第02练 高考读后续写真题写作微技能训练：动作描写（专项训练）2027年高考英语一轮复习读后续写高分突破

**基本信息** 聚焦读后续写动作描写，构建“基础句式-细节丰富-氛围营造”三阶方法体系，通过真题实操与多维评价提升语言表达精准性与情节逻辑性，培养语言能力与思维品质。 **专项设计** |模块|题量/典例|方法提炼|知识逻辑| |----|-----------|----------|----------| |起笔练·根基铸牢|4类句式讲解（动作链/非谓语等）|动作链（基础/升阶句式）、非谓语（细节补充）、with复合结构/独立主格（氛围营造）及句式融合|从动作分解构骨架到非谓语添细节，再到高分句型绘氛围，层层递进| |提笔练·进阶跃升|1篇真题材料+多情节推进任务|基于核心情节拆解动作链、非谓语等方法的场景化应用|以“困境-求助-解决”情节为载体，实现方法到写作的迁移| |多维评·复盘进阶|自评互评表+五档评分对标|对标五档标准（融洽度/语法词汇/连接成分）的针对性反馈|通过三级评价（自评/互评/师评）强化方法运用与逻辑衔接能力|

第02练 从真题习得读后续写·写作微技能：动作描写 起笔练·根基铸牢 动作链搭骨架推情节 一、什么是动作链？ 这里的动作链指得是多个谓语动词构成的动词链，可以理解为慢镜头下的多个分解动作，先做什么就先写，后做什么就后写，用逗号把动作隔开，最后一个动作前加个and。 2、 动作链句式 1. 基础版：主语 + did A and did B 2. 升阶版：主语 + did A, did B, and did C 非谓语添细节润画面 一、非谓语如何丰富画面细节？ 非谓语动词（现在分词/过去分词）作状语，表示伴随、原因、时间等，或者两个非谓语动词并列，共同修饰主要动作，丰富动作细节。 二、非谓语常用句式 1. 基础版：主语 + did A, 非谓语动词 B 或 非谓语动词 A, 主语 + did B 2. 升阶版：主语 + did A, 非谓语动词 B and 非谓语动词 C 或 非谓语动词 A, 主语 + did B, 非谓语动词 C 两大高分句型绘氛围 1、 with 复合结构 主语 + did A, with + 复合结构 2、 独立主格 主语 + did A, 独立主格 注：动作链、非谓语、with 复合结构和独立主格都是写作高分句式，实际行文时除单独使用外，也可以把多种句式融合在一起，既能让上下文衔接更流畅，也能增强句子的朗读节奏感。 提笔练·进阶跃升 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My husband, Wayne, pulled into the driveway, and I went to the door. “Ready to go?” he shouted. “Go...?” I replied. “To pick up Susan,” Wayne said. “If we leave now, we can beat the snow.” “Are you kidding?” I said, my eyes widening in disbelief. “It is minus 45 degrees outside and snow is on its way. The news reports warn that we must stay at home. The roads are likely to be icy and dangerous.” Wayne waved off my concern, saying, “Our car is built for bad weather. It’s got all the necessary features to handle this kind of things.” If Wayne thought we could do it, maybe we could. After all, he was usually pretty reliable when it came to these things. “I’ll get my coat,” I said, trying to shake off the feeling of unease (不安). I’d hoped my fear would go away once we got on the road, but as we drove along, at every mile marker, I felt a growing urge to tell Wayne to turn around. The thought of the potential dangers kept coming into my mind. However, I was looking forward to having our daughter, who had started her freshman year at Kent State University, home for the Christmas break. Then suddenly, a strange sound came from our car. “Probably just ice on the tires (轮胎),” Wayne comforted me. On our way, there were hardly any cars, except for a few pickup trucks. Our car stopped, started, and then stopped again. Each time it happened, the news warnings played in my head. Snow had finally started to fall and the wind picked up. Our car came to a complete stop when we were near the university. “I guess we’ll have to push it up to start the car,” Wayne said. We got off the car and tried to push it, but in vain. Just as we didn’t know what to do, a pickup truck made its way toward us. 注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 实操练习：动作描写构建 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. (1)衔接1 一位热心司机探出头，注意到我们被困在风雪中。 核心情节 主要动作 动作链 非谓语 with复合 结构 独立主格 融合版 (2）情节推进（一定解决核心矛盾且有核心人物的情绪变化） 得知我们车子抛锚、风雪恶劣无法前行，司机主动帮忙修车。我紧绷的心终于放松下来，绝望和不安渐渐消散。 核心情节1 得知情况后主动帮忙修车 主要动作 动作链 非谓语 with复合 结构 核心情节2 我紧绷的心放松，绝望不安消散 主要动作 动作链 非谓语 with复合 结构 (3) 衔接2 他不顾严寒，立刻下车仔细检查车辆故障。 核心情节 主要动作 动作链 非谓语 with复合 结构 独立主格 融合版 As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. (1) 衔接3 看着重新启动的车子，我心中涌起一阵温暖与感动。 核心情节 主要动作 动作链 非谓语 with复合 结构 独立主格 融合版 (2) 情节推进（一定围绕核心人物展开，含回扣伏笔或情绪变化） 司机解释是低温和路面结冰导致车辆故障，印证了我一路以来的担忧。我和丈夫深深感激陌生人的雪中相助。 核心情节 主要动作 动作链 非谓语 with复合 结构 独立主格 融合版 (3) 结尾 我们向司机道谢，安心驶向不远处的学校接女儿。 核心情节 主要动作 动作链 非谓语 with复合 结构 独立主格 融合版 (4) 主旨升华 风雪无情，人间有爱。微小的善意总能在绝境中带来希望与温暖。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 风向标·评分标准 第五档（很好）(21～25分)： (1)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接非常合理，文章内容新颖、丰富、合理，非常有逻辑性，续写完整； (2)所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，语言错误很少，且完全不影响意义表达； (3)自然有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，全文结构非常清晰，前后呼应，意义非常连贯。 锚高分·连句成篇 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 多维评·复盘进阶 项目 填写内容 学生姓名 ____________________ 写作题目 高速路上遇陌生人的善意 写作日期 ____________________ 互评同学姓名 ____________________ 本次核心 训练点 □ 动作描写精细化分解 □ 句式多样化运用 □ 连句成篇逻辑衔接 □ 五档评分标准对标 · 总分汇总与档位确认 注：本次专题核心训练动作描写，范文优先复用课上整理的各类动作句型，重点突出动作刻画，因此大家在评分部分也是侧重动作方面。 评分类型 自评总分 互评总分 最终得分（师评） 本次得分对应高考档位 得分 □ 五档（21-25 分） □ 四档（16-20 分） □ 三档（11-15 分） □ 二档（6-10 分） □ 一档（0-5 分） · 三级评语反馈 评价主体 评语内容 学生自评评语 对本次写作的整体评价、核心亮点、最明显的不足： 同学互评评语 对本次写作的亮点肯定、可落地的改进建议： 教师评语 对标五档标准的针对性反馈、高分提升路径： · 自我反思与进步规划 1. 本次写作的核心亮点（对标五档标准，我完全做到了的点）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 本次写作的主要失分点 / 待改进的核心问题（对标五档标准，我还有哪些差距）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 对比上一次写作，我取得的明确进步是： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 针对本次写作的不足，我下一步的具体提升计划（可落地、可检验）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 我下一次写作的目标分数 / 档位是： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 6. 我下一次写作一定要使用的句式或词汇： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 19 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 第02练 从真题习得读后续写·写作微技能：动作描写 起笔练·根基铸牢 动作链搭骨架推情节 一、什么是动作链？ 这里的动作链指得是多个谓语动词构成的动词链，可以理解为慢镜头下的多个分解动作，先做什么就先写，后做什么就后写，用逗号把动作隔开，最后一个动作前加个and。 2、 动作链句式 1. 基础版：主语 + did A and did B 2. 升阶版：主语 + did A, did B, and did C 非谓语添细节润画面 一、非谓语如何丰富画面细节？ 非谓语动词（现在分词/过去分词）作状语，表示伴随、原因、时间等，或者两个非谓语动词并列，共同修饰主要动作，丰富动作细节。 二、非谓语常用句式 1. 基础版：主语 + did A, 非谓语动词 B 或 非谓语动词 A, 主语 + did B 2. 升阶版：主语 + did A, 非谓语动词 B and 非谓语动词 C 或 非谓语动词 A, 主语 + did B, 非谓语动词 C 两大高分句型绘氛围 1、 with 复合结构 主语 + did A, with + 复合结构 2、 独立主格 主语 + did A, 独立主格 注：动作链、非谓语、with 复合结构和独立主格都是写作高分句式，实际行文时除单独使用外，也可以把多种句式融合在一起，既能让上下文衔接更流畅，也能增强句子的朗读节奏感。 提笔练·进阶跃升 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My husband, Wayne, pulled into the driveway, and I went to the door. “Ready to go?” he shouted. “Go...?” I replied. “To pick up Susan,” Wayne said. “If we leave now, we can beat the snow.” “Are you kidding?” I said, my eyes widening in disbelief. “It is minus 45 degrees outside and snow is on its way. The news reports warn that we must stay at home. The roads are likely to be icy and dangerous.” Wayne waved off my concern, saying, “Our car is built for bad weather. It’s got all the necessary features to handle this kind of things.” If Wayne thought we could do it, maybe we could. After all, he was usually pretty reliable when it came to these things. “I’ll get my coat,” I said, trying to shake off the feeling of unease (不安). I’d hoped my fear would go away once we got on the road, but as we drove along, at every mile marker, I felt a growing urge to tell Wayne to turn around. The thought of the potential dangers kept coming into my mind. However, I was looking forward to having our daughter, who had started her freshman year at Kent State University, home for the Christmas break. Then suddenly, a strange sound came from our car. “Probably just ice on the tires (轮胎),” Wayne comforted me. On our way, there were hardly any cars, except for a few pickup trucks. Our car stopped, started, and then stopped again. Each time it happened, the news warnings played in my head. Snow had finally started to fall and the wind picked up. Our car came to a complete stop when we were near the university. “I guess we’ll have to push it up to start the car,” Wayne said. We got off the car and tried to push it, but in vain. Just as we didn’t know what to do, a pickup truck made its way toward us. 注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 实操练习：动作描写构建 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. (1)衔接1 一位热心司机探出头，注意到我们被困在风雪中。 核心情节 一位热心司机探出头，注意到我们被困在风雪中 主要动作 ①摇下车窗 ②探出头/探出身子 ③意识到我们被困/需要帮助 动作链 基础版：The driver rolled down the window and looked at us. He saw our car stuck in snow. 进阶版：The driver rolled down the window, glanced at our stuck car, and nodded his head at the sight of us standing in the freezing wind. 非谓语 基础版：Rolling down the window, the driver leaned out and noticed our stranded car. 进阶版：Rolling down the window, the driver cast a concerned glance at our vehicle, his eyes widening at the sight of the anxious couple in the snow. with复合 结构 With the window rolled down, the driver leaned out to check on us. 独立主格 The window rolled down, the driver leaned out to see what was wrong. 融合版 The pickup truck slowed to a stop and the driver rolled down his window. Leaning out into the cold, he noticed our car and the worried expressions on our faces. Without hesitation, he offered to help. (2）情节推进（一定解决核心矛盾且有核心人物的情绪变化） 得知我们车子抛锚、风雪恶劣无法前行，司机主动帮忙修车。我紧绷的心终于放松下来，绝望和不安渐渐消散。 核心情节1 得知情况后主动帮忙修车 主要动作 ①了解情况 ②主动提出帮忙 动作链 基础版：The driver learned about our car trouble. He offered to help us fix it. 进阶版：The driver listened to our description, examined the engine, and offered to help fix it on the spot. 非谓语 基础版：Learning about our situation, the driver offered to help fix the car. 进阶版：Learning about our trapped car and the worsening storm ahead, the driver offered to help without hesitation. with复合 结构 With a warm smile on his face, the driver told us not to worry. 核心情节2 我紧绷的心放松，绝望不安消散 主要动作 ①心放松 ②绝望消散 ③不安褪去 动作链 基础版：My heart finally relaxed. The despair and unease gradually faded away. 进阶版：A wave of relief washed over me as the tension in my chest finally loosened, and the despair that had gripped me for hours began to fade. 非谓语 基础版：Feeling relieved, I let my tension go. 进阶版：My heart, having been tight with anxiety for hours, finally relaxed, and the despair and unease gradually melted away. with复合 结构 With the driver offering to help, my heart settled down. (3) 衔接2 他不顾严寒，立刻下车仔细检查车辆故障。 核心情节 司机不顾寒冷，立即下车检查车辆问题 主要动作 ①不顾严寒 ②下车 ③仔细检查故障 动作链 基础版：He ignored the cold. He got out of the truck. He checked the car carefully. 进阶版：He didn't hesitate. He jumped out of the truck, walked to our car, and examined the engine with great care. 非谓语 基础版：Ignoring the cold, he got out and checked the car carefully. 进阶版：Ignoring the freezing wind, the driver jumped out of his truck and knelt beside our car, examining the engine with focused attention. with复合 结构 With the cold wind blowing against his face, the driver stepped out without hesitation and carefully examined the broken-down car. 独立主格 His breath visible in the freezing air, the driver stepped out of his truck and bent down to examine our car's problem. 融合版 Without a second thought for the cold, the driver swung his door open and stepped into the snow. Kneeling beside our car, he examined the engine with practiced hands, his breath rising in white clouds around him. As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. (1) 衔接3 看着重新启动的车子，我心中涌起一阵温暖与感动。 