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九年级英语 第一次月考Units 1—2 话题作文专练 人教版九年级上册 · 含命题依据对照、分层训练与评分标准 · 中考写作标准 Unit 1 The Changing World 写作专练 第1篇 Great Changes in My Hometown（基础篇） 【题目】校广播站“家乡新变化”栏目正在征稿。请你以 Great Changes in My Hometown 为题写一篇短文投稿。 【写作要点】 1. 家乡过去的样子； 1. 现在发生的变化（至少两点）； 1. 你的感受。 【参考范文】 My hometown is a small village in the north. Great changes have taken place here over the past ten years. In the past, the roads were narrow and rough, and sand often covered the track after a strong wind. My family used to live in a small house with dirt floors. There was no hospital and no bus. But now, a wide road has been built and a bus comes twice a day. My family has moved into a flat with a lift. Digital technology has made life so convenient that we can buy almost anything with a phone. These changes have greatly improved our life. I am proud of my hometown, and I believe it will achieve even greater miracles. 【范文点评】首段 Great changes have taken place here over the past ten years 一句点题并交代时间范围。第二段以 In the past ... But now ... 构成今昔对照，其中 were narrow、used to live 与 has been built、has moved 的时态对照是本题最关键的得分点。末段回应话题并落实要点三。全文 10 句、约 120 词，要点齐全、时态准确，可入第五档。 【本题给分点】①过去的样子：须用一般过去时或 used to do 写出至少两个具体细节，只写 Life was hard in the past 属要点不全。②现在的变化：须用现在完成时写出至少两条，并与①形成对照。③感受：须有明确的态度句。常见失分：通篇用一般现在时描述过去；现在完成时与一般过去时混用。 【本篇亮点】take place；used to do；so ... that ...；make + 宾语 + adj.；in the past 与 now 的对照 第2篇 A Letter to My Pen Pal（基础篇） 【题目】你的美国笔友 Peter 来信询问你的家乡近年来有什么变化。请你用英语给他写一封回信。 【写作要点】 1. 回应来信，点出家乡最大的一处变化； 1. 其他变化（至少一条）； 1. 邀请对方来访。 【参考范文】 Dear Peter, Thank you for your letter. You asked about my hometown, and I am glad to tell you that it has changed a lot. The biggest change is the railway. A new line was completed two years ago, and it now links our town with the port and the capital city. The journey takes only ninety minutes. There are other changes too. We can pay with e-payment even in a small shop, and my sister reads e-books on her phone. These changes have benefited everyone here. I hope you can come and see the changes for yourself one day. Yours, Li Hua 【范文点评】You asked about my hometown, and I am glad to tell you that ... 是回信类作文的固定起句，一句话同时完成格式要求与要点一。文中 has changed、was completed、has benefited 三个时态切换准确，说明写信人分得清“变化的结果”与“完成的时间点”。e-payment、e-books 两个教材新词把“变化”落到具体事物上，避免了通篇抽象表述。落款 Li Hua 与称呼 Dear Peter 完整，符合书信体要求。 【本题给分点】①书信格式（称呼、正文、落款）齐全，开头须回应来信；②至少两条变化，且须用现在完成时；③邀请须用 hope、would like 等委婉表达，只写 Welcome 不得分。常见失分：漏写落款；把“变化”全部写成一般过去时；只报流水账、没有回应来信的开头。 【本篇亮点】link ... with ...；thanks to；benefit；for oneself 第3篇 Changes in Transport（基础篇） 【题目】英语课上老师请大家谈谈家乡交通的变化。请你根据提示写一篇发言稿。 【写作要点】 1. 过去人们的出行方式； 1. 现在的出行方式； 1. 这些变化带来的影响。 【参考范文】 Hello, everyone. Today I would like to talk about the changes in transport in my hometown. In the past, people used to walk or ride bikes. There was only one bus a day, and it took a whole morning to reach the next town. The old railway line was narrow, and trains ran slowly on it. But now, a high-speed railway has been completed, and it takes only forty minutes to get to the capital city. Many families have bought their own cars, too. These changes have made travel much more convenient. We can now reach almost any place we like. Thank you for listening. 【范文点评】发言稿的三要素齐全：问候、正文、致谢。There was only one bus a day 与 a high-speed railway has been completed 形成数量与速度的双重对照，其中 was、ran 与 has been completed、have bought 的时态对照正是本单元的核心考点。结尾 These changes have made travel much more convenient 用 make 的复合结构收束要点三，比写成 Travel is convenient now 更显功力。 【本题给分点】①过去的方式：须用 used to do 或一般过去时；②现在的方式：至少两种，须用现在完成时；③影响：须用 make + 宾语 + adj. 等结构点出，只写交通变好了不得分。常见失分：忘写问候或致谢；通篇只说 bus 一种交通工具；影响句与前面内容重复。 【本篇亮点】It takes sb. some time to do sth.；make ... much more convenient；a whole morning 第4篇 The Most Beautiful Place in My Hometown（基础篇） 【题目】学校举办“最美家乡”摄影展，请你为自己的参展照片写一段英文配文。 【写作要点】 1. 这处地方的位置； 1. 它的样子和特点； 1. 你喜欢它的原因。 【参考范文】 The most beautiful place in my hometown is a small lake in the east of the town. The lake is not big, but the water is so clear that we can see fish swimming in it. Around the lake there is a wide track for walking, and tall trees stand on both sides. This place used to be a piece of waste land with dirt and stones everywhere. The villagers turned it into a lake five years ago, and they planted many trees around it. I like the lake because it is quiet and clean. It is the best place for me to relax and do my homework. 【范文点评】The lake is not big, but ... 用转折句开场，避免了“我是个湖，我又大又美”式的平铺。so ... that ... 把“水清”写具体，是拉开档次的句式。used to be a piece of waste land 与 The villagers turned it into a lake 补出这处地方自身的今昔变化，正面回应单元话题，也是最容易被阅卷老师注意到的加分点。 【本题给分点】①位置：须给出方位表达（in the east of 等），不能只写 my hometown；②样子和特点：至少两处景物描写，并含一处今昔对比；③原因：须与①②呼应，不能另起话头。常见失分：只写 beautiful、nice 等空泛形容词；方位写成 in my hometown 了事；缺少今昔对比这一单元要求。 【本篇亮点】in the east of；so ... that ...；turn ... into ...；the best place to do sth. 第5篇 Changes in My Family（提升篇） 【题目】英语课上，老师请同学们做一次口头报告，介绍自己家庭二十年来的变化。 【写作要点】 1. 二十年前家人的生活状况； 1. 现在的生活状况； 1. 你的感受和打算。 【参考范文】 My family has changed a lot over the past twenty years. In the past, my parents lived in a small village with my grandparents. They did not have a telephone or a computer, and they had to walk a long way to buy anything. My mother used to keep money in a box under the bed. But now, we live in a flat in the city. My parents manage a small shop, and they can pay and get paid with e-payment. My brother reads e-books on his phone every night. These changes have made our life much more convenient. I am thankful for what we have, and I will work hard to make my family even better. 【范文点评】全文用 a telephone or a computer 与 e-payment、e-books 构成具体的物件对照，比抽象的“生活变好”更容易得分。My mother used to keep money in a box under the bed 这一细节是全篇最生动的一笔，它把“变化”写成了可以看见的画面。结尾 I will work hard to make my family even better 把感受落到行动上，是本题区分第五档与第四档的关键。 【本题给分点】①二十年前：须具体到物件或行为，只写 life was hard 不得分；②现在：须与①一一对应，形成对照；③感受与打算：要分成两层，只有感受没有打算要扣内容分。常见失分：两段各说各话、缺少对应关系；打算句写成 I will study hard 与“家庭变化”脱节。 【本篇亮点】manage（经营、管理）；with e-payment；be thankful for；make ... even better 第6篇 Changes in My School（提升篇） 【题目】学校举办校园开放日，请你向外校同学介绍自己学校近年来的变化。 【写作要点】 1. 学校过去的样子； 1. 现在的新设施或新课程（至少两点）； 1. 你的感受。 【参考范文】 My school has changed a lot in recent years, and I would like to show you around. Ten years ago, there was only one building and no library. The playground was small, and we used to share three basketballs among forty students. But now, three new buildings have been completed. A big library has opened, and there is a modern science lab beside it. The school has also started more than twenty clubs, from woodwork to computer design. It is a great honour to study in such a school. I will try my best to achieve my dream. 【范文点评】I would like to show you around 一句话设定“开放日介绍”的情境，让全文有了明确的说者与听者。第二段最后一句 The school has also started more than twenty clubs 把视线从“硬件”转到“课程”，避免了三段都在列建筑。结尾用 it 作形式主语的句式写感受，与全文其余句子形成变化，避免“一逗到底”。 【本题给分点】①过去：须用过去时描述旧貌；②新设施或新课程：至少两处，须用现在完成时，且两类都要涉及；③感受：须换用与全文不同的句式。常见失分：新设施与课程只写一类；感受句写成 I like my school very much 的套话；介绍性文字配了议论性结尾。 【本篇亮点】show sb. around；used to do；It is + adj. + to do sth.；try one’s best 第7篇 Protecting the Environment in My Hometown（提升篇） 【题目】班会上同学们讨论家乡的环境问题。请你写一篇发言稿，指出问题并提出建议。 【写作要点】 1. 家乡环境存在的问题； 1. 你的建议（至少两条）； 1. 你的期望。 【参考范文】 Our hometown is becoming more and more beautiful, but there are still some problems. There is a shortage of clean water in some villages. The river is no longer as clean as it used to be, because some factories pour dirty water into it. After a sandstorm, a thick layer of dirt covers the crops, and the soil becomes poorer year by year. I think we should do something about it. First, we should support the farmers and plant more trees to hold the soil together. Second, we should sort the rubbish instead of throwing it everywhere. We can also ride bikes or walk instead of taking cars. If everyone plays a part, our hometown will be a better place to live in. 【范文点评】After a sandstorm, a thick layer of dirt covers the crops 把单元词汇 sandstorm、dirt、soil 串进同一个画面里，是“素材取自课本”的直接体现。The river is no longer as clean as it used to be 一句同时踩住“环境问题”与“今昔变化”两个话题词。两条建议用 First ... Second ... 分层，第三条用 We can also 补充，句式不重复。 【本题给分点】①问题：须具体到水、空气、土壤等某一项，笼统写 pollution is serious 属要点不全；②建议：至少两条，须使用不同句式，两条都是 we should 会显得单调；③期望：须回应话题、形成呼吁。常见失分：建议空泛（如 we should protect the environment）；期望句与前文重复；发言稿没有收束句。 【本篇亮点】no longer；not as ... as ...；instead of；play a part 第8篇 My Childhood Memory（挑战篇） 【题目】班级英文分享会上，同学们要分享一段自己的童年记忆。请你写一篇短文。 【写作要点】 1. 回忆发生的时间、地点和人物； 1. 事情的经过，至少含一个具体细节； 1. 把过去与现在作一处对比，并写出感受。 【参考范文】 When I was a child, I lived in a small village with my grandparents. The summer evenings there are still the warmest pictures in my mind. Every evening I ran along a dirt track to the river with my friends. We caught small fish with our hands and did not go home until it got dark. In autumn, we helped the villagers pick corn and lay it in the sun. My grandmother used to call me from the door, and her cooking always smelled wonderful. At that time we did not have a television or a phone, but we were never bored. Now I live in the city and life is much busier. Whenever I feel tired, those evenings come back to me and make me smile. 【范文点评】全文不靠形容词堆砌，而用 caught small fish with our hands、did not go home until it got dark、smelled wonderful 三个可感细节让画面站得住，这正是记叙文得高分的关键。At that time we did not have ... but we were never bored 用转折句自然带出今昔对比，扣住单元话题。Whenever I feel tired 用从句写出这段记忆对今天的影响，使回忆不止于“过去”，是挑战篇的加分点。 【本题给分点】①时间、地点、人物三要素齐全；②经过须有可感的细节（动作、声音、气味），只写 we were happy 不得分；③须有今昔对比，并有落在现在的感受。常见失分：通篇 I remember ... 的排比而无具体事件；对比句与回忆内容脱节；结尾停在“过去”，没有回到现在。 【本篇亮点】until；at that time；Whenever ...；make sb. smile 第9篇 Living in the City（挑战篇） 【题目】英语角讨论的话题是“住在大城市好不好”。请你写一段发言，说明自己的看法。 【写作要点】 1. 城市生活的优点； 1. 城市生活的缺点； 1. 你的看法。 【参考范文】 More and more people are moving to the city. In my opinion, living in the city has both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, the city is convenient. There are big shops, good schools and modern hospitals, and we can buy almost everything we need. Besides, there are more chances to experience a different life. On the other hand, the city is crowded and noisy. The streets are often dirty, and the air is not as clean as it is in the countryside. What is more, prices here are much higher, and it is not easy to manage your time well. As far as I am concerned, the city is a good place to work and study. However, we should not forget the peace of the countryside. 