Unit 2 Success 人物传记（含学习地图）（单元同步写作讲义）高中英语北师大版选择性必修第一册

本高中英语讲义聚焦人物传记写作核心知识点，通过“明确主题任务—搭建叙事框架（开头引出人物与印象、主体梳理成长历程与关键抉择、结尾总结成功要素）—积累主题词汇句型—提供标准版与提升版模板—典例精练—评价表自查”的学习支架，构建从理解任务到独立写作的完整路径。 该资料特色在于紧扣单元“Success”主题，以创业者、科学家等五类分层练习实现语言能力迁移，通过梳理历程与提炼品质培养思维品质，评价表引导自评互评提升学习能力。课中辅助教师系统教学，课后助力学生自主查漏补缺，强化写作技能。

Unit 2 Success 人物传记（单元同步写作讲义）学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 Success · 成功者奋斗故事 人物传记（题干给定标题，无称呼落款） 80 词左右 讲述一位成功者的奋斗经历，梳理成长历程并总结成功要素 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 开头、发展、高潮、结尾 搭出完整叙事结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 描述人物、交代信息的常用句式 把人和事写得具体、连贯 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整简介 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练1 创业者奋斗历程 讲述创业者的成功故事 历程梳理、关键抉择、要素总结 练2 科学家科研坚守 呈现科学家坚守与突破 坚守叙事、突破时刻、品质提炼 练3 运动员重返巅峰 讲述运动员逆袭故事 低谷刻画、复出过程、精神总结 练4 家人勤劳改变生活 记录家庭奋斗史 岁月叙述、奋斗细节、敬意表达 练5 作家笔耕不辍 讲述作家成长故事 成长历程、代表作诞生、启示提炼 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 2 Success 人物传记（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题： Success；奋斗与成功、人生价值 应用文体裁： 人物传记（人生故事） 写作任务： 撰写短文讲述一位成功者的奋斗经历，梳理其成长历程并总结成功要素。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 标题（1行） 按题干使用已给标题，居中书写。 开头（1—2句） 引出成功者，点明人物身份与总体印象。 主体（4—5句） 梳理成长历程与关键抉择；时态对比：叙述经历用一般过去时，呈现现状与影响用一般现在时；善用非谓语动词使叙事紧凑。 结尾（1—2句） 总结成功要素，表达感悟与启示。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 persistent adj. 坚持的；执意的 描写不肯放弃的品质 determined adj. 坚定的，坚决的 突出意志坚定 optimistic adj. 乐观的，乐观主义的 描写面对逆境的心态 committed adj. 坚定的；尽心尽力的 说明对事业的投入 ambitious adj. 有抱负的，有雄心的 点明志向远大 outstanding adj. 杰出的，优秀的 评价人物成就 countless adj. 无数的，数不尽的 渲染经历的艰辛 ultimate adj. 最后的，最终的 指向最终目标 injury n. 伤，损害 交代人生低谷 element n. 基本部分；要素 总结成功要素 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 devote oneself to 致力于；献身于 强调长期投入事业 strive for 努力争取；奋斗 描写为目标拼搏 boil down to 归结为；要点是 收束成功要素 set sb apart 使与众不同 突出人物的过人之处 apply oneself to 努力；专心致志于某事 描写专注做事的状态 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. She is ________(乐观的) and always believes tomorrow will be better. 2. He set a big goal for his career because he is ________(有雄心的). 3. ________(无数的) nights of hard work finally paid off. 4. A serious ________(伤) once stopped her from training. 5. Honesty is an important ________(要素) of a good reputation. 句子翻译 1. 正是多年的坚持使他与众不同。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 面对困难，他全身心投入自己的事业，从不抱怨。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 他的成功归根结底源于自律和乐观的心态。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 四、写作句型 开头句 1. Among all the successful people I know, _______ impresses me most.（在比较中引出人物） 2. _______, a determined and hardworking _______, is a role model for us all.（同位语点明身份与品质） 3. Behind _______’s success lies a story of persistent effort.（倒装句引出奋斗故事） 中间句 1. Born in _______, he/she grew up in a _______ family.（过去分词开头交代出身） 2. In _______, he/she started _______, hoping to _______.（现在分词作状语补充目的） 3. Faced with countless difficulties, he/she never thought of giving up.（过去分词作状语写逆境） 4. After years of persistent effort, he/she finally _______, which _______.（时态对比收束经历） 结尾句 1. His/Her story tells me that success boils down to persistence and hard work. 2. It is his/her devotion and determination that set him/her apart.（强调句总结品质） 3. Inspired by his/her story, I will apply myself to my own dream.（非谓语开头表达行动） 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______（标题，按题干书写） Among all the successful people I know, _______(人物) impresses me most. He/She is _______(品质印象). _______(时间), he/she started _______(起步经历). He/She worked very hard every day. Though he/she met many difficulties, he/she didn't lose heart. Gradually, _______(成果). His/Her story tells me that success comes from hard work and a hopeful heart. 模板2：分层高分版 _______（标题，按题干书写） Among all the successful people I know, _______(人物) impresses me most. He/She is _______(品质印象), always ready to face challenges. _______(时间), he/she started _______(起步经历). Full of hope, he/she was ambitious and determined to succeed. He/She devoted himself/herself to his/her work every day, _______(奋斗细节，用 doing 结构). Although he/she was faced with countless difficulties, he/she never stopped. Step by step, _______(成果与现状). His/Her story convinces me that success belongs to those who strive until they achieve their ultimate goal. 六、典例精练 你校英文报正在开展“成功的故事”主题征文。请你以 “A Story of Success” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述你熟悉的一位成功者的奋斗经历，梳理其成长历程并总结成功要素。 写作要点： 1. 点明人物身份与总体印象。 2. 梳理其成长历程与关键经历。 3. 总结成功要素并表达感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Story of Success ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 七、拓展练习 练习1：讲述一位创业者的奋斗历程与成功要素（人与社会-商业人物） 你校英文报正在开展“身边的成功者”主题征文。请你以 “A Successful Entrepreneur” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位创业者的奋斗历程与成功要素。 写作要点： 1. 点明创业者身份与总体印象。 2. 梳理创业历程，描写关键抉择。 3. 总结成功要素并表达感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Successful Entrepreneur ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习2：讲述一位科学家长年坚守科研终获突破的人生故事（人与社会-科学家） 你校英文报正在开展“科学人生”主题征文。请你以 “A Story of Perseverance” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位科学家长年坚守科研终获突破的人生故事。 写作要点： 1. 点明科学家身份与总体印象。 2. 叙述长年坚守与突破时刻。 3. 提炼成功品质并表达敬意。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Story of Perseverance ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习3：讲述一位运动员从伤病重返巅峰的人生故事（人与社会-体育名人） 你校英文报正在开展“体育人生”主题征文。请你以 “Back to the Top” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位运动员从伤病重返巅峰的人生故事。 写作要点： 1. 交代运动员身份与伤病低谷。 2. 描写复出训练的过程。 3. 总结体育精神并表达感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Back to the Top ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习4：讲述家人中一位靠勤劳改变生活的奋斗故事（人与自我-勤劳） 你校英文报正在开展“家庭奋斗史”主题征文。请你以 “The Power of Diligence” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述家人中一位靠勤劳改变生活的奋斗故事。 写作要点： 1. 点明家人身份与生活背景。 2. 叙述勤劳奋斗的细节与生活变化。 3. 表达敬意与感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 The Power of Diligence ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习5：讲述一位作家笔耕不辍的成长故事（人与社会-文学家） 你校英文报正在开展“文学人生”主题征文。请你以 “A Life with Words” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位作家笔耕不辍的成长故事。 写作要点： 1. 点明作家身份与成长起点。 2. 叙述笔耕不辍与代表作诞生的历程。 3. 总结成功启示。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Life with Words ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 标题、开头、主体、结尾安排合理，段落层次清楚。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 覆盖成长历程和成功要素，叙事具体完整。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能运用非谓语动词和时态对比，准确使用本单元核心词汇。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 格式规范，段落清楚，拼写、大小写和标点正确。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价结构、内容、语言和书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分15分；13—15优秀；10—12达标；7—9需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 2 Success 人物传记（单元同步写作讲义）学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 Success · 成功者奋斗故事 人物传记（题干给定标题，无称呼落款） 80 词左右 讲述一位成功者的奋斗经历，梳理成长历程并总结成功要素 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 开头、发展、高潮、结尾 搭出完整叙事结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 描述人物、交代信息的常用句式 把人和事写得具体、连贯 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整简介 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练1 创业者奋斗历程 讲述创业者的成功故事 历程梳理、关键抉择、要素总结 练2 科学家科研坚守 呈现科学家坚守与突破 坚守叙事、突破时刻、品质提炼 练3 运动员重返巅峰 讲述运动员逆袭故事 低谷刻画、复出过程、精神总结 练4 家人勤劳改变生活 记录家庭奋斗史 岁月叙述、奋斗细节、敬意表达 练5 作家笔耕不辍 讲述作家成长故事 成长历程、代表作诞生、启示提炼 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 2 Success 人物传记（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题： Success；奋斗与成功、人生价值 应用文体裁： 人物传记（人生故事） 写作任务： 撰写短文讲述一位成功者的奋斗经历，梳理其成长历程并总结成功要素。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 标题（1行） 按题干使用已给标题，居中书写。 开头（1—2句） 引出成功者，点明人物身份与总体印象。 主体（4—5句） 梳理成长历程与关键抉择；时态对比：叙述经历用一般过去时，呈现现状与影响用一般现在时；善用非谓语动词使叙事紧凑。 结尾（1—2句） 总结成功要素，表达感悟与启示。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 persistent adj. 坚持的；执意的 描写不肯放弃的品质 determined adj. 坚定的，坚决的 突出意志坚定 optimistic adj. 乐观的，乐观主义的 描写面对逆境的心态 committed adj. 坚定的；尽心尽力的 说明对事业的投入 ambitious adj. 有抱负的，有雄心的 点明志向远大 outstanding adj. 杰出的，优秀的 评价人物成就 countless adj. 无数的，数不尽的 渲染经历的艰辛 ultimate adj. 最后的，最终的 指向最终目标 injury n. 伤，损害 交代人生低谷 element n. 基本部分；要素 总结成功要素 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 devote oneself to 致力于；献身于 强调长期投入事业 strive for 努力争取；奋斗 描写为目标拼搏 boil down to 归结为；要点是 收束成功要素 set sb apart 使与众不同 突出人物的过人之处 apply oneself to 努力；专心致志于某事 描写专注做事的状态 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. She is ________(乐观的) and always believes tomorrow will be better. 2. He set a big goal for his career because he is ________(有雄心的). 3. ________(无数的) nights of hard work finally paid off. 4. A serious ________(伤) once stopped her from training. 5. Honesty is an important ________(要素) of a good reputation. 【答案】 1. optimistic 【解析】be 动词后接形容词作表语，optimistic 表示“乐观的”，与后文 believes tomorrow will be better 呼应。 2. ambitious 【解析】be ambitious 表示“有雄心的”，because 引导的原因状语从句说明设定大目标的原因。 3. Countless 【解析】countless 修饰 nights，表示“无数个”，句首首字母大写。 4. injury 【解析】a serious injury 表示“一次重伤”，作主语。 5. element 【解析】an important element 表示“一个重要要素”，of a good reputation 作后置定语。 句子翻译 1. 正是多年的坚持使他与众不同。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 面对困难，他全身心投入自己的事业，从不抱怨。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 他的成功归根结底源于自律和乐观的心态。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 1. It is years of persistence that set him apart. 【解析】强调句 It is...that... 突出 years of persistence；set sb apart 表示“使与众不同”。 2. Faced with difficulties, he devoted himself to his career without complaint. 【解析】过去分词短语 Faced with difficulties 作状语；devote oneself to 表示“全身心投入”。 3. His success boils down to self-discipline and an optimistic attitude. 【解析】boil down to 表示“归结为”，用于结尾总结成功要素。 四、写作句型 开头句 1. Among all the successful people I know, _______ impresses me most.（在比较中引出人物） 2. _______, a determined and hardworking _______, is a role model for us all.（同位语点明身份与品质） 3. Behind _______’s success lies a story of persistent effort.（倒装句引出奋斗故事） 中间句 1. Born in _______, he/she grew up in a _______ family.（过去分词开头交代出身） 2. In _______, he/she started _______, hoping to _______.（现在分词作状语补充目的） 3. Faced with countless difficulties, he/she never thought of giving up.（过去分词作状语写逆境） 4. After years of persistent effort, he/she finally _______, which _______.（时态对比收束经历） 结尾句 1. His/Her story tells me that success boils down to persistence and hard work. 2. It is his/her devotion and determination that set him/her apart.（强调句总结品质） 3. Inspired by his/her story, I will apply myself to my own dream.（非谓语开头表达行动） 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______（标题，按题干书写） Among all the successful people I know, _______(人物) impresses me most. He/She is _______(品质印象). _______(时间), he/she started _______(起步经历). He/She worked very hard every day. Though he/she met many difficulties, he/she didn't lose heart. Gradually, _______(成果). His/Her story tells me that success comes from hard work and a hopeful heart. 