周8-3-Wednesday 考场作文研析（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦推荐类书信/短文及“个人成长”读后续写，包含读后续写微技能（解决问题意识）、2021浙江卷改编好题解析、提分四步骤（读原文理要素、思情节、伏笔协同、语言协同）等学习支架，助力学生掌握写作要点。 资料特色显著，融合核心素养，思维品质上通过Eva适应跑步、实验室取暖等实例培养解决问题能力，语言能力指导动作链与从句运用，学习能力提供“321”“CARE”原则策略。适合高三学生备考，提升续写逻辑与表达，为教师提供结构化教学方案和实例参考。

Wednesday　考场作文研析 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 读后续写微技能8　发现问题、解决问题意识 解决问题意识:读后续写要写出主人公到底采取了何种措施解决他/她所面临的问题,比如Week 9好题探索2024浙江首考读后续写中的Eva到底采取了什么样的mind trick来适应跑步,并记住教学楼中各个场所的位置;Week 16 Saturday的读后续写练习中,两个孩子在实验室取暖设备坏了的情况下如何利用企鹅取暖等到救援的到来等。这些解决问题的过程一定要详细写出来。 提醒:一定要找出原文中有何种工具或何种方法能被主人公使用,主人公有何种品质和素质,他人如何帮助主人公,这些都可以用来解决问题。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 好题探索　(2021·浙江卷改编) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn’t understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses. 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 I didn’t really understand his world either:He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass (超过) anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.③  Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone (长号). 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field.⑥ He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals.① After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed.② Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb’s-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn’t sure how much it would amount to.  第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 At home, my dad said, “A job’s a big step to growing up. I’m glad you will be contributing to the household.” My dad’s words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.④  My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money⑤.  第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　When I brought my paycheck home, my dad wanted to talk to me. 　　I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who I, my dad George When the summer before my eighth grade Where in the field➝at home What “我”暑假在农场做帮工,辛辛苦苦干了两周,正满心期待工资时,父亲暗示“我”赚的钱要补贴家用。虽然农场还缺人手,“我”却不想干了,“我”觉得拿自己赚的钱贴补家用不公平。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 理2情线 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　When I brought my paycheck home, my dad wanted to talk to me. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“薪水”和“父亲想和我谈话”:“我”是什么反应(协同原文伏笔:想到自己赚的钱要贴补家用,再次感到不公平)? ◆过渡句1　“我”打算如何支配自己赚来的钱?→“我”和父亲如何沟通? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句中的“父亲允许我花自己的钱”:父亲告诉“我”可以花自己的钱。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 Para. 2　I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“让我感到惊讶的是,父亲允许我花自己的钱”:“我”明白了什么? ◆过渡句2　“我”明白一切之后的行动(交给父亲钱)→父亲是什么反应? ◆结尾+主题　尾句协同原文尾段中的there might be more work,可写第二天“我”又去农场工作。主题可升华为反思劳动的价值和对家庭的贡献,体现责任与理解在个人成长中的作用。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔, 合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 情节协同 Para. 3　... throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team ... I read about sports ... 第一段可协同描写“我”花钱的计划:买足球或体育方面的书籍等。 Para. 6　I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money. 第一段可协同描写“我”再次感到不公平。 第二段可协同描写“我”意识到父亲从未抱怨过不公平(unfairness)。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 物的协同 truck, the money “我”赚来的钱应贯穿在两段续写中;父亲的卡车也可以作为“我”交出钱的原因。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 1.动作链和非谓语动词(原文①)描写人物动作。2.宾语从句和主语从句(原文③④⑤)描写心理活动。3.定语从句(原文②⑥)叙述事实。续写时应借鉴和仿效原文语言特点,这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 完成《核心默练》10分钟 随堂微练8 第 1 页 Week 8　推荐类书信/短文&“个人成长”读后续写 $