周13-3-Wednesday 考场作文研析（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦读后续写微技能训练，包含神态描写方法、2022新高考Ⅰ卷真题解析、四步续写步骤（读原文理要素、思情节原则、思伏笔协同、协同语言）及范文示例，为学生提供系统学习支架。 资料特色突出，融合核心素养培养，通过“321”“CARE”原则引导逻辑思维，神态描写（如“His eyes glittering with excitement”）提升语言表达能力，主题升华（勇敢面对恐惧、坚韧）涵养文化意识，助力学生掌握续写策略，也为教师提供清晰教学路径，适合高三学生升学备考使用。

Wednesday　考场作文研析 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 读后续写微技能13　恰当神态描写　人物跃然纸上 神态描写指对面部表情的细节刻画,可以表现人物的喜怒哀惧,描写时要用表示表情、神态的词语,如哭丧着脸、专注的神情、脸上的微笑等。1.通过描写人物的表情表示喜悦,如His face beamed and his bright smile lit up the room.2.通过描写脸色表现激动、恐惧、悲哀等,如She paled at the sight of a policeman.恰当的神态描写,能让续写中的人物更生动形象。3.通过对眼睛的描写表现人物的激动、愤怒、悲哀和恐惧等,如His eyes were glittering with excitement. 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 好题探索　(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route through thick evergreen forest.①   第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!  I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.② “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”  第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 I bit back my frustration (懊恼).④ I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward③.   David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children⑦, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.⑤ That was why none of the children thought it unusual 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish⑥. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.   第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 　　注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who David, I, the coach When the day of the big cross-country run Where the route through thick evergreen forest What 患有脑疾的David参加越野赛跑,在学校里没有同学认为这有什么不妥,他只是比其他人慢一点完成训练的内容而已。但是在比赛当天,David退缩了。 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 理2情线 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. ◆衔接1　衔接首句“David不看我”: David低头的肢体动作,表现他的纠结、犹豫。 ◆过渡句1　为说服David参赛,“我”说了什么?→David是什么反应? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句中的“走到起跑线”: David最终决定参赛。 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 Para. 2　I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“我看着David和其他选手一起走到起跑线”:比赛开始后运动员们的表现。 ◆过渡句2　David克服困难跑步→观众是什么反应(加油鼓掌喝彩)?→“我”是什么反应? ◆结尾+主题　尾句协同原文第二段中的His usual big toothy smile was absent: David又咧嘴露齿而笑。 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 主题可升华为勇敢面对内心的恐惧,坚持自己认同的道路,或自我接受与坚韧的重要性。 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔, 合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 人设协同 Para. 6　He always participated to the best of his ability; David had not missed a single practice ...;... was proud of his strong determination→David有决心、有毅力 David内心渴望参加比赛,因为身体问题担心被嘲笑,第一段协同描写David最终决定参加比赛,面对挑战。 第二段协同描写在赛跑过程中,David虽面对困难,但依然不放弃,坚持到最后。 Para. 2　his usual big toothy smile→标志性笑容 Para. 5　his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward→人物走路特点:摇摇晃晃 在描写David的肢体动作时,应添加摇摇晃晃这一特征;第二段应描写冲过终点时, David脸上又露出了往日灿烂的露齿笑容。 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 情节协同 Para. 3　He had worked so hard for this event! Para. 6　... although he always finished his run long ... he did always finish 第二段协同描写David虽是最后一个到达终点的,但是完成了比赛。 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 1.构建动作链(原文①②)和独立主格结构(原文③)描写人物动作。2.简单句(原文④)描写情感。3.宾语从句、状语从句和定语从句(原文⑤⑥⑦)叙述事情发展、原因等。续写时应借鉴和仿效原文语言特点,这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。 (提示:续写范文Version 2、Version 3见答案) 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 Version 2 　　We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. Dropping his head, he was in low spirits. I turned to him and said in a soft voice, “David, you had worked so hard for this event. How I admire your strong determination! Why not give it a try?” “I’m afraid that other kids will laugh at me,” murmured he. “But David, what counts most is your heart. You want to run, don’t you? You are sure to make it.” Hearing this, he lifted his head and looked into my eyes, saying firmly, “I’m gonna run.” 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. I had no idea what would happen during the race. But I knew David would make it. The starting gun was fired. David’s small body rushed out, rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. He fell behind soon but it seemed that he cared for nothing except moving forward. Everybody cheered for him as he reached the finish line. David waved to me with excitement and shouted,“I made it!”His big toothy smile came back again. 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 Version 3 　　We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. He just lowered his head, silent. “Do you fear the audience will laugh at you?” I asked. He nodded glumly(闷闷不乐地). It suddenly struck me that he was ashamed of his physical condition. I hugged him tightly, “I am always proud of your strong determination. I know you will always participate to the best of your ability in whatever you are doing. Just be yourself and you will not be looked down upon.” Inspired, David took a deep breath and gathered his courage, “I will give it a try.” 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 　　I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. As the signal to run ignited, runners shot out like bullets, except David. He struggled to run forward, with his small body rocking with the rhythm of his run. Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him enthusiastically. “Come on! You can make it!” Finally, though the last one, David raised his arms in triumph as he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause. People were deeply moved by his perseverance and it was the dearest thing in sportsmanship. 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 完成《核心默练》10分钟 随堂微练13 第 1 页 Week 13　倡议书&“表演赛事”读后续写 $