核心情节 车重新启动，"我"心中涌起温暖与感动 主要动作 ①看着车子启动 ②心中涌起温暖 ③感动 动作链 基础版：The engine started. I watched the car. A feeling of warmth rose in my heart. I was deeply moved. 进阶版：The engine roared back to life. I stared at the running car, and a surge of warmth flooded through me. I was deeply moved by the stranger's kindness. 非谓语 基础版：Watching the car restart, I felt a warmth rising in my heart. 进阶版：Hearing the engine come back to life, I felt a warm wave wash over me, deeply touched by the stranger's selfless help. with复合 结构 With the engine running again, I felt warmth in my heart. 独立主格 The engine started, warmth filling my heart. 融合版 The engine started again. Watching the car run, I felt so warm and moved inside. This stranger's kindness really touched me. (2) 情节推进（一定围绕核心人物展开，含回扣伏笔或情绪变化） 司机解释是低温和路面结冰导致车辆故障，印证了我一路以来的担忧。我和丈夫深深感激陌生人的雪中相助。 核心情节 ①司机解释是低温和结冰导致故障 ②印证"我"一路的担忧 ③夫妻俩深深感激陌生人 主要动作 ①司机解释 ②"我"意识到担忧被印证 ③表达感激 动作链 基础版：The driver explained it was the low temperature and icy roads. This confirmed my worries all the way. We thanked him deeply for his help in the snow. 进阶版：The driver explained that the extreme cold and icy roads had caused the breakdown, confirming every fear I'd had on the journey. My husband and I expressed our heartfelt gratitude for this stranger's help in the storm. 非谓语 基础版：Explaining the cold and ice had caused the problem, the driver confirmed my worries. We felt deeply grateful for his help. 进阶版：Explaining that the freezing temperature and icy roads were to blame, the driver confirmed the fears that had haunted me since we left home. Deeply grateful, we thanked the stranger again and again for coming to our rescue in the snowstorm. with复合 结构 With his explanation, we understood it was the cold and ice. We were grateful for his help. 独立主格 The cause explained, my worries were confirmed. We were grateful for his help. 融合版 The driver told us it was the cold weather and icy roads that caused the problem. It was exactly what I had worried about all along. We were so thankful for his help in such bad weather. (3) 结尾 我们向司机道谢，安心驶向不远处的学校接女儿。 核心情节 向司机道谢，安心驶向学校接女儿 主要动作 ①道谢 ②驶向学校 ③心情安心/踏实 动作链 基础版：We thanked the driver. We got back into the car and drove toward the university. I felt at ease. 进阶版：We thanked the driver once more, got back into the car, and drove toward the university just a mile ahead. My heart, once full of fear, was now at peace. 非谓语 基础版：Thanking the driver, we drove toward the university to pick up our daughter. 进阶版：Having thanked the driver one last time, we got back into the car and headed toward the university, our hearts finally at ease as we looked forward to seeing our daughter. with复合 结构 With heartfelt thanks to the kind stranger, we drove toward the university, our hearts at peace and our minds focused on the warm reunion ahead. 独立主格 Our thanks offered to the stranger, we continued our journey toward the university, our hearts at ease and the thought of our daughter waiting ahead warming us from within. 融合版 We said goodbye and thanked the driver again. Then we drove toward the university to pick up our daughter. I felt safe and happy. (4) 主旨升华 风雪无情，人间有爱。微小的善意总能在绝境中带来希望与温暖。 Storms passed and cold faded, yet the kindness shared between people like us remained the hope in every desperate situation like us. 风向标·评分标准 第五档（很好）(21～25分)： (1)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接非常合理，文章内容新颖、丰富、合理，非常有逻辑性，续写完整； (2)所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，语言错误很少，且完全不影响意义表达； (3)自然有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，全文结构非常清晰，前后呼应，意义非常连贯。 锚高分·连句成篇 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 注：本次专题核心训练动作描写，范文优先复用课上整理的各类动作句型，重点突出动作刻画。因此文中缺少环境、心理描写与过渡衔接词，属于贴合本节课训练目标的针对性范文，服务动作专项练习。 【范文达标版】 总词数：165词 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. The driver rolled down the window and leaned out. Learning about our car trouble, he offered to help at once. Ignoring the freezing cold, he got out of his truck and carefully checked our car. After examining the engine, he found the problem and fixed it quickly. Soon the engine started again. A wave of warmth washed over me, and I was deeply moved by the stranger's kindness. As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. He explained that the extreme cold and icy roads had caused the breakdown, which confirmed all my worries on the journey. My husband and I thanked him deeply for his selfless help in the snowstorm. Then we drove toward the university to pick up our daughter, our hearts finally at ease. Storms passed and cold faded, yet the kindness shared between people like us remained the hope in every desperate situation like us. 【范文高分版】 总词数：168词 The pickup truck slowed down and stopped beside us. The window rolled down, revealing a middle-aged man in a thick coat. Taking in our desperate situation — our car dead in the snow, the storm worsening — he offered to help without hesitation. Ignoring the biting wind, the driver stepped out and knelt beside our car, examining the engine with practiced hands. Minutes later, the engine roared back to life. The tight knot in my chest finally loosened, and the despair that had weighed me down since we left home began to dissolve like frost in morning sun. As the engine started, the man nodded toward the university just 1 mile ahead. "Extreme cold and icy roads," he explained, confirming every fear that had haunted me on the drive. Overwhelmed with gratitude, my husband and I thanked the stranger again and again. With heartfelt waves goodbye, we continued our journey, our hearts at peace and our minds focused on the warm reunion ahead. Storms passed and cold faded, yet the kindness shared between people like us remained the hope in every desperate situation like us. 多维评·复盘进阶 项目 填写内容 学生姓名 ____________________ 写作题目 高速路上遇陌生人的善意 写作日期 ____________________ 互评同学姓名 ____________________ 本次核心 训练点 □ 动作描写精细化分解 □ 句式多样化运用 □ 连句成篇逻辑衔接 □ 五档评分标准对标 · 总分汇总与档位确认 注：本次专题核心训练动作描写，范文优先复用课上整理的各类动作句型，重点突出动作刻画，因此大家在评分部分也是侧重动作方面。 评分类型 自评总分 互评总分 最终得分（师评） 本次得分对应高考档位 得分 □ 五档（21-25 分） □ 四档（16-20 分） □ 三档（11-15 分） □ 二档（6-10 分） □ 一档（0-5 分） · 三级评语反馈 评价主体 评语内容 学生自评评语 对本次写作的整体评价、核心亮点、最明显的不足： 同学互评评语 对本次写作的亮点肯定、可落地的改进建议： 教师评语 对标五档标准的针对性反馈、高分提升路径： · 自我反思与进步规划 1. 本次写作的核心亮点（对标五档标准，我完全做到了的点）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 本次写作的主要失分点 / 待改进的核心问题（对标五档标准，我还有哪些差距）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 对比上一次写作，我取得的明确进步是： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 针对本次写作的不足，我下一步的具体提升计划（可落地、可检验）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 我下一次写作的目标分数 / 档位是： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 6. 我下一次写作一定要使用的句式或词汇： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 19 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $