内容正文:
Unit 2 Inspiring People 单元主题写作讲练
目录
· 单元主题写作讲解
全面解析单元主题,明确写作任务。
根据具体的写作任务,确定文章框架。
给出与写作任务相关的素材。
通过范文赏析,进一步理解写作的要点和方法。
· 单元主题写作练习
通过写作练习,在具体的语境中运用写作素材,练习写作方法和技巧,提高写作能力。
单元主题写作讲解
一、单元主题与写作任务解读
1. 单元主题解析
本单元贯穿始终的核心议题是——"什么样的人值得敬佩?他们的哪些品质和精神能够激励我们?"
教材通过钟杨(种子科学家)、墨子(思想家)、贝聿铭(建筑师)、王亚平(航天员)、袁隆平(科学家)、法拉第(科学家)、司马迁(史学家)、居里夫人(科学家)等多组人物素材,向学生传递了以下三个层层递进的核心理念——“各行各业都有激励人心的人物”、“激励人心的人物都拥有一些优秀品质”以及“普通人也可以成为激励人心的人”。
2. 结合单元主题,分析写作任务
(1)明确本次的写作任务:
本单元要求学生在阅读关于墨子的在线帖子后,完成图表填写,然后探究本单元中的一位人物或任何其他你觉得激励人心的人,介绍你敬佩的激励人心的人物,说明他/她是谁、做了什么、为什么激励人心。
(2)结合单元主题,阐述写作要点和审题要点:
本次写作任务要求学生从"认识激励人心的人物"出发,运用单元所学的描述人物品质的词汇和句型,介绍一位杰出人物(可以是历史名人、当代英雄或身边的普通人),分析其优秀品质,并阐述其对自己或对世界的激励意义。
审题和写作要点
具体说明
题材
描写文/说明文——在线帖子(online post),介绍一位激励人心的人物
选准角度
选择一位你真正敬佩的人物,可来自本单元(如钟杨、墨子、贝聿铭、王亚平、袁隆平等)或自己了解的其他人(如身边的长辈、老师、朋友等)
内容完整
介绍人物身份、描述其主要事迹或成就、分析其激励人心的品质、阐述对自己的影响或启发
条理清晰
按"人物介绍→事迹描述→品质分析→影响感悟"的逻辑展开
时态准确
描述人物的基本信息和普遍事实用一般现在时;描述过去的事迹和成就用一般过去时;阐述对自己的影响可用一般现在时或现在完成时
语言要求
运用单元所学的描述人物品质的词汇(如creative, brave, inspiring, full of courage等)和句型(It was ... of/for ... to ... / It was ... that ...等),以及that引导的宾语从句
格式要求
在线帖子格式,开头可有标题或引言,结尾可有总结或感悟
核心内容
人物身份(Who)+ 事迹成就(What he/she did)+ 品质分析(What qualities he/she showed)+ 激励意义(Why he/she inspires me)
二、写作框架指导
介绍"我敬佩的激励人心的人物"建议采用 "四段式"结构:
第一段:开头——引出人物,简要介绍(1-2句)
用一句话引出你要介绍的人物,点明他/她的身份和为什么值得关注。
核心句式:
To me, one of the most inspiring people is ...(对我来说,最激励人心的人之一是……。)
I would like to introduce ... who is ...(我想介绍……,他/她是……。)
... is a person that I truly admire.(……是我真正敬佩的人。)
Among all the great people I know, ... inspires me the most.(在我所认识的所有伟大人物中,……最激励我。)
I have always looked up to ... because ...(我一直敬佩……,因为……。)
第二段:正文1——描述人物的事迹和成就(3-4句)
介绍这个人做了什么、取得了什么成就。需要具体、真实的信息,可以通过具体事例来展示。
核心句式:
... is best known for ...(……以……而闻名。)
... spent his/her whole life ...(……花费了他/她的一生……。)
... was the first woman/person to ...(……是第一个……的女性/人。)
... developed/invented/created ... and helped ...(……发明/创造了……并帮助了……。)
... did research on ... and made great discoveries.(……做了关于……的研究并取得了重大发现。)
It was very difficult for ... to ..., but he/she never gave up.(对……来说……很难,但他/她从未放弃。)
第三段:正文2——分析人物的品质,阐述为什么激励人心(2-3句)
从人物的行为和成就中提炼出他/她的优秀品质,并解释这些品质为什么对你或对世界有意义。
核心句式:
What makes ... inspiring is that ...(使……激励人心的原因是……。)
... was full of ... and ...(……充满了……和……。)
It was really ... of ... to ...(……做……真的很……。)
... showed great ... and taught us that ...(……展现了极大的……,并教会我们……。)
I admire ... because he/she not only ... but also ...(我敬佩……,因为他/她不仅……而且……。)
His/Her love for ... lives on in ...(他/她对……的热爱在……中延续。)
第四段:结尾——总结感悟,点明对自己的影响(1-2句)
总结这个人对你的启发或影响,呼应单元主题。
核心句式:
... is a great inspiration to me.(……对我来说是极大的激励。)
I think ... is still a great inspiration to many people.(我认为……仍然是许多人的巨大激励。)
I hope that I can learn from ... and become a better person.(我希望我能向……学习,成为一个更好的人。)
... shows us the way forward.(……为我们指明了前进的方向。)
Stories like this give us power and inspiration.(这样的故事给予我们力量和激励。)
三、语言素材积累
(1)与写作主题相关的词汇:
inspiring 激励人心的 admirable 令人敬佩的 creative 有创造力的
brave / courageous 勇敢的 wise 有智慧的 modest 谦虚的
patient 耐心的 hard-working 勤奋的 confident 自信的
responsible 负责任的 kind / kind-hearted 善良的 selfless 无私的
determined 坚定的 curious 充满好奇心的 energetic 精力充沛的
amazing 令人惊叹的 great 伟大的 courage 勇气
wisdom 智慧 curiosity 好奇心
(2)与写作主题相关的短语:
look up to 敬佩,仰慕 dream big 有远大梦想
never give up 永不放弃 come true 实现
live on 继续存在,流传 be known for 以……闻名
spend one's life doing 花费一生做某事 be full of 充满
brave the difficulties 勇敢面对困难 show great courage 展现出极大的勇气
make great discoveries 取得重大发现 do research on 做关于……的研究
teach a live class 上直播课 walk in space 太空漫步
pioneer of ... ……的先驱 above all 最重要的是
bring back valuable information 带回宝贵信息 build relationships 建立关系
for all of these reasons 基于以上所有理由
(3)与写作主题相关的句型(含本单元语法重点)
(1)It作形式主语的句型(描述人物品质和评价)
It was great of Yuan Longping to develop a new kind of rice.(袁隆平培育了新型水稻,真是太伟大了。)
It was amazing that Marie Curie won two Nobel Prizes.(居里夫人获得了两次诺贝尔奖,真是令人惊叹。)
It was very difficult for Zhong Yang to brave the cold weather.(对钟杨来说,勇敢面对寒冷天气非常困难。)
It was really brave of Victor Hugo to stand up for the common people.(维克多·雨果为普通人挺身而出,真的很勇敢。)
It is important for us to learn from great people.(向伟人学习对我们来说很重要。)
It is always inspiring to read about great people and learn from their stories.(阅读伟人的故事并向他们学习,总是很激励人心。)
It was creative of I.M. Pei to design the glass pyramid at the Louvre Museum.(贝聿铭设计了卢浮宫的玻璃金字塔,真有创造力。)
It is really nice of my father to support and encourage me.(我的父亲支持和鼓励我,真是太好了。)
(2)描述人物品质的句型
... was full of courage and wisdom.(……充满了勇气和智慧。)
... showed a deep love for and a curiosity about the things he studied.(……对他研究的事物表现出深深的热爱和好奇心。)
... never forgot his task and never gave up.(……从未忘记自己的使命,从未放弃。)
... is a person that I truly admire.(……是我真正敬佩的人。)
What makes ... inspiring is that ...(使……激励人心的原因是……。)
(3)描述事迹和成就的句型
... is best known for being the first woman to ...(……以作为第一个……的女性而闻名。)
... spent his/her whole life doing ...(……花费了一生做……。)
... developed ... and helped ...(……发展了……并帮助了……。)
... did research on ... and made great discoveries.(……做了关于……的研究并取得了重大发现。)
... came up with new ideas of ...(……想出了关于……的新点子。)
(4)表达感悟和影响的句型
... is a great inspiration to me.(……对我来说是极大的激励。)
I think ... is still a great inspiration to many people.(我认为……仍然是许多人的巨大激励。)
I hope that I can learn from ... and become a better person.(我希望我能向……学习,成为一个更好的人。)
Stories like this give us power and inspiration.(这样的故事给予我们力量和激励。)
... shows us the way forward.(……为我们指明了前进的方向。)
四、范文赏析
题目: 请写一篇在线帖子(120-150词),介绍一位你敬佩的激励人心的人物。你可以从本单元中选择一位人物,也可以介绍你了解的其他人。请说明他/她是谁、做了什么、为什么激励人心。运用本单元所学的描述人物品质的词汇和句型。
范文:
My Biggest Inspiration —— Zhong Yang
To me, one of the most inspiring people is Zhong Yang, a well-respected biologist in China.(运用单元核心词汇inspiring和well-respected)(【第一段:引出人物,点明身份】)
Zhong Yang spent his whole life researching plants and seeds.(运用核心短语spend one's life doing)He collected many important seeds for China's seed banks to make sure that important plants did not disappear.(运用that引导的宾语从句)It was very difficult for him to brave the cold weather and great heights when he traveled across Xizang to collect seeds.(运用It作形式主语的句型:It was very difficult for ... to ...)He sometimes fell sick, but he always continued with his work.(运用but连接对比)(【第二段:描述人物的事迹和成就,用具体事例展示他的坚持】)
What makes Zhong Yang inspiring is that he never gave up, no matter how hard the work was.(运用what引导的主语从句和单元核心短语never gave up)He showed great love for his job and great curiosity about plants.(运用核心词汇love和curiosity)He also trained local students to become scientists because he knew it was better to include more people when doing important work.(【第三段:分析人物的品质,提炼"永不放弃"和"热爱与好奇"两个核心品质】)
Zhong Yang left behind more than just a huge collection of seeds. His love for his job and research lives on in his students.(运用单元核心表达lives on)I think he is still a great inspiration to many people. Stories like this give us power and encouragement to work hard and never give up.(运用that引导的宾语从句和单元主题句)(【第四段:总结感悟,点明对自己的激励意义】)
范文点评:
维度
亮点
结构
四段式结构完整,层次清晰——开头引出人物,第二段描述事迹,第三段分析品质,第四段总结感悟。逻辑顺畅,层层递进
内容
选择了本单元的核心人物钟杨;事迹描述具体(收集种子、赴藏科考);品质提炼准确(永不放弃、热爱与好奇);结尾呼应单元主题"Inspiring people show us the way forward"
语言
运用了单元核心词汇(inspiring, well-respected, curiosity, lives on);运用了It作形式主语的句型(It was very difficult for ... to ...);运用了what引导的主语从句(What makes ... is that ...);运用了that引导的宾语从句
语法
时态使用准确(一般现在时描述人物身份和普遍事实,一般过去时描述过去事迹);It作形式主语和宾语从句使用正确;连接词(but, because)使用恰当
单元主题写作练习
1.假如你是李华,学校正在举办英语作文大赛,题目为“The Hero in My Heart”,请你根据下列信息,写一篇英语作文介绍你心目中的英雄屠呦呦。
Born
1930, in Ningbo, China
Education
1951-1955 at Beijing Medical College.
What did she do
1969, worked as the leader of a research team to find a treatment for malaria. 1972, discovered qinghaosu from a Chinese herb. Qinghaosu is very effective at fighting malaria.
What did she win
2015, the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine 2019, the title of “the Greatest Person of the 20th Century”
要求:1. 文中不得出现真实姓名和校名;2. 短文开头已给出,不计入总词数;3. 80~100 词,可适当发挥。
The Hero in My Heart
Tu Youyou is one of the greatest scientists in the world. __________________________________________
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【答案】参考范文
The Hero in My Heart
Tu Youyou is one of the greatest scientists in the world. She was born in 1930 in Ningbo, China. She studied at Beijing Medical College from 1951 to 1955.
In 1969, she led a research team to find a treatment for malaria. In 1972, she discovered qinghaosu from a Chinese herb. It is effective at fighting malaria. She won the Nobel Prize in 2015. In 2019, she was given the title of “the Greatest Person of the 20th Century”.
She is the hero in my heart. I admire her spirit and hope to make contributions to our country like her.
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:记叙文,以一般过去时为主
明确要点:介绍屠呦呦的出生时间、出生地以及求学经历,依次介绍她的主要工作事迹、所获荣誉,最后抒发自己的感悟
确定人称:第三人称(she)
注意事项:语言流畅,书写规范,词数80‑100词左右,文中不得出现真实姓名和校名
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构
开头段:开篇点出屠呦呦是世界上最伟大的科学家之一,引出话题
主体段:依次介绍她的出生、求学经历、科研事迹以及获得的各项荣誉
结尾段:点明屠呦呦是自己心中的英雄,表达向她学习、为国奉献的愿望
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:介绍人物以及基本信息
人物介绍: Tu Youyou
个人信息:was born in.../studied at.../Born in..., she received her education at等
要点二:主要事迹
行为表现:led a research team/discovered qinghaosu/Leading a research team to..., she discovered等
具体做法:fighting malaria/find a treatment for malaria/fight against malaria等
要点三:获得荣誉
获奖经历:won the Nobel Prize/was given the title of.../won the Nobel Prize and received the title of等
要点四:结尾感悟
结尾感悟:admire her spirit/learn from her等
美好祝愿:hope to make contributions to our country/set a good example for us等
2.学校英语专栏开展征文活动:An Inspiring Person I Admire。请写一篇英语短文投稿。
提示:
1. 你敬佩的一位励志人物(可以是名人或身边普通人);
2. 人物主要事迹与可贵品质;
3. 你的感悟以及对你的启发。
要求:
1. 词数 100‑120;
2. 行文连贯,语法正确;
3. 不得出现真实校名、人名。
参考词汇:admire, devote oneself to, perseverance, overcome difficulties
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【答案】参考范文
An Inspiring Person I Admire
There are many inspiring people around us. The person I admire most is Zhong Yang.
He was a great botanist. He devoted over 16 years to collecting wild plant seeds on the Qinghai‑Tibet Plateau. The living and working conditions were really terrible. Though he suffered from illness, he never gave up his research. He collected more than 40 million seeds for our country. He passed away in 2017, but his spirit lives on.
I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion. From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals and try our best to serve society. I will study harder and try to be a useful person in the future.
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:记叙文(征文投稿)
明确要点:介绍敬佩的励志人物;讲述人物主要事迹与可贵品质;写出个人感悟与带来的启发
确定人称:第一人称 (I),第三人称 (he/she)
注意事项:覆盖全部提示要点,词数100‑120,行文连贯语法正确,文中不能出现真实人名、校名
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:引出话题,点明自己最敬佩的人物
主体段:介绍人物身份,讲述主要事迹,体现人物可贵品质
结尾段:写出自身感悟,说明人物带给自己的启发,表达今后的行动方向
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:引出敬佩的人物
开篇引入:There are many inspiring people around us./There are lots of great people who set good examples for us等
点明对象:The person I admire most is…/I admire…very much等
要点二:人物事迹与可贵品质
人物身份:He/She is a great…/He/She is a common but great person等
主要事迹:He devoted himself to doing sth./He spent lots of time doing sth./He overcame many difficulties等
环境与挫折:Though he met lots of difficulties,…/Although the conditions were terrible等
品质体现:show his perseverance/his spirit of devotion等
要点三:个人感悟与启发
内心感受:I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion./His spirit touches me deeply等
学到的道理:From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals./We should never give up when we face difficulties等
未来行动:I will study harder./I will try my best to become a useful person等
3.假如你即将在学校英语兴趣小组的活动中发言,题目是”我心目中的英雄”。请根据以下要点提示,介绍你心目中的英雄——”共和国勋章”获得者黄旭华。
(1)黄旭华于1926年出生在广东省。
(2)19岁那年,他考入上海交通大学造船专业学习。
(3)从1958年起,为了工作他隐姓埋名,三十年未与父母见面。
(4)他默默无闻地为国家研制核潜艇。
(5)你认为……
要求:
(1)词数:80—100,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
(2)要点齐全,行文连贯,可适当发挥。
参考词汇:
上海交通大学 Shanghai Jiao Tong University
造船专业shipbuilding
隐姓埋名 live under an assumed name
默默无闻without fame
核潜艇 nuclear submarine
My hero
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
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Thank you for listening!
【答案】参考范文
My hero
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
Huang Xuhua was born in Guangdong in 1926. At the age of 19, he entered Shanghai Jiao Tong University to study shipbuilding. From 1958, he lived under an assumed name for work and didn’t meet his parents for 30 years. He worked without fame to develop nuclear submarines for our country.
I think he is a great hero because he devoted his whole life to science and our country. His sacrifice and hard work encourage me to study harder and help others.
Thank you for listening!
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:发言稿,记叙文,一般过去时为主
明确要点:介绍黄旭华的基本经历;说明其为国家作出的贡献;表达自己对英雄的看法
确定人称:第三人称he/his
注意事项:包含所给要点,可适当发挥;80—100,开头结尾已给不计入词数
[第二步:构思布局]
开头:给定句子,点明英雄人物黄旭华
正文:按时间顺序写黄旭华的出生、求学经历以及奉献事迹
结尾:抒发个人感悟,发言稿结束语(题目已给定)
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:出生与求学
was born in Guangdong in 1926/ At the age of 19/ When he was 19/entered Shanghai Jiao Tong University/got into Shanghai Jiao Tong University等
要点二:奉献经历
lived under an assumed name for work/ kept his identity secret/didn’t meet his parents/couldn’t see his parents/was separated from his parents/worked without fame等
要点三:个人评价与感悟
a great hero/a true hero/devoted his whole life/gave his whole life to/encourage me to study harder and help others/inspire me to work harder等
4.假设你是李华,你们学校将举办“我最敬佩的人”英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇80–100词的演讲稿,介绍一位你敬佩的中国杰出人物/教育家(如袁隆平、屠呦呦、钟扬、钱学森、张桂梅等),并说明他/她激励你的原因。
要求:用上本单元词汇(如 admire, courage, wisdom, devote, achieve, inspire 等)和句型(It is + adj. + of/for sb. to do)。
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【答案】参考范文
Dear teachers and friends,
Today I’d like to talk about the person I admire most—Zhang Guimei.
She is a great educator. She devoted herself to helping mountain girls receive education. With great courage and wisdom, she achieved her dream of building China’s first free high school for girls. It is selfless of her to spend all her energy on poor students.
Her spirit truly inspires me. I learn that one can make a difference through hard work. I will value my education and try to help people in need in the future.
Thank you!
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:演讲稿,以一般现在时为主
明确要点:介绍敬佩的科学家/教育家、人物事迹、激励自己的原因
确定人称:第一人称(I/my):用来表达我的想法、感悟;第三人称:专门介绍杰出人物的事迹,是文章主体描述人称。
注意事项:使用指定词汇与It is +adj.+of/for sb. to do句型,词数控制在80-100词,不泄露个人真实信息
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:总起问候,开门见山,点明本次演讲要介绍最敬佩的人
主体段:介绍人物身份、主要事迹,运用要求词汇与规定句型
结尾段:阐述人物对自己的激励,表达今后的决心,礼貌收尾
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:引出演讲人物
核心表达:admire most/respect/look up to等
要点二:人物事迹介绍
身份介绍:educator/scientist/physicist/professor等
人物行为:devote oneself to doing sth/build school/help poor girls/receive education/make efforts/sacrifice time/realize goals等
要点三:人物带来的激励
核心表达:inspire/encourage/motivate/guide等
要点四:感悟
核心表达:make a difference through hard work/value education/help people in need/hold on to dreams/strive for goals/serve society等
5.作为中学生,在日常学习和生活中,有许多榜样值得我们学习,他们可以是古今中外的名人,为人类发展做出了卓越贡献;也可以是我们身边的亲人、朋友、老师,他们身上同样有着诸多闪光的品质。假设你是李华,某英文网站正在开展以“My Role Model”为题的征文活动,请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,谈一谈你的榜样。
参考人物:司马迁、袁隆平、张骞、詹天佑…… Isaac Newton, Marie Curie, Alan Turing …
写作提示:1.Who is he/she?
