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英语读后续写“激动、兴奋”主题常用句和语篇解析
一、核心分级词汇
基础进阶动词/形容词/副词/名词
excited (adj.) 激动的 — excitedly (adv.) — excitement (n.) 激动
thrilled (adj.) 狂喜激动的 — thrill (v./n.) 使激动;激动感
enthusiastic (adj.) 热情高涨的 — enthusiastically (adv.) 热情地
eager (adj.) 热切期盼的 — eagerly (adv.) 急切地
passionate (adj.) 满腔热忱的 — passionately (adv.) 激动热忱地
overjoyed (adj.) 喜出望外的
breathless (adj.) 激动到窒息的
frantic (adj.) 狂喜失控的
radiant (adj.) 因兴奋神采奕奕的
electrify (v.) 使极度兴奋
同义替换名词(替代 excitement)
thrill, enthusiasm, passion, eagerness, euphoria, exhilaration
二、高频万能短语
with/in excitement 激动地
to one's excitement/thrill 令某人激动的是
on top of the world 欣喜若狂、激动到顶点
be excited beyond words 激动得难以言表
contain one's excitement 克制内心的激动
a wave/thrill of excitement 一阵激动涌上心头
jump up and down with excitement 兴奋得蹦蹦跳跳
tremble with excitement 激动得浑身发抖
be flushed with excitement 激动得脸颊通红
take one's breath away 震撼到屏息、激动不已
one's eyes sparkle/dance/shine/twinkle with excitement 眼里闪动兴奋光芒
burst into wild cheers 爆发出热烈欢呼
leap for thrill 激动地一跃而起
heart pounding wildly with excitement 心脏因激动狂跳不止
clasp one's hands tightly in excitement 激动地双手紧握
rush forward eagerly 急切地冲上前
shout enthusiastically 热情高涨地大喊
filled with burning eagerness 满怀滚烫的期盼
electrify the whole crowd 让全场人都激动沸腾
grin widely out of excitement 激动地咧嘴大笑
三、四大维度高分句型
(一)动作神态描写(肢体、面部动作)
She jumped up and down with excitement, waving her arms nonstop in the air.
她兴奋得上蹿下跳,在空中不停地挥舞双臂。
His whole body trembled with excitement the moment he heard the inspiring news.
一听到这个振奋人心的消息,他激动得浑身发抖。
Clasping my hands tightly in excitement, I could barely stand still on my feet.
我激动地紧紧攥住双手,双脚几乎无法站稳。
She leaped for thrill and threw her arms around her teammate tightly.
她激动地一跃而起,紧紧抱住队友。
She was so excited that her cheeks flushed with excitement and her body trembled slightly nonstop. 她激动得脸颊通红,身体微微不停颤抖。
All the audience clapped their hands enthusiastically and stamped their feet to show their joy.
全场观众热情鼓掌,跺脚抒发内心的激动。
He held the award high above his head, spinning around excitedly again and again.
他将奖杯高举过头顶,激动地原地转了一圈又一圈。
Unable to contain my excitement, I ran forward eagerly to embrace my long-lost friend.
我抑制不住内心激动,急切冲上前拥抱许久未见的朋友。
Her eyes twinkled with excitement, shining like two bright burning candles.
她眼中闪动着兴奋的光芒,像两支燃烧的明亮蜡烛。
He covered his open mouth with palms, too thrilled to make any loud sound.
他用手掌捂住大张的嘴,激动到发不出大声。
The kids hopped forward passionately, eager to see the surprise waiting for them.
孩子们热忱地蹦跳向前,迫切想看见等待他们的惊喜。
We linked our fingers tightly and jumped together, filled with endless excitement.
我们十指紧扣一同蹦跳,满心都是无尽的激动。
She wiped the hot tears streaming down cheeks, still grinning widely out of excitement.
她擦去脸颊滚烫的泪水,依旧激动地咧嘴大笑。
(二)心理内心描写(内心波澜、心跳、情绪涌动,含课本原句、倒装、强调句)
On the journey to the lake, a wave of excitement spread through my body.
在去湖边的路上,一股兴奋激动的情绪席卷全身。(课本同款句型)
To my great thrill, I finally got the chance to take part in the national competition.
令我无比激动的是,我终于获得了参加全国大赛的资格。
I was on top of the world when the teacher announced I won the first prize.
老师宣布我拿下一等奖时,我激动到飘飘欲仙。
My heart was pounding wildly with excitement, beating faster and faster every second.
心脏因激动狂跳,一秒比一秒跳得更快。
So great was my excitement that I was excited beyond words for quite a long time.
我的激动之情无以复加,许久都难以用言语形容。(倒装高分句)
It always makes me excited to work hard and achieve a team goal together.
全力以赴,一起实现团队目标,总是让我兴奋不已。(北师大课本原句)
What excites me the most is that all our months of efforts will finally pay off.
最令我激动的是,我们数月的付出终将得到回报。(译林同款句式)
A sudden thrill of excitement washed over me, driving away all my former anxiety.
一阵突如其来的激动席卷全身,驱散了我此前所有的焦虑。
I was breathless with excitement, fully understanding the truth “No pains, no gains”.
我激动得屏住呼吸,彻底读懂了 “一分耕耘,一分收获” 的道理。(谚语)
I tried hard to contain my excitement, yet every cell inside me burned with eagerness.
我努力克制激动,可身体每个细胞都充斥着热切期盼。
Nothing could take away the exhilaration surging deep inside my heart at this moment.
此刻,没有任何事物能夺走心底翻涌的狂喜。
It was the greatest thrill that I had ever experienced in my teenage life.
这是我少年时期体会过最极致的激动。(强调句)
I felt electrified from head to toe, filled with passionate excitement and pride.
我从头到脚热血沸腾,满心热忱的激动与自豪。
(三)人物语言描写(激动时对话、感叹)
“We made it! All our hard work finally comes true!” he shouted enthusiastically.
“我们成功了!所有努力终于成真!” 他热情高涨地大喊。
“What a miracle! This scene really takes my breath away!” I cried excitedly.
“太不可思议了!这一幕震撼得让我窒息!” 我激动地喊道。
“What excites me the most is we can share this glory side by side,” my partner whispered eagerly.
“最让我激动的是我们能并肩共享这份荣光。” 我的搭档热切低语。
“Two heads are better than one! Without your help I could never reach here!” I said passionately.
“众人拾柴火焰高!没有你的帮助我绝走不到今天!” 我热忱地说道。(谚语)
“Can you believe it? We are given such a precious chance at last!” she exclaimed with a thrill.
“你敢相信吗?我们终于得到这么珍贵的机会!” 她激动地惊呼。
“Let’s rush to tell our family this good news right now!” my friend suggested excitedly.
“我们立刻跑去把这个好消息告诉家人!” 朋友激动地提议。
“I’m absolutely on top of the world; I have waited for this day for three whole years!”
“我激动到极致,为这一天我整整等待了三年!”
“The crowd immediately recognized that they were listening to something truly special, and they broke into enthusiastic cheers.”
听众们很快意识到他们所听绝非凡品,演出结束瞬间全场爆发出热情欢呼。(译林课本原句)
“Don’t hold back your excitement! Every effort you put deserves this reward!” the coach cheered.
“尽情释放你的激动吧!你所有付出都配得上这份嘉奖!” 教练鼓舞道。
“A friend in need is a friend indeed. It’s your company that makes this moment more thrilling.”
“患难见真情,是你的陪伴让此刻更加激动动人。”(谚语)
“I can’t wait to start our adventure! My heart is full of burning eagerness.”
“我已经迫不及待开启旅程!心中满是滚烫的期盼。”
“Look ahead! Our dream is just within reach!” he yelled, eyes shining with excitement.
“看前方!我们的梦想近在咫尺!” 他大喊,眼里满是激动光芒。
(四)环境烘托描写(以景衬情,激动氛围万能结尾,读后续写升华必备)
Bright golden sunlight flooded the whole square, matching my overwhelming excitement.
耀眼的金辉洒满广场,恰好衬出我难以抑制的激动。
Soft warm wind swept across the grassland, carrying our excited shouts far into the distance.
和煦暖风掠过草地,将我们激动的呼喊送向远方。
Little birds sang loudly on the branches, as if sharing our passionate excitement together.
枝头小鸟放声啼鸣,仿佛一同分担我们满腔的激动。
The clear blue sky stretched endlessly, free of clouds, just like my unrestrained thrill.
澄澈蓝天一望无际万里无云,如同我毫无束缚的激动心绪。
Colorful lanterns glowed in the evening breeze, creating a warm and excited atmosphere.
彩灯在晚风里摇曳发光,烘托出热烈激动的氛围。
Gentle ripples spread across the lake surface, echoing our shouts full of excitement.
湖面漾开层层涟漪,呼应着我们满含激动的呐喊。
Fresh floral fragrance filled the air, mixing with our laughter and excited voices.
清甜花香弥漫空气,交织着我们的欢笑与激动的话语。
Countless stars twinkling above lit up the night, wrapping us in endless exhilaration.
漫天星辰点亮黑夜,将我们包裹在无尽的狂喜之中。
Warm lamplight poured out of the classroom windows, warming our excited hearts deeply.
暖黄灯光从教室窗内倾泻而出,深深温暖我们激动的心。
A light rainbow hung above the hills after rain, adding more joy to our great thrill.
雨后山间悬起一道浅虹,为我们极致的激动再添欢喜。
The rustle of leaves in the wind sounded like enthusiastic cheers for our victory.
风中树叶沙沙作响,如同为我们的胜利发出热烈欢呼。
As the sun rose slowly, casting brilliant rays, all my eagerness and excitement bloomed completely.
朝阳缓缓升起,洒落璀璨光芒,我所有的期盼与激动全然绽放。
The lively crowd and joyful music electrified the whole street, full of wild excitement.
热闹人群与欢快乐曲让整条街道沸腾,处处充斥着浓烈的激动。
四、近三年新高考读后续写真题“激动 / 兴奋”主题语篇分析
真题 1:2024 新高考 I 卷:好心出租车司机(重逢、感激带来极致激动)
原文梗概:作者异国错过班车,陌生司机无偿送其抵达车站,免收车费。三个月后作者重返维也纳寻找司机,想要报答善意。
两段段首:
Para 1: Just then, Gunter waved his hand and told me not to worry about the money.
Para 2: Three months later, I returned to Vienna and found Gunter again.
情绪考点:窘迫→震惊激动→重逢狂喜
第一段核心激动点:得知免车费,浑身颤抖、眼中发光、内心一阵激动翻涌,搭配动作拥抱、语言感谢;
第二段核心激动点:时隔三月重逢,eagerly 冲上前,on top of the world,环境城市暖阳烘托激动;
适配谚语:No pains, no gains;The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine
素材适配:a wave of excitement、tremble with excitement、eyes twinkle with excitement、on top of the world
真题 2:2023 新高考 II 卷(官方真题)巴西裔少年写作比赛获奖(坚持付出、获奖后极致激动)
原文梗概:主人公来自巴西,英语并非母语,原本抗拒参加校内写作大赛,在社会课老师不断鼓励下下定决心参赛。他以保罗・里维尔的马为独特写作视角,反复打磨文稿、查阅资料、修正语法,熬过无数自我怀疑的时刻。几番修改后,他不再执着于输赢,只沉浸写作本身,数月后突然收到获奖通知,站上领奖台收获全场热烈喝彩。
两段官方给定段首
Para 1: A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. Para 2: I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
情绪考点
自卑抗拒→埋头坚持→得知消息满怀期待激动→登台获奖极致狂喜
段落写作要点
第一段铺垫:心底翻涌 burning eagerness,努力 contain one’s excitement,内心独白抒发压抑已久的兴奋; 第二段高潮:公布奖项瞬间全场 burst into enthusiastic cheers,heart pounding wildly with excitement,手握奖状激动地 jump up and down with excitement,教室暖阳、窗外飞鸟环境烘托内心震撼,场面 take one’s breath away;
适配谚语
No pains, no gains(一分耕耘一分收获)
适配核心素材
contain one’s excitement、jump up and down with excitement、take one’s breath away、a wave of excitement、eyes twinkle with excitement、on top of the world、tremble with excitement
真题 3:2022 新高考 I 卷 兄弟和解(误会解开、亲情重逢的温情激动)
原文梗概:我因小狗和弟弟产生隔阂,带手工饼干登门道歉,兄弟冰释前嫌。
两段段首:
Para 1: With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
Para 2: We sat on the porch with Toby resting beside us.
情绪考点:愧疚→开门瞬间的惊喜激动→平和温暖的兴奋
第一段:开门看见我,弟弟 tremble with excitement,双眼闪耀光芒,激动相拥;
第二段:庭院晚风、星光环境烘托心底绵长的激动,感悟亲情珍贵;
适配谚语:A friend in need is a friend indeed
素材适配:a thrill of excitement、heart pounding wildly、soft wind 烘托情绪
五、2023 新高考 II 卷 真题解析
(一)真题完整原文(带翻译)
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did. 上中学时,社会学老师邀请我参加写作比赛。我想都没想就拒绝了。我并不喜欢写作,我家来自巴西,英语只是我的第二语言。写作对我来说又难又煎熬,老师甚至允许我用独角戏表演来展示泰坦尼克号沉没的课题报告,全场笑得最开心的就是他。
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. 可他为什么非要逼我做一件我注定会搞砸的事?他答道:“我喜欢你写的故事。只要你肯用心,你很有机会获奖。” 这番话鼓舞了我,我决定试一试。
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice. 我选定保罗・里维尔的马作为写作主题。保罗・里维尔是波士顿银匠,1775 年 4 月 18 日深夜骑马奔赴列克星敦,提醒民众英军来袭。我打算以马的第一视角叙事。想法不算精妙,但十分有趣,应该不会和别人撞题。
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them. 深夜狂奔时,马儿在想什么?它会疲惫吗?会动摇吗?想放弃吗?我瞬间共情了它。我写作时也曾疲惫、动摇、想要摆烂。但我像那匹马一样坚持了下来。我埋头打磨文稿,反复核对拼写,请姐姐修正语法,从图书馆借了六本相关书籍,认真研读。
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care. 我把作文交给老师,他读完放声大笑:“写得很好,重写一遍。” 我改了一遍又一遍。等到终稿完成,我早已不在乎能否获奖,只享受写作本身。就算落选,我也无所谓。
续写给定段首:
Para 1: A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
Para 2: I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
(二)语篇情绪考点深度分析(激动 / 兴奋描写落点)
1. 情绪变化线:自卑抗拒→坚持写作→得知获奖极致激动狂喜→领奖感恩温情兴奋
2. 四类激动描写命题要求
1. 动作:心跳狂跳、原地蹦跳、攥紧双手、眼眶发亮、激动颤抖
2. 心理:a wave of excitement 席卷全身、on top of the world、克制不住激动、激动到失语
3. 语言:和老师、同学的感叹对话,融入谚语 No pains, no gains
4. 环境:教室暖阳、窗外飞鸟烘托激动氛围
3. 适配背诵素材:全部前文汇总 excited/thrilled/eager 相关单词、短语、课本句型
(三)满分续写范文(大量复用激动全套素材,标注素材对应点)
Para 1: A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
A wave of excitement spread through my body the moment my teacher called my name in class. My eyes twinkled with excitement and I was flushed with excitement instantly. My heart was beating wildly with excitement. I tried hard to contain my excitement, yet burning eagerness rushed out of my mind. I jumped up and down with excitement, clasping my hands tightly. “To my great thrill, you won the first prize!” the teacher announced enthusiastically. So great was my excitement that I was excited beyond words, totally on top of the world. What excites me the most is that all my hard work finally paid off. Bright golden sunlight flooded through classroom windows, while little birds sang cheerfully outside as if sharing my wild joy.
几周过去,我几乎都忘了那场比赛,消息却突然传来。当老师在课堂上念出我的名字时,一阵激动瞬间席卷我的全身。我的眼中闪烁着兴奋的光芒,脸颊激动得瞬间涨得通红。心脏因激动狂跳不止。我拼命克制内心的激动,可满腔滚烫的期盼还是难以压抑。我兴奋得上蹿下跳,双手紧紧攥在一起。“令你无比激动的是,你拿下了一等奖!” 老师满怀热忱地宣布。我激动到无以言表,整个人欣喜若狂。最让我激动的是,我一遍又一遍的修改终于有了回报。耀眼的金色阳光洒满教室的窗户,窗外的小鸟欢快地啼叫,仿佛也在分享我难以抑制的喜悦。
重点短语对应对照
A wave of excitement spread through my body 一阵激动席卷全身
eyes twinkled with excitement 眼里闪烁着兴奋的光芒
flushed with excitement 激动得脸颊通红
heart was pounding wildly with excitement 心脏因激动狂跳不止
contain my excitement 克制内心的激动
burning eagerness 滚烫热切的期盼
jump up and down with excitement 兴奋地上蹿下跳
To my great thrill 令我无比激动的是
excited beyond words 激动得难以言表
on top of the world 欣喜若狂
What excites me the most is… 最令我激动的是……
wild exhilaration 极致的狂喜
Para 2: I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
Hardly had I stepped into the office when the teacher shouted passionately, “This sight really takes my breath away! I knew you could make it!” I trembled with excitement, holding my award tightly in hands. The crowd immediately realized that hard work created miracles, and they broke into enthusiastic cheers during the ceremony. “No pains, no gains,” I said sincerely to my teacher. It always makes me excited to stick to something challenging with guidance from others. Warm lamplight wrapped around us, clearing away all my former self-doubt. A sudden thrill of excitement washed over me as I realized his encouragement lighted up my whole world. I rushed forward eagerly and gave him a heartfelt hug, full of endless gratitude and excitement.
颁奖典礼结束后,我来到了老师的办公室。我刚一踏进办公室,老师就激动万分地喊道:“眼前这一幕实在太震撼了!我就知道你一定能成功!” 我激动得浑身发抖,双手紧紧攥着奖状。颁奖仪式上,所有人都见证了努力造就奇迹,全场爆发出热烈的欢呼。我真诚地对老师说道:“一分耕耘,一分收获。” 在他人的指引下坚持攻克难题,这件事总能让我满心激动。温暖的灯光笼罩着我们,驱散了我从前所有的自我怀疑。一股突如其来的狂喜席卷了我,我恍然明白,是他的鼓励照亮了我的整个人生。我急切地快步上前,由衷地给了他一个拥抱,心中满是道不尽的感激与激动。
重点短语 & 句型注解
Hardly had I stepped into…when… 一…… 就……(部分倒装高分句型)
takes my breath away 令人震撼、让人惊叹
trembled with excitement 激动得浑身发抖
broke into enthusiastic cheers 爆发出热烈欢呼
No pains, no gains 一分耕耘,一分收获(英语谚语)
A sudden thrill of excitement washed over me 一阵激动涌上心头
rushed forward eagerly 急切地冲上前
a heartfelt hug 真挚的拥抱
六、高考读后续写模拟专项训练
(一)完整原文
Our class planned a Chinese calligraphy exhibition to spread traditional culture. I, Li Hua, signed up eagerly and prepared for weeks. However, on the exhibition morning, I found I had left my writing brush and ink at home. Panic flooded me, and I stood by my desk anxiously, not daring to tell anyone.
My deskmate Emma noticed my unusual look and asked about my trouble. After hearing everything, she comforted me warmly and promised to find substitutes right away. She searched every corner of the classroom and borrowed a thick soft pen and a big blank poster board from the art teacher. While preparing tools together, she kept cheering me up and encouraged me to show my best. My nervousness faded little by little, replaced by eager expectation.
I polished the board carefully, practicing basic strokes again and again. I worried my handwriting would disappoint the whole class, yet Emma kept telling me I was talented. Soon the exhibition began, and all classmates gathered around my display area, waiting for me to write live on the board.
Para 1: With Emma’s help, Li Hua finally got everything ready for the exhibition.____________
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Para 2: When Li Hua started writing Chinese characters with a brush, the whole class fell silent.
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(二)语篇激动情绪分析
情绪线:慌乱焦虑→期待激动→书写完成全场欢呼、极致狂喜
核心描写:外放型激动(蹦跳、高举作品、全班欢呼),适合使用 jump up and down、burst into cheers 等短语,搭配谚语 Two heads are better than one。
(三)完整续写范文
Para 1: With Emma’s help, Li Hua finally got everything ready for the exhibition. A wave of thrill swept over Li Hua the second Emma laid out writing tools. Stars sparkled in his eyes and pink flushed his cheeks. Though struggling to hold back his inner delight, burning eagerness filled his whole body. He leaped forward and grasped Emma’s hands firmly. “Two heads are better than one! What thrills me most is that I can take part in the show because of you,” he said passionately. To his great joy, Emma smiled and cheered him on. He thought it always filled him with delight to overcome difficulties with a friend. Golden sunlight poured into the classroom, wrapping him in soft warm rays.
Para 2: When Li Hua started writing Chinese characters with a brush, the whole class fell silent. Elegant characters gradually appeared on the board. The class sensed its unique beauty and burst into warm cheers once he finished. Li Hua was in high spirit, holding his artwork high. His heart beat wildly and he was lost in sheer bliss. A wave of delight washed over him as classmates crowded to admire his strokes. “This sight takes my breath away!” a classmate exclaimed. Soft wind drifted through the window with their merry laughter. Glancing at Emma, Li Hua understood “No pains, no gains”. Weeks of practice rewarded him with precious progress, as sunshine brightened every classroom corner.
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