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上海市格致中学2023-2024学年第二学期高三第一次测验英语试题
作文讲义
一、写作题目
V. Guided Writing
Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
你校学生会正开展主题为 “The first job I want to take” 的英语征文比赛,请你撰文参加(文中请不要出现真实的校名和人名)。你的征文内容需包括:
1. 离开校园、步入社会后,你想从事的第一份职业是什么;
2. 你想从事这份职业的原因(可从个人特点、职业价值等方面进行阐述)。
二、写作思路
开头段:点明本次征文主题,直接亮出自己毕业后想要从事的第一份工作 —— 中学英语教师。
主体段:分层阐述择业理由。第一层结合自身优势:热爱英语、擅长沟通交流,适合教书育人;第二层讲述职业价值:传递语言知识,拓宽学生眼界,助力青少年成长,实现自身社会价值。顺带简单说明今后会努力夯实专业能力。
结尾段:升华主旨,表明自己会脚踏实地朝着目标奋进,坚守初心做好这份工作。
三、写作高级表达
开头段
高级短语
· take part in the essay contest 参与征文比赛
· step out of the campus 走出校园
· enter the society 步入社会
· ideal career 理想职业
· share my aspiration 分享我的志向
高级句子
1.I’m delighted to take part in the school essay contest themed The first job I want to take.
我很高兴参加本次以 “我理想的第一份工作” 为主题的校园征文比赛。
2.If I step out of campus and enter society, my first ideal job is a high school English teacher.
倘若走出校园步入社会,我理想的第一份工作是一名中学英语教师。
3.I would like to elaborate on my career choice in the following passage.
接下来我将详细阐述我的职业选择。
主体段
高级短语
· have a passion for English 热爱英语
· be gifted in communication 擅长沟通交流
· pass on professional knowledge 传授专业知识
· broaden students’ horizons 拓宽学生视野
· realize personal social value 实现个人社会价值
· strengthen professional competence 夯实专业能力
· accompany teenagers’ growth 陪伴青少年成长
· build solid foundations 打下坚实基础
高级句子
1.I have long possessed a deep passion for English and excel at communicating patiently with young people.我一直深爱英语,并且擅长耐心和年轻人沟通。
2.My outgoing personality enables me to get along well with students in daily teaching.
开朗的性格让我在日常教学中可以和学生融洽相处。
3.As an English teacher, I can pass on language knowledge and open a door to the world for teenagers.身为英语老师,我既能传授语言知识,也能为孩子们打开看世界的大门。
4.Guiding students to make progress brings me a strong sense of achievement and satisfaction.
见证学生不断进步会带给我强烈的成就感与满足感。
5.I will spare no effort to strengthen my professional knowledge to qualify for this job.
我会全力以赴夯实专业知识,胜任这份工作。
6.This occupation allows me to devote myself to meaningful things and realize my social value.
这份工作能让我投身有意义的事业,实现自身的社会价值。
结尾段
高级短语
· stick to the original aspiration 坚守初心
· strive for the goal steadily 稳步奔赴目标
· make unremitting efforts 不懈努力
· live up to the expectation 不负期许
· devote myself wholeheartedly 全心投入
高级句子
1.I will keep working hard steadily to realize this small but warm career dream.
我会稳步努力,实现这个平凡却温暖的职业理想。
2.If I gain this job in the future, I will stick to my original aspiration and teach earnestly.
未来若是如愿入职,我会坚守初心,认真教书育人。
3.I firmly believe persistent efforts will bring me closer to my ideal career.
我坚信持之以恒的努力会让我离理想工作越来越近。
四、范文赏析
The first job I want to take
I’m glad to participate in the school essay contest themed The first job I want to take. When stepping out of campus into society, the first job I am eager to take is a high school English teacher.
There are two main reasons for my choice. Firstly, I have a lasting passion for English and I am patient and outgoing, which helps me communicate smoothly with teenagers. Secondly, this job carries precious social value. I can not only pass on language knowledge but also broaden students’ horizons, accompanying their growth. Witnessing students’ progress brings me great fulfillment. Besides, I plan to keep polishing my professional skills to get well-prepared.
I will stick to my aspiration and make steady efforts. I hope to devote myself to education and live a valuable life in this job.
中文翻译
我想要从事的第一份工作
我很开心参加本次主题为《我想要从事的第一份工作》的校园征文比赛。当走出校园踏入社会时,我最向往的第一份工作是一名中学英语教师。
做出这个选择主要有两点原因。第一,我一直热爱英语,性格耐心开朗,能够和青少年顺畅沟通。第二,这份工作拥有珍贵的社会价值。我不仅可以传授语言知识,还能拓宽学生的眼界,陪伴他们成长。见证学生不断进步会带给我极大的满足感。除此之外,我打算不断打磨专业技能,做好充足准备。
我会坚守初心,脚踏实地努力。希望未来投身教育行业,在这份工作中活出自身的价值。
范文赏析要点:
整体结构赏析
标准三段式结构:开篇引入征文主题,点明目标职业;主体从个人性格优势、职业社会价值两方面完整完成题干两大写作要求;结尾升华立志。词数 138,严格控制在 120-150 词区间,文风正式贴合征文比赛风格。
经典例句逐句赏析
例句1:When stepping out of campus into society, the first job I am eager to take is a high school English teacher.
赏析:时间状语从句采用省略式非谓语结构,句式简洁高级,开篇直接扣题,清晰亮出中心观点。
例句2:Firstly, I have a lasting passion for English and I am patient and outgoing, which helps me communicate smoothly with teenagers.
赏析:which 引导非限制性定语从句,衔接自然,紧扣个人自身优势论证择业合理性,论据真实贴合题意。
例句3:I can not only pass on language knowledge but also broaden students’ horizons, accompanying their growth.
赏析:not only...but also 并列结构搭配现在分词作伴随状语,句式丰富多变,精准诠释这份职业的内在价值。
整体得分亮点
逻辑层次清晰,Firstly、Besides 衔接流畅;高级动词短语、多样从句交替使用,摆脱简单基础句;紧扣题目全部写作指令,内容充实不空洞,立意积极正向,符合校园征文的评分标准,属于考场高分范文。
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