2.What made him/her admirable?
3.What can you learn from him/her?
写作要求: 1.文中须包含以上写作提示中的所有信息,可适当发挥;
2.文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数100左右(文中已给出内容不计入总词数)
My Role Model
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【答案】参考范文
My Role Model
My role model is Yuan Longping, who is known as “the Father of Hybrid Rice”. He was a great scientist who spent most of his life studying rice. Because of his hard work, millions of people have enough food to eat.
Yuan Longping was hardworking and never gave up. Although he met many difficulties, he continued his research and made great achievements. His love for science and people’s lives made him admirable.
From him, I learn that we should work hard and be responsible. When we face problems, we should keep trying and never give up. I hope to become a useful person like him in the future.
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
确定文体:说明文(人物介绍),一般现在时与一般过去时相结合
明确要点:介绍自己的榜样是谁;说明他/她令人敬佩的原因;表达自己从榜样身上学到的品质和启示
确定人称:第三人称介绍榜样,第一人称表达自己的感受
注意事项:词数100左右;包含写作提示中的全部信息;可适当拓展细节;文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称;突出榜样人物的优秀品质
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构:
开头段:介绍榜样是谁及基本身份
主体段:介绍榜样的优秀品质和令人敬佩的经历或成就
结尾段:说明自己从榜样身上学到的东西以及未来努力方向
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:介绍榜样人物(Who is he/she?)
人物介绍:my role model is Yuan Longping/Isaac Newton/Marie Curie/Alan Turing/Sima Qian等
身份职业:a great scientist/a famous inventor/a writer/a teacher/a person who made great contributions to the world等
其他表达:be known as/be famous for/have a great influence on people等
要点二:介绍令人敬佩的原因(What made him/her admirable?)
优秀品质:hardworking/creative/brave/responsible/patient/kind/persistent/determined/selfless等
具体事例:spend most of his life studying/work hard for many years/face difficulties/never give up/solve problems/help others/achieve his dream等
精神品质:love for science/love people/have a strong will/keep trying/be devoted to his work等
要点三:表达自己的学习和启示(What can you learn from him/her?)
学习品质:work hard/be responsible/keep learning/think creatively/be brave to face difficulties等
成长目标:become a useful person/improve myself/make contributions to society/try my best to achieve my dream等
感悟表达:Never give up/I believe hard work pays off/Nothing is impossible if we keep trying等
6.题目:假设你是李华,你校英语俱乐部正在举办以“An Inspiring Person Around Me”为题的英语演讲比赛。请你结合九上Unit 2的学习内容,写一篇短文参赛。
要求:
介绍一位你了解的令人敬佩的人(如袁隆平、钟扬、南丁格尔等),并说明他/她让你敬佩的原因(至少两点);
结合该人物的精神,谈谈你打算如何在学习或生活中践行这种精神;
词数80-100词左右(开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数);
文中不得出现真实的校名和姓名。
An Inspiring Person Around Me
Hello, everyone! I’m Li Hua. Today I’d like to share an inspiring person with you.
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That’s all. Thank you for listening!
【答案】参考范文
An Inspiring Person Around Me
Hello, everyone! I’m Li Hua. Today I’d like to share an inspiring person with you.
The person I look up to most is Yuan Longping, the “Father of Hybrid Rice”. What makes him so inspiring is his lifelong devotion to rice research. Despite the tough conditions, he spent years working in the fields to solve the global hunger problem. Besides, his spirit of never giving up encourages me a lot. Inspired by him, I have made up my mind to study harder. Whenever I face difficulties in my studies, I will think of his hard work and keep going. I believe that with great effort, I can also make a difference in the future.
That’s all. Thank you for listening!
【详解】写作步骤
[第一步:审题立意]
文体:英语演讲稿,时态以一般现在时为主,适当使用一般过去时
核心要点:确定激励人物——袁隆平,“杂交水稻之父”
梳理敬佩理由(至少两点):毕生投身水稻研究、永不放弃的精神阐述
自身收获:遇到学习困难不轻言放弃,努力拼搏,立志将来有所作为
人称:第一人称 (I)、第三人称 (he/his)
注意事项:不可出现真实校名与人名;给定开头、结尾不计入总词数,主体词数控制 80–100 词
[第二步:构思布局]
三段式结构
开头段(已给出):开门见山,引出要分享的榜样人物
主体段:第一层:介绍人物身份,阐述两点令人敬佩的品质与事迹;第二层:结合人物精神,说明自己在学习中如何向他学习
结尾段(已给出):标准演讲稿结束语
[第三步:要点展开]
要点一:点明人物身份
look up to/inspiring person/the “Father of Hybrid Rice”/role model/great scientist/set an example/devoted researcher等
要点二:叙述令人敬佩的事迹(两点原因)
lifelong devotion/tough conditions/solve the global hunger problem/never giving up/stick to his dream/overcome difficulties/devote himself to/fight against hunger等
要点三:谈谈自身如何践行精神
inspired by him/face difficulties/keep going/make a difference/learn from him/stick to my goals/try my best/achieve my dreams等
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Unit 2 Inspiring People 单元主题写作讲练
目录
· 单元主题写作讲解
全面解析单元主题,明确写作任务。
根据具体的写作任务,确定文章框架。
给出与写作任务相关的素材。
通过范文赏析,进一步理解写作的要点和方法。
· 单元主题写作练习
通过写作练习,在具体的语境中运用写作素材,练习写作方法和技巧,提高写作能力。
单元主题写作讲解
一、单元主题与写作任务解读
1. 单元主题解析
本单元贯穿始终的核心议题是——"什么样的人值得敬佩?他们的哪些品质和精神能够激励我们?"
教材通过钟杨(种子科学家)、墨子(思想家)、贝聿铭(建筑师)、王亚平(航天员)、袁隆平(科学家)、法拉第(科学家)、司马迁(史学家)、居里夫人(科学家)等多组人物素材,向学生传递了以下三个层层递进的核心理念——“各行各业都有激励人心的人物”、“激励人心的人物都拥有一些优秀品质”以及“普通人也可以成为激励人心的人”。
2. 结合单元主题,分析写作任务
(1)明确本次的写作任务:
本单元要求学生在阅读关于墨子的在线帖子后,完成图表填写,然后探究本单元中的一位人物或任何其他你觉得激励人心的人,介绍你敬佩的激励人心的人物,说明他/她是谁、做了什么、为什么激励人心。
(2)结合单元主题,阐述写作要点和审题要点:
本次写作任务要求学生从"认识激励人心的人物"出发,运用单元所学的描述人物品质的词汇和句型,介绍一位杰出人物(可以是历史名人、当代英雄或身边的普通人),分析其优秀品质,并阐述其对自己或对世界的激励意义。
审题和写作要点
具体说明
题材
描写文/说明文——在线帖子(online post),介绍一位激励人心的人物
选准角度
选择一位你真正敬佩的人物,可来自本单元(如钟杨、墨子、贝聿铭、王亚平、袁隆平等)或自己了解的其他人(如身边的长辈、老师、朋友等)
内容完整
介绍人物身份、描述其主要事迹或成就、分析其激励人心的品质、阐述对自己的影响或启发
条理清晰
按"人物介绍→事迹描述→品质分析→影响感悟"的逻辑展开
时态准确
描述人物的基本信息和普遍事实用一般现在时;描述过去的事迹和成就用一般过去时;阐述对自己的影响可用一般现在时或现在完成时
语言要求
运用单元所学的描述人物品质的词汇(如creative, brave, inspiring, full of courage等)和句型(It was ... of/for ... to ... / It was ... that ...等),以及that引导的宾语从句
格式要求
在线帖子格式,开头可有标题或引言,结尾可有总结或感悟
核心内容
人物身份(Who)+ 事迹成就(What he/she did)+ 品质分析(What qualities he/she showed)+ 激励意义(Why he/she inspires me)
二、写作框架指导
介绍"我敬佩的激励人心的人物"建议采用 "四段式"结构:
第一段:开头——引出人物,简要介绍(1-2句)
用一句话引出你要介绍的人物,点明他/她的身份和为什么值得关注。
核心句式:
To me, one of the most inspiring people is ...(对我来说,最激励人心的人之一是……。)
I would like to introduce ... who is ...(我想介绍……,他/她是……。)
... is a person that I truly admire.(……是我真正敬佩的人。)
Among all the great people I know, ... inspires me the most.(在我所认识的所有伟大人物中,……最激励我。)
I have always looked up to ... because ...(我一直敬佩……,因为……。)
第二段:正文1——描述人物的事迹和成就(3-4句)
介绍这个人做了什么、取得了什么成就。需要具体、真实的信息,可以通过具体事例来展示。
核心句式:
... is best known for ...(……以……而闻名。)
... spent his/her whole life ...(……花费了他/她的一生……。)
... was the first woman/person to ...(……是第一个……的女性/人。)
... developed/invented/created ... and helped ...(……发明/创造了……并帮助了……。)
... did research on ... and made great discoveries.(……做了关于……的研究并取得了重大发现。)
It was very difficult for ... to ..., but he/she never gave up.(对……来说……很难,但他/她从未放弃。)
第三段:正文2——分析人物的品质,阐述为什么激励人心(2-3句)
从人物的行为和成就中提炼出他/她的优秀品质,并解释这些品质为什么对你或对世界有意义。
核心句式:
What makes ... inspiring is that ...(使……激励人心的原因是……。)
... was full of ... and ...(……充满了……和……。)
It was really ... of ... to ...(……做……真的很……。)
... showed great ... and taught us that ...(……展现了极大的……,并教会我们……。)
I admire ... because he/she not only ... but also ...(我敬佩……,因为他/她不仅……而且……。)
His/Her love for ... lives on in ...(他/她对……的热爱在……中延续。)
第四段:结尾——总结感悟,点明对自己的影响(1-2句)
总结这个人对你的启发或影响,呼应单元主题。
核心句式:
... is a great inspiration to me.(……对我来说是极大的激励。)
I think ... is still a great inspiration to many people.(我认为……仍然是许多人的巨大激励。)
I hope that I can learn from ... and become a better person.(我希望我能向……学习,成为一个更好的人。)
... shows us the way forward.(……为我们指明了前进的方向。)
Stories like this give us power and inspiration.(这样的故事给予我们力量和激励。)
三、语言素材积累
(1)与写作主题相关的词汇:
inspiring 激励人心的 admirable 令人敬佩的 creative 有创造力的
brave / courageous 勇敢的 wise 有智慧的 modest 谦虚的
patient 耐心的 hard-working 勤奋的 confident 自信的
responsible 负责任的 kind / kind-hearted 善良的 selfless 无私的
determined 坚定的 curious 充满好奇心的 energetic 精力充沛的
amazing 令人惊叹的 great 伟大的 courage 勇气
wisdom 智慧 curiosity 好奇心
(2)与写作主题相关的短语:
look up to 敬佩,仰慕 dream big 有远大梦想
never give up 永不放弃 come true 实现
live on 继续存在,流传 be known for 以……闻名
spend one's life doing 花费一生做某事 be full of 充满
brave the difficulties 勇敢面对困难 show great courage 展现出极大的勇气
make great discoveries 取得重大发现 do research on 做关于……的研究
teach a live class 上直播课 walk in space 太空漫步
pioneer of ... ……的先驱 above all 最重要的是
bring back valuable information 带回宝贵信息 build relationships 建立关系
for all of these reasons 基于以上所有理由
(3)与写作主题相关的句型(含本单元语法重点)
(1)It作形式主语的句型(描述人物品质和评价)
It was great of Yuan Longping to develop a new kind of rice.(袁隆平培育了新型水稻,真是太伟大了。)
It was amazing that Marie Curie won two Nobel Prizes.(居里夫人获得了两次诺贝尔奖,真是令人惊叹。)
It was very difficult for Zhong Yang to brave the cold weather.(对钟杨来说,勇敢面对寒冷天气非常困难。)
It was really brave of Victor Hugo to stand up for the common people.(维克多·雨果为普通人挺身而出,真的很勇敢。)
It is important for us to learn from great people.(向伟人学习对我们来说很重要。)
It is always inspiring to read about great people and learn from their stories.(阅读伟人的故事并向他们学习,总是很激励人心。)
It was creative of I.M. Pei to design the glass pyramid at the Louvre Museum.(贝聿铭设计了卢浮宫的玻璃金字塔,真有创造力。)
It is really nice of my father to support and encourage me.(我的父亲支持和鼓励我,真是太好了。)
(2)描述人物品质的句型
... was full of courage and wisdom.(……充满了勇气和智慧。)
... showed a deep love for and a curiosity about the things he studied.(……对他研究的事物表现出深深的热爱和好奇心。)
... never forgot his task and never gave up.(……从未忘记自己的使命,从未放弃。)
... is a person that I truly admire.(……是我真正敬佩的人。)
What makes ... inspiring is that ...(使……激励人心的原因是……。)
(3)描述事迹和成就的句型
... is best known for being the first woman to ...(……以作为第一个……的女性而闻名。)
... spent his/her whole life doing ...(……花费了一生做……。)
... developed ... and helped ...(……发展了……并帮助了……。)
... did research on ... and made great discoveries.(……做了关于……的研究并取得了重大发现。)
... came up with new ideas of ...(……想出了关于……的新点子。)
(4)表达感悟和影响的句型
... is a great inspiration to me.(……对我来说是极大的激励。)
I think ... is still a great inspiration to many people.(我认为……仍然是许多人的巨大激励。)
I hope that I can learn from ... and become a better person.(我希望我能向……学习,成为一个更好的人。)
Stories like this give us power and inspiration.(这样的故事给予我们力量和激励。)
... shows us the way forward.(……为我们指明了前进的方向。)
四、范文赏析
题目: 请写一篇在线帖子(120-150词),介绍一位你敬佩的激励人心的人物。你可以从本单元中选择一位人物,也可以介绍你了解的其他人。请说明他/她是谁、做了什么、为什么激励人心。运用本单元所学的描述人物品质的词汇和句型。
范文:
My Biggest Inspiration —— Zhong Yang
To me, one of the most inspiring people is Zhong Yang, a well-respected biologist in China.(运用单元核心词汇inspiring和well-respected)(【第一段:引出人物,点明身份】)
Zhong Yang spent his whole life researching plants and seeds.(运用核心短语spend one's life doing)He collected many important seeds for China's seed banks to make sure that important plants did not disappear.(运用that引导的宾语从句)It was very difficult for him to brave the cold weather and great heights when he traveled across Xizang to collect seeds.(运用It作形式主语的句型:It was very difficult for ... to ...)He sometimes fell sick, but he always continued with his work.(运用but连接对比)(【第二段:描述人物的事迹和成就,用具体事例展示他的坚持】)
What makes Zhong Yang inspiring is that he never gave up, no matter how hard the work was.(运用what引导的主语从句和单元核心短语never gave up)He showed great love for his job and great curiosity about plants.(运用核心词汇love和curiosity)He also trained local students to become scientists because he knew it was better to include more people when doing important work.(【第三段:分析人物的品质,提炼"永不放弃"和"热爱与好奇"两个核心品质】)
Zhong Yang left behind more than just a huge collection of seeds. His love for his job and research lives on in his students.(运用单元核心表达lives on)I think he is still a great inspiration to many people. Stories like this give us power and encouragement to work hard and never give up.(运用that引导的宾语从句和单元主题句)(【第四段:总结感悟,点明对自己的激励意义】)
范文点评:
维度
亮点
结构
四段式结构完整,层次清晰——开头引出人物,第二段描述事迹,第三段分析品质,第四段总结感悟。逻辑顺畅,层层递进
内容
选择了本单元的核心人物钟杨;事迹描述具体(收集种子、赴藏科考);品质提炼准确(永不放弃、热爱与好奇);结尾呼应单元主题"Inspiring people show us the way forward"
语言
运用了单元核心词汇(inspiring, well-respected, curiosity, lives on);运用了It作形式主语的句型(It was very difficult for ... to ...);运用了what引导的主语从句(What makes ... is that ...);运用了that引导的宾语从句
语法
时态使用准确(一般现在时描述人物身份和普遍事实,一般过去时描述过去事迹);It作形式主语和宾语从句使用正确;连接词(but, because)使用恰当
单元主题写作练习
1.假如你是李华,学校正在举办英语作文大赛,题目为“The Hero in My Heart”,请你根据下列信息,写一篇英语作文介绍你心目中的英雄屠呦呦。
Born
1930, in Ningbo, China
Education
1951-1955 at Beijing Medical College.
What did she do
1969, worked as the leader of a research team to find a treatment for malaria. 1972, discovered qinghaosu from a Chinese herb. Qinghaosu is very effective at fighting malaria.
What did she win
2015, the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine 2019, the title of “the Greatest Person of the 20th Century”
要求:1. 文中不得出现真实姓名和校名;2. 短文开头已给出,不计入总词数;3. 80~100 词,可适当发挥。
The Hero in My Heart
Tu Youyou is one of the greatest scientists in the world. __________________________________________
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2.学校英语专栏开展征文活动:An Inspiring Person I Admire。请写一篇英语短文投稿。
提示:
1. 你敬佩的一位励志人物(可以是名人或身边普通人);
2. 人物主要事迹与可贵品质;
3. 你的感悟以及对你的启发。
要求:
1. 词数 100‑120;
2. 行文连贯,语法正确;
3. 不得出现真实校名、人名。
参考词汇:admire, devote oneself to, perseverance, overcome difficulties
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3.假如你即将在学校英语兴趣小组的活动中发言,题目是”我心目中的英雄”。请根据以下要点提示,介绍你心目中的英雄——”共和国勋章”获得者黄旭华。
(1)黄旭华于1926年出生在广东省。
(2)19岁那年,他考入上海交通大学造船专业学习。
(3)从1958年起,为了工作他隐姓埋名,三十年未与父母见面。
(4)他默默无闻地为国家研制核潜艇。
(5)你认为……
要求:
(1)词数:80—100,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
(2)要点齐全,行文连贯,可适当发挥。
参考词汇:
上海交通大学 Shanghai Jiao Tong University
造船专业shipbuilding
隐姓埋名 live under an assumed name
默默无闻without fame
核潜艇 nuclear submarine
My hero
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
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Thank you for listening!
4.假设你是李华,你们学校将举办“我最敬佩的人”英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇80–100词的演讲稿,介绍一位你敬佩的中国杰出人物/教育家(如袁隆平、屠呦呦、钟扬、钱学森、张桂梅等),并说明他/她激励你的原因。
要求:用上本单元词汇(如 admire, courage, wisdom, devote, achieve, inspire 等)和句型(It is + adj. + of/for sb. to do)。
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5.作为中学生,在日常学习和生活中,有许多榜样值得我们学习,他们可以是古今中外的名人,为人类发展做出了卓越贡献;也可以是我们身边的亲人、朋友、老师,他们身上同样有着诸多闪光的品质。假设你是李华,某英文网站正在开展以“My Role Model”为题的征文活动,请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,谈一谈你的榜样。
参考人物:司马迁、袁隆平、张骞、詹天佑…… Isaac Newton, Marie Curie, Alan Turing …
写作提示:1.Who is he/she?
2.What made him/her admirable?
3.What can you learn from him/her?
写作要求: 1.文中须包含以上写作提示中的所有信息,可适当发挥;
2.文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数100左右(文中已给出内容不计入总词数)
My Role Model
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6.题目:假设你是李华,你校英语俱乐部正在举办以“An Inspiring Person Around Me”为题的英语演讲比赛。请你结合九上Unit 2的学习内容,写一篇短文参赛。
要求:
介绍一位你了解的令人敬佩的人(如袁隆平、钟扬、南丁格尔等),并说明他/她让你敬佩的原因(至少两点);
结合该人物的精神,谈谈你打算如何在学习或生活中践行这种精神;
词数80-100词左右(开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数);
文中不得出现真实的校名和姓名。
An Inspiring Person Around Me
Hello, everyone! I’m Li Hua. Today I’d like to share an inspiring person with you.
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That’s all. Thank you for listening!
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