周11-3-Wednesday 考场作文研析（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦读后续写微技能与图表分析，包含“喜怒哀乐恐”情感描写方法、Anna骑马救牛群续写实例、四步提分步骤及思维导图，为学生搭建从技能学习到实战应用的完整支架。 资料特色鲜明，融合核心素养，通过“神态+肢体+环境”描写提升语言能力，用四步续写步骤培养逻辑思维，思维导图辅助情节构建。实例丰富如Anna故事的伏笔协同，助力学生精准表达情感，为教师提供系统的同步教学方案，尤其适合高三学生提升考场作文应试能力。

Wednesday　考场作文研析 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 读后续写微技能11　刻画“喜怒哀乐恐”　写情更细腻 情感描写包括人物的感受、情绪,有以下途径。1.直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词(如delighted, shocked等)、名词(如excitement)或介词短语(如in relief)等表达人物的情感。2.描写神态和head, hand等的肢体动作,如Joy was written all over her face.3.描写voice, heart,如said in a(n)+情感形容词+voice, one’s heart pounded with fear/excitement等。4.融情于景,用环境描写烘托人物的情绪感受,如读后续写原文中利用下雪、下雨等天气,烘托人物情绪低落,续写中应用天气晴朗等烘托人物情绪变得积极,如With the sun peeking over the horizon, John’s face glowed with gratitude. 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 好题探索 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　Anna poured coffee from the pot as the evening sunlight flickered (闪烁) on the prairie (草原). She hated cooking. What Anna loved best was riding. At twelve years old, she was an able cowhand—Papa just never gave her the chance to prove it. But whenever she was sitting on her horse, Copper, pushing the cattle onward, Anna knew where she belonged. 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 After Anna washed the cups and unrolled her bed, she listened to the cowboys talk about the next day’s challenges. “A storm’s coming,” said Luke, the head wrangler (牛仔). “The cattle will panic, and they’ll be skittish (易惊而难以驾驭的).” Anna closed her eyes and tried to sleep, but couldn’t. “The men will need my help!” she thought. But when Papa slipped into his bedroll (睡袋), he whispered, “Anna, you stay in the camp tomorrow. It’ll be dangerous.” “But I’m a good hand!” 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 Anna crossed her arms and stared at the sky.① The stars disappeared under a blanket of clouds. The wind whistled and bent the grass.⑩ Nervous, the cattle bawled (大叫) and stamped the ground.⑤  The camp slept—everyone but Anna. She got up, grabbed her hat, and tiptoed towards her horse.②“Copper!” she whispered. The horse nuzzled Anna.④ He seemed to sense her frustration. Anna rode slowly into the darkness.③ She wanted to be alone.  第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 Why couldn’t Papa understand? Ever since her mother’s death, he’d tried to protect Anna from everything. And he made it clear that she came along as a cook—not a cowgirl. But Luke had shaped her into one of the best riders. A loud crack of thunder shook Anna from her thoughts.⑦ Copper pranced (腾跳) nervously.⑥As lightning lit the landscape, Anna sensed the herd panic.  Then a more dazzling flash of lightning streaked across.⑧ From the direction of the herd came a sudden low rumbling (隆隆声).⑨  第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 “Stampede (兽群的惊跑)!” Anna cried. “And it’s coming this way!” The sleeping men lay between Anna and the cattle stampede (人群的奔逃). 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　She swung Copper around and raced back, yelling so loud that her chest hurt. But in the camp, Papa looked at her severely, “I don’t know what you were doing there, but—” 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who Anna, Papa, Luke When at night Where on the prairie What 安娜最喜欢骑马。十二岁时,她已经是一名出色的放牛娃了。这个夜晚电闪雷鸣,牛群受到惊吓,朝营地狂奔,而睡梦中的牛仔们毫不知情。该怎么做才能避免灾难的发生呢? 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 理2情线 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　She swung Copper around and raced back, yelling so loud that her chest hurt. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“飞驰回去,喊得胸口疼”:营地的牛仔们是什么反应(忙乱地躲开牛群狂奔的方向)? ◆过渡句1　Anna看到牛仔们躲开(欣慰)→Anna策马前去控制受惊飞奔的牛群的过程(策马,指挥领头牛,控制受惊牛群,动作描写)。 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句中的“在营地”:Anna成功控制了受惊的牛群,营地转危为安。 Para. 2　But in the camp, Papa looked at her severely, “I don’t know what you were doing there, but—” ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“爸爸严厉地看着她:‘我不知道你在做什么,但——’”:Anna看到父亲严厉的眼神有什么反应? ◆过渡句2　Luke插嘴解释Anna使大家脱离险境→父亲是什么反应(夸奖Anna,请Anna原谅)?→是否邀请她第二天一起赶牛群?→Anna的反应。 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 ◆结尾+主题　尾句协同原文首段中的she was an able cowhand—Papa just never gave her the chance to prove it:父女相拥,Anna最终证实了自己是个能干的女牛仔。 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔, 合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 人设协同 Para. 2　... pushing the cattle onward, Anna knew where she belonged.➝Anna的技能 第一段可描写Anna熟练地策马前去控制受惊牛群的动作,场景描写紧张生动,一环扣一环。 Para. 6　“But I’m a good hand!” Para. 9　But Luke had shaped her into one of the best riders. 第二段可添加描写Luke向父亲说明Anna是个好帮手,父亲也承认她骑马技术很好。 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 情节 协同 Para. 3　she listened to the cowboys talk about the next day’s challenges Para. 5　you stay in the camp tomorrow 第二段协同描写父亲邀请Anna参加第二天的活动。 物的 协同 hat→思考帽子的作用 第一段协同描写Anna挥舞帽子让牛群转向。 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 1.动作链(原文①②)和简单句(原文③④)描写Anna和马的动作。2.形容词和副词作状语描写情感(原文⑤⑥)。3.简单的“无灵”主语句和倒装句描写电闪雷鸣(原文⑦⑧⑨)。4.拟人的修辞手法描写风(原文⑩)。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效原文语言特点,利用长、短句和动作链描写Anna策马前去控制受惊飞奔的牛群的动作场景,还可适当加入一点环境描写,这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 完成《核心默练》10分钟 随堂微练11 第 1 页 Week 11　图表分析/图文结合类&“脱险救援”读后续写 $