【范文点评】On the one hand ... On the other hand ... 让利弊两侧对称呈现，是本题最稳妥的结构。Besides 与 What is more 交替使用，避免通篇 firstly、secondly 的单调。In my opinion 与 As far as I am concerned 两个表态句分置首尾，第二次换用不同表达，正是“句式有变化”的直接体现，也是本题从第四档升到第五档的常见分水岭。 【本题给分点】①优点：至少两条；②缺点：至少两条，且与优点一一呼应，不能只写一边；③看法：须明确表态，只写 both good and bad、不给结论不得分。常见失分：优缺点条数悬殊；连接词只用 firstly、secondly；结尾用 in a word 之类的空话收束。 【本篇亮点】both advantages and disadvantages；On the one hand ... On the other hand ...；as far as I am concerned 第10篇 An Unforgettable Trip（挑战篇） 【题目】英语报“旅行故事”栏目正在征稿，请你写一篇短文，讲述一次难忘的旅行。 【写作要点】 1. 旅行的时间、地点； 1. 途中印象最深的一件事； 1. 你的感受。 【参考范文】 Last summer, I travelled to Xi’an with my parents by high-speed rail. It was one of the most unforgettable trips in my life. The journey took only four hours, while in the past the same trip took more than twenty hours on a slow train. In Xi’an we visited the City Wall and the Terracotta Warriors. What surprised me most was that modern buildings stand right next to the old city wall. Standing there, I felt as if the past and the present met in one place. I also learned a lot about the history of this ancient capital. This trip opened my eyes. I hope I can travel to more places and experience more in the future. 【范文点评】本篇与普通作文的差距就在要点二上：What surprised me most was that ... 把“现代楼与古城墙并立”这一件事单独拎出来，再用 felt as if the past and the present met in one place 写出反应，避免了“参观—好看—开心”的流水账。同时用 The journey took only four hours, while in the past ... 把旅途与单元“变化”话题连起来，使旅行类作文也扣得上单元主题。 【本题给分点】①时间、地点明确；②须写“一件事”，不能罗列景点，并要有个人反应（surprised、felt 等）；③感受须与②呼应，只写 I was happy 不得分。常见失分：把行程按天罗列；只有景物没有“我”；感受句与前文无关。 【本篇亮点】one of the most ... in one’s life；What surprised me most was that ...；as if；open one’s eyes 四、Unit 2 Inspiring People 写作专练 第1篇 The Person I Admire Most（基础篇） 【题目】校刊“人物专栏”正在征稿。请你介绍一位自己最敬佩的人。 【写作要点】 1. 是谁，什么身份； 1. 主要经历与贡献（至少两点）； 1. 你从他身上学到了什么。 【参考范文】 The person I admire most is Yuan Longping, one of the greatest scientists in China. Yuan was born in 1930. He studied science in college, and after he graduated, he spent his whole life on rice research. He worked in the fields for many years, even when he was old and weak. Thanks to his work, millions of hungry people now have enough food. People call him the Father of Hybrid Rice. It is important for us to learn from him. He taught me that we should work hard and never give up. 【范文点评】首句用同位语 one of the greatest scientists 一句完成要点一，比另起一句写 He is a scientist 更紧凑。第二段按 was born → studied → spent → worked 的时间线推进，符合人物介绍类作文的行文习惯。结尾 It is important for us to learn from him 用 it 作形式主语句式，正是本单元的核心语法，阅卷时属于立刻能加分的句式。 【本题给分点】①身份：须用同位语或定语从句补足，不能只写名字；②经历：至少两条，须按时间顺序排列；③收获：须落到具体品质，只写 he is great 不得分。常见失分：全篇堆砌伟大、令人敬佩等形容词而无事实；时间顺序混乱；收获句写成口号。 【本篇亮点】spend one’s whole life on sth.；thanks to；That is why ...；It is + adj. + for sb. to do sth. 第2篇 A Hero in My Heart（基础篇） 【题目】英语演讲比赛的主题是“我心中的英雄”。请你写一篇演讲稿。 【写作要点】 1. 你心中的英雄是谁； 1. 为什么（贡献与品质各一点）； 1. 你的决心。 【参考范文】 Hello, everyone. Today I would like to talk about a hero in my heart. Her name is Tu Youyou. Tu Youyou is a great medical scientist. She and her team studied traditional Chinese medicine and tested hundreds of them. Finally, they discovered artemisinin, a new medicine for malaria, which has saved millions of lives around the world. In 2015, she became the first Chinese woman to win the Nobel Prize in medicine. But she is very modest, and she says that her success belongs to her whole team. It is her courage and modesty that I admire most. I will study hard and try to help others, just like her. Thank you. 【范文点评】became the first Chinese woman to win ... 用 the first ... to do 结构写成就，信息密度高，句式也高于一般水平。But she is very modest 用转折把“贡献”转向“品质”，正好覆盖要点二的两层，是全文结构的支点。结尾用强调句点出所敬佩的品质，句式与全文其余句子都不重复，避免了“我爱英雄、英雄真伟大”的平铺结尾。 【本题给分点】①演讲稿须有称呼与致谢，缺一扣格式分；②贡献与品质都要写，只写贡献属要点不全；③决心要具体，写成 I will study hard 之外还须有可感的行为。常见失分：把演讲稿写成普通短文；用 drug、chemistry 等词时拼写错误；决心句与前文品质不对应。 【本篇亮点】be the first ... to do sth.；save lives；belong to；It is ... that ... 第3篇 My Role Model（基础篇） 【题目】英语课上，老师请同学们介绍自己身边的榜样。请你写一份口头报告稿。 【写作要点】 1. 榜样是谁； 1. 他/她的经历与品质； 1. 对你的影响。 【参考范文】 My role model is my grandmother. She is a kind and hard-working woman. Grandma has lived in a small village all her life. When she was young, her family was poor and she had few chances to study. But she never gave up. She worked in the fields from morning till night, brought up four children and treated everyone with respect. Now she is old, but she still gets up early and takes care of others. Grandma taught me to be honest and brave. Whenever I meet difficulties, I think of her, and I feel I can go on. 【范文点评】第二段用 was poor → never gave up → worked ... brought up four children → still gets up early 五个动作串起一生，用事实而不是形容词写品质，这是人物类作文最容易被漏掉的得分点。结尾 Whenever I meet difficulties ... I feel I can go on 用短句收束，比套话式结尾更有力。全文只有约 100 词，但人物立得住，适合作为基础篇的示范。 【本题给分点】①人物身份与关系明确；②须有具体经历支撑品质，只罗列 kind、hard-working 等形容词不得分；③影响要写“我”的变化，不能只说“我很感动”。常见失分：榜样写成名人却没有真实经历；形容词堆砌；结尾情绪化而无具体转变。 【本篇亮点】all one’s life；bring up；treat sb. with respect；Whenever ... 第4篇 The Power of Role Models（提升篇） 【题目】校报征文，话题是“榜样的力量”。请你写一篇短文。 【写作要点】 1. 榜样对我们的作用； 1. 举例说明（至少一例）； 1. 你打算怎么做。 【参考范文】 Everyone needs a role model. A good role model can give us power and hope, especially when we are in trouble. Take Yuan Longping as an example. He spent his whole life on rice research and never gave up, even when his experiments failed again and again. His spirit has encouraged millions of people to work hard. Tu Youyou is another example. She worked quietly for many years before she finally discovered artemisinin. As for me, role models teach me to be brave and patient. I will learn from them and keep trying. I believe that if we never give up, we can make a difference. 【范文点评】举例部分用 take ... as an example 与 ... is another example 两种说法连接两个人物，避免 for example 连用带来的单调。even when his experiments failed again and again 补出细节，使例子不空泛。结尾 I believe that if ... 用宾语从句写信念，句式上比 I think 高一个层级，也扣住了本单元句式要求。 【本题给分点】①作用：须写成“给人力量、指方向”等具体判断，不能只说 role models are important；②举例：至少一例，须有时间或行为细节；③打算：要与②中的人物品格呼应。常见失分：例子与论点无关；两个例子写成同一句话的重复；打算只写 I will study hard。 【本篇亮点】take ... as an example；even when；As for me；make a difference 第5篇 The Teacher Who Changed Me（提升篇） 【题目】学校举办“我最感谢的老师”征文活动。请你写一篇记叙文。 【写作要点】 1. 这位老师是谁； 1. 他/她做了什么（一件具体的事）； 1. 你的变化。 【参考范文】 Miss Wang was my English teacher in Grade Eight. She is the teacher who changed me most. Before that, I was afraid of English and often failed my exams. I never had the courage to open my mouth in class. Then one afternoon, Miss Wang asked me to read a short poem aloud. My voice was shaking, but she listened to the end and told me that my voice was beautiful. She asked me to try again the next day. From then on, she gave me a short passage every week and encouraged me to ask questions. Little by little, I stopped being afraid. Now I am one of the most confident students in my English class. It is Miss Wang that I want to thank most. 