第06讲 对话描写公式（微技能）2027年高考英语一轮复习读后续写高分突破

该高中英语讲义聚焦高考书面表达核心考点对话描写，以“原则层-公式层-润色层-句型层-融合层”五维递进架构整合四原则、万能公式等技法，通过技法精修梳理考点，好句赏析提供范例，实战演练（微场景+高考真题）强化应用，帮助学生构建系统的对话写作知识网络和解题思路。 资料创新采用“对话描写公式”五招体系，如“无标签动作式”模型通过动作链融合台词，培养学生语言表达能力和思维品质。设置分层练习，从基础微场景到高考真题，配合即时技法迁移，确保学生在有限时间内掌握高分策略，为教师把控复习节奏、提升学生应考能力提供有力支持。

第06讲 对话描写公式 内容导航 01 笔法堂·技法精修 核心技法讲解（分技法点） 对话描写公式（5 招） ①四原则：寒暄省·主题藏·变中见·悬念张 ②万能公式：Voice+Facial+Body+Thought ③五大润色：副词·并列·介短·分词·从句 ④八大模型：伴随·从句·并列·接力·前置·定从·方式·无标签 ⑤对话动作融合：把台词写进动作链 对话 = 情节推进器 + 性格显影剂 02 品鉴台·好句赏析 高考金句+模拟金句 03 微场景·实战演练1 情景描写+技法迁移 04 高考场·实战演练2 高考真题+模拟题 笔法堂·技法精修 【技法总览】对话描写公式 · 5 大技法（先定原则，再套公式，最后配动作） ◇ 原则层（1 招）：①对话四原则——寒暄省 · 主题藏 · 变中见 · 悬念张 ◇ 公式层（1 招）：②万能公式——Voice + Facial expression + Body language + Thought ◇ 润色层（1 招）：③五大润色——加副词 · 加并列 · 加介短 · 加分词 · 加从句 ◇ 句型层（1 招）：④八大对话模型——伴随/从句/并列/接力/前置/定从/方式/无标签 ◇ 融合层（1 招）：⑤对话 + 动作融合——把台词写进动作链，show 而不是 tell 技法一　对话四原则——寒暄省·主题藏·变中见·悬念张 核心口诀：对话不是聊天记录：先砍掉"你好吗""我很好"这类寒暄，让人物一开口就直奔主题；每句台词要么藏着主题，要么显出人物的转变，要么把悬念往上再拉一格。 高考常用词：直入主题 direct opening / 推动情节 push the plot / 展示转变 show the change / 制造悬念 raise the stakes / 每段对话不超过两句 范例： • "How much do we still need to pay for a new truck?" asked my mother. "买辆新卡车我们还差多少钱？"妈妈问道。（开口即冲突，无一句寒暄） • "You can't stop me. It's my choice," he said, meeting my eyes for the first time. "你拦不住我，这是我自己的选择。"他说着，第一次直视我的眼睛。（台词显出人物转变） • "There's something I never told you about that night," she said, and then fell silent. "关于那晚，有件事我从没告诉过你。"她说完就沉默了。（把悬念往上拉一格） 小贴士：动笔前先问自己三句话：这句台词推动情节了吗？暴露性格了吗？留下钩子了吗？三个都答"没有"，就删掉。每段对话最多两句，两段四句足矣。 技法二　万能公式——Voice + Facial + Body + Thought 核心口诀：一句"他说"太干，给它加四味料：Voice（怎么说）+ Facial（脸上什么表情）+ Body（身体在做什么）+ Thought（心里在想什么），任选二三味即可成句。 高考常用词：said forcefully / in a low voice 低声 / who looked as if… 看上去像 / with a smile on his face / leaning forward 身体前倾 / clenching his fists 攥紧拳头 / hoping that… 心里盼着 范例： • "I hate them," screamed Shmuel angrily, clenching his fists. "我恨他们。"什穆埃尔愤怒地尖叫着，攥紧了拳头。（Voice + Body） • "I'm sorry," he said in a low voice, his eyes filled with regret. "对不起。"他低声说，眼里满是悔意。（Voice + Facial） • "You can do it," she whispered, patting my shoulder. "你可以的。"她轻声说着，拍了拍我的肩。（Voice + Body） 小贴士：四味料别一次全上——两味最稳，三味已是长句上限。人物情绪越激烈，越优先加 Body；情绪越隐忍，越优先加 Facial 与 Thought。 技法三　五大润色——副词·并列·介短·分词·从句 核心口诀：把光秃秃的 he said 打扮起来，只有五种加法：加副词、加并列动词、加介词短语、加分词短语、加状语从句。记住五个"加"，考场上随手就能润色。 高考常用词：加副词 he repeated forcefully / 加并列 he added, and shook his head / 加介短 with a sincere tone, in a shaky voice / 加分词 asked Mr. Foster, making his tone professional / 加从句 he said, as though he had recognized the allusion 范例： • "I don't think so," he added, and shook his head. "我可不这么认为。"他补充道，摇了摇头。（并列动词） • "Let's begin, shall we?" asked Mr. Foster, making his tone professional. "我们开始吧？"福斯特先生问道，刻意让语气显得professional。（分词短语） • "Watch out!" she shouted, her voice trembling. "小心！"她大喊，声音发颤。（独立主格 + 介短式润色） 小贴士：五招里"加副词"最省力但最易滥用——句中已有 fantastic、hate 这类强情绪词时，就别再补 happily、angrily。宁可换一个更准的"说"（screamed / murmured / sighed），也不要堆副词。 技法四　八大对话模型——从伴随动作到无标签动作 核心口诀：考场上不必现编句式，八个模型轮着用：①伴随动作 ②状语从句 ③并列谓语 ④接力对话 ⑤前置动作 ⑥定语从句 ⑦方式状语 ⑧无标签动作。 高考常用词：said, doing/done… / said, as/when/as if… / said, and did… / said, "…" / did, did, and said… / said sb, who… / replied with a smile / "…" + 动作句 范例： • ① 伴随动作式："I didn't know what I was doing," she said, laughing. say 后接 doing/done 作伴随状语，引号内用逗号收尾。 • ② 状语从句式："Watch out!" she shouted, as the car started to move. say 后接 as/when/before/as if 从句，把台词钉在具体时间点上。 • ③ 并列谓语式："Good morning, children!" said the minister, and he kindly shook hands with both. say 后接 and + 并列动作，一句话说完顺手把动作也交代了。 • ④ 接力对话式："There was a letter from Prince Andrew today," he said. "Haven't you read it?" 对话标签插在两句台词之间，读起来有停顿感，也便于换气。 • ⑤ 前置动作式：He paused, looked straight into her eyes, and said, "That's true." 先连做几个动作再开口，引号内首字母大写，最能酝酿气氛。 • ⑥ 定语从句式："I don't know," said Zeb, who was still confused. 主语后加 who 从句，补充说话人此刻的状态或身份。 • ⑦ 方式状语式："Of course," Nancy replied with a smile. say 后接副词或 with/in 短语，一笔点明说话的方式。 • ⑧ 无标签动作式："I don't believe you any more." He turned around, slammed the door and stormed out. 干脆不写"说"，用动作接住台词，冲突感最强。 小贴士：①③⑤⑦ 是最安全的四个，先练熟；④⑧ 用在情绪爆发或诀别处最出彩。注意标点：用①②③⑦时引号内以逗号收尾，用⑤⑧时引号内用句号或叹号。 技法五　对话+动作融合——把台词写进动作链 核心口诀：最高级的对话不是"说"出来的，而是"做"出来的：让人物在动作链里顺手把话说了，读者看见的是画面，不是台词。 高考常用词：Burning with anger, he glared at me, yelling… / Smiling, she handed me the note, whispering… / Sighing with relief, she said… / her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled / hugged them and burst out crying 范例： • Burning with anger, he glared at me, yelling, "You're such an idiot." 怒火中烧的他瞪着我，吼道："你真是个白痴。"（情绪→动作→台词，一气呵成） • Smiling, she handed me the note, whispering, "Read this later." 她笑着把纸条递给我，低声说："等会儿再看。"（动作在前，台词收尾） • Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her son. "Everyone is unique. Just follow your heart." 她冲儿子微笑时，眼里映着烛光。"每个人都是独一无二的，跟着自己的心走。"（先给画面，再让台词落下） 小贴士：当你想写 "he said angrily" 时，改成"动作 + 台词"几乎总是更好：show 而不是 tell。这一招也是治"对话标签滥用症"的特效药。 品鉴台·好句赏析 【真题临摹】 1.（2026·浙江首考《寻牛记》）"我"温声安抚受惊的牛，同时轻拍它的背。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 2.（2024·省联考《聪明的海豚》）希尔达笑吟吟地揭晓玛雅的秘密。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 3.（2021·浙江卷《少年打工记》）妈妈开口就是钱的缺口，一句寒暄都没有。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 4.（2023·新高考《写作比赛》）老师握着"我"的手道贺。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 5.（2022·新高考《身残志坚的男孩》）"我"用真诚的语气肯定他的准备。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 6.（2022·浙江卷《无家可归的人》）流浪者们眉开眼笑，轻声道谢又鞠躬致意。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 7.（2021·高考卷《母亲节的惊喜》）父亲一边回应妈妈的激动，一边冲孩子们眨眼。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 8.（2021·浙江首考《尴尬的万圣节》）南瓜壳里的"我"惊慌大喊，声音大得反常。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 9.（2018·浙江卷《骑马遇险》）保罗叔叔隔着院子喊话叮嘱，一句分成两半说。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 10.（2017·浙江卷《骑行遇狼》）麦克声音发抖地回忆那场噩梦，眼里泛起泪光。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 【模拟题实战】 1.（2026·广东佛山·一模《被叫23号的女孩》）老师带着暖意打来电话报喜。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 2.（2026·广东汕尾·一模《车主来过了》）他说出这句话时，语气里有一种意料之外的骄傲。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 3.（2026·湖北八校·一模《冰棒铃铛》）"我"望着孩子们期待的脸，心里嘀咕自己惹了什么麻烦。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 4.（2026·河北沧州·一模《圣诞礼物》）朗太太一边说等你很久了，一边把盒子递过来。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 5.（2026·安徽芜湖·一模《AI作文风波》）凯茜直视杰克的眼睛，把最关键的问题抛出来。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 6.（2026·安徽淮北·一模《海边的歌》）父亲不夸奖，只说了一句关于"你自己的歌"的话。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 7.（2026·广东顺德区·一模《火桥救援》）陌生人语气坚定，混乱中声音格外沉稳。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 8.（2026·湖南邵阳·一模《大象与灯笼》）拉维带着腼腆的笑解释大象的寓意。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 9.（2026·湖北十堰·一模《老员工加里》）她先看了看加里，又转回来，语气轻柔地说出内情。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 10.（2026·福建泉州·一模《旧书店》）老人叹着气说也许是时候了，手还搭在旧书上。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景·实战演练1 微场景1　争执后的道歉 和同桌为一件小事吵翻后，两人一整天没说话。放学时我在教室门口拦住了他。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景2　久别重逢 三年没见的小学同桌在地铁站叫住了我，我愣了两秒才认出她。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景3　秘密的分享 晚自习后，好友把我拉到走廊尽头，说有件事憋了很久。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景4　误会解开 我一直以为班长故意漏掉了我的名字，直到那天他把改了三遍的名单递到我面前。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景5　鼓励队友 接力赛第三棒的队友掉了棒，蹲在跑道边不肯起来。我跑过去把他拉起。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景6　拒绝诱惑 考试前一晚，同学发来一张所谓的"押题答案"，说只有几个人有。我盯着屏幕看了很久。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景7　向父母坦白 月考成绩单被我压在抽屉底下三天。周五晚上，我把它拿出来放到饭桌上。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 微场景8　安慰失落的友人 落选校队的那天，他一个人坐在空荡荡的看台上，谁也不理。我买了两瓶水走过去。 ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________ 高考场·实战演练2 【高考真题】2025年6月高考2卷（名字架起文化桥） “What is your name? ” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time. But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland. The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English. For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce. My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them. Every time I gave a self-introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did. Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates. I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter. I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me. After all, I did care about how others would think of me. I realized that if I didn’t stop, the entire lecture would be ruined. “It’s okay, professor,” I shrugged (耸肩). The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter. I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further. After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly. This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over-explain. However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity. 注意： (1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 In a class discussion I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【模拟题】2026年广东大湾区一模——《画里的大狗》 Jack looked out of the car window when he and his mom passed their old neighborhood. His fingers tapped nervously on his backpack as his mom told him the moving company had found some lost boxes from their recent move, and she could get them that afternoon. A feeling of hope rose in Jack’ s heart. He asked quietly if Big Dog might be in the boxes. Grandpa had bought the treasured toy dog for him at the fair three years before. Though now eight years old, Jack still needed his old friend back on the shelf above his bed, which had been empty since they moved. His mom said she wasn’t sure. Her voice trembled as she added that the photo albums were confirmed lost by the company — all those precious pictures of festive occasions, birthday celebrations, and family gatherings were gone. Jack recognized that voice, the one that she used when trying to be strong. He knew what the albums meant to her. She promised to check the boxes carefully before picking him up, giving his shoulder a comforting pat (轻拍)。 All day at school, Jack found it hard to sit still, his eyes constantly darting (瞟) to the clock. During math class, he missed Big Dog’s lovely eyes. At lunch, he recalled Grandma’s warm hug and bright smile from those lost photos. On the playground, his mind wandered back to the joy of their whole family together-laughing and running along the beach under a clear blue sky. As the art class bell finally rang, Mr. Light announced, “Today you are free to draw anything you wish.” Jack stared at the blank paper, memories rushing back. The sad face of his mom popped up and then an idea came to him — maybe he could find a new way to save those memories. 注意： (1)续写词数应为150个左右; (2)请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 He knew what he could draw. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ After school, Jack rushed to his mom, with the drawing in his hand. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【模拟题】2026年重庆巴蜀中学一模——《雪夜街区》 This was West Central in the early 2000s, a neighborhood of middle-class people born and raised by the tracks, people who never dreamed of leaving. Much has changed since then.Luxury apartments have replaced the rusted trains. It’s barely snowed three inches this month. Outside my window, another cold rain slaps Spofford Avenue. The park across the street is empty, a mess of dead-brown grass and dry leaves. In my dreams, though, I see drifts of snow that are deep and blue enough to bury the moon.These are dreams of boyhood, of the gang of neighborhood boys who defined it. Back then, a couple feet of snow meant no school, and we played football every day. Snow Bowls, as I remember them, were wild, violent events, a cross between sport and warfare. Without helmets or pads, we occasionally knocked each other unconscious. We broke wrists and bit ankles. On snow days, we gathered on the big field behind our high school, where we’d pick teams, four or five a side. The captains were always the same. Matt Moore was a captain because he was faster and stronger than the rest of us and actually had experience playing organized football. Jimmy White was the other because he brought the football, and he believed supplying the equipment somehow gave him the right. The games were untimed and there were hardly any rules. We played until the snow melted under our feet, or until someone got seriously hurt. The best Snow Bowls occurred when snow was still falling, covering our tracks and silencing the world around us. In the evenings, we’d play under the field lights, feeling like pros. Two decades later, I’m the only former Snow Bowler who still resides in Spokane. The ones who moved away like to ask me for updates on home, as if our city is an elderly relative dying from cancer, and I’m the lone caregiver. I always steer (引导) our conversations back to the weather, especially the startling lack of snow this winter. 注意： 1.写作词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【模拟题】2026年河北承德一模——山里的来信 The bell above the bakery door sounded, marking the end of another long day. Six-year-old Ana watched her mother, Elena, wipe flour-dusted hands on her apron (围裙)—the same faded blue one she wore every day. Her mother’s dress, a simple grey shift washed thin at the elbows, was as constant as the sunrise. Tomorrow was Mama’s birthday. A secret, heavy with love, sat in Ana’s chest. Mama never bought clothes for herself. Her gifts were the warm bread on the table, the quiet mending of Ana’s socks, and the gentle song she hummed while making bread. Ana’s biggest wish was to wrap her love in something beautiful: a new dress, the color of the sky just after dawn. But coins were for flour and eggs, not for dreams. As Elena locked the door, an idea started to form and grow in Ana’s mind. She would grow her gift, like the seeds in the window box. The next morning, Ana became a tiny, determined entrepreneur. She gathered fallen flowers from the geraniums (天竺葵) by the step, threading them onto strings to make “necklaces”. She drew careful pictures of their bakery, selling them to kindly neighbors for a penny. She even offered to carefully dust old Mr. Henderson’s collection of tin soldier statues, her small face serious with effort. Her piggy bank began to whisper with a few lonely coins. Days passed. Her piggy bank grew heavier, but not heavy enough. On the eve of the birthday, Ana poured the coins onto her blanket. It wasn’t enough for a dress, not even a scarf. Downstairs, she found her mother at the kitchen table, mending that same grey dress by lamplight. The sight was a quiet ache. “Mama,” Ana whispered, the coins held firmly in her small fist. “I wanted to buy you a blue dress for tomorrow. But I only have this.” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Ana’s voice trembled (颤抖) as she opened her hand. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ “Oh, could you buy some multi-color threads for me?” Elena asked. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 19 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 第06讲 对话描写公式 内容导航 01 笔法堂·技法精修 核心技法讲解（分技法点） 对话描写公式（5 招） ①四原则：寒暄省·主题藏·变中见·悬念张 ②万能公式：Voice+Facial+Body+Thought ③五大润色：副词·并列·介短·分词·从句 ④八大模型：伴随·从句·并列·接力·前置·定从·方式·无标签 ⑤对话动作融合：把台词写进动作链 对话 = 情节推进器 + 性格显影剂 02 品鉴台·好句赏析 高考金句+模拟金句 03 微场景·实战演练1 情景描写+技法迁移 04 高考场·实战演练2 高考真题+模拟题 笔法堂·技法精修 【技法总览】对话描写公式 · 5 大技法（先定原则，再套公式，最后配动作） ◇ 原则层（1 招）：①对话四原则——寒暄省 · 主题藏 · 变中见 · 悬念张 ◇ 公式层（1 招）：②万能公式——Voice + Facial expression + Body language + Thought ◇ 润色层（1 招）：③五大润色——加副词 · 加并列 · 加介短 · 加分词 · 加从句 ◇ 句型层（1 招）：④八大对话模型——伴随/从句/并列/接力/前置/定从/方式/无标签 ◇ 融合层（1 招）：⑤对话 + 动作融合——把台词写进动作链，show 而不是 tell 技法一　对话四原则——寒暄省·主题藏·变中见·悬念张 核心口诀：对话不是聊天记录：先砍掉"你好吗""我很好"这类寒暄，让人物一开口就直奔主题；每句台词要么藏着主题，要么显出人物的转变，要么把悬念往上再拉一格。 高考常用词：直入主题 direct opening / 推动情节 push the plot / 展示转变 show the change / 制造悬念 raise the stakes / 每段对话不超过两句 范例： • "How much do we still need to pay for a new truck?" asked my mother. "买辆新卡车我们还差多少钱？"妈妈问道。（开口即冲突，无一句寒暄） • "You can't stop me. It's my choice," he said, meeting my eyes for the first time. "你拦不住我，这是我自己的选择。"他说着，第一次直视我的眼睛。（台词显出人物转变） • "There's something I never told you about that night," she said, and then fell silent. "关于那晚，有件事我从没告诉过你。"她说完就沉默了。（把悬念往上拉一格） 小贴士：动笔前先问自己三句话：这句台词推动情节了吗？暴露性格了吗？留下钩子了吗？三个都答"没有"，就删掉。每段对话最多两句，两段四句足矣。 技法二　万能公式——Voice + Facial + Body + Thought 核心口诀：一句"他说"太干，给它加四味料：Voice（怎么说）+ Facial（脸上什么表情）+ Body（身体在做什么）+ Thought（心里在想什么），任选二三味即可成句。 高考常用词：said forcefully / in a low voice 低声 / who looked as if… 看上去像 / with a smile on his face / leaning forward 身体前倾 / clenching his fists 攥紧拳头 / hoping that… 心里盼着 范例： • "I hate them," screamed Shmuel angrily, clenching his fists. "我恨他们。"什穆埃尔愤怒地尖叫着，攥紧了拳头。（Voice + Body） • "I'm sorry," he said in a low voice, his eyes filled with regret. "对不起。"他低声说，眼里满是悔意。（Voice + Facial） • "You can do it," she whispered, patting my shoulder. "你可以的。"她轻声说着，拍了拍我的肩。（Voice + Body） 小贴士：四味料别一次全上——两味最稳，三味已是长句上限。人物情绪越激烈，越优先加 Body；情绪越隐忍，越优先加 Facial 与 Thought。 技法三　五大润色——副词·并列·介短·分词·从句 核心口诀：把光秃秃的 he said 打扮起来，只有五种加法：加副词、加并列动词、加介词短语、加分词短语、加状语从句。记住五个"加"，考场上随手就能润色。 高考常用词：加副词 he repeated forcefully / 加并列 he added, and shook his head / 加介短 with a sincere tone, in a shaky voice / 加分词 asked Mr. Foster, making his tone professional / 加从句 he said, as though he had recognized the allusion 范例： • "I don't think so," he added, and shook his head. "我可不这么认为。"他补充道，摇了摇头。（并列动词） • "Let's begin, shall we?" asked Mr. Foster, making his tone professional. "我们开始吧？"福斯特先生问道，刻意让语气显得professional。（分词短语） • "Watch out!" she shouted, her voice trembling. "小心！"她大喊，声音发颤。（独立主格 + 介短式润色） 小贴士：五招里"加副词"最省力但最易滥用——句中已有 fantastic、hate 这类强情绪词时，就别再补 happily、angrily。宁可换一个更准的"说"（screamed / murmured / sighed），也不要堆副词。 技法四　八大对话模型——从伴随动作到无标签动作 核心口诀：考场上不必现编句式，八个模型轮着用：①伴随动作 ②状语从句 ③并列谓语 ④接力对话 ⑤前置动作 ⑥定语从句 ⑦方式状语 ⑧无标签动作。 高考常用词：said, doing/done… / said, as/when/as if… / said, and did… / said, "…" / did, did, and said… / said sb, who… / replied with a smile / "…" + 动作句 范例： • ① 伴随动作式："I didn't know what I was doing," she said, laughing. say 后接 doing/done 作伴随状语，引号内用逗号收尾。 • ② 状语从句式："Watch out!" she shouted, as the car started to move. say 后接 as/when/before/as if 从句，把台词钉在具体时间点上。 • ③ 并列谓语式："Good morning, children!" said the minister, and he kindly shook hands with both. say 后接 and + 并列动作，一句话说完顺手把动作也交代了。 • ④ 接力对话式："There was a letter from Prince Andrew today," he said. "Haven't you read it?" 对话标签插在两句台词之间，读起来有停顿感，也便于换气。 • ⑤ 前置动作式：He paused, looked straight into her eyes, and said, "That's true." 先连做几个动作再开口，引号内首字母大写，最能酝酿气氛。 • ⑥ 定语从句式："I don't know," said Zeb, who was still confused. 主语后加 who 从句，补充说话人此刻的状态或身份。 • ⑦ 方式状语式："Of course," Nancy replied with a smile. say 后接副词或 with/in 短语，一笔点明说话的方式。 • ⑧ 无标签动作式："I don't believe you any more." He turned around, slammed the door and stormed out. 干脆不写"说"，用动作接住台词，冲突感最强。 小贴士：①③⑤⑦ 是最安全的四个，先练熟；④⑧ 用在情绪爆发或诀别处最出彩。注意标点：用①②③⑦时引号内以逗号收尾，用⑤⑧时引号内用句号或叹号。 技法五　对话+动作融合——把台词写进动作链 核心口诀：最高级的对话不是"说"出来的，而是"做"出来的：让人物在动作链里顺手把话说了，读者看见的是画面，不是台词。 高考常用词：Burning with anger, he glared at me, yelling… / Smiling, she handed me the note, whispering… / Sighing with relief, she said… / her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled / hugged them and burst out crying 范例： • Burning with anger, he glared at me, yelling, "You're such an idiot." 怒火中烧的他瞪着我，吼道："你真是个白痴。"（情绪→动作→台词，一气呵成） • Smiling, she handed me the note, whispering, "Read this later." 她笑着把纸条递给我，低声说："等会儿再看。"（动作在前，台词收尾） • Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her son. "Everyone is unique. Just follow your heart." 她冲儿子微笑时，眼里映着烛光。"每个人都是独一无二的，跟着自己的心走。"（先给画面，再让台词落下） 小贴士：当你想写 "he said angrily" 时，改成"动作 + 台词"几乎总是更好：show 而不是 tell。这一招也是治"对话标签滥用症"的特效药。 品鉴台·好句赏析 【真题临摹】 1.（2026·浙江首考《寻牛记》）"我"温声安抚受惊的牛，同时轻拍它的背。 "I herded cows on a farm and can help calm it down," I said in a gentle tone, patting its back softly. 【解析】技法二（万能公式 Voice + Body）。in a gentle tone 交代"怎么说"，patting its back softly 用分词补上"说的同时手在做什么"，一句台词同时给出语气与动作，比干写 I said 信息量翻倍。 2.（2024·省联考《聪明的海豚》）希尔达笑吟吟地揭晓玛雅的秘密。 "This is Maya's secret," Hilda said with a big smile. 【解析】技法四（模型⑦方式状语式）。say 后直接挂 with a big smile，一个介词短语点明说话方式，比 Hilda said happily 更具画面，也避开了副词滥用。 3.（2021·浙江卷《少年打工记》）妈妈开口就是钱的缺口，一句寒暄都没有。 "How much do we still need to pay for a new truck?" asked my mother. 【解析】技法一（对话四原则·寒暄省）。母亲一开口就直奔"还差多少钱"，把家庭困境瞬间摆上台面；若先写 "How are you, dear?" 就成了废话对话，反而稀释冲突。 4.（2023·新高考《写作比赛》）老师握着"我"的手道贺。 Holding my hands, he said "Congratulations!" 【解析】技法四（模型⑤前置动作式）。先用分词写出"握手"这一动作再让人物开口，读者先看见画面再听见台词，比 He said congratulations and held my hands 顺序更自然、更有温度。 5.（2022·新高考《身残志坚的男孩》）"我"用真诚的语气肯定他的准备。 "You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here", I added with a sincere tone. 【解析】技法三（五大润色·加介词短语）。用 added 替换 said 点出"补充说"，再加 with a sincere tone 交代语气，两处小改动就把平淡的对话标签润色成得分点。 6.（2022·浙江卷《无家可归的人》）流浪者们眉开眼笑，轻声道谢又鞠躬致意。 Upon seeing it, every one of them beamed with smile, gently murmured "Thank you" and bowed to me sincerely, which brought warmth straight into my heart. 【解析】技法五（对话 + 动作融合）。台词被夹在"绽笑—低语—鞠躬"的动作链中间，读者看到的是一整幅画面而不是一句台词，比 They said thank you happily 高出一个档次。 7.（2021·高考卷《母亲节的惊喜》）父亲一边回应妈妈的激动，一边冲孩子们眨眼。 "They have known how to take care of others." Father said in response to her excitement, winking at Jenna and Jef. 【解析】技法四（模型①伴随动作式）。say 后接 winking… 分词伴随，一个眨眼就把父子间的默契写活了，比再补一句 He was proud of them 含蓄得多。 8.（2021·浙江首考《尴尬的万圣节》）南瓜壳里的"我"惊慌大喊，声音大得反常。 "I can't get it out!" I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space. 【解析】技法二（万能公式 Voice）。用 shouted 替换 said 定住音量，再用独立主格 my voice sounding… 描述封闭空间里的回声，把"慌"写成了可听见的声音。 9.（2018·浙江卷《骑马遇险》）保罗叔叔隔着院子喊话叮嘱，一句分成两半说。 "Don't be late for supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep to the track so that you don't get lost!" 【解析】技法四（模型④接力对话式）。对话标签插在两截台词之间，读起来自带停顿与喘息，比一口气说完更像真人喊话；注意后半句首字母小写、前面用逗号。 10.（2017·浙江卷《骑行遇狼》）麦克声音发抖地回忆那场噩梦，眼里泛起泪光。 "It was really a nightmare and I thought I was going to die," said Mac in a shaky voice, tears gathering in his eyes. 【解析】技法三（五大润色·加介短 + 独立主格）。in a shaky voice 写声音，tears gathering in his eyes 写神态，两处润色叠在同一个对话标签上，惊魂未定的样子跃然纸上。 【模拟题实战】 1.（2026·广东佛山·一模《被叫23号的女孩》）老师带着暖意打来电话报喜。 The teacher's voice was filled with warmth as she said, "I'm just calling because I have some wonderful news about Anna." 【解析】技法四（模型②状语从句式）。用 as 从句把"声音里带着暖意"和"开口说话"绑在同一时刻，比先写 Her voice was warm. She said… 两句拆开更紧凑。 2.（2026·广东汕尾·一模《车主来过了》）他说出这句话时，语气里有一种意料之外的骄傲。 "The car owner has been here," he said with a pride I hadn't anticipated. 【解析】技法三（五大润色·加介词短语）。with a pride… 不仅点出语气，还借"我没料到"暗示人物关系的转折，一个介短同时完成润色与铺垫。 3.（2026·湖北八校·一模《冰棒铃铛》）"我"望着孩子们期待的脸，心里嘀咕自己惹了什么麻烦。 Looking into their eager young faces, I wondered, "What have I started?" 【解析】技法四（模型⑤前置动作式）。先用分词写"望着孩子们的脸"，再让内心独白落下，读者先看画面后听心声，比 I wondered what I had started 生动得多。 4.（2026·河北沧州·一模《圣诞礼物》）朗太太一边说等你很久了，一边把盒子递过来。 "I've been waiting for you," she said, handing me a box. 【解析】技法四（模型①伴随动作式）。say 后接 handing… 分词伴随，说话与递盒同时发生，一句话既有台词又有动作，是考场上最保险的对话写法。 5.（2026·安徽芜湖·一模《AI作文风波》）凯茜直视杰克的眼睛，把最关键的问题抛出来。 Cathy looked straight into his eyes and asked, "Jack, I need you to tell me the truth — did you write this essay entirely on your own?" 【解析】技法一（对话四原则·悬念张）+ 技法四（模型⑤前置动作式）。先用两个连续动作压住气氛，再抛出直击要害的问题，台词本身就是悬念钩子，读者必须往下看。 6.（2026·安徽淮北·一模《海边的歌》）父亲不夸奖，只说了一句关于"你自己的歌"的话。 He did not offer compliments; instead, he said, "The song doesn't need to be perfect; it just needs to be yours." 【解析】技法一（对话四原则·主题藏）。父亲这句台词把全文主题"做自己"直接说了出来，却不显说教，比作者跳出来议论更自然，也为女儿的转变埋下伏笔。 7.（2026·广东顺德区·一模《火桥救援》）陌生人语气坚定，混乱中声音格外沉稳。 "I'll take care of him," he said firmly, his voice calm amidst the chaos. 【解析】技法二（万能公式 Voice）+ 技法三（加副词）。firmly 定语气，独立主格 his voice calm… 再把这份沉稳放进"混乱"的背景里对比，人物形象一句立住。 8.（2026·湖南邵阳·一模《大象与灯笼》）拉维带着腼腆的笑解释大象的寓意。 "In my culture, the elephant symbolizes good luck and friendship," Ravi explained with a shy smile. 【解析】技法四（模型⑦方式状语式）。用 explained 替换 said 点出"解释"这一目的，再加 with a shy smile 写神态，跨文化交流场景里的分寸感全在这半句里。 9.（2026·湖北十堰·一模《老员工加里》）她先看了看加里，又转回来，语气轻柔地说出内情。 Upon hearing my tentative words, she glanced toward Gary, then back at me, and said gently, "Gary was the boss's first employee." 【解析】技法五（对话 + 动作融合）。"瞥一眼—转回来—轻声说"三个动作串成一条链，台词落在链尾，把欲言又止的犹豫写得有画面，比 She told me gently 高出一档。 10.（2026·福建泉州·一模《旧书店》）老人叹着气说也许是时候了，手还搭在旧书上。 "Maybe it's time, David," he sighed, his hand resting on a dusty copy of his favorite novel. 【解析】技法三（五大润色·换说 + 独立主格）。sighed 替换 said 就把不舍写了出来，独立主格 his hand resting… 让手停在旧书上，"舍不得"三个字一个也没写却处处都是。 微场景·实战演练1 微场景1　争执后的道歉 和同桌为一件小事吵翻后，两人一整天没说话。放学时我在教室门口拦住了他。 【技法清单】对话四原则 · 万能公式 I stopped him at the door, my fingers twisting the strap of my bag. "I'm sorry," I said in a low voice, my eyes fixed on the floor. "Forget it," he said, and punched my shoulder lightly. 【解析】技法一（四原则·寒暄省）：一开口就道歉，不铺垫寒暄；技法二（万能公式 Voice + Facial）：in a low voice 加 my eyes fixed on the floor，把愧疚写成看得见的姿态；技法三（加并列）：said, and punched… 用并列动作代替"他原谅了我"。 微场景2　久别重逢 三年没见的小学同桌在地铁站叫住了我，我愣了两秒才认出她。 【技法清单】对话四原则 · 八大模型① "Is that really you?" she cried, running toward me with her arms wide open. I froze for a second before my face broke into a grin. "Three years," I said, hugging her tightly, "and you still walk like that." 【解析】技法四（模型①伴随动作式）：cried, running toward me 让喊声和奔跑同步；技法四（模型④接力对话式）：把 I said 插进两截台词中间，重逢时那种断断续续的语气就出来了；技法一（悬念张）：以"你走路还是那样"收尾，留出回忆的余味。 微场景3　秘密的分享 晚自习后，好友把我拉到走廊尽头，说有件事憋了很久。 【技法清单】万能公式 · 八大模型⑤ She looked around, lowered her voice, and said, "Promise me you won't tell anyone." "I promise," I whispered, my heart beating faster than usual. She took a deep breath, her hands trembling slightly, and began her story. 【解析】技法四（模型⑤前置动作式）：三个连续动作先把气氛压住，台词落下时自然带着分量；技法二（万能公式 Voice + Thought）：whispered 加 my heart beating faster，说话音量与心跳同时交代；技法二（Body）：her hands trembling 让"紧张"看得见。 微场景4　误会解开 我一直以为班长故意漏掉了我的名字，直到那天他把改了三遍的名单递到我面前。 【技法清单】八大模型② · 五大润色 · 对话四原则 "I rewrote it three times," he said, as he smoothed out the crumpled list on the desk. My face burned with shame. "I'm the one who should say sorry," I said quietly, unable to meet his eyes. 【解析】技法四（模型②状语从句式）：as 从句让"说话"与"抚平名单"同时发生，动作替他辩解；技法三（加副词 + 加分词）：said quietly 定音量，unable to meet his eyes 补神态；技法一（变中见）：两句台词完成从误解到愧疚的转变。 微场景5　鼓励队友 接力赛第三棒的队友掉了棒，蹲在跑道边不肯起来。我跑过去把他拉起。 【技法清单】万能公式 · 八大模型⑦ · 对话动作融合 Kneeling down beside him, I gripped his shoulder. "It's not over yet." "Everyone drops the baton once," I added with a grin, "and everyone picks it up." He wiped his face with his sleeve and stood up, feeling the strength come back to his legs. 【解析】技法五（对话 + 动作融合）：跪下、抓肩、台词落下，画面先行；技法四（模型⑦方式状语式）：added with a grin 用介短点明鼓励的语气；技法四（模型④接力对话式）：把标签插在两截台词之间，让这句安慰有停顿、更真诚。 微场景6　拒绝诱惑 考试前一晚，同学发来一张所谓的"押题答案"，说只有几个人有。我盯着屏幕看了很久。 【技法清单】对话四原则 · 八大模型⑧ · 五大润色 "Just this once," he urged, leaning closer to my desk. "No." I closed the phone, pushed it back across the table and picked up my pen. He stared at me for a moment, then laughed awkwardly and walked away. 【解析】技法四（模型⑧无标签动作式）：一个 "No." 之后全靠动作接住，拒绝的态度比任何形容词都硬；技法四（模型①伴随动作式）：urged, leaning closer 写出诱惑者的步步紧逼；技法一（四原则·寒暄省）：台词只有一个词，却把冲突推到顶点。 微场景7　向父母坦白 月考成绩单被我压在抽屉底下三天。周五晚上，我把它拿出来放到饭桌上。 【技法清单】万能公式 · 八大模型⑤ · 对话动作融合 I put the report card on the table, took a deep breath, and said, "There's something I have to tell you." Mum picked it up, her eyebrows drawing together. "I let you down," I said, my voice cracking, "but I know where I went wrong." 【解析】技法四（模型⑤前置动作式）：放成绩单、深呼吸、开口，三步把坦白的勇气写足；技法二（万能公式 Facial + Voice）：her eyebrows drawing together 写母亲的脸，my voice cracking 写我的声音；技法一（变中见）：末句从认错转到反思，人物的转变藏在台词里。 微场景8　安慰失落的友人 落选校队的那天，他一个人坐在空荡荡的看台上，谁也不理。我买了两瓶水走过去。 【技法清单】对话动作融合 · 八大模型① · 五大润色 Sitting down beside him, I handed him a bottle, saying nothing at first. "They didn't see what I saw today," I said at last, patting his back gently. He turned to me, his eyes red but a small smile forming. "Then you'd better keep watching." 【解析】技法五（对话 + 动作融合）：先坐下、递水、沉默，让安慰从动作开始；技法四（模型①伴随动作式）：said…, patting his back gently 把话和拍背绑在一起；技法四（模型⑧无标签动作式）：结尾用神态接住台词，苦涩里的笑意不写自明。 高考场·实战演练2 【高考真题】2025年6月高考2卷（名字架起文化桥） “What is your name? ” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time. But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland. The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English. For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce. My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them. Every time I gave a self-introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did. Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates. I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter. I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me. After all, I did care about how others would think of me. I realized that if I didn’t stop, the entire lecture would be ruined. “It’s okay, professor,” I shrugged (耸肩). The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter. I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further. After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly. This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over-explain. However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity. 注意： (1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 In a class discussion I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. Standing up, I felt a mix of nervousness and excitement. “My name, Qiuyu, combines the characters for autumn and rain in Chinese,” I began, my voice steady. “Autumn represents harvest and maturity, while rain symbolizes nourishment and growth. Together, they embody a time of abundance and renewal.” As I spoke, I noticed the rapt attention of my classmates, their eyes reflecting curiosity and respect. It was a moment of connection, a bridge built between cultures through the simple act of sharing my name. Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. They surrounded me, their questions pouring out like a stream. “What other names have beautiful meanings in Chinese?” “Can you teach us how to write our names in Chinese characters?” I smiled, feeling a warmth spread through me. I took out a piece of paper and began to sketch out characters, explaining each stroke and its significance. Through this interaction, I realized that by embracing my cultural identity, I was not only preserving my heritage but also enriching the lives of those around me. It was a small yet meaningful step towards fostering cultural understanding and appreciation. 【解析】 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，主要讲述了作者作为国际学生在爱尔兰因中文名字发音难而遭遇挑战，之后在一次课堂讨论中分享名字含义，意识到分享文化身份重要性，并借此与同学增进文化理解的故事。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“在课堂讨论中，我被邀请解释我名字的含义。”可知，第一段可描写作者在课堂讨论中解释自己名字的含义，并感受到同学们的专注和尊重，意识到这是一个文化交流的契机。 ②由第二段首句内容“我的许多同学都很感兴趣，下课后都来找我。”可知，第二段可描写课后同学们对作者名字背后的文化产生浓厚兴趣，纷纷提问，作者通过教他们写中文名字，进一步加深了彼此的文化理解和欣赏。 2.续写线索：课堂受邀请解释名字的含义——作者阐释名字的寓意——同学们专注倾听——同学们对名字背后的文化感兴趣——作者教他们写中文名字——感悟文化桥接 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①代表：represent/stand for ②解释：explain/illustrate ③保护：preserve/protect 情绪类 ①紧张：nervousness/tension ②兴奋：excitement/thrill 【点睛】【高分句型1】As I spoke, I noticed the rapt attention of my classmates, their eyes reflecting curiosity and respect.(运用了as引导的状语从句以及独立主格结构) 【高分句型2】Through this interaction, I realized that by embracing my cultural identity, I was not only preserving my heritage but also enriching the lives of those around me.(运用了that引导的宾语从句和“not only...but also...”连接两个并列结构) 【主题对接】 本篇范文运用了「招二·万能公式：Voice+Facial+Body+Thought」与「招四·八大模型·并列」——以「Standing up, I felt a mix of nervousness and and excitement. ‘My name, Qiuyu, combines the characters for autumn and rain in Chinese,’ I began, my voice steady.」与「They surrounded me, their questions pouring out like a stream. ‘What other names have beautiful meanings in Chinese?’ ‘Can you teach us how to write our names in Chinese characters?’」中两组直接引语并列推进对话，再用「questions pouring out like a stream」做群体对话背景音——四元素（Voice 直接引语+Facial 表情+Body 身体反应+Thought 心理独白）齐全。比单纯写「I told them about my name」人物互动饱满一倍。 【模拟题】2026年广东大湾区一模——《画里的大狗》 Jack looked out of the car window when he and his mom passed their old neighborhood. His fingers tapped nervously on his backpack as his mom told him the moving company had found some lost boxes from their recent move, and she could get them that afternoon. A feeling of hope rose in Jack’ s heart. He asked quietly if Big Dog might be in the boxes. Grandpa had bought the treasured toy dog for him at the fair three years before. Though now eight years old, Jack still needed his old friend back on the shelf above his bed, which had been empty since they moved. His mom said she wasn’t sure. Her voice trembled as she added that the photo albums were confirmed lost by the company — all those precious pictures of festive occasions, birthday celebrations, and family gatherings were gone. Jack recognized that voice, the one that she used when trying to be strong. He knew what the albums meant to her. She promised to check the boxes carefully before picking him up, giving his shoulder a comforting pat (轻拍)。 All day at school, Jack found it hard to sit still, his eyes constantly darting (瞟) to the clock. During math class, he missed Big Dog’s lovely eyes. At lunch, he recalled Grandma’s warm hug and bright smile from those lost photos. On the playground, his mind wandered back to the joy of their whole family together-laughing and running along the beach under a clear blue sky. As the art class bell finally rang, Mr. Light announced, “Today you are free to draw anything you wish.” Jack stared at the blank paper, memories rushing back. The sad face of his mom popped up and then an idea came to him — maybe he could find a new way to save those memories. 注意： (1)续写词数应为150个左右; (2)请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 He knew what he could draw. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ After school, Jack rushed to his mom, with the drawing in his hand. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 He knew what he could draw. Jack grabbed his crayons with determination. First he vividly depicted his seventh birthday: Grandma’s face beaming with a smile as he blew out the candles. Next came a sunny beach scene — his whole family laughing and running along the shore. Finally, he drew the special moment when Grandpa gave him Big Dog. He connected all these scenes into one big picture, leaving one corner empty for new memories. When the bell rang, he gently rolled up his masterpiece, eager to share it with his mom. After school, Jack rushed to his mom, with the drawing in his hand. Breathlessly, he showed her his artwork. Her eyes welled up as she recognized each precious moment. Overwhelmed, she pulled him into a warm hug and then revealed Big Dog, which she had found in the recovered boxes. Seeing his old friend, Jack leaped with great joy, clutching it to his chest. When his mom noticed the blank corner, she suggested drawing the whole family in their new house. In that moment, they realized it was love that kept memories alive, and that together, they could always create new ones. 【解析】 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了杰克和妈妈搬家后，心爱的玩具狗Big Dog失踪，相册也确认遗失，二人都十分难过。杰克在美术课上把珍贵的家庭回忆画成一幅画，想以此留住记忆。妈妈看到画作十分感动，同时拿出了找到的Big Dog，他们明白爱让记忆永存，还能创造新回忆。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“他清楚自己能画些什么”可知，第一段可描写杰克在美术课上把珍贵的家庭回忆画成一幅画，想以此留住记忆。 ②由第二段首句内容“放学后，杰克手里拿着画冲向妈妈”可知，第二段可描写妈妈看到画作十分感动，同时拿出了找到的Big Dog，他们明白爱让记忆永存，还能创造新回忆。 2.续写线索：杰克绘画——描绘家庭回忆——给妈妈看——妈妈感动——感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①描绘：depict/portray ②意识到：realize/be aware of ③看到：see/spot 情绪类 ①宝贵的：precious/valuable ②渴望：eager/raring 【点睛】[高分句型1] Her eyes welled up as she recognized each precious moment.（运用了as引导时间状语从句） [高分句型2] When his mom noticed the blank corner, she suggested drawing the whole family in their new house.（运用了when引导时间状语从句） 【模拟题】2026年重庆巴蜀中学一模——《雪夜街区》 This was West Central in the early 2000s, a neighborhood of middle-class people born and raised by the tracks, people who never dreamed of leaving. Much has changed since then.Luxury apartments have replaced the rusted trains. It’s barely snowed three inches this month. Outside my window, another cold rain slaps Spofford Avenue. The park across the street is empty, a mess of dead-brown grass and dry leaves. In my dreams, though, I see drifts of snow that are deep and blue enough to bury the moon.These are dreams of boyhood, of the gang of neighborhood boys who defined it. Back then, a couple feet of snow meant no school, and we played football every day. Snow Bowls, as I remember them, were wild, violent events, a cross between sport and warfare. Without helmets or pads, we occasionally knocked each other unconscious. We broke wrists and bit ankles. On snow days, we gathered on the big field behind our high school, where we’d pick teams, four or five a side. The captains were always the same. Matt Moore was a captain because he was faster and stronger than the rest of us and actually had experience playing organized football. Jimmy White was the other because he brought the football, and he believed supplying the equipment somehow gave him the right. The games were untimed and there were hardly any rules. We played until the snow melted under our feet, or until someone got seriously hurt. The best Snow Bowls occurred when snow was still falling, covering our tracks and silencing the world around us. In the evenings, we’d play under the field lights, feeling like pros. Two decades later, I’m the only former Snow Bowler who still resides in Spokane. The ones who moved away like to ask me for updates on home, as if our city is an elderly relative dying from cancer, and I’m the lone caregiver. I always steer (引导) our conversations back to the weather, especially the startling lack of snow this winter. 注意： 1.写作词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion. The proposal sent a shiver of nostalgia through me. But the idea wasn’t simply to meet and chat — it was about reviving the Snow Bowls. Within minutes, a chorus of replies flooded in — “Count me in!” “Let’s relive the madness!” Before the call ended, we had a date set and a location chosen: our old high school field. Yet as the day approached, the skies turned ominously gray. We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets. The cold stung my face as I stepped into the familiar field now blanketed in white. Laughter and shouted greetings echoed around me as old friends arrived. Without a word, we fell into our old routines — picking teams, dusting snow off the ball, and launching into a game that honored the spirit of our childhood. Rules were as carefree as they’d ever been, and the snow swallowed our shouts, just like old times. As I ran, breath crystallizing in the air, I felt a strange peace. Some things — this land, these people, the snow — would always be home. 【解析】 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开。文章回忆了作者童年在West Central社区和伙伴们在雪天无拘无束踢足球的快乐时光，二十年后社区物是人非，鲜少下雪。有人提议高中同学聚会，大家响应重办Snow Bowls的提议，在聚会当天下起大雪，众人回到旧球场重拾童年的足球乐趣，作者也在其中感受到熟悉的归属感。 【详解】1.段落续写 ①由第一段首句内容“上周末，有人提出了举办20年高中同学聚会的想法。”可知，第一段可描写聚会提议引发的反响，包括大家对重办Snow Bowls的热情响应，以及聚会前的期待和天气的变化。 ②由第二段首句内容“我们急忙跑到外面，果然，大雪纷飞。”可知，第二段可描写众人看到下雪后的行动，回到旧球场踢球的场景，以及作者在过程中的感受和对过往的怀念。 2.续写线索 聚会提议——响应重办Snow Bowls——期待聚会——天降大雪——重回旧球场——重拾童年踢球乐趣——感悟归属感 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①临近：approach / draw near ②回响；回荡：echo / reverberate ③涌入；蜂拥而至：flood in / pour in 情绪类 ①怀旧：nostalgia / reminiscence ②无拘无束的：carefree / uninhibited 【点睛】[高分句型1]Yet as the day approached, the skies turned ominously gray.（运用了as引导的时间状语从句） [高分句型2]Without a word, we fell into our old routines—picking teams, dusting snow off the ball, and launching into a game that honored the spirit of our childhood.（运用了that引导的定语从句） 【模拟题】2026年河北承德一模——山里的来信 The bell above the bakery door sounded, marking the end of another long day. Six-year-old Ana watched her mother, Elena, wipe flour-dusted hands on her apron (围裙)—the same faded blue one she wore every day. Her mother’s dress, a simple grey shift washed thin at the elbows, was as constant as the sunrise. Tomorrow was Mama’s birthday. A secret, heavy with love, sat in Ana’s chest. Mama never bought clothes for herself. Her gifts were the warm bread on the table, the quiet mending of Ana’s socks, and the gentle song she hummed while making bread. Ana’s biggest wish was to wrap her love in something beautiful: a new dress, the color of the sky just after dawn. But coins were for flour and eggs, not for dreams. As Elena locked the door, an idea started to form and grow in Ana’s mind. She would grow her gift, like the seeds in the window box. The next morning, Ana became a tiny, determined entrepreneur. She gathered fallen flowers from the geraniums (天竺葵) by the step, threading them onto strings to make “necklaces”. She drew careful pictures of their bakery, selling them to kindly neighbors for a penny. She even offered to carefully dust old Mr. Henderson’s collection of tin soldier statues, her small face serious with effort. Her piggy bank began to whisper with a few lonely coins. Days passed. Her piggy bank grew heavier, but not heavy enough. On the eve of the birthday, Ana poured the coins onto her blanket. It wasn’t enough for a dress, not even a scarf. Downstairs, she found her mother at the kitchen table, mending that same grey dress by lamplight. The sight was a quiet ache. “Mama,” Ana whispered, the coins held firmly in her small fist. “I wanted to buy you a blue dress for tomorrow. But I only have this.” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Ana’s voice trembled (颤抖) as she opened her hand. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ “Oh, could you buy some multi-color threads for me?” Elena asked. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Ana’s voice trembled (颤抖) as she opened her hand. The coins, polished by her tiny palms, gleamed under the lamplight. Elena’s eyes softened, and a gentle smile spread across her face. She reached out, cupping Ana’s face in her flour-dusted hands. “Sweetheart, this is the most precious gift I’ve ever received. But let’s think of something else we can do together to celebrate my birthday.” Ana looked at her mother, confusion and disappointment in her eyes, but she nodded slowly. “Oh, could you buy some multi-color threads for me?” Elena asked. Ana’s eyes lit up with curiosity. The next day, Ana rushed to the store with the coins and bought the threads. Elena then taught Ana how to embroider. Together, they worked on the grey dress, adding colorful patterns of flowers and stars. When it was done, the dress was a beautiful piece of art. Elena put it on, and Ana saw that her mother looked more radiant than ever. This simple act of creating together had made the birthday truly special. 【解析】 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了六岁小女孩安娜看到母亲埃琳娜每天穿着洗得发白的旧围裙和灰色连衣裙辛苦经营面包店，且从不给自己买衣服。明天是母亲生日，安娜想送她一件像黎明后天空颜色一样美的蓝色新裙子，可钱要用于买面粉和鸡蛋。于是安娜决定自己赚钱。多日后，存钱罐里的钱仍不够买裙子甚至围巾。生日前夕，安娜看着钱，又看到母亲在灯下修补旧裙子，心疼地向母亲坦白心意。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“安娜打开手时声音都颤抖了。”可知，第一段可描写安娜向母亲展示辛苦攒下的钱时紧张又期待的心情，以及母亲看到后温柔回应，母女间温馨互动的场景。 ②由第二段首句内容““哦，你能给我买些彩色丝线吗？”埃琳娜问道。”可知，第二段可描写母亲提出新想法后，母女俩共同通过刺绣改造旧裙子，让母亲生日变得格外特别的温馨过程。 2.续写线索：Elena温柔回应——Elena提议——安娜点头——买丝线——为裙子刺绣——Elena穿上裙子——感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①伸出手：reach out/stretch out ②买：buy/purchase ③添加：add/append 情绪类 ①困惑：confusion/puzzlement ②失望：disappointment/dismay 【点睛】[高分句型1] Sweetheart, this is the most precious gift I’ve ever received. (运用了关系代词that引导的限制性定语从句，省略了that) [高分句型2] But let’s think of something else we can do together to celebrate my birthday. (运用了关系代词that引导的限制性定语从句，省略了that) 【主题对接】 本篇范文运用了「招四·八大模型·前置对话」与「招二·万能公式」——以「‘Oh, could you buy some multi-color threads for me?’ Elena asked」中『前置引语+主语+动词(asked)』开局，把『开口+应答+表情反应』三段串成一条对话链，再用「Ana’s eyes lit up with curiosity」做表情对话承接。比单纯写「Elena asked Ana to buy threads」对话推进感更鲜活。 1 / 19 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $