周14-3-Wednesday 考场作文研析（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦Week 14报道/宣传稿与“自然探索”读后续写，包含读后续写微技能讲解、2018浙江卷改编好题探索、四步续写步骤（理要素情线、思情节、伏笔协同、语言协同）、范文及随堂练习，为学生提供系统学习支架。 资料特色突出，以“对话少而精”微技能细化语言表达，通过“321”“CARE”原则培养逻辑思维，结合原文河流等伏笔协同提升内容连贯性，融合语言能力与思维品质培养。如范文中环境描写与动作链运用，助学生掌握续写技巧，也为教师提供清晰教学路径，适合高三学生针对升学考试强化读后续写能力。

Wednesday　考场作文研析 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 读后续写微技能14　对话少而精　续写有声有色 少而精的对话描写可以推动故事情节发展,增加故事的生动性,为文章增光添彩。1.应符合人设:凸显人物性格,传递人物的情感,如Week 13好题探索2022新高考Ⅰ卷的读后续写,续写时David说的话就应符合孩子的特点。2.用间接引语:为避免偏离人设、偏离主线等问题,可将直接引语转为间接引语。3.言简意赅:围绕主题,写一两句对话即可。4.添加修饰:添加介词短语、非谓语动词、时间状语等,丰富对话表达。 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 好题探索　(2018·浙江卷改编) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.  We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.①  第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farmhouse, listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.④ Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool. 潺潺流水,河中蛙鸣,利用非谓语动词描写环境 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains.② “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back.③ After a while Uncle Paul and his farmhouse were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene.⑤ It looked like a beautiful woven blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.⑥ ←利用简单句描写环境  第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 　　注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who Dad, I, Uncle Paul When summer Where on a farm What “我”和父亲去Uncle Paul位于西部的农场,下午和父亲骑马出去享受骑行的乐趣,欣赏迷人的自然风景。 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 理2情线 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. ◆衔接1　衔接首句“突然,一只小兔子跑到我的马前”:马受惊狂奔的本能反应和“我”的反应是什么? ◆过渡句1　受惊的马把“我们”带到了哪里?→周围的风景如何?“我们”的感受如何? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句中的“我们不知道自己身处何方”:“我”和父亲是怎样迷路的? 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 Para. 2　We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“天黑了,我们不知道自己身处何方”:“我”和父亲的不同感受(“我”害怕?父亲镇静?)? ◆过渡句2　“我”和父亲通过什么途径(river? star?)找到出路?→返回农场途中的所见所想。 ◆结尾+主题　尾句协同原文尾段中的Don’t be late for supper,写“我们”安全到达农场,但是没按时吃晚饭,或协同首段中的a vacation like never before,写“我”感叹这是难忘的冒险经历。主题可升华为在困境中保持冷静与坚强的重要性。 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔, 合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 情节协同 Para. 4　and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost→不偏离路线 第一段可协同写马受惊奔跑,远离了通往农舍的路。 Para. 3　listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby→农舍旁的河 第二段可协同写父亲想出了沿着河骑行返回农舍的办法。 物的协同 track, farmhouse, river→思考如何借助river找到回农舍的路 第一段尾句可协同写找不到通往农舍的路。 第二段可协同写“我们”利用水声找到河,返回农舍。 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 1.动作链(原文①②)和简单句(原文③)描写人物动作。2.描写自然环境(原文④⑤⑥),如潺潺流水、蛙鸣和岩石、绿树、夕阳构成的美景。续写时可适当增加对周围景物的描写,烘托人物的紧张、不安和害怕。 (提示:续写范文Version 2见答案) 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 Version 2 　　Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, and it started to run like crazy. I was seized by fear. “Don’t let go of the rope! Keep calm!” yelled Dad. I did so and tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off. Fortunately, it stopped slowly. At that moment, Dad came up. Seeing I was OK, he was relieved. But we soon found we had been off the beaten track and got lost. 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 　　We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. I was very frightened, but Dad wasn’t. He kept silent and listened very carefully. We were wandering around when suddenly he heard the sound of the running water. Then we went off in the direction and soon a river came into sight. Dad said, “We can find our way back to the farmhouse if we follow the river.” Finally, we arrived at Uncle Paul’s home safely, although it was a little late for supper. 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 完成《核心默练》10分钟 随堂微练14 第 1 页 Week 14　报道/宣传稿&“自然探索”读后续写 $