2022年新高考读后续写：个人成长类之两步六维法 讲义-2027届高三英语一轮复习专项

该高中英语高考复习讲义聚焦读后续写核心考点，围绕个人成长类主题，以“两步六维法”构建知识体系，整合动作、情绪、心理等六维要素与句式变换要求。通过话题分类梳理核心矛盾，方法指导明确两段逻辑链，真题讲解结合2022新高考真题范文解析，帮助学生系统突破写作难点。 讲义创新采用“两步六维”教学策略，通过六维要素分解训练与模板填空练习，培养学生语言能力与思维品质。范文解析含词汇升级、长难句分析及原文要素呼应，助力学生快速构建情节，提升表达规范性，为教师精准把控复习节奏、提升学生应考能力提供实用指导。

2022年新高考Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷读后续写 两步六维法 · 个人成长类突破 （两步：两段推进；六维：动作·情绪·心理·对话·环境·升华；句式要求：简单句·复合句·非谓语·独立主格） 一、真题原文 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide." I bit back my frustration. I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Para 1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. Para 2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. 二、话题分类与方法介绍 话题分类 话题类型 个人成长 · 克服困难（身残志坚 / 鼓励与自信） 核心矛盾 David 有脑病，怕被外校同学嘲笑 → 决定退赛 → "我"鼓励 → 重新站上起跑线 写作主线 退赛退缩 → 对话鼓励 → 重拾信心 → 上场坚持 → 冲线自豪 方法介绍：两步六维法 "两步"指续写分两段推进，每段按固定步骤写作；"六维"指每段必须覆盖的六个写作维度：动作、情绪、心理、对话、环境、升华。句式上要求变换使用简单句、复合句、非谓语动词、独立主格四种类型。写作时注意三点：原文给出的人物、物品、伏笔尽量用上（不浪费线索）；段落之间情绪转变要有因果链（不跳脱）；人物对话要能推动情节或表达真实意图（不说废话）。 三、两步六维法 · 两段写法指导 第一段写什么（回应首句1：David 不愿看"我"） 写作步骤 具体内容 ① 动作细节 David 低头、抠衣角、回避眼神——身体语言表现自卑 ② 环境烘托 森林的安静 vs 远处其他孩子的喧闹，反衬 David 的孤独 ③ 对话鼓励 "我"用事实提醒他：你从没缺席训练，你总能跑完——用事实唤起成就感 ④ 表达恐惧 David 小声问"如果他们笑怎么办？"——说出真实顾虑 ⑤ 接纳与支持 "我"回应：那就让他们笑，我会为你加油——接纳恐惧+给予支持 ⑥ 心理转变 David 眼神变化，慢慢点头——决定上场，为第二段铺垫 逻辑链 自卑回避 → 事实鼓励 → 说出恐惧 → 获得支持 → 决心上场 第二段写什么（回应首句2：David 站上起跑线） 写作步骤 具体内容 ① 动作呼应 David 身体左右摇晃着迈步——呼应原文"rocking from side to side" ② 落后但坚持 其他选手很快消失在树林里，David 独自在蜿蜒小路上，但一步一步坚持 ③ 神态描写 面部专注、表情坚定——展现内心力量 ④ 冲出森林 终于从森林中跑出，观众爆发出真诚的欢呼（不是嘲笑）——反转 ⑤ 情绪高潮 "我"热泪盈眶，David 冲线，标志性的大笑回来了——呼应开头"smile absent" ⑥ 升华主题 他没有赢过任何人，但战胜了差点让他放弃的恐惧——点题 逻辑链 起跑 → 落后 → 坚持 → 冲出森林 → 欢呼冲线 → 战胜自我 四、原创范文（约164词，不含首句） Para 1 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. He hung his head, picking at the hem of his shirt, his usual big smile nowhere to be seen. The forest around us was quiet except for the distant chatter of other children. "David, you've never missed a single practice," I said gently, "and you always finish." He glanced up briefly, his eyes glistening. "What if they laugh?" he whispered. "Then let them laugh," I replied, "but I'll be right there cheering for you." Something shifted in his expression, and he slowly nodded. Para 2 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. His small body rocked from side to side as he swung his feet forward, just like always. Soon the other runners disappeared into the trees, leaving David alone on the winding path. But he kept going, one determined step at a time, his face set with concentration. When he finally emerged from the forest, the crowd erupted into genuine cheers for his courage. Tears welled up in my eyes as he crossed the finish line, that familiar big toothy smile back on his face. He hadn't beaten anyone, but he had conquered the fear that almost kept him from trying. （全文不含首句约164词；原文要素全呼应：rocking from side to side、big toothy smile、never missed a practice、always finish、怕被嘲笑、森林路线；覆盖六维，句式含简单句/复合句/非谓语/独立主格） 五、范文解析 1. 词汇升级：简单词 → 高级词 原文简单词 升级表达 说明 hung his head drooped his head / hung his head in shame 更有画面感的"低头" picking at his shirt fidgeting with the hem of his shirt fidget 更准确表达"不安地摆弄" said gently softly reassured / murmured gently reassure 体现"安慰"的言语功能 his eyes glistening his eyes brimming with tears brim 更生动地表现"含泪" erupted into cheers burst into thunderous applause thunderous 更有气势 conquered the fear overcame the fear that had paralyzed him paralyze 强调恐惧的"束缚"作用 big toothy smile that familiar grin spreading across his face grin + spread 更生动 2. 长难句解析 句1：He hung his head, picking at the hem of his shirt, his usual big smile nowhere to be seen. • 句型：非谓语动词作伴随状语 + 独立主格结构 • 解析：picking at the hem of his shirt 是现在分词作伴随状语，表"抠着衣角"；his usual big smile nowhere to be seen 是独立主格结构（名词 + 不定式），表"他平时的大笑不见了"，与主句主语 he 不一致，故用独立主格。一个句子同时包含非谓语和独立主格，句式丰富，且"smile nowhere to be seen"直接呼应原文"His usual big toothy smile was absent today"。 句2：Soon the other runners disappeared into the trees, leaving David alone on the winding path. • 句型：非谓语动词作结果状语 • 解析：leaving David alone on the winding path 是现在分词作结果状语，表"其他选手跑进树林后，自然结果是 David 被独自留在蜿蜒小路上"。winding path 呼应原文的 route through thick evergreen forest，体现原文线索不浪费。 句3：Tears welled up in my eyes as he crossed the finish line, that familiar big toothy smile back on his face. • 句型：时间状语从句 + 独立主格结构 • 解析：as 引导时间状语从句，表"当他冲线时"；that familiar big toothy smile back on his face 是独立主格结构（名词 + 介词短语），表"他那熟悉的大笑又回到了脸上"。此处与第一段"his usual big smile nowhere to be seen"形成首尾呼应，smile 从 absent 到 back，完成情绪闭环。 句4：He hadn't beaten anyone, but he had conquered the fear that almost kept him from trying. • 句型：并列复合句 + 定语从句 + 升华主题 • 解析：but 连接两个并列分句，表转折；that almost kept him from trying 是定语从句，修饰 fear，"差点让他不敢尝试的恐惧"。全句是点睛之笔：没有赢过任何人，但战胜了自己的恐惧——点出"战胜自我"的主题，与原文"strong determination"呼应。 3. 原文要素呼应表（物尽其用） 原文要素 范文中的呼应 rocking from side to side 第二段"His small body rocked from side to side as he swung his feet forward" big toothy smile absent 第一段"his usual big smile nowhere to be seen" → 结尾"big toothy smile back on his face" never missed a single practice 第一段对话"you've never missed a single practice" always finished (long after others) 第一段对话"and you always finish" → 第二段坚持到最后冲线 afraid kids would laugh at him 第一段"What if they laugh?" → 结尾观众是"genuine cheers"而非嘲笑 thick evergreen forest / route 第二段"disappeared into the trees""winding path""emerged from the forest" special education teacher "我"的鼓励话语体现专业与耐心 六、背诵模板（填空版） 以下模板适用于"个人成长·克服困难"类读后续写，背诵后可直接套用。 第一段模板（鼓励/安慰场景） We sat down next to each other, but [主角] wouldn't look at me. [主角] [动作1], [非谓语描写不安], [独立主格表情绪缺失]. [环境描写一句]. "[用事实鼓励的话]," I said gently, "[继续鼓励]." [主角] glanced up, [独立主格表含泪]. "[表达恐惧的话]?" [主角] whispered. "[接纳恐惧+给予支持的话]," I replied. Something shifted in [主角]'s expression, and [主角] slowly nodded. 第二段模板（坚持/冲线场景） I watched as [主角] moved up to the starting line with the other runners. [主角]'s body [动作特征], just like always. Soon the other runners [动作], leaving [主角] alone on [地点]. But [主角] kept going, one determined step at a time, [独立主格表专注]. When [主角] finally [动作], the crowd erupted into [欢呼/反应]. Tears welled up in my eyes as [主角] [动作], [独立主格表情绪回归]. [主角] hadn't [表面结果], but [主角] had conquered [升华主题]. 模板填空练习（用本题内容填空） 第一段： We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. He ________, ________, his usual big smile ________. The forest around us ________. "David, you've ________," I said gently, "and you ________." He glanced up briefly, ________. "________?" he whispered. "________," I replied, "but ________." Something shifted in his expression, and he slowly nodded. 第二段： I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. His small body ________, just like always. Soon the other runners ________, leaving David alone on ________. But he kept going, one determined step at a time, ________. When he finally ________, the crowd erupted into ________. Tears welled up in my eyes as he ________, that familiar big toothy smile ________. He hadn't ________, but he had conquered ________. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $