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该高中英语读后续写复习讲义聚焦高考核心考点，涵盖主旨理解、情节与情感线分析、续写框架构建、细节描写及语言连贯等内容，按技能突破分模块系统编排，通过考点梳理（如主旨与两线表格分析）、方法指导（如“两线相同”策略）、真题训练（每个技能配典型真题示例）等环节，帮助学生建立从理解到创作的完整思维链，突破续写难点。 讲义以“五步分析法”为特色，创新融合思维品质与语言能力培养，如引导学生通过原文情节线和情感线表格精准把握续写方向，结合动作、心理细节描写提升文本生动性。设置分层练习（基础框架构建、细节优化、综合创作），配合即时反馈，确保高效复习，助力学生提升应考能力，为教师把控复习节奏提供清晰路径。

[技能突破一]　 定主旨意图——明确方向 读后续写不是脱离开原文材料的独立创作。而是顺着原文作者的思路完成作者未完成的文本，动手续写前，应先认真阅读原文材料，理清原文的人物、故事情节的发展线和情感线，把握原文的主旨大意和写作意图：①记叙文类的主旨大意，即原文讲述的主要事件和结果；而写作意图是指故事主要内容传递给考生的信息，可以是情，也可以是理；②准确理解原文，根据“谁发生了什么”，快速理清原文对主要人或物的讲述并整理相关事件，提炼出主旨大意和写作意图；③续写部分要在主旨大意和写作意图上与原文保持一致。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 During this past year, I've had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of　 the way most people hadn't bothered to help. (失望) One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK (千斤顶), and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up　(失望)，a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father . He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw(锯子) from the truck and a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We it and his jack on top, and we were in business. I started the wheel ， and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries　： He it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. (家人一起帮忙). We finished the job, and I was a very happy man.　 (高兴) The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash out hands. I tried to put a $ 20 bill in the man's hand，　 (作者的感激之情) but he wouldn't take it, so instead I the truck and it to his wife as quietly as I could.　 I asked the little girl where they lived.　 (作者的感激之情) Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I'd had lunch.________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ [第一步]　 把握原文大意，明主旨和两线 主旨大意 作者的汽车出故障后，本以为无人愿意帮忙，没想到墨西哥一家人不嫌麻烦，不计回报，帮作者修好汽车。 原文两线 情节线：汽车出故障→好心人帮忙修车→支付报酬 情感线：disappointed→happy→grateful 写作意图 讲述了一个不计报酬和回报的助人为乐的故事，体现了无私奉献精神和爱心的继续传递。 [第二步]　根据首句信息，定续写方向 两段首句 定框架 第一段首句 根据第一段首句关键信息“the girl asked if I'd had lunch”可知，续写可接着写作者对此的回答；接着叙述是否一起吃午饭。 第二段首句 第二段关键信息“the paper bag”可逆推出，该段应提及墨西哥家庭给了作者一个纸袋子。 两段首句 显能量,①根据第二段首句中的“opened the paper bag”，第一段首句中的“lunch”和原文中的“a $20 bill可叙述纸袋里是吃的和20美元；②尾句应呼应原文主题写出感悟，体现正能量：pay it forward。 [第三步]　原、续两线同，加合理细节 ◎两“线”相同　续写部分情节线和情感线的发展，应与原文故事情节线和情感线一致。如图：①续写部分的情节线是和墨西哥家庭一起吃午饭→给作者纸袋→打开纸袋→在纸袋里发现什么，应侧重面部表情、心理活动和动作细节描写；②情感线的走向应是惊喜→惊讶→感激→感动等情感描写。 ◎添加细节　在描写墨西哥家庭邀请作者吃午饭时，可利用面部表情(如微笑)和动作细节描写。情感细节方面的描写，叙述作者打开纸袋发现里面的东西时应该侧重描写惊喜、惊讶、感激、感动等情感。 [第四步]　 依照语言特点，原、续融一体 原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句，进行动作描写(加框内容)和情感描写(画波浪线内容)，续写部分可利用适当的并列句、非谓语和复合句描写动作和情感。 [第五步]　 临摹衡水字体，打造完美卷面 [技能突破二]　 据两段首句——构思框架 根据“两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量”的原则确定续写方向。①两段首句定一框：根据第一段首句关键信息与第二段首句关键信息确定续写部分第一段的续写框架，同时注意情节发展合情合理。②二框二首正能量：根据第二段首句关键信息推断第二段情节和情感发展，并结合正能量结尾的续写原则确定第二段的续写框架。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 “I'm going to miss you so much，Poppy，”said the tall，thin teenager.He bent down　 to 　hug　 his old friend goodbye.He 　stood up　，　hugged　 his parents，and 　smiled　，trying not to let his emotions(情绪)get the better of him.(hugged出现2次：男孩与小狗和父母的依依不舍) His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control.They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying.It was time to say goodbye for now at least.The family 　hugged　 and 　smiled　 through 　misty eyes　 and then 　laughed　.(再次出现hugged和smiled：含泪拥抱，微笑告别，体现一家人的依依不舍和浓浓的亲情) The boy 　lifted　 the last bag onto his shoulder，and 　flashed a bright smile.　“I guess this is it.”he said.“I'll see you back home in a month，okay？”His parents 　nodded　，and they 　watched　 as he 　walked　 out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents.The boy's mother 　turned to　 the dog，“Okay，Poppy，time to go back home.” 　The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there　.(比喻)All that week，Poppy 　didn't seem interested　 in her dinner，her favorite toy，or even in her daily walk.Her owners were 　sad　 too，but they knew their son would be back to visit，Poppy didn't.(一家人郁郁寡欢) They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats.They even let her sit on the sofa，but the old girl just 　wasn't her usual cheerful self　.Her owners started to get 　worried　，“What should we do to cheer Poppy up？” asked Dad.“We've tried everything.” “I have an idea，but it might be a little crazy，”smiled Mom.“Without anybody left in the house but us，this place could use a bit of fun.　Let's get a little dog for Poppy.　” It didn't take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box.Poppy welcomed them home as usual，but when she 　saw　 the box，she 　stopped　.She 　put her nose on　 it.Her tail began 　wagging　(摆动) ever so 　slowly　，then 　faster　 as she 　caught　 the smell.(一系列肢体动作暗示Poppy的心理变化，为续写埋下伏笔) 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。 2．请按如下格式作答。 Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ A few weeks later，the boy arrived home from the university.____________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ [第一步]　 把握原文大意，明主旨和两线 主旨大意 男孩离家上大学和父母和狗(Poppy)依依惜别。Poppy自此闷闷不乐，男孩父母决定为它找一个伴。 原文两线 情节线：含泪微笑拥抱道别→回到家中Poppy闷闷不乐茶饭不思→父母想办法哄Poppy开心→提议寻一只小狗作伴。 情感线：(Poppy)sad→upset&lonely→(parents)sad→worried 写作意图 通过解决Poppy的情绪问题，体现家人之间、人与狗之间的爱、和谐和温情。 [第二步]　 根据首句信息，定续写方向 两段首句 定框架 第一段 首句 首句衔接段首语中的“a sweet little dog appeared”描写Poppy好奇和戒备的反应，接着叙述Poppy与初来乍到的小狗如何相处。 第二段 首句 由原文尾句描写父母认为Poppy快乐起来是给儿子的惊喜，呼应第二段段首语。 两段首句显能量 ①首句衔接段首语“the boy arrived home”，可描写男孩和Poppy的拥抱，接着可叙述男孩见到小狗的反应。②尾句呼应原文主旨：人与狗之间的亲情与和谐。 [第三步]　原、续两线同，加合理细节 ◎两“线”相同　续写部分情节线体现的是：接纳小狗→和小狗和谐相处→父母高兴→男孩到家受到Poppy和小狗的欢迎→一家人享受快乐时光。情感线走向：curious→excited→cheerful→(父母)relieved→(男孩)homesick→confused→happy。 ◎添加细节　①动作细节：第一段描述Poppy与小狗如何和谐相处，可描写狗的动作、叫声等以增添故事的画面感。②情感细节：着重描述Poppy从郁郁寡欢到惊喜、快乐的情感变化。 [第四步]　依照语言特点，原、续融一体 原文用大量的简单句和并列句，少量复合句和非谓语进行动作和情感描写，续写部分应利用简单句、并列句、复合句和非谓语动词进行动作和情感描写，同时沿用原文在描写情感时利用大量形容词(见原文画波浪线部分)的手法。 [第五步]　临摹衡水字体，打造完美卷面 [技能突破三]　 造故事冲突——扣人心弦 高考读后续写选材为积极的正能量，虽话题广泛，但基本围绕“Conflict&Solution”展开叙述，所涉及的冲突主要有4类：①人间自有真情系列(主人公遇到贫困、残疾或孤独、失败或自卑等困境)；②迷路或苦恼系列；③脱险(摆脱危险的动物、人或环境)系列； ④争吵(误解、背叛或伤害)系列。解决冲突基本通过4个途径：①他人的：encouragement、comfort、kindness love 和help；②他物：如河流、太阳等；③自己的：courage、effort、calmness和inspiration；④自然：突出和谐、时间和成长。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal, to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”—the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears—like all wild animals—should be photographed from a safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear. I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake ， and our garlic bread. The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He and the wire. He his back legs and at the wooden fence posts. Terrified，　 Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We at the bear, pots hard, and blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though—he the fence with his massive paws (爪子)． I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇)，I took some pictures of the bear. 　Elli_and_I_feared_the_fence_wouldn't_last_through_30_more_minutes_of_ the_bear's_punishment.　 The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear to the lake to wash his eyes. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按如下格式作答。 A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ [第一步]　把握原文大意，明主旨和两线 主旨大意 本文主要讲述了作者和妻子待在营地准备冒险拍摄北极熊，结果北极熊闯入，一场人熊大战即将展开。 原文两线 情节线：在营地等待拍摄北极熊→一头北极熊被美味吸引试图闯入→制造噪音无法吓退北极熊而向营地经理求助→喷胡椒粉喷雾剂暂时赶走北极熊 情感线：excited，nervous→surprised →worried，frightened →anxious→a little relieved 写作意图 人与北极熊对抗并成功脱险，主人公成功拍照心想事成。 [第二步]　根据首句信息，定续写方向 两段首句 定框架 第一段首句 首句衔接段首语，可描写被喷雾刺痛眼睛的北极熊肯定被激怒了，会更猛烈地袭击围栏，主人公需采取有效办法避险，如利用随身物品应对北极熊的攻击，可写妻子的动作和情绪，烘托场面的危急。 第二段首句 尾句可将人与熊的冲突推到最大，营造危急的场景，如北极熊马上要破栏而入，呼应第二段段首语中的“very moment”。 两段首句 显能量 ①首句衔接段首语“the helicopter arrived”可描写人物“绝处逢生的喜悦”作为第二段开头，接着叙述利用直升机的优势解决问题，如利用螺旋桨发出的巨大声响吓走北极熊成功脱险等；②尾句应呼应原文主旨：成功拍照。 [第三步]　原、续两线同，加合理细节 ◎两“线”相同　续写部分的两线的发展应与原文两线一致，达到“两情相悦”，续写部分情节线是：双方对峙→采用新办法避险→脱离险境→拍好照片。情感线是：紧张→恐惧→松一口气但仍心有余悸。 ◎添加细节　①心理描写：夫妇二人面对北极熊一定很恐惧，但脱险后，心理活动会有变化，既感慨逃过一劫又觉得不虚此行，可通过直接或间接的方式，刻画人物心理。②环境描写：在渲染北极熊袭击围栏的危险场景时，可描写时间紧迫或用拟人的手法描写周围的事物(如风声、草等)，间接烘托人物内心的恐惧。 [第四步]　依照语言特点，原、续融一体 原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句，进行动作描写(加框内容)、情感描写(画波浪线内容)和心理描写(加下划线内容)，续写部分可利用适当的并列句、非谓语和复合句描写动作和情感。 [第五步]　临摹衡水字体，打造完美卷面 [技能突破四]　 加合理细节——亮人一眼 确定续写部分的基本情节后，应添加合理的细节，用人物动作、心理活动、表情、语言和环境等描写丰富内容，增强叙述的画面感：①添加的细节要符合续写部分的叙述情境且应与原文已有的、与该细节相关的信息(情感线和细节线或伏笔)一致；②添加的细节中所描述的事件应紧扣原文中描写外貌(外观)、表情、动作和语言等反映人或物特点的词。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My 11­year­old daughter, Elizabeth, started to talk about quitting swimming, which broke my heart　 because she loves swimming. So when the swim season began, I cut a deal with her. She would practice three times a week and try really hard. I wouldn't make her compete in the swim meets. Elizabeth does not like swim meets. She gets horribly nervous　 but not because she wants to win. She doesn't care if she wins. Recently, Elizabeth's team announced a special swim night: Members 11 and older would swim a timed 50 meters relay. It wasn't exactly a meet, because it would involve only team members. That was my view. Elizabeth argued that it absolutely was a meet because there would be races. I told Elizabeth I really wanted her to go. She fought back angrily　 but finally agreed. When the day of the special swim night arrived Elizabeth was nervous.　 She was the youngest person and shorter by at least a foot than most of the other kids. She panicked　 when it was time for the T­shirt relay. The relay works like this: One person from each relay team puts on a T­shirt, a pair of socks and a swim cap; swims 50 meters; and gets out of the pool. She the clothes and them on the next person, who then swims 50 meters. This continues until everyone on the team has completed a lap. Then it was Elizabeth's turn to swim. She seemed to swim faster in the T­shirt and socks than she did when she wasn't wearing them.　 the halfway mark, Elizabeth was in the lead. Suddenly, somebody that one of Elizabeth's socks had fallen off and was floating (漂) in the pool. “She has to get that sock on before the end of the race.” a swimming official told Elizabeth's team. “or you will be disqualified.” 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。 2．请按如下格式作答。 Everybody on her team started screaming “Elizabeth! Get the sock！”________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ On the ride home, she shared her moment of winning again and again.________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ [第一步]　把握原文大意，明主旨和两线 主旨大意 本文主要讲述了作者的女儿Elizabeth要参加游泳比赛，赛前很紧张，害怕游不好，比赛时袜子却脱落了，不及时穿上袜子就会被取消资格。 原文两线 情节线：女儿努力训练→作者说服女儿参加比赛→比赛日子到来→袜子脱落漂浮在水上 情感线：nervous→angry→nervous &frightened→competitive &confident 写作意图 伊丽莎白通过自己和队友的共同努力赢得了比赛，体现竞争、团队和体育精神 [第二步]　根据首句信息，定续写方向 两段首句 定框架 第一段首句 根据首句衔接段首语中的“Elizabeth！Get the sock！”可叙述她听不见大家的喊叫声，再接着叙述是否有同学帮助她捡起袜子，伊丽莎白是否穿上袜子。 第二段首句 尾句呼应第二段首句关键信息“winning”应叙述伊丽莎白取得了胜利。 两段首句显能量 ①首句衔接段首语内容“在回家的路上，她一次又一次地分享了自己赢得胜利的时刻。”可知，第二段可描写她回想比赛过程中的激烈竞争、并全力以赴获得团队胜利的经历。②尾句可描述作者赞同女儿的心态和努力。 [第三步]　原、续两线同，加合理细节 ◎两线相同　续写部分两线呼应原文两线，情节线可为：女儿听不见同学喊捡袜子的声音→一个女孩跳入水中捡起袜子给她送过去→穿上袜子努力取得成功→回家分享成功→女儿的感悟。情感线走向：scared→anxious→funny→feel great。 ◎添加细节　①动作细节：在描写队友捡袜子追上伊丽莎白和伊丽莎白努力夺取胜利的过程中，可描写丰富的肢体动作，营造身临其境的比赛场景；②情感细节：续写第二段可描述伊丽莎白愉悦的心情。 [第四步]　依照语言特点，原、续融一体 原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句，进行动作描写(加框内容)和情感描写(画波浪线内容)，因此续写部分利用适当的并列句、非谓语和复合句进行动作和情感描写。 [第五步]　临摹衡水字体，打造完美卷面 [技能突破五]　 添合理收尾——完美收关 在读后续写中，第二段结尾至关重要，除揭示故事结局外，还应与原文伏笔相呼应，使人觉得在情理之中。结尾方式有4种：①哲理式结尾：总结文章主旨，通过哲理性的语言结尾点明主旨，升华主题。通过以小见大、从物到人、由事及人等方式升华文章主题。②正能量结尾：结尾句呼应原文主题，且一定要体现正能量。③以景结情：在续写中通过寓情于景的描写，使所写环境和人物心情相照应。④自然结尾：顺着文章所叙之事自然发展，以其必然结果结尾，简单自然。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A Vacation with My Mother I had an 　interesting　 childhood. 　It_was_filled_with_surprise_and_amusements，　 all because of my mother—　loving, sweet, and yet absent­minded and forgetful.　 (妈妈的性格特点)One strange family trip we took when I was eleven 　tells_a_lot_about_her.　 (伏笔) My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight­year­old brother, and I unwillingly　 said good­bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we'd ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and 　we_loaded_suitcases,_books,_games,_camping_equipment,_and_a_tent　 into the car and bravely drove off. (伏笔) We bravely　 drove off again two hours later after we'd returned home to 　get_the_purse_and_traveler's_checks_Mom_had_forgotten.　 (用事实说话：妈妈健忘) David and I were always 　a_little_nervous　 when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept：“You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go, and I'll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go. ” I had terrible pictures in my mind：　“Honey,_where_are_the_kids？”_“What?_Oh,_Gosh..._I_thought_they_were_being_awfully_quiet.”　 We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren't about to take any chances. (孩子们心有余悸，担心妈妈心不在焉，轮流放哨) On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likely­looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous.　 To out great relief，　 Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections. 　If_a_strange_family_showed_up_on_her_front_doorsteps,_Mom_would_have_been_delighted._She_thinks_everyone_in_the_world_as_nice_as_she_is.　 (妈妈的善良) 　We_finally_found_a_vacancy_in_the_next_town.　 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按如下格式作答。 　　The next day we remembered the brand­new tent we had brought with us. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ [第一步]　 把握原文大意，明主旨和两线 主旨大意 本文主要讲述了我们一家四口去祖父母家的途中，由于母亲的健忘发生的趣事。 原文两线 情节线：和朋友道别装好车出发→两小时后返回家中取落下的东西→途中用卫生间各种担心→找旅店期间妈妈萌发搭帐篷的想法→找到旅店住宿 情感线：unwilling→forgetful，surprised→nervous→amused→relieved 写作意图 通过叙述旅行趣事体现妈妈的性格：forgetful，nice，并体现快乐、母爱和亲情。 [第二步]　根据首句信息，定续写方向 两段首句定框架 第一段首句 首句衔接段首语中的“brand­new tent”结合妈妈的健忘的性格可描述，妈妈把帐篷落在酒店，接着叙述返回酒店取帐篷。 第二段首句 尾句可描写作者的感受。 两段首句显能量 ①首句衔接段首语“great sights”，可在第二段描述自然风景。②尾句正能量说明妈妈的性格“nice”。 [第三步]　原、续两线同，加合理细节 ◎两“线”相同　续写部分两线呼应原文两线，情节线可为：帐篷落在酒店→返回酒店取帐篷→接着开车→欣赏风景→找个地方宿营。情感走向：anxious→relieved→happy→peaceful→sweet。 ◎添加细节　①动作细节：根据原文“意外不断”的基调，可叙述妈妈因健忘发生的趣事与第一段“surprise and amusements”相呼应。②环境细节：续写第二段可通过描述景色烘托人物愉悦的心情，体现“亲情”和“与妈妈一起的趣事”。 [第四步]　依照语言特点，原、续融一体 原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词、虚拟语气和主从复合句，进行动作描写(画横线内容)和情感描写(画波浪线内容)描写妈妈的性格影响发生在旅途中的趣事，续写部分可适当地利用并列句、非谓语和复合句进行动作和心理描写，突出妈妈的性格特点。 [第五步]　临摹衡水字体，打造完美卷面 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $