。请你以学生 会的名义写一则通知，内容包括：1.讲座的时间与地点；2.讲座的主要内容：3.参加注意事项。 要点编号：①讲座目的+主题（通知自带）②时间地点③主要内容④参加要求 隐含要点：⑤落款Student Union(可加日期)一一通知没有称呼，也没有Yours 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 1格式片段（背这几行就够） NOTICE(标题居中，全大写，不加标点)》 To help students lear English more effectively,a lecture on English learning strategies will be delivered by Professor Smith from 3:00 to 5:00 next Friday afternoon in the school lecture hall.( +主题+时间地，点，全句将来时被动) The professor will share practical methods of memorising vocabulary and improving listening, followed by a question-and-answer session. (主要内容) Those who are interested are welcome to attend.Please arrive ten minutes early and keep your mobile phones silent. (参加要求》 Student Union (落款) 通知的命门就两条：一是不写称呼、不写Yos(写了直接暴露体裁没认出来)：二是全篇将来时 (通知讲的是「将要发生」)，时态一错整篇垮掉。 练一练（书面练习·通知） 参考范文见第三部分「示范篇·通知」；练习详解见第四、五部分题头批注。 终检：格式（无称呼、无Yours)√时态（全篇将来时）√要点①②③④全字数100-120√ 提纲：NOTICE标题（居中全大写）→活动目的/主题→时间地，点→主要内容→参加要求→ Student Union落款 【练习·通知：志愿者招募】假定你是校学生会主席李华。学校将于下周六上午9：00-11：00在学校图书馆 举办「英语读书分享会」。请你以学生会的名义写一则通知，内容包括：1.活动时间与地点；2.活动主要 内容（至少两项）；3.报名方式。注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连 贯。 三、演讲稿Speech 4 ●骨架：称呼(Dear friends/Boys and girls)→开场点题→观点展开→号召收尾(Let's.) ●多用we/us拉近距离，结尾要有感染力和号召性 【例题示范·主题演讲 【例题·演讲稿：阅读】 假定你是李华，你校将举办以「Reading Enriches Our Life」为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇演 讲稿，内容包括：1.阅读的好处：2.你的阅读习惯；3.发出倡议。 要点编号：①开场点题（演讲自带）②阅读的好处③我的阅读习惯④号召收尾 隐含要点：⑤结尾致谢Thank you一演讲缺了称呼或缺了号召都要扣分 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)：2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 【格式片段（背这几行就够） Boys and girls,(称呼，脱稿演讲也必须有） It is a great honour to stand here and share my views on reading..(开t场句，固定背下来) Reading is to the mind what exercise is to the body,which not only broadens our horizons but also enriches o1 ur inner1 vorld.(好处：明喻+not only.but also) Personally,I have formed the habit of reading for half an hour before going to bed every night. (我的习惯：加Wat细节，撑开字数) Let's make reading a part ofour daily life and keep reading every day!Thank you!(+ 谢，一个都不能少) 演讲稿的命门在「一头一尾/：开头必须有称呼(Bovs and girls/Dear friends)和开场句，结尾必 须有号召(Lt..）和致谢。中间多用1e/s把听众拉进来，别通篇I。 【练习·演讲稿：环保】假定你是李华，你校将举办以“Protect Our Green Campus''为主题的英语演讲比 赛。请你写一篇演讲稿，内容包括：1.校园环境的现状；2.我们能做的具体行动；3.发出倡议。 提纲：称呼→开场点题→观点展开→号召收尾(Let's..)+Thank you 终检：称呼(Boys and girls/Dear friends)√开场点题√结尾号召+致谢/字数100-120√ 参考范文见第三部分「示范篇·演讲稿」；练习详解见第四、五部分题头批注。 』练一练（书面练习·演讲稿） 四、报道/日记Report&Diary ●共同点：写「已经发生」的事→全文过去时 ●要素齐全5WlH:Who/What/When/Where/Why/How ●日记开头常写天气与心情：It was a sunny Sunday./I was more than delighted to. 5 【例题示范·校园报道 【例题·报道：校园科技节】 假定你是校英文报记者李华。上周五你校举办了校园科技节(Science and Technology Festival)。请 你为此写一篇英文报道，内容包括：1.活动的时间与地点；2.活动的主要内容：3.同学们的反响。 要点编号：①何时何地(5WlH的When/Where)②主要内容③同学反响 隐含要点：④标题（报道常加一个简短标题）一一全文过去时，这是和通知最大的区别 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 ■格式片段（背这几行就够） School Science Festival,,a Big Hit(标题，简短醒目) Last Friday witnessed our school's Science and Technology Festival,which was held on the playground and attracted o1er800 students and teachers.(过去时+hich从句，一开场5W全 给) A variety ofactivities were organised,ranging from robot competitions to a scientific experiment shom,all of which were greeted with bursts of applause.(主要内容：给具体名称) The festival was highly spoken of by all the students present,who said it not only broadened their horizons but also aroused their interest in science. (反响+双从句收尾) 报道的命门是时态：写的是「己经发生」的事，从第一句到最后一句全是过去时。日记同理，只是 人称换成I、开头常点一句天气与心情。 练一练（书面练习·报道） 参考范文见第三部分「示范篇·报道」；练习详解见第四、五部分题头批注。 终检：时态（全篇过去时）√5W1H要素齐全要点①②③全√字数100-120√ 提纲：简短标题一何时何地（过去时）一主要内容→同学反响→（无落款，记者署名可省） 【练习·报道：爱心义卖】假定你是校英文报记者李华。上周六你校举办了「爱心义卖」(Charity Sale) 活动。清你写一篇英文报道，内容包括：1.活动的时间与地点；2.活动的主要内容：3.活动反响。注意： 1.词数100左右(100-120词)：2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 五、投稿/短文（近年新题型） ●骨架：简短标题→开头点题引入→正文分享→无称呼、无落款（署名可省） ●常见题干：「英文报XX栏目正在征稿」/「请你写一篇短文投稿」一一近年新题型，长相像小报 道，重在「分享观点或经历」 6 ●时态：讲习惯、讲道理用现在时为主，讲经历才用过去时一一和日记正好相反 【例题示范·栏目征稿 【例题·投稿/短文：健康生活方式】 假定你是李华，你校英文报「lealthy Living」栏目正在征稿。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，内容包 括：1.你的健康生活方式：2.你的感受或建议。 要点编号：①我的健康生活方式②感受或建议 隐含要点：③简短标题一一投稿短文常加标题；全文不写Der、不写Yours 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 1格式片段（背这几行就够） A Healthy Lifestyle Within Reach(标题，简短醒目) When it comes to healthy living,a regular routine matters more than occasional effort. (开头点 题) Every morning,Ijog around the playground for halfan hour,which not only builds up my body but also refreshes my mind. Only with a healthy body can we embrace our study and life energetically. (Ony倒装收尾) 投稿短文的命门在「标题/和「无书信痕迹/：加一个简短标题，全文不写Dea㎡、不写Yous:第 一人称，像和朋友分享。它比报道自由，但要点照样一个不能漏。 【练习·投稿/短文：我的偶像】假定你是李华，你校英文报「My Role Model.」栏目正在征稿。请你用 英语写一篇短文投稿，介绍你心目中的一位榜样，内容包括：1.他/她是谁及主要事迹；2.对你的影响。注 意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)：2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 提纲：简短标题→开头点题→事迹（第一人称叙述）→影响/建议 终检：格式（标题+无称呼无落款）√时态（现在时为主）要点①②全√字数100-120√ 参考范文见第三部分「示范篇·投稿/短文」；练习详解见第四、五部分题头批注。 1练一练（书面练习·投稿/短文） 第三部分五步主流程（示范篇·六种体裁全程演示） 下面把高考最高频的六种体裁一一书信/通知/演讲稿/报道/日记/投稿短文一一各做一遍完整的 五步示范。只看一种你会「换题就懵」，六种连看才能把「定体裁→拆要点→搭框架→扩句→终 检」这五步练成肌肉记忆。每一步都标了耗时，考场上严格照这个节奏走。 【示范题·书信/邮件：感谢信】 7 假定你是李华，作为交换生在英国学习期间得到M.Brown一家照顾。回国后请你给他们写一封感 谢信，内容包括： 1.表达感谢：2.回顾帮助；3.邀请来访。 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 第一步·定体裁(30秒) ●认问法：给外国家庭写邮件→书信类（邮件） ●定格式：Dear一→正文→Yours,Li Hua ●定时态：回顾「过去」的帮助用一般过去时；邀请「将来」来访用一般将来时 ●定语气：写给长辈、外籍家庭一正式、礼貌，不用缩写 体裁是地基。书信认错成通知（写了NOTICE)或漏了落款，格式分直接归零，后面写得再漂亮也 白搭。 第二步·拆要点(30秒) 把题干信息点全划出来，分清「明写要点」和「隐含要点」： ●明写要点：①表达感谢②回顾帮助③邀请来访 ●隐含要点：④开头先说写信目的一一书信体裁自带，题干不写也得补 ●隐含要点：⑤结尾再致谢+期待回复一一同上，属于体裁必备项 血泪经验：漏1个要点=直接掉一档。先写五行草稿：①感谢②回顾③邀请④目的⑤期待， 写完勾一遍题千。 第三步·搭框架(1分钟) 通用三段式，先把100-120词分好： ●开头1-2句（约20词）：写信目的一一我为什么写这封信 ●正文56句（约70词）：每个要点1-2句，每句至少加1个W ●结尾1-2句（约20词）：期待回复/表达感谢 本题框架：开头I am writing to express my gratitude(④)一正文回顾帮助（②）+邀请来访（③） →结尾期待（⑤）。 第四步·扩句(5分钟)一一核心 四个W挑l-2个最自然的加：When时间·Where地点·What具体细节·Why原因/目的。 1要点②示范：回顾帮助 干句：You helped me a lot..(只有4词，太干) P What +Why:But for your patient guidance,I could not have adapted to the local life and made progress in my studies.(虚拟语气一上，立刻有分量) 1要点③示范：邀请来访 干句：I hope you can visit.(太直白) What:We would be more than delighted if you could pay a visit to China and experience our culture firsthand..(would/could比can礼貌，是书信最划算的语气分) 1开头句与结尾句（体裁自带，背位置即可） I am writing to express my sincere gratitude for your generous help during my stay in Britain. I sincerely hope you can visit China someday.Looking forward to your reply. 第五步·终检(1分钟) ●格式√Dear/Yours,LiHua都在 ●要点√①②③④⑤一个不漏 ●语气√对外籍家庭够正式，无缩写 ●字数√100-120词 ●时态√回顾过去时、邀请将来时，不混 I范文A·基础版（约88词·要点全但未展开） Dear Mr.and Mrs.Brown, I am writing to thank you for your kind help during my stay in Britain.When I first arrived,I could not speak English well.You encouraged me ad helped me with ny English every day.You also cooked delicious food for me and showed me around the city on weekends.Thanks to your help,I made great progress and had a wonderful time. I sincerely hope you can visit China one day.I am looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua 1范文B·高分版（约112词·达标) Dear Mr.and Mrs.Brown, I am writing to express my sincere gratitude for your generous help during my exchange study in Britcin. It was your patient guidance and warn care that helped me adapt to the local life so quickly.Whenever I met with difficulties in English,you were alwvays there to encourage me.Besides,the delicious meals you cooked and the places you showed me around made my stay colorful and enjoyable.But for your kindness,I would never have overcome the loneliness of living abroad I sincerely hope you can pay a visit to China someday and experience our culture firsthand.Looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua 对照看：B版用express my sincere gratitude替代thank,用It was.that强调句和But for虚拟语气 撑开内容，112词达标；A版每句只说一层、88词偏短。 【示范题·通知：英语讲座】 假定你是校学生会主席李华。学校将邀请Sith教授作一场关于英语学习策略的讲座。请你以学生 会的名义写一则通知，内容包括： 1.讲座的时间与地点；2.主要内容；3.参加要求。 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 第一步·定体裁(30秒) ●认问法：以学生会名义、告知一件「将要发生」的事→通知Notice ●定格式：NOTICE标题（居中全大写）→正文→Student Union落款（无称呼、无Yors) ●定时态：通知讲「将要发生」→全篇一般将来时 ●定语气：客观、正式，不用口语 通知的两大命门：①不写称呼、不写Yous(写了就暴露体裁没认出来)；②全篇将来时，时态一 错整篇垮。 第二步·拆要点(30秒) 通知自带「目的+主题」，主体再拆三项： ●明写要点：①时间地点②主要内容③参加要求 ●隐含要点：④开头点明目的+主题（通知自带） ●隐含要点：⑤落款Student Union(可加日期) 通知没有「回信」，也没有「期待回复」。要点④⑤是体裁自带，别漏。 第三步·搭框架（1分钟) ●标题1行：NOTICE(全大写、居中、不加标点) ●正文56句（约90词）：目的→时间地点一内容→要求 ●落款1行：Student Union 第四步·扩句(5分钟)一一核心 【要点①示范：时间地点 千句：The lecture will be held.(太千) When Where:To be held next Friday,the lecture will take place in the school hall from 3:00 to 5:00p.1m. 10 【要点②示范：主要内容 千句：The professor will share methods.(空) What:Professor Smith will share practical strategies for enlarging vocabulary and improving reading efficiency,.which will surely benefit every attendee..(which从句把「好处」补上) 【要点③示范：参加要求 千句：Please come.(太口语) What:Those who are interested are expected to arrive ten minutes earlier and bring a notebook for key points. 第五步·终检(1分钟) ●格式√无称呼、无Yours,落款Student Union ●时态√全篇将来时 ●要点√①②③④全 ●字数/100-120词 ■范文A·基础版（约85词·要点全但未展开） NOTICE Our school will invite Professor Smith to give a lecture on English learning strategies.It will be held in the school hall from 3:00 to 5:00 p.m.next Friday. At the lecture,Professor Smith will share some good methods of memorising vocabulary and improving listening and speaking.There will also be a question-and-answer part,so you can ask him questions about English study. If you want to attend,please sign up with your class monitor before Thursday and arrive ten minutes early Student Union 1范文B·高分版（约104词·达标） NOTICE To help students learn English more effectively,a lecture on English learning strategies will be delivered by Professor Smith in the school hall from 3:00 to 5:00 p.m.next Friday. At the lecture,Professor Smuith will share practical methods of memorising vocabulary and improving listening and speaking skills,followed by a question-and-answer session,where you can communicate with him face to face. Those who are interested are welcome to attend.Please sign up with your class monitor in advance ad arrive ten ninutes early with your questions ready. It is a golden opportunity to improve your English,so don't miss it. Student Union 11 对照看：B版把「学校将邀请」升级成被动alecture.will be delivered by,用hose who are interested替代please come,.l04词达标；A版偏短且口语化。 【示范题·演讲稿：阅读】 假定你是李华，你校将举办以「Reading Enriches Our Life」为主题的英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇演 讲稿，内容包括： 1.阅读的好处：2.你的阅读习惯；3.发出倡议。 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 第一步·定体裁(30秒) ●认问法：比赛现场讲给同学听→演讲稿Speech ●定格式：称呼(Boys and girls/Dear friends)一→开场点题→观点展开→号召收尾(Let's..)+ Thank you ●定时态：讲「一般道理+习惯」一一般现在时为主 ●定语气：亲切、有感染力，多用we/us拉近距离 演讲稿命门在「一头一尾」：开头必须有称呼+开场句，结尾必须有号召(Lt's..)+致谢 (Thank you)。缺一个都扣分。 第二步·拆要点(30秒) ●明写要点：①阅读的好处②我的阅读习惯③发出倡议 ●隐含要点：④开场点题（演讲自带） ●隐含要点：⑤结尾号召+致谢（演讲自带） 第三步·搭框架(1分钟) ●开头1-2句：Boys and girls,.+开场点题 ●正文4-5句：好处→习惯 ●结尾2句：Let's..号召+Thank you 第四步·扩句(5分钟)一一核心 1要点①示范：阅读的好处 千句：Reading is good.(太干) What Why:Reading is to the mind what exercise is to the body,which not only broadens our horizons but also enriches our inner world. 1要点②示范：我的习惯 干句：I read every day.(空) 12 What When:Personally,I have formed the habit of reading for half an hour before bed,covering everything from classics to news. 第五步·终检（1分钟) ●格式√有称呼、有号召、有Thank you ●要点√①②③④⑤全 ●语气√亲切有感染力 ●字数/100-120词 】范文A·基础版（约90词·要点全但未展开） Boys and girls, It is a great honour to stand here and share ny views on reading. As we all know,reading is very important for us.It can not only help us learn new things but also make us smarter.Personally,I have formed the habit of reading for half an hour before going to bed.My favourite books are English novels,from which I have learned many beautiful sentences. Let's make reading a part ofour daily life and read more good books together! Thank you. Li Hua 1范文B·高分版（约109词·达标) Boys and girls, It is a great honour to stand here and share my views on reading. As the saying goes,reading is to the mind what exercise is to the body.It not only broadens our horizons but also enriches our inner world,which lays a solid foundation for our future development. Personally,I have formed the habit of reading for half an hour before going to bed covering classic novels as well as English magazines.It is reading that helps me improve my English and see a wider world Let's make reading a part ofour daily life and keep reading every day!Thank you Li Hua 对照看：B版用比喻Reading is to the mind what exercise is to the body撑开「好处」，用have formed the habit of升级「习惯」，109词达标；A版句子过短。 【示范题·报道/日记：校园科技节】 假定你是校英文报记者李华。上周五你校举办了校园科技节(Science and Technology Festival)。请 你为此写一篇英文报道，内容包括： 1.活动的时间与地点；2.主要内容；3.同学反响。 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 第一步·定体裁(30秒) ●认问法：报道「己经发生」的事→报道Report(日记同理) 13 ●定格式：简短标题一正文(5W1H)→记者署名可省 ●定时态：写「已经发生」→全篇一般过去时 ●定语气：客观叙述 报道的命门是时态：从第一句到最后一句全过去时。日记同理，只是人称换I、开头常点一句天气 与心情。 第二步·拆要点(30秒) ●明写要点：①何时何地(When/Where)②主要内容③同学反响 ●隐含要点：④简短标题（报道常加） ●隐含要点：⑤用5W1H把要素写全(Who/What/Why/How) 第三步·搭框架（1分钟) ●标题1行：简短醒目 。正文56句：何时何地→内容→反响（全过去时） 本题框架：标题School Science Festival,a Big Hit→Last Friday witnessed.…(①)一A variety of activities.(②)→highly spoken of(③) 第四步·扩句(5分钟)一一核心 I要点①示范：何时何地 干句：The festival was held.(太干) When+Where:Last Friday witnessed our school's Science and Technology Festival,which was held in the playground from 2:00 to 5:00 p.m. 1要点②示范：主要内容 千句：There were many activities..(空) What:A variety of activities were organised,ranging from robot competitions to AI lectures,which attracted students of all grades 第五步·终检(1分钟) ●格式√有简短标题，无落款 ●时态√全篇过去时 ●要点√①②③④⑤全(5W1H齐) ●字数/100-120词 【范文A·基础版（约85词·要点全但未展开） School Science Festival,a Big Hit 14 Last Friday,our school held a Science and Techology Festival on the playground.Mamy students and teachers took an active part in it. During the festival,there were many interesting activities,such as robot competitions ad science experiments. The most popular one was the robot show,and the students watched it with great excitement Besides,some famous scientists gave us wonderful talks about AI. All the students present said they had learned a lot from the festival. Li Hua I范文B·高分版（约112词·达标） School Science Festival,a Big Hit Last Friday witnessed our school's Science and Technology Festival,which was held on the playground and attracted over one thousand students and teachers. A variety of activities were organised ranging from robot competitions to AI lectures.What impressed the students most was the robot show,where the robots danced and completed difficult tasks,drawing loud applause from the cudience.Besides,several famous scientists delivered wonderful talks on artificial intelligence. The festival was highly spoken of by all the students present,who said it not only enriched their knowledge but also sparked their passion for science.It was truly a feast of science and technology. Li Hua 对照看：B版用Last Friday witnessed..和ranging from.to.升级句式，ll2词达标；A版句子过 短且反响空泛。 【示范题·日记：难忘的志愿活动】 假定你是李华。上周日你参加了学校组织的社区敬老院志愿活动。请你写一篇英文日记，内容包 括： 1.活动经过；2.你的感受。 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 第一步·定体裁(30秒) ●认问法：题干明说「写一篇英文日记」→日记Diay ●定格式：日期+天气（右上角）一第一人称正文一无称呼、无落款 ●定时态：记「已经发生」→全篇一般过去时；感悟句可用现在时 ●定语气：第一人称、主观叙述，重在「我的所见所感」 日记与报道是近亲：都写已发生的事、全过去时。区别就两处一一人称换成I;开头先写日期天 气，再点一句心情。 第二步·拆要点(30秒) ●明写要点：①活动经过②我的感受 15 ●隐含要点：③日期天气行(Sunday Sunny)一一日记格式分，漏了就扣 ●隐含要点：④开头一句总起（今天做了什么+心情） 第三步·搭框架（1分钟) ●日期天气1行：Sunday Sunny(右上角) ●正文56句：总起一→经过34句（过去时）一感受2句 本题框架：Sunday Sunny(③)→This morning..总起（④）→经过（①）→感受（②）。 第四步·扩句(5分钟)一一核心 【要点①示范：活动经过 千句：I visited the nursing home.(只有5词，太干) When+What:This morning,our class went to the nursing home as volunteers,where I read newspapers to the elderly and chatted with them. 1要点②示范：我的感受 干句：I felt happy.(空) Why:Tired as I was,a strong sense of fulfillment welled up in my heart,because their warm smiles touched me a lot. 第五步·终检（1分钟) ●格式√日期+天气行在，无称呼、无落款 ●时态√全篇过去时（感悟句可现在时） ●要点√①②③④一个不漏，人称全是I/we ●字数/100-120词 【范文A·基础版（约75词·要点全但未展开) Sunday Suny This morning,our class went to the mrsing home in our community as volnteers.We cleaed the windows and swept the floor first.Then I read newspapers to some elderly people ad chatted with them.They smiled and thanked us warnily. An old grandma told me interesting stories about her youth.Ifelt tired but happy.I have learned that helping others brings us true happiness.I hope to go there again soon. 1范文B·高分版（约112词·达标） Sunday Sunny This morning witnessed our most unforgettable volunteer activity-visiting the nursing home in our comnumnity,which left a deep impression on me. 16 On arriving,we were warmly welcomed by the elderly.While some classmates were cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor,I read newspapers to Gramndima Wang and chatted with her about her colorful youth.What touched me most was her bright smile when we sang songs together. Tired as I was,a strong sense offulfillment welled up in my heart.It dawned on me that what the elderly need is not only care but also company.I will spare no effort to help them in the future. 对照看：B版用Tired as I was倒装和a sense of fulfillment welled up写感受，用What touched me most主语从句写瞬间：A版感受只有happy一个词一一这就是3分卷和5分卷的差距。 【示范题·投稿/短文：健康生活方式】 假定你是李华，你校英文报「Iealthy Living」栏目正在征稿。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，内容包 括： 1.你的健康生活方式：2.你的感受或建议。 注意：1.词数100左右(100-120词)；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 第一步·定体裁(30秒) ●认问法：给栏目「投稿」的短文→投稿/短文Contribution ●定格式：简短标题→正文（第一人称分享）→无称呼、无落款 ●定时态：讲习惯、讲道理一一般现在时为主；讲经历才用过去时 ●定语气：亲切自然，像给同学分享经验 投稿短文像「去掉格式的书信」：不写Dear、不写Yours,但要加简短标题。最容易犯的错是写 成书信一一加了称呼落款，直接暴露体裁没认出来。 第二步·拆要点(30秒) ●明写要点：①我的健康生活方式②感受或建议 ●隐含要点：③简短标题一一 投稿常加，简短醒目即可 ●隐含要点：④开头点题引入(When it comes to…) 第三步·搭框架（1分钟) ●标题1行：简短醒目（如A Healthy Lifestyle Within Reach) ●正文56句：引入→方式3句（现在时）→感受/建议2句 本题框架：标题（③）→When it comes to.引入（④）→方式（①）→建议（②）。 第四步·扩句(5分钟)一一核心 I要点①示范：健康方式 千句：I exercise every day.(太干) 17 What Why:Every morning,I jog around the playground for half an hour,which not only builds up my body but also refreshes my mind. 1要点②示范：感受建议 干句：It is good for us.(空) 加How+呼吁：Only with a healthy body can we embrace our study and life energetically.Why not start exercising from today? 第五步·终检（1分钟) ●格式√有简短标题，无Dear、无Yours ●时态√现在时为主 ●要点√①②③④全 ●字数√100-120词 I范文A·基础版（约81词·要点全但未展开） My Healtlry Lifestyle As a senior high school student,I keep a healthy lifestyle in my daily life.Every morning,I run for half an hour on the playground which makes me energetic.Besides,I have a balanced diet with plenty ofvegetables and fruit instead of junk food. After class,I often play basketball with my friends to rela myself.In my opinion,ahealthy body is the basis of good grades.I strongly suggest that everyone take exercise regularly. 【范文B·高分版（约115词·达标） A Healthy Lifestyle Within Reach When it comes to healthy living,aregular routine matters more than occasional effort.As far as I cm concerned,keeping fit has become an essential part ofmy daily routine. Every morning,Ijog around the playground for half a hour,which not only builds up my body but also refreshes my mind.In addition,I stick to a balanced diet,staying aay from junk food,because we are what we eat.What benefits me most is adequate sleep-never staying up late before exams. Only with a healthy body cam we embrace our study and life energetically.So why not start exercising from today and stick to it? 对照看：B版用Only with.can we倒装和What benefits me most主语从句撑观点；A版句句都对但 平一一这就是「说得对」和「说得漂亮」的距离。 18