【范文点评】第三段用 asked me to read a poem aloud → listened to the end → told me that my voice was beautiful → gave me a passage every week 四件事的推进写出老师的做法，其中“老师说我的声音好听”这一句是全文最有力的细节。Little by little, I stopped being afraid 与开头的 was afraid of 首尾照应，把“变化”写得看得见，正是题目中 changed 一词所要求的。 【本题给分点】①交代时间与关系；②须是一件具体的事，只写 she helped me a lot 不得分；③变化要可验证（成绩、表现、态度），不能只写“我进步了”。常见失分：把“一件事”写成“她对我很好”的泛泛之谈；变化句与开头状态不对应；结尾又回到感谢老师的套话。 【本篇亮点】be afraid of doing sth.；have the courage to do sth.；From then on；Little by little 第6篇 An Inspiring Person Around Me（提升篇） 【题目】英语报征集“身边的感动”稿件。请你写一位身边令你敬佩的普通人。 【写作要点】 1. 这个人是谁，为什么值得敬佩； 1. 他/她做的令人敬佩的事； 1. 对你的影响。 【参考范文】 The person who inspires me most is not a famous scientist but a volunteer in my neighbourhood. Everyone calls him Uncle Chen. Uncle Chen is over sixty, but he gets up at five every morning to clean the small park near our building. He has done this for eight years without asking for anything. Last winter, when many people were ill, he stood at the gate every day and gave out masks to those who passed by. When someone asked why, he just smiled and said that if everyone gave a little, life would become easier. His words made me think. It is never too late to do something for others. Now I often help him on weekends. 【范文点评】开头用 not a famous scientist but a volunteer 作对比，一下把“英雄”落在身边人身上，避免与前几篇写名人的人物作文雷同。Last winter, when many people were ill 给出时间锚点，gave out masks to those who passed by 用定语从句写动作，简洁而准确。转述人物原话为间接引语，为文章提供了“人味”，也使第三段的议论有了依据。 【本题给分点】①点明身份，并说明为什么值得敬佩，不能只写 he is a good man；②事件要有时间、动作与话语，三样缺一；③影响要落到“我做了什么”。常见失分：人物身份模糊（a person in my neighbourhood）；事件没有时间；影响句只有感受没有行动。 【本篇亮点】not ... but ...；without doing sth.；give out；make sb. think 第7篇 Marie Curie — A Woman of Science（提升篇） 【题目】英语课上要介绍一位你敬佩的历史人物。请你写一篇人物介绍。 【写作要点】 1. 基本信息； 1. 主要成就与遇到的困难； 1. 你的评价。 【参考范文】 Marie Curie was one of the greatest scientists in history. She was born in Poland in 1867. Marie studied physics and chemistry in Paris when she was young. Life was hard then: she had little money, and she often went hungry in winter. But she never stopped her research. In 1898, she and her husband discovered radium. Later she won the Nobel Prize twice — once in physics and once in chemistry. She was the first person to win the prize in two different sciences. It is her courage and her effort that move me most. She showed us that a woman can also change the world. 【范文点评】Life was hard then: she had little money, and she often went hungry in winter 用冒号举例，把“困难”写实，与后面的成就形成张力——这是本篇区别于普通人物介绍的关键所在。once in physics and once in chemistry 用并列结构交代两次获奖，信息清楚而不啰嗦。结尾 that a woman can also change the world 用宾语从句收尾，扣住本单元句式，也把评价落到了实处。 【本题给分点】①生卒、国籍、身份齐全；②成就与困难都要写，只写成就属要点不全；③评价要有个人立场，不能只复述事实。常见失分：把生卒年份写错或漏写；只写“伟大”而不说具体成就；评价句与前面事实无关。 【本篇亮点】stop doing sth.；go hungry；once ... and once ...；show sb. that ... 第8篇 A Letter About My Hero（挑战篇） 【题目】你的英国笔友 Amy 来信，问你最敬佩的人是谁。请你写一封回信。 【写作要点】 1. 回应来信并点出人物； 1. 介绍他/她的事迹与品质； 1. 说明他/她对你的意义。 【参考范文】 Dear Amy, Thank you for your last letter. You asked me who I admire most, and the answer is my cousin. My cousin grew up in a poor village. When he was a child, he had to walk five kilometres to school every day, but he never complained. He studied hard and got into a famous university. Now he works as a doctor in his hometown, where he treats every patient with respect, and many old people come to him for help. It was not easy for him to give up a big city, but he did. Whenever I think of him, I feel I should work harder. He is the reason why I want to be a doctor, too. Yours, Li Hua 【范文点评】与前面几篇人物作文不同，本篇用 my cousin 这一“身边人”作为回信对象，避免了素材重复。had to walk five kilometres ... but he never complained → studied hard and got into ... → now he works as a doctor 的时间线清晰。It was not easy for him to give up a big city, but he did 用形式主语句式评价人物选择，是全文最漂亮的一句。结尾 He is the reason why ... 用定语从句把人物与“我”的选择连接起来，让回信有了收束。 【本题给分点】①书信格式完整并回应来信；②事迹按时间顺序，至少三点；③意义要与自己的选择挂钩。常见失分：格式残缺（漏落款或漏回应来信）；事迹罗列而无品质；意义句写成空泛的“他很伟大”。 【本篇亮点】grow up；get into a university；It is + adj. + for sb. to do sth.；the reason why 第9篇 What I Want to Be（挑战篇） 【题目】班会上，每位同学都要用英语谈谈自己将来想成为什么样的人。请你写一篇发言稿。 【写作要点】 1. 你想成为什么样的人； 1. 原因（由一位影响你的人引出）； 1. 你打算怎么做。 【参考范文】 Good morning, everyone. Today I want to talk about what I want to be. I want to be an English teacher, like Miss Wang. When I was in Grade Seven, I was the quietest student in my class and I could hardly say a word in English. Miss Wang never pushed me. Instead, she gave me easy questions and waited patiently. Her patience inspired me a lot. Thanks to her, I have fallen in love with English and become much more confident. I hope I can help more children learn and grow, just like her. To make my dream come true, I will read more books and practise speaking every day. I believe my dream will come true one day. Thank you. 【范文点评】Miss Wang never pushed me. Instead, she gave me easy questions and waited patiently. 用短句加 Instead 写老师的做法，比一个长句更清楚，也更有节奏感。Her patience inspired me a lot 与 Thanks to her 承上启下，自然引出“我”的选择。结尾用 To make my dream come true 作目的状语开头，句式与全文其余陈述句形成变化。 【本题给分点】①明确说出职业或身份，不能只写 a good person；②原因须由一位具体人物引出，只写 because it is interesting 不得分；③打算要有可执行的动作，至少两条。常见失分：原因与人物脱节；打算写成 I will work hard 的空话；演讲稿缺问候或致谢。 【本篇亮点】hardly；instead；fall in love with；make one’s dream come true 第10篇 A Speech: Never Give Up（挑战篇） 【题目】英语演讲比赛的主题是 Never Give Up。请你写一篇演讲稿。 【写作要点】 1. 提出观点； 1. 用一个具体人物的经历说明； 1. 号召大家付诸行动。 【参考范文】 Good morning, everyone. Today I want to talk about three small words: never give up. Let me tell you a true story. Yuan Longping spent more than ten years on hybrid rice. In those years his experiments failed again and again, and some people even said that his idea was impossible. But he did not stop, even after so many defeats. Every day he walked in the fields, took notes and tried once more. Finally, his rice fed millions of hungry people, and he became a pioneer in agriculture. So the next time you fail an exam or lose a match, remember his example. It is never too late to start again. Let us be brave enough to try one more time. Thank you. 【范文点评】全文只讲一个故事，但用 failed again and again → did not stop → walked, took notes, tried once more → fed millions of hungry people 四个动词短语把“失败—坚持—结果”写完整，符合演讲稿“一段一意”的要求。结尾 So the next time you fail an exam or lose a match 直接把听众代入情境，号召落到实处；It is never too late to ... 用 it 作形式主语句式收束，扣住本单元核心语法。 【本题给分点】①开头要亮出观点，不能先讲故事再点题；②故事须有“失败—坚持—结果”三部分，缺一不可；③号召要有具体对象和动作，只写 let us work hard 不得分。常见失分：故事讲成生平流水账；观点与故事不对应；结尾只有口号，没有可做的动作。 【本篇亮点】again and again；take notes；It is never too late to do sth.；be brave enough to do sth. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $