2023年浙江1月读后续写两步呼应法 讲义-2027届高三英语一轮复习专项

该高中英语讲义聚焦高考读后续写核心考点，围绕情节逻辑呼应、原文要素利用、主题升华等考查要求，以“两步呼应法”为框架，结合“六维描写”（动作、情绪、心理、对话、环境、升华）构建知识体系。通过真题原文解析、话题分类梳理、两段写法步骤指导、原创范文精讲及模板应用训练，形成“考点梳理—方法提炼—真题演练—模板固化”的系统复习流程，帮助学生突破续写难点。 资料创新采用“两步呼应法”拆解续写逻辑，通过原文要素呼应表（如挤奶房、破窗修复等细节回扣）和六维描写训练，培养学生思维品质（逻辑分析与情节构建）和语言能力（词汇升级、句式变换）。设置模板填空练习等分层活动，助力学生快速掌握写作策略，有效提升续写得分，为教师精准把控复习节奏、高效开展教学提供实用指导。

2023年1月浙江高考读后续写 两步呼应法 · 人与自然类突破 （两步：两段推进；呼应：前后衔接呼应·原文要素呼应·情节逻辑呼应；六维：动作·情绪·心理·对话·环境·升华） 一、真题原文 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I was invited to a cookout on an old friend's farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird, desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spiderwebs and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up. With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me. When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spiderwebs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired? Or too thirsty? As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering, she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight. During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, "She must have come to say goodbye." 注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Para 1: A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. Para 2: I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. 二、话题分类与方法介绍 话题分类 话题类型 人与自然 · 人与动物（感恩 / 和谐相处） 核心矛盾 "我"救了被困蜂鸟 → 蜂鸟两次回来对视道别 → 几周后故地重游 → 重逢 写作主线 故地重游 → 查看旧地 → 未见蜂鸟的失落 → 蜂鸟出现 → 重逢感动 → 升华主题 方法介绍：两步呼应法 "两步"指续写分两段推进，每段按固定步骤写作；"呼应"包含三层含义：一是前后衔接呼应，段落之间情绪转变有因果链，不跳脱；二是原文要素呼应，原文给出的人物、物品、伏笔尽量在续写中用上或回扣，不浪费线索；三是情节逻辑呼应，每个动作和对话都要推动情节发展，不说废话。每段覆盖动作、情绪、心理、对话、环境、升华六个维度，句式变换使用简单句、复合句、非谓语动词、独立主格。 三、两步呼应法 · 两段写法指导 第一段写什么（回应首句1：几周后故地重游） 写作步骤 具体内容 ① 动作直奔旧地 "我"径直走向废弃挤奶房，心跳加速——呼应原文救鸟地点 ② 查看变化 破窗户已修好（呼应原文朋友 promised to fix the window），屋内空无一物 ③ 情绪失落 没见到蜂鸟，一丝失落涌上心头，转身准备离开 ④ 心理安慰 自我安慰：也许她找到了更安全的地方 ⑤ 环境烘托 黑莓小路果实累累，午后阳光闪耀——呼应原文 blackberry-lined path ⑥ 衔接下段 正准备离开（为第二段"正要离开时蜂鸟出现"做衔接） 逻辑链 直奔旧地 → 查看窗户 → 未见蜂鸟 → 失落安慰 → 环境烘托 → 准备离开 第二段写什么（回应首句2：正要离开时蜂鸟出现） 写作步骤 具体内容 ① 蜂鸟出现 蜂鸟悬停在半空中，翅膀快速振动——呼应原文 hovering ② 一句对话 "我"轻声打招呼："Hey, old girl!"——言语行为，表达惊喜 ③ 动作呼应 蜂鸟飞近，轻轻落在"我"掌心——呼应原文 cupped hand ④ 细节描写 "我"轻抚羽毛，蜂鸟久久凝视"我"的眼睛，转头——呼应原文 stared into eyes / turning head ⑤ 告别飞走 蜂鸟发出吱吱叫声，展翅飞向蓝天——呼应原文 squeaking call ⑥ 升华主题 "我"伫立目送，感悟人与自然之间有些联结永远不会断 逻辑链 蜂鸟出现 → 对话惊喜 → 落入手心 → 凝视对视 → 叫着飞走 → 感悟升华 四、原创范文（约170词，不含首句） Para 1 A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. I walked straight to the old milking house, my heart beating a little faster with each step. The broken window had been repaired, just as my friends had promised. I looked inside through the glass, but the room was quiet and empty—no hummingbird, no spiderwebs. A touch of sadness settled over me as I slowly turned to leave. Maybe she had found a safer place to live, I thought, trying to comfort myself. The blackberry bushes along the path were heavy with ripe fruit, shining in the afternoon sun. Para 2 I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. There she was, hovering in midair, her tiny wings beating so fast they were a blur. "Hey, old girl!" I whispered, my eyes filling with tears. She flew closer and settled gently in my cupped hand, just as before. I touched her soft feathers, my heart filled with joy. For a long moment, she stared into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she let out a squeaking call, spread her wings, and flew into the blue sky. I stood there, watching her disappear, knowing that some relationships between humans and nature can never be broken. （全文不含首句约168词；原文要素全呼应：milking house、broken window repaired、spiderwebs、cupped hand、blackberry bushes、hovering、stared into eyes、turning head、squeaking call；覆盖六维，句式含简单句/复合句/非谓语/独立主格） 五、范文解析 1. 词汇升级（均为高中范围内词汇） 原文用词 升级表达 说明 walked straight to headed straight for / made my way to head for 更地道，"朝……走去" looked inside peered inside / glanced inside peer 表"仔细看"，更有画面感 sadness a touch of sadness / a wave of sadness a touch of 表"一丝"，更细腻 shining in the sun glistening in the afternoon sun glisten 表"闪耀"，描写果实更生动 flew closer darted closer dart 表"飞快地冲"，描写蜂鸟更准确 touched her feathers stroked her soft feathers stroke 表"轻抚"，更温柔 filled with joy overflowing with joy overflow 表"充满"，情绪更强烈 relationships bonds / connections bond 表"联结"，更贴合人与自然主题 2. 长难句解析 句1：I walked straight to the old milking house, my heart beating a little faster with each step. • 句型：独立主格结构 • 解析：my heart beating a little faster with each step 是独立主格结构（名词 + 现在分词），表"我的心每走一步就跳得更快一点"，与主句主语 I 不一致，故用独立主格。该结构同时交代了动作（walked）和情绪（心跳加速），句式紧凑。 句2：The broken window had been repaired, just as my friends had promised. • 句型：过去完成时被动 + 方式状语从句 • 解析：had been repaired 是过去完成时被动，表"窗户在我到来之前已经被修好"；just as my friends had promised 是方式状语从句，"正如我朋友承诺的那样"，直接呼应原文 They promised to fix the window，体现原文要素不浪费。 句3：There she was, hovering in midair, her tiny wings beating so fast they were a blur. • 句型：倒装句 + 非谓语 + 独立主格 + 结果状语从句 • 解析：There she was 是完全倒装，表"她就在那儿"，增强画面感；hovering in midair 是现在分词作伴随状语；her tiny wings beating so fast they were a blur 是独立主格，其中 so fast (that) they were a blur 是结果状语从句，"翅膀快得变成一团模糊"。一个句子融合四种语法现象，句式丰富。 句4：I stood there, watching her disappear, knowing that some relationships between humans and nature can never be broken. • 句型：非谓语动词作伴随状语 + 宾语从句 + 升华主题 • 解析：watching her disappear 是现在分词作伴随状语，表"目送她消失"；knowing that... 也是现在分词作伴随状语，that 引导宾语从句，表"我知道……"。全句是点睛之笔，点出"人与自然的联结不会断"的主题，与原文蜂鸟两次回来道别的情节呼应。 3. 原文要素呼应表（物尽其用） 原文要素 范文中的呼应 milking house（挤奶房） 第一段"I walked straight to the old milking house" broken window + promised to fix 第一段"The broken window had been repaired, just as my friends had promised" spiderwebs（蛛网） 第一段"no hummingbird, no spiderwebs" cupped hand（合起的手掌） 第二段"settled gently in my cupped hand" blackberry-lined path（黑莓小路） 第一段"The blackberry bushes along the path were heavy with ripe fruit" hovering（悬停） 第二段"hovering in midair" looked into my eyes / turning head 第二段"stared into my eyes, turning her head from side to side" squeaking call（吱吱叫声） 第二段"let out a squeaking call" came to say goodbye（道别） 第二段蜂鸟叫着飞走，呼应"道别"主题 六、背诵模板（填空版） 以下模板适用于"人与自然·人与动物重逢/感恩"类读后续写，背诵后可直接套用。 第一段模板（故地重游/寻找场景） A few weeks later, I went to [地点] again. I walked straight to [旧地], [独立主格表心跳/紧张]. The [原文物品] had been [变化], just as [人物] had promised. I looked inside, but the place was [状态]—no [动物], no [物品]. A touch of [情绪] settled over me as I turned to leave. Maybe [动物] had found [更好的地方], I thought, [非谓语表安慰]. The [环境物] along the path were [状态], [非谓语表环境描写]. 第二段模板（重逢/告别场景） I was just about to leave when [动物] appeared. There [动物] was, [非谓语表动作], [独立主格表细节]. "[对话内容]!" I whispered, [独立主格表情绪]. [动物] flew closer and settled gently in [身体部位], just as before. I [动作] [动物]'s [细节], [独立主格表心情]. For a long moment, [动物] stared into my eyes, [非谓语表动作]. Then [动物] let out a [声音], spread [部位], and flew into the [地点]. I stood there, [非谓语表目送], knowing that [升华主题]. 模板填空练习（用本题内容填空） 第一段： A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. I walked straight to ________, my heart ________. The broken window ________, just as ________. I looked inside, but the room was ________—no ________, no ________. A touch of ________ settled over me as I ________. Maybe she had found ________, I thought, ________. The blackberry bushes ________, ________ in the afternoon sun. 第二段： I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. There she was, ________, her tiny wings ________. "________!" I whispered, my eyes ________. She flew closer and settled gently in ________, just as before. I ________ her soft feathers, my heart ________. For a long moment, she ________, turning her head ________. Then she let out ________, spread ________, and flew into ________. I stood there, ________, knowing that ________. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $