Unit 1 Using Language（写作课讲义）英语人教版选择性必修第二册

本讲义聚焦CEEL例证段结构（Claim-Evidence-Explanation-Link）这一核心知识点，系统衔接阅读课“Evidence→inference→conclusion”的思维路径，引导学生迁移至写作中“Life event→quality inference→thematic claim”的论证逻辑。通过区分品质标签与证据、提取“困难—选择—行动—结果”事件链、完成证据卡和写作提纲等学习支架，帮助学生掌握用具体事例证明抽象品质的方法。 该资料以钱学森与霍金的事例分析为载体，通过比较阅读培养学生分析、推断的思维品质，借助句式升级和衔接词训练提升语言表达的准确性与逻辑性。分层任务设计（基础120词/培优140-170词）和“三看一改”互评活动，助力学生自主调控学习过程，发展学习能力。课中任务驱动式教学提升课堂效率，课后范文研读与修订清单帮助学生查漏补缺，强化论证能力。

人教版高中英语选择性必修第二册 UNIT 1 SCIENCE AND SCIENTISTS Using Language 写作课讲义（解析版） CLAIM 品质判断 EVIDENCE 具体事例 EXPLANATION 解释关联 LINK 回应主题 核心问题：How can specific life stories prove an abstract quality? 答案、解析和教师提示以黄色或蓝色提示框呈现；开放性答案不唯一。 使用说明与学习目标 讲义定位 本讲义配合教材第7—9页使用，不替代教材原文。课堂重点不是罗列科学家生平，而是把“人物经历”转化为支持“品质判断”的证据。 解析版供教师备课、课堂核对和课后订正使用。派生学生原卷版时，应删除黄色答案框、参考范文和教师提示，并保留必要书写空间。 课堂实施：40分钟建议核心路径为Task 1—5、8—13、16—21、25—26；其余任务用于分层拓展、范文研读或课后成文与修订。 1 一、学习目标 比较钱学森与霍金两篇人物语篇的段落功能，提取“困难—选择—行动—结果”。 区分品质标签与品质证据，说明具体行为为什么能够证明某种科学精神。 掌握CEEL例证段结构：Claim—Evidence—Explanation—Link。 形成一篇约120词的科学精神主题短文提纲，并完成一个80—100词核心例证段；培优任务可扩展至140—170词。 2 二、课堂产出 产出 完成标准 评价证据 人物证据卡 至少提取2个具体行为，并注明所体现的品质 能回答“Which detail proves it, and why?” CEEL写作提纲 只选择2个主要品质；每个品质对应1个核心事例 品质、事例与解释一一对应 核心例证段 80—100词；含完整CEEL链 有具体行为，不只写形容词或生平列表 3 三、与阅读课的衔接 阅读课中的思维 写作课中的迁移 Evidence → inference → conclusion Life event → quality inference → thematic claim 相信某个理论不等于证明理论 认为某人“伟大”不等于已经证明其品质 必须解释证据为什么有效 必须解释事例为什么能够体现品质 贯穿性提醒 不要把“Qian was patriotic.”或“Hawking was determined.”当作完整论证。品质判断只是Claim，后面还需要具体Evidence和显性的Explanation。 1 Lead-in：从“标签”走向“证据” Task 1 判断下列句子属于Quality label、Evidence还是Explanation。 句子 类型 判断依据 ① Qian Xuesen was patriotic. Quality label 只给出品质结论，没有说明他做了什么。 ② When China needed aerospace expertise, Qian chose to return and take responsibility. Evidence 呈现了具体情境、选择和行动。 ③ This decision shows that national responsibility mattered more to him than personal comfort. Explanation 解释“回国承担责任”为什么能够证明爱国与责任感。 ④ Stephen Hawking was willing to admit his faults. Evidence / quality-bearing action 句子本身含有具体行为，可进一步说明其体现honesty和open-mindedness。 Task 2 选择更有说服力的一句，并说明原因。 A B Qian loved China very much. Although his return was delayed, Qian kept trying to come back and later accepted the challenge of building China’s aerospace programme. Hawking was a great scientist. Despite severe illness, Hawking continued his research and remained willing to correct himself when evidence challenged an earlier view. 参考答案： 两组都应选择B。B句包含具体处境、行动与选择，读者可以据此推断品质；A句只是笼统评价，缺少可核查的依据。 教师追问 追问1：What exactly did the scientist do? 追问2：What difficulty or choice made the action meaningful? 追问3：Why does this action prove the quality? 本课驱动问题：How can specific life stories prove an abstract quality? 2 While-reading—Text 1：THE FATHER OF CHINA’S AEROSPACE Task 3 快速阅读，完成“段落功能—关键信息”表。 部分 段落功能 关键信息（参考） Introduction 概括人物身份与影响 钱学森对中国航天和国防科技产生了深远影响，被誉为“中国航天之父”。 Body 1 早年经历与专业选择 “一·二八”事变后，他认识到国家需要强大的航空力量，因此调整学习方向。 Body 2 回国受阻与重大选择 回国过程受到阻碍，但他没有放弃；回国后面对基础薄弱的现实，仍承担起研究任务。 Body 3 科研贡献 他参与并领导导弹、火箭等研究；神舟系列背后的许多技术可追溯到他的研究。 Conclusion 总结品质及多元兴趣 文本强调他的爱国、坚定、学识与创造性，也提到艺术修养对其科学思维的积极影响。 Task 4 核对教材信息。判断正误并订正。 陈述 判断 订正 / 依据 ① Qian changed his major simply because his personal interest changed. F 他调整方向与国家需要有关，而不是单纯因为个人兴趣变化。 ② Much of the technology behind the Shenzhou rockets can be traced back to Qian’s research. T 这也是他被称为“中国航天之父”的重要依据。 ③ Qian’s interest in art was unrelated to his scientific development. F 文本指出，他对艺术的深刻欣赏可能有助于其创造性思维。 文本问题答案 Why was Qian called “the father of China’s aerospace”? Because much of the technology behind the Shenzhou rockets can be traced back to his research, and he helped establish and lead major aerospace programmes. 3 Post-reading—Text 1 Analysis：事例如何证明品质 Task 5 完成Qian的Evidence—Quality—Why证据卡。 具体处境或行为 可推断品质 为什么能够证明 国家受到战争威胁后，他重新思考自己的专业方向。 patriotic / responsible 他的学习选择由国家需要推动，而不是只追求个人兴趣。 回国受阻后仍坚持回到中国。 determined / patriotic 阻碍越大，持续选择越能显示其坚定与归属感。 面对基础薄弱、人才和条件有限的局面，仍承担重大科研任务。 courageous / determined 他没有因条件不利而退缩，而是接受长期且高风险的挑战。 广泛阅读并重视音乐、绘画等艺术。 creative / open-minded 跨领域兴趣能够帮助他从不同角度思考问题，增强创造性。 Task 6 把“生平罗列”改写为“例证论证”。 原句：Qian studied railway engineering, later changed his field, returned to China and worked on rockets. He was patriotic. 参考答案： When the country needed stronger aviation and aerospace technology, Qian changed his field of study and later returned to take responsibility for a difficult national programme. These choices show that his knowledge was guided by patriotism rather than personal comfort. 写作方法小结 不要只写：发生了A、B、C，所以他很伟大。 应当写：在什么困难下 → 作出什么选择 → 采取什么行动 → 这一行为为什么体现某种品质。 证据选择原则：优先选择“有压力、有选择、有后果”的行为，而不是一般性履历。 Task 7 一句话出口条。 The strongest evidence of Qian’s scientific spirit is __________________ because __________________. 参考答案： 示例：The strongest evidence is his decision to return and accept a difficult national task because it shows that responsibility to his country outweighed personal comfort and easier opportunities. 4 While-reading—Text 2：A WORLD OF PURE THOUGHT Task 8 完成霍金语篇结构图。 部分 主要功能 关键信息（参考） Introduction 简要介绍身份、处境与研究领域 霍金是著名物理学家；严重疾病限制了身体活动，但没有停止他的思考和研究。 Body 说明“成名依据” 他围绕宇宙起源和大爆炸理论开展研究，相关观点后来得到天文观测支持。 Conclusion 归纳成就背后的品质 文本强调brilliant、brave、determined，并特别指出他愿意承认错误。 Task 9 回答教材问题，并标出“证据动词”。 问题 参考答案 How was Hawking’s work on the big bang theory proven correct? Astronomers used their telescopes and observations to provide support for his work. Which action most clearly shows intellectual honesty? He was willing to admit his faults and revise a view when evidence required it. Why is “continued his work despite illness” stronger than “he was determined”? 前者呈现了困难与持续行动，读者能够据此推断determination；后者只是直接贴标签。 Task 10 完成Hawking的证据卡。 Evidence Quality Explanation He continued to think and work while living with severe physical limitations. brave / determined 持续研究并非没有困难，正是困难使行动具有证明力。 He developed bold ideas about the origin of the universe. brilliant / curious 他敢于提出并探索重大问题，而不是满足于已有解释。 He was willing to admit faults. honest / open-minded 科学真理被置于个人面子之上。 5 Post-reading：比较两位科学家的“不同经历—共同精神” Task 11 比较阅读。 维度 Qian Xuesen Stephen Hawking 主要挑战 回国受阻；国家科研基础薄弱；承担重大国防与航天任务 严重疾病限制身体活动；面对复杂且有争议的宇宙理论 关键选择 回国并服务国家；在困难条件下建立科研事业 继续研究；接受观测证据；承认并修正错误 主要贡献呈现方式 国家工程、技术体系和长期影响 理论突破、观测验证与思想影响 可提炼品质 patriotism, responsibility, determination, creativity brilliance, courage, determination, intellectual honesty 共同点 把困难转化为持续行动；让个人选择服务于更大的科学目标 把困难转化为持续行动；让个人选择服从证据和真理 Task 12 回答主题问题：What personal qualities define the scientific spirit? 参考答案： Scientific spirit includes curiosity and intelligence, but it becomes visible through responsibility, persistence, courage, creativity, honesty and respect for evidence. Different scientists may show different qualities, yet their actions must place truth and progress above comfort, pride or immediate success. 选材提醒 核心任务为约120词短文；培优任务可扩展至140—170词。短文不宜写四五种品质。选择2种最有代表性的品质，每种品质配1个核心事例并解释。 Qian和Hawking可以同时写，也可以集中写一位科学家。无论选谁，都要保证“品质—事例—解释”对应。 Task 13 从下列品质中选择最适合两篇文本的四项。 curiosity　patriotism　responsibility　determination　honesty　creativity　humour　obedience 参考答案： 推荐选择：patriotism / responsibility（Qian）；determination / honesty（两人均可，尤其Hawking）。creativity也可用于Qian，但需用其跨领域兴趣或科研实践作证。 6 Language Building：结构与衔接不是装饰 Task 14 归纳两篇文本的段落功能。 段落 核心问题 写作功能 Introduction Who is the scientist? Why does he matter? 简洁界定人物及主题，不展开所有细节。 Body paragraph 1/2 What difficulty did he face? What did he choose or do? What does it prove? 用具体事例证明品质，形成CEEL。 Conclusion Why do the qualities matter beyond the individual? 回扣scientific spirit，说明对科学与社会的意义。 Task 15 分析衔接词的功能，并选择合适词完成句子。 衔接词 主要功能 示例位置 however / nevertheless 转折、让步；突出困难与后续行动之间的反差 Although conditions were poor, Qian accepted the challenge nevertheless. because / therefore / as a result 建立原因—结果关系 His work influenced later technology; therefore, his impact continued beyond one project. besides / furthermore 补充同层次论据 Besides being brilliant, Hawking was brave and determined. above all 突出最重要品质 Above all, he was willing to admit his faults. rather than 呈现价值选择 He placed scientific truth above pride rather than defending an unsupported view. 句子 答案 ① Qian faced poor research conditions. ________, he did not allow them to discourage him. Nevertheless / However ② Hawking was brilliant. ________, he was willing to admit his faults. Above all ③ Qian returned to serve his country ________ seeking an easier life abroad. rather than ④ Hawking’s theory received observational support; ________, the argument became more convincing. therefore / as a result 语言使用原则 连接词必须表达真实逻辑。不要为了“高级”而堆砌Furthermore、Moreover、What’s more；同一段中通常1—2个关键连接就足够。 7 Writing Tool：CEEL例证段 Task 16 理解CEEL四步。 步骤 作用 核心问题 常用表达 C—Claim 提出一个明确品质 What quality will this paragraph prove? One quality that defines… is… / …showed remarkable… E—Evidence 呈现具体处境、选择和行为 What exactly happened? Faced with… / When… / Rather than…, he… E—Explanation 解释事例与品质的关系 Why does the action prove the quality? This shows/illustrates that… / The decision reveals… L—Link 回扣科学精神或全文主题 Why does it matter? Such responsibility is essential because… Task 17 分析示范段。 CEEL示范段 Determination was central to Qian Xuesen’s scientific spirit. Although his return to China was delayed and the country’s research conditions were poor, he continued trying to come back and later accepted the challenge of developing aerospace technology. These choices show that he did not allow difficulty to decide the direction of his work; instead, he turned responsibility into sustained action. Such determination made long-term scientific progress possible. CEEL部分 对应句子 / 信息 Claim Determination was central to Qian Xuesen’s scientific spirit. Evidence 回国受阻仍坚持；科研条件差仍接受航天任务。 Explanation 困难没有决定他的方向；责任被转化为持续行动。 Link 这种坚定使长期科学进步成为可能。 Task 18 修复“缺少Explanation”的段落。 Hawking was honest. He was willing to admit his faults. He was a great scientist. 参考答案： Intellectual honesty was one of Hawking’s most important qualities. He was willing to admit his faults instead of protecting an earlier opinion. This willingness shows that he valued evidence and scientific truth more than personal pride. Such openness allows science to correct itself and move forward. 8 Pre-writing：审题与选材 Task 19 拆解教材写作任务。 要素 本课要求 Topic the scientific spirit Purpose explain which qualities matter and prove them through specific stories Audience classmates / general school readers Genre short thematic essay with examples Tone objective, respectful and evidence-based Length about 120 words for the core task; advanced option: 140—170 words（本系列统一课堂要求） Core rule 2 qualities + 2 concrete pieces of evidence + explicit explanation Task 20 选材银行：只选最强证据。 品质 可选人物事例 适用解释 patriotism / responsibility Qian根据国家需要调整专业方向；克服阻碍回国；承担航天任务 个人知识与国家需要结合；责任高于舒适和个人得失 determination Qian在条件薄弱时持续工作；Hawking在疾病限制下继续研究 困难没有中断行动，长期目标得到坚持 creativity / open-mindedness Qian重视跨领域阅读与艺术；Hawking探索宇宙起源的重大问题 不同视角和大胆提问推动新认识 honesty / respect for evidence Hawking愿意承认错误并修正观点 真理高于个人面子；科学能够自我纠正 Task 21 完成提纲。 段落 中心内容 参考提纲 Introduction 界定scientific spirit；提出2个品质 Scientific spirit is shown not only in intelligence, but also in responsibility and honesty. Body 1 品质1 + 具体事例 + 解释 Qian—return / difficult conditions—responsibility to country—science serving society Body 2 品质2 + 具体事例 + 解释 Hawking—admit faults—truth above pride—science corrects itself Conclusion 总结共同意义 Great science depends on difficult choices, sustained action and respect for evidence. 9 Language Building：把普通句写成有效句 Task 22 句式功能库。 功能 基础表达 可迁移表达 提出品质 He was determined. One quality that defined him was determination. / Determination was central to his scientific spirit. 呈现困难 He had many difficulties. Faced with limited resources and an uncertain future, he… 突出选择 He returned to China. Rather than choosing an easier path, he returned and took responsibility for… 解释关联 This shows determination. The decision reveals that he placed long-term responsibility above immediate comfort. 回应主题 He was a great scientist. Such honesty allows science to correct itself and move closer to the truth. Task 23 合并并升级句子。 原句 参考改写 Qian returned to China. The conditions were poor. He worked on aerospace technology. Although research conditions were poor, Qian returned and accepted the challenge of building China’s aerospace programme, a choice that reveals both patriotism and determination. Hawking made mistakes. He admitted them. This was honest. When evidence challenged an earlier view, Hawking was willing to admit his faults, showing that scientific truth mattered more to him than personal pride. Qian liked art. It helped him. He was creative. Qian’s deep appreciation of art broadened the way he viewed problems and may have contributed to the creativity required in scientific research. 准确性提醒 不要把“may have contributed to”改成绝对因果“directly made him creative”。教材只提供一种合理关联，不足以证明单一因果。 评价人物时使用克制表达：shows, suggests, reveals, illustrates，比proves beyond doubt更稳妥。 Task 24 选择恰当动词。 A specific action can show / suggest / reveal a quality; an essay should explain / list the relationship; evidence should support / decorate the claim. 参考答案： show / suggest / reveal均可，语气强弱略有差异；应选explain和support。事例不是装饰，而是论证。 10 Micro-writing：完成一个80—100词核心例证段 Task 25 任选Qian或Hawking，使用CEEL完成一段。 写作要求 ① 只证明1个品质；② 至少写出1个具体处境和1个行动；③ 必须有Explanation；④ 80—100词；⑤ 不照抄教材原句。 CEEL 你的内容 / 参考方向 Claim quality: determination / responsibility / honesty / creativity Evidence difficulty + choice + action Explanation why the action reveals the quality Link why the quality matters to science _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考范文（约95词） Intellectual honesty was one of Stephen Hawking’s most valuable qualities. Although he was famous for bold ideas about the universe, he did not treat his own opinions as untouchable truths. When evidence or later thinking exposed a weakness, he was willing to admit his faults instead of protecting his reputation. This choice reveals that he valued truth more than personal pride. Such honesty is essential to scientific progress because knowledge grows only when researchers examine, question and, when necessary, correct their own conclusions. Task 26 课堂互评：三看一改。 检查项 2分 1分 0分 Claim 品质明确且集中 品质基本明确 无明确品质 Evidence 具体处境和行为完整 有行为但细节不足 只有标签或生平列表 Explanation 清楚解释关联 解释较笼统 没有解释 Coherence & Language 衔接自然，语言准确 有少量问题但能理解 逻辑跳跃或错误较多 11 Model Essay：从两位科学家理解科学精神 参考范文（约165词） Scientific spirit is not simply a gift for producing clever ideas. It is shown in the choices scientists make when progress becomes difficult. Qian Xuesen demonstrated responsibility and determination. After realizing that China needed stronger aviation and aerospace technology, he changed his field of study. Later, although his return was delayed and research conditions were poor, he accepted the challenge of helping build the country’s aerospace programme. These choices show that his knowledge was guided by responsibility rather than personal comfort. Stephen Hawking showed intellectual courage and honesty. Despite severe illness, he continued to explore the origin of the universe. More importantly, he was willing to admit mistakes when evidence challenged an earlier view. This openness placed scientific truth above personal pride. Qian and Hawking followed different paths, yet both remind us that great science depends on difficult choices, sustained action and respect for evidence. Task 27 标注范文中的论证结构。 部分 内容 作用 Introduction Scientific spirit…choices scientists make… 界定主题并建立“品质必须由选择体现”的观点。 Body 1—Qian 国家需要→调整方向→回国受阻→承担任务→responsibility 用困难和选择证明责任感与坚定。 Body 2—Hawking 疾病→继续探索→承认错误→truth above pride 用持续行动和修正错误证明勇气与诚实。 Conclusion different paths…difficult choices, sustained action, respect for evidence 综合两人共同点，回应scientific spirit。 Task 28 范文为何没有写所有生平成就？ 参考答案： 因为写作目标是证明scientific spirit，而不是写人物传记。凡是不能直接支持所选品质的细节，都应删减；有限篇幅应留给“事例+解释”。 可替换方案 只写Qian：用patriotism + creativity两段展开。 只写Hawking：用determination + intellectual honesty两段展开。 写课外科学家时，也必须遵守相同的CEEL结构，并核实事实来源。 12 Homework：完整成文与修订 Task 29 完成约120词主题短文；培优任务可扩展至140—170词。 写作题目 Write an essay about the scientific spirit. Choose one or two scientists and explain two important qualities through specific examples. Use a clear introduction, CEEL body paragraphs and a focused conclusion. 提交内容 具体要求 初稿 核心任务约120词；培优可扩展至140—170词；2个主要品质；2个具体事例；每个事例后有Explanation。 CEEL标注 在每个主体段旁标注C/E/E/L。 修订痕迹 至少补充1处具体细节、强化1处解释、修改1处衔接。 自评 用本页清单完成自评，圈出一处最有说服力的证据句。 Task 30 终稿自检清单。 □ 我的开头直接回应scientific spirit，没有写空泛背景。 □ 我只选择了1—2个主要品质，没有堆积形容词。 □ 每个品质至少有一个具体、准确的人物事例。 □ 我解释了“事例为什么能够体现品质”。 □ 我的结尾说明这些品质为什么对科学进步重要。 □ 连接词表达真实逻辑，没有机械堆砌。 □ 词数、时态、拼写和标点符合要求。 13 教师使用提示 常见问题 课堂纠偏 只写人物生平 删除不能支持品质的细节；要求学生在每个事例后补写“This shows that…” 品质与事例错配 追问“同样行为在没有这一困难时，还能否证明该品质？” Explanation重复Claim 要求解释行为中的“选择、代价或价值排序”，不要只换词重复。 结尾喊口号 回到两位人物的共同点：difficult choices, sustained action, respect for evidence。 板书建议 Scientific spirit = Quality claim + verifiable life evidence + explanation CEEL: C 品质判断 → E 具体事例 → E 解释关联 → L 回应主题 Qian: responsibility / determination　　Hawking: courage / honesty — Unit 1 Using Language 写作课讲义（解析版）结束 — 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 人教版高中英语选择性必修第二册 UNIT 1 SCIENCE AND SCIENTISTS Using Language 写作课讲义（学生原卷版） CLAIM 品质判断 EVIDENCE 具体事例 EXPLANATION 解释关联 LINK 回应主题 核心问题：How can specific life stories prove an abstract quality? 姓名：________________　班级：________________　日期：________________ 使用说明与学习目标 讲义定位 本讲义配合教材第7—9页使用，不替代教材原文。课堂重点不是罗列科学家生平，而是把“人物经历”转化为支持“品质判断”的证据。请在课堂阅读、讨论和教师引导后完成各项任务。 课堂实施：40分钟建议核心路径为Task 1—5、8—13、16—21、25—26；其余任务用于分层拓展、范文研读或课后成文与修订。 1 一、学习目标 比较钱学森与霍金两篇人物语篇的段落功能，提取“困难—选择—行动—结果”。 区分品质标签与品质证据，说明具体行为为什么能够证明某种科学精神。 掌握CEEL例证段结构：Claim—Evidence—Explanation—Link。 形成一篇约120词的科学精神主题短文提纲，并完成一个80—100词核心例证段；培优任务可扩展至140—170词。 2 二、课堂产出 产出 完成标准 评价证据 人物证据卡 至少提取2个具体行为，并注明所体现的品质 能回答“Which detail proves it, and why?” CEEL写作提纲 只选择2个主要品质；每个品质对应1个核心事例 品质、事例与解释一一对应 核心例证段 80—100词；含完整CEEL链 有具体行为，不只写形容词或生平列表 3 三、与阅读课的衔接 阅读课中的思维 写作课中的迁移 Evidence → inference → conclusion Life event → quality inference → thematic claim 相信某个理论不等于证明理论 认为某人“伟大”不等于已经证明其品质 必须解释证据为什么有效 必须解释事例为什么能够体现品质 贯穿性提醒 不要把“Qian was patriotic.”或“Hawking was determined.”当作完整论证。品质判断只是Claim，后面还需要具体Evidence和显性的Explanation。 1 Lead-in：从“标签”走向“证据” Task 1 判断下列句子属于Quality label、Evidence还是Explanation。 句子 类型 判断依据 ① Qian Xuesen was patriotic. ________________ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ② When China needed aerospace expertise, Qian chose to return and take responsibility. ________________ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ③ This decision shows that national responsibility mattered more to him than personal comfort. ________________ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ④ Stephen Hawking was willing to admit his faults. ________________ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 2 选择更有说服力的一句，并说明原因。 A B Qian loved China very much. Although his return was delayed, Qian kept trying to come back and later accepted the challenge of building China’s aerospace programme. Hawking was a great scientist. Despite severe illness, Hawking continued his research and remained willing to correct himself when evidence challenged an earlier view. 我的判断与理由 选择：__________ 理由：＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 思考提示 1. What exactly did the scientist do? 2. What difficulty or choice made the action meaningful? 3. Why does this action reveal the quality? 本课驱动问题：How can specific life stories prove an abstract quality? 2 While-reading—Text 1：THE FATHER OF CHINA’S AEROSPACE Task 3 快速阅读，完成“段落功能—关键信息”表。 部分 段落功能 关键信息 Introduction ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body 1 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body 2 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body 3 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Conclusion ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 4 核对教材信息。判断正误并订正。 陈述 判断 订正 / 依据 ① Qian changed his major simply because his personal interest changed. ____ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ② Much of the technology behind the Shenzhou rockets can be traced back to Qian’s research. ____ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ③ Qian’s interest in art was unrelated to his scientific development. ____ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 教材问题 Why was Qian called “the father of China’s aerospace”? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 3 Post-reading—Text 1 Analysis：事例如何证明品质 Task 5 完成Qian的Evidence—Quality—Why证据卡。 具体处境或行为 可推断品质 为什么能够证明 国家受到战争威胁后，他重新思考自己的专业方向。 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 回国受阻后仍坚持回到中国。 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 面对基础薄弱、人才和条件有限的局面，仍承担重大科研任务。 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 广泛阅读并重视音乐、绘画等艺术。 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 6 把“生平罗列”改写为“例证论证”。 原句：Qian studied railway engineering, later changed his field, returned to China and worked on rockets. He was patriotic. 我的改写 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 写作方法小结 不要只写：发生了A、B、C，所以他很伟大。 应当写：在什么困难下 → 作出什么选择 → 采取什么行动 → 这一行为为什么体现某种品质。 证据选择原则：优先选择“有压力、有选择、有后果”的行为，而不是一般性履历。 Task 7 一句话出口条。 The strongest evidence of Qian’s scientific spirit is __________________ because __________________. 我的答案 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 4 While-reading—Text 2：A WORLD OF PURE THOUGHT Task 8 完成霍金语篇结构图。 部分 主要功能 关键信息 Introduction ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Conclusion ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 9 回答教材问题，并标出“证据动词”。 问题 我的答案 How was Hawking’s work on the big bang theory proven correct? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Which action most clearly shows intellectual honesty? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Why is “continued his work despite illness” stronger than “he was determined”? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 10 完成Hawking的证据卡。 Evidence Quality Explanation He continued to think and work while living with severe physical limitations. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ He developed bold ideas about the origin of the universe. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ He was willing to admit faults. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 5 Post-reading：比较两位科学家的“不同经历—共同精神” Task 11 比较阅读。 维度 Qian Xuesen Stephen Hawking 主要挑战 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 关键选择 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 主要贡献呈现方式 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 可提炼品质 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 共同点 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 12 回答主题问题：What personal qualities define the scientific spirit? 我的回答 What personal qualities define the scientific spirit? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 选材提醒 核心任务为约120词短文；培优任务可扩展至140—170词。短文不宜写四五种品质。选择2种最有代表性的品质，每种品质配1个核心事例并解释。 Qian和Hawking可以同时写，也可以集中写一位科学家。无论选谁，都要保证“品质—事例—解释”对应。 Task 13 从下列品质中选择最适合两篇文本的四项。 curiosity　patriotism　responsibility　determination　honesty　creativity　humour　obedience 我的选择与依据 选择：____________________________________________ 依据：＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 6 Language Building：结构与衔接不是装饰 Task 14 归纳两篇文本的段落功能。 段落 核心问题 写作功能 Introduction Who is the scientist? Why does he matter? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body paragraph 1/2 What difficulty did he face? What did he choose or do? What does it prove? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Conclusion Why do the qualities matter beyond the individual? ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 15 分析衔接词的功能，并选择合适词完成句子。 衔接词 主要功能 示例位置 however / nevertheless 转折、让步；突出困难与后续行动之间的反差 Although conditions were poor, Qian accepted the challenge nevertheless. because / therefore / as a result 建立原因—结果关系 His work influenced later technology; therefore, his impact continued beyond one project. besides / furthermore 补充同层次论据 Besides being brilliant, Hawking was brave and determined. above all 突出最重要品质 Above all, he was willing to admit his faults. rather than 呈现价值选择 He placed scientific truth above pride rather than defending an unsupported view. 句子 我的答案 ① Qian faced poor research conditions. ________, he did not allow them to discourage him. ________________________ ② Hawking was brilliant. ________, he was willing to admit his faults. ________________________ ③ Qian returned to serve his country ________ seeking an easier life abroad. ________________________ ④ Hawking’s theory received observational support; ________, the argument became more convincing. ________________________ 语言使用原则 连接词必须表达真实逻辑。不要为了“高级”而堆砌Furthermore、Moreover、What’s more；同一段中通常1—2个关键连接就足够。 7 Writing Tool：CEEL例证段 Task 16 理解CEEL四步。 步骤 作用 核心问题 常用表达 C—Claim 提出一个明确品质 What quality will this paragraph prove? One quality that defines… is… / …showed remarkable… E—Evidence 呈现具体处境、选择和行为 What exactly happened? Faced with… / When… / Rather than…, he… E—Explanation 解释事例与品质的关系 Why does the action prove the quality? This shows/illustrates that… / The decision reveals… L—Link 回扣科学精神或全文主题 Why does it matter? Such responsibility is essential because… Task 17 分析示范段。 CEEL示范段 Determination was central to Qian Xuesen’s scientific spirit. Although his return to China was delayed and the country’s research conditions were poor, he continued trying to come back and later accepted the challenge of developing aerospace technology. These choices show that he did not allow difficulty to decide the direction of his work; instead, he turned responsibility into sustained action. Such determination made long-term scientific progress possible. CEEL部分 我的标注 / 分析 Claim ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Evidence ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Explanation ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Link ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 18 修复“缺少Explanation”的段落。 Hawking was honest. He was willing to admit his faults. He was a great scientist. 我的修订 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 8 Pre-writing：审题与选材 Task 19 拆解教材写作任务。 要素 本课要求 Topic the scientific spirit Purpose explain which qualities matter and prove them through specific stories Audience classmates / general school readers Genre short thematic essay with examples Tone objective, respectful and evidence-based Length about 120 words for the core task; advanced option: 140—170 words（本系列统一课堂要求） Core rule 2 qualities + 2 concrete pieces of evidence + explicit explanation Task 20 选材银行：只选最强证据。 品质 可选人物事例 适用解释 patriotism / responsibility Qian根据国家需要调整专业方向；克服阻碍回国；承担航天任务 个人知识与国家需要结合；责任高于舒适和个人得失 determination Qian在条件薄弱时持续工作；Hawking在疾病限制下继续研究 困难没有中断行动，长期目标得到坚持 creativity / open-mindedness Qian重视跨领域阅读与艺术；Hawking探索宇宙起源的重大问题 不同视角和大胆提问推动新认识 honesty / respect for evidence Hawking愿意承认错误并修正观点 真理高于个人面子；科学能够自我纠正 Task 21 完成提纲。 段落 中心内容 我的提纲 Introduction 界定scientific spirit；提出2个品质 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body 1 品质1 + 具体事例 + 解释 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body 2 品质2 + 具体事例 + 解释 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Conclusion 总结共同意义 ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 9 Language Building：把普通句写成有效句 Task 22 句式功能库。 功能 基础表达 可迁移表达 提出品质 He was determined. One quality that defined him was determination. / Determination was central to his scientific spirit. 呈现困难 He had many difficulties. Faced with limited resources and an uncertain future, he… 突出选择 He returned to China. Rather than choosing an easier path, he returned and took responsibility for… 解释关联 This shows determination. The decision reveals that he placed long-term responsibility above immediate comfort. 回应主题 He was a great scientist. Such honesty allows science to correct itself and move closer to the truth. Task 23 合并并升级句子。 原句 我的改写 Qian returned to China. The conditions were poor. He worked on aerospace technology. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Hawking made mistakes. He admitted them. This was honest. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Qian liked art. It helped him. He was creative. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 准确性提醒 不要把“may have contributed to”改成绝对因果“directly made him creative”。教材只提供一种合理关联，不足以证明单一因果。 评价人物时使用克制表达：shows, suggests, reveals, illustrates，比proves beyond doubt更稳妥。 Task 24 选择恰当动词。 A specific action can show / suggest / reveal a quality; an essay should explain / list the relationship; evidence should support / decorate the claim. 我的选择 A specific action can show / suggest / reveal a quality; an essay should explain / list the relationship; evidence should support / decorate the claim. 答案：____________________________________________________________ 10 Micro-writing：完成一个80—100词核心例证段 Task 25 任选Qian或Hawking，使用CEEL完成一段。 写作要求 ① 只证明1个品质；② 至少写出1个具体处境和1个行动；③ 必须有Explanation；④ 80—100词；⑤ 不照抄教材原句。 CEEL 你的内容 / 写作提示 Claim quality: determination / responsibility / honesty / creativity Evidence difficulty + choice + action Explanation why the action reveals the quality Link why the quality matters to science _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Task 26 课堂互评：三看一改。 检查项 2分 1分 0分 Claim 品质明确且集中 品质基本明确 无明确品质 Evidence 具体处境和行为完整 有行为但细节不足 只有标签或生平列表 Explanation 清楚解释关联 解释较笼统 没有解释 Coherence & Language 衔接自然，语言准确 有少量问题但能理解 逻辑跳跃或错误较多 11 Model Essay：从两位科学家理解科学精神 课堂范文研读 阅读教师展示的范文，圈画人物事例，标出主体段中的C / E / E / L，并完成下表。 Task 27 标注范文中的论证结构。 部分 我的摘录 作用分析 Introduction ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body 1—Qian ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Body 2—Hawking ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Conclusion ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ Task 28 范文为何没有写所有生平成就？ 我的回答 范文为什么没有写人物所有的生平成就？ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿ 12 Homework：完整成文与修订 Task 29 完成约120词主题短文；培优任务可扩展至140—170词。 写作题目 Write an essay about the scientific spirit. Choose one or two scientists and explain two important qualities through specific examples. Use a clear introduction, CEEL body paragraphs and a focused conclusion. 提交内容 具体要求 初稿 核心任务约120词；培优可扩展至140—170词；2个主要品质；2个具体事例；每个事例后有Explanation。 CEEL标注 在每个主体段旁标注C/E/E/L。 修订痕迹 至少补充1处具体细节、强化1处解释、修改1处衔接。 自评 用本页清单完成自评，圈出一处最有说服力的证据句。 _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Task 30 终稿自检清单。 □ 我的开头直接回应scientific spirit，没有写空泛背景。 □ 我只选择了1—2个主要品质，没有堆积形容词。 □ 每个品质至少有一个具体、准确的人物事例。 □ 我解释了“事例为什么能够体现品质”。 □ 我的结尾说明这些品质为什么对科学进步重要。 □ 连接词表达真实逻辑，没有机械堆砌。 □ 词数、时态、拼写和标点符合要求。 — Unit 1 Using Language 写作课讲义（学生原卷版）结束 — 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $