读后续写二四六八法 课件+学案-2027届高三英语一轮复习专项

读后续写 之 二四六八 法 Step 1 Reading for imitation 1...enjoying the sunrise and...appreciating the sunset 2.could not help envying them (enviable) 3.without any consciousness 4.guard him by the bed 5....calling his name nonstop 6.God was finally moved by... (show sympathy to..) 7. say excitedly and firmly 8....flying hurriedly to the hospital 9.It turned out that.. 10.come to his consciousness 11.what she could do was ... 12. watch her beloved... helplessly; feel heart-stricken 13. be in a hurry to fly back..., only to realize... 14.She was so shocked that she almost... 15. People were talking about that...and that...and that... Step 2 Reading for information 1.二线：Plot & Emotion A)Plot : ▲ Beginning：____________________ ▲ Development：_________________ ▲Climax：________________________ B)Emotion:( the main characters) ▲The butterfly: _________________ ▲God: ___________________________ Brief information Who: What: a couple of lovers, God, the woman doctor ____ couple of lovers led an ________ (envy) life in a town. ___________ (fortunate), the man had an accident and was severely _____ (injure). The woman ___________ (attend) him day and night. _________ her lover was still sleeping, _________ (hope), she made a deal ______God: to be a butterfly for three years in exchange for the man’s ________ (recover), _____ was a hard choice but easy to make to a willing heart. A enviable Unfortunately injured attended to But hopelessly with recovery which Step 3 Reading for summary The plot （情节） of the story Development Ending Beginning Climax(高潮) A. The man was badly injured and showed no signs of recovery. B. The woman dealt with God to save her lover but another girl appeared between them. C. The man and the woman had an enviable love. A C B Step 4 Reading for creation 2.四点： (倒叙法：先构思第二段尾句，然后第一段尾句) ▲二段尾 (New information)________ ▲一段尾 (New information)________ ↓(注意衔接） ▲二段首（Given information）.... ▲一段首（Given information）.... 3.六要素： A)Given information ▲where:_________________________ ▲when: _________________________ ▲Who: __________________________ B)New information (依据原文情节合理构思) ▲What?__________________________ ▲Why?___________________________ ▲How?___________________________ Possible questions for para1 : ①Why did the butterfly rest on the man's shoulder on and off? ②What would be the man's reaction ? ③How did the butterfly feel at the man's reaction? ④What else could the butterfly do? ...... Possible questions for para2 : ①What would be the butterfly’s answer? ② Why did the butterfly answer that way? ③If she regretted, what would she/God say and do? If she didn't regret, what would she/God say and do? ④ What is the possible ending of the story? ...... 4.八句话：（根据What? Why?How?可能的回答 列提纲，8句话，每段各4句，用五大简单句式即可） Para1: ①_________________________ ②_________________________ ③_________________________ ④_________________________ Para2: ①_________________________ ②_________________________ ③_________________________ ④_________________________ Step 5 Reading for writing logic ★ your newly created 10 sentences the given story the underlined words the two given sentences They are the clues to help you create your writing logically. underlined words enjoying the sunrise the sunset consciousness the church God tears love regret became the butterfly fly sweet heart-stricken underlined words（选5个以上） who (人物）：God the butterfly where（地点）：the church what（事件）：enjoying the sunrise the sunset consciousness tears love butterfly sweet heart-stricken given clues “I can help you…for three years…” “Yes, I do! I won’t regret doing that!” God also felt sad … “Do you regret for what you have done?” Paragraph1: The butterfly knew that all these should have belonged to her, but now they belonged to another woman. She could do nothing but rest on the man’s shoulder off and on. __________________________________________________ Single is simple,double is trouble, triangle is terrible. 利用已给信息将情节推向高潮 How to deal with the woman doctor? When to get married ? Paragraph2: God also felt sad and sighed to the butterfly, “Do you regret for what you have done?” __________ ______________________________________________ 利用已给信息得出一个完美结局 24 The possible versions of the ending e…. b. The man and the doctor married, and the woman remained to be a butterfly. a. The man and the doctor married, and the woman left. c. The man proposed to the doctor, but God uncovered the truth to the man and gave the separated lovers a happy reunion. d. The man proposed to the doctor, but God uncovered the truth to the man which involved him in a dilemma. Finally, the man left. √ negative negative positive negative ▲ your 10 sentences ▲the two given sentences ▲the underlined words 1.The two given clues and your newly created plots lead you,help you,and control you to go in the right direction. 2. Detail all the information and well organize your composition. Competition Group A(paragraph 1) 1. 目睹；见证 (vt) 2. 他说过的最甜蜜的话（提示词sweet） 3. 蝴蝶难过得情不自禁地哭了。(tears) 4. 变深；使加深(v) 5. 第三年的最后一天 6. 他们的爱已成为回忆。 Group B(paragraph 2) 1.被打动的；受感动的 (adj.) 2. 揭露真相 3.对于我为他所做的事我从来没有后悔过。（提示词regret, 用倒装句式） 4. 唤醒 (vt.) 5. 遭受许多挫折 6. 男人震惊了， 越发觉得后悔和内疚 （提示词the feeling of regrets/guilt） 1. 目睹；见证 vt._________ 2. 他说过的最甜蜜的话 （提示词sweet） _________________________________ 3. 蝴蝶难过得情不自禁地哭了。 （提示词tears） _____________________________________________ _____________________________________________ see/witness The sweetest words he has ever said The butterfly couldn’t help bursting into tears sadly. /The butterfly could no longer hold back the tears. 4. 变深；使加深 vt./vi. _________ deepen 5. 在第三年的最后一天 ____________________________ On the last day of the third year 6. 他们的爱已成为回忆。 ______________________________ ______________________________ Their love has become memories. Their love has become a past. Paragraphy1: The butterfly knew that all these should have belonged to her, but now they belonged to another woman. She could do nothing but rest on the man’s shoulder off and on. ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ draft It was heartbroken to see their love deepen day by day. Time went by quickly. On the last day of the third year when the deal between God and the butterfly was almost over, the man proposed to his girlfriend. He took out a beautiful ring and swore the sweetest words he has ever said. Hearing this, the butterfly couldn’t breathe. Her darken eyes were full of tears. she flew away silently. At that moment, she realized that he wouldn’t know her sacrifices and their love had become a past. 2. 揭露真相 ____________________________________ 1. 被打动的；受感动的 adj. be_____________________ by touched uncover the truth /expose/reveal /moved/impressed 3. 对于我为他所做的事我从来没有后悔过。 （提示词regret, 用倒装句式） ________________________________________________ Never have I regretted for what I have done for him. 4. 唤醒 vt. ______________ awaken/ arouse 5. 遭受许多挫折 _____________________ suffer many struggles go through many obstacles/setbacks/ frustrations 6. 男人震惊了， 越发觉得后悔和内疚 （提示词the feeling of regrets/guilt） ______________________________________ ______________________________________ The man got shocked, and the feeling of regrets and guilt grew stronger. Paragraphy2: God also felt sad and sighed to the butterfly, “Do you regret for what you have done?” ______________________ __________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ draft The butterfly said, “No. Never have I regretted for what I have done for him.” moved by her words, God was lost in thought: she had gone through so many struggles and she should deserve that. So, the day before the man and the doctor’s wedding, God uncovered the whole truth to him. Obviously, the man was shocked and the feeling of regrets and guilt grew stronger. The love deep inside was awakened. He rushed to the church to beg for the woman’s forgiveness. And he determined that this time he wouldn't let her go. He would take her to enjoy the sunrise and the sunset for a lifetime. Level 3 polish （润色） Level 2 draft （拟稿） Level 1 compose (构思） Re-reading for polishment ★you'better re-read and set aside several minutes to polish your writing How to polish your writing? Inner thoughts to portray the figures 1. Feeling happy/sad/angry/guilty/depressed…, 2. Driven by curiosity/a sense of sympathy... Deeply touched/ moved by… 3. ..，full of regret/anger/fear/gratitude… 4. 具体的动作描写 stand frozen, jump with joy, tremble with anger, with tears filling one’s eyes, with one’s eyes wide open 等等 34 Let’s have a try! 1. God said to the woman, “Do you regret for what you have done?” Driven by a sense of sympathy, God said to the woman, “Do you regret for what you have done?” 2. She said to God, “Thank you ,God.” With tears filling her eyes, She said to God cheerfully, “Thank you ,God.” Paragraphy1: The butterfly knew that all these should have belonged to her, but now they belonged to another woman. She could do nothing but rest on the man’s shoulder off and on. ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________ draft It was heartbroken to see their love deepen day by day. Time went by quickly. On the last day of the third year when the deal between God and the butterfly was almost over, the man proposed to his girlfriend. He took out a beautiful ring and swore the sweetest words he has ever said. Hearing this, the butterfly couldn’t breathe. Her darken eyes were full of tears. she flew away silently in great grief and despair. At that moment, she realized that he wouldn’t know her sacrifices and their love has become a past. * inner thoughts * ……….. * ……….. 1 * theme：negative/positive * interpretation（解意） * key words+ two given sentences *2 clues +4 key points + 6 elements+ 8 sentences Step3 polish （润色） Step 2 draft （拟稿） Step 1 compose (构思） 3 steps : continuation writing 1.Reading for imitation 3.Reading for summary 4.Reading for creation 5.Reading for writing 2.Reading for brief information 6.Re-reading for polishment, which takes time and practice! Summary of this period: Rome was not built in a day!!! Assignment Choose one of the following theme to write two paragraphsfor the story based on the given underlined words. a. The man and the doctor married, and the woman left. b. The man and the doctor married, and the woman remained to be a butterfly. c. The man proposed to the doctor, but God uncovered the truth to the man which involved him in a dilemma. Finally, the man left. See You! $ 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。  There was once a beautiful town and a couple of lovers would often stay together on the top of the mountain enjoying the sunrise and by the sea appreciating the sunset. Everyone who knew them could not help envying them for their happy love. But one day，the man was severely injured and lying in bed in hospital for several days without any consciousness(意识). The woman guarded him by the bed in daytime，calling his name nonstop while at night，she would go to the church and pray to God until her tears ran up. A week passed by and the man was still sleeping. One day，God was finally moved by her love and persistence and would like to do her a special favor. God said，“I can help your lover recover quickly on the condition that you should promise to be a butterfly for three years. Do you agree with the deal？” She said excitedly and firmly，“Yes，I do! I won’t regret doing that.” The next day，the woman became a beautiful butterfly，flying hurriedly to the hospital. It turned out that the man came to his consciousness and waked up，talking with a doctor. She could not hear what they were talking about because she could not fly into the house. What she could do was watch her beloved through the windows helplessly. Another spring came and the butterfly was in a hurry to fly back to see the man，only to realize that there was a pretty lady standing by him. At that moment，she was so shocked that she almost fell down from the sky. She could hardly believe her eyes. People were talking about that the man was seriously ill during Christmas and that the pretty and cute female doctor took good care of him and that finally they fell in sweet love. The butterfly felt heart­stricken（悲痛欲绝的）. In the following days，she often saw the man take the woman to the top of the mountain to enjoy the sunrise and to the seaside to enjoy the sunset together. 注意： 1．所续写短文的词数应为150词左右； 2．应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1 The butterfly knew that all these should have belonged to her，but now they belonged to another woman. She could do nothing but rest on the man’s shoulder off and on. ____________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2： God also felt sad and sighed to the butterfly，“Do you regret for what you have done？” __________________________________________________________________________ 1. 摘抄原文好句，并注明好的原因（如：并列句，非谓语， 双形容词或副词，三连动...等等） 1) ____________________________________________________________________（ ） 2) ____________________________________________________________________（ ） 3) ____________________________________________________________________（ ） 4) ____________________________________________________________________（ ） 5) ____________________________________________________________________ ( ) .... 2. 按“二、四、六、八法”列提纲 1） 二线：Plot & Emotion A) Plot : ▲ Beginning：_______________________________________________________________ ▲ Development：____________________________________________________________ ▲Climax：__________________________________________________________________ B) Emotion:( the main characters) ▲The butterfly: ________________________________________________________________ ▲God: _______________________________________________________________________ ▲The man: ____________________________________________________________________ ▲The woman doctor: ____________________________________________________________ 2)四点：(倒叙法：先构思二段尾句，然后一段尾句) ▲二段尾 (New information)_______________________________________________________ ▲一段尾 (New information)_______________________________________________________ ▲二段首（Given information）God also felt sad and sighed to the butterfly，“Do you regret for what you have done？” ▲一段首（Given information）The butterfly knew that all these should have belonged to her，but now they belonged to another woman. She could do nothing but rest on the man’s shoulder off and on. 3）六要素： A)Given information ▲where:________________________________ ▲when: _______________________________ ▲Who: ___________________________________ B)New information (依据原文情节合理构思) ▲What?________________________________ ▲Why?________________________________ ▲How?____________________________________ 4)八句话：（根据What? Why?How?可能的回答列提纲，8句话，每段各4句，用五大简单句式即可） Para1: ①_________________________________________________ ②_________________________________________________ ③__________________________________________________ ④___________________________________________________ 可参考以下问题提示列提纲 1 Why did the butterfly rest on the man’s shoulder on and off? 2 What would be the man’s reaction ? 3 How did the butterfly feel at the man’s reaction? 4 What else could the butterfly do? Para2: ①_________________________________________________ ②_________________________________________________ ③__________________________________________________ ④___________________________________________________ 可参考以下问题提示列提纲 ①What would be the butterfly’s answer? ② Why did the butterfly answer that way? ③If she regretted, what would she/God say and do? If she didn’t regret, what would she/God say and do? ④ What is the possible ending of the story? 3. 扩写：根据2+8 共10句话，再仿写所摘抄的好句。或参考使用下列技巧扩写： 1) 高级词汇：替换、升级 2) 交替句式：简单句、并列句、复合句（定从、名从、状从） 3) 高级句式：三连动、双形容词、虚拟语气、非谓语、强调、倒装、省略 4. 连句成文 Paragraph 1 The butterfly knew that all these should have belonged to her，but now they belonged to another woman. She could do nothing but rest on the man’s shoulder off and on. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2： God also felt sad and sighed to the butterfly，“Do you regret for what you have done？” ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5.Complete your story and make a self-assessment Self-assessment Is your plot reasonable or logical? Is the language accurate and rich? Is the tense correct? 6.Polish up your story.... 续写有套路(按“二、四、六、八法”列提纲) 1.二线：Plot & Emotion A) Plot : ▲ Beginning：_______________________________________________________________ ▲ Development：____________________________________________________________ ▲Climax：__________________________________________________________________ C) Emotion:( the main characters) ▲_______________________________________________________________________ ▲_______________________________________________________________________ ...... 2. 四点：(倒叙法：先构思二段尾句，然后一段尾句) ▲二段尾 (New information)___________________________________________________ ▲一段尾 (New information)___________________________________________________ ▲二段首（Given information）....... ▲一段首（Given information）...... 3.六要素： A)Given information ▲where:________________________________ ▲when: _______________________________ ▲Who: ___________________________________ B)New information (依据原文情节合理构思) ▲What?________________________________ ▲Why?________________________________ ▲How?____________________________________ 4.八句话：（根据What? Why?How?可能的回答列提纲，8句话，每段各4句，用五大简单句式即可） Para1: ①_________________________________________________ ②_________________________________________________ ③__________________________________________________ ④___________________________________________________ Para2: ①_________________________________________________ ②_________________________________________________ ③__________________________________________________ ④___________________________________________________ 5. 扩写：根据2+8 共10句话，再仿写所摘抄的好句。或参考使用下列技巧润色： 4) 高级词汇：替换、升级 5) 交替句式：简单句、并列句、复合句（定从、名从、状从） 6) 高级句式：三连动、双形容词、虚拟语气、非谓语 6. 连句成文 7.润色技巧： 一、对话的3种表现形式 1. 对话标签在前 She said,“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.” 2. 对话标签在后 “I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”She said. 3. 对话标签在句子中间 “I would like to go with you,”she said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.” 注意：对话标签在后或者在句子中间时（第2,3种情况），如果主语是名词，则可以倒装。而代词不可以倒装(said she是错误的)。 “I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”said Emily/Emily said. “I would like to go with you,”said Emily/ Emily said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.” 二、让你的对话标签不平庸的小技巧 在对话标签中加入语气，嗓音，情感以及伴随动作，让你的描写更生动传神。 ① “I would love to,” said Emily in a pleasant tone. 愉悦的语气 用...的语气  in a/an+形容词+tone 如： in a pleasant /firm/rude/sad.... tone 也可以用 in a tone of +名词的搭配 如：in a tone of surprise/curiosity/impatience/regret/command命令/    ② “I didn’t mean to,” she murmured in a low voice. 小声地说道 用...的声音 in a/an+形容词+voice 如： in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft /weak voice ③“I...I.. don’t think I’m right for the part,”I replied with embarrassment. “I will never do that again,” I answered firmly坚定地. =Firmly，I answered，“I will never do that again.”可将副词提到句首 用介词短语或者副词来表达情感 介词短语有：in:  in surprise/shock/sorrow /horror害怕 with:with delight /excitement /embarrassment /pride /caution/care/patience/certainty 副词有：firmly/excitedly/seriously/sincerely/slowly/regretfully等等 ④⑴“Well,”said the farmer, as he rubbed the sweat of the back of his neck. 此处在说的动作后，紧跟了as引导的状语从句，翻译成“一边，一边”。他一边擦脖子后面的汗水一边说“好啊。” ⑵“I want that one,”the boy said, pointing to the little dog. = Pointing the little dog, the boy said, “I want that one.” 此处在说的动作后，紧跟了doing的非谓语结构，表伴随。 ⑶The farmer picked up the dog, knelt down and said in a soft voice, “It’s yours now.” =The farmer picked up the dog and knelt down, saying, “It’s yours now.” 三个并列动作，可以用并列谓语，也可以用第二条中的非谓语。 ⑷ With her head down/With tears in her eyes, she said, “Sorry.” 小结：在说的同时，可以加入伴随动作，即说话的同时（自己/别人）在做什么，用动作描写来辅助对话。可以用as引导的从句，非谓语，并列谓语以及with的复合结构。 One possible version: The butterfly knew that all these should have belonged to her，but now they belonged to another woman. She could do nothing but rest on the man’s shoulder off and on. On the last day of the third year when the deal between God and the butterfly was almost over，the man held a wedding with his girlfriend. The church was crowded with people. The butterfly flew into the church quietly and rested on the shoulder of God，listening to the man’s promise to the bride and seeing him put a ring on her finger and kiss her sweetly. The butterfly was sad in tears. God also felt sad and sighed to the butterfly，“Do you regret for what you have done？” The butterfly cleaned her tears on the face，“No.” God felt a bit relieved and said，“Tomorrow you can become human again.” But she shook her head and said，“No，I want to be a butterfly for the rest of my life...”Then the butterfly would stay together with her lover forever. On the top of the mountain，she seemed to enjoy the sunrise and the sunset happily together with them. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $