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My Favorite Invention
书面表达写作指导课
仁爱版 · 九年级上册 · Unit 3 Great Ideas
作文题目
随着科技的高速发展,各种发明创造已成为我们生活中不可缺少的东西。
请以 "My Favorite Invention" 为题,写一篇 80-100 词的短文。
要求:描述你最喜欢的发明,说明至少两条喜欢的理由,并谈谈你的看法。
提示词:laptop, cellphone, digital camera, convenient, easy, make payments, have fun
写作要求:
① 必须包含所有要点 ② 不出现真实姓名和校名 ③ 词数 80-100
开头已给出(不计入总词数):
My favorite invention is ________
第一步:选定对象 & 头脑风暴
我们写:手机 cellphone。它能帮我们做什么?
① 使生活更便捷、方便
convenient / easy
② 放松一下、听音乐
relax / listen to music
③ 学知识、学英语
learn English / knowledge
④ 用某物做某事(短语)
use sth. to do sth.
⑤ 付款、买东西
make payments
⑥ 玩得开心、消遣
have fun
第二步:说明理由(连词成句)
看中文 + 关键词,自己说英文
① 当我们外出时,我们不必带现金,因为我们可以用手机支付。
关键词:外出 go out|不必 don't need to|带现金 carry cash|用手机支付 use the phone to make payments
When we go out, we don't need to carry cash, because we can use the phone to make payments.
② 当我们累了的时候,我们可以用手机听音乐来放松。
关键词:当……时 when|累的 tired|听音乐 listen to music|放松 relax
When we are tired, we can listen to music on the phone to relax.
③ 如果我们想和远方的朋友聊天,我们可以用视频通话。
关键词:如果 if|远方的朋友 friends far away|聊天 talk with|视频通话 video calls
If we want to talk with friends far away, we can use video calls.
④ 此外,我们还能通过看电影或听音乐来消遣。
关键词:此外 besides|通过做某事 by doing sth.|看电影 watch movies|消遣 have fun
Besides, we can have fun by watching movies or listening to music.
第三步:表达看法(结尾升华)
别再只写 I like it very much!看中文+关键词,升级结尾
① 虽然手机给我们带来很多便利,但是我们应该合理使用它。
关键词:虽然 though|带来便利 bring convenience|应该 should|合理使用 use sth. properly
Though the cellphone brings us much convenience, we should use it properly.
② 我们使用它越明智,我们的生活就会变得越美好。
关键词:the + 比较级…, the + 比较级…|明智地 wisely|变得 become
The more we use it wisely, the better our life will become.
范文赏析:My Favorite Invention
【第一段·总】 My favorite invention is the cellphone. It has become one of the most important things in our daily life. The cellphone makes our life much more convenient than before.
【第二段·分】 If we want to talk with friends far away, we can use video calls instead of writing letters. When we go out, we don't need to carry cash, for we can make payments with our phones easily. Besides, we can also have fun by watching movies or listening to music on it.
【第三段·总】 Though the cellphone brings us much convenience, we should use it properly. The more we use it wisely, the better our life will become.
图例: 绿划线=好句亮点 红划线=从句/高级句型 蓝划线=重点短语
范文用到的语法结构(约96词)
① one of the + 最高级 + 复数名词
② much + 比较级 + than
③ if 条件状语从句
④ when 时间状语从句
⑤ though 让步状语从句
⑥ for 并列连词(表原因)
⑦ instead of 短语
⑧ by doing sth. 方式
⑨ The + 比较级, the + 比较级
语法精讲① one of the + 最高级 + 复数名词
【原句】
It has become one of the most important things in our daily life.
它已成为我们日常生活中最重要的东西之一。
✍ 仿写练习:看中文 + 关键词,自己说英文
英语是中学最重要的科目之一。
关键词:one of + 最高级 + 名词复数|important, subjects
English is one of the most important subjects in middle school.
手机是世界上最有用的发明之一。
关键词:one of + 最高级 + 名词复数|useful, inventions
The cellphone is one of the most useful inventions in the world.
语法精讲② much + 比较级 + than(……得多)
【原句】
The cellphone makes our life much more convenient than before.
手机使我们的生活比以前方便多了。
✍ 仿写练习:看中文 + 关键词,自己说英文
这本书比那本书有趣得多。
关键词:much + 比较级 + than|interesting
This book is much more interesting than that one.
今天比昨天冷得多。
关键词:much + 比较级 + than|cold
Today is much colder than yesterday.
语法精讲③ if 条件状语从句(主将从现)
【原句】
If we want to talk with friends far away, we can use video calls.
如果我们想和远方的朋友聊天,我们可以用视频通话。
✍ 仿写练习:看中文 + 关键词,自己说英文
如果明天不下雨,我们就去公园。
关键词:if + 一般现在时, 主句将来时|rain, park
If it doesn't rain tomorrow, we will go to the park.
如果你努力学习,你就会通过考试。
关键词:if + 一般现在时, 主句将来时|study hard, pass
If you study hard, you will pass the exam.
语法精讲④ when 时间从句 & though 让步从句
【原句】
When we go out, we don't need to carry cash. / Though it brings convenience, we should use it properly.
当我们外出时不需要带现金。/ 虽然它带来便利,但我们应合理使用。
✍ 仿写练习:看中文 + 关键词,自己说英文
当我到家时,我就给你打电话。
关键词:when|get home, call you
When I get home, I will call you.
虽然他很小,但他懂得很多。
关键词:though(不与but连用)|young, know a lot
Though he is young, he knows a lot.
语法精讲⑤ The + 比较级, the + 比较级 越……越……
【原句】
The more we use it wisely, the better our life will become.
我们越明智地使用它,生活就越美好。
✍ 仿写练习:看中文 + 关键词,自己说英文
你读得越多,知道得就越多。
关键词:The + 比较级, the + 比较级|read, know
The more you read, the more you will know.
我们种的树越多,空气就越新鲜。
关键词:The + 比较级, the + 比较级|plant trees, fresh
The more trees we plant, the fresher the air will be.
重点短语必背(选自范文)
① one of the most important things
最重要的东西之一
② make our life much more convenient
使生活方便多了
③ instead of
代替,而不是
④ make payments
付款
⑤ by doing sth.
通过做某事
⑥ use sth. properly
合理使用某物
⑦ talk with friends far away
和远方的朋友聊天
短语闯关:看中文说英文
① 最重要的东西之一
① one of the most important things
② 使生活方便多了
② make our life much more convenient
③ 代替,而不是
③ instead of
④ 付款
④ make payments
⑤ 通过做某事
⑤ by doing sth.
⑥ 合理使用某物
⑥ use sth. properly
⑦ 和远方的朋友聊天
⑦ talk with friends far away
背诵积累(一)中英文对照
It has become one of the most important things in our daily life.
它已成为我们日常生活中最重要的东西之一。
The cellphone makes our life much more convenient than before.
手机使我们的生活比以前方便多了。
The cellphone is one of the most useful inventions in the world.
手机是世界上最有用的发明之一。
背诵闯关(一)看中文背英文
它已成为我们日常生活中最重要的东西之一。
语法结构提示:结构:one of + 最高级 + 名词复数 | 词:daily life, things
It has become one of the most important things in our daily life.
手机使我们的生活比以前方便多了。
语法结构提示:结构:much + 比较级 + than | 词:convenient, before
The cellphone makes our life much more convenient than before.
手机是世界上最有用的发明之一。
语法结构提示:结构:one of + 最高级 + 名词复数 | 词:useful, inventions, world
The cellphone is one of the most useful inventions in the world.
背诵积累(二)中英文对照
Though the cellphone brings us much convenience, we should use it properly.
虽然手机带来很多便利,但我们应合理使用它。
The more we use it wisely, the better our life will become.
我们用得越明智,生活就越美好。
The more trees we plant, the fresher the air will be.
我们种的树越多,空气就越新鲜。
背诵闯关(二)看中文背英文
虽然手机带来很多便利,但我们应合理使用它。
语法结构提示:结构:though(不与but连用) | 词:convenience, properly
Though the cellphone brings us much convenience, we should use it properly.
我们用得越明智,生活就越美好。
语法结构提示:结构:The + 比较级, the + 比较级 | 词:wisely, better
The more we use it wisely, the better our life will become.
我们种的树越多,空气就越新鲜。
语法结构提示:结构:The + 比较级, the + 比较级 | 词:plant trees, fresh, air
The more trees we plant, the fresher the air will be.
Keep Writing, Keep Growing.
笔耕不辍,未来可期。下节课见!
仁爱版 · 九年级上册 · Unit 3 Great Ideas
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