周7-3-Wednesday 考场作文研析（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦读后续写微技能，围绕“劳动与品行”主题展开。包含2025浙江首考真题解析，通过“顺藤摸瓜解谜底型”续写方法讲解，构建“读原文理要素、思情节遵原则、思伏笔巧协同、协同语言写表达”四步学习支架，助力学生掌握续写逻辑与技巧。 资料特色显著，深度融合核心素养。以Kevin智助寻表故事为载体，通过“321”“CARE”原则培养思维品质，分析动作链、无灵主语句等提升语言能力，引导学生理解勇气与责任的文化内涵，提供可操作的续写策略。特别适合高三学生升学备考，能帮助学生提升读后续写得分能力，为教师教学提供系统、实用的同步指导。

Wednesday　考场作文研析 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 读后续写微技能7　顺藤摸瓜　解谜底型读后续写 解谜底型读后续写中会出现一个大家百思不得其解的现象或问题,然后主人公发现了这个现象或问题背后的真相。比如Week 6 Friday 2024九省联考的读后续写,小海豚Maya私藏东西以获取实物奖励,主人公Hilda一步一步揭开了谜底。 解开谜底型读后续写应侧重主人公情绪的变化,如从吃惊、震惊、生气等转变为如释重负、高兴等。圈出并恰当协同原文给的线索提示,慢慢揭开谜底,做到推理有依据,而非自己臆想。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 好题探索　(2025·浙江首考) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　Kevin was pretty bored. His mother was at work, and his father had been away on business. Therefore, he was left in the care of Mrs. Hill, an old lady who lived next door. His parents had raised the 12-year-old to be a good boy. He never got into trouble, though sometimes he wanted to do risky things. Mrs. Hill was asleep. Kevin sighed (叹息) and hoped something exciting would happen. Suddenly, a movement outside caught his eye.④  第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 Mrs. Hill’s front window faced Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house across the street. The couple had both gone to work, so it was strange that someone was over there. Kevin stared at the man at their front door. Suddenly, the man jumped through an open window into the house. With his heart in his mouth, Kevin grabbed Mrs. Hill’s home phone and called the police.⑥  Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted before the police arrived, Kevin decided to do something. He rushed out of Mrs. Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly.① Grabbing a branch from a cut-down tree, he jumped in through the window.② “Stop right there! You must leave right now!” he called out, holding the branch with both hands.  第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 The man froze for a second, but when he saw the skinny boy he breathed a sigh of relief. “Hey, kid, put that down. It was my home. My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,” he explained, trying to lift a floorboard. At that moment, the sounds of a police car echoed (回响) in the air.⑤ The man stood up in a panic, then ran through the house toward the window and jumped out.③ Kevin followed out and told the arriving police officers what had happened. They pursued and arrested the man.⑦  第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 Kevin went back to Mrs. Hill’s house. Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing. “What if he has told the truth?”⑧ he thought to himself. The man’s words sounded pretty convincing.  注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station. 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who Kevin (12岁男孩,渴望探索未知), Mrs. Hill (Kevin的看护人), the man When one day Where in Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house What Kevin发现邻居家进了小偷,立刻报了警,并喝止对方,然而对方为自己辩解。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 理2情线 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“talk to them”: Kevin向Green夫妇说了什么?怎么说?(描写人物神态与语气,体现他阻止闯入者的小得意,又带出内心的疑虑) ◆过渡句1　Kevin讲完后,Green夫妇对陌生男子的身份和“手表”的疑惑、猜测或好奇→查看地板,确认其下是否有手表→发现手表。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 ◆衔接2　衔接第二段首句中的“带着找到的手表到警局”:Kevin十分愧疚,和Mr. Green出发去警局。 Para. 2　Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“the police station”:转场到警局,警察的反应→因陌生男子还被扣押着,警察立刻明白是哪个案子(协同原文警察已经逮捕了陌生男子,此时应该已经过初步审问)。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 ◆过渡句2　警察核实手表来历,证实了男子的说法→男子道歉,承认“不该私闯民宅”并致谢→Kevin释然,意识到自己的“冲动之举”最终促成了手表物归原主。 ◆结尾+主题　Kevin回家,看着那扇见证了一切的窗户,领悟到真正的勇气是即便心存不确定,依然选择做正确的事。 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔, 合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 人设协同 a good boy; never got into trouble; wanted to do risky things; hoped something exciting would happen; called the police; jumped in; wasn’t sure he had done the right thing→善良、渴望刺激;勇敢、冲动行动、自省 Kevin向Green夫妇讲述事情时,对应他“成功阻止闯入”的成就感,应该有点小得意;看到地板下的手表后,Kevin应有愧疚感(a wave of guilt flooded over);真相大白后,Kevin领悟到“勇敢”的真正意义。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 情节协同 Para. 4　“... My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,”he explained 第二段协同描写警察查记录证实男子说的话属实。 Para. 6　Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing.“What if he has told the truth?”→没有“抓小偷”的成就感,反而开始自我怀疑 第一段协同描写Kevin向Green夫妇讲述时,语气略带得意却又犹豫,提到男子“找父亲手表”的说法时,更是直接把内心的疑问说出口。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 物的协同 the watch:男子闯入的动机(寻找父亲的手表),也是Kevin怀疑的焦点(是否真实存在) 手表的找回象征一段被找回的亲情记忆,第二段协同描写警察通过手表确认其说辞属实,也让Kevin松了口气。 a floorboard:男子被Kevin制止时,试图撬开地板找手表,是引发悬念的细节,续写部分可以作为印证男子说辞的关键,作为连接悬念与真相的桥梁 第一段可描写Kevin向Green夫妇讲述时,领他们走向“the floorboard the man had tried to lift”,Mr. Green“carefully lifted the loose floorboard”。 the window (Green家窗外的观察视角):男子闯入的入口,Kevin观察、进入房屋的通道 赋予其深层含义:象征“判断与成长的视角”,见证Kevin从冲动行事到领悟勇气真谛的全过程。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 文章通过语气、动作、内心独白的细节,让情感与心理活动自然流露。1.环环相扣的动作链(简单句和非谓语,原文①②③)推动情节发展。2.“无灵”主语句(原文④⑤)烘托氛围,营造出紧张感。3.with复合结构(原文⑥)描写Kevin的紧张。4.句式长短结合,节奏张弛有度(原文⑦)。5.结尾用直接引语(原文⑧)呈现Kevin的内心疑问,简洁有力,为续写留下了悬念。 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 完成《核心默练》10分钟 随堂微练7 第 1 页 Week 7　感谢信&“劳动与品行”读后续写 $