模板2：分层高分版 _______（标题，按题干书写） Among all the successful people I know, _______(人物) impresses me most. He/She is _______(品质印象), always ready to face challenges. _______(时间), he/she started _______(起步经历). Full of hope, he/she was ambitious and determined to succeed. He/She devoted himself/herself to his/her work every day, _______(奋斗细节，用 doing 结构). Although he/she was faced with countless difficulties, he/she never stopped. Step by step, _______(成果与现状). His/Her story convinces me that success belongs to those who strive until they achieve their ultimate goal. 六、典例精练 你校英文报正在开展“成功的故事”主题征文。请你以 “A Story of Success” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述你熟悉的一位成功者的奋斗经历，梳理其成长历程并总结成功要素。 写作要点： 1. 点明人物身份与总体印象。 2. 梳理其成长历程与关键经历。 3. 总结成功要素并表达感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Story of Success ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作指导 第一步 审题谋篇 体裁是人物传记（人生故事），题干已给标题，无书信称呼与落款，标题居中书写。读者是校英文报读者，目的是讲述成功者的奋斗经历并总结成功要素。时态对比：叙述成长历程以一般过去时为主，说明现状与影响用一般现在时；善用非谓语动词（现在分词作状语、过去分词作状语）使叙事紧凑；以第三人称为主；语气真挚、有感染力。布局为“标题—引出人物—奋斗历程—成功要素与感悟”。 第二步 要点拆解与表达 中文要点 英文表达 句式说明 引出人物与总体印象 Among all the successful people I know, Uncle Li impresses me most. among 短语开篇，点明比较范围。 梳理起步经历 Ten years ago, he started a small noodle shop with little money. 一般过去时叙述起步，with 短语交代起点之低。 描写奋斗细节 Working from dawn to midnight, he devoted himself to his small shop. 现在分词作状语，叙事紧凑有力。 总结成功要素 His story tells me that success comes from persistence and a hopeful heart. 主语+宾语从句总结启示，点明成功要素。 第三步 句式升级 原句 升级句 仿写句 说明 He worked very hard. Working from dawn to midnight, he devoted himself to his small shop. Working deep into the night, she prepared every detail of the contest. 用现在分词作状语，叙事更紧凑。 When he met difficulties, he didn't give up. Faced with countless difficulties, he never thought of giving up. Faced with heavy pressure, she stayed calm and confident. 用过去分词作状语，突出逆境中的坚持。 After many years, he succeeded. After ten years of persistent effort, he achieved his ultimate goal. After months of training, she reclaimed her championship. 时态对比+时间状语，收束有力。 第四步 同义替换 普通表达 升级表达 使用场景 work hard devote oneself to work 强调长期投入 meet difficulties be faced with difficulties 被动结构叙述困境更客观 not give up never think of giving up 否定式表达更显坚定 be successful achieve one's goal 动词化表达更有力 the reason for success the key element of success 名词化表达更正式 参考范文 基础版范文 A Story of Success Among all the successful people I know, Uncle Li impresses me most. He is a hardworking and optimistic restaurant owner. Ten years ago, he started a small noodle shop with little money. He worked very hard every day, preparing food from dawn to midnight. Though he met many difficulties, he didn't lose heart. Little by little, his shop became famous for its tasty noodles. His story tells me that success comes from hard work and a hopeful heart. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 worked very hard devoted himself to his work 突出长期投入与专注 had a strong wish to succeed was ambitious and determined to succeed 点明志向与决心 met many difficulties was faced with countless difficulties 被动结构渲染困境之大 didn't lose heart remained optimistic in the darkest days 突出逆境中的乐观心态 succeeded at last achieve their ultimate goal 动词化表达收束更有力 提高版范文 A Story of Success Among all the successful people I know, Uncle Li impresses me most. He is a hardworking and optimistic restaurant owner. Ten years ago, he started a small noodle shop with little money. Full of hope, he was ambitious and determined to succeed. He devoted himself to his work every day, preparing food from dawn to midnight. Although he was faced with countless difficulties, he remained optimistic in the darkest days. Step by step, his shop won a growing number of loyal customers. His story convinces me that success belongs to those who strive until they achieve their ultimate goal. 七、拓展练习 练习1：讲述一位创业者的奋斗历程与成功要素（人与社会-商业人物） 你校英文报正在开展“身边的成功者”主题征文。请你以 “A Successful Entrepreneur” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位创业者的奋斗历程与成功要素。 写作要点： 1. 点明创业者身份与总体印象。 2. 梳理创业历程，描写关键抉择。 3. 总结成功要素并表达感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Successful Entrepreneur ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于人物传记短文，题干已给标题，无称呼与落款，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：先点明创业者身份与印象；再梳理起步、坚持与突破的历程；最后总结成功要素。 3. 结构：引出人物；创业历程与关键抉择；成功要素与感悟。 4. 表达：叙述经历用一般过去时，呈现现状用一般现在时；用分词状语压缩叙事，体现非谓语动词与时态对比。 基础版范文 A Successful Entrepreneur Liu Wei is a young entrepreneur admired by many people in my hometown. He is brave and hardworking. After graduating from college, he started his own business in a small office. At first, he had little money and few customers. He worked day and night to improve his products. Gradually, his company grew stronger and won many loyal customers. He often says that every difficulty makes him stronger. His story tells me that a clear goal and hard work lead to success. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 started his own business launched a business of his own 用词更正式有力 had little money was faced with a shortage of funds 被动结构客观呈现困境 worked day and night buried himself in work day and night 突出全身心投入 improve his products constantly polishing his products 非谓语结构叙事紧凑 won many loyal customers earned the trust of countless customers 强调信任积累更显分量 提高版范文 A Successful Entrepreneur Liu Wei is a young entrepreneur admired by many people in my hometown. He is brave and hardworking. After graduating from college, he launched a business of his own in a small office. At first, he was faced with a shortage of funds and had few customers. However, he buried himself in work day and night, constantly polishing his products until they stood out in the market. Gradually, his company grew stronger and earned the trust of countless customers. His story convinces me that a burning ambition, plus persistent effort, is the real key to success. 练习2：讲述一位科学家长年坚守科研终获突破的人生故事（人与社会-科学家） 你校英文报正在开展“科学人生”主题征文。请你以 “A Story of Perseverance” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位科学家长年坚守科研终获突破的人生故事。 写作要点： 1. 点明科学家身份与总体印象。 2. 叙述长年坚守与突破时刻。 3. 提炼成功品质并表达敬意。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Story of Perseverance ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于人物传记短文，题干已给标题，无称呼与落款，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：先点明科学家身份；再叙述二十年坚守与最后突破；最后提炼品质表达敬意。 3. 结构：引出人物；坚守岁月与突破时刻；品质提炼与感悟。 4. 表达：长年坚守用现在完成时与一般过去时对比；突破时刻用一般过去时收束；用分词状语增强叙事张力。 基础版范文 A Story of Perseverance Dr Chen is a scientist working on new rice types. He is quiet but determined. For twenty years, he spent most of his time in the fields, watching and recording his plants. Sometimes he stayed there from morning till night. His experiments failed many times, but he kept on trying. Last year, he finally developed a new rice type that grows well in dry areas. His story tells me that real success comes from years of quiet hard work. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 spent most of his time in the fields devoted most of his time to field research 突出对科研的奉献 failed many times was met with repeated failures 被动结构强调挫折之频繁 kept on trying persisted in his experiments 用词更精准彰显毅力 finally developed eventually achieved a breakthrough in 突出突破的里程碑意义 real success comes from years of quiet hard work success is rooted in long-term devotion and self-discipline 归因更深邃、更有哲思 提高版范文 A Story of Perseverance Dr Chen is a scientist working on new rice types. He is quiet but determined. For twenty years, he devoted most of his time to field research, watching and recording his plants from morning till night. Although he was met with repeated failures, he persisted in his experiments with firm faith. Last year, he eventually achieved a breakthrough in rice breeding, developing a new type that grows well in dry areas, which brings hope to local farmers. His story convinces me that success is rooted in long-term devotion and self-discipline. 练习3：讲述一位运动员从伤病重返巅峰的人生故事（人与社会-体育名人） 你校英文报正在开展“体育人生”主题征文。请你以 “Back to the Top” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位运动员从伤病重返巅峰的人生故事。 写作要点： 1. 交代运动员身份与伤病低谷。 2. 描写复出训练的过程。 3. 总结体育精神并表达感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Back to the Top ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于人物传记短文，题干已给标题，无称呼与落款，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：先交代身份与伤病低谷；再刻画复出训练与夺冠时刻；最后总结体育精神。 3. 结构：引出人物与低谷；复出过程；巅峰时刻与感悟。 4. 表达：伤病叙述用一般过去时，回归巅峰用具体时间状语收束；用被动语态和非谓语动词刻画低谷与复出。 基础版范文 Back to the Top Lin Yue is a runner in our provincial team. She is brave and never afraid of challenges. Two years ago, a serious injury forced her to stop training. Many people thought her career was over, but she didn't give up. Day after day, she rebuilt her strength in the gym. Last season, she won the national championship and returned to the top. Her story tells me that strong will can carry us through hard times. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 forced her to stop training kept her away from the track 具象呈现远离赛场的低谷 didn't give up refused to bow to fate 突出不向命运低头的姿态 rebuilt her strength in the gym threw herself back into intense training 强调复出的拼劲与强度 won the national championship reclaimed the national championship title reclaim 点明“重回”巅峰 strong will can carry us through hard times it is determination that lifts us back to the top 强调句收束更有力量 提高版范文 Back to the Top Lin Yue is a runner in our provincial team. She is brave and never afraid of challenges. Two years ago, a serious injury kept her away from the track. Many people thought her career was over, but she refused to bow to fate. Day after day, she threw herself back into intense training. Meanwhile, she adjusted her diet and daily schedule with great discipline. Last season, she reclaimed the national championship title and stood on the top podium again. Her story convinces me that it is determination that lifts us back to the top. 练习4：讲述家人中一位靠勤劳改变生活的奋斗故事（人与自我-勤劳） 你校英文报正在开展“家庭奋斗史”主题征文。请你以 “The Power of Diligence” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述家人中一位靠勤劳改变生活的奋斗故事。 写作要点： 1. 点明家人身份与生活背景。 2. 叙述勤劳奋斗的细节与生活变化。 3. 表达敬意与感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 The Power of Diligence ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于人物传记短文，题干已给标题，无称呼与落款，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：先点明父亲身份与家境背景；再叙述勤劳细节与生活变化；最后表达敬意。 3. 结构：引出人物；奋斗岁月与生活转变；敬意与感悟。 4. 表达：过去与现在用时态对比；用动词不定式表目的、分词状语写细节，突出勤劳主题。 基础版范文 The Power of Diligence My father is an ordinary worker, but he is a successful man in my heart. He is honest and hardworking. Twenty years ago, our family was poor. He got up early every day and often worked late into the night. To make our life better, he learned new skills after work and used every free minute wisely. Little by little, he became a skilled technician, and our life changed greatly. His story tells me that diligence can change one's life. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 learned new skills after work kept improving himself after work 突出持续自我提升 used every free minute wisely made the most of every minute 强调珍惜光阴的程度 became a skilled technician grew into an outstanding technician 呈现渐进成长过程 our life changed greatly our life took on a new look 描摹变化更生动 diligence can change one's life hard work is the true ladder to a better life 比喻式总结更具感染力 提高版范文 The Power of Diligence My father is an ordinary worker, but he is a successful man in my heart. He is honest and hardworking. Twenty years ago, our family was poor. He got up early every day and often worked late into the night. To make our life better, he kept improving himself after work and made the most of every minute. Little by little, he grew into an outstanding technician, and our life took on a new look. His story convinces me that hard work is the true ladder to a better life. 练习5：讲述一位作家笔耕不辍的成长故事（人与社会-文学家） 你校英文报正在开展“文学人生”主题征文。请你以 “A Life with Words” 为题写一篇人物传记短文，讲述一位作家笔耕不辍的成长故事。 写作要点： 1. 点明作家身份与成长起点。 2. 叙述笔耕不辍与代表作诞生的历程。 3. 总结成功启示。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Life with Words ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于人物传记短文，题干已给标题，无称呼与落款，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：先点明作家身份与文学起点；再叙述屡遭退稿仍坚持写作与代表作诞生；最后总结启示。 3. 结构：引出人物；坚持与突破；启示与感悟。 4. 表达：童年起点用一般过去时，代表作诞生用时间状语收束；让步状语从句和分词状语刻画坚持。 基础版范文 A Life with Words Mr Wang is a writer in our city. He is gentle and full of wisdom. As a child, he fell in love with reading and dreamed of writing his own stories. When his first book was refused by many publishers, he didn't stop writing. He read more, wrote more and improved himself day by day. Ten years later, his novel came out and became a great success. His story tells me that success belongs to those who hold on to their dreams. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 fell in love with reading developed a deep love for words 突出与文字的深厚情缘 was refused by many publishers was rejected by countless publishers 用词更精准、渲染更充分 didn't stop writing stuck to his pen regardless of rejection 具象化“笔耕不辍” became a great success finally saw his masterpiece in print 点明代表作问世的里程碑感 success belongs to those who hold on to their dreams success boils down to never giving up on one's dream 归因式总结更凝练有力 提高版范文 A Life with Words Mr Wang is a writer in our city. He is gentle and full of wisdom. As a child, he developed a deep love for words and dreamed of writing his own stories. He read widely and filled notebooks with his thoughts. When his first book was rejected by countless publishers, he stuck to his pen regardless of rejection, reading and writing to sharpen his skills. Ten years later, he finally saw his masterpiece in print, which touched thousands of readers. His story convinces me that success boils down to never giving up on one's dream. 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 标题、开头、主体、结尾安排合理，段落层次清楚。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 覆盖成长历程和成功要素，叙事具体完整。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能运用非谓语动词和时态对比，准确使用本单元核心词汇。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 格式规范，段落清楚，拼写、大小写和标点正确。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价结构、内容、语言和书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分15分；13—15优秀；10—12达标；7—9需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $