Unit 4 Great people（单元同步写作讲义）英语新教材冀教版九年级上册

本讲义聚焦“伟人”主题写作，核心认知为伟大不只属于名人，平凡人亦可成为英雄，评判关键在于贡献、品质及鼓舞他人。写作涵盖人物介绍与观点论述两类，核心要点包括伟人共同品质（奉献、坚持等）及时态使用（过去时述生平、现在时评品质），并通过分类词汇（核心名词、品质形容词等）、功能句式（开篇、叙述、评价等）、佳句仿写构建从素材积累到篇章写作的学习支架。 该资料特色在于素材系统实用，分类词汇与功能句式夯实语言能力基础，典例（如袁隆平介绍）与多样实战任务（科学家、传统匠人等写作）结合，培养思维品质（如观点论述中的价值判断）和学习能力（仿写与实战提升自主表达）。课中辅助教师系统教学，课后助力学生通过实战任务巩固，查漏补缺，提升写作综合能力。

Unit 4 Great people 单元同步写作讲义 本单元主题为伟人，核心认知：伟大不只属于知名名人，平凡人同样可以成为英雄。评判伟大的关键，是为社会作出贡献、拥有可贵品质，并且能够鼓舞他人。 写作可分为两类：一是人物介绍，介绍你敬佩的伟人；二是观点论述，讨论何为伟大、普通人能否成为英雄。 写作核心要点：不同伟人领域、时代各不相同，但共同特点是奉献、坚持、勇敢、无私。写人物介绍时，叙述事迹之外，必须点明人物品质与个人感悟；时态注意，叙述人物生平多用一般过去时，评价精神品质用一般现在时。 词汇积累 1 / 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 1. 核心名词 hero 英雄；伟人 contribution 贡献 quality 品质，素质 society 社会 achievement 成就，功绩 spirit 精神 courage 勇气 creativity 创造力 2. 品质形容词 hard-working 勤奋的 selfless 无私的 brave 勇敢的 devoted 甘于奉献的 gifted 有天赋的 modest 谦虚低调的 determined 意志坚定的 ordinary 普通的 3. 动词与短语 admire sb. 钦佩某人 devote oneself to (doing) sth. 献身于；致力于做某事 spare no effort to do sth. 不遗余力做某事 make contributions to… 为…… 做出贡献 inspire sb. to do sth. 激励某人做某事 differ from 与…… 不同 give up 放弃 face difficulties 面对困难 句式积累 开篇引入 When we talk about great people, … always comes to my mind. 当我们谈论伟人时，我总会想起…… My hero is …, who has many valuable qualities. 我的英雄是……，他拥有许多可贵的品质。 I really admire … because of his great spirit. 我十分敬佩……，因为他崇高的精神。 叙述事迹 He devoted himself to his work and made great contributions to society. 他投身于自己的事业，为社会做出巨大贡献。 He spared no effort to fight against difficulties and finally achieved his goal. 他不遗余力地克服困难，最终实现了目标。 During his lifetime, he kept working hard and never gave up. 在他的一生中，他坚持努力，永不放弃。 评价人物 Great people differ in many ways, but they have one thing in common. 伟人各有不同，但他们有一个共同点。 What makes him great is his courage, hard work and selflessness. 让他变得伟大的是他的勇气、勤奋与无私。 Ordinary people can also be heroes if they are ready to help others. 普通人只要愿意帮助他人，也可以成为英雄。 段落过渡 Besides his amazing achievements, his spirit touches me most. 除了惊人的成就，他的精神最打动我。 Although he met plenty of failures, he still held on to his dream. 尽管遭遇很多失败，他依然坚守梦想。 结尾感悟升华 His spirit inspires me to keep trying when I meet trouble. 他的精神激励我遇到困难时继续努力。 I will learn from him and try my best to become a helpful person. 我会向他学习，努力做一个有用的人。 We should learn from great people and pass on their good spirit. 我们应当向伟人学习，传承他们美好的精神。 佳句仿写 1. 原句：He devoted himself to his work and made great contributions to society.他投身于自己的事业，为社会做出巨大贡献。 仿写：她致力于帮助残障人士，为世界做出巨大贡献。 _________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 原句：My hero is …, who has many valuable qualities.我的英雄是……，他拥有许多可贵的品质。 仿写：我的英雄是白求恩，他拥有许多可贵的品质。 _________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 原句：Although he met plenty of failures, he still held on to his dream.尽管遭遇很多失败，他依然坚守梦想。 仿写：尽管遇到重重困难，她依然坚守自己的梦想。 _________________________________________________________________________________ 典例 英雄是榜样，能够给予我们力量和勇气，让我们相信自己能够成为更好的自己。请根据以下内容提示，介绍你心目中的英雄——袁隆平。 内容提示： 1. 他是世界上最伟大的科学家之一，他在2019年获得了共和国勋章。 2.  年轻时，他看到许多中国人挨饿，所以梦想培育更好的水稻。1953年获得学位，然后开始工作。起初3000多次实验失败了。但他意志坚强，无论发生什么，他都不放弃。最后他培育出新型水稻，包括一种比普通水稻增产30%的水稻。 3. 你对他的评价。 提示词：共和国勋章 the Medal of the Republic 注意：1. 词数：80左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 文中不能出现真实的学生姓名及班级。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （一） 某英文报社正在进行主题为“My favourite scientist”的征文活动。请你根据下面提示，写一篇80—100词左右的英文短文，介绍一下你最喜欢的科学家袁隆平，并给报社投稿。 Year of birth 1930 Birthplace Beijing Study in Southwest Agricultural University in 1950 Contribution (贡献) made a special study of rice in 1964; developed a new kind of rice in 1974 Awards (奖项) the World Food Prize Comment the “Father of Hybrid Rice” Yuan Longping is my favourite agricultural scientist. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ In a word, we should learn from his hard work and never give up. （二） 请根据以下提示，写一篇80词左右的短文，介绍一位你敬佩的国际人物（可以是本课学到的Norman Bethune，也可以选择其他人物）。 提示： 1. 这位人物是谁？他/她来自哪里？ 2. 他/她做了什么让人们敬佩的事情？ 3. 你从他/她身上学到了什么？ 要求： • 语言通顺，逻辑清晰； • 至少使用一个before/after/when/while引导的时间状语从句； • 不少于80词。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （三） 假如你是李华，你所在的英语俱乐部正在举办“我与传统工艺有个约会”的主题活动，每位成员要用英语介绍一种传统工艺或是一位传统匠人。请你用英语写一篇80—100词的短文，向大家介绍旗袍匠人——梁玉华。 内容包括：生于1951年；来自天津；20岁开始学做旗袍；为了守护和传承这门技艺，她广收学徒，并在网上开课。旗袍制作需要200多个步骤，包括选布料、剪布料等等。 参考词汇：career 事业 effort 努力 qipao 旗袍 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （四） 我们学校即将迎来百年校庆，学校公众号已经分享了多名优秀校友的事迹， 婺剧演员陈美兰就是其中之一。广播站正在举办以“The Person I Take Pride in”为题的征文活动。请根据表格内容，写一篇文章，用于投稿。 要求: (1) 表格内容仅供参考，条理清晰，语意通顺，语法正确，可适当发挥； (2) 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息； (3) 词数80-100(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。 The Person I Take Pride in Among the excellent alumni of our school, Chen Meilan is the one I take pride in. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （五） 平凡铸就伟大。在现实生活中，很多普通人坚守岗位，默默奉献，成为我们心中的英雄。请你以“The Hero in My Heart”为题写一篇短文。 要点： 1. 介绍你心中的平凡英雄(职业、人物)； 2. 列举他/她的具体事迹； 3. 谈谈你的感悟与向他/她学习的打算。 要求：词数90‑110，行文连贯，逻辑清晰。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （六） 在我们的生活中有很多值得敬佩的英雄，他可以是名人，也可以是身边平凡的普通人。请以My Hero为题写一篇短文。 要点： 1. 你的英雄是谁； 2. 他/她的事迹； 3. 你从他/她身上学到什么。 要求：80词左右，语句通顺，语法正确。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $Unit 4 Great people 单元同步写作讲义 本单元主题为伟人，核心认知：伟大不只属于知名名人，平凡人同样可以成为英雄。评判伟大的关键，是为社会作出贡献、拥有可贵品质，并且能够鼓舞他人。 写作可分为两类：一是人物介绍，介绍你敬佩的伟人；二是观点论述，讨论何为伟大、普通人能否成为英雄。 写作核心要点：不同伟人领域、时代各不相同，但共同特点是奉献、坚持、勇敢、无私。写人物介绍时，叙述事迹之外，必须点明人物品质与个人感悟；时态注意，叙述人物生平多用一般过去时，评价精神品质用一般现在时。 词汇积累 1 / 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 1. 核心名词 hero 英雄；伟人 contribution 贡献 quality 品质，素质 society 社会 achievement 成就，功绩 spirit 精神 courage 勇气 creativity 创造力 2. 品质形容词 hard-working 勤奋的 selfless 无私的 brave 勇敢的 devoted 甘于奉献的 gifted 有天赋的 modest 谦虚低调的 determined 意志坚定的 ordinary 普通的 3. 动词与短语 admire sb. 钦佩某人 devote oneself to (doing) sth. 献身于；致力于做某事 spare no effort to do sth. 不遗余力做某事 make contributions to… 为…… 做出贡献 inspire sb. to do sth. 激励某人做某事 differ from 与…… 不同 give up 放弃 face difficulties 面对困难 句式积累 开篇引入 When we talk about great people, … always comes to my mind. 当我们谈论伟人时，我总会想起…… My hero is …, who has many valuable qualities. 我的英雄是……，他拥有许多可贵的品质。 I really admire … because of his great spirit. 我十分敬佩……，因为他崇高的精神。 叙述事迹 He devoted himself to his work and made great contributions to society. 他投身于自己的事业，为社会做出巨大贡献。 He spared no effort to fight against difficulties and finally achieved his goal. 他不遗余力地克服困难，最终实现了目标。 During his lifetime, he kept working hard and never gave up. 在他的一生中，他坚持努力，永不放弃。 评价人物 Great people differ in many ways, but they have one thing in common. 伟人各有不同，但他们有一个共同点。 What makes him great is his courage, hard work and selflessness. 让他变得伟大的是他的勇气、勤奋与无私。 Ordinary people can also be heroes if they are ready to help others. 普通人只要愿意帮助他人，也可以成为英雄。 段落过渡 Besides his amazing achievements, his spirit touches me most. 除了惊人的成就，他的精神最打动我。 Although he met plenty of failures, he still held on to his dream. 尽管遭遇很多失败，他依然坚守梦想。 结尾感悟升华 His spirit inspires me to keep trying when I meet trouble. 他的精神激励我遇到困难时继续努力。 I will learn from him and try my best to become a helpful person. 我会向他学习，努力做一个有用的人。 We should learn from great people and pass on their good spirit. 我们应当向伟人学习，传承他们美好的精神。 佳句仿写 1. 原句：He devoted himself to his work and made great contributions to society.他投身于自己的事业，为社会做出巨大贡献。 仿写：她致力于帮助残障人士，为世界做出巨大贡献。 __________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 原句：My hero is …, who has many valuable qualities.我的英雄是……，他拥有许多可贵的品质。 仿写：我的英雄是白求恩，他拥有许多可贵的品质。 __________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 原句：Although he met plenty of failures, he still held on to his dream.尽管遭遇很多失败，他依然坚守梦想。 仿写：尽管遇到重重困难，她依然坚守自己的梦想。 __________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 1. She devoted herself to helping disabled people and made great contributions to the world. 2.My hero is Bethune, who has many valuable qualities. 3. Although she met lots of difficulties, she still held on to her dream. 典例 英雄是榜样，能够给予我们力量和勇气，让我们相信自己能够成为更好的自己。请根据以下内容提示，介绍你心目中的英雄——袁隆平。 内容提示： 1. 他是世界上最伟大的科学家之一，他在2019年获得了共和国勋章。 2.  年轻时，他看到许多中国人挨饿，所以梦想培育更好的水稻。1953年获得学位，然后开始工作。起初3000多次实验失败了。但他意志坚强，无论发生什么，他都不放弃。最后他培育出新型水稻，包括一种比普通水稻增产30%的水稻。 3. 你对他的评价。 提示词：共和国勋章 the Medal of the Republic 注意：1. 词数：80左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 文中不能出现真实的学生姓名及班级。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 审题 确定文体：记叙文，用 一般过去时和一般现在时为主 明确要点： 身份与荣誉；成长与奋斗经历；个人对英雄的评价 确定人称： 第三人称 注意事项： 80词左右，不能出现真实的学生姓名及班级 谋篇布局 开头段：点明袁隆平是“我”心目中的英雄，并概括其杰出身份和所获荣誉 主体段：按照时间顺序讲述他从立志、求学到最终成功的艰难过程   结尾段：对袁隆平的评价         佳作展示     Yuan Longping is my hero. He is one of the greatest scientists in the world. He received the Medal of the Republic in 2019.     When he was young, he saw many Chinese people go hungry, so he dreamed of developing better rice. He got his degree in 1953 and began to work. At first, over 3,000 experiments failed. However, he was strong-minded and never gave up. Finally, he developed new rice, including one type with 30% higher production.     In my opinion, he is a great man. We should learn from him. 佳作赏析 亮点词汇： scientist 科学家receive 获得；收到medal 奖章，勋章develop 研发；培育experiment 实验fail 失败 strong-minded 意志坚定的give up 放弃production 产量；产出 高分句型： 1.He is one of the greatest scientists in the world.他是世界上最伟大的科学家之一。 2.When he was young, he saw many Chinese people go hungry, so he dreamed of developing better rice.年轻时，他看到很多中国人挨饿，于是他梦想培育出更优良的水稻。 3.At first, over 3,000 experiments failed. However, he was strong-minded and never gave up.起初，3000 多次实验都失败了。然而，他意志坚定，永不放弃。 4.Finally, he developed new rice, including one type with 30% higher production.最终，他培育出新型水稻，其中一种产量提高了 30%。 5.In my opinion, he is a great man. We should learn from him.在我看来，他是一位伟人。我们应该向他学习。 （一） 某英文报社正在进行主题为“My favourite scientist”的征文活动。请你根据下面提示，写一篇80—100词左右的英文短文，介绍一下你最喜欢的科学家袁隆平，并给报社投稿。 Year of birth 1930 Birthplace Beijing Study in Southwest Agricultural University in 1950 Contribution (贡献) made a special study of rice in 1964; developed a new kind of rice in 1974 Awards (奖项) the World Food Prize Comment the “Father of Hybrid Rice” Yuan Longping is my favourite agricultural scientist. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ In a word, we should learn from his hard work and never give up. 【答案】例文 Yuan Longping is my favourite agricultural scientist. He was born in Beijing in 1930. In 1950, he studied in Southwest Agricultural University. He worked hard on farming all his life. In 1964, he started to study rice. After ten years of hard work, he finally developed a new kind of high-yield rice in 1974. Thanks to him, many people have enough food. His work helps the world. He won the World Food Prize. People call him the “Father of Hybrid Rice”. He is really a great hero in my heart. In a word, we should learn from his hard work and never give up. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：记叙文，以一般过去时为主 明确要点：出生年份与地点；学历背景；主要贡献；获得奖项；称号与评价；个人感悟 确定人称：第三人称（he/his） 注意事项：词数80—100；不得出现真实信息 [第二步：构思布局] 开头段：点明最喜欢的是袁隆平及其身份，介绍出生信息（1930年、北京）和学习经历（1950年西南农业大学） 主体段：按时间顺序介绍研究贡献（1964年研究水稻、1974年培育新品种）及成就（帮助全球解决粮食问题） 结尾段：介绍获奖、称号，表达敬佩和学习决心 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：人物身份与出生信息 人物身份：favourite agricultural scientist/favourite scientist/favourite agricultural expert等 出生时间：born in Beijing in 1930/was born in 1930/born in the capital city等 学习经历：studied in Southwest Agricultural University/went to Southwest Agricultural University/studied agriculture at university等 要点二：主要贡献与影响 研究贡献：worked hard on farming/devoted himself to farming/spent his whole life on farming等 研究水稻：started to study rice/began his research on rice/focused on rice studies等 培育新品种：developed a new kind of rice/created a new type of rice/produced a better rice等 全球影响：many people have enough food/helped feed many people/helped solve food problems等 要点三：荣誉与评价 获奖：won the World Food Prize/received the World Food Prize/got the World Food Prize等 称号：called the “Father of Hybrid Rice”/known as the “Father of Hybrid Rice”/named “Father of Hybrid Rice”等 个人评价：a great hero in my heart/a great scientist/my hero等 要点四：学习与感悟 学习精神：learn from his great spirit/learn from his hard work/follow his example等 决心表达：never give up/stick to our dreams/keep working hard等 （二） 请根据以下提示，写一篇80词左右的短文，介绍一位你敬佩的国际人物（可以是本课学到的Norman Bethune，也可以选择其他人物）。 提示： 1. 这位人物是谁？他/她来自哪里？ 2. 他/她做了什么让人们敬佩的事情？ 3. 你从他/她身上学到了什么？ 要求： • 语言通顺，逻辑清晰； • 至少使用一个before/after/when/while引导的时间状语从句； • 不少于80词。 _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考范文 The international hero I admire most is Norman Bethune. He was a Canadian doctor who came to China to help during the war. Before he came to China, he was already a famous doctor in Canada. After he arrived in northern China, he organized hospitals and trained many doctors and nurses. He worked tirelessly in difficult conditions and once operated for sixty-nine hours without stopping. He showed great courage and selflessness. I have learned from Bethune that true greatness means helping others without thinking about oneself. He will be remembered by people forever. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：介绍类记叙文，叙述事迹以一般过去时为主，表达个人感悟用一般现在时 明确要点：人物基础介绍、令人敬佩的事迹、个人收获与感悟 确定人称：以第三人称（he/she）介绍人物事迹，用第一人称（I/My）表达个人感悟 注意事项：必须使用至少一个由 before/after/when/while 引导的时间状语从句 [第二步：构思布局] 三段式结构： 开头段：开篇点题，点明自己最敬佩的国际人物，补充其国籍与身份 主体段：具体叙述人物的核心事迹，自然融入要求的时间状语从句 结尾段：提炼人物的精神品质，抒发个人感悟，说明从人物身上学到的道理 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：人物基础介绍 人物选择：The international hero I admire most is… 身份描述：a Canadian doctor/a great scientist/a peace fighter 国籍背景：come from…/be born in… 要点二：令人敬佩的事迹 事迹铺垫：用before引导从句，如Before he came to China, he was already a famous doctor in Canada. 核心事迹：用after引导从句，如After he arrived in northern China, he organized hospitals and trained many doctors and nurses. 拓展补充：worked tirelessly/saved many lives/never cared about his own safety 要点三：个人收获与感悟 精神品质：selflessness/courage/spirit of international friendship/devotion 个人收获：learn to help others without thinking of ourselves/understand the true meaning of kindness 结尾升华：be remembered by people forever/set a great example for us （三） 假如你是李华，你所在的英语俱乐部正在举办“我与传统工艺有个约会”的主题活动，每位成员要用英语介绍一种传统工艺或是一位传统匠人。请你用英语写一篇80—100词的短文，向大家介绍旗袍匠人——梁玉华。 内容包括：生于1951年；来自天津；20岁开始学做旗袍；为了守护和传承这门技艺，她广收学徒，并在网上开课。旗袍制作需要200多个步骤，包括选布料、剪布料等等。 参考词汇：career 事业 effort 努力 qipao 旗袍 _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考范文 Liang Yuhua is a great qipao maker. She was born in Tianjin in 1951. She began to learn to make qipao at the age of 20. There are more than 200 steps in making a qipao, such as choosing and cutting cloth. It’s not an easy job to do. To keep and pass on this traditional skill, she takes many students and gives online lessons. She puts lots of effort into her career. Her hard work helps more people know about beautiful qipaos. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：介绍性记叙文，以一般现在时为主，一般过去时为辅 明确要点：围绕主人公（梁玉华）展开，介绍其个人信息，包括出生年份、出生地、何时开始学做旗袍、旗袍制作的步骤、为了守护和传承旗袍制作技艺所做出的努力等 确定人称：第三人称 注意事项：必须包括所给的全部提示要点，可适当发挥 [第二步：构思布局] 开头段：介绍梁玉华的个人基础信息——出生年份、出生地、何时开始学做旗袍 主体段：围绕“旗袍”展开，旗袍制作的步骤、为了守护和传承旗袍制作技艺所做出的努力；讲述这些付出所带来的影响 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：基本信息与学艺经历 姓名：Liang Yuhua/a great qipao maker等 出生：born in Tianjin in 1951/was born in 1951 in Tianjin等 学艺：began to learn to make qipao at the age of 20/started learning qipao-making when she was 20等 要点二：制作步骤与技艺特点 步骤数：more than 200 steps/over 200 steps等 具体步骤：choosing and cutting cloth/selecting cloth, cutting patterns and sewing等 难度：not an easy job to do/requires great skill and patience等 要点三：传承方式与评价 传承：takes many students and gives online lessons/teaches apprentices and offers online courses等 目的：keep and pass on this traditional skill/preserve and spread this traditional art等 评价：puts lots of effort into her career/devotes herself to her work等 影响：helps more people know about beautiful qipaos/introduces more people to the beauty of qipao等 （四） 我们学校即将迎来百年校庆，学校公众号已经分享了多名优秀校友的事迹， 婺剧演员陈美兰就是其中之一。广播站正在举办以“The Person I Take Pride in”为题的征文活动。请根据表格内容，写一篇文章，用于投稿。 要求: (1) 表格内容仅供参考，条理清晰，语意通顺，语法正确，可适当发挥； (2) 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息； (3) 词数80-100(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。 The Person I Take Pride in Among the excellent alumni of our school, Chen Meilan is the one I take pride in. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 The Person I Take Pride in Among the excellent alumni of our school, Chen Meilan is the one I take pride in. She is a Wu Opera actress. She was born in 1964. In 1980, she joined the Zhejiang Wu Opera Troupe. She practiced day and night and never gave up. She won the 6th Plum Blossom Performance Award because of her excellent performance in 1989. She is always hard-working. Her stories encourage me a lot not only in study but also in my life. Whenever I face difficulties in my studies, I’ll think of her, and keep trying. I will be a persistent and brave person like her. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：记叙文，以一般现在时和一般过去时为主 明确要点：介绍人物陈美兰（婺剧演员）生平经历、品质以及对“我”的影响 确定人称：第三人称(she) + 第一人称(I) 注意事项：不得出现真实人名、校名等相关信息；词数80-100 [第二步：构思布局] 三段式结构： 开头段：点题，引出“我”引以为傲的校友陈美兰 主体段：介绍生平经历、优秀品质以及带来的影响 结尾段：表达决心，升华主题 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：人物生平经历 出生年份：was born in 1964/grew up loving Wu Opera/started learning opera young 加入剧团：joined the Zhejiang Wu Opera Troupe/began professional training/practiced day and night 获得奖项：won the 6th Plum Blossom Performance Award/gained wide recognition/achieved great success 性格品质：is always hard-working/never gave up/kept persistent all the time 要点二：人物影响与“我”的感悟 精神鼓励：encourage me a lot/inspire me to stick to my goals/teach me the value of persistence 面对困难：face difficulties in my studies/keep trying/never lose heart/move forward bravely 自我决心：be a persistent and brave person like her/follow her example/hold on to my dreams （五） 平凡铸就伟大。在现实生活中，很多普通人坚守岗位，默默奉献，成为我们心中的英雄。请你以“The Hero in My Heart”为题写一篇短文。 要点： 1. 介绍你心中的平凡英雄(职业、人物)； 2. 列举他/她的具体事迹； 3. 谈谈你的感悟与向他/她学习的打算。 要求：词数90‑110，行文连贯，逻辑清晰。 _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 The Hero in My Heart In my heart, my hero is a very kind street cleaner. He keeps our city clean every day. He gets up very early every morning. No matter it is windy or rainy, he appears on the street. He collects rubbish and sweeps roads carefully. He does the simple work again and again, though few people notice him. Ordinary people can also be heroes. His spirit of devotion touches me. I decide to respect workers like him. And I will try my best to do small good things for our society. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：介绍性记叙文，以一般现在时为主 明确要点：介绍心中平凡英雄（职业、人物）；列举具体事迹；谈感悟与学习打算 确定人称：第一人称（I/my） 注意事项：词数控制90-110词，行文连贯，不透露真实个人信息 [第二步：构思布局] 三段式结构： 开头段：点明心中英雄是谁以及职业 主体段：描述英雄的日常与具体事迹 结尾段：抒发感悟，表明向他/她学习的打算 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：介绍心中平凡英雄 人物职业选择：street cleaner/teacher/nurse等 人物介绍：kind/warm-hearted/nice等 要点二：列举具体事迹 日常行为：collects rubbish/sweeps roads/cleans streets/tidies up等 环境条件：windy/rainy/snowy/foggy等 细节描述：does the simple work again and again等 要点三：感悟与学习打算 感悟：Ordinary people can also be heroes/They are common but great in their own way/Great power hides in ordinary people等 学习打算：try my best to do small good things/plan to do little helpful things/keep doing small good things等 （六） 在我们的生活中有很多值得敬佩的英雄，他可以是名人，也可以是身边平凡的普通人。请以My Hero为题写一篇短文。 要点： 1. 你的英雄是谁； 2. 他/她的事迹； 3. 你从他/她身上学到什么。 要求：80词左右，语句通顺，语法正确。 _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考范文 My Hero My hero is Yuan Longping. He was a great agriculturist. He spent most of his life developing hybrid rice. His research helped lots of people around the world get enough food. He also had many hobbies in his free time, such as listening to music and swimming. He worked hard until he was very old. I learn a lot from him. I will study hard and try my best to help other people in the bright future. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：记叙文，主体时态为一般过去时（介绍袁隆平）+ 一般现在时（我的感悟） 明确要点：①介绍英雄是袁隆平；②介绍他的身份、事迹；③介绍他的爱好；④表达我的收获与决心 确定人称：第三人称（he/his）+ 第一人称（I/my） 注意事项：词数控制在80词左右，语句通顺，语法准确 [第二步：构思布局] 三段式结构： 开头段：总起，点明我的英雄是袁隆平，介绍他的身份 主体段：讲述他的贡献与业余爱好 结尾段：写我从他身上学到的品质以及未来的打算 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：开篇总述（介绍人物） hero/Yuan Longping/great agriculturist/national hero/respect 要点二：人物事迹与爱好 spend most life developing hybrid rice/help people get enough food/have hobbies/listen to music/swim/work hard/devote…to…/save millions of lives/persistent 要点三：个人感悟 learn a lot from him/study hard/try my best to help others/in the bright future/spirit/set a good example/achieve dreams $