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仁爱版七上英语 Unit1 作文指导 My Friend and I(适合基础薄弱学生)
写作审题读懂要求
本篇作文题目是 My Friend and I《我和我的朋友》,属于人物介绍类记叙文。
这篇作文有硬性要求:文章必须同时介绍两个人,你自己,还有你的一位好朋友,不能只写自己,也不能只写朋友,少写其中一个就会丢分。
我们要写清楚四类信息,写全这四点,作文就拿到基础分数。
第一点:两个人的姓名、来自什么地方、所在班级。
第二点:两个人的性格,比如安静的、友好的、可爱的。
第三点:两个人的兴趣爱好,喜欢做哪些事情。
第四点:结尾对朋友简单评价,表达和朋友相处的感受。
温馨提醒:本篇是书面作文,标题一定要写,标题单词首字母注意大写。
拆解作文结构,逐段讲解
整篇文章分成4个部分:标题、开头段、主体段、结尾段。
1. Title 标题
固定题目:My Friend and I
注意每个实词首字母大写,不要写错单词。
2. Beginning 开头段
开头任务:简单告诉大家你是谁,引出你的好朋友。
不需要写很长,2句话就够。
必背基础句型:
My name is … 我的名字叫……
I have a good friend. 我有一个好朋友。
Her/His name is … 她/他的名字叫……
重点区分代词:
如果你的朋友是女生,就用 Her name is…
如果你的朋友是男生,就用 His name is…
示例句子:
My name is Lingling. I have a good friend. Her name is Xiao Ya.
我的名字叫玲玲。我有一个好朋友。她的名字叫小雅。
3. Body 主体段(全文最重要,占大部分分数)
主体分为两层内容。
第一层:介绍自己和朋友的家乡、班级、性格。
写自己:I’m from +地点 我来自……;I’m in Class …, Grade Seven. 我在七年级……班;I am +形容词(描述性格)。
写朋友:She/He is from +地点;She/He is my classmate. 她/他是我的同班同学;She/He is +形容词(描述性格)。
重要书写规则:班级和年级,班级写在前,年级写在后,每一个单词的首字母必须大写。
正确写法:Class Six, Grade Seven
错误写法:grade seven class six(全部小写、顺序颠倒,考试扣分)
例句:
I’m from Beijing. I’m in Class Six, Grade Seven. I’m quiet and friendly.
我来自北京,我在七年级六班,我安静而且待人友好。
Xiao Ya is from Tianjin. She is my classmate. She is a beautiful and lovely girl.
小雅来自天津,她是我的同班同学,她是一个漂亮可爱的女孩。
第二层:写爱好,还有你们两个人一起做的事。
这里是本篇最大的语法考点:like / enjoy / love 后面,要接动词‑ing形式,表示“喜欢做某事”。
✅ like drawing pictures 喜欢画画
❌ like draw pictures(错误,不能直接写动词原形)
先分别写自己的爱好,再写朋友的爱好,最后写我们共同做的活动。
参考句型:
I like doing … and doing … 我喜欢做……和做……
She/He likes doing … and doing … 她/他喜欢做……和做……
We also do many things together, such as … and …
我们也一起做很多事情,例如……和……
例句:
I like drawing pictures and reading books. Xiao Ya likes singing and listening to music. We also do many things together, such as swimming and running.
我喜欢画画和读书。小雅喜欢唱歌和听音乐。我们也一起做很多事,例如游泳和跑步。
4. End 结尾段
结尾任务:简单评价你的朋友,写出和朋友相处的感受。不需要长篇大论,1‑2句话收尾。
必背句型:
… is a great friend. ……是一个很棒的朋友。
I enjoy the time with him/her. 我很享受和他/她在一起的时光。
注意:宾格的用法:朋友是女生用her;朋友是男生用him。
例句:
Xiao Ya is a great friend! I enjoy the time with her.
小雅是一位很棒的朋友!我很享受和她相处的时光。
基础篇范文(保底得分,适合基础薄弱同学)
My Friend and I
Hi, everyone! My name is Lingling. I have a good friend. Her name is Xiao Ya.
I’m from Beijing. I’m in Class Six, Grade Seven. I’m quiet and friendly. Xiao Ya is from Tianjin. She is my classmate. She is a beautiful and lovely girl.
I like drawing pictures and reading books. Xiao Ya likes singing and listening to music. We also do many things together, such as swimming and running.
Xiao Ya is a great friend! I enjoy the time with her.
★范文亮点
1. 完全贴合课本素材,句子简短,几乎没有难词,方便基础差学生背诵仿写。
2. 文章结构完整:开头‑人物信息‑爱好‑结尾评价,四部分齐全,不会漏写作要点。
3. 严格使用单元核心句型:be from;like doing;such as举例,紧扣本单元学习内容。
▲本篇重难点
1. like + 动词ing 表示喜欢做某事,是本篇最高频易错语法点。
2. 班级年级书写格式:Class Six, Grade Seven,顺序、大小写不能出错。
3. 物主代词 his/her 区分,根据朋友性别选择。
4. 写作任务必须同时写“我”和朋友两个人,不能只写一方。
基础仿写填空练习(课堂直接使用)
My Friend and I
Hi, everyone! My name is ________. I have a good friend. ________ name is ________.
I’m from ________. I’m in Class ________, Grade Seven. I’m ________. My friend is from ________. He/She is my classmate. He/She is ________.
I like ________ and ________. My friend likes ________ and ________. We also do many things together, such as ________ and ________.
________ is a great friend. I enjoy the time with him/her.
填写提示:横线填写姓名、地点、性格形容词、动词‑ing形式的爱好。
进阶篇范文(中等水平学生,提升作文分数)
My Friend and I
Hello, everyone! My name is Li Hua. I have a nice friend. His name is Tom.
I come from Zhengzhou. I am in Class Three, Grade Seven. I am quiet and friendly. Tom is from Shanghai. He is also my classmate. He is an active boy.
I like reading books and playing basketball after school. Tom loves playing football and listening to music. We often do many fun things together, such as running and swimming.
Tom is a great friend. I really enjoy staying with him.
★范文亮点
1. 同义替换升级: be from 替换成 come from ,丰富表达,不增加理解难度。
2. 增加副词 often 、 really ,句子更生动;加入短语 after school 补充场景。
3. 保留基础框架,只是升级词汇,学生可以在会写基础篇之后直接套用。
▲本篇重难点
1. be from 和 come from 同义转换,注意come要随人称变化。
2. love doing sth 和 like doing sth 用法完全一致,love后面同样接动词ing。
3. 副词often的位置:放在实义动词前面 We often do… ,不要放在句末。
拔高篇范文(学有余力的学生,作文出彩)
My Friend and I
Hello, everyone! I’d like to talk about my friend and me. My name is Li Hua and I have a wonderful friend called Tom.
I come from Zhengzhou and I’m in Class Three, Grade Seven. I am quiet and friendly. As my classmate, Tom comes from Shanghai. He is an active boy with a big smile.
In our free time, I enjoy reading books and playing basketball. Tom is interested in playing football and listening to music. Besides our own hobbies, we take part in many activities together, like running and swimming.
Tom is really a great friend. I feel very happy when I stay with him. I hope we can be good friends forever.
★范文亮点
1. 开头句式升级: I’d like to talk about… ,摆脱千篇一律的My name is。
2. 拓展短语 in our free time 、 be interested in doing 、 take part in activities ,丰富书面表达。
3. 使用简单状语从句 when I stay with him ,句式不再全部是简单句,作文档次提升。
▲本篇重难点
1. be interested in doing sth ,in是介词,后面动词必须加ing。
2. called Tom 作后置定语,表示“名叫Tom的”,理解并且会仿写。
3. besides 词义“除……之外”,区分和but的不同。
考试完整写作步骤
第一步:写作文标题 My Friend and I。
第二步:写开头段,写出自己名字,引出好朋友名字。
第三步:写主体部分,先写两个人的家乡、班级、性格;再写两个人爱好,再写共同做的事。
第四步:写结尾段,评价朋友,写出相处感受。
第五步:作文写完,做4项检查。
①检查like/love/enjoy后面动词是不是加了ing;
②检查班级年级的大小写和顺序;
③检查he/she / his/her代词性别有没有用错;
④确认作文既写了自己,也写了朋友
重难点专项巩固练习题
一、用所给动词的正确形式填空(重点:like / love / enjoy / be interested in + doing)
1. I like ________ (draw) pictures after class.
2. She loves ________ (sing) songs.
3. They enjoy ________ (run) together.
4. Tom is interested in ________ (play) football.
5. My friend likes ________ (read) books.
二、判断对错,错的请改正(重点:班级年级格式、代词)
( )1. I’m in grade seven class two. ________________
( )2. My friend is a girl. His name is Amy. ________________
( )3. Class Five, Grade Seven ________________
三、句型转换
1. I am from Henan.(同义句改写)
I ________ ________ Henan.
2. He likes swimming.(改为一般疑问句)
________ he ________ swimming?
四、翻译句子
1. 我喜欢读书和听音乐。
2. 他是我的同学,我们经常一起做很多事情。
五、小作文改错(整篇有4处错误,请找出来并且改正)
My Friend and I
Hi, everyone! My name is Wang Hong. I have good friend. His name is Lucy.
I’m in grade seven class four. I like draw. Lucy like dance.
Lucy is a great friend, I enjoy the time with she.
1.________ 2.________ 3.________ 4.________
参考答案
一、动词填空
1.drawing 2.singing 3.running 4.playing 5.reading
二、判断改错
1.(×) I’m in Class Two, Grade Seven.
2.(×) My friend is a girl. Her name is Amy.
3.(√)
三、句型转换
1.come from
2.Does; like
四、翻译句子
1.I like reading books and listening to music.
2.He is my classmate. We often do many things together.
五、短文改错
1.have good friend → have a good friend
2.grade seven class four → Class Four, Grade Seven
3.like draw → like drawing;like dance→likes dancing(两处,任选标出)
4.with she → with her
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