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读后续写技能提升专项演练(三)
一、“尴尬羞愧”情感专项
【超市碰倒货架・羞愧尴尬主题】
Last Saturday afternoon, I headed to the supermarket alone to buy daily supplies. Wandering among the shelves, I was fully absorbed in reading the product labels and totally forgot to watch my shopping cart. Suddenly, my hand slipped off the cart handle. The cart dashed forward violently and crashed into a tall snack shelf. Bags of chips, candies and cookies fell down with a loud crash, scattering everywhere on the floor.
The sharp noise drew all the nearby customers’ attention at once. Everyone stopped their shopping and turned to stare at me. Some even whispered and giggled. I froze on the spot, completely at a loss. Filled with embarrassment, I stood there without daring to lift my head, not knowing what to do to fix the mess. Just then, a young shop assistant walked towards me.
写作要求:词数 150 左右;
灵活使用专题(十九)尴尬羞愧描写、分词作状语、独立主格、so…that 倒装句等
续写开头
Paragraph 1:
Having taken a deep breath, I hurried forward and bent down to pick up the scattered goods.
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Paragraph 2:
When all the snacks were neatly put back on the shelf, I lifted my head and talked to the assistant shyly.
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二、主旨升华:脱困类专项
【逐梦深海・困境重拾希望专题】
Since I was a little kid, I have dreamed of exploring the mysterious deep sea. After years of self-disciplined study, I finally joined an ocean research team, aiming to develop an unmanned exploration vessel to dive into the 10,000-meter trench.
However, countless hazardous troubles struck our project one after another. The vessel could not become accustomed to the instantly changing undercurrents, and the crushing deep-sea pressure nearly damaged our core equipment. Seeing the repeated failures, most crew members lost confidence and even planned to suspend the whole research. Filled with disappointment, I wandered alone by the seaside, a heavy shadow cast on my heart. At that moment, my research partner Lin walked towards me slowly.
写作要求:词数 150 词左右;灵活运用本专题词汇:cast a shadow, rekindle, submit, hazardous, instantaneously, self-discipline, crew 等;
必须使用:分词作状语、独立主格、Only + 状语倒装句、名言主旨升华句四类高分句式;情节完整,体现 “陷入困境 — 他人开导 — 重拾希望” 的成长逻辑。
续写段落开头
Paragraph 1: Noticing my low spirits, Lin asked softly what made me so upset.
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Paragraph 2: Inspired deeply by Lin’s encouraging words, I made up my mind to keep fighting for my deep-sea dream.
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参考范文
一、(超市碰倒货架・羞愧尴尬主题)
(参考:专题十九)
Paragraph 1:
Having taken a deep breath, I hurried forward and bent down to pick up the scattered goods. My face burning with embarrassment, I hung my head low all the time, wondering how to hide my inner awkwardness. Overwhelmed with shame, I dared not glance at the surrounding customers who were still watching me. Blood flooded my face and an awkward silence hung between me and the crowd. I felt ashamed of my carelessness, for I had made such a big mess and disturbed everyone around.
Paragraph 2
When all the snacks were neatly put back on the shelf, I lifted my head and talked to the assistant shyly. So ashamed did I feel that I was close to tears, apologizing repeatedly for my mistake. To my surprise, the assistant smiled gently and told me accidents happened all the time. Her kind words let off my heavy mental steam and eased my embarrassment greatly. At that moment, I realized being frank about our faults can help us resolve awkward situations properly.
解析:
1.现在分词作状语:Having taken a deep breath / Overwhelmed with shame /wondering how to hide my inner awkwardness匹配讲义 “动词 - ing / 过去分词作状语” 模板
2.独立主格结构:my face burning with embarrassment
3.So…that… 倒装句:So ashamed did I feel that I was close to tears
套用专题核心倒装句型
尴尬羞愧类语块:hang one’s head in shame, blood floods one’s face, awkward silence, overwhelmed with shame, feel ashamed of, embarrassment, awkwardness
情感描写佳句模板:Filled with embarrassment, I stood there without daring to lift my head.
原文翻译:上周六下午,我独自前往超市购买日常用品。在货架间走动时,我全神贯注地阅读商品标签,完全忘了留意购物车的位置。突然,我的手从购物车把手滑落,购物车猛地向前冲去,撞上了高高的零食架。几袋薯片、糖果和饼干伴随着巨大的声响掉落下来,散落在地板上各处。
刺耳的噪音瞬间吸引了所有附近顾客的注意。所有人都停下购物动作,转过身来盯着我;有些人甚至小声议论、窃笑起来。我当场僵在原地,完全不知所措。满脸尴尬地站在那里,不敢抬头,不知道该如何收拾这个场面。就在这时,一位年轻的店员向我走来。
二、(逐梦深海・困境重拾希望专题)
参考:专题二十
Paragraph 1: Noticing my low spirits, Lin asked softly what made me so upset.
I screamed at the top of my voice about my despair, telling him all the hazardous challenges we had met. Instantaneously, thick dark clouds gathered above the sea, casting a deeper shadow on my heart. I was totally cast down, ready to submit myself to the endless failures. Lin patted my shoulder firmly and comforted me, “Only if we refuse to give in to difficulties can we accomplish our dream of deep-sea exploration.”
Paragraph 2:Inspired deeply by Lin’s encouraging words, I made up my mind to keep fighting for my deep-sea dream.
Just as the old saying goes, “Where there’s a will, there’s a way.” I gathered all the crew members the next day and shared Lin’s words with them. Our fading hope was fully rekindled, and we spent every day adjusting the vessel’s performance together. That tough period was so unforgettable that it would be engraved in my mind forever. I truly realized that courage and perseverance are the greatest power to overcome any hardship.
解析:1.现在分词作状语:Noticing my low spirits / Inspired deeply by Lin’s encouraging words(课本标准 ing 分词开篇模板)
2.独立主格结构:a heavy shadow cast on my heart(复刻航天素材心理描写加分结构)
3.Only + 状语前置倒装句:Only if we refuse to give in to difficulties can we accomplish our dream(专题核心倒装句型,难度加长升级)
4.主旨升华素材(两类结尾模板结合)
① 经历感悟:That tough period was so unforgettable that it would be engraved in my mind forever.
② 名言升华:Just as the old saying goes, “Where there’s a will, there’s a way.”
原文翻译:从我小时候起,我就梦想探索神秘的深海。经过多年严于律己的刻苦钻研,我终于加入了一支海洋科考团队,目标是研发一艘无人探测船,下潜至万米海沟。
然而,无数凶险难题接连不断地冲击着我们的项目。探测船无法适应瞬息万变的暗流,深海巨大的水压也险些损毁我们的核心设备。
目睹一次次失败,大部分队员都失去了信心,甚至打算暂停全部研究。满心沮丧的我独自在海边徘徊,心头蒙上一层浓重的阴霾。就在这时,我的科研搭档林缓缓朝我走来。
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