Week 7 感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写（Word练习）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

Week 7 感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 Monday　满分范文晨诵 五档优范文　感悟范文亮点并背诵 Dear Alex, It’s really hard to say goodbye to you! But meanwhile, I’m eagerly writing to express my gratitude to you for your help. (致谢) and written English. Additionally, you also frankly shared your learning experience with me. Most importantly, without your advice English and would not have even ranked first in the recent English speech contest. All in all, words fail to convey how grateful I am. (回顾Alex的帮助) Thanks again and wish you a pleasant journey home. (再次致谢并临别祝愿) Yours, Li Hua (浙江卷)假定你是李华,经常帮助你学习英语的朋友Alex即将返回自己的国家。请你给他写一封邮件,内容包括: 1.表示感谢; 2.回顾Alex对你的帮助; 3.临别祝愿。 注意:写作词数应为80个左右。 积累 frankly /̍fræ􀱻kli/ adv.坦率地 教考衔接 人教B1U5,外研B1U2 仿写再借鉴　仿照范文中的衔接过渡词汇和句式补全下文并背诵 Dear Jim, On behalf of the Student Union, ①________________________________________________________________ (我想感谢你积极参与本次劳动节志愿者活动). ②________________________________ (最让我们印象深刻的是你在整个活动中的奉献精神,主语从句). In the Temple of Heaven, you greeted visitors with a warm smile and patiently answered their questions at the information desk. ③________________, as an English native speaker, you communicated fluently in Chinese with visitors from home and abroad. ④________________________________, your efforts enabled them to have a better experience in Beijing. ⑤________________________________________________ (我们真的感激你所做的一切). We look forward to your participation in future activities. Yours, Li Hua 假设你是红星中学学生会主席李华。你校国际部学生Jim参与了学生会举办的五一劳动节志愿者活动,请用英语给他写一封电子邮件,内容包括: 1.回顾他的参与; 2.表达感谢。 注意:写作词数应为80个左右。 积累 greet sb. with a warm smile以热情的微笑迎接某人 教考衔接 人教选B4U4,外研B3U2 Tuesday　黄金素材&模板 素材7　感谢 背模板佳句 夺人眼球开头句(表明写信目的) 1.I’d like to express/convey my great appreciation for your timely help and support. 我想对你给予我的及时帮助和支持表示感谢。 2.I’m writing to extend my heartfelt gratitude to you for your help and care when I stayed at your home, without which I couldn’t have enjoyed myself so much. 我写信向您表达我衷心的感谢,在我待在您家期间,是您给予我帮助和关怀,没有这些,我不可能过得那么愉快。 3.Words fail me to express my thanks to you for your kindness when I was traveling in London. 对于我在伦敦旅行时你对我的关心照顾,我无以言谢。 亮点出彩篇中句(描述事情经过和感受) 4.Thank you so much for the gift you sent me. It’s one of the most wonderful gifts I have ever got. 非常感谢你送我的礼物。这是我至今为止收到的最好的礼物之一。 5.Your introduction to English festivals and customs helped me adapt to the new surroundings better. 您对英国节日和风俗的介绍帮助我更好地适应了新的环境。 6.During the week, the comfortable accommodation, delicious meals and your friendly family members all made me warm, leaving me everlasting memories. 在这一周中,舒适的房间、美味的饭菜以及您友好的家人都让我感到温暖,给我留下了永远的回忆。 7.Never will I forget your patient guidance and continuous encouragement, without which I couldn’t have got the prize. 我永不会忘记您的耐心指导和不断的鼓励,没有这些我不可能获奖。 8.Undoubtedly, it was your encouragement and support that cheered me up when I encountered difficulties in English learning. 毫无疑问,当我在英语学习中遇到困难时,是您的鼓励和支持使我振作。 9.Had it not been for your assistance and kindness, I couldn’t have made such great progress. 如果没有你的帮助和关怀,我不可能取得如此大的进步。 韵味无穷结尾句(再次致谢) 10.Once again, thank you for everything you have done for me. 再次感谢您为我所做的一切。 11.Thanks again for your help and I’m sincerely looking forward to showing you around in order to repay your kindness. 再次感谢你的帮助,我真诚地期待着带你到处看看,以报答你的好意。 背黄金模板 Dear George, I’m writing to convey my appreciation to you for your warm entertainment, without which our journey couldn’t have been so enjoyable. (表明写信意图,表示感谢) During our stay in London, it was the comfortable room, tasty meals and your company that made me feel at home. (说明对方具体的帮助和自己的感受)Furthermore, guided by you, I was honored to have the opportunity to visit tourist attractions and be exposed to a unique culture as well as impressive scenery. (说明其他帮助) (描述事情经过和感受) My appreciation is beyond words and I’ll be delighted if I can show you around Beijing to repay your kindness. (再次致谢,表达回报的愿望) Yours, Li Hua 　　　模板范文中的加粗内容是可通用内容,未加粗内容可按照写作要求灵活更换。 ·主体段落写明对方给予的具体帮助,以及自己对对方帮助的感受或所受的益处。 ·利用虚拟语气可以使表达更得体。 ·主体段落常用一般过去时。 ·文章通常以第一人称为主。 Wednesday　考场作文研析 读后续写微技能7　顺藤摸瓜　解谜底型读后续写 ▼ 解谜底型读后续写中会出现一个大家百思不得其解的现象或问题,然后主人公发现了这个现象或问题背后的真相。比如Week 6 Friday 2024九省联考的读后续写,小海豚Maya私藏东西以获取实物奖励,主人公Hilda一步一步揭开了谜底。 解开谜底型读后续写应侧重主人公情绪的变化,如从吃惊、震惊、生气等转变为如释重负、高兴等。圈出并恰当协同原文给的线索提示,慢慢揭开谜底,做到推理有依据,而非自己臆想。 好题探索　(2025·浙江首考) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　Kevin was pretty bored. His mother was at work, and his father had been away on business. Therefore, he was left in the care of Mrs. Hill, an old lady who lived next door. His parents had raised the 12-year-old to be a good boy. He never got into trouble, though sometimes he wanted to do risky things. Mrs. Hill was asleep. Kevin sighed (叹息) and hoped something exciting would happen. Suddenly, a movement outside caught his eye.④  Mrs. Hill’s front window faced Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house across the street. The couple had both gone to work, so it was strange that someone was over there. Kevin stared at the man at their front door. Suddenly, the man jumped through an open window into the house. With his heart in his mouth, Kevin grabbed Mrs. Hill’s home phone and called the police.⑥  Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted before the police arrived, Kevin decided to do something. He rushed out of Mrs. Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly.① Grabbing a branch from a cut-down tree, he jumped in through the window.② “Stop right there! You must leave right now!” he called out, holding the branch with both hands.  The man froze for a second, but when he saw the skinny boy he breathed a sigh of relief. “Hey, kid, put that down. It was my home. My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,” he explained, trying to lift a floorboard. At that moment, the sounds of a police car echoed (回响) in the air.⑤ The man stood up in a panic, then ran through the house toward the window and jumped out.③ Kevin followed out and told the arriving police officers what had happened. They pursued and arrested the man.⑦  Kevin went back to Mrs. Hill’s house. Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing. “What if he has told the truth?”⑧ he thought to himself. The man’s words sounded pretty convincing.  注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station. 请参考附录二~六 四步续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who Kevin (12岁男孩,渴望探索未知), Mrs. Hill (Kevin的看护人), the man When one day Where in Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house What Kevin发现邻居家进了小偷,立刻报了警,并喝止对方,然而对方为自己辩解。 理2情线 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“talk to them”: Kevin向Green夫妇说了什么?怎么说?(描写人物神态与语气,体现他阻止闯入者的小得意,又带出内心的疑虑) ◆过渡句1　Kevin讲完后,Green夫妇对陌生男子的身份和“手表”的疑惑、猜测或好奇→查看地板,确认其下是否有手表→发现手表。 ◆衔接2　衔接第二段首句中的“带着找到的手表到警局”:Kevin十分愧疚,和Mr. Green出发去警局。 Para. 2　Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“the police station”:转场到警局,警察的反应→因陌生男子还被扣押着,警察立刻明白是哪个案子(协同原文警察已经逮捕了陌生男子,此时应该已经过初步审问)。 ◆过渡句2　警察核实手表来历,证实了男子的说法→男子道歉,承认“不该私闯民宅”并致谢→Kevin释然,意识到自己的“冲动之举”最终促成了手表物归原主。 ◆结尾+主题　Kevin回家,看着那扇见证了一切的窗户,领悟到真正的勇气是即便心存不确定,依然选择做正确的事。 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔, 合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 a good boy; never got into trouble; wanted to do risky things; hoped something exciting would happen; called the police; jumped in; wasn’t sure he had done the right thing→善良、渴望刺激;勇敢、冲动行动、自省 Kevin向Green夫妇讲述事情时,对应他“成功阻止闯入”的成就感,应该有点小得意;看到地板下的手表后,Kevin应有愧疚感(a wave of guilt flooded over);真相大白后,Kevin领悟到“勇敢”的真正意义。 Para. 4　“... My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,”he explained 第二段协同描写警察查记录证实男子说的话属实。 Para. 6　Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing.“What if he has told the truth?”→没有“抓小偷”的成就感,反而开始自我怀疑 第一段协同描写Kevin向Green夫妇讲述时,语气略带得意却又犹豫,提到男子“找父亲手表”的说法时,更是直接把内心的疑问说出口。 the watch:男子闯入的动机(寻找父亲的手表),也是Kevin怀疑的焦点(是否真实存在) 手表的找回象征一段被找回的亲情记忆,第二段协同描写警察通过手表确认其说辞属实,也让Kevin松了口气。 a floorboard:男子被Kevin制止时,试图撬开地板找手表,是引发悬念的细节,续写部分可以作为印证男子说辞的关键,作为连接悬念与真相的桥梁 第一段可描写Kevin向Green夫妇讲述时,领他们走向“the floorboard the man had tried to lift”,Mr. Green“carefully lifted the loose floorboard”。 the window (Green家窗外的观察视角):男子闯入的入口,Kevin观察、进入房屋的通道 赋予其深层含义:象征“判断与成长的视角”,见证Kevin从冲动行事到领悟勇气真谛的全过程。 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 文章通过语气、动作、内心独白的细节,让情感与心理活动自然流露。1.环环相扣的动作链(简单句和非谓语,原文①②③)推动情节发展。2.“无灵”主语句(原文④⑤)烘托氛围,营造出紧张感。3.with复合结构(原文⑥)描写Kevin的紧张。4.句式长短结合,节奏张弛有度(原文⑦)。5.结尾用直接引语(原文⑧)呈现Kevin的内心疑问,简洁有力,为续写留下了悬念。 ⇒完成《核心默练》10分钟随堂微练7 Thursday　练应用文写作 Writing 1　德育 | 感谢网友寄来的生日礼物 　　假定你是李华,在生日来临之际,你收到了美国网友Nancy寄来的礼物。请你用英语给她写一封感谢信,内容包括:1.礼物已收到;2.表达谢意;3.回赠礼物。 注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 教考衔接:外研B1U4,外研B3U1;请参考素材7 “感谢”,附录一~二 Writing 2　德育 | 感谢好友帮助 　　假定你是李华,你在你校上周举办的英语演讲比赛中获得了一等奖。此前,你的交换生好友Peter给予了你很多帮助。请你给他写封邮件,内容包括:1.分享获奖的喜悦;2.感谢他的帮助;3.邀请他到你家做客以表谢意。 注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 Dear Peter,____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Hua 教考衔接:人教B1U5,外研B1U2,外研B1U4;请参考素材7 “感谢”,素材2“邀请”,附录一~二 Friday　提分读后续写 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 One day, my nine-year-old younger brother Jeff came home from school earlier than me. When I returned home, I found he was shouting at our mom—who was busy cooking in the kitchen—about the clothes that needed washing. “Mom, why haven’t you washed my clothes?” he asked, pointing at the dirty clothes he had taken off two days before. “I want to wear them tomorrow,” Jeff added. However, the clothes that he was wearing still looked clean. “Dear, I’ll wash them after cooking,” Mom told Jeff, looking anxious and upset. Without replying, Jeff unhappily went to his bedroom and closed the door, with a long face. I was shocked about Jeff’s bad behavior towards Mom. How unsympathetic he was! Our washing machine had been out of order for two months. Because our parents were on a tight budget and were too busy, they still didn’t buy a new one. So recently our family had to wash our clothes by hand, which was time-wasting and truly hard work. Just when I decided to scold (训斥) my little brother, Dad came home from work, and I told him what had happened. Dad was upset and felt sorry for Mom, knowing how hard she worked all day. She was a saleswoman in a supermarket and did all she could to support our family. Often, Dad tried to help with some of the housework. He didn’t want Mom to have too much burden, knowing her heavy work as a saleswoman. I also tried to spare time to help do housework, sharing some of the family burden. However, Jeff was a lazy and naughty boy, who hardly did housework. Now, our dad decided it was high time to teach him a lesson. “Jeff, come here,” Dad called out. “I’ve some good news for you.” Jeff immediately came and asked excitedly, “What, Dad?” “Your mom and I are too busy recently. Tonight, I want you to wash your own clothes,” Dad smiled. Jeff immediately refused, shaking his head. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　“Then, you won’t get your pocket money next week. I’m serious,” Dad replied.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　At 9p.m., Jeff was still struggling to rinse (漂洗) the clothes, realizing the work wasn’t easy at____________________________________________________________ all.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 请参考附录二~六 Saturday　提分读后续写 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eliza was an eleven-year-old girl. She had vivid imagination and loved to try new things. She also had a passion for painting. Under her brush, colors seemed to come alive, mixing and flowing to create magic images. One autumn morning, Eliza’s teacher, Mrs. Perkins, announced the annual school talent show. Excited whispers spread through the classroom. Each student was to present a unique talent. Eliza didn’t want to be left out, so she said, “I can juggle (抛接) five apples at the same time!” Her classmates stared in amazement, eyes wide with wonder. In truth, Eliza had never juggled more than three apples before. But her classmates’ admiration gave her a great feeling. The following Sunday, Eliza tried to juggle five apples in the backyard. With her eyes narrowing in concentration, she threw them into the air again and again. However, the apples slipped through her fingers like autumn rain. With each failed attempt, Eliza’s confidence gradually disappeared. She sat among the apples lying around, her heart heavy with disappointment. Her younger brother, Max, wandered over, observing her curiously. He asked why she was throwing apples around and sat down beside her. Burying her face in her hands, Eliza admitted that she had told everyone she could juggle five apples at the same time, but she simply couldn’t make it. After thinking for a while, Max suggested that maybe she could try something else for the show, something she was really good at. Eliza fell silent, lost in thought over his words. One afternoon, as Eliza walked under the tree in front of her class building, a wind shook the branches above. A piece of paper danced down, landing at her feet. It was a poster for the talent show, colorful and eye-catching. At the bottom, it read: “Remember, honesty is the key to true talent.” The words resounded in her mind, over and over. Eliza knew it was time for her to tell the truth. 　　注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　The next day at school, Eliza approached her teacher, Mrs. Perkins.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　The night of the talent show arrived.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 请参考附录二~六 Sunday　高效提分训练 言之有“艺”(一)——高级词汇之“弃旧用新” 习提分技法 高级词汇如添彩明珠,可助考生稳拿高分 阅卷老师偏爱“学得晚”的单词,因为用学得较晚的单词,能体现学以致用的意识。如表达“美丽的”时,少用初中词汇beautiful,多用高中词汇appealing, attractive, charming和fascinating等,能给文章增加亮点。其他还有carefully→attentively, get→obtain/acquire, have→possess, improve→promote/strengthen等。 With your birthday coming, I’d like to send you one Chinese painting as a gift.你的生日快到了,我想送你一幅中国画作为礼物。(coming升级为approaching) There will be many activities to mark this unforgettable occasion.将会有很多活动来纪念这个难忘的时刻。(many升级为various) 练提分好题 Ⅰ.高级词汇用于应用文写作 用所给词的正确形式或用高级词汇升级加粗部分,补全下面的感谢信,并背诵全文。 Dear Mike, I am writing to express my thanks ①________________________________ to you for sending me the photos that bring back those wonderful ②__________ (memory). The time we spent together during Christmas was just good ③__________. We ④__________ (wake) up early to see ⑤__________ the sunrise over the sea. On the way back, we tasted the fine local food, which was ⑥__________ (impress) indeed. And what was ⑦__________ (true) unforgettable was the hospitality I had experienced as a guest at your home. I really had a great time. I’d like to invite you over this weekend. It will be a chance for you ⑧__________ (meet) my family. Looking forward to your coming. Yours, Li Hua Ⅱ.高级词汇用于读后续写 用高级词汇升级下面“人与动物类”读后续写片段中的加粗词语或根据所给动词填空, 并体会动作和细节描写。 　　Amanda and I had to get Ellie, the baby elephant, inside the house ①__________ (keep) her safe until we could get her back to her mother. Her frightened eyes looked ②__________ at us through the leaves. I ③__________ (edge) slowly to Ellie. She watched me but as soon as I was within touching distance, she ran behind the house. Amanda and I ran after her. Finally ④__________, we managed ⑤__________ (corner) Ellie in the parking area. She stood completely still, head down and eyes ⑥__________ (flash) anxiously at any movement or sound. 微技能小练　读后续写之神态细节描写(一) 根据汉语提示补全下面与“笑” 相关的细节描写并背诵。 1.Jenny 　 (露出灿烂的笑容) and rushed to her mom. 2.Her face lit up, 　 (嘴角露出微笑). 3.The girls were thrilled at the amazing performance, 　 (她们的脸上洋溢着灿烂的笑容). 4.The two boys________________________________ (咯咯地笑着) at the joke when I entered the room. 5.When they saw me, they ________________________________ (大笑起来). 6.Harry turned and caught sight of her; she ________________________________ (在咧着嘴笑). 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 素材7　感谢 1.____________________________________________________________________. 我想对你给予我的及时帮助和支持表示感谢。 2.________________________________________________ when I stayed at your home, ____________________________________. 我写信向您表达我衷心的感谢,感谢您在我在您家期间给予我的帮助和关怀,没有您的帮助,我不可能过得那么愉快。 3.____________________________________ when I was traveling in London. 对于我在伦敦旅行时你对我的关心照顾,我无以言谢。 4.____________________________________. It’s one of the most wonderful gifts I have ever got. 非常感谢你给我寄来的礼物。这是我至今为止收到的最好的礼物之一。 5.Your introduction to English festivals and customs _____________________________. 您对英国节日和风俗的介绍帮助我更好地适应了新的环境。 6.During the week, the comfortable accommodation, delicious meals and your friendly family members ____________________________________. 在这一周中,舒适的房间,美味的饭菜,友好的家人都让我感到温暖,给我留下了永远的回忆。 7. ____________________________________________, _________________________ ___________________. 我永不会忘记您的耐心指导和不断的鼓励,没有这些我不可能获奖。 8.____________________________________________________________________. 毫无疑问,当我在英语学习中遇到困难时,是您的鼓励和支持使我振作。 9.____________________________________________________________________. 如果没有你的帮助和关怀,我不可能取得如此大的进步。 10.____________________________________________________________________. 再次感谢您为我所做的一切. 11.____________________________________________________________________. 再次感谢你的帮助,我真诚地期待着带你到处看看,以报答你的好意。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Week 7　感谢信&人与动物类读后续写 Monday　满分范文晨诵 仿写再借鉴 ①I’d like to thank you for your active participation in our Labor Day volunteer activity　②What impressed us most was your devotion throughout the event　③More importantly ④All in all　⑤We really appreciate what you did Wednesday　考场作文研析 Version 2 A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. The furry creature launched an attack on the fence instantly leaving a narrow opening on it. Obviously, the pepper spray only made him even more furious. I feared the giant would tear down the fence at any minute. Much as I wanted to photograph the approaching bear with my camera, I, without hesitation, grabbed the bread and threw it far away. However, in not even a minute did the hungry animal finish the bread and come back again, making Elli scream and shake all the time. At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. It hovered over the camp, making a deafening noise all around us. As we were lifted into the air we saw the stubborn bear already heading back to our camp. When Elli and I, safe and sound, got home and developed our pictures, we noticed the bear had a broken tooth. Like humans, polar bears feel pain, have emotions, and can be afraid. Elli and I learned our lesson: Beware of a bear with a toothache. Thursday　练应用文写作 Writing 1 文思梳理 美文诵读 Dear Nancy, I am so happy to receive your gift. Thank you so much for such a great camera with which I can take many interesting photos to record my colorful life. (致谢+原因) Knowing you are interested in Chinese culture, I have chosen a collection of (一些) traditional Chinese music records for you. Therefore, you can enjoy a lot of famous music played by different unique instruments of China such as the pipa, erhu and guzheng. (回赠的礼物) Thank you again and I hope you will come to China and experience wonderful traditional Chinese music in person (亲自) with me. (表示感谢+发出邀请) Yours, Li Hua 佳句　Thank you so much for such a great camera with which I can take many interesting photos to record my colorful life. (“介词+which”引导的定语从句)  Writing 2 文思梳理 美文诵读 Dear Peter, I am thrilled to share with you that I just won first prize in our school’s English speech competition last week! This accomplishment is undoubtedly a result of your invaluable assistance (无价的帮助). (分享获奖的喜悦) Your insights, suggestions, and encouragement were crucial in helping me prepare for the competition,which I really appreciate. (感谢帮助) To express my heartfelt gratitude, I would like to invite you to my home for a visit. It would be a pleasure to have you as my guest and to thank you in person (亲自;当面) for all your help. (邀请做客) Thanks again for everything you have done for me. (再次致谢) Yours, Li Hua 佳句　Your insights, suggestions, and encouragement were crucial in helping me prepare for the competition,which I really appreciate. (非限制性定语从句)  Friday　提分读后续写 读后续写 基本要素 主要人物:Chet, Sid, Monty, Dewey 原文情节线:Chet正在河里游泳突然看到鲨鱼→Chet拼命游泳逃命,鲨鱼消失→Chet看到自己的朋友们跳入河中大声预警→朋友们不相信Chet的预警。 主题:人与动物,脱险,勇敢 续写情节 第一段:衔接①:开头句衔接首句中的“希德奇怪地待在河里”可描写希德在河里看到鲨鱼时的震惊、吓呆和鲨鱼逼近时的危险境况的场景。过渡句:切特的反应、其他人的反应等。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句可写鲨鱼逼近。 第二段:衔接③:开头句衔接首句中的“切特还没来得及思考,就跳下水了”可描写切特跳入河里后对希德的营救过程。过渡句:Monty和Dewey做了什么?→救出希德→遇到的危险状况→脱险。尾句自然结尾:切特虽受伤,但朋友们安然无恙。 美文诵读 　　But then he noticed Sid, strangely still in the river. His face had gone white. His mouth was open, as if to scream. Chet’s insides turned to jelly (发颤;发抖) when he saw the shining fin moving slowly through the water. “Hurry!” Chet cried. “Get out!” Monty and Dewey flew out of the water. But Sid seemed stuck. The shark was closer to the surface now, its black eyes almost glowing. They all screamed at Sid, but Sid still didn’t move. The shark was getting closer. Before he had a chance to think, Chet was in the water, leaving Monty and Dewey on the dock. He swam as fast as he could toward Sid, grabbed hold of (抓住) Sid’s arm and pulled him. Monty and Dewey were at the edge of (在……边缘) the dock, reaching down for them. Sid lifted himself up and Chet planted his hands on the dock. Chet was almost out of the water when something caught his leg. “It has got my leg!” Chet screamed. “Pull!” Sid shouted. They pulled until Chet’s leg finally came free! Chet was injured, but to his relief, his friends were safe. 佳句　He swam as fast as he could toward Sid, grabbed hold of Sid’s arm and pulled him. (三连动词构成动作链,描写Chet的动作) 原文续写语料积累　①look over one’s shoulder 回头看 ②thunder down the path 怒吼着沿着小路疾奔 Saturday　提分读后续写 读后续写 基本要素 主要人物:Mary:实验室科学家的女儿,对实验室的企鹅持实际的态度; Tom: Mary的朋友,对企鹅充满感情,相信他与企鹅有着特殊的联系;企鹅:研究对象,适应极端温度。 原文情节线:玛丽和汤姆常在实验室研究企鹅,观察它们如何适应极端温度→一次,两人留在实验室照顾企鹅。突然,实验室的加热器出现故障,温度直线下降→由于大人不在,孩子们将不得不应对寒冷的天气,直到救援人员到来。 主题:适应与生存:如何从企鹅身上学习适应极端环境的方法,及人类和动物如何在困难时刻相互依靠。成长与责任: Mary和Tom面对紧急情况时的成长,及他们如何学会负起责任,用他们所学的知识来解决问题。 续写情节 第一段:衔接①:衔接首句中的“我有个保暖的办法”:这个保暖的办法是什么(来自企鹅的保暖策略,即通过群聚来保暖)。过渡句:玛丽担心企鹅不会接受他们,汤姆让她安心→汤姆蹲下轻抚企鹅(协同原文汤姆和企鹅互动的描写)→两人融入企鹅群中。衔接②:尾句衔接段二首句“两个半小时后,父母回来了”;(协同原文尾段中企鹅群聚行为的描写)就像企鹅一样,他们向中间移动,然后再随着群体的移动而向后移动。 第二段:衔接③:衔接首句“两个半小时后,父母回来了”:他们回来看到了什么[看到孩子们被企鹅围着? 他们的反应(吃惊、惊讶)]。过渡句:父母和孩子的交流(父母的询问,孩子们的回答, 父母的称赞)。结尾:他们会从这次事件中学到什么?玛丽和汤姆从这次经历中学到了重要的生存技能,并加深了他们对自然界的理解和尊重。 美文诵读 　　“I have an idea to stay warm!” Tom shouted excitedly. Spreading his arms, he suggested joining the penguin huddles. Worried that the penguins wouldn’t let them, Mary hesitated but was soon persuaded by Tom’s assuring grin (令人放心的笑容). He slowly approached the crowded penguins, crouching down (蹲下). Gently stroking them with care, he whispered softly. Though alarmed at first, the penguins recognized Tom and let him into their group. Mary quickly followed. The children squeezed into (挤入) the huddle’s edge with the penguins. Just as the birds did, they moved toward the middle and back out as the group shifted. Two and a half hours later, the parents returned with help. Rushing in screaming out the kids’ names, they were surprised. The children were surrounded by penguins in a large huddle, safe and sound. When asked how they managed to brave this terrible cold (对抗严寒), the two kids exchanged a proud glance (交换了一个骄傲的眼神). “We copied what the emperor penguins do,” they told their parents. Patting Tom on the shoulder, Mary said with sincere admiration(由衷地钦佩地说), “You are a true penguin whisperer!” Grinning broadly, Tom praised the penguins for what they taught him. Their teamwork had seen them through the difficult cold with the penguins’ aid. 佳句　Though alarmed at first, the penguins recognized Tom and let him into their group. (省略句)  原文续写语料积累　①shake one’s head with a gentle smile 温柔地微笑着摇摇头　②Time dragged as Mary and Tom anxiously waited. 时间过得很慢,玛丽和汤姆焦急地等待着。 Sunday　实效提分训练 练提分好题 Ⅰ.高级词汇用于应用文写作 ①convey my gratitude/appreciation　②memories ③incredible　④woke　⑤admire　⑥impressive　⑦truly ⑧to meet Ⅱ.高级词汇用于读后续写 ①to keep　②stared　③edged　④Eventually　⑤to corner ⑥flashing 微技能小练 1.flashed a big/wide/broad/bright smile 2.lips curving in a smile 3.with broad smiles spreading over their faces 4.were giggling 5.burst into laughter/burst out laughing 6.was grinning 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $