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读后续写 夯基赋能·直击高考
心理描写是展现故事中角色的性格品质、思想感情、动机和内在世界的一种写作手法。运用心理描写能够更深入地表现角色并引起共鸣。在读后续写中,人物心理描写是塑造角色、推动情节发展的关键之一。心理描写可以分为两类:直接描写和间接描写。
奠基续写高分表达——心理描写
从怯懦到战胜自我的体育蜕变之路
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1.直接描写是使用表示情绪的词汇直接袒露心理、表达情感。常见的直接描写的词汇:
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2.间接描写通过细节描写来表达心理活动,如动作、对话、场景、亮点词汇和语块、句型结构及修辞手法。常见结构及句式如下:
(1)with+表达情绪的抽象名词
*With great excitement, Lily rushed to the concert hall, her heart pounding fast.
莉莉非常兴奋地冲向音乐厅,她的心跳得很快。
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(2)“so...that...”及其部分倒装
*So worried were the parents that they couldn't sleep well at night, their minds filled with concerns about their child. 父母们如此担心,以至于他们晚上都睡不好觉,脑海里充满了对孩子的担忧。
(3)形容词作状语
*Well-prepared and confident, she walked into the stadium, ready to show her abilities.
她准备充分且自信地走进体育场,准备好了展示自己的能力。
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(4)无生命名词作主语:表达情绪的抽象名词+seized/possessed/captured/ruled/came over+sb.
*Fear seized him suddenly as he heard a strange noise in the dark room, which made his hair stand on end. 当他在黑暗的房间里听到奇怪的声音时,恐惧突然攫住了他,使他毛骨悚然。
(5)比喻
*Their acts of kindness were like warm rays of sunshine, melting the ice in the community as they helped those in need. 他们的善举如同温暖的阳光,在帮助那些有需要的人时,融化了社区的坚冰。
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阅读下面的材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
[1]Sports are about more than competitions. To me, they foster growth under the care of others. I only truly understood this after experiencing it myself.
[2]I used to be very shy and often felt lonely. Although I did well in all the academic subjects, I was afraid of physical education. That's because I was not good at sports. I was always slow on the track, and would freeze up whenever group games started.
重拳锤炼续写场景——驰文思•试锋芒
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[3]Moreover, whenever the teacher organized competitive games, I'd hang back, worried I'd let my team down. As a result, I often ended up standing on the sidelines, too nervous to join in. “I wish I could run as smoothly as you do,” I'd mumble to myself, watching my classmates move easily across the field.
[4]Things would go on like that if not for a sports meet in my high school. By mistake, my name was put on the list of those who would compete in the women's 1,500 meters race. By the time people found the mistake, it was too late to change.
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[5]One girl who was a natural athlete said to me, “I couldn't run that race in your place, because I've signed up for three items already. This time, you should run for yourself.” Other athletic girls of the class said the same, their eyes warm and earnest.
[6]I was utterly dumbfounded. 1,500 meters! Running against the best runners from other classes! And in front of students of the entire school! It would be the worst nightmare I'd ever go through! Oh, my god! Giving up is out of the question now. What should I do? I was lost in a dilemma.
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[7]Just at that time, my classmates noticed how awkward I was. “You still have time to catch up, because there is still one month before the sports meet.” They all said this to me, including my teacher.
[8]My deskmate, a careful girl, patted me on the shoulder. “Cool! You will run for our class! And we will do training together.”“Yes, this is not just for myself, but for my class too.” I said to myself. But still, 1,500 meters to me was like Mount Qomolangma to a beginning climber. I had no idea even how to start my preparation.
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
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Fortunately, my deskmate gave me a hand._____________ _______________
With the shot of the starting gun, I dashed out and ran as fast as I could, as if it were a 200-meter race.___________________________________
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[2]I used to be very __________ and often felt ____________. I was afraid of PE because I was not good at sports.
[3]Whenever the teacher organized competitive games, I'd ______________. I often _____________________.
[4]By mistake, my name was put on the list of _____________________
____________________________. By the time people found the mistake, it was too late to change.
一审——审情节
shy
lonely
hang back
stood on the sidelines
the women's 1,500 meters race
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[5]A natural athlete couldn't take my place because she _____________________________already.
[6]When I knew I had to run 1,500 meters, I was _______________________________ and lost in a dilemma.
[7]My classmates and teacher noticed my ______________ and encouraged me.
[8]My deskmate said she would ______________ with me. But I had no idea how to ______________ for the 1,500 meters race.
had signed up for three items
shocked/dumbfounded
awkwardness
train
prepare
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With the ______________of my deskmate, classmates and teacher, I made efforts to train, ____________________ myself and realized that sports foster ______________under the care of others.
二定——定主题:正能量原则
help
improved/challenged
growth
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根据第一段段首句可知,下文续写内容为:
[Question 1] What did the deskmate do to help the writer?
[Answer] ___________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
[Question 2] What's other classmates' reaction?
[Answer] ___________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________
[Question 3] What changes happened to the writer?
[Answer] ___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
三构思——构思每段三个微情节
She made a proper training schedule for the writer and accompanied the writer to practise every day.
Other classmates also accompanied the writer and encouraged her.
She became braver and more confident and gradually got used to long-distance running.
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根据第二段段首句可知,下文续写内容为:
[Question 1] What did the writer do after dashing out at first?
[Answer] __________________________________________________
[Question 2] What gave the writer strength during the race?
[Answer] ____________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________ [Question 3] What was the result of the race?
[Answer] ____________________________________________________
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She soon ran out of strength and wanted to give up halfway.
The warm cheers and sincere support from her classmates filled her with power.
The writer stuck to the end and finished the race, gaining precious courage and growth.
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特别关注语言协同: 模仿原文的亮点词汇、语法结构和亮点句型。
One possible version:
Fortunately, my deskmate gave me a hand. She worked out a proper training schedule for me. Every afternoon after class, she stayed to run with me patiently. She adjusted my running pace and taught me useful skills. Other classmates also came to keep me company and offered constant encouragement. Gradually, I threw away my timidity and kept pushing myself harder. Day by day, my physical strength improved greatly, and I no longer feared the tough long run. Then the moment of the race came.
四成文——梳理思路,完成正文
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With the shot of the starting gun, I dashed out and ran as fast as I could, as if it were a 200-meter race. Soon I felt exhausted and my legs ached badly. Just as I wanted to quit, warm cheers from my classmates echoed around the playground. Their sincere support lifted my spirits instantly. I held on firmly and kept moving forward steadily. Though I didn't win a prize, I finished the whole race successfully. I truly understood that not only are sports merely about competitions, but they also promote growth accompanied by love